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|'Introduction to golf' - Common App short answer.
Undergraduatet24me - Dec 16, 2007 / t24me - Dec 17, 2007
|"It takes a village to raise a child," ; Personal Statement for NYU
3 - Greetings! I think your revisions is excellent! The only other suggestion I can think of is that you...
Undergraduatecollegewannabe - Dec 14, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Dec 15, 2007
|"I was once an introvert"; Benefit from and Contribute to
6 - Greetings! I think you've done a great job of revising your essay for a different purpose! Here are...
Undergraduatevalm8 - Nov 29, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Dec 15, 2007
|PARENTS & Especially my mother; Personal statement: Important person
NEW - I really need help with my personal statement below. Please give me some feed back.Thank you for your help!!!...
Undergraduatepaul - Dec 13, 2007 / — -
|Essay on discussion about the positive & negative effects of child day care
UndergraduateCarmel Ball - Dec 10, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Dec 11, 2007
|"The Early Show." - Evaluate a significant experience or achievement
Undergraduateshan00ts - Dec 9, 2007 / shan00ts - Dec 9, 2007
|Passion for Television Directing; Syracuse U
2 - Greetings! I think you've written an excellent essay! You have definitely done your homework, and I like the...
Undergraduateshan00ts - Dec 8, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Dec 9, 2007
|Rutgers University: As a Libra I can I would describe myself...
2 - Greetings! You've written a good essay! I just have a few editing suggestions for you. You will be...
Undergraduatefrago - Nov 30, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Dec 1, 2007
|'My Indian heritage' - Talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience essay
2 - Greetings! What an excellent, well-written essay! It is virtually flawless; just one comma will make it perfect: ...
Undergraduatesweetxtart - Nov 29, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 30, 2007
|The stress a person undergoes when applying for admissions - essay
2 - Greetings! I think you've written a good essay! However, I think you should eliminate the first paragraph. It...
Undergraduatemcas - Nov 29, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 30, 2007
|'taking care of others' - UC prompt #1
Undergraduatephotoguy - Nov 29, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 30, 2007
|'corporate strategy of business' - (describe where you come from)
2 - Greetings! You've written very good essays! I have just a few editing tips for you: However, my...
Undergraduatesweetxtart - Nov 29, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 30, 2007
|MOVING TO AMERICA; "Challenging Experience"
Undergraduatevishal720 - Sep 19, 2007 / fozyn76 - Nov 29, 2007
|'excel in math & science and personal qualities' - uc
Undergraduatemcas - Nov 28, 2007 / mcas - Nov 29, 2007
|'a Chilean with a love' - World I come from essay
2 - Greetings! What a delightful essay! I think you did a great job answering the prompt. I have just...
Undergraduatebizkitgirlzc - Nov 28, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 29, 2007
|"Tia Rosa", Aunt Rose - someone who has made an impact on your life
Undergraduaterosy - Nov 24, 2007 / rosy - Nov 27, 2007
|Essay on what important contribution are you proud of?
2 - Greetings! You've written a good essay! I have just a few editing suggestions for you: The audience...
Undergraduatebigeyes614 - Nov 26, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 26, 2007
|My Personal Statement - "Describe the world you come from"
UndergraduateDarkAngelAiza - Nov 18, 2007 / DarkAngelAiza - Nov 26, 2007
|MOVING FROM PERU TO US AT NINE; NCSSM App - ADVERSITY IN LIFE
Undergraduatedrums4metallica - Nov 22, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 23, 2007
|'Creativity from my heart' - it can't be taken away from me
2 - Greetings! You've written a good essay. Here are some editing tips for you: I have always had...
UndergraduateDarkAngelAiza - Nov 18, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 20, 2007
|Footprints and making a difference essay
2 - Greetings! You have discovered, as so many before you, that the most difficult part of writing is getting...
UndergraduateWreckChords - Nov 19, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 20, 2007
|'my mother, my father and my sister' - Your family, community or school
2 - Greetings! You're essay is shaping up very well! I have just a few editing suggestions for you. ...
UndergraduateDarkAngelAiza - Nov 19, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 20, 2007
|Mom's Daycare to Psychology; PERSONAL STATEMENT
2 - Greetings! I'd be happy to help with some editing suggestions! The thrash about becoming a psychologist -...
Undergraduatemaryam357 - Nov 17, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 18, 2007
|Electronic media, drawing, and sculpture; "Who you are/explain your self"
Undergraduatewoox - Nov 12, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 13, 2007
|"Important Issue to you" College Entrance essay
2 - Greetings! We provide our services for free. I'd be happy to help with some editing tips! Trashing...
Undergraduatewoox - Nov 11, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 12, 2007
|Boarding school essay.. "Why am I a vegetarian?"
Undergraduatefishndag - Nov 11, 2007 / fishndag - Nov 12, 2007
|DIETETICS Field; UBC COMMON APP - Achieve life and/or career goals?
6 - Greetings! I think you're off to a good start! Here are some editing suggestions: By taking the...
Undergraduatexxalixx - Nov 4, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 8, 2007
|SCARY MOVIES; What is your most frightened experience? - college essay
Undergraduatewistfulizzie - Oct 23, 2007 / wistfulizzie - Nov 6, 2007
|Setback essay - Applying to Tech College
Undergraduatebizkitgirlzc - Oct 29, 2007 / wannabe - Nov 6, 2007
|'Studying in a very competitive school and traveling' - My Personal Statement
4 - Greetings! Yes, I think it is a very strong personal statement and speaks very well of you! If...
Undergraduatevedantsureka - Nov 4, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Nov 6, 2007
|USC personal statement - EXTERNAL INFLUENCE
Undergraduateohhkevin - Nov 5, 2007 / ohhkevin - Nov 5, 2007
|"So you're Peruvianese" ;My unique background- Clever and funny
Undergraduatehunter13 - Nov 3, 2007 / hunter13 - Nov 4, 2007
|Math, Physics and Calculus; Governor's School Program
Undergraduatetkelly - Oct 31, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 31, 2007
|"A Hero in Disguise"; My best friend had Acute Lymphoblastic Leukemia
2 - Greetings! This is a well-written and moving essay! I like tone, which is simple, yet poignant. I have...
Undergraduatesonia - Oct 31, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 31, 2007
|"Birthday party this weekend" UF ESSAY
Undergraduatepbitesize - Oct 29, 2007 / pbitesize - Oct 30, 2007
|Mathew & my family; University of Miami - Most significant person
Undergraduatemalvarez - Oct 22, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 30, 2007
|'Science Fair victory' - Diversity Essay for University of Michigan
2 - Greetings! You've written a very good essay! I have just a couple of suggestions: simply being a...
Undergraduatebizkitgirlzc - Oct 29, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 30, 2007
|CYCLING; UFlorida- Meaningful Experience
3 - A final review and help on my concluding paragraph--UF I was wondering fi you could give my essay...
Undergraduatemalvarez - Oct 23, 2007 / malvarez - Oct 29, 2007
|'playing my character' - Howard University - My Admission
Undergraduatedee301568 - Oct 28, 2007 / dee301568 - Oct 28, 2007
|'Physical limits' - My UF aplication essay
2 - Greetings! I'm happy to help with some editing for your excellent essay! Limits are meant to be...
Undergraduatelostsy10 - Oct 28, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 28, 2007
|Math Essay for college- feedback/comments?
3 - Greetings! Thanks for giving me some suggestions! I feel those spots were confusing too. Your correction works! ...
Undergraduatelopsicicle - Oct 14, 2007 / lopsicicle - Oct 27, 2007
|Purpose of App; Why I chose Penn State University
Undergraduateblue_palace - Oct 24, 2007 / blue_palace - Oct 25, 2007
|"My family", the greatest influence on me
Undergraduatewolffangel21 - Oct 24, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 25, 2007
|My extremely successful business - Imagine you just completed your BIOGRAPHY
2 - Greetings! I think you're doing a great job! It's interesting and makes me want to know more about...
Undergraduateammarrauf - Oct 23, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 23, 2007
|Polarization causes violence & remedy is compromise; FREE CHOICE
3 - okay, thanks....
UndergraduatePeachy - Oct 21, 2007 / Peachy - Oct 22, 2007
|My Summer 2007 internship with Senator Schumer - admission essay
4 - Greetings! I don't think your quotation is awkward; I would have said "attention-grabbing"! As far as the last...
UndergraduateKostasg - Oct 18, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 22, 2007
|Teaching mathematics; - PERSONAL STATEMENT
12 - Greetings! I think you've done a very good job of answering most of the questions, with one exception,...
Undergraduateammarrauf - Sep 29, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 13, 2007
|Economic activity of developing country, Pakistan - personal essay
2 - Greetings! I think your essay is well-written, cohesive and informative! I would give it a 9 out of...
Undergraduateammarrauf - Oct 10, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 11, 2007
|'Clubs and school activities' - Why did you choose to apply to UCF?
Undergraduateucf4me - Oct 8, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 9, 2007
|"Children of the trash" - Concise narrative - UF campus community
3 - Thanks again!...
Undergraduatenicamsgb - Oct 6, 2007 / nicamsgb - Oct 8, 2007
|COMPUTERS, the most intriguing and complicated things in the world
2 - Greetings! I think you've done a great job with your essay! I have just a few editing suggestions:...
Undergraduatehabtdemis - Oct 1, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Oct 1, 2007
|FSU App. essay: the best advice given; 'be the head and not the tail'
NEW - The topic is to basically explain the best advice given and why? Please read this and give me any...
UndergraduateJessicaTiffany - Sep 29, 2007 / — -
|FSU ESSAY - "Pick your favourite and meaningful quote"
2 - Greetings! Your essay is excellent, and nearly perfect. I have only a couple of small suggestions: I...
Undergraduatecarsons2k - Sep 24, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 24, 2007
|15 minutes of fame; NYU COMMON APP
2 - Greetings! You've written an excellent essay! I have just a few editing suggestions. It was then I...
Undergraduatevishal720 - Sep 19, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 20, 2007
|ME & My BROTHER / Human behavior psychology -Common App
2 - Greetings! I think you've written a great essay that reveals a lot about what kind of person you...
Undergraduatemodi - Sep 18, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 18, 2007
|Hole - narrative essay(incident that happened and changed my mind)
7 - Greetings! Yes, I think that sounds good. I did like the headline idea, however. Perhaps something like "Pile...
Undergraduatesamuraitom - Sep 16, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 17, 2007
|'Breeze to find a job after graduation' - FSU admission
NEW - Hello the topic for the essay is (what is the best advice you have ever received, and why?) and...
Undergraduatedarca17 - Sep 10, 2007 / — -
|World of writings; NYU - creative work that has influenced me
Undergraduatelunasea - Aug 29, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 5, 2007
|'FFA and FLA Leadership Adventures' - U of Florida admissions
2 - Greetings! I'd be happy to give you some editing suggestions for your excellent essay! :-) I discovered...
Undergraduatelinz24708 - Sep 2, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 3, 2007
|UofI Champaign-Urbana admissions essay
2 - Greetings! I think you have written a couple of great essays! The only suggestion I would make content-wise...
UndergraduateAlexJ444 - Aug 28, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Aug 29, 2007
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