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Name: yurike ika cahyo
Joined: Nov 10, 2016
Last Post: Dec 2, 2016
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School: Sepuluh Nopember Institute of Technology

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yurikeyuri   
Dec 2, 2016
Writing Feedback / Fijian ants grow their own plant cities and farm tropical fruits [2]

The Squamellaria fruit plant is used growing media of the ant, Philidris Nagasau who enter in seeds of the fruit plant and eat flesh also collect the seeds for future farming. Not only the fertiliser is main feature of the growing of the plant, but also it dependent on the ant, so they can symbiotic relationship which it can be the history of the Fijian ant-plant interactions that when the plants developed roots that could grow in bark and the ants lost their ability to build nests and at the same time as finally this signals the beginning of the mutual relationship. Moreover, the ants also have smart ability to cultivate the fungi recently. The stagger teamwork of ants comes from their skill to develop such sophisticated food production

Source : New Scientist
yurikeyuri   
Dec 2, 2016
Writing Feedback / Eight Easy Ways Lead to Success [2]

There are eight ways to create success in the life according to seven years of research and 500 interviews. First of all is the passion according to Freeman Thomas who talk about passion can bring to the success because do it for love. Secondly, Rupert Murdoach said that the success must do with hard work because nothing comes easily. Thirdly, put the nose down in good something to get the success and practice it, based on Alex Garden's says. Then focus, in Noman Jewison's view who is think all with focusing on one thing. David Gallo. The next, Push the self, particularly physically and mentally, also pass the shyness and self-doubt. Then, Sherwin Nuland talked that the another way which can serve others something of value. The Ideas come from creativity skills according to Bill Gates's speak. Kraus says that persistence is the total one reason for the success which it gotta persist pass failure.

Source : TED
yurikeyuri   
Dec 2, 2016
Writing Feedback / India's grand plan to create world's longest river set to go [4]

Hello Pram, let me give my correction for you

India planplans to make (India is singular noun, use singular verb too)

about 3000 damdams(because plural noun)

it makemakes drought ("it" is singular verb, so use singular verb too)

eventhougheven though

... increasing water supply in otheranother dam

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Dec 2, 2016
Writing Feedback / Within left behind underwater in Mediterrania, live an unique species of fish. [2]

Hello Pram, let me give my correction for you

Within left behind area of under waterunderwater are in Mediterrania

biodiversity that makemakes less of (the subject "biodiversity" is singular subject", so you use singular verb too)

This uncommon activity of this species drawdraws(the subject in this sentence is "uncommon activity" which is singular subject, and after the preposition "of" is object)

look like whiles(did you mean "whales"?)

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Dec 1, 2016
Writing Feedback / Office clothes are important, but the quality of work is crucial to the existence of an organisation [2]

Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

One of the important things that must have many employees in the company in office-look clothes which they wear, but the quality of labor's working skill is important else than their appearance.

Nowadays, may organizations decide in order to their employees must have good-looking style because the labor's appearance shows the identity of the company, so it is right way if many companies have the certain rule which their employees must use smart dress in working area. However, I think it is not main feature to enterprise the identity of the company because the quality work of the labor is more important to show their name and work capability of the company rather than the suitable which they wear.

Some companies is entering the industrialization era, it means that the capability of work is more essential from other factors, like clothes-looking. The quality of labor's working shows more and less the rating of the organization because the skill can be measured and looked by other people who want to look job capacity of the industry. Some researchers illustrate that the identity of the industry can be looked from the work capacity of their employees and I think that it is right statement because the working style can determine the result of things which can be produced by the factory and also can be felt by the people who as their consumer in the real life.

All in all, I can conclude that the capability of employee's working as important as the suitable which the labors wear, while the quality of working is more essential rather than clothes. Finally, I just give suggest that it must balance between two factors above because it can improve the name of the organization and also it can be the right way towards modern industrialization.
yurikeyuri   
Dec 1, 2016
Writing Feedback / The drought is the crucial problem for some areas in the globe like in Papua [5]

Hello Pram, I will give my correction for you

it happenhappens(because the pronoun "it" indicate singular subject in this sentence, so you must use singular verb too)

In many perspectiveperspectives(after the quantifier "many", you must use plural noun)

Marchela, scientist from UGM that focus on plant in her research, saysays that (because subject "Marchela" is singular, so use singular verb too)

root of these plantplants(because the word "thes" indicate plural noun, so you must use "plants")

Hutama, professor from Upsalla University, saysays that (because subject "Hutama" is singular, so use singular verb too)

the government (the word "Government" need article "the" in this sencente because only one noun/things)

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Dec 1, 2016
Writing Feedback / Looking for a love in social network. [2]

Hello Pram, I will give my correction for you

teenager who find finds love (because the teenager is singular subject, so you must use singular verb too)

The Social network (in the early of sentence, you must use article "the")

online dating also bringbrings(because "online dating" is singular noun, so you must use singular verb too)

eventhougheven though from this website (the right write of even though)

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Dec 1, 2016
Writing Feedback / The connubial couple have twice more chances for happiness than single people [2]

The charts illustrate about the percentage of happiness ratings based on the number of people age and the percentage of the effect of the children who the marital couple has on the spouse life. Overall, the connubial people have twice more happiness rating than unmarried people, and also the children who married people have that is not effect in the happiness ratings.

Firstly, the percentage of happiness of married people is above 40 percent which the highest percentage at 45 percent in young age, between 18 and 29 years old, and also the lowest percentage in over medium, 50 to 64 years old. Secondly. The percentage of happiness of unmarried people is between 20 and 35 percent which the highest percentage at 34 percent in the old period, 65 years and over.

Another graph shows the happiness of marital couple who have children that above 40 percent and it is not effect to their happiness. The highest percentage at 44 percent in married couple life which have children under 18 years old and the lowest percentage in the spouse life which have only children 18+ years old about 41 percent.
yurikeyuri   
Dec 1, 2016
Writing Feedback / A Next-Generation Digital Book [2]

Push Pop Press Team, Charlie Mecher, and Melcher Media create the first feature-length interactive book, which called "Our Choice" with the author is Al Gore that explains about solve the climate crisis. Many advantages of this electronic book which only touching the screen, like search the location where we are now which called interactive map, open and swipe through the chapters, the pages at the bottom can scrolled, open the page to zoom, lift off and open up have function to open the another page, the opposite that just fold the page is back up and put it back. Moreover, it shows the documentary footage and interactive animation in the page on the book which we can play it while we read a book. also, the video can be pinched and peaked back at the page and the video still playing. The other features illustrate the interactive infographics, like wind, geothermal, solar power potential that only takes the finger, it can be explored and seen state by state. On the other hand, the book can be blown by us and it shows real motion, also these books can run in iPad, iPhone.

Source : TED
yurikeyuri   
Dec 1, 2016
Writing Feedback / Jakarta's Governor Was Questioned for Hours by Police as Part of a Blasphemy Probe [2]

Basuki T. Purnama or Ahok, the governor of the country's capital, answered 27 questions which repetitive of the previous interrogation for 8 hours from Indonesian police because his case is blasphemy probe. His campaign brings a quranic verse, Al Maidah, that the position of leadership in Indonesia mustn't always from Muslims although Indonesia is a Muslim-majority country. He had apologized that he never intended to insult Islam or the Quran., but 200,000 Muslims protested Ahok in the Streets of Jakarta on 4th November 2016 and also they require Indonesian President "Jokowi" to endorse the governor in the upcoming gubernatorial election. The solving of this problem is meeting with leaders from mainstream Islamic groups, political parties, and also Prabowo Subianto as former presidential election rival and his party's chairwoman Megawati Sukarnoputri as well as military officials.

Source : TIME
yurikeyuri   
Dec 1, 2016
Writing Feedback / These days, formal dress became a trend in the most of companies and institutions. [2]

Hello Alfin, l give my correction for you

clothes formally becomesbecome("clothes" are plural noun, so you must use plural ver too)

People who workswork have accustomed ("people" are plural noun, so you must use "work")

... be polite and wear a good clothes (not use article "a or an" before the plural noun "clothes")

it makemakes customers (pronoun "it" in this sentence indicate singular, so you must use singular verb too)

probably don't recognized us(remember that after "do or does", you must use V1)

It can be happenhappened because (the passive voice is using the Verb participle or V3)

because they do not be related directly

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 30, 2016
Writing Feedback / The time when young people finished their school and before take a lecture in the college [5]

Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this

The time when young people finished their school and before take a lecture in the college that is opportunity time to take a job in the adolescence. Although there are some advantages to working in young time, I believe that many disadvantages too. The advantages are the enrich work experience and financial matters, meanwhile, the disadvantages are lack of the academic knowledge and also deficiency on finances.

One of two advantages is they who decide to work after school graduation will have enlarged work skill. For the first example, the fresh graduate who early has academic experience such as study oriented, working the task, and only reading or writing skill, in the next time in other places like industry or working area will more learn about keep on stay good process and also they can communicate with many people, so it will increase their new knowledge. For the second example, young people who take a job early after school and before enroll be the student of the university will increase the financial matters in their life. They will have self-income from their job and also it can help family economical in order to suffice with standard life matters.

However, there are many disadvantages of the adolescent who get work in early time before they study in college. Firstly, the young people will have the lack of academic knowledge because many their times has been wasted to focus on the job in the industry. They must review again many studying materials which they are gotten in school level. Secondly, the young people who decide don't to work in transition time, between school and university, will have the financial problem in their life because the need some necessaries to towards the life, but they don't have many ultimates to keep their necessity.

Finally, I can conclude about the decision of the graduate school which will take a job has many advantages to increasing their knowledge and work skill, but it also has many disadvantages in the academic knowledge . I suggest that the adolescent must envisage the two decision in order to appropriate with their life.
yurikeyuri   
Nov 30, 2016
Writing Feedback / The wind turbine with its components and best locations to generate electricity effectively [3]

The pictures illustrate about the type of devices which be operated as wind turbine and the location where it can be applicated in the environment. Overall, the wind turbine has the same design in many locations, such as in the sea, lower mainland, or high place, and also this device has the same natural resource, mainly wind source.

The wind turbine consists of blades which made from fiberglass r wood, wind sensor that has function in measurement of speed and direction of wind resource, generator which will change the wind resource become electricity, the steel tower which will prop up this device, and the computer in the house will receive the data from sensor and adjust blades.

This renewable energy device can be placed in three places, such as in the sea, in the citizen place which is called domestic turbine, and in the high hell. The wind turbine which is placed in the sea has electric energy result between 100 kilowatts and 1.5 megawatts, but the domestic turbine can produce output electricity is 100 kilowatts and the turbine which is applicated in the high hill like mountain will generate 1.5 megawatts of electricity output.
yurikeyuri   
Nov 30, 2016
Writing Feedback / Diverification of Monotasking and Multitasking Skill [3]

Monotasking and multitasking are the two things which defferent. Monotasking is skill which focusing only one things, but multitasking is another different skill which able to do or control many things in one time. For the example, mono phone which has one essential function or mono compas is device which has one feature on the adventure. Meanwhile, there is another of skill, supertasker, of the people who are able to manage multitasking field.

Source : TED
yurikeyuri   
Nov 30, 2016
Writing Feedback / Chinese Astronauts Back on Earth After Monthlong Stay in Space [2]

Two Chinese astronauts, Jing Haipeng and Chen Dong, went to space by Shenzhou 11 vehicle for monthlong stay which it is the sixth and longest crewed China's mission and the growing ambitions of advancing space program. They come back on earth with good condition and they spent 30 days aboard for conducting experiment and preparation of equipment. The space program has realized new progress and can contribute in the innovation and a world power of science and technology of the country. the reputation of the space program that China has launched two space stations, staged a spacewalk, landed a rover on the moon and is now considering sending a crewed lunar mission. The another country is funding the china's space program to Tiangong 2, which, at 60 tons when completed, would still be considerably smaller than the 420-ton ISS.

Source : TIME
yurikeyuri   
Nov 29, 2016
Writing Feedback / Water Canary is Easily Future Devices [3]

The cholera is one of disease that is caused by water contaminated. The previous device to test water contaminated has many disadvantages, like after it changes, the picture of condition on the ground will be obtained and for implementation need very expensive cost. The alternative device is water canary with many advantages like it is fast because use light for the chemical reaction to take place, also it is cheap device because no need to use reagents that can run out, and finally it no need expert person to get actionable information about water contaminated. The working step to test water is inserted a water sample and within second, the device will display either the light which the red light indicate the contaminated water or the green light that indicate safety sample. Everyone can collect life-saving information and can monitor water quality condition. This device integrates with wireless networking by GPS and GSM which can read automatically transmitted to servers to be mapped in real time, so this way can prevent the contaminated water before it becomes emergencies

Source : TED
yurikeyuri   
Nov 29, 2016
Writing Feedback / The media should bring more attention to commoners people news than the celebrities news. [4]

The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or football. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead

The news of celebrities always being reported in media and the opposite talks that common people show is rare in media. The phenomenon must more attention to commoners people news than the celebrities news. My point of view said that the unknown people news more essential to educate many people in other places. Moreover, the celebrity news is important else for inspiring abut new mode style, particularly in modern lifestyle.

Firstly, the entertainer news is important to entertain many people by comedian, cinema, their daily activity in modern style which it is very useful to develop our style and also to update our old fashion especially. Many celebrities have the modern style in their interior design of their house, beautiful jewelry which they have, kinds of other cosmetics that can be inspiring to use for people who duplicate their modern beauty. Also, the celebrities can entertain by their daily activity which is the humorous moment.

However, there is news which is more essential for our life which is unknown people report because, from this news, we can learn more about reality life in society and also inspire our self to do much useful something in daily activity. The ordinary people have many unique activities, such as in agriculture, culture, and education field. For the example, the farmer of commoners who lived in the rural village can create hydroponic technology to increase high result in many seasons without the use of large land media. The inspiring technology can educate many people in order to always innovation in technology towards self-production program in this developing country. secondly, many inspirations activity of common people which can become role models to introduce the traditional culture in the international area and can be known by other countries in the world. Thirdly, many innovation programs in education field which to inspire and more educating the young generation to increase the studying skills.

In the conclusion, the celebrity news is important to other people as to entertain the citizen, but the news of common people is more demanded to society life in order to towards development life. On the other hand, I suggest that the industrial must be able to decide balance between reporting the celebrity and unknown people to increase the knowledge of inhabitants.
yurikeyuri   
Nov 29, 2016
Writing Feedback / The process of finding English and French Language Educators in Ontario [3]

Percentage of first-year teachers with regular teaching jobs by year of graduation

The graph illustrates about the percentage of the process finding English and French Language Educator in Ontario each year of graduation between 2001 and 2007. Overall, the recruitment process of French-language teachers is bigger than English-language teachers, and also the French-language teachers show the up trend of the line graph, it means the line graph of English-language teachers shows the opposite. However, two line graphs have the same amount of starting point.

Firstly, the line graph of English-language teachers has starting point about 70 percent in 2001, the fall dramatically in two next years. For two next years again, the graph slightly increases and have the peak at between 40 percent and 50 percent in 2005. Finally, the line decreases again and has the smallest percentage at below 30 percent in 2007.

Secondly, the another line graph is French-language teachers has the same starting point in 2001 about 70 percent, then the line decreases by almost 20 percent in 2002 and also it is the smallest percentage of this graph. However, the line graph increases again in one next year, then it has the slight increase between 2003 and 2005, but the line graph decreases at below 70 percent and finally the line increases again and it means that it has the highest percentage at over 70 percent in 2007.
yurikeyuri   
Nov 28, 2016
Writing Feedback / Integration Problems for People Living Aboard [5]

The chart talks about the relation between many people living aboard and the problems which they have. Overview, the main feature of the problems consist of three factors which is sorting out finances, sorting out healthcare, and finding educational institution for their cildren which happen in people aged range. Also the finding school for their children is the less percentage of their problem.

Firstly, the sourting out finances factor always appear in over 25 percent which the highest percentage about 35 percent in range age of people is 35 - 54 years. However, the lowest percentage of this problem almost 30 percent in people over 55 years. The different between young aged and middle aged group of people by below 5 percent.

Secondly, the highest percentage of sourting out healthcare over 35 percent in people middle aged which the opposite said that the lowest percentage between 30 and 35 percent in people over 55 years. The different of this factor is not sharply which the different of value by below 5 percent or same with the different of first problem.

Thirdly, the finding school has smaller percentage of other problems before which it has the highest percentage approximately 20 percent in people aged 35 - 54 years and also it has the lowest percentage at below 5 percent in people age range over 55 years.
yurikeyuri   
Nov 28, 2016
Writing Feedback / Children use their smartphones everywhere - it provides to the unhealthy lifestyle [2]

Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?


The main problem of unhealthy lifestyle happen in manny children, particularly the use of handphone which it need solving way from both educational institution and their parents. In my view, the solving way from them must do together in order to can towards the children unhealthy lifestyle free.

Nowadays, the use of handphone in information era always increase typically in children life. The children use the handphone in school and almost in their house. On the other hand, the school have the task to decrease on the handphone using when they in the school or when the children in the home, especially in their bedroom which always use their handphone. Recently, there is many school which still allow the students particularly the children to bring handphone in around school activity. Finally, will use their handphone when in the classroom or in break time. The school must not allow their student to bring handphone to the school because it will disturb the teaching and learning activity, and also it has many negative impacts to their healthy, mainly the problems in brain or their bone.

However, the children have another place too which they most wate their time in the home, so the parents are the most important to solve the problem of handphone using in the children life. If the children take more their time to interact with their handphone, their healthy will have many diseases which destroy their body, such as rematic and brain or bone disease. The parents must not allow the favorite activity of their children and they can change this activity with do these activities in the home, such as gathering with many people in watching room or family room to communicate the hoby, the today news, or the school.

Finally, the conclution of this problem is the both father-mother and the schools have main feature to help the children far of handphone using un their activity. I also suggest that the school and the parent always see and more protection to the children and always give may alternative acivities which interesting for the children.
yurikeyuri   
Nov 28, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Truth of Turkey and Tryptophan [9]

The turkey's meat has a bad reputation to make eaters sleepy. It contains the amino acid L-tryptophan, which produces sleep-promoting serotonin and melatonin. The opposite is the tryptophan that has the function to against sleepiness with the much of protein which can regulate insulin levels and actually combat fatigue.

Source : TIME
yurikeyuri   
Nov 23, 2016
Writing Feedback / Exercise writing test 2 (Inventors are not as important to society as doctors, Agree or disagree) [6]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

numerous inventions waswere(because the subject "inventions" is plural, so you must use "were" not "was")

many achivementsachievements

several revolutionary productproducts(the word "several" indicate the plural)

if they didn't discovereddiscovere(because after did is V1)

most of the people don't have handphone or computer, even electric can't useduse by people

the doctor also (...), they have abiltyability

Everyone werewas needed (because the word "everyone" indicate singular subject, so you must use singular verb too)

the inventors has have aan intelligence for discoverdiscovering new inventions which usefulluseful for human in the world

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 23, 2016
Writing Feedback / Global trade of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009 [4]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

The information about the global trade of hybrid vehicles

is presented by the bar chart

during the periodeperiod except in the last period

quite similar asto the rate in the first period(the correct preposition is to after the word "similar")

they had the similar pattern that was increaseincreased slightly

it reachreachs bigger

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 23, 2016
Scholarship / Highlight what you believe to be the most important issue facing your country today [3]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

highly dependent ofon foreign (the right preposition after dependent is "on")

my class werewas visiting (because the subject "my class" is singular, so you must use the singular verb too)

one country needneeds(because the subject "one country" is singular, so the verb "needs" must singular too)

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 23, 2016
Writing Feedback / The new appearance of The Canada transition out of coal-powered electricity by 2030 [3]

Canada has the plan to reduce the old coal-fired power in 2030 with accelerating from existing timetable that the defeating of trump's ideas to reborn the coal industry. They are two option which will give to the four provinces, Alberta, Saskatchewan, Nova Scotia, and New Brunswick, where still burn coal for power that it produces power using lower-emitting resources or using carbon capture and storage technology. Nowadays, the non-carbon emitting resource produces 80 percent of Canada's electricity and will increase by 10 percent in 2030. the use of the Canada Infrastructure Bank's public-private funding mechanism will help the Canadian government to the realization the transition out of coal-powered electricity.

Source : TIME
yurikeyuri   
Nov 23, 2016
Writing Feedback / Positive Impact on The Walking Activity [6]

One of the daily activity of some people is sitting 9.3 hours a day. This activity makes the negative influence in healthy of someone which many diseases like breast cancer and colon cancer, heart disease, and type two diabetes which the percentage are 10 percent, 6 percent, 7 percent. Therefore, the one and main solution to reduce the negative impact of over sitting is walking more in anytime and anywhere, because the fresh air will mobilize fresh thinking and finally give some new ideas in the brain, also the walking in the way make us in order to respect to others people in their environment.

Source : TED
yurikeyuri   
Nov 23, 2016
Writing Feedback / GRE Issue Topic : "All too often, companies hire outside consultants to suggest ways for the [7]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

Now a days consultancies are increasing day by day Nowadays

opinions to other companycompanies who hire their services (other indicate the plural form so the word "company" must in plural form too)

so they have good experience in the there field

view pointsview point and suggestions

wasting a time to hire a full timefull-time employee or (...) employee who don'tdoesn't have prior experience ...

they hire a consultants from the outside

have spendspent
yurikeyuri   
Nov 23, 2016
Writing Feedback / "Inventors are not as important to society as doctors, Agree or disagree?" [3]

The talking about the position or function of the scientist to society as same important as the doctors. The inventors or the doctors just have the different way in the society, but these work have same important to increase the good quality of society life. In my view, I disagree with the statement that the doctor is important to society and not for the inventor.

The doctor has a job description to solve other problems in the environment, particularly in the health field. The health sector is one of the big problems which occur the body of the human in their population. For example, many diseases have damaged the society like cancer, diabetes, hypertension etc. which need the medical treatment from the doctors. Therefore, the doctors have the main job to reduce the percentage of disease risk or to solve many problems only in the medic subject. However, it is different of the way to solve other problems in outer the medician, like agriculture, technology, or the environment. The doctors can't solve these problems.

The inventors have many skills to solve the problem in society which the problem can't be solved by the doctor. For example, to make many solutions to solve agriculture problem like the drought is increased the cloud seeding which has researched by the scientist in order to occur the not nature rainwater. Also, to increase eco electricity power system, so the scientist makes the outline research of wave electricity. In many cases, there is work which can't be solved by the doctor but can be done with another person, mainly scientist

Finally, the conclusion of this problem is the inventor as more important as the doctor. The inventors have many skills to solve many problems in the society which can't be solved by the doctors. I suggest that these jobs must be work together in the society.
yurikeyuri   
Nov 23, 2016
Writing Feedback / The total demand on hybrid vehicles in 2009 was twice as much as three years earlier [7]

The global sale of hybrid vehicles is showed in below chart between 2006 and 2009. The kinds of countries which participate in this survey that are Japan, US, and other. Overall, the total sales in 2009 were the twice amount of the total sales in 2009 and it includes the upward trend.

Firstly, Japan always increases the sale of hybrid transport between 2006 and 2009, which it has the highest number of sales at almost 350 thousand that it increased extremely from 2008 to 2009. Not only Japan has highest sales, but also it has the lowest number of hybrid vehicle sales approximately 50 thousand.

Secondly, Ushas up and down trend of the hybrid transport sales which it has the lowest number of sales about 250 thousand vehicles and also the US has the highest number of hybrid sales by 100 thousand in 2007 or from one year before in 2006.

Thirdly, the other countries have the gradual increase about 50 thousand transports from 2006 to 2009 which the smallest number of hybrid vehicle sales at 50 thousand, also the highest number is over 100 thousand and below in 150 thousand of the hybrid vehicle.
yurikeyuri   
Nov 22, 2016
Writing Feedback / How cement is made? Which materials are used in the manufacturing process? [3]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

results in the concrete mixer (the word "concrete mixer" need an article "the")

... cement production was insertinserted (because the both of was and insert are verbs, and two verbs must be separated by connector)

Afterwardsafterward , the powder

Another steps step, ("another" is indicate the singular form)

will produce the source of cement.

the material was grindedground by grinder (ground is verb 3 of grind not grinded)

the it will produce the concrete

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 22, 2016
Writing Feedback / Ielts academic task 2: some people say that we do not need printed newspaper anymore. agree/disagree [4]

Hello, let me give my correction for you

there isare many (the word "many" indicate plural form, so need plural verb is "are")

many kindkinds of (the word "many" indicate plural form, so need plural verb is "are")

informs you withof all the news (the best preposition after "you" is "of")

my coffee inon the balcony (the best preposition after "my coffe" is "on")

two puzzlepuzzles nearby (the word "two" indicate plural form, so need plural form of puzzle is "puzzles")

thank you
yurikeyuri   
Nov 22, 2016
Writing Feedback / 30 Days Method to Try New Something [3]

The new something can add to our life with many ways, mainly think or planning and try it for the next 30 days because this way is very effectively to support our self-do more, pressure and harder 30 days challenge and finally be much more memorable about something. We can keep thinking of self that one small thing is sustainable changes.

Source : TED
yurikeyuri   
Nov 22, 2016
Writing Feedback / Bleached corals in the Pacific have started bouncing bac [3]

The scientists make a research about coral around the island of Kiritimati and proved the coral about 85 percent was dead, 10 percent was sick and bleached, but only 5 per cent was doing okay. It occurred because of hot water phenomenon from El Nino. this is natural warming which sometimes occurred in the Pacific ocean and has the influence to change weather worldwide and also made global warming effect which coral damage in the sea. Meanwhile, the coral species are able to rebound and recover their life, but it still susceptible by El Nino threat, finally need to protect the coral with any natural systems.

Source : New Scientist

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