Writing Feedback / Health attitude refers to food consumption and behaviour toward healthy life [3]

Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem.
To what extend do you agree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience!

Nowadays, many children show bad behaviour to health lifestyle. In this case, I concern to explain health attitude refers to food consumption and behaviour towards healthy life, in which parents have to be responsible. Not only parents, but also school where it mentions as second home and teacher as a second parents for children.

Mother and father have to know what their children do at school, including what children eat at school. School also watches over what students eat. In this case, teachers who involve in the school area sometimes supervise their pupils' food during free time. Since, home and school are the most place children stay in their daily life. What children eat, including to their healthy lifestyle. If they eat some unhygienic food, it will disrupt their health. For example, one form of awareness, parents can supply food for their children eating at school. Parents can guarantee that food is hygiene and safe for their children. Parents can also ask teacher in the school to control their children's snack. My mother as example always notices what kinds of food their pupils eat while free time. Because when the students eat bad food, they will be getting stomachache or health problems. It will disturb their study. Teachers remind students to not to eat particular snack that they know badly for children. School also has to filter what kinds of food that appropriate to stock in the canteen. Therefore, parents and school play important roles towards students' nutrition.

Besides food, students' attitudes towards health also have to parents and teachers concern to. Since, it also affect to students' lives. School usually provides many events to instruct student good behave and then student are asked to practice it at home. For example, it is important for children to wash their hand before and after eating food. In the school, teacher can teach student how to wash their hand as well. After they know it, parents usually ask their children about what they do at school. Parents have responsibility to habituate children do what they have learnt. As a result, children will accustom to their good habits. It reflects how important school teach student and parents supervise their children.

In conclusion, children can behave based on healthy life pattern after they are taught and are given example by school. Then they are familiarized and supervised by parents. So, that is why schools and parents have important role in children lifestyle. 408w

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1 - Three Problems When Move to Overseas [6]

The chart below shows information about the problems people have when they go to live in other countries. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives information about the difficulties that people face when they move to overseas based on the group of age. Overall, in the middle age, people have more severe problems than the other ages. Pursuing education for children are the smallest problems for all age. In the last two groups of age, most people get health life as hardest.

Based on the graph, financial problems is slight increase from young people to middle people by just under 35 percent - 35 percent exactly. However, it fell to under 30% in old people.

Healthy as the most problems people get in the middle age with just under 40%. It is also difficult to old residents with just above 35 percent. However, the percentage of the young residents is 30.

Education for children is easy for old people to face with only just under 5 percent. It is also not hard for young people with just above 5%. However, in the middle age find that it is a big problem with the percentage is more than 35. 176w

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Writing Feedback / The mass media are fulfilled with different news about celebrities - actors, singers, footballers... [2]

The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers, or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The media report and show much news about people who appear in the visual screen, like actors, singers, and footballers. As a result, mass media fulfill with their news. Even, it is good or bad. I tend to agree that media also should inform about common people's life that sometimes inspire and affect the others' life.

People, news watchers, or TV audiences may do not know who has won gold medal in mathematics olympiad in overseas, if media never report it. That is why I think media should record the news about ordinary people, because they are more important as well as celebrities. Many ordinary people are inspirational persons. For instance, a girl who comes from poor family has gotten full scholarship in abroad. When media show this news to public, it will inspire many young people for struggling to get scholarship. In fact, it really has happened in my country. It has resulted that many fresh graduates are getting confident for hunting scholarship in overseas too. It can be seen that media affect the life of some people through the good news from common persons.

Even though, media also still provide the news about famous persons who always perform in TV. Because audiences will always be waiting for their idol, in which they are actors, singers, or footballers. People will not get boring when they notice their idol's news. Even it had repeated many times or had shown for a long time. For example, Raffi Ahmad and Nagita Slavina's wedding had showed for 2 days in several hours a day. Some people say that it was not important to watch and to display in TV, but the rating and share rose and hit other TV shows. Therefore, media have prove their affection how people are getting happy by just watching their favorite celebrities on TV and media will get many benefits from this case.

To sum up, media can spend more time to report celebrities' lives, but they also should provide much news about ordinary people's lives. Since, ordinary people frequently give inspiration for people's life and it can change how people stand out. Good news from ordinary people can balance the negative issue from celebrities. Media can do the way. 364w

Writing Feedback / A slight increase in the recruitment of French language teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007 [3]

The graph below shows information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontarion between 2001 and 2007.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph provides information about the percentage of people who recruited new English teachers and new French teachers based on year graduation in Ontario from 2001 to 2007. Overall, there was a slight increase in the recruitment of French language teachers. Meanwhile, English teachers got a downward trend in generally. Recruitment of French educator is larger than English during the period.

Based on graph, the number of French language teacher that graduated in 2001 stood at 70 percent of recruiting. The percentage of the following graduation year of teacher fell to around 50. However, graduation year from 2003 to 2005 went up by around just under 60 - 70. In the following year, it declined slightly by just fewer than 70. However, it rocketed at about 80 percent later.

The recruitment of English teacher was dramatic decrease between graduation years of 2001 - 2003 by 70 - 40 percent. Then it rose from 40 to just around 50 in 2004 and 2005 of graduation years. Two years later, it dipped at approximately 20 percent.

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Writing Feedback / The illustrations shows the process of generating electricity by using wind rotary motor [5]

The diagrams below show the design for a wind turbine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant!

The illustrations show the process of generating electricity by using wind rotary motor that locate in the three different places. Overall, domestic turbine uses slower wind strength than two other turbines where it is located in the sea and in the hill. The fastest wind blows, the highest energy produces.

The first wind turbine is placed in the land with some equipment on it, such as steel tower, blade fiberglass, wind sensor, generator, and computer. Firstly, wind blows over the particular part of turbine on the blades. The strength of wind blowing is medium. Afterwards, it is responded by wind sensors, in which computer is used to get information from sensor to adjust the position of blades. Wind sensor manages speed and direction of the wind. Then, wind will be generated by generator to produce 100 kilowatts of current.

The second location of other turbine is in the sea. It has the same process with the turbine that is located in the mainland. It uses the maximum wind strength. The electricity that is released by the turbine is 1.5 Megawatts. Using the complex steel tower brings benefit, which it does not disturb the scenery view. The turbine tower three is in the hill. Wind come upon to the tower and pass the same process like other towers. It uses the same level of wind strength as turbine two. Both of these turbines produce larger current than domestic turbine. 250w

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Writing Feedback / It\s hard for some people to build their first business enterprise instead of working as an employee [2]

Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages?

It may be hard for some people to build their first business enterprise instead of working as employee in a particular place. Since they think, it needs a lot of materials and necessary things. However, managing company that has been running will make them realize many things that they never think before.

To begin some work such as trading goods or merits trading will be hard for people since it needs a self-endurance and ability to manage their work. People who succeed to build start up but do not have strategy to manage their work and enough mental skills will be getting stress. For example, in the capital city, there is a man who had stressed and had become a beggar after he failed to manage his business and had been fraud. He owed much money in bank and he could not pay it. He did not know what to do next. It means that negligence of mental gives drawback to him.

On the other hand, becoming an entrepreneur will bring many benefits, not only for entrepreneurs themselves, but also for anyone. For instance, I have a friend that had started his business since he was in college. He got monetary asset by joining challenge. After build the education institute, he opened the opportunity to college students for being a tutors and get salary. By developing his own enterprise, he had gone umrah and had brought his special employees too. Now, he can earn much money from that course without sit several hours a day in office. He can enjoy his life while manage his business conveniently. It has proved that set up career by business will bring advantages, include happiness.

All in all, I think starting a business brings many advantages to owners and somebody else. Since become an entrepreneur means people must ready to be a boss who will get much money without someone's pressure and exactly it helps residents. However, to reduce demerits, the beginner should have a strong mental skill and a managerial ability to avoid frustration. 341w

Writing Feedback / The level of cheerfulness in life of spouses and singles based on age groups [2]

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts give information about the level of cheerfulness in life of spouses and singles based on age groups, and how heredities influence married people's life. Overall, wed people are happier than unwed. However, the happiness ratings both of groups are not more than a half of entire survey numbers. Blissful levels of spouses who have or do not have children are almost same. However, having children more satisfy their life.

Teen married couples satisfy their life with 45% of happiness level. In 30-49 years old, it decreases slightly to 44 percent. Then, in adult phase, their cheerfulness level experience a bottom at 40%. However, it increases again in over 65 years old to 44 percent. The percentage of singles' happiness ratings in 18-64 years old stands between 21 and 22. Then in old un-married persons' satisfaction reach a top at 34%.

The percentages of happiness level of spouses who have teen children exist at 44. Then, it fall to 40 percent in wed people who have children aged more than 18. However, it goes up to 43% in couples who do not have heredities. 185w

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Writing Feedback / It's not enough for company to provide uniform and to be good looking without workers' competence [5]

Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Sometimes, workers are obligated to wear particular uniform or formal apparel in work. Some people argue that quality of working is more important. However, I think both of these situations are important to do equally.

Some company provides uniform for employees based on work level and others do not, but they should dress smartly. It means that they must use formal, clean, and fresh clothes. For example, certain TV Company requires the camerapersons and broadcasting teams use the TV label uniform for denoting workers' identity. It benefits when they catch news with other TV station, residents will be easy to indicate where they are from. However, producers and managerial teams are freed to use other clothes by regulation that it should be formal look and suitable for work. Therefore, they can wear attire that makes them convenient. The company does this to brand good image while meet with clients and meet with other company.

In my view, wearing properly is not enough for company to achieve their goals. The workers also should have good grade in work. They must have brilliant idea and good resolution. Because fashion and work quality value, hold each other in one package. For instance, General Manager, HRD, and Director who clothed deluxe have been known that they have good degree for working. It is not good for them too, if their appearance looks unlike their job position.

Personally, I believe that all rules and regulations that have been fixed by company are good for company itself and for workers. Therefore, employees must comply it, even they dislike or unpleasant with it. Sometimes, it will motivate laborer to improve their grade to achieve the position where they can wear as convenient as they want.

In conclusion, it is not enough for company to provide uniform and to be good looking without best potential of workers. It is also hard to build good image with well appearance only. It should be supported with high working ability. Therefore, both of these are important to complete each other. 335w

Writing Feedback / In 1990s the land in North America was most affected by over-cultivation factor with 3.3%. [4]

The pie chart shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s

The pie chart provides information about some factors that caused production of agricultural field. The table informs how the regions were influenced by those causes during the 1990s. Overall, over-gazing was the largest factor that caused land degradation, and Europe was the largest region where land degradation had happened.

Over-gazing was the main problem that made land degradation. It stood at 35%. The second factor was deforestation that contributed 30 percent. It had a slight different number with over-cultivation, which the percentage was 28. Other factors were mentioned that had degraded agricultural land.

Land in North America was most affected by over-cultivation factor with 3.3%. Deforestation was the main caused that had affected Europe region in agricultural land by 9.8%. However, the amount case of over-gazing had degraded 11.3 percent land area in Oceania. It carried Oceania as the second larger region that had been degraded in agricultural field than North America with 5%. Nevertheless, Europe got the percentage of land degradation with 23%. 164w

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Writing Feedback / Responsiblity of Parents and School Toward Children to be a Good Member of Society [2]

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Children can learn to be a good member of community from their parents. Some people trust that school is a good place to gain knowledge to behave. I think both school and parents are the best source to learn attitude.

Almost all side of children's life, there are parents who have responsibility. It includes that parents should teach their children about attitudes as a supplier that supports children to be a good member of society. It is caused by position of parents as the first educator for children. Parents are the first persons who children meet in their life. Many things or kinds of behaviour, children get from their mother and father than anyone. For example, parents teach their daughter and son thank to somebody who has given them pleasant gift or anything they need. Parents also teach their heredities to share their food to their friends, and take apologize after doing something wrong. These attitudes mostly get from family's lead, especially both mother and father.

Besides, school also important source to gain knowledge to be a good community persons. Because children school can meet many people there. They can apply what have they been learned from home. School tends to the place to learn and to practice. Nevertheless, they also can get new knowledge from their teacher, which their teacher plays a role as their second parents. For example, a son shares their which their red candy to their friend, but their friend just wants the blue candy. Then, they fight each other. The teacher will come to separate them, and give some advices. From that case, both children can learn how to understand each other and do not fight about that problem. They get another lesson in school.

To sum up, it is important for parents to teach their children good attitudes. Afterwards, children can practice their good behaviour in school when they meet many friends, not only to practice, but also to gain any knowledge about behaviour from their teacher as their second parents. 335w

Writing Feedback / Nowadays it is very difficult to stay healthy in this modern world [3]

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

In globalization period, everything has changed and transformed easier. It affects how people live their life. Most of them think that is hard to have a healthy lifestyle because of instant life. However, it should not be difficult if people struggle to be healthy. I think both of these situations can be chosen by people in recent life.

Anything that people desire has provided in recent life because of development era. Nevertheless, sometimes it spoils people to follow the accessibility. I focus to explain in food as an example. Inhabitants now are easy to find any kinds of fast food shops. They can buy or eat at fast food stores when they are hungry. However, we have known that junk food has less nutrition and sometimes cause serious illness. It may be an instant food that people can choose when they do not have any options to eat, busy, and lazy to cook. Residents have a dependence with that and make it as a daily food. It makes people difficult to live healthily after getting dependence.

However, it is not only a single case. People can keep their life to be healthy by struggling to live healthily, if they want to be. For instance, people can take some exercise every day with only 20 minutes a day, or put it on weekend with an hour or more. Inhabitant also can control what kinds of food they eat. Cook food by themselves and eat organic food, not junk food. Therefore, it will make their life healthy because of high nutrition food and lifestyle pattern. Nevertheless, it takes much time and high cost value that do not all people can spend their time and money.

To sum up, modern life brings easy access to people, but sometimes it become a boomerang for people to get easy on eat food too, which their life will change less fit. However, people can be health by controlling their life that I think take much time and rather expensive for some people to do. Like an unknown quote, "health is expensive". 337w

Writing Feedback / Bulgarian citizens who lived outside their country, based on school level [5]

The chart below give information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives information about Bulgarian residents who wanted to move from Bulgaria in 2002, 2006, and 2008 based on three types of education degree. Overall, the secondary education was the highest number of people who planned to go abroad during three years. In general, it was a downward trend. The higher education was the lowest quantity. However, primary and lower educations were an upward trend even though they did not reach a high number.

To begin with, Bulgarian people who was from higher education stood at 17 percent in 2002. In the following year, it increased gradually to 20%. Two years later, it decreased dramatically to 9 percent. The percentage of secondary education during the periods was decreased fourfold from 65 to 61. In 2008, middle education degree that planned to go overseas declined to 59 percent. Meanwhile, primary and lower educations were a slight rise from 18 to 19 percent. Next, it reached a peak at 32%. 160w

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Writing Feedback / People's opinion toward several communication skills that were important to use in working [5]

The table gives the results of two surveys, in 1997 and 2006, in which people were asked which communication skills were essential in their jobs.

The table gives information about the percentage of people's opinion in 1997 and 2006 toward several communication skills including internal and external that were important to use in working. Overall, dealing with people showed the most important communication externally and selling a product was the less effective. The most important internal communication was listening carefully to colleagues and the reverse was making speeches or presentations.

To begin, four external communications were essential for working in 1997 and 2006. Dealing with people was chosen by 60 and 65 percent people respectively as the most. Knowledge of particular product service was a slight increase from 35 to 41 percent. It was the second larger essential. People decided that advising or caring for customers and clients also was essential to apply in work with increasing of number between 36 and 39. However, selling a product or service fell by 3%. Generally, it had an upward trend.

In 1997, listening carefully to colleagues obtained 38 percent and went up in 2006 to 40%. Making speeches or presentation was the lowest important between 7 and 11 percent. Three skills got the same numbers of quarrel around five from 1997 to 2006. There were instructing or training people, persuading or influencing others, and analyzing problems together with others. 204w

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Writing Feedback / Electronic devices have brought negative effects on human, especially in personal communication [5]

The use of electronic media has negative effects on personal relationships between people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Using of electronic devices now more difficult to arrange. It is caused by a large number of people use it. Some people say that it has brought negative effects on people's life, especially in personal relationship between people. I tend to agree about this statement and this essay will discuss the notion.

Many people use electronic media as a tool or media to connect them to other people. The most electronic devices that are used by people are handphone with many features inside. By using handphone, users can send message, chat, and video call through particular application without moving locations. Nevertheless, sometimes some negative effects are resulted from using it. It can affect how people communicate with their relatives. Because in certain situation or attitude of using it, they do not realize what they have told via text. Whether it insults their partner or not. For example, users posted hate speech status in Facebook that they do not realize that it humiliates someone or makes someone has wrong feeling. Another example, somebody who chats with her friend reply the messages without thinking first whether it makes her friend mad. As a results, the two cases make the relationship of people break up.

Moreover, users who do not use mobile phone well and exactly, will experience the worst situation in relationship. That situation will bring persons in bad condition. For instance, users will being adverse with their friends. It makes them losing some friends. It also will affect their psychological condition that they do not expect. We also often see that someone who posts sensitive status will get bullying from netizens due to the reason they offend others clearly. Sometimes that case will lead the person to get stress and depression. Therefore, using electronic media need self controlling. Because it also spreads fast and puclic.

All in all, digital devices now become a necessary of many people. It brings many benefits in people's life. However, people must use it wisely and effectively. Since it can produce negative effect in private relationship among people. So, as users, they have to realize what they do while using mobile phone.

Writing Feedback / Let Heat lost and Energy Waste by Air Flows [2]

The diagram below shows how heat is lost and energy wasted in a house because of air getting into and out of the house.

The picture describes about the process of air that get out and get into the house to remove heat and energy residue. Overall, the number of part or things in the house that let the air out is less than the air leak into the house. Both entering air and leaving air can pass the same part of the house.

The air is produced by many things and part of the house. It passes all the part of the first and second floor of the house. The parts are dryer vent, crawl space, kitchen fan vent, and bathroom fan vent, plumbing stack vent and attic hatch. The air is generated by dryer vent in the right side of the house. The energy waste (water waste) that is produced by outdoor faucet can be removed through crawl space in the left side of the house. It can rise to the second floor by evaporating process.

In the second floor of the house, air can be blown by kitchen fan vent. There are some energy sources such as electrical sources, lamp, and water faucet (in the first floor). The light energy can be produced by the lamp. It rises to the balcony. It can be released to the atmosphere by passing the attic hatch. The light in the balcony can be left the house by passing plumbing stack vent. An amount of air gets into the door and rises to balcony. It unites with air that is released from bathroom fan vent and releases to the environment by passing plumbing stack vent and attic hatch.

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Writing Feedback / Should Businesses Only Concentrate to Make Much Money? [8]

The purpose of businesses is to make money and they should concentrate only on this. Do you agree or disagree?

Many workers decide to resign from their job and start to begin business. They make a business to get much money. Focus on making money is the way to produce it largely. I tend to disagree due to there are some things that businessperson should notice too.

Many businesses are in the good trading and merits trading that residents need it. That it is why business is one of the best ways to produce much money. How to make much money by business? Since we know that business is about compete to sell something and the product that are liked and needed by many people. Therefore, owner must improve the quality of the product. They have to make familiar own-label product to make consumers easy to remember. They should make the product unique than others. So, it will improve the profit of them.

Besides, owner also must notice the other side. Because focus on only making money will make the entrepreneurs negligence about the construction of business. Improving the quality of employees is an example. It must be paid more attention by entrepreneur. Since making much money from the quality of product, sales cannot exist without contribution of good and loyal workers. Hence, businessman must treat their labors well. The labors must get appropriate welfare.

In conclusion, profit is the focus of entrepreneurs that will be gotten by selling high quality product and unique brand. However, they must take care their labors 'improvement too for supporting of product manufacturing, promoting, and selling (distributing).

Writing Feedback / People Dressed What They Like, But Not Show Their Characters [2]

Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indicator of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should no be judged by the clothes they wear.

Fashion industries now spread and more develop than before. They exist in almost all media that people can notice clearly. People are offered by any form and stylish garments. Nevertheless, most of them only buy the fashion product that they like and I believe what kind of dresses people use, do not reflect what character they have.

The kinds of clothes sometimes do not make people become lavish to spend their money buying it. Because the fashion items that contemporary popular are not their style. Many people collect some garments based on their desiring and favorite. For instance, in recent year, palazzo pants more likely to use by some hijabers, especially popular hijabers, but I do not attract to buy the clothes like that and keep continue buying dress. Because, it is not my style, and it is true that we can say that people's fashion style depend on their delight to something, such as color, shape, and convenience.

Fashion styles of people do not reflect their personality. We may judge a woman is so feminine and soft by a dress she uses. But, we do not know her character until we are making friends with her. Sometimes, people use garment just for duty and situation and to be obligated by someone like her boss. The enjoyable dresses people use, do not reflect their behavior and social status. Because, we often see the rich uses a simple fashion and the poor wears a high-class-look-like clothes. Sometimes clothes deceive our eyes and waste our brain

To sump up, we may judge people's fashion styles as something they interest to, but it does not mean that their clothes reflect their characters. Since wearing particular clothes frequently, hinder our eyes from the real personality of people. 293w

Writing Feedback / Most workers had very good relationship with their supervisors and partners in 2005 and 2009 [2]

The chart below show the results of surveys in 2005 and 2009 asking workers about their relationships with their supervisors and their co-workers.

The percentage of relationship among workers in the workplace toward their supervisors and work partners in 2005 and 2009 is presented by pie charts. Overall, most workers had very good relationship to their supervisors and partners in 2005 and 2009. Nonetheless, the partnership with co-workers was better than with supervisors.

To begin with, in 2005 the relationship between employees and supervisors stood at 61% of very good category. Four years later, it went up to 65%. Meanwhile, the good level fell from 26 to 22 percent. Then, the percentage of fair, poor, and employees who do not have supervisors was less than 10 percent. In 2005, there were people who categorized as 'no answer' with only 2%. However, in 2009 all participants give answers.

The very good level of officers in 2009 was higher than 2005 between 70 and 63 percent. However, workers had a slight increased from 2005 to 2009 by 3%. The fair interaction between workers and their partners fell from 7 to 3. There was no poor relationship in 2009 and workers who did not have supervisors just below to 3 percent. 186w

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