Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2 Children's Unhealth Lifestyle and Parents/Schools responsibility [2]

Nowadays, many children under five year old are experience lifestyle which is not appropriate for their health such as consume unhealthy food. There are some people that say kindergarten and parents have responsibilities for what that happen with their children.

I totally agree that parents and schools have responsibilities to solve their problem. For example, when they consume unhealthy meals in their schools. It is necessary to be aware because almost whole time in a day they spend in their schools and houses. In this case, actually parents and teachers are role mode for their children with they have a job to improve the capability of kids. For example, the parents can learn how to sort quality foods, such as fish, vegetables and fruits. And also teachers can give some advise or information to improve their knowledge about the foot that contain with high nutrition.

On the other hand, there are many parents and teachers that have not given what is should be children accepted by both. Because their parents have busy activities and less time to choosing their meals, so they kids just accept the food that prepared by their assistance.

Besides, in the school children have not lesson about what the healthy food and what kinds. Because there is no person can give they the information about healthy food. So, i think the both have responsibility and to solve this problem, but there are other sectors that have responsibility in increase health behavior of children, such as the government especially The Ministry of Health. The governments have a responsibility to promote health lifestyle of children. They can give some speech to the children about the healthy food and the benefits. So children can know and change their habit to eat health meal. Besides, the governments can give a training for teachers and parents about healthy behavior especially for children. Because if they don't consent about it may children will decrease their health quality.

In conclusion, the parents and teachers have important position and responsibility to solve their children's habit especially in consume unhealthy food. But also they need other sector such as health promoter that can improve their knowledge about basic of health in lifestyle and behavior that can increase their health of degree.

Writing Feedback / Various of difficulties that people experience when they stay in overseas [2]

The bar chart gives information about the various of difficulties that people experience when they stay in overseas, according to some of the age groups. Overall, the much higher problem that people experience in all group age is at 35-54 years old, and the most less problem is choosing of education for children.

Based on the bar chart, people sort out the finances increase slightly from around 34 to 35 at age 35-54. After that, there are a slight fall under 30 of the oldest. Which is the fewest along the age.

The other hand, the middle age experience a significant increase of difficulty in shorting out health care from age group before, at about 35 people. The next age group people experience decrease slightly at 36.

Finding education institute is the most less problem in all of age group, which the most higher is happen in the middle age. Which is at 55 and over experience fall dramatically than age 18-34.

To sum up, the most higher problem experience in all age is shorting in healthcare and the most less problem is in finding school for the children.

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Writing Feedback / Mostly famous people such as entertainment workers and sport athletes dominate in news [NEW]

The media pay too many attentions to the lives and relationship of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballer. They should be more time reporting the lives of ordinary people.

The powerful of news about popular people on diverse of mass media is very influence in recently. He famous people such as entertainment workers and sport athletes dominate in news. I think we have to know other side of live that need more attention and it uses to be reported such as general people. I totally agree that inhabitant people is necessary to be blew up.

Everybody has a curiosity to know about the information. For instance, it is aim to fulfill their need for news. I believe that the most important news should be come from general people especially about every experience that happen in their live. We have to report about ordinary people, because they are larger element in a country according to job than the celebrities. This case, because there are many phenomenons that experienced to the people, which those are necessary to be known and to be reported. Such as, an outbreak of disease, flood and conflict. Those condition very essential because refer to sustainable people's lives. If, the ordinary people don't be reported may can increase the nation's problem. However, general people important to be known, there are other sectors that also important such as actors.

On the other hand, there are advantage side of news about artists. They bring positive effects such as they may become a role mode for the citizens, because they affect to people's life by their appearance on TV or films. For example, the actor can attract many people by their talent. So the citizens will follow what they say. In this case, there is an opportunity to change people to be better the future life. For example we can persuade film player as ambassador of environment. So if they safe clean and aware to around area. The people will take action same like them.

At the end, I believe that news about citizens is very necessary to be known, the news can raise sustainable people's life. But also, they have to concert with other sector like an actor, which they can be role mode to change our behavior, so think we have to sort the news especially that important and sustainable to our need.

Writing Feedback / Statistics of first-year (English/Franch) tutors job some years ago [2]

The line chart shows the information about the percentage of the number of teacher who have regular jobs according to year of graduation. The graph illustrates the fluctuation of the number of English and French teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007.

Overall, there was a downward trend of the number of French teachers. The highest number came from English teachers.

According to the graph, there was a dramatic decline of the number English teachers, from 75% to 40% in the three-first years. In the next year, rose slightly to 45% in 2005. And reached bottomed at 28 percent in 2007.

On the other hand, the number of French teachers fell by 17% in 2002. After that, there was a significant increase of 69%. In the four years later, there were a steady rise and fell again by 2 percent in 2006. After that reached a peak in the end year, at 73 percent.

In conclusion, the number of French teachers larger than English teachers. And in the end of the year French teachers peaked, but the French teachers were opposite which bottomed below 30%.

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Writing Feedback / How to produce power energy using wind turbine with its proper location [6]

The diagrams give the information about how producing power energy using wind turbine and that located in 3 different areas. The equipments that needed are a generator, blades, wind sensor and a computer. Overall, wind turbine which are located in hill and sea produce more power of electricity. However, the wind turbine located in the sea is not spoiled the scenery.

Process installation a wind turbine is began from build the installation. First, a generator, blades, wind sensor are placed in the top of tower. After that, the installation is connected by a computer to transfer the sensor which are cathed by wind sensor from wind's pressure through the blides. So, the turbine can be rotated and a generator can be activated to produce electricity.

Oh the other hand, wind turbine can be located in hill, sea and near domestic. When wind turbines that are located in hill and sea can produce much electricity power, at 1,5 megawatts. Then, the wind turbine is applied in housing just produce 100 kilowatts.

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In conclusion, producing an electricity that using wind can use a simple gerator-installation. If you need more electricity power you can modify with applying it in strategic area.

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Writing Feedback / I believe that become an entrepreneur is good choice - business instead of working for a company. [4]

Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for the people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages?.

Development in business sector grow rapidly, recently. There are many new business innovations build to getting better salary such as a start-up company. I believe that become an entrepreneur is good choice. Although, many risks but star a company has outweigh the advantages in many sides.

Starting a new business has many benefits. First, this chance to open job opportunities. Many people who unemployment and still become job seekers. Louncing a new start-up company make chance to try their ability in entrepreneur as a worker. This condition can increase their income and productivity so can help government to solve problem especially in jobless rate. Besides, it can make us to be an innovator. For example, handicraft from waste it can rise innovation and build self-esteem like how to change a problem to be income source and it necessary for regularly people, nowadays.

On the other hand, there are some disadvantages for create new corporation. Because high risk for collapse because there is a tight competition with other companies. Example the company with high technology that provides many attractive products. If a company not has equipment that can positioned from the collapse may it will easy go broke. And how cruel the planning to return the corporation in good position. However, the risk is very strong, but I believe the advantages for the start-up corporation is outweigh from the disadvantages.

All in all, there are many unpleasant opportunities that we can experience if we start-up business but the benefit is more than disadvantages, such as it can decrease jobless rate and to fulfill need for self-esteem so it can good chance if it experience properly.

Writing Feedback / There's a good effect of having business suit but the value of performance in job is most important [3]

Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Other value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Business development causes a competition between corporations. The famous company usually applied a rule for the employees to look more impressive in every they do work activities. However, there was an good effect of having business suit, but i believe that the value of performance in their job is most important.

Most of popular corporation has obligation for the employees to wear suit and tie along they do work. It was important because it can influence to the costumers. For instance, a teller bank. She or he have to look tidy, impressive and good looking, because if they have beautiful appearance, the transaction will be held as well. Besides, dressing smartly can attract many bank users, so it can increase the relationship opportunity among other companies.

Good looking not always become first factor to raise success in business company. I think the other causes of successful corporation, one of them is how they result a product that it has a value. For example, a programing company has more prefer to recruit workers who have many skills, because quality of human resource can influence rate of work productivity. They not need to wear tie suit. They can use every shirt that they enjoy and comfort to do their work. For example, a developer apps or programs prefer to use T-shirt, because their look is not affect to their product at all.

Superior corporations result from who person that involve it. I believe that suit smartly can influence success a company, but the quality of workers is the most significant factor that can improving a corporation productivity. So, you can wear every kind of dress that you like but it has to suit and depend on your occupant and year purpose in every your activity.

Writing Feedback / The answer people gave about the extent to which they are satisfied with their lives [3]

How satisfied are you with your live? and What would make you happinest?

The graph below and the chart on the next page show the answer people gave about the extent to which they are satisfied with their lives and what they think would make them happiness.

The graph provide information about stage where they feel satisfied across different age group and show about reasons that make people happy (health and money) along their ages until 75+. Overall, there was an upward trend of satisfied people however it fell in middle age. There is a positive correlation between happiness of health factor and along the ages.

Satisfied stages of male is higher than female in the young age, and both fell in 21-30 years old, at 5,2 after that it fell again to 5,0 in the middle age. However, the age of 41-50 old was the least, but both reached a peak in elder, at 5,6.

The second graph shows there was an upward trend of health need from above ten percent to 45% (15-24 until 65-74), and it peaked in 65-74 years old, and the next stage there was slight decrease at 42 percent. However, in young stage shown that money was the highest reason at 55% but it dropped sharply until 75+.

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Writing Feedback / The causes of worldwide land degradation (in percent) and the consequences of such phenomenon [2]

the pie chart below shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. the table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart shows information about the main factors that causes where agricultural land experience decreasing of function which occur in three continents of the world during 1999s. The table gives overview about the number of degradation land based on the area (North America, Europe and near Australia). Overall, the highest causes of grand degradation came from over-grazing in farming activity. The greatest degradation occure in Europe.

Based on the pie chart, the percentage of over-grazing was accounted 35%, and it was dominated among other causes. The second highest came from increasing forest function and illegal logging, at 30%. The least number came from other reasons.

The table illustrate that Europe was as main contributor in degradation, at 23% which it gave 9,8 of deforestation and 7,7 over cultivation. However, Europe is the highest percentage totally, but other islands including Australia and New Zealand gave the largest number of over-grazing and they were not experienced in over-cultivation.

In conclusion, the worldwide land degradation most caused by over-grazing and the friendlier land is North America.

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Writing Feedback / The school also have responsibility to guide children about socializing. [3]

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this.

Childhood is a condition when person experience changing of life stage. Many people think a parent has to learn children to be able to a party of society. However, the parent is most important sector to improve their social-relationship skill, but i believe that school also have responsibility to learn children about socializing.

Many people argue that children need education in social life from their parent. Parent is the closest person to children. So, parent has a big responsibility to grow their child as a human social who can contribute in society. Because parent know well about their child personality and having an emotional relationship, so it will easier to approach children and it will give an effective way to learn them to be a person who more sensitive in knowing their social lives. However, parent is vital to improving social ability's children, but there are other sectors that have responsibility to teach schoolchildren such as school.

School is place where children spend a lot of time. They study with their teacher. Some people say a teacher has responsibility to teach schoolchildren about ho to socialize with the others. Even, parent is necessary in this matter but school has an important role to increase their life capacity, because a teacher usually to be a role mode. The children may think that the resource of knowledge comes from their teacher. For example, when they are in the school, when they will ask to their teacher about everything. Then they had bad experience because of their classmate. The first person who they asked for help is a teacher. So, school is suitable place for the children to learn about socialize in a society.

To sum up, there are sectors who have responsibility to improve the children's sense of community, such as parent. Although, parent is important person but school also necessary to grow up children's ability in socializing.

Writing Feedback / The chart shows information about educational stage of Bulgarian who wanted study to overseas [2]

The chart below gives you information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006, and 2008.

The chart shows information about educational stage of Bulgarian who wanted study to overseas in three period (2002, 2006, and 2008). The educational stages were consist from primary until higher education. Overall, there was an upward trend of the percentage of primary and lower education. The highest number came from secondary education.

Based on the chart, all of educational stages were under 70% in the three period. There was a gradual incline of higher education from 17 (2002) to 20 (2006). It was the least number among the others. Then dropped sharply by nine percent in the last year of period.

Secondary education reached number one in all years, and it peaked at 65 during 2002. But it fell slightly to 61 and 59 (2006-2008). In 2002 the number of primary and lower education rose smoothly from 18 to 19, but peaked in 2008, at 32 percent. It was the biggest upward between other educational type, by 13%.

To sum up, primary and pre school education experienced upward trend dramatically, but the highest number of educational stage was secondary education.

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Writing Feedback / The perspective of the people about a healthy lifestyle [4]

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Other, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit they want to be.

This day, in a modern era, many people have a problem with their health. For instance, a lack to do some exercises. Some people say that exercising is uneasy activity, but other people argue that a healthy lifestyle in this matter is an exercise, is simple and easy to apply it.

The workers usually spend a lot of time in their offices. They do their jobs from the morning until the evening. It condition makes they rarely to go to the sport center for their healthy need. Because, they spent leisure time in the weekend just to stay in home or got to the shop. So, it will difficult to having sport. If, they continue this behaviour may they will experience decreasing of health standard. For example a cardiovascular diseases, because they have no time to make their body more fit.

On the other hand, people argue that healthy lifestyle is easy to apply in their lives. For example, the employee in the office with rush and many deadline tasks, they can use opportunities such as like walking to go to the office. They can keep their condition in fit. If, they walking routinely. Many benefits from walking. They can burn their calories and their muscle feet became stronger. So, it is good for their healthy. The study discovered that walking 1000 steps every day can increase the immune and make the person's bone stronger, so it very useful and suitable for busy employee who want to improve their healthy.

There are many issues about a healthy lifestyle recently. People think that healthy lifestyle is difficult because a reason. But it will easier with do a simple activity that possible to do. But, very useful for healthy. I believe that everyone can improve their habit to healthy, whatever their job, with do simple activity but routine.

Writing Feedback / Without action to solve this problem, electronics may destroy a relationship between loved people [2]

The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationships between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, most of the people like to using an electronic gadget. Some people say that there is a disadvantage from using a gadget. I totally agree with that electronic media will give bad effect to the users.

People using gadget because many reasons from its function. In fact it has a negative effect to human life. The disadvantage of electronic media usage because it makes someone less time to do relationship with the others. For example, primary high school student who using an electronic media. They will spend a lot of time in front of their gadget, such as laptop, and IPad. They took a long time just for play games by their gadget or they spent their weekend for play PSP in their homes. They prefer playing alone rather than go out with their classmates or relatives. This condition is not good for development their social capability. Because they will lose their moments and contacts with their the loved people.

On the other hand, they might be become un respect with other people around area where they live. The electronic media that they usage, serves many information without any filters, which they not know where the sources and for who the content is purposed. If the children consume any information that have bad impact, it will affect their perception to other people. the study says that most of the young experience the improvement of social relationships it their lives, in 11-18 age group. But, good relationship will not produce without any stimulant, such as gather with families, help older people and make friend. They never do those activities, because they fulfill their time for playing games. If this condition is experienced in long time, they will lose attention for their parent or they will not any friends.

To sum up, there is a bad effect from usage of an electronic media by teenagers. I believe that if there is no action to solve this problem, it will destroy their relationship with loved people

Writing Feedback / A questionnaire for people that related to communication capacities important in their jobs [2]

The table shows the information about some questions from people that related to communication capacities were important in their jobs. This measurement took in 1997 and 2006. Overall, the biggest number of communication external came from dealing with people. Listening carefully to colleagues of internal aspect was the largest in that two years.

Based on the table can be seen that there was an increase from 60% to 65%. The second largest came from knowledge of particular product or services, which is rose significantly, by six percent in 2006. Although, the other experienced fell slightly, by three percent.

From internal aspect of communication, the highest increase came from listening carefully to colleagues, by nine percent (form 38% to 47%). The second highest came from instructing of training people, at 30% in the second survey, but it had same of the number of increasing, at five percent. Planning the activities of other, and making speeches or presentations rose highly not more that four percent. (163w)

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Writing Feedback / There are some rooms where the warm air is leaking outside. Air leaks and heat loss in houses [2]

The diagram illustrates the information about how air regulation in a house that air flows inside and heat flows outside caused by air leaks and heat loss in a house. Overall, the biggest air leaking which is flow into the house comes from main room and the highest air leaking that flow out of house comes from bathroom.

Based on the diagram, there are some rooms that result air leaking out of the house, such as bathroom, bedroom and kitchen. The most of heat loss comes from bathroom which caused by recessed lamps. Kitchen is the second highest that loss heat causes by hidden lights. The lowest of heat loss is from the bedroom.

The main bedroom has much air that flows inside through the ventilation and door. Kitchen and laundry room which have air lower than bedroom that getting fresh air from the vent and window. Then, the least air fresh that leaks into the house comes from the bathroom which air getting inside through electrical outlet.

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Writing Feedback / Many companies exist not only for financial purposes, but also to do useful activities for people [3]

The purpose of businesses is to make money and they should concentrate only on this. Do you agree or disagree?

These days, development of business experience changes fast. Some corporation became more concentration and innovative in creating many fascinating products. Some people say that business activity only aim to earn money. I totally disagree with this statement. There are many companies that survive not only for financial purpose, but also to do useful activity that relates to humanity duty.

Business activity has highly profitable and it has pleasure prospect to earn a lot of money, so business must be concentrated properly. For example, a business retail which has a benefit in produce the income. A company that supply many goods that have high qualities, so it can attract consumers. It is mean the big income will be easy to reach. The owners have to concern in internal aspect of their own company, such as manage and maintenance sales. If they not improve the managerial and maintenance they will lose many buyers. It is mean they will lose much money. So, concentrate in internal factor is important, especially to get big income.

On the other hand, there are many corporate that not only aim to get money, but also to act a social usefulness. For example, Lifebuoy, it is a hygiene products company that has purpose not only for financial, but also to promote healthy lifestyle to the people. Besides, they do improving in their products, they also make campaign when were happened disaster, such as flood, and earthquake. They donate their product to prevent diseases that related to a disaster. Then, they give food aid, and housing equipment freely for the victims. So, that ways they can help other people and the company can survive existence.

In conclusion, business is one of ways to ear money, so we have to give much concern into it, but I believe that there are other factors that we have to take more concentrate such as, humanity duty to help people, so we can get big income and can solve people's problem.