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|(IELTS ESSAY) effect of mobile phones on young children.
12 - Hai Somy... Yes, you are right...)Ř› But you mentioned your opinion in the introduction itself.. Sorry for...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Feb 1, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 3, 2013
|(IELTS essay) Dangerous sports banned or not; Children put themselves in trouble
5 - Hai dumi... Thanks for your correction and suggestions.. So many people concerned about the time for my...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Feb 1, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 3, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2. TALENTED PEOPLE
3 - ... this sentence is poorly constructed.... It doesn't deliver a relevant idea too....In any society there should be...
Writing FeedbackJanett - Feb 3, 2013 / dumi - Feb 3, 2013
|IELTS-Many children these days have their own mobile phones. advantages/disadvantages
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Feb 2, 2013 / dumi - Feb 3, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) Effects of short time work
Writing Feedbackrombos - Feb 2, 2013 / dumi - Feb 3, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) MODES OF LEARNING OTHER CULTURE AND TRADITION..
2 - ...good start :) learning about others' lifestyles help you learn more about those people like their...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Feb 2, 2013 / dumi - Feb 3, 2013
|one can understand the society by studying major cities; rural and heritage area
NEW - Issue: "To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Studying Major...
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|IELTS Writing Task 2: 'ageing population' topic
2 - Hi, I think you write pretty good. So I thought giving my suggestions for different presentations of your ideas...
Writing FeedbackYanSun - Feb 2, 2013 / dumi - Feb 3, 2013
|What kinds of places do you avoid visiting when you travel?
9 - Hello frnds, i am Sharvani, Plz reply above my eassy, and tel me where i did mistakes. Help me...
Writing Feedbackelmar91 - Jan 21, 2013 / sharvani - Feb 2, 2013
|'neat and tidy'; Students who can keep their rooms organized are sure to succeed
4 - I take your point and thank you. And I doubt that there may be some other faults,especially the logy...
Writing Feedbacktofel201304 - Jan 28, 2013 / tofel201304 - Feb 2, 2013
|IELTS- Effects of replacing sports and games with more acdemic sessions in schools
6 - Hai bosco... Over all good essay.. Nice to read.. Nowadays many schools.... Keep on reading and...
Writing Feedbackrombos - Jan 30, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 1, 2013
|IELTS-Some say that reading newspapers and watching TV news is a waste of time.
2 - Hai dev.. Over all good attempt....). You have so many good points also...). Be careful about the...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Feb 1, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 1, 2013
|IELTS- people have different way of escaping the stress and difficulties
5 - you used many places stress instead use another vocabulary like anxiety, pressure, strain, tension, trauma, distress...
Writing Feedbackpmw0647 - Feb 1, 2013 / devabe2005 - Feb 1, 2013
|Some prefer living in places with same weather. Which do you prefer?
4 - ... your previous sentence says you generally have a colder weather throughout the year. This highlighted part...
Writing Feedbackmayraschmidt - Jan 28, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|IELTS ; What factors contribute to job satisfication?
Writing Feedbackcaoxue - Jan 28, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|Lazy talk - Television is dangerous because it has destroyed the family living and communication.
2 - .... I suggest you to present this differently; Some people argue that Television distances the family members and...
Writing Feedbackabcd1234 - Jan 31, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|Should educators be paid according to their students performance?
2 - this sounds a bit awkward .... this is my suggestion; to the academic performance of students ...
Writing FeedbackMabossani - Jan 27, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|Memoir of the Chevalier ; Writing Section of the Toefl, Question 1
7 - Hello. I am a former ETS TOEFL exam rater with 4 years of experience. My comments are intended to...
Writing Feedbackharetche - Jan 23, 2013 / toeflrater - Feb 1, 2013
|IELTS - Eat at food stands or restaurants? Eat at home
Writing Feedbackpmw0647 - Jan 31, 2013 / rombos - Jan 31, 2013
|IELTS-Some people think that museums entertain people, while others it is to educate
4 - First, it seems your essay is two short. Try to maintain at least the minimum word count required for...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 27, 2013 / dumi - Jan 31, 2013
|IELTS-Children prefer electronic games to other games and toys.Why is it happening
2 - It should be either "rapid technological advancement" or "technological revolution" "Software companies deliver " is the correct form....
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 31, 2013 / dumi - Jan 31, 2013
|(practicing writing) Should first world countries offer economic help to third world?
3 - Thank you very much for your points there! =) I'm not practicing for a certificate (not yet though),...
Writing Feedbackkiniggit - Jan 31, 2013 / kiniggit - Jan 31, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) effects of electronic games on children
4 - ... Your sentence is too complex.. Let's simplify it. Today, it is not an unfamiliar sight to see...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Jan 31, 2013 / Pahan - Jan 31, 2013
|schools replacing sports and exercise classes with more academic
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 31, 2013 / Arun0506 - Jan 31, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Both man and women should share domestic works..?
6 - Hai dumi, syed, dev and cuong... Thanks to you all, for your valuable time and concern for correcting...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 22, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 31, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Child-care courses, best way to up date childcare?
6 - Hai Hung.. Thanks for your wonderful correction.. It was really valuable.. It strength my essay Thanks a...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 28, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 31, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Drop sports classes from school?
5 - Hai Jenny, Pahan, Dev and Arun... Hai Jenny and Pahan... Thanks for the corrections which strengthen my...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 30, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 31, 2013
|IELTS:Crime_nothing can be done to prevent it_Agree or disagree?To what extend?
Writing Feedbacktogiang - Jan 30, 2013 / togiang - Jan 30, 2013
|The most significant transportation innovation of past 200 years?
Writing Feedbackelmar91 - Jan 30, 2013 / elmar91 - Jan 30, 2013
|IELTS - Parents are concerned with their children's' up-bringing than before.opin
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 29, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 30, 2013
|IELTS - TASK1 - Write a letter to your friend thanking him/her for guiding interview
2 - ... the interview had already taken place.... so you need to keep this sentence in past tense. ...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 30, 2013 / dumi - Jan 30, 2013
|The squirrel on the roof, basking in the morning sun
2 - about the time when I am done with my own morning routine, bath and toilet, meditation and yoga, and...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Jan 29, 2013 / devabe2005 - Jan 30, 2013
|IELTS- Most schools planning to replace sports classes with more academic sessions
4 - Thanks dumi, arun, I forget to proofread this essay that is why some places it is incomplete. They...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 30, 2013 / devabe2005 - Jan 30, 2013
|Far-sighted/ Persevering/ Help my progres; Important qualities of a good boss
Writing FeedbackQingye - Jan 29, 2013 / Qingye - Jan 30, 2013
|IELTS; INTERNET BRINGS THE WORLD TOGETHER AND MAKE IT SMALLER
3 - The Internet havehas becomea big part of our daily life. It existedexists everywhere; office, home and even your cell...
Writing Feedbackmanson20 - Jan 29, 2013 / somysojan - Jan 30, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Economical developments degrade Social values?
4 - let me suggest this way as its an introductory sentence and it should have a punch. Nowadays,...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 29, 2013 / somysojan - Jan 30, 2013
|Parents have an exceptionally great impact on their children; TOEFL
Writing FeedbackIcebird - Jan 7, 2013 / Qingye - Jan 29, 2013
|Today television is an important object which help people to connect each other from far places
6 - Some program in television allows people to connect with officials and experts. They can talk about their individual problems...
Writing Feedbackashkanboorboori - Dec 31, 2012 / Qingye - Jan 29, 2013
|We shouldn't rely on the easier-prepared food too much, even though it has made our life much easier
2 - This is a good essay you have raised some relevant points but in some cases you are reiterating what...
Writing FeedbackQingye - Jan 29, 2013 / Dr Seus - Jan 29, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) pros and cons of technology in human life.
3 - Hai Somy... Good attempt...): :In addition to....causes...:===> causes pollution to our environment and therby direct.... :In...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Jan 29, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 29, 2013
|IELTS LETTER-historical building in town and the city council wants to pull it dow
4 - ..."demolishing" is a good key word to use for destroying buildings. This was a shocking news...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 29, 2013 / dumi - Jan 29, 2013
|Childcare training course for parents. Agree or Disagree?
7 - Thanks Dev...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 28, 2013 / Arun0506 - Jan 29, 2013
|[IELTS Essay] Government - Investments in Arts is not a waste of money
2 - This is too close to the prompt introduction. You may take the idea, but present it differently; Governments...
Writing Feedbackmt22 - Jan 29, 2013 / dumi - Jan 29, 2013
|IELTS : museum is for education or for entertainment? BOTH
5 - Hai somy.. Overall good attempt.. Your opinion about why museums to be enjoyable is weak in terms of...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Jan 28, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 29, 2013
|IELTS-Countries develop economies improve living standards.degradation social values
6 - .... In my view, unemployment cannot be eradicated, but can be controlled or reduced. Even in highly develped...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 28, 2013 / dumi - Jan 29, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) necessity of child rearing programs for parents?
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Jan 29, 2013 / somysojan - Jan 29, 2013
|IELTS: all parents should take children training courses
5 - i think it would be better if you agreed to the question to list out your ideas perfectlty.. but...
Writing FeedbackCallie0202 - Jan 28, 2013 / somysojan - Jan 28, 2013
|'my first day on a new job' - narrative essay
2 - Yes, I like where you're getting but I suggest you add an anecdote in this essay. I really like...
Writing Feedbackevadfa - Jan 28, 2013 / janajackson - Jan 28, 2013
|GRE essay/Topic: job satisfication is an important element of individual wellbeing.
Writing Feedbackmultivariate - Jan 28, 2013 / evadfa - Jan 28, 2013
|IELTS; Museums are meant for educating people or entertaining them?
5 - Hai.... Dumi, Dev, Ben and Romeo Hai dumi.. Thanks for your wounderful correction... Hai Ben.. i like...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 27, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 28, 2013
|Advertisement encourages to buy in bulk, whereas it should promote high quality of the products sold
5 - but it is not showing importance to the quality of the product ă‹other than reflect the quality of products...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 26, 2013 / caoxue - Jan 28, 2013
|I pinch myself but easily notice this isn't a dream; Creative Writing
3 - Bent!...
Writing Feedbackh4rry - Jan 28, 2013 / LewisBirty - Jan 28, 2013
|Film review on MEN IN BLACK - A-list stars, an excellent production team
Writing Feedbackwroeykid09 - Jan 28, 2013 / wroeykid09 - Jan 28, 2013
|We were in a terrible state, trapped by all exits; Creative Writing
3 - I burnt essay...
Writing FeedbackLewisBirty - Jan 28, 2013 / LewisBirty - Jan 28, 2013
|All I knew was that I was safe; creative writing piece
Writing Feedbackwroeykid09 - Jan 28, 2013 / wroeykid09 - Jan 28, 2013
|[IELTS] Learning foreign languages is common now. Good or Not? Can prevent drawbacks
Writing Feedbackchristyzhongs - Dec 24, 2012 / devabe2005 - Jan 27, 2013
|UNIVERSITY EDUCATION IS IMPORTANT OR NOT?
3 - not uncommon -- common As an ordinary person, we would be well-advised to attend university to gain knowledge...
Writing FeedbackYukiCat - Jan 27, 2013 / niesaysi - Jan 27, 2013
|IELTS: Ageing population. What are the advantages and disadvantage
Writing Feedbackcolin - Jan 20, 2013 / colin - Jan 27, 2013
|IELTS-Nowadays people becoming parents later in life. Some think not good development
5 - hello. i think that there are not various ideas in this essay. For example, late childbearing causes...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 25, 2013 / gsisland - Jan 26, 2013
|Modern cooking offers convenient solutions for preparing food
11 - Thank you sooooo much for your revise, Dumi. ^^ To be honest, i'm still confuse about using inappropriate word...
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