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It is widely believed nowadays that social knowledge and the ability to adapt in a changing society

3 - I think your essay is divided into too many paragraph. To be more specific, each paragraph should contain at...

Writing Feedbackphongmai0301 - Oct 4, 2022 / Hoang Minh - Oct 4, 2022
Some individuals like to put more effort in their work

5 - The second paragraph is somewhat weak and confusing. For example, the causality between hardworking and obesity is based on...

Writing Feedbackdinhpham - Sep 19, 2022 / Dts007 - Oct 2, 2022
Books on online platforms or traditional, paper books (ielts essay)

2 - The essay properly responded to the discussion question. It created a very strong restatement and personal opinion. The personal...

Writing Feedbackhgthng1010 - Sep 29, 2022 / Holt - Sep 30, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TENDENCY TO BE SELF-EMPLOYED.

3 - In your third paragraph, when you said " to begin with, if someone does not have enough" This statement...

Writing FeedbackGabriell - Sep 27, 2022 / Chukwuagozie - Sep 29, 2022
(WT2) Children spent hours on their smartphones every day

2 - This is a failing essay that will not receive a passing score based on one specific reason. The writer...

Writing FeedbackHoang Minh - Sep 28, 2022 / Holt - Sep 28, 2022
The gender distribution of Australians doing regular physical activities in 2010

3 - I think your should do your Overview more clearly. Well, I mean that in an Overview, people usually overview...

Writing Feedbackhoangtubongdem - Sep 27, 2022 / Hoang Minh - Sep 28, 2022
The given diagram interprets the cyclical procedure of reprocessing plastic bottles. (IELTS TASK 1)

3 - Well, in my opinion, you should mix the Introduction part and the Overview together so that the essay will...

Writing FeedbackNammanly - Sep 28, 2022 / Hoang Minh - Sep 28, 2022
[IELTS WTITING 1] the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015

3 - Thank you som much sir @holt...

Writing Feedbackchillout - Sep 28, 2022 / chillout - Sep 28, 2022
[IELTS WT1] The Police budget for 2017-2018 in an area of Britain.

2 - The writer still has not shown an ability to create an informative report using less than 200 words. That...

Writing FeedbackHoang Minh - Sep 25, 2022 / Holt - Sep 28, 2022
TASK 2: THE GAP BETWEEN RICH AND POOR

2 - It will be difficult for me to provide a proper assessment of the writer's opinion making abilities with this...

Writing Feedbackvnguyen248 - Sep 28, 2022 / Holt - Sep 28, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 2: Animal testing is morally wrong but it can save human's life.

3 - Lemme help you correct some mistakes: 1st paragraph: to test => delete "to" 2nd paragraph: a large amount of...

Writing FeedbackClover118 - Sep 18, 2022 / Gabriell - Sep 27, 2022
The change in Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas - IELTS Task1 - Table

4 - 1st paragraph: UK => the UK (remember to add "the" in front of some countries such as: The Philipines,...

Writing Feedbackclancylins - Sep 27, 2022 / Gabriell - Sep 27, 2022
The bar chart provides information how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 & 2018

2 - Incorrect use of a conjunction. This can only be used when the topics being discussed are connected in...

Writing Feedbackancle21 - Sep 26, 2022 / Holt - Sep 27, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: BAR CHART ABOUT WEEKLY EXPENDITURE.

2 - There are a few things that the exam taker can do to improve the scores for his summary overview...

Writing FeedbackGabriell - Sep 26, 2022 / Holt - Sep 27, 2022
[IELTS WTITING 1] The pie charts give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy

3 - I think the paragraphs need to be connected better, the sentences are way too simple, apart from that, the...

Writing Feedbackalex1 - Sep 25, 2022 / geovannafrra - Sep 26, 2022
Ielts writing - Task 2 : Nowadays, many animal species are becoming extinct.

3 - @Holt Thank you very much for your advice!...

Writing Feedbackhinguyn91 - Sep 25, 2022 / hinguyn91 - Sep 25, 2022
Some people believe that personal happiness is directly related to achievement in gaining wealth

2 - This is a sentence that strays from the original presentation. Nowhere in the prompt is the writer asked...

Writing FeedbackTrang Hanh - Sep 25, 2022 / Holt - Sep 25, 2022
VILLAGE AND MODERN CITY FROM 1990 - 2005

3 - Well, I think you should remember about the Overview section. It can be written at the end of the...

Writing Feedbackmiaselvina - Sep 9, 2022 / Hoang Minh - Sep 25, 2022
Females participating in parliament - IELTS WRITING TASK 1

4 - I think it may be your typo mistake that in the Overview paragraph, you forgot to shown the particular...

Writing Feedbacknanhh123 - Sep 12, 2022 / Hoang Minh - Sep 25, 2022
Effect of social media on interaction between people - merits and demerits

4 - You should provide examples in your 2nd and 3rd paragraphs to further prove your claim. Also your essay is...

Writing Feedbacksabrina28 - Sep 18, 2022 / lt3737 - Sep 23, 2022
Some people argue that the juvenile offenders should be treated in a similar way as mature people

3 - Thank you so much...

Writing FeedbackJack Lee - Sep 23, 2022 / Jack Lee - Sep 23, 2022
The Graph Below Shows The Average Number Of Vietnamese Students Studying In France, America And RU

3 - I think your overview is quite confusing, instead you could just focus on 2 main features, the first one...

Writing FeedbackL_i_n_h_coi - Sep 19, 2022 / DanielDang - Sep 20, 2022
When designing a building, the function is normally more important than the outward appearance.

2 - The presentation is a bit too long at 326 words. Remember the 40 minute limitation within which the writer...

Writing FeedbackPiipi - Sep 20, 2022 / Holt - Sep 20, 2022
[IELTS WT2] Should people take risks both in their personal and professional lives?

2 - The writer has exaggerated the original topic presentation which has caused a change in the topic foundation. The original...

Writing FeedbackHoang Minh - Sep 19, 2022 / Holt - Sep 20, 2022
IELTS task1 (maps) - The two maps below show Stokeford town development over the 80 years

3 - In my opinion, your essay is divided into too many paragraphs. It may not very serious but according to...

Writing Feedbackhaianh6115 - Sep 17, 2022 / Hoang Minh - Sep 19, 2022
IELTS1: The bar chart - the gender ratio of art-related subjects of the educational institution 2011

3 - I think the paragraph is too short. It is required about 150 words for writing task 1. You should...

Writing Feedbacknandir - Sep 18, 2022 / Hoang Minh - Sep 19, 2022
Information technology and changing world - ielts writing

3 - The outline of the essay is great, but I believe that in 40 minutes the ideas could have been...

Writing Feedbacksatphuong - Sep 15, 2022 / geovannafrra - Sep 18, 2022
The opinion I disagree with, that spending money on the arts is a waste

2 - Creating an immediate discussion point in the opening statement has created a failing TA score for this particular paragraph....

Writing FeedbackPhunglan - Sep 17, 2022 / Holt - Sep 18, 2022
IELTS 2: Schools are spending time teaching traditional subjects as history not how to find a job

2 - The writer's rewording of the original prompt is problematic because the phrase is a direct cut...

Writing Feedbackverina - Sep 17, 2022 / Holt - Sep 18, 2022
The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time in the last year.

2 - While the task can be assessed as well analyzed and written, the problem with the presentation is that it...

Writing Feedbackhanhmai - Sep 17, 2022 / Holt - Sep 17, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2: reduce the amount of traffic in cities - how to curb this problem?

2 - This is an extent essay that requires the writer to define his response based on the measured / emotional...

Writing Feedbacknnlinh2610 - Sep 14, 2022 / Holt - Sep 15, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2:businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way

3 - Let me correct some of your mistakes in your essay. You made a lot of mistakes ! emphasis =>...

Writing Feedbackmonica2000 - Sep 12, 2022 / Yemen - Sep 14, 2022
The graph below shows the employment rate of each gender in four different countries in 2002.

2 - The summary overview is difficult to follow becausethe writer chose to use a single sentence to represent information that...

Writing FeedbackLemonsiuer - Sep 13, 2022 / Holt - Sep 13, 2022
Cause for Concern, Kids and Social Media

2 - The reference materials are too old to be considered valid sources of information for the article. In...

Writing FeedbackJen229 - Sep 11, 2022 / Holt - Sep 12, 2022
Ielts writing task 2 - Technology (The question is be written below)

4 - On the other hand, expeditious internet dissemination will be a fertile breeding ground for gaining knowledge if all the...

Writing FeedbackPear - Aug 28, 2022 / jacquelinearriz - Sep 11, 2022
IELTS Task 2: Following the customs and traditions in a new country - the newcomers should adapt

2 - This is a well thought out and properly developed essay. The prompt restatement and writer's opinion came in strong...

Writing FeedbackTVyB - Sep 11, 2022 / Holt - Sep 11, 2022
Central authorities or teacher choose education program

3 - I really appreciate the comments on the whole article, especially the ending, thank you very much! I will rewrite...

Writing Feedbacksunny21 - Sep 10, 2022 / sunny21 - Sep 11, 2022
Median hours spent on housework, childcare or gardening per week by married women and men

2 - The 3 sectors should have been listed as the 2nd sentence requirement of this paragraph. A basic paragraph...

Writing FeedbackDanielDang - Sep 11, 2022 / Holt - Sep 11, 2022
The number of people who have a need to go abroad for studying and working purposes is on the rise

2 - I believe that the writer has confused the topic focus of the essay by indicating both studying and working...

Writing Feedbackn2h - Sep 10, 2022 / Holt - Sep 11, 2022
Many people believe that it is prominent to buy people's own house rather than rent

2 - I cannot help but wonder if this user is even listening to me when I make observations and corrections,...

Writing Feedbacksofianur23 - Sep 9, 2022 / Holt - Sep 10, 2022
The map potrays the development of a town

2 - - This is an incorrect summary in the sense that the number of maps indicated are not...

Writing Feedbackpemburuawardee - Sep 9, 2022 / Holt - Sep 10, 2022
Change from a small village to a modern town - development from 1990 to 2005.

2 - There is a problem with the way the report depicts the changes in the maps (not map) provided. All...

Writing Feedbackdrhchopper - Sep 9, 2022 / Holt - Sep 10, 2022
Town development progress

2 - This exam taker has not fully utilized the word count for this task in aid of receiving a higher...

Writing Feedbacksimupa - Sep 9, 2022 / Holt - Sep 10, 2022
The maps showed the comparison of a city expanded from 1990 to 2005

2 - The task accuracy of this essay in relation to the correct report format will be a failing score. A...

Writing Feedbackmbmustofa - Sep 9, 2022 / Holt - Sep 10, 2022
The increasing numbers of species come under threat of extinction; biodiversity

2 - The essay does not meet the minimum word count of 250 words. Deductions based on the missing word count...

Writing Feedbackhoward_le_3009 - Sep 9, 2022 / Holt - Sep 9, 2022
TASK 1 - The figures in terms of using water for varied intentions in six regions of the world

2 - A summary overview must be complete in its explanation of the important figures and references from the given image....

Writing FeedbackSamsamisme - Sep 8, 2022 / Holt - Sep 9, 2022
IELTS 2: Should children be taught by their parents in the home or by their teacher in the school?

2 - The first sentence in this presentation contains cut and paste information from the original presentation that will lead to...

Writing FeedbackFachrulhuda79 - Sep 7, 2022 / Holt - Sep 8, 2022
Ielts writing task 2: What does success come from?

2 - The writer presented a personal opinion in the opening sentence instead of merely restating the given topic covering 2...

Writing FeedbackJfghhhgvgf - Sep 7, 2022 / Holt - Sep 8, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (Environmental problems from human harmful activities)

4 - I think you miss the task achievement because the requirement is to discuss the two views given but you...

Writing FeedbackTuandepzai - Sep 1, 2022 / sofianur23 - Sep 8, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 : LAGUNA BEACH; more and more sophisticated facilities have been built there

2 - When a task 1 essay is written, careful consideration should be given to the time allowance of 20 minutes...

Writing Feedbacksofianur23 - Sep 6, 2022 / Holt - Sep 6, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: The reasons of migration to capital city in a particular country (2000 - 2015)

2 - While the writer wrote more than the expected word count, he did not properly format the paragraph presentations. A...

Writing Feedbackdungphuong - Sep 6, 2022 / Holt - Sep 6, 2022
[IELTS Writing Task 1] The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit

3 - In my view, the writer do not clearly explain the trend so that the reader can not understand the...

Writing FeedbackAlexon - Aug 21, 2022 / sofianur23 - Sep 6, 2022
IELTS: WRITING TASK 1. THE TOTAL VALUE AND SOURCES OF FISH IMPORTED TO THE US

2 - This report presentation will immediately receive a failing score due to the incorrect response format. It is missing the...

Writing Feedbackjxss - Sep 6, 2022 / Holt - Sep 6, 2022
TOEFL Writing Essay: 'young people to follow and obey' - I'd really appreciate if you rate my essay

3 - you make a lot of redundant in certain worlds such as early and life. Try to use paraphrase it....

Writing FeedbackNegarsf - Sep 3, 2022 / sofianur23 - Sep 5, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 : THE BENEFITS AND RISKS OF WATCHING TELEVISION FOR CHILDREN

2 - As there are several practice essays related to the topic of television and its effect on children, it would...

Writing Feedbacksofianur23 - Sep 5, 2022 / Holt - Sep 5, 2022
The line graph gives data about four sectors in terms of the amount of acid rain emissions in the UK

2 - The writer uses long sentences with combined information presentations too often in this essay. It creates a cluttered presentation...

Writing Feedbacklinhkn - Sep 4, 2022 / Holt - Sep 4, 2022
IELTS writing task 2 - Pros and cons of taking a gap year; give reasons and relevant examples

2 - The prompt restatement is acceptable and serves its purpose of delivering an originally worded version of the original topic....

Writing Feedbackngori - Sep 4, 2022 / Holt - Sep 4, 2022
IELTS Writing Task 1 . The process details the process of making smoked fish

2 - The summary overview should be composed of at least 2 sentences. The presentation lacks a proper diagram identification which...

Writing Feedbacknataliely - Sep 3, 2022 / Holt - Sep 4, 2022
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - Industrial area maps

2 - The writer is confusing the image references. First he indicates the plural form of maps, which is correct since...

Writing Feedbackjiminpark - Sep 2, 2022 / Holt - Sep 2, 2022
The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to

2 - The summary overview is based on individual sentence requirements. That means, it follows the one sentence, one idea structure....

Writing FeedbackHarry26 - Sep 2, 2022 / Holt - Sep 2, 2022

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