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TOEFL ESSAY:HOW TO USE THE LAND THAT YOU WISH?

2 - Land is a valuable resource, as we can make a lot of money and a lot of other things...

Writing Feedbackhatung94 - Jan 23, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 23, 2010
Descriptive essay of a person you know (family first, himself last)

2 - I know that sounds bad becauseit makes you think we used him. It's not like that at all,...

Writing Feedbacktwillis32 - Jan 22, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 23, 2010
My Existentialism Beliefs-Free Will, karma, and reincarnation

3 - It depends on whether or not you care about showing "good composition," whatever that is. If you want...

Writing Feedbackrosschang - Jan 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 23, 2010
using computers in schools results in the rise in the illiteracy rate?

3 - Great corrections, caonhungchi! Here is another one: There is no doubt that the computer is one of the...

Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Jan 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 23, 2010
Dream Job essay (independent films)

3 - Thank you two for all you input. And to Juniper this essay is for Western Washington University, i'm also...

Writing Feedbackalejandrocastil - Jan 20, 2010 / alejandrocastil - Jan 23, 2010
Advantages and disadvantages of computer to run a small business!

4 - you use too many linking words. This may make your essay incoherent or maybe sometimes illogical...

Writing Feedbackvothiha - Jan 9, 2010 / hatung94 - Jan 23, 2010
people should try to earn money as much as possible??

4 - the open of your 1st essay seems too long. you should shorten it and focus on the topic :D...

Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Jan 17, 2010 / hatung94 - Jan 23, 2010
Trafficking in human beings - My 500-words essay

7 - After studying a number of publications on this subject I made the following conclusions. Non-governmental organizations are doing a...

Writing Feedbackmalenkaya_ya - Jan 22, 2010 / malenkaya_ya - Jan 23, 2010
"Recent Moscow State University bachelor in psychology came to an unknown world"

2 - Let me introduce myself here. My name is ***, and I am ** years old. Throughout all this...

Writing Feedbacksarapultseva - Jan 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 22, 2010
governments should try to promote alternative energy resources?

NEW - i am preparing for ielts, however, my writing skill is not good.could u check this essay for my mistakes....

Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Jan 21, 2010 / — -
Compare and Contrast Paragraph - Frogs and Toads

2 - I think you could come up with something more interesting as the first sentence! :-) It might...

Writing Feedbackilovetowrite - Jan 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 21, 2010
Some people prefer to work for large company. I belong to the technical domain

2 - The choice of company for an individual generally depends upon two factors -- namely, the salary package and the...

Writing Feedbackshraps - Jan 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 21, 2010
[TOEFL]Governments should spend much money on exploring outer space?

2 - ... an idea that seems sensible. In actuality , I believe that ... ... are not sure about...

Writing Feedbackyin - Jan 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 20, 2010
[TOEFL]I dont agree that businesses should do anything they can to make a profit!

6 - Thank you very much Kevin. I appreciate your help. :D...

Writing Feedbackyin - Jan 15, 2010 / yin - Jan 19, 2010
MySpace Not Responsible for Predators (an argumentave essay)

3 - He backs his claim with four very strong and direct points, which include the following: MySpace is not there...

Writing FeedbackJoeyson - Jan 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 19, 2010
Evaluate: Is it more important to learn more about business or about agriculture

3 - Today with new technologies and globalization the world is shrinking and it has become difficult to define the differences...

Writing Feedbackjagk2j - Jan 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 19, 2010
learning from experience or learning from books - compare essay

2 - Hi you tend to forget a toefl format In the introduction part, you do not write an thesis,...

Writing Feedbackpinpin - Jan 19, 2010 / Keng - Jan 19, 2010
Problem Solving Essay:Contradicting Characteristics-Correct my essay

5 - Well, it should be something that resonates with ou. Think of what you feel strongly about; what problems are...

Writing Feedbackmilkee_0923 - Apr 19, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 18, 2010
1500 word report on a letter by the author Norman Angell appeared in Times 1914

NEW - FULLY UNDERSTAND AND EVALUATE OF SOURCE PROVENANCE 10% UNDERSTAND AND APPLY WHERE APPROPRIATE WIDER CONCEPTUAL QUESTIONS REGARDING SOURCE MATERIAL...

Writing Feedbackblue50 - Jan 17, 2010 / — -
the rise in good consumption reflect the power of advertising not for real needs

NEW - i am preparing for ielts test. however, my writing is bad, please help me to check for my essay....

Writing Feedbackkhoctham - Jan 17, 2010 / — -
Industrial Revolution (essay on a respectable topic)

2 - They showed us a powerful video/audio footage of Rachel's life and the Columbine tragedy that led everyone, including me,...

Writing Feedbackawaterbottle38 - Jan 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 16, 2010
IELTS: The money spent on Leisure and Education was a very little amount in all 5 countries

2 - This is very good! You should feel confident in your communication skills. Whenyou put 2 complete sentences together...

Writing FeedbackRuah - Jan 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 16, 2010
Essay about responsible for bringing children up

2 - I see that Jen made some excellent corrections here! Notice that she put an s at the end of...

Writing Feedbackcavin301 - Jan 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 16, 2010
toefl essay - Human is a threat to an another human

6 - Thank you for your feedback. It seems that i may lose a point in an essay exam because i...

Writing FeedbackKeng - Jan 8, 2010 / Keng - Jan 16, 2010
education at schools is necessary for all people, not just excellent students

3 - Thank you, Yuwei Zhang :) Your feedbacks are very helpful to me. Thanks so much....

Writing Feedbackyin - Jan 16, 2010 / yin - Jan 16, 2010
TOEFL "Playing game is fun when you win?"

5 - In my point of view, the latter group's idea due to some significant reasons which will be discussed in...

Writing Feedbackhitchhike - Dec 31, 2009 / yin - Jan 16, 2010
Clean energy / threat to life on Earth - Benefits and risks of Nuclear Technology

2 - Do the people rate you on just your structures and grammar or including your ideas? If they rate you...

Writing Feedbackvothiha - Jan 8, 2010 / yin - Jan 16, 2010
Toefl essay Advertising can tell you a lot about a country

4 - Usually, people say More importantly More importantly, it can draw a lot of tourists to visit your country....

Writing FeedbackKeng - Jan 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 15, 2010
Are Juveniles Responsible for Their Crimes

4 - What's a boat ride 8? :-) Well, I totally hear you about the injustice of it. And...

Writing FeedbackJeannie - Jan 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 15, 2010
" GRE essay: Laws should not be rigid or fixed. ..

4 - I have a small suggestion. State your claim clearly at the begining...

Writing FeedbackDipD - Jan 4, 2010 / Dulie - Jan 14, 2010
"Miss Wordy" strikes again. I have to chop oh, about 193 words.

4 - This sentence gives chills. It is very powerful the way you place it here. It's a very powerful...

Writing FeedbackJeannie - Jan 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 14, 2010
dormitory or apartment - comparison essay

NEW - please correct my essay and give me some tips how to improve my essay ?Students at universities often...

Writing Feedbackpinpin - Jan 14, 2010 / — -
Animal and music lover - NCSSM Essay #1

7 - Hey again, here are some things I would do if it were my essay: (Ambitious is a good word...

Writing Feedbackfishbish4 - Jan 11, 2010 / salbazili - Jan 14, 2010
A girl who decides to stand up for what is right - Antigone essay

3 - Many people argue if about whether or not Antigone is a hero. This essay is all about the...

Writing FeedbackBenk84 - Jan 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 11, 2010
Taking one long vacation has more educational benefits than it used to be.

3 - Hi Panyapon, Don't capitalize student in that first line. They will have a good opportunity to do...

Writing FeedbackKeng - Dec 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 10, 2010
An essay about Building up our Immune System.

8 - Thank you everybody for all your help! I really appreciate your prompt reply to my questions. Regards...

Writing Feedbackabd85 - Jan 6, 2010 / abd85 - Jan 9, 2010
The overpopulation leads many serious problems

4 - Thanks you for helpful comments. I wil continue to write and share them to you. Your advice and encouragement...

Writing Feedbackvothiha - Jan 5, 2010 / vothiha - Jan 7, 2010
"Terrorism is not new." - can sb help me edit this analytical writing piece?

5 - Hey Yin! Tnx a lot. I actually agree wid you that the first paragraph completely seems bizzarre and out...

Writing Feedbackmarpals - Jan 2, 2010 / marpals - Jan 7, 2010
IELTS practice writing for music.

2 - I do not know a lot about IELT essay. Is it an arguementative essay. In my own opinion,...

Writing FeedbackSeong - Jan 6, 2010 / Keng - Jan 7, 2010
essay on sovereignty, MA International politics essay

5 - Thank you very much for the answer. "Relative equality of states and the ungoverned international arena" is a practical...

Writing FeedbackUmbyboy - Dec 28, 2009 / Umbyboy - Jan 7, 2010
"Faker?" - Somatization Disorder (abnormal psychology essay)

4 - Is it possible to feel physical pain from a psychological disorder with no traceable cause? In the 1980's the...

Writing Feedbackdas74d - Dec 29, 2009 / psitutor - Jan 6, 2010
Write an argumentative essay Modern technology has increased material weath

2 - Yes, this is easy to understand. It is okay for you to write in a way that shows that...

Writing Feedbackngothanhtam - Dec 19, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2010
Talk about how the poets show their respect to animals.

4 - This confused me... Agamemnon is ancient mythology, and it has been told many times, but when I google...

Writing FeedbackKellyli - Dec 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2010
Media essay - GRE (Issue Topic)

2 - The structure is pretty good; those grammar errors Susan caught are most important. For the structure, you hae...

Writing Feedbackivanka22 - Dec 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2010
the gap between poor people and rich people - ielts writing

4 - gab = > difference because gab is informal word Do not use too much " mark because it can...

Writing Feedbackmanda - Dec 30, 2009 / Seong - Jan 6, 2010
The Lessons of Groundhog Movie

3 - Thanks Kevin...

Writing Feedbackraiya - Jan 3, 2010 / raiya - Jan 5, 2010
Journal. Why do people hurt each other.

4 - Thank you Kevin!!! I will definitely revise it....

Writing Feedbackkayyao - Jan 3, 2010 / kayyao - Jan 5, 2010
For good or ill, I a feel intensely drawn toward adventure, risk and excitement

2 - When you want to post an essay, please select "New Thread." Don't post your essay in someone else's thread....

Writing Feedbackhadi - Jan 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 4, 2010
Cheating in School- Satire Essay Help

2 - Hi Anna, I think this seems forced and uninspired. What are you making fun of exactly, the whole college...

Writing FeedbackAnnAsburY - Jan 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 4, 2010
Essay for a Contest: Living in Suburbia- Looking for some criticism

4 - [b]I just came to help you because of some great help I saw you give other people. Thanks! ...

Writing FeedbackLewisClark13 - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 4, 2010
'unusual behaviors' - Games are as important for adults as they are for children

4 - Your feedback is very useful to my understanding a given prompt. each time i write an essay, i...

Writing FeedbackKeng - Dec 28, 2009 / Keng - Jan 3, 2010
'first thing people think about work is salary' - job satisfaction essay

NEW - Topic : As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an...

Writing FeedbackSeong - Jan 2, 2010 / — -
TOEFL "Having job while studying or not"

NEW - 19. In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good...

Writing Feedbackhitchhike - Jan 2, 2010 / — -
Toelf essay Some people believe that success comes in life from taking risks

4 - Hi, ...attend to a famous and cannot be friendly with other people working in a office Maybe it's...

Writing FeedbackKeng - Jan 1, 2010 / hitchhike - Jan 2, 2010
Innuendo in "Ode to Billy Joe". Check my grammar!

3 - garfunkel129 Garfunkel129, Thank you so much for your comments. I will definitely look into these changes....

Writing Feedbackkayyao - Dec 30, 2009 / kayyao - Jan 1, 2010
teacher's teaching ability, a salary rise and a promotion to a higher level - teachers evaluation

5 - Thank you for feedback. I think my writing skill will improve a lot....

Writing FeedbackKeng - Dec 31, 2009 / Keng - Dec 31, 2009
historical event stanford grammar; "bulldog running along at the feet of Jesus"

3 - Whats the word count on this? Also, I agree with the poster before me, I think maybe you...

Writing Feedbackshannon92 - Dec 31, 2009 / medelman2010 - Dec 31, 2009
The Sentinels

5 - Its a cynical piece on an attitude I find much too often in the people in Western countries. ...

Writing FeedbackRajiv - Dec 20, 2009 / Rajiv - Dec 31, 2009
Why Harvey Mudd College-This student asked and answered his own question

4 - Harvey mudd actually has something like a Why XXX college? essay on their supplement. It goes like this... ...

Writing Feedbackyf8651 - Dec 16, 2009 / opeakapo - Dec 31, 2009
Rensselaer Polytechnic Institute: They say I impacted the 21st century...

8 - The world has entered an era of rapidly increasin g change. The people who lead Leading scientists of this...

Writing Feedbackmstickel - Dec 26, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2009

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