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|FSU App. essay: the best advice given; 'be the head and not the tail'
NEW - The topic is to basically explain the best advice given and why? Please read this and give me any...
UndergraduateJessicaTiffany - Sep 29, 2007 / — -
|FSU ESSAY - "Pick your favourite and meaningful quote"
2 - Greetings! Your essay is excellent, and nearly perfect. I have only a couple of small suggestions: I...
Undergraduatecarsons2k - Sep 24, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 24, 2007
|15 minutes of fame; NYU COMMON APP
2 - Greetings! You've written an excellent essay! I have just a few editing suggestions. It was then I...
Undergraduatevishal720 - Sep 19, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 20, 2007
|ME & My BROTHER / Human behavior psychology -Common App
2 - Greetings! I think you've written a great essay that reveals a lot about what kind of person you...
Undergraduatemodi - Sep 18, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 18, 2007
|Hole - narrative essay(incident that happened and changed my mind)
7 - Greetings! Yes, I think that sounds good. I did like the headline idea, however. Perhaps something like "Pile...
Undergraduatesamuraitom - Sep 16, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 17, 2007
|'Breeze to find a job after graduation' - FSU admission
NEW - Hello the topic for the essay is (what is the best advice you have ever received, and why?) and...
Undergraduatedarca17 - Sep 10, 2007 / — -
|World of writings; NYU - creative work that has influenced me
Undergraduatelunasea - Aug 29, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 5, 2007
|'FFA and FLA Leadership Adventures' - U of Florida admissions
2 - Greetings! I'd be happy to give you some editing suggestions for your excellent essay! :-) I discovered...
Undergraduatelinz24708 - Sep 2, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Sep 3, 2007
|UofI Champaign-Urbana admissions essay
2 - Greetings! I think you have written a couple of great essays! The only suggestion I would make content-wise...
UndergraduateAlexJ444 - Aug 28, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Aug 29, 2007
|Sun-Sentinels journalism programs; UF campus- Significant Event
3 - Greetings! Yes, I think you've definitely improved it! I do have a few editing suggestions: Your first...
Undergraduatekylester61 - Aug 11, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Aug 22, 2007
|BALLET ; What is one thing you do really well?
Undergraduatedreamingdigital - Jul 22, 2007 / dreamingdigital - Jul 23, 2007
|'Genetic answers' - Concise narrative, meaningful event
NEW - I was wondering if you guys would help me edit my essay...Here were the instructions: "In the space...
Undergraduateilive4music89 - Jul 10, 2007 / — -
|'Faith in God and Purpose' - Admit Essay
Undergraduateblackcatdomain - Jul 7, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jul 8, 2007
|'Hurrying up for a plane' - University of Florida - College
6 - Greetings! Sometimes improving your essay and making things clearer is just a matter of providing a little more...
Undergraduatealvarez16 - Jun 28, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jun 29, 2007
|'Trying to adapt to this foreign country' - significant learning experience
NEW - My essay question is "Describe a significant learning experience in your life." What was it about the experience, more...
Undergraduatekikay - May 31, 2007 / — -
|My Biographical Essay; I was born in Peru
2 - Greetings! I think you have done an excellent job for a non-native speaker of English! I went through...
Undergraduateeljuleso - May 25, 2007 / EF_Team2 - May 27, 2007
|Turning Dreams into Realities essay - Computer future and exciting new world
Undergraduatehsmith490 - May 17, 2007 / EF_Team2 - May 18, 2007
|Effect of bad friends - causes and effect essay
11 - You're welcome! Once you have a rough draft, I'd be happy to help with editing! Thanks, Sarah,...
Undergraduatemr_student - May 13, 2007 / EF_Team2 - May 15, 2007
|Mural on Broad and Spring Garde - help with my "statement of interest"
2 - Greetings! For someone who has no experience writing a statement of interest, you have done a marvelous job!...
Undergraduatelint99 - May 10, 2007 / EF_Team2 - May 11, 2007
|'my High School Mathematics teacher' Admission essay of mine
5 - Greetings! It can be a challenge to cut out a significant portion of something you have written--after all,...
Undergraduateanhminh - May 7, 2007 / EF_Team2 - May 10, 2007
|CONTRACT; business law assignment
4 - Greetings! Those are good questions. The "no worries" remark does not affect the breach of duty/negligence as far...
Undergraduatelawstudent - May 8, 2007 / EF_Team2 - May 10, 2007
|5 paragraph essay form about my career goals
4 - Greetings! I think it's coming along very well so far! I can give you some editing suggestions. ...
Undergraduatearacid - Apr 28, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Apr 29, 2007
|Experience that has been a strong influence on your goals - Essay no.2
Undergraduatelivia - Apr 24, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Apr 25, 2007
|Stimulates me to question ; "Why ECLA?"
NEW - Hello, I would kindly ask for your help in revising some essays that I've written for applying to a...
Undergraduatelivia - Apr 24, 2007 / — -
|'BETWEEN YOU AND I: MY AUTOBIOGRAPHY' - for honors application
6 - Greetings! I like the way you start off--the image of the 60-year-old man with a blood-red mohawk sticks...
Undergraduatefsugirl89 - Feb 26, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Apr 23, 2007
|economic causes; Essay on the reasons for attending APUS
2 - Greetings! Your writing is very good, and your command of English very impressive! I think you do a...
UndergraduateFredParisFrance - Apr 13, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Apr 13, 2007
|Cause and effect - 'one day can change your whole outlook on life'
UndergraduateDownsdld - Apr 8, 2007 / Downsdld - Apr 11, 2007
|High School: My self-realization: a significant experience and its impact on you
4 - Greetings! You've written a really great essay! There is very little about it that needs work; I'll just...
UndergraduateKevin - Apr 9, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Apr 10, 2007
|Essay topic -Colonization,Conquest, Commerce,Civilization,Christianity
4 - Greetings! If you look back through European history, you see one wave of conquerors coming in, say, to...
UndergraduateNINZ - Mar 17, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Mar 19, 2007
|Undergrad Application - Waterloo, Canada
2 - Greetings! You've written a fine essay! I have just a few small suggestions for you. Your essay...
UndergraduateRitika - Mar 10, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Mar 11, 2007
|Time in Terelj - descriptive essay
4 - Greetings! I think your opening paragraph lacks cohesiveness. It's rather "all over the place." The first sentence sounds...
Undergraduateokuna - Feb 19, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Feb 21, 2007
|I know personally how enriching studying abroad can be.
4 - Thank you so much Sarah. Having a pro review my essay and give me feedback is absolutely priceless. ...
Undergraduatepash_fashion - Feb 17, 2007 / pash_fashion - Feb 18, 2007
|Summer in a Mongolian place
3 - What you need is a motivator to capture the reader attention, sure it is great you went to all...
UndergraduateSergelen - Feb 11, 2007 / aznpoo - Feb 17, 2007
|[working in series, painting] - SAIC statement of purpose
2 - Greetings! I think you've written an excellent essay here! I think you do a fabulous job of describing...
Undergraduatevegetablenazi - Feb 12, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Feb 12, 2007
|Application to The University Of Mary Washington 250-500 words
3 - thanks a ton for the quick feedback Sarah, I really appreciate it, and the changes you suggested are being...
UndergraduateAzap - Jan 29, 2007 / Azap - Jan 30, 2007
|struggling with admission essay question.
2 - Greetings! These are good questions! I think a paragraph on your strengths, with examples to back them up,...
UndergraduatejimmyD88 - Jan 28, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jan 28, 2007
|"ART IS A FORM OF PROBLEM SOLVING"- Undergrad SOP/ Graphic Design
2 - Greetings! You have written an excellent essay -- congratulations! I have just a few suggestions to make it...
Undergraduatemmmm - Jan 27, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jan 27, 2007
|'Influencing the future' - COMMON APP - Person with siginificant influence
3 - Thank you for your help...I really appreciate it. Especially the editing notes i'm terrible with those sort of things....
UndergraduateKdmaxwell - Jan 23, 2007 / Kdmaxwell - Jan 25, 2007
|'A Night Classes program' - college application short response
Undergraduateryan - Jan 14, 2007 / ryan - Jan 19, 2007
|'accept the greater challenge' - Review on my Essay for NCSSM
3 - Wow, didn't expect such a quick reply! I changed entranced to fascinated after rereading the paragraph (it sounds better)....
Undergraduateshayonsaleh - Jan 6, 2007 / shayonsaleh - Jan 6, 2007
|'Emerging as an artist' - Essay - Graphic Design
Undergraduatemmmm - Jan 5, 2007 / EF_Team2 - Jan 6, 2007
|'Homeschool' - Personal Statement for Common App
2 - Greetings! I think you have a very good start here. With just a little tinkering here and there,...
Undergraduateaudacity - Dec 31, 2006 / EF_Team2 - Jan 1, 2007
|'Mass communication today' - University Ca Essays
6 - Greetings! You have written a wonderful essay! I have only a few small corrections to suggest: "the...
Undergraduaterosadia - Nov 26, 2006 / EF_Team2 - Dec 31, 2006
|'international student and academic atmosphere' - Boston University Essay
Undergraduateskitzz - Dec 28, 2006 / EF_Team2 - Dec 28, 2006
|'Japan anime' - Common App. (Wash U in St. Louis, Cornell, + Syracuse)
2 - Greetings! This is a very impressive piece of writing! You have a lovely way of expression that is...
UndergraduateChiisanahime - Dec 28, 2006 / EF_Team2 - Dec 28, 2006
|A a system to think without system; Opinions on an unorthodox approach essay?
2 - Greetings! You appear to have the mind of a philosopher! I think this is a very creative essay,...
Undergraduaten0nl33t - Dec 20, 2006 / EF_Team2 - Dec 21, 2006
|A SMALL STEP - Evaluate a significant experience or achievement - Essay
NEW - Hi, This is another essay I have to write. The subject is "evaluate a significant experience or achievement...
Undergraduatebernat - Dec 13, 2006 / — -
|Personal Statement (applying for Development studies)
5 - Greetings! Your essay states your reasons for applying to the program clearly. I understand now what Development Studies...
UndergraduateMuhiddin - Dec 6, 2006 / EF_Team2 - Dec 13, 2006
|Spending money; I realized that i used a lot of money for unnecessary things.
UndergraduateOdontuul - Dec 3, 2006 / Odontuul - Dec 7, 2006
|Every thing was gray in my eye, the sky, buildings, ground, people, and even buses. Is this America?
Undergraduateyr_0331 - Nov 23, 2006 / yr_0331 - Dec 5, 2006
|I said goodbye to my mother; University of Maryland
Undergraduateyr_0331 - Dec 3, 2006 / — -
|Philosophy, Robotics, and Economi NCSSM ; COMMUNITY -Academic&Residential Experience
3 - Greetings, Kalyan! I love the addition! It makes me feel as though I'm right there with you. I...
Undergraduatekrao - Nov 28, 2006 / EF_Team2 - Dec 3, 2006
|Scout/ Grammar School/ Drama/ Peer Counseling; UC - More on Academic Record
2 - Greetings! Let's see what I can do, whether we're within the deadline or not: "Several times a...
Undergraduatecwuzzup - Nov 30, 2006 / EF_Team2 - Dec 1, 2006
|BUSINESS/ STOCK BROKER, BANKER, LAW FIRM ; UC - Intended major? experience?
2 - Hello, again-- Very well-stated! You say exactly what you need to about your accomplishments and desires, and you...
UndergraduateiLoveCookies - Nov 30, 2006 / EF_Team2 - Nov 30, 2006
|"most of us take what we have for granted" ; COMMON APP
6 - Hey, Michael-- Lacking in depth? After what you have experienced? Surely not! Do you have academic accomplishments...
UndergraduateiLoveCookies - Nov 30, 2006 / EF_Team2 - Nov 30, 2006
|World Affairs Challenge; UC -'A difficult academic endeavor'
Undergraduatev8m9t - Nov 29, 2006 / EF_Team2 - Nov 30, 2006
|BREAST CANCER/ Doing something without feeling helpless; Donho UC
3 - Thanks Sarah. I'll definately take your input on this one! Dont overwork yourself too much today!...
Undergraduatedonho - Nov 30, 2006 / donho - Nov 30, 2006
|'eagle project' - contribution or personal quality..
3 - Greetings! This an excellent essay! It clearly outlines the qualities you intend to bring to the university and...
Undergraduatecwuzzup - Nov 29, 2006 / EF_Team2 - Nov 30, 2006
|"Your future begins here" ; Estero High School
NEW - This grade determines whether or not I pass my comp class so I was wondering if anybody would critique...
Undergraduatenbc4911 - Nov 29, 2006 / — -
|Great things don't come easy; UC Admission
6 - You're welcome! I'm relieved that you got it in time. Good luck with the psychology classes. I find it...
Undergraduateaznshorty1900 - Nov 29, 2006 / EF_Team2 - Nov 29, 2006
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