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|1.) Prompt: Again and again we hear the complaint that we have no heroes anymore.
4 - examples of people who became can be changed to for instances it is more formal. you used stood many...
Writing FeedbackJOSCONIC - Jul 31, 2013 / hili - Jul 31, 2013
|IELTS TASk 2-Many species of animals and plants are in danger of being extinct. What
Writing Feedbackbobinv - Jul 30, 2013 / bobinv - Jul 31, 2013
|Increasing amount of violence on TV has a negative impact on children's behavior
5 - You were smart to avoid repeating the word "negative." However, you can't just "use another one." No...
Writing FeedbackYami - Jul 31, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 31, 2013
|IELTS essay: Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of living off-campus?
Writing FeedbackHelinkway - Jul 25, 2013 / Harneet Kaur - Jul 31, 2013
|[ielts task2]Nowadays some people prefer to rebuild or redesign the old houses.....
2 - Okkkkkk.... here I am as you requested in uhnna's thread. Good introduction. You write very well, however, pay attention...
Writing FeedbackDaniel Guo - Jul 31, 2013 / dumi - Jul 31, 2013
|Everyone makes 100s of simple,spontaneous decisions daily;2 Most Difficult Options
Writing Feedbackwritingcyh - Jul 28, 2013 / zoha - Jul 31, 2013
|IELTS- Best way to improve public health is to improve sports facilities?
2 - a important topic => an important topic are lacking of sports facilities => are lacking in sports facilities accompanied...
Writing Feedbacktiendh - Jul 30, 2013 / khanhlinhpham - Jul 30, 2013
|Task 1 IELTS- Acid rain emissions in UK over a period of 17 years
Writing Feedbackxucoi - Jul 30, 2013 / xucoi - Jul 30, 2013
|[TOEFL]All schoold teachers should be required to take the courses in every five year
Writing Feedbackbiryne - Jul 24, 2013 / dumi - Jul 30, 2013
|Some people are of the opinion that looking back the past is waste of time
4 - waste of time ....while others claim that studying history brings great benefits to people, especially to...
Writing Feedbackthe gunner - Jul 24, 2013 / dumi - Jul 30, 2013
|Continuous developments of zoo required towards a more comfortable and habitable for animals to live
5 - Your ideas sometimes don't flow well. Avoid writing very lengthy sentences. .... Well, zoo is not...
Writing Feedbackdrifter702 - Jul 15, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 30, 2013
|CITY&GUILDS: Human beings do not need to eat meat in order to maintain good health...
5 - ... You better have a stronger hook. This is something too obvious and hence not interesting. ...
Writing Feedbackbrtsnck - Jul 24, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 30, 2013
|IETLS; A Claim Letter against Insurance Company
4 - .... You have adopted the correct formal tone for this type of a letter. However, I feel this...
Writing Feedbacktuhin_75 - Jul 17, 2013 / dumi - Jul 30, 2013
|Why study? 'career preparation, gaining experiences, and increasing knowledge'
3 - jkjeremy has provided you with very good feedback as to improve your writing and I hope you pay enough...
Writing FeedbackFardin - Jul 17, 2013 / dumi - Jul 30, 2013
|IELTS; Social status of man is influenced by education parenting and environment
Writing Feedbackshimshel - Jul 28, 2013 / ldlsky03 - Jul 30, 2013
|Using consultansy or listening to the own people; GRE analyze & issue
4 - ]While I believe that it is necessary to appreciate and incorporate the views of one's ownthe employees, I...
Writing Feedbacktherajendraadhi - Jul 15, 2013 / dumi - Jul 30, 2013
|Advance in the field of Information technology is altering people's lifestyles
5 - I'm confused with "ranging from home to leisure or even at workplace" You can try:. Information technology is...
Writing Feedbackfred123 - Jul 29, 2013 / xucoi - Jul 30, 2013
|Is it more important to be able to work alone or in group?
4 - Thank you very much for the comments. I will try my best to improve my writing skills. But everyone...
Writing FeedbackChocofun - Jul 29, 2013 / Chocofun - Jul 30, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1: UK Youth who are vegetarian - Line Graph
2 - In 20 years from 1960, there washad been a gradually upward trend in the percentage of young people...
Writing Feedbackmangdoli - Jul 24, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 29, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: The problems created by unlimited use of cars
4 - .... You can use direct speech to tell this idea more interestingly and clearly; Driving in traffic congestions...
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Jul 23, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 29, 2013
|GRE essay.....will technology deteriorate our thinking abilities?
5 - ... this is my suggestion; Another revolutionary invention had been the Sensor. .... I capitalized the word to...
Writing Feedbackharsha138 - Jul 25, 2013 / dumi - Jul 29, 2013
|While the unpaid community service is useful for our society, we should not force students to do it
4 - Thanks everyone for your feedback. I always find it difficult to get ideas for any topics. I tried to...
Writing Feedbacktiendh - Jul 28, 2013 / tiendh - Jul 29, 2013
|IELTS Letter ; Asking a friend to be my partner!
Writing Feedbacksophisticated - Jul 28, 2013 / dumi - Jul 29, 2013
|IELTS ESSAY : WRITING A RESPONSE LETTER TO A COMPLAIN ABOUT NOISE
Writing Feedbackhuyenanh1508 - Jul 29, 2013 / dumi - Jul 29, 2013
|Should new editors decide what to broadcast on TV &what to print in the newspapers?
6 - Thanks a lot Pahan. I actually gave examples but before posting the essay here I removed them because I...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Jul 29, 2013 / dolly - Jul 29, 2013
|Team Work Vs Working Independently ; Which is better?
Writing FeedbackRAJAN44 - Jul 27, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 29, 2013
|City should preserve its old, historic buildings - it's part of city history
6 - .... This sounds like your opinion on the issue. However, in the conclusion you take the other position....
Writing Feedbacksanginabadi - Jul 28, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 29, 2013
|It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city.
3 - I think your introduction is too long and too detailed. You had better save some ideas for your 2...
Writing Feedbacksanginabadi - Jul 28, 2013 / MisterWandering - Jul 28, 2013
|Electromagnetic induction / How metal detectors work?
3 - all-metal detectors, iron metal detectors and aluminum foil metal detectors. They enjoy wide popularity around the world , which...
Writing Feedbackkmykimi - Jul 10, 2013 / dumi - Jul 28, 2013
|TOEFL Children should learn to manage their own money; views differ considerably
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Jul 24, 2013 / hanyoojung - Jul 28, 2013
|IELTS 2; Television's influence on cultures - Negative or Positive?
4 - It seems you can write well... Can you manage time well? If you have a problem with that, limit...
Writing Feedbackdheeraj93 - Jul 28, 2013 / dumi - Jul 28, 2013
|IELTS - old buildings should be preserved; 'contribute to our sense of culture'
5 - yucky Thanks for your feedback "the preservation is very expensive because all components of old buildings have historical values"...
Writing Feedbackhieptv - Jul 27, 2013 / hieptv - Jul 28, 2013
|Which is more important to you?A Business Or A House
Writing FeedbackYorgun95 - Jul 27, 2013 / Sara Elmessiry - Jul 27, 2013
|IELTS:Cheap air travel should be encouraged?
4 - I think you write well . Your writing is clear and well presented. There are small grammar issues here...
Writing Feedbackgnam6174 - Jul 22, 2013 / dumi - Jul 27, 2013
|When students move to a new school, they sometimes face problems.
2 - The problem with your reasoning is that most schools have sports year round that almost anyone can participate in....
Writing FeedbackYorgun95 - Jul 27, 2013 / USNAGoal - Jul 27, 2013
|Some people want to be independent from their families as soon as possible and some other not
Writing Feedbackramshah - Jul 25, 2013 / ramshah - Jul 27, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:Popularity of mobile phones to young people
7 - you have strong sentences :) very good:) Similarly, the phones with internet capability influence young children...
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jul 25, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 27, 2013
|Kubbar island ; Trip to Island ...4 paragraph essay
4 - Well.... I don't find mistakes in your essay. However, my suggestions were intended to improve your writing more...
Writing Feedbackleadero - Jul 26, 2013 / dumi - Jul 27, 2013
|Arguments in favor of Animal Testing? Yes or No?
5 - Maybe you should decide on what side to agree with in your conclusion. You sound undecided. The rest of...
Writing Feedbackmingyu - Jul 21, 2013 / hanyoojung - Jul 27, 2013
|Is it more important to be able to work with a group of people on a team?
Writing FeedbackMaheshkushwaha - Jul 25, 2013 / Maheshkushwaha - Jul 27, 2013
|Physical exercises do not mean only to maintain good shape
6 - Hi What's the purpose of this essay? IELTS/ TOEFL/ GRE ? Include the purpose in your topic (in the...
Writing FeedbackMariProvi - Jul 22, 2013 / dumi - Jul 26, 2013
|TOEFL;Should parents limit their children watching TV to make them do well in shcool?
4 - Good introduction :) Recently,more and more children got into the habit of smoke because they imitated...
Writing Feedbackdreamer77 - Jul 25, 2013 / dumi - Jul 26, 2013
|IELTS:Children can learn efficiently by watching television
3 - Hi, First, you should post all IELTS essays into Writing Feedback forum. (I moved your essay from "Undgraduate" to...
Writing Feedbackgivemebrave - Jul 24, 2013 / dumi - Jul 26, 2013
|'all round education is vital to a studen' - GRE Issue Essay
Writing Feedbackishas - Jul 25, 2013 / ishas - Jul 26, 2013
|'everything has its good and bad sides' - Food has become easier to prepare
Writing FeedbackAbrorjon_20 - Jul 25, 2013 / dumi - Jul 26, 2013
|Are you in favour of exams being abolished?
Writing Feedbackfureit1998 - Jul 25, 2013 / dumi - Jul 26, 2013
|What makes small businesses successful?
4 - .... well.... you don't have to apologize because this is a forum where people can discuss and share...
Writing FeedbackYAS20 - Jul 24, 2013 / dumi - Jul 26, 2013
|[TOEFL] Choosing the job that is similar to parents' jobs could benefit to one's career.
4 - there are many discussions about what kind of structure could get good score, and many people said they got...
Writing Feedbackdreamer77 - Jul 21, 2013 / dreamer77 - Jul 25, 2013
|IELTS;Talents with which people are born or practice is more beneficial.
Writing Feedbacktalwinder - Jul 22, 2013 / abderrahim - Jul 25, 2013
|People have so many possibilities. We can learn new things by only writing the term in Google Search
7 - As others have xpressed it's important to include your prompt so that others know how to align their feed...
Writing Feedbacktiha - Jul 22, 2013 / dumi - Jul 24, 2013
|Surest indicator of great nation is wellfare of people: Claim n Reason
NEW - Question: Claim: The surest indicator of great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists. Reason:...
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|Is learning through experiments better than classroom-based learning?
Writing FeedbackCherylEM0 - Jul 21, 2013 / CherylEM0 - Jul 24, 2013
|An introduction for capital punishment
18 - maybe I should have written:decreased considerably in number(instead of decreased in number considerably) to emphasize on considerably.what do you...
Writing Feedbackmehdi1 - Jul 23, 2013 / mehdi1 - Jul 24, 2013
|IELTS:Competition or Co-operation should children learn? 'future career'
7 - I think a good way for you to start is reading valuable articles on the internet. You could also...
Writing Feedbackgehan - Jul 21, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 23, 2013
|"Watching TV is bad for children" agree or disagree? / Use Specific Reasons
Writing Feedbackbrtsnck - Jul 22, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 22, 2013
|When to start formal education for children?
Writing Feedbackhosseinrooh2010 - Jul 22, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 22, 2013
|Whether the power of advertisement or the real need of people?
7 - I understand your comments. Thanks for your feedback. I will send my essay as quick as possible....
Writing Feedbackvananhnguyen - Jul 21, 2013 / vananhnguyen - Jul 22, 2013
|IELTS essay: Should the government pay the tuition fees for students?
Writing FeedbackHelinkway - Jul 20, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 22, 2013
|IELST Writing Task 1 - Water use worldwide and water consumption
Writing Feedbackjeawon_198x - Jul 22, 2013 / dumi - Jul 22, 2013
|What you have learned about a country from its movies - 'culture & attractions'
6 - .... better than what you said above .... or else you can say something like this; By watching American...
Writing Feedbackholylua - Jul 21, 2013 / dumi - Jul 22, 2013
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