Writing Feedback / A breakdown of figure for holidaymakers visited five different countries - in millions [2]

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries.

A breakdown of figure for holidaymakers visited five different countries in millions is revealed in the line graph. Overall, it can be seen that there was an upward trend for all countries, and France had a utterly increase in 2010 over a fifteen-year period.

To begin with, there was a similar trend in some countries. Egypt and Brazil stood the same point at about ten in 1995, while Egypt existed higher number than Brazil in 2010 at about 20 and 15 respectively.

After that, the number of sightseers in Malaysia recorded at just above 20, while in USA appeared more than threefold bigger than of this in 1995. USA and Malaysia a slight went up between 1995 and 2000, while France extremely inclined from just above 30 to twice times greater than before. Furthermore, from 2005 to 2010 France significantly rose to ninety, while Malaysia gained a gradual decrease and met the same point with France by about 15 to just under 90 and the highest point happened in USA at just above 90, while Brazil illustrated the least popular destination at lower than 10 million.

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Writing Feedback / A breakdown of the figure for several sources for power plant in New Zealand and Germany; 1980, 2010 [2]

The pie charts below show electricity generation by source in New Zealand and Germany in 1980 and 2010.

A breakdown of the figure for several sources for power plant in New Zealand and Germany in 1980 and 2010 is revealed in the pie charts. Overall, it can be seen that in 1980 both in New Zealand and Germany experienced the highest number of coal, while hydro exposed the lowest total in Germany and petroleum was less favorite in New Zealand, and in 2010 coal witnessed the most priority in New Zealand, while nuclear dominated in Germany.

Coal experienced the most preferred sources in 1980 at 56 units in New Zealand, while hydro gained the smallest unit in Germany at seven units. Petroleum stood at 11 units in New Zealand and Germany showed at twofold higher than in New Zealand, while in Germany showed at twofold higher than in New Zealand. Furthermore, in 1980 natural gas was close behind both in New Zealand and Germany at 30% and 28% respectively.

On the other hand, the quantity of coal was far dominated at 150 units in New Zealand, while the other sources were less than 47 points. Even though, nuclear recorded the most popular in Germany at 155 units, there was no nuclear power plant in New Zealand in 2010.

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Writing Feedback / The table gives a clue on consumer spending on different articles [3]

The table gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table illustrates the information about the percentage of items that people buy in five different countries in 2002. Overall, it can be seen that food/drink/tobacco dominated item which was bought over five countries while leisure/education was less favorite.

Turkey has the biggest percentage in food/drink/tobacco item at 32.14 percent when Sweden was the smallest at 15.77 percent. This category always has the percentage above 15 percent. The next item was clothing/footwear which is dominated by Italy at 9 percent while Sweden was the smallest at 5.40 percent. The last item was leisure/education which has score under 5 percent. Spain has the smallest percentage at 1.98 percent and the smallest from the all items.

Sweden has the lowest percentage in two items at 15.77 percent and 5.40 percent when Turkey has the highest percentage in two items at 32.14 percent and 4.35 percent. The second fovurite item was clothing/footwear which has the percentage between 5 percent and 10 percent.

Writing Feedback / Happiness is a magic which is very hard to describe [2]

Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

Having a happy life is the purpose for everyone. It is the most essential thing that someone wants to make it true. Happiness is a magic which is very hard to describe, but many factors can make people happy.

Everybody has different opinion if someone asks about happiness. It happens because the rate of happiness is different from one person to another. Sometimes people said that happiness is reached by having luxury car and in the other side said that having a child is the real happiness. It depends on people's point of view how they feel or thing about happiness. For instance, a business man who has many companies never feel happy, but he feel worry to get lose their wealthy. In contrast, a poor man life happily even he does not have big house or much money. So, it is not easy to categorise what is happiness mean.

However, many ways can make people feel happiness. For the first is they have a good physic or health in body. People who get sick always imagine how lucky they are if they have good condition. After that, people who have good relationship with their family always happy, because they live in a peace and do not have conflict that can make them stress. And the most influence for getting happiness is always accept whatever the condition that people get through.

All in all, there is no doubt that happiness is very crucial in life. Even it is hard to describe but many ways to reach happiness itself. However, life by helping each other is an absolute happiness that can people gets in their life.

Writing Feedback / Before entering university students in many countries do some activities like working or traveling. [2]

In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

Before entering university students in many countries do some activities. It can be working or traveling. However, there are positive and negative effects by doing those things in their free time.

Studying in university is something serious that need to be prepared. Some students tend to use their time for working before entering university. It is very useful because they can get more experience that can increase their knowledge in work field. Also they can learn how to interact professionally with other people that can be implemented when they are studying in university. In further advantage, students will get money by working. They can use it for their necessity in college or pay enrolment in university. In other hand, student choose traveling instead of working because they want to refresh their mind after doing exam in senior high school and hopefully they will ready to study in the next step.

However, there are disadvantages while they decide to travel or work before beginning university as well. If they travel to some places, they do not have money to continue to university. After that, If they are working, they do not have much time to study. It is very essential because the method for studying in university is totally different than when they are in senior high school. So, they must self-study to understand the subject in university.

All in all, although, work and travel for a year before beginning university can give good impact students need to study as well. In my opinion, I suggest that students can work or travel only in a half year before class begin in university and the rest of that is used for studying to make it easier when they are in university.

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1 - The graph above shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 [5]

The graph above shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The line graph illustrates the number of stuff in million tonnes that has been delivered by four methods of transportation from 1974 to 2002 in the UK. Overall, it can be seen that there is an upward trend over twenty eight-years period and road is the highest transportation that is used in the same period with always more than sixty.

In 1974, road had higher number to deliver goods at about 70 than pipeline only at about 5. Between 1974 and1978 there was a slight increase in the number of roads but pipeline was steady. In the following years, pipeline went up to about 20 while road had a fluctuation. After that, in 2001 road hit a high point at about 95 which pipeline still the lowest number of four categories with about 20.

In the other hand, the equipment transported by rail and water almost the same number with about 38. After there was a cross between rail and water, water increased and water fell in 1978. From 1986 to 1990 rail and water were steady at about 37 and about 60 respectively.

Writing Feedback / Every crime has been decided to various categories of people. Fixed punishment essay [2]

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that ...

Every crime has been decided to various categories of people. People think that there is a clear rule to conclude what category to every specific crime. In contrast, the condition of the crime itself and the motivation should be considered to make decision. However, in my opinion, I think the judge should consider many aspects before judging. Event there is a fundamental rule which talk about the category of crime.

To make sure what sort of punishment that is given to criminal, the judge should make what kind of criminal it is. It is better to understand the consequence every single criminal that have already happen. For instance, killer must be punished by death punishment or drug distributor has to be jailed throughout life. It make easier for government to warn people about the punishment that will be given if someone do a criminal. As a result, I think people will think twice again if they wan to do criminal. Therefore, exact punishment should be made to every specific crime.

However, they judge should understand other factors that make people do a criminal. The condition of individual crime has to be included to make decision. For instance, the effect of criminal can make people die or permanent disability. Those things are different although have the same category, such as, stealing. Another consideration is the purpose of doing crime. If people did criminal to look after their children, they will get less punishment instead of for holding party reason. So, it is very essential to know the reason from criminals and the effect of the action. In my opinion, every criminal do not always have some punishment, but it need to think again about the reason and condition.

All in all, even though there is specific punishment for each criminal, the punishment needs to be considered base on the circumstances and motivation. In my opinion, generalize the punishment should include many factors that make criminal happened. Because if now it will give more disadvantages than before.

Writing Feedback / Two processes about how to produce cement and how to make concrete for building [4]

The diagrams show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams illustrate two processes about how to produce cement and how to make concrete for building. Overall, it can be seen that simple process to produce cement by mixing limestone and clay only and produce concrete by using four goods.

The components to make cement are limestone, clay, crusher, mixer, rotating heater, heat, grinder, and bags. The processes begin by crushing limestone and clay to be powder. After that, powder is entered to mixer and continues to rotating heater. It looks like look pipe with source of heat in the end. Next, powder is grinded to become cement. Finally it is ready to cover by bags.

The second process need cement (15%), water (10%), sand (25%), and gravel (25%) to produce concrete. There is a mixture that can be used to mix the entire source in one place. For the first, mix those things into concrete mixer. And then, the mixer will be rotate to mix the ingredients by clock wise rotating direction.

Writing Feedback / Traffic congestion makes the amount of pollution rate increasing [2]

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective?

Throughout these days, traffic congestion has been the main problem in the city and it makes the amount of pollution rate is increasing. However, in my opinion, I agree that the price of oil can affect the number of transportation in the street and I am sure that there are the other solutions to face these problems.

Oil is the most significant thing for vehicles to operate. The prices of oil is higher than before, drivers tend to use public transportation. But, some people still drive a car because they want to arrive of their destination quickly. That is only the minority of people and the fact say that people do not want to buy gasoline which has high price and it will decrease the rate of pollution in the street. For instance, there was a sharp decrease in the number of vehicles in the street because the government made a rule to increase the price of oil twice in 2005. However, I agree that lowering of prices the way how to reduce pollution and traffic congestion while there are many solutions that can solve this problem.

Using public transportation is one of the solutions to decrease pollution in the city. But, the government needs to fix the public transportation that makes it faster and more comfortable for people to use. Another solution is that cars need to pay off the cross to some streets. The driver will think again if they have to pay every crossing the street. For instance, Electronic Road Price (ERP) is implemented by Indonesian government in protocol way. It has reduced 25 percent of cars in the street. The consequence is that pollution will decrease as well. However, many ways solve this problem in the street.

To sum up, I totally agree that the price of oil can handle the number of vehicles and lowering the pollution while these other solutions still can be implemented. In my opinion, this solution can be reality if the government is very serious to fix the problem.

Writing Feedback / Children can study more effective, however they can't eat junk foods, only healthy meals [2]

To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal at school. How true is this statement ? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children?

In this era, children have many activities in school from in the morning until in the afternoon. To support the education, children must eat healthy food. As a result, process education will be better and children can study more effective.

Eating healthy food can surely give the best effect for students to get high score. Firstly, children attend to the class everyday because they do not sick. Secondly, they can concentrate while they are studying and they will more focus to listen what their teacher say. Finally, they can be smart because of nutrition that they have consumed everyday. For instance, based on the research in 2005, children who have IQ more than 100 always consumed healthy food that contains vitamin and protein. Although, there is a few child who always eat good food but still get bad score, it happens because they do not want study.

However, schools and parents are those who have responsibility to serve healthy food when children are studying in school. Because children usually buy food in school canteen, school have to make sure that the food is certainly fresh and clean. School can filter the food that can be sold in canteen and check the expired date of each food. After that, the condition of canteen itself must clean, because bacteri will be growth in dirty place. In the other hand, parents need to serve high quality food for their children if they are affraid about the food condition at school. They can give food with high nutrition, vitamin, and also include some fruits in children's meal. However, someone who lives closer to children is the one that have to make sure what children eat.

To sum up, healthy food is very important to make children fit. Beside that, school and parent have to give the best meal for children to support education process at school. In my opinion, children should protect themselves from dangerous food and obey what their parents or teacher in school suggesting to them about food.

Writing Feedback / The table shows the detail aspects from using airplane in percent from 1999, 2000, to 2007 in the US [3]

The chart and table below show customer satisfaction levels in the US with airlines and aspects of air travel in 1999, 2000, and 2007.

The bar chart illustrates the rate of customer satisfication in airlines and the table shows the detail aspects from using airplane in percent from 1999, 2000, to 2007 in the US. Overall, it can be seen that over eight-years period the percentage in satisfied always higher than in dissatisfied and in aspect about courtesy of flight attendants is usually higher than the other aspects between 1999, 2000, and 2007.

There was an increase in satisfied answer from customers from 1999, 2000, to 2007 while in dissatisfied decreased. In satisfied answer hit a high point in 2007 at 72 percent while dissatisfied bottomed at 24 percent. Between 2000 and 2007, there was the highest decrease by 5 percent in dissatisfied answer.

In 1999, courtesy of flight attendants was the higher percentage at 88 percent when price of tickets was the lowest percentage at 45 percent. In 1999 and 2000, there was not people who was given answer to the survey about comfort of seats. After that, in 2007, courtesy of flight attendats was the highest at 92 percent when comfort seats was the lowest at 47 percent. Price of ticket and courtesy of flight attendats always increased over eight-years period.

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Writing Feedback / The appearance is very significant information about people's interest and sometimes their beliefs [2]

Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear.

Clothes have developed in this modern era and they have been a fashion for many people. Appearance is very significant information about people's interest while sometimes it can be perception how people think about someone else. However, I think fashion is essential to predict people's life, but it is not absolutely true.

Various fashion styles that people have used in the century. From fashion, people know which clothes people like and it can be caused by financial condition. The rich usually wear luxury and branded product because they have much money to buy expensive clothes when the poor only wear standard clothes. Even they have same fashion mode, wealthy people certainly love higher class fashion than the poor. For instance, legislation council and farmer want to buy white t-shirt. And the result is so different in quality. Therefore, people's styles is indicate what they interest and it can be influenced by another factor.

Many reasons why people like trendy clothes or juts simple cothes happen today. It is hard to know that they are rich or not. For instance, Bill Gates always worn black long hand t-shirt while they published his product or had conference in from of people. It does not mean that he does not have enough money to buy expensive clothes. It is happen because he loves simple clothes. However, people should not underestimate people based on their fashion style, because sometimes it is opposite what we are thingking about.

All in all, people prefer to wear clothes that they like but it does not mean they are bad in financial. However, in my opinion, fashion is an art so it cannot be a tools for judging someone.

Writing Feedback / The pie charts present about the relationship between employees and supervisor and their work-mates [2]

The charts below show the results of surveys in 2005 and 2009 asking workers about their relationship with their supervisors and their co-workers.

The pie charts present about the relationship between employees and supervisor and their work-mates in 2005 and 2009 based on surveys. Overall, it can be seen that the highest percentage both relationship with supervisor and job partners are very good and it's always more than fifty percent while the lowest percentage are don't have work-mates in 2005 and 2009.

In relationship with supervisor, there was an increase in very good percentage over 4-years period. It changed from 61 percent to 65 percent when there was a decrease in good results from 26 percent to 22 percent. Beside that, in don't have a supervisor there was an increase from 1 percent to 5 percent when there was a steady percentage in poor answer at 2 percent.

In relationship with co-workers, there was an increase in very good results from 63 percent to 70 percent while there were a decrease in good and fair results, from 28 percent to 25 percent and 7 percent to 3 percent respectively. But in 2009 there was not employees that have poor answer.

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