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|Watching too much TV and violent images - essay
8 - .... watching what? .... Also, this has some grammar issues too. Watching TV too often can have many...
Writing Feedbackchauuyenbinh - Jun 27, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 7, 2013
|IELTS writing task 1_ Proportion of teachers as per gender in 6 different types
Writing Feedbackmangdoli - Jul 6, 2013 / mangdoli - Jul 7, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1; Internet Usage in Taiwan during 3 years from 1998
6 - First, make sure that you upload the chart using the feature "Attach file(s)". It's always better for you to...
Writing Feedbackhaje9alshoo8 - Jun 25, 2013 / dumi - Jul 7, 2013
|ielts task1 Japanese travel abroad
Writing Feedbackwuzhi - Jul 6, 2013 / dumi - Jul 7, 2013
|Percentage of clear differences between the national consumer expenditure of five various countries
3 - ... you are supposed to write a report. So, it's important to stay away from verbose. Simply say;...
Writing Feedbackjenny90 - Jun 26, 2013 / dumi - Jul 7, 2013
|IELTS ESSAY: IMPROVEMENTS OF THE TOURISM INDUSTRY
5 - I believe he means that your essay doesn't stand out among the applicants in the application pool. Going in...
Writing Feedbackhuyenanh1508 - Jul 6, 2013 / luky0ne - Jul 6, 2013
|IELTS; Today young people are finding it harder and harder to find permanent jobs!
11 - Much of the corrections has been made. However, I will say this I would leave out "and their...
Writing FeedbackShumaila86 - Jul 3, 2013 / kawsneffect - Jul 6, 2013
|'staying in touch' : Phones and E-mail have made communication less personal
Writing FeedbackFardin - Jul 5, 2013 / dumi - Jul 5, 2013
|Do you agree or disagree ? Advertising can tell you a lot about a country.
10 - Compared to other issues, it means almost nothing. Don't sweat it unless you're doing it for a sneaky...
Writing FeedbackFardin - Jun 29, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 5, 2013
|Some people enjoy reading novels and short stories. Others like watching movies. ?
6 - ... Well... I find there are more than one sentences here; I spend my leisure time reading books....
Writing FeedbackNaveen 54 - Jun 28, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 5, 2013
|IELTS; Every country should produce more materials and goods? Agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackbein - Jul 4, 2013 / bein - Jul 5, 2013
|IELTS Task 2: fixed punishment vs adjustable punishment. discuss
Writing Feedbackdido272000 - Jul 4, 2013 / dumi - Jul 5, 2013
|IELTS: people believe "unpaid community service should be compulsory part of shool"
2 - ... facilities does not seem to be the best word to use there; Such activities that include charity...
Writing Feedbackfred123 - Jul 4, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 4, 2013
|Ielts: Opinion on animal experimentation; Should continue!
4 - Thanks for your advice! When I was writing this essay, I couldn't think of any other way of paraphrasing...
Writing FeedbackMisterWandering - Jun 27, 2013 / MisterWandering - Jul 4, 2013
|IELTS; Paid work for children is good or bad? Discuss
10 - avoid using "thing" ==> try to use higher words: " skills, abilities" life experiences Your thoughts...
Writing Feedbackpiggiepolly - Jul 2, 2013 / ningo - Jul 4, 2013
|IELTS extinction of languages in globalization are highly considered problematic
2 - On the other hand, the language is an important aspect of one's identity. Therefore disappearance of a language...
Writing Feedbackfred123 - Jul 4, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 4, 2013
|GRE Analytic Writing; Surest indicator of a Great Nation
7 - No I don't...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Jul 2, 2013 / shadman19922 - Jul 4, 2013
|What are the negative effects of overpopulation?
5 - First, overpopulation may increase the demand for infrastructure in an alarming degree. As the population grows...
Writing Feedbackminhdang - Jul 2, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 4, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: Social behavior changes in some ways when children become adults!
Writing Feedbackbein - Jul 3, 2013 / dumi - Jul 4, 2013
|IELTS: Increase in overweight and decrease in health - Causes & Measures
2 - Introduce your topic in a more simple and interesting manner without complicating your expression. Take lots of help...
Writing Feedbacknellylovekelly - Jul 4, 2013 / dumi - Jul 4, 2013
|'growing concern'; Work or travel for a year beween high school and university
Writing Feedbackhungly0610 - Jun 30, 2013 / huyenanh1508 - Jul 4, 2013
|A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status
Writing Feedbackmsmwarren - Jun 18, 2013 / sherry manson - Jul 4, 2013
|IELTS Task II. people choose to live alone or with friends rather with their family
Writing FeedbackShumaila86 - Jun 28, 2013 / dumi - Jul 4, 2013
|students of school age should be allowed to use cellphone
2 - First, I request you to add a meaningful topic for your essay when you open a new thread (type...
Writing Feedbackminhdang - Jul 4, 2013 / dumi - Jul 4, 2013
|How overpopulation can affect society?/ Negative effects of overpopulation
Writing Feedbackhuynhquang - Jun 26, 2013 / minhdang - Jul 4, 2013
|Should school children be allowed to use cellphone?
Writing Feedbackduchuynguyen180 - Jul 3, 2013 / minhdang - Jul 4, 2013
|technology impact - we should keep the knowledge of traditional skills alive
3 - past tense of lead is led and "leaded" means; 1. (of windowpanes or a roof) Framed, covered, or...
Writing Feedbackdrodriguez_38 - Jun 16, 2013 / dumi - Jul 3, 2013
|Mother Teresa; Essay on Role Model
3 - quote=carolyn]Mother Teresa was an incredible individual thatwho showed the world many things about religion, love and compassion for mankind....
Writing Feedbackcarolyn - Jul 3, 2013 / dumi - Jul 3, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: raising the age of retirement. should or shouldn't?
5 - For me, your essay is quite good. :-D. I also have some opinions. Hope these help. "whereby = because...
Writing Feedbackbein - Jul 2, 2013 / xucoi - Jul 3, 2013
|THE DIVINE MAGIC WAND; Beliefs and thoughts
4 - I would put a comma after "direction" and combine the sentences. Then I would start the other sentence...
Writing Feedbacktemptprovidence - Jun 23, 2013 / carolyn - Jul 3, 2013
|IELTS-Fixed Punishment for each type of crime?or Consider circumstances & motivation?
5 - your grammar is good with various sentence structures. but what is the type of this essay? discussion or argument?...
Writing Feedbackorxan88 - Jul 2, 2013 / bein - Jul 3, 2013
|IELTS Task 1: The number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad between 1983 and 1992
Writing Feedbackthtm - Jun 30, 2013 / bein - Jul 3, 2013
|TOEFL ESSAY:-People learn things better from those at their own level
5 - I think you should link simple sentences by using connectors or relative clauses. your structures are quite simple with...
Writing Feedbacksubinjp - Jul 3, 2013 / bein - Jul 3, 2013
|Why most big cities are noise-polluted? Discussion
4 - ... there are lots of errors here.... grammar, vocabulary and spellings. manufacturing industry (not industrial) My advice for...
Writing Feedbacktomjerry - Jul 2, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 3, 2013
|IELTS : REWARDING EMPLOYEES WITH CASH INCETIVES -GOOD or BAD?
4 - Yes... IELTS and TOEFL needs lots of practicing. By doing so, you can improve your vocabulary, grammar and...
Writing Feedbackdieplinh131 - Jul 2, 2013 / dumi - Jul 3, 2013
|IELTS: 65 ages and over population between 1940-2040
6 - The provided line graph delineates the fluctuation about the proportion of population aged 65 and over in-between three countries-...
Writing Feedbacklady G - Jun 3, 2013 / nogonno - Jul 3, 2013
|IETLS; Discuss your views on - Born talents Vs Acquiring talents
Writing Feedbacknereide - Jul 1, 2013 / MisterWandering - Jul 2, 2013
|What makes your town attractive?
2 - .... your prompt talks about a town or city (which is different from community) and therefore you better...
Writing FeedbackMabossani - Jul 2, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 2, 2013
|Some people believe that pressures of modern life are having negative effects on fami
2 - Thanks to the development of advanced technologies, Since Socialists often blame the pressure of modern life as a...
Writing Feedbackthuytrangenglis - Jul 2, 2013 / fred123 - Jul 2, 2013
|Parents should send their children to school and let them live happily
Writing Feedbackkuz7204 - Jul 1, 2013 / dumi - Jul 2, 2013
|IELTS; Number of Heart cases of in England during four decades(1960 to 1990)
4 - The graph illustrates the statistics of people who suffered from heart diseases from the year 1960 to 1990....
Writing FeedbackShumaila86 - Jul 1, 2013 / dumi - Jul 2, 2013
|Not only families and schools job, but also the whole society, to solve students behavioral problems
2 - one reason is the education from students' families, especially their parents you can write this as only family...
Writing Feedbackpiggiepolly - Jul 1, 2013 / orxan88 - Jul 2, 2013
|IELTS essay - How can young people be made responsible drivers?
Writing Feedbackkuz7204 - Jul 1, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 1, 2013
|IELTS ; We are getting more and more greedy & selfish; Should we go back to the past?
6 - As everybody else above, I too suggest you to write simple sentences with more clarity. Don't have the habit...
Writing Feedbacksunnyback - Jun 16, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 1, 2013
|parents are the first people who show the children what they should or shouldnt
Writing Feedbackvioletkau1 - Jun 16, 2013 / Pahan - Jul 1, 2013
|IELTS : The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of ads
3 - First, you need to select "Writing Feedback" Forum for IELTS essays and make sure you open new threads in...
Writing Feedbackuhanna - Jul 1, 2013 / dumi - Jul 1, 2013
|TOEFL:How should people spend money? Personal Enjoyment or Fulfilling Duties?
3 - This essay should focus on the consequences of people "spend[ing] too much time on personal enjoyment." In other...
Writing Feedbacksubinjp - Jul 1, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jul 1, 2013
|Universities should require every student-take a variety of courses outside-course
Writing FeedbackGREASPI - Jun 30, 2013 / GREASPI - Jul 1, 2013
|Older generations consumed healthy food compared to what is consumed by people today.
2 - First, I have two requests ; Post this type of essays into "Writing Feedback" forum. Then also give a...
Writing Feedbackj0937065063 - Jun 30, 2013 / dumi - Jul 1, 2013
|IELTS; Should there be a law to get every child immunized?
Writing Feedbacksally12390 - Jun 28, 2013 / sydney5555 - Jun 30, 2013
|TOURISM and its IMPACT on our society
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jun 26, 2013 / sydney5555 - Jun 30, 2013
|IELTS; Letter to a friend - request to look after my sick dog Pooh
3 - huyenanh1508 If there wasn't you, I wouldn't know who to ask for help. this just does not sound...
Writing Feedbackhuyenanh1508 - Jun 29, 2013 / kyh8252 - Jun 30, 2013
|Difference between Two Close friends
Writing Feedbackkieulinhbs - May 29, 2013 / JangGemini - Jun 30, 2013
|IELTS- begin language learning from elementary school compared to secondary school
3 - Learning a foreign language is becoming increasingly essential in the modern globalized world. ... teaching what?...
Writing Feedbackvenise - Jun 29, 2013 / dumi - Jun 30, 2013
|IELTS- Task 1.The number of houses sold of UK in 2000
Writing Feedbackxucoi - Jun 27, 2013 / shinichi75 - Jun 30, 2013
|Children who grew up with hardships are better prepared to deal with problems; Agree?
2 - I wish you wrote this in two sentences; Personally I agree with this statement. However, I also...
Writing FeedbackMuath1987 - Jun 29, 2013 / dumi - Jun 30, 2013
|TOEFL; Integrated writing task - Team Work is the best way to handle a new project
5 - First, the reading passage claims that a team exerts a greater power than that of an individual in...
Writing Feedbacksinafrm1365 - Jun 17, 2013 / dumi - Jun 29, 2013
|Same laws should be applied to Tobacco as they are applied to Heroin
3 - Follow the outline suggested by jkjeremy. Also don't forget to support your reasons with a specific example that can...
Writing Feedbackdrodriguez_38 - Jun 16, 2013 / dumi - Jun 29, 2013
|Break after high school has advantages and disadvantages
8 - Yes.... you are right because it is the easiest way to handle this task. Considering the time factor, you...
Writing Feedbackdido272000 - Jun 11, 2013 / dumi - Jun 29, 2013
|My sister, my roommate - MY COMPARISON AND CONTRAST ESSAY
2 - My sister and i usually argue about somthing whereas my sister I wonder how she can talk consecutive over...
Writing Feedbackchauuyenbinh - Jun 29, 2013 / sally12390 - Jun 29, 2013
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