mem77
Sep 20, 2016
Writing Feedback / Invented at 1934 by Leonard Kleinrock, the Internet has become a global system [3]
Hello kiki, it was very interested topic and i think it makes me know about something new about the internet. However, I have some advice for you to make your writing more good. So, keep watch sister!
At second sentence of first paragraph, you write " Some peoplemay think that........" In my view, it should be replace because it's enough to understand about your idea within that word. So i suggest you to replace it. And than for the next sentence, you write ".......... that internet have advantages while other think the reserve." I think there are wrong subject-verb agreement, So it should be change with "........ that internet have advantages while others think the reserve."
I think that's enough from me. Keep practice and writing!
Hello kiki, it was very interested topic and i think it makes me know about something new about the internet. However, I have some advice for you to make your writing more good. So, keep watch sister!
At second sentence of first paragraph, you write " Some people
I think that's enough from me. Keep practice and writing!