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|"Every thing is alive because of water"; Clean Water ESSAY
Writing Feedbackabdullahtrading - Apr 12, 2013 / temptprovidence - Apr 14, 2013
|'many good degrees in Japan'; family background have more influence than teacher
2 - Begin your essay with a more catchy line; Who influence the young person's learning more? Parents or the...
Writing Feedbacklinhmonoforever - Apr 13, 2013 / dumi - Apr 14, 2013
|IETLS; Social media and its impact on my life
3 - .... it is not clear what you mean by "work and societal outcomes".... you better specify that. ...
Writing Feedbacktestessay - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 14, 2013
|Dieting can change a person's life for the better or ruin one's health completely.
4 - I would strongly suggest you to follow the four para structure for this task. That's the best way...
Writing FeedbackSuzy Naguib - Apr 14, 2013 / dumi - Apr 14, 2013
|Will the Internet will bring people of the world closer together?
Writing Feedbackjohnsultanov - Apr 12, 2013 / johnsultanov - Apr 14, 2013
|Computers usage at school-level studies for children (IELTS)
Writing Feedbackshaddy - Apr 8, 2013 / Redtape - Apr 14, 2013
|Drawbacks of technology in our modern world? *Short <400 words!
Writing Feedbackballerinia - Apr 13, 2013 / Misius - Apr 13, 2013
|TOEFL: Students should apply for admission for their first choice or several schools?
3 - Thank you about your opinion! However, I do have some doubts. I am studying BARRON's Toefl ibt and they...
Writing FeedbackMisius - Apr 13, 2013 / Misius - Apr 13, 2013
|IELTS-Wealthy nations have an obligation to provide food and education to the poorer?
4 - This should be your introductory paragraph. Don't leave the first line separate. Well ... why you...
Writing FeedbackAntonR - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|Mr. Heng taught me the value of HARDWORKING; My favorite TEACHER
Writing Feedbackpohui88 - Apr 9, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|IELTS Writing Task 1 - Bar chart (various flavours of food)
4 - That's just fine.... Those are good key words you can use in report writing. In this task try to...
Writing Feedbackdannydo - Apr 13, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|TOEFL iBT: Integrated Essay, The origin of dreams, Freud vs biochemical approach
3 - Thank you for your advice! I completely understand your position about integrated essays so I asked about grammar and...
Writing FeedbackMisius - Apr 13, 2013 / Misius - Apr 13, 2013
|Everyone has the right to education irrespective of gender difference
2 - Hi You should include your prompt in your post so that others can give you more relevant feed backs....
Writing Feedbacktestessay - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|Sapodila, was the name given to me when I was born; Essay on myself
Writing FeedbackSapodils - Apr 13, 2013 / Sapodils - Apr 13, 2013
|In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel before university
Writing Feedbackmsmwarren - Apr 12, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|IELTS-writing a short essay to express why moves to a new house and how's that place.
Writing Feedbackstormynick - Apr 12, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|IELTS;Children are under increasing educational, social, and financial stress
5 - In the modern society, the children undergo sever stress due to study pressure together with social and financial...
Writing Feedbackhomsai - Apr 9, 2013 / dumi - Apr 13, 2013
|Reasons for why people attending colleges or universities?
2 - ... This introduction is a bit too short. Introduce your topic with a better entrance to your essay....
Writing FeedbackPATEL RAJ - Apr 12, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|"Success is harder to accept than Failure"
Writing Feedbackacepoh - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|Art, music, and drama should be a part of curriculum
6 - ... people had different psychologies right from the beginning of evolution. So let's say this a bit differently;...
Writing FeedbackMonikamirka - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|Ielst Task 1; Describe a bar chart on trends of International and UK students
Writing Feedbackeileenalien - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|Participating in games teaches many lessons for life
Writing FeedbackJamieK - Apr 11, 2013 / JamieK - Apr 12, 2013
|IELT TASK 1: Percentage of male and female teachers
6 - .... This sentence is not well presented; As shown in the chart, the female teachers have dominated up...
Writing Feedbacknguyenanh92 - Mar 30, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|EVENT MANAGEMENT SKILLS ; LOGBOOK Entries from work placement
5 - .... by changing the order a little bit, you can improve clarity; During the last month I was...
Writing Feedbackunigirl - Apr 7, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|LIFE IN A CITY IS MUCH BETTER THAN LIFE IN THE COUNTRYSIDE/ TOEFL ESSAY
3 - To begin with, as far as i'm known that if you use "firstly", the next paragraph, you should follow...
Writing Feedbackkretoszczur - Apr 7, 2013 / xucoi - Apr 12, 2013
|"Only once one has known real sadness can one feel true happiness"
3 - I firmly believe that without having experienced true sadness, one would not really feel what true happiness is....
Writing Feedbackparthasarathy17 - Apr 5, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|Technological innovation is important / Reason
3 - These inventions have significantly contributed to better the living standards of people worldwide. For me,...
Writing Feedbackmadalyalim - Apr 5, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|TOEFL:Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends?
Writing Feedbackxuyue - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|IELTS General Writing task 1; Letter to John - making arrangements
2 - You are writing to a relative, a known party, and therefore you should show more intimacy in your...
Writing Feedbackirfanafsar - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|Do you prefer traditional house or live in apartment?
4 - ... this is not a very catchy sentence to open an essay. The sentence would be more effective...
Writing Feedbacksaeed_s_1368 - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|If I have enough money what would I do? Purchase either a house or a business? TOEFL
Writing Feedbackstudent12345 - Apr 12, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|TOEFL: Television has more bad than good in respect of bonds with family and friends
2 - What are these indirect experiences? Better specify. Good introduction! Thus,Therefore they cannot make appointment or go out with...
Writing Feedbackgospellover - Apr 11, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|The rising levels of congestion and air pollution
2 - This affects negatively on quality of life that people lead. Therefore, governments should take necessary measures to control...
Writing Feedbackassetbai - Apr 12, 2013 / dumi - Apr 12, 2013
|IELTS; Letter to the course lecturer informing my inability to continue the course
Writing Feedbackabhigeorge - Apr 11, 2013 / Dreamer84 - Apr 12, 2013
|TOEFL; Different cloths get people to behave differently. Agree or Disagree?
Writing Feedbackaria8111 - Apr 10, 2013 / student12345 - Apr 11, 2013
|TOEFL: What do you want for your major? Specific reasons & Examples
Writing Feedbackgospellover - Apr 11, 2013 / gospellover - Apr 11, 2013
|You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program
NEW - You are going to visit New Zealand for an 'English and Homestay' program. You have just received details of...
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|The advertising and the need of society, IELTS
Writing Feedbackhomsai - Apr 10, 2013 / homsai - Apr 11, 2013
|TOEFL: (Dis/agree) spend money as you earn it or not
3 - Well.... It's better you introduce your topic first and then slowly let it flow to the point of expressing...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Apr 10, 2013 / dumi - Apr 11, 2013
|Single world culture; TOEFL; the same internet, television programs and language
5 - ... this sentence does not flow well...It's a bit too long as well. In the introduction you need...
Writing Feedbackstudent12345 - Apr 9, 2013 / dumi - Apr 11, 2013
|Albert Einstein and Thomas Edison; Compare & Contrast
2 - Science and technology has contributed immensely to the development of human society. Well.... you are to compare...
Writing Feedbacksushiking - Apr 10, 2013 / dumi - Apr 10, 2013
|Internet is turning the world into a global village
5 - No.... it does not look too long. However, the most important thing is that you should be able...
Writing Feedbackbluewings1007 - Apr 6, 2013 / dumi - Apr 10, 2013
|Start work Early Morning or Work till late night? IELTS
Writing Feedbackgyal - Mar 20, 2013 / aria8111 - Apr 10, 2013
|TOEFL IBT; E-mail or Voice mail Versus Telephone or face to face
3 - Thank you so much Dumi! xD I will remember to link my sentences better next time :X You're greatest...
Writing FeedbackJangGemini - Apr 9, 2013 / JangGemini - Apr 9, 2013
|Governments or children should be responsible for old people ?
Writing FeedbackHuong nisha - Mar 13, 2013 / Huong nisha - Apr 9, 2013
|TOEFL; Keep your old friends or form new friends?
Writing Feedbackshack555 - Apr 4, 2013 / dumi - Apr 9, 2013
|IELTS: Using a computer everyday may affect children negatively
4 - ...develop skills for using computers and their applications. .... very good point. This early and over...
Writing Feedbackabhigeorge - Apr 4, 2013 / dumi - Apr 9, 2013
|In some countries it has been made illegal for people to smoke in all public places.
Writing Feedbackabhigeorge - Apr 9, 2013 / abhigeorge - Apr 9, 2013
|Are we always doing things that we enjoy? IELTS
8 - Hi georgege . a copy of Wren and Martin and start practicing your grammar. copy from whom...?????? any way...
Writing Feedbackgyal - Apr 8, 2013 / gyal - Apr 9, 2013
|IELTS; Try new things or repeat things we know?
Writing Feedbacknorza - Apr 7, 2013 / homsai - Apr 9, 2013
|TOEFL ; Businesses should only concentrate on profit making!
2 - hi aria, corrections from my side. I am providing a line by line correction so that the grammatical errors...
Writing Feedbackaria8111 - Apr 9, 2013 / abhigeorge - Apr 9, 2013
|TOEFL; Pros & cons of having presence of a large factory near our community
Writing Feedbacklpsk - Apr 8, 2013 / aria8111 - Apr 8, 2013
|The most of high-school studients haven't planned their career when they graduate
4 - Well.... follow the four para structure; Introduction, 2 body paras and Conclusion. Introduction - Introduce the topic +...
Writing FeedbackTsegi - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 8, 2013
|TOEFL; School should purchase Books or Computers for the library?
3 - ... you begin with expressing your opinion. I prefer if you introduced your prompt to the reader before...
Writing Feedbackaria8111 - Apr 8, 2013 / dumi - Apr 8, 2013
|TOEFL WRITING: Why going to university or college
5 - Homescholling In this set of materials, the reading passage describes several disadvantages of homeschooling. The listening passage challenges it...
Writing Feedbackcandy2571 - Apr 5, 2013 / ahmadpashaei - Apr 8, 2013
|Sports professionals Vs Other important Professionals; Who should earn more?
Writing FeedbackMahdavian - Mar 30, 2013 / Mahdavian - Apr 8, 2013
|What is the major benefit of an international cooperation? Correct my essay
4 - Well, you could start off by creating a thesis. Like instead of going too broad, you use four different...
Writing Feedbackkirin - Apr 17, 2009 / ryoga - Apr 7, 2013
|Skills from work placement essay; Section of a logbook
3 - can someone help me write these sentences more fluently When I first started placement last month, I feel...
Writing Feedbackunigirl - Apr 7, 2013 / unigirl - Apr 7, 2013
|Young adults should learn to become financially responsibleSECU
4 - High speed transactions and extremely easy/efficient mediums of transaction are acceptable and available everywhere nowadays high speed transactions...
Writing FeedbackLarryHoover - Apr 3, 2013 / unigirl - Apr 7, 2013
|Persuasive Essay; Aboriginal children adopted into non-Aboriginal home
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