justivy03
Sep 9, 2016
Scholarship / Individuals with strong networking skill and influence to lead others [6]
Hi Choy, it's great to hear from you and thank you for appreciating our work here on EF, I know it's going to be a long road for you to take in pursuing your academic goal, but hey, you made a good start here so the goal should not be far behind.
What's good about your writing is the fact that you are very specific, you have the words, "I believe", "I know" and this are just examples of words that gives you an edge from applicants who are not sure of what they really want to do or their definite purpose in applying for the scholarship.
Overall, you are in a very definite track that will hopefully yield good results in the end. Furthermore, I still suggest that you keep writing, keep reading good English literatures, do a healthy comparison of your work, this way you will be able to critique your own work, thus, opening windows for you to get better at this craft. Keep writing Choy!
Hi Choy, it's great to hear from you and thank you for appreciating our work here on EF, I know it's going to be a long road for you to take in pursuing your academic goal, but hey, you made a good start here so the goal should not be far behind.
What's good about your writing is the fact that you are very specific, you have the words, "I believe", "I know" and this are just examples of words that gives you an edge from applicants who are not sure of what they really want to do or their definite purpose in applying for the scholarship.
Overall, you are in a very definite track that will hopefully yield good results in the end. Furthermore, I still suggest that you keep writing, keep reading good English literatures, do a healthy comparison of your work, this way you will be able to critique your own work, thus, opening windows for you to get better at this craft. Keep writing Choy!