Writing Feedback / School - a place to get information and parents to teach good behavior. Unhealthy lifestyle problem. [4]

Many children these have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Nowadays, information about unhealthy lifestyle which occur in society especially for children can find anywhere as newspaper, magazine, internet and others. These problems are dangerous for them, unhealthy lifestyle on children can destroy their life, like easy to sick and make disease as diarrhea or obesity. These phenomena can disturb their daily activity as play or socialization with their friends. Unhealthy lifestyle on children is must eliminated and responsible for solving this problem are school and parents.

Schools are place for children to get information about good habits. In the school, teacher teach theirs student about unhealthy life style. Then, give them are remind about anything as well as how to a healthy diet, how to a healthy behavior and a healthy environment. For example, Teacher give task and example how to the dangerous of unhealthy life style for life. It will make them sick and cannot do activities. Besides, in school environment, teachers have responsibility to warn about instant food and the danger of that. So, school is the one factor to solving about unhealthy life for children because it is places of them to study and get knowledge.

On the other hand, parents are place to follow the healthy life style, parents must give a good example, good custom, and prevision before go to school. The behavior of parents will affect for children and have positive effect for their life style. Such as accustomed their children to wash their hand before eat, take a bath twice a day, toothbrush every morning and before sleep. In addition, Parents which give prevision for their children will help their healthy lifestyle, they will not eat instant food on their school and keep healthy, because more clean than food or snack which sale in their school. Parents are the first source of unhealthy life style for their children. If they do not have good behavior as habits, it will make their children have unhealthy life style.

In conclusion, both of school and parents are responsible for solving the problem about unhealthy lifestyle. School is place to get information and parents are place to teach good behavior. (354w)

Writing Feedback / The chart compares the problems of citizens who stay outside their home countries [5]

The chart below shows information about the problems people have when they go to live in other countries.

The chart compares the problems of citizen when stay in other countries based on different ages. All in all, the most severe issues of moving abroad is experienced by the middle age for all types of difficulty.

The biggest problem about money are experienced by age group 35-54 around 35 percent, then people ages 18-34 with the percentage is under 35 percent. While, the oldest age category finds it as the smallest problem approximately 28 percent. For the healthy problem, 38 percent is the biggest feature that underwent by people ages 35-54 then people over 55 years old, with the percentage is under 38 percent. A bit different the percentage of old people, just around 32 percent is young people have healthy problem. On the other hand, the last problem people are finding school for their children, 19 percent is the percentage of second last age of people. It is the higher percentages if compares with young people and old people. People have 18-34 years-old is the second highest after middle age about 6 percent and then just 2 percent is over 55 years-old.

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Writing Feedback / News about ordinary people bring other people's attention for local problems [5]

Writing Task 2
The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationship of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.

To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In the present, technology has developed rapidly, people can find much information in several media, such as television programs, newspaper or the internet. Because of that, people can know local, international or anything news which they want to seen. Some people argue that, the media just should report about the activities of local people in the country. But in my view, I tend to agree about that, because other important to report by the media is activities of celebrities.

People who argue that, the media should report about lives of common people. They have main reason for their opinion. Ordinary people news brings other people to pay attention for local problems such as crime, natural disasters, killing, theft and other problems. For example, the first is, if citizens do not know about crime which occurs in a city, they will not care full when visit a city. It is important to know for safe our life. The second is natural disasters like tsunami, flood, and earthquake, it is important because we will aware of problems other people and can help them to solve their problem, may be give money, food or cloth.

On the other hand, to know the activities, problems or relationship of famous people also important. Because, it makes several people have motivation to follow their favorite actor and artist. For example, if people have favorite singer or player music, they will learn how to sing a song or instruments directly. Besides, for some people, the news becomes entertainments for them, and to know the development of fashion. So, it will not make citizens in a country have old-fashion and more know the global information.

In conclusion, I think that media have to report of celebrities problems or activities by local people and, because it is equally important to increase our knowledge about global or local news which occurs in around or beyond our rich.

Writing Feedback / The graph provides information regarding the recruitment number of English & French language tutors [3]

Percentage of first-year teacher with regular teaching jobs by year of graduation (Unit 3 Page 36)

The graph gives information about number of English-Language teachers and French-Language teachers from 2001 to 2007 in Ontorio by years of graduation. All in all, the percentage of English-Language teachers were a dramatic decrease and French-Language teachers were a slight increase.

In 2001, the number of English-language teachers stood at 75 percent and French-language teachers was 70 percent. Three years later, in 2003 there was a dramatic decrease of English-language teachers to 35 percent and decreased in the percentage of French-Language teachers during 2001 to 2003 at 70 percent to 68 percent.

From 2003 to 2005, English and French language teachers were gradual increase. Based on the graph can be seen that, an increase in English teachers were 40 percent to 45 percent. And then, French teachers were small rise from 68 percent to 70 percent.

Even though, there was grew up during three years later, between 2005 and 2007 the number of English-Language teachers and French-Language teachers were different. English-Language teachers were felt down under 30 percent, while French-Language teachers were slight increase event there was fluctuated (179w).

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Writing Feedback / The form of a wave-energy machine and several locations that it can be placed [5]

The diagrams show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location

The diagram gives information about the form of a wind turbine and several locations that can be placed. Overall, can be seen that turbine which placed on domestic will produce 100 kilowatts smaller than the resulting of generator is 1,5 megawatts.

The machine consist of Steel Tower, wind sensor, Generator and computer. Steel tower function is a pole holder and place of generator and wind sensor. Wind sensor function is accepts a wind and lit generator. And the last is computer, its function is accepts info from sensor. The process starts when the turbine is reached by wind, as a results, generator will be lit because wind was reached a sensor and computer was sent info from sensor. After that the turbine will be turned on by generator.

On the other hand, there are 3 locations of wind turbine, those are sea, local area, and hill. Based o the figures, we can see that, the turbine has been placed in sea result of landscape not spoiled. Domestic turbine produces 100 kilowatts. It is smaller than other which the generator produces 1,5 megawatts. Besides, Turbine has been placed on the hill have maximum wind strengths.

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Writing Feedback / To become an employee, working man or having business are available choices for people. [3]

Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages?

In the present, having a job is need by people. There are several kinds of job, such as working for a company or becoming independent business. Become employee, working man or having business are choose by people. They have some reasons to choose their job. But I argue that, having own company or start up have advantages for people rather than working for organization.

However, we know that the advantages have work in a company are get fixed salary every month, and have the right time to work. But it is cannot help people to get highest income and just work for their boss. So, it is make people cannot increase their lifestyle because have salary particular. On the other hand, people who have independent business will easy to growth up their life. This is affected by some advantages. The first is less pressure or work under pressure, that situation will make human more creative than others who have high pressure in their company. They have responsibility to make their business develop rapidly. The second is open job opportunity, it will help other people get job and they have better life. The third is flexible time and highest income. This is caused they can manage their time and their self to do another job and directly it makes have additional income. Although, we know that if we become an entrepreneur, it will have high risk and need much time to developing own business.

All in all, i think that there are many advantages, if we have own business or company, because can increase our lifestyle, personal quality and help people to get a job. However, there are competitor and vast capital.

Writing Feedback / The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people [2]

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

The charts give information on the level of happiness for people who are single and have a husband or wife in the US, and then married couples who do not have children and have children by the age of their children. Overall, it can be seen that the rate happiness people is same which is under 50 percent, but humans which have partner life spouse twice happier than the unmarried. In additional, there is a bit difference between the percentage people who have children and they who do not have children in their lives.

There is 45 percent of happy level by people was married at 18-29 years old. It is bigger than young and old people between age groups 30-49 and over 65 who have a level of happiness as much as 44 percent. While age groups 50-65 years old, there is 40 percent of happy level.

The number of percentage who has a level of happiness under 35 percent is unmarried people. Between 18 and 64 age groups have percentages around 21-22 percent, while over 65 years old just 34 percent. Afterwards, people who have children show a level happiness under 50 percent. Having children who under 18 years old for their life have percentages as much as 41 percent. And then 43 percent is the percentages of people do not have children.

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Writing Feedback / Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work [3]

Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Having a job is a responsibility which is chosen by people. There are many types job such as a employee, a teacher, advertising, a businessman, a driver and so on. Sometimes, people who want to improve their ability in a company or organization, they are do anything such as more creative than other, never come late, focus and confidence.

Some people argue that, having professionalism is important thing as a worker. Because it will make a company or an organization as a place by people to work become more productive. It is directly make a company have good image rather than other. A quality of work by employee effects the developing of an organization. For example, Film production house has had smart, creative, and responsible employee, it will make their company more famous than other, because they have best quality worker.

On the other hand, there are some organizations say that, an employee must wear smart dress. Appearance is one of factor which shows the professionalism of people, as a representative and characteristic a company. Sometimes, Wearing particular dress is a role model by a company as well as in a bank, a hospital, and other. People who have job like that, just not about skills or quality, but appearance is main factor, because their job related with citizens. For example a doctor should smart and warn their dress, because people do not believe, if they just wear casual dress at the hospital. So wearing dress smartly is important also for a worker.

In conclusion, I think that it is depend on how are people job, if they have job in a company they must follow regulation of their company. But if they are a businessman, they do not must wear office dress. On the other hand, having a good quality of work is important also to make people have best reputation.

Writing Feedback / Why agricultural land become less productive? The highest total land degradation is in Europe [2]

Causes of Land Degradation in Worldwide and Some Regions

The pie chart gives information about causes of productivity agricultural land of worldwide. The table gives information about the number of land degradation three regions in the world with three reasons. Overall, it can be seen that there are main reasons which causes of agricultural land becomes less productive and the highest total land degradation for 3 regions are Europe.

There is 35 percent of over-grazing which causes of less productivity of agricultural land. The second reasons which cause of worldwide land degradation is deforestation with the percentage is 30 percent. This factor places the second biggest factors after over-grazing. 28 percent is the percentage of over-cultivation, this becomes the third reason of agricultural band becomes less productive after over-grazing and deforestation.

On the other hand, there was biggest percentage of total degradation in Europe during 1990s, which was 23 percent consist of 9.8 percent deforestation, 7.7 percent over-cultivation and 5.5 percent over-grazing. Afterwards, Oceania is the second region which have 13 percent the number of degradation, the highest factor is over-grazing 11.3 percent. The last region is North America Which was percentage of land degradation become the smaller than other region it was 5 percent. (196w)

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Writing Feedback / Parents and school as a place for children to get knowledge and friendly habits in society. [3]

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this.

Becoming parents are biggest responsibility for keep their children. One of working by parents teach their children become useful for citizens, good member and friendly with the other. On the other hand, school is one of place children to get information and knowledge how to be good people which can help other people. Some people argue that, parents should teach children how to be good member of society and other say school is the place to learn about this. In my view, parents and school are the place of children to get knowledge and habbit become friendly in society.

Parents are good teacher after study in the school. Behavior of parents are the key of children to be good people. Children will imitate the habbit their mother and father. Because of this situation, parent become teacher for their children. Parent must teach their children how to be good members for society, they must give good example and explanation the benefit to be useful for other human. For example, if there are people get problem such as their neighboar, parents will help and give explanation to their children about helping of people is important because you live always need other people. People cannot life without other people, so become good members bring advantages for life. So, parent are the first teacher in the world.

However, school is the place of children to get new experience. It will become place of children to show their ability, how to help other people, especially for their school environment. For example, if there are friend do not understand about the lesson, indirectly children must teach to help their friend to understand about the lesson or when teacher give task, they can learn together and become useful friend.

In conclusion, parents are the first teacher for children to get good behavior and school is the place to get other information how to become good members and in the school are place to applicate their habbit and behavior which give their parent. So, parents and school place of children to get knowledge and applicate becom friendly human.

Writing Feedback / A number of Bulgarians with different education, who plan to continue their live in other countries [3]

The chart below give information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives information about the percentage of Bulgarians who have different education categories and having plan to continue their live in other country in 2002, 2006, and 2008. Overall, it can be seen that, people with secondary education have the highest percentage in 2002, 2006, and 2008 to leave Bulgaria. Although, there is small decrease in the percentage every category of years.

In 2002, people who have the biggest percentage to go in another country is secondary education which is 65 percent. This is become the higher one than other level in 2002, 2006, and 2008. For the higher education, there is fluctuation and become the smallest percentage in 2008 which is just 9 percent. Although, we can see that in 2006 the percentage reaches 20 percent.

Primary and lower education is the category which have gradual rise between 2002 and 2006. In 2002 stood at 18 percent and it increases at 19 percent. Afterwards, there is dramatically increase in the number of level education by 13 percent in 2008. However, the primary and lower education is always rise between 2002, 2006, and 2008, but secondary education which have the bigger percentage than other, which is in 2002, 2006, and 2008 at 65 percent, 61 percent and 59 percent.

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Writing Feedback / The developing, modern world makes very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle [2]

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

In the present, a healthy lifestyle is one of need by people. Because developing of world and many more activities or jobs, people will forget to discover their bodies. Unhealthy life, can be caused by consume unhealthy food or do not time to do sport. They are so busy and it makes them consume dangerous food, such as Junk food and other instant food which is simple to eaten. They do not think about the disease which can destroy their bodies if consume unhealthy food.

These days, Junk food or instant food can find everywhere. People usually choose eat junk food because they do not need more time and not expensive. Junk food have made people unhealthy, because there is less nutrition, it will make people obesity or find some disease such as cholesterol, higher blood pressure and mere dangerous is cancer. On the other hand, because busy reason, people do not have time to do sports. It will make much fat in their body, because in a week they just work and usually have pressure which can make stress. And finally, they are lazy to sport and because they think it will make they are more tired. They do not know it is unhealthy life style which can dangerous for their life.

But with the development of technology, we can find many facilities or people who have stored healthy food and we can delivery order. So in this time, nothing reason by people to say they do not have time to looking for food and make it by self because we can order whenever we want. Besides, doing sport is one of simple to doing in the house, because we can download of example gesture, which can help to do sport in house without go out. There several sports which can do in the home such as, yoga and gym.

In conclusion, unhealthy lifestyle always there are in daily activity but we can avoid this situation with used our knowledge and technology. Because, the world have became developing, many facilities can find and help people to doing healthy life style.

Writing Feedback / People argue on the fundamental external and internal communication skills, which is better in a job [2]

The table gives the results of two surveys, in 1997 and 2006, in which people were asked which communication skills were essential in their jobs.

The table compares the number of people who argue about the essential external and internal communication skills in their job in 1997 and 2006. Overall, it can be seen that the important thing in external communication is dealing with people and in internal communication is listening carefully to colleagues.

In 1997, 60 percent is the percentage of people who asked about dealing with people, it is needed in communication skill, especially external communication. Then, the same question was asked in 2006 and the percentage increase at 65 percent. Selling a product or serving are not essential enough in external communication, which is the percentage of people argue this communication skills is smaller than other, which is in 1997 and 2006 just 24 percent and 21 percent. For other skills, the number of people have view about kinds of external communication skills is under 40 percent.

On the other hand, listening carefully to colleagues is kind of internal communication skill, which is the number of people said, it is useful for their job is 30 percent in 1998 and it is increase become 47 percent in 2006. While, the lowest percentage is make speeches or presentation. People just argue that, it is 7 percent influence for their job in 1997 and 11 percent in 2006. And the other factors just have percentage smaller than 21 percent.

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Writing Feedback / Electronic media have a good effect for activities of people between another people. [3]

The use of electronic media has negative effects on personal relationships between people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the past, electronic media is one of things which do not much to find. People just communicate with send a letter by pos. But now, electronic media becomes important thing for their life. In this time, electronic media consist of many programs such as email, messenger, what's app, line, instagram, BBM, and other. This situation make people easy to communicate which other people. But others have view that, using electronic media can destroy their personal relationship in their life.

In my view, I totally disagree about that, I think electronic media helps people to more close with other, especially personal relationship. Because when we do not time to meet with other, we just send a text into our electronic media and we can make another meeting in another time. Electronic media have good effect for activities of people between another people. Some people can make lots of friend in social networking sites, it will affect for their career, because many colleagues from other aspects can find in social networking, directly affect for their personal relationship.

However, people do not speak to each other face or sometimes, people send massages without thinking first. But this is situation make people have many friends and close with other in other place or other jobs. Human can make other schedule if they want to meet in particular place. Without send a letter by post and it needs long time.

All in all, I believe that electronic media do not has negative effect on personal relationships between people, but it is help people more close because many application can use, if one of them is busy or in abroad, they can use video call application and can face to face through media electronic.

Writing Feedback / Recognising the heat loss in a house is a way to save much energy [5]

The diagram shows how heat is lost and energy wasted in a house because of air getting into and out of the house.

The diagram gives information about air leaking out and leaking into the house which is causes heat is lost and energy wasted. Overall, it can be seen that, heat is lost into the house through several ways which occur by air getting into the house. And energy will be wasted through several vents in the some rooms.

Based on the diagram, in the house consist of Bathroom fan vent, Plumbing stack vent, attic hatch, recessed lights, chase, kitchen fan vent, electrical outlet, dryer vent, crawl space and outdoor faucet. The air enter into the house and several items such as light, kitchen will result heat but it will be lost through the several vent, which are Plumbing stack vent, kitchen fan vent, dryer vent. Air leaking out of the house and heat is lost.

Besides, energy will wasted in a house, because air leaking out of the house. This is happen in the dryer vent and crawl space. Air will leak out and into the house which take place below of soil.

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Writing Feedback / Business aim, beside of making money, means helping others to get a job and make their life better [3]

The purpose of business is to make money and they should concentrate only on this. Do you agree or disagree?

These days, business has become job of several people. It is occur because people want to develop their career and they do not become employee. For several people, they argue that business is one of job which they can make money and if they have a business, it will make them just focus in their job. But in my view, I totally disagree about this statement.

Becoming a businessman and businesswomen is the choice of people. There are advantages if people have business such as help people to get job. With the development of country, many people need job to their live and their family. Business just not about make a money or result big income but it will help other people. Opening of job fields, which help people who do not work and directly the government is helped to loss and decrease of citizens do not work. On the other hand, having business which can make people happy is the positive effect of business. Because with the improving of technology, at the present people just order and delivery their tools or material foods, clothes, or anything which make live become simple. For example other people just open their phone, search and can get anything based on what are they want.

Having a business make people can do another thing, because they do not responsibility to follow a system. Such as people who have business online. They can do everywhere and whenever they want. They just need hand phone or media electronic to promote their business like make advertisement or broadcast in social media such as shoes, bags, electronic, or anything which become need of people. So, the businessman can make other job and get additional income to develop their business and open of job field for others.

In conclusion, having a business jus not about make money but help others to get job and make their life simple and enjoy. A businessman can do another thing because they have flexible time.