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|[IELTS] Housing shortage is the responsibility of the only government
2 - Hi, I can see you have excellent writing skills. So, I practically don't see any issue with your grammar,...
Writing Feedbackwater28190 - Mar 17, 2013 / dumi - Mar 18, 2013
|IELTS: spread of multinational companies is good or bad? Good
6 - Yes... it's a very good approach to practice with time. Never mind even if you are a little short...
Writing Feedbacksoso12_34 - Mar 16, 2013 / dumi - Mar 18, 2013
|IELTS; Computer and Internet usage in the Arab World (Charts)
4 - Firstly, your essay seems to be not long enough (150 words required). I think I will love it more...
Writing Feedbackch143 - Mar 17, 2013 / water28190 - Mar 17, 2013
|Execution of criminals; Capital punishment is necessary to control violence
Writing Feedbackmalhamed - Mar 16, 2013 / malhamed - Mar 17, 2013
|(IELTS) People in the past used to be more dependent on one another
7 - I think you did well , however , your third para is contrast to you aritcle's topic, it needs...
Writing Feedbackwilliam731 - Feb 19, 2013 / littlekid 986 - Mar 16, 2013
|toefl test The place you choose to live has a greater effect on you overall hapiness
Writing Feedbacklittlekid 986 - Mar 15, 2013 / dumi - Mar 16, 2013
|"What are your feelings about the High School Proficiency Exam (HSPE) Why?" Essay
Writing FeedbackStressedWriter - Mar 13, 2013 / StressedWriter - Mar 16, 2013
|IELTS: Music - as long as it doesn't hurt you, can improve your balance, mentally and physically
3 - nika_mt Sorry, but you should follow the IELTS structure and try to solve the main issue :Is the traditional...
Writing Feedbacknika_mt - Mar 16, 2013 / toantva509 - Mar 16, 2013
|TOEFL; Reasons why travelers visit Museums?To know about CULTURE, TRADITION & HISTORY
Writing FeedbackCamilaTobar95 - Mar 15, 2013 / dumi - Mar 16, 2013
|Should students be allowed to have cell phones in secondary and high schools?
4 - Be specific! What are they? What is the connection between this sentence and your topic sentence?...
Writing FeedbackHuong nisha - Mar 13, 2013 / Alizia - Mar 15, 2013
|Should students concentrate more on the subjects they like?
7 - Very impressive argument you have discussed. I think you can give more examples to each body paragraph to make...
Writing Feedbacksanaqvi - Mar 14, 2013 / Alizia - Mar 15, 2013
|TOEFL; Your boss needs to know your strengths for you to succeed; Do you agree?
6 - There is no denying that aquired attentions of people who has already successed in a certain field is better...
Writing Feedbacklittlekid 986 - Mar 5, 2013 / ningo - Mar 15, 2013
|Her sweater had always been her cloak of protection;Short Story thoughts and opinions
2 - Good short story. I can get a clear idea of the picture you are trying to illustrate. However, some...
Writing Feedbackcpdphilippe - Mar 14, 2013 / coljin - Mar 14, 2013
|"My emotions that I remember on a day in your life"; ARTICLE
Writing Feedbacktemptprovidence - Mar 5, 2013 / EF_Team - Mar 14, 2013
|Different cultures and ethnic groups live together in one country; GOOD or BAD?
3 - ... I think you better specify what those reasons are. Sounds vague otherwise. This situation creates...
Writing FeedbackHuong nisha - Mar 13, 2013 / dumi - Mar 14, 2013
|Is it more important to study history and literature than to study science and maths?
Writing Feedbacktsungu - Mar 6, 2013 / tsungu - Mar 14, 2013
|People are not allowed to smoke in many public places? Good rule or bad rule?
Writing Feedbacktsungu - Mar 14, 2013 / tsungu - Mar 14, 2013
|toefl essay; What do you want most in a friend? humor, intelligence, trust, modest
Writing Feedbackabcdefgh - Mar 11, 2013 / dumi - Mar 14, 2013
|GMAT AWA ; Common notion, workers are genreally apathetic about mgmt issues is false
4 - Hello, Several issues here. First of all, way too many grammatical issues here to get a top score...
Writing Feedbackabhradeephaldar - Mar 13, 2013 / admission2012 - Mar 13, 2013
|Is Death Penalty needed for our lives to be more secured and have less crimes?
Writing Feedbackorkhan - Mar 4, 2013 / dumi - Mar 13, 2013
|IELTS; ENGLISH has become a universal language for communication
Writing Feedbacksannywu - Mar 12, 2013 / sannywu - Mar 13, 2013
|Raising age limit for driving license would help reduce traffic accidents
3 - thank you very much. i follow this stucture, but i can not use my ideas effectively and i always...
Writing FeedbackBazarov - Mar 12, 2013 / Bazarov - Mar 13, 2013
|Be grateful to the people!; My life LESSON
Writing Feedbackjamesjustice - Mar 12, 2013 / dumi - Mar 12, 2013
|IELTS: Task 1 - two charts on aspects of adult education
Writing Feedbackqqshka - Mar 11, 2013 / dumi - Mar 12, 2013
|WOMEN ARE THE STRONGER SEX; Persuasive Writing
Writing Feedbackbabysnoops00 - Mar 10, 2013 / babysnoops00 - Mar 12, 2013
|Toefl essay: Work at home Vs work in office
2 - This sentence is too long... When you avoid lengthy statements, you can arrange your flow more effectively; Some...
Writing FeedbackQingye - Mar 11, 2013 / dumi - Mar 12, 2013
|BYOD (Bring Your Own Device) and Its Benefits
2 - Um, you're stating that employees bring their devices to work for corporate espionage... First of all your sentance...
Writing FeedbackJonesyBrown - Mar 12, 2013 / formenthos - Mar 12, 2013
|Extra credit & retests destroy students academic accountability? argumentative essay.
2 - The thing about arguments is, that most often they are only personal opinions. You're doing more than participating in...
Writing Feedbackash123 - Mar 11, 2013 / formenthos - Mar 12, 2013
|What are some ways to study for a test? There are several ways!
Writing FeedbackLeeana - Mar 11, 2013 / prettyboy_bn123 - Mar 12, 2013
|[IELTS] Task 2 : Competitive Sports are an important part of school curriculum!
Writing FeedbackDiamond Vu - Mar 4, 2013 / AlexChow - Mar 11, 2013
|Advertisement isn't the main reason which makes comsumers buy products unneccessarily
Writing Feedbackjaymeehuynh - Mar 10, 2013 / AlexChow - Mar 11, 2013
|IELTS task2 - job they love or job with high salary
5 - Yes... you need to have minimum 250 words for this task and this essay is slightly below that. However,...
Writing Feedbackyaya411156 - Mar 7, 2013 / dumi - Mar 11, 2013
|TOEFL: eating more vegetables, less junk food and sweet, improve your health
Writing FeedbackOcean Weng - Mar 11, 2013 / Qingye - Mar 11, 2013
|We knew that we wanted to be together
3 - Ever since I was a child, I dreamed of becoming a lawyer.[Maybe whoever's writing this can explain why?]Then I...
Writing Feedbackstephaniearella - Mar 11, 2013 / Didgeridoo - Mar 11, 2013
|IELTS T- 2 Mixing children from different social back grounds & various abilities
Writing Feedbackmhss - Mar 5, 2013 / mhss - Mar 11, 2013
|Uniform? What's the need in it? Does it help our education? No; Persuasive Essay
2 - For example, netted tights, a pretty pink cardigan and even some Doc Martens, well explain our passion...
Writing Feedbackmelissamagee - Mar 10, 2013 / dumi - Mar 11, 2013
|News Editors decide what to broadcast but they can't use their power in an efficient way
Writing FeedbackAshmara - Mar 2, 2013 / Ashmara - Mar 10, 2013
|My mom passed away; Sad emotional experience
4 - I know what you want to express. But you should more focus on your mother's death and how that...
Writing Feedbackbmaquise - Mar 5, 2013 / KYOAAA - Mar 10, 2013
|Classes and libraries always deserves much more financial support - two key elements for the quality
3 - Your introduction follows the right structure, but you need to pay attention to grammar and vocabulary. Try to...
Writing FeedbackAseaDai - Mar 10, 2013 / dumi - Mar 10, 2013
|Achilles in the Trojan War; Three character traits of Achilles of MOVIE TROY
Writing Feedbackalyssa0123 - Feb 24, 2013 / AseaDai - Mar 10, 2013
|GRE; Reliance on technology destroys the problem solving skills of people?
2 - hour is not toooo long for this... and you will certainly improve over time you essay was pretty...
Writing FeedbackWolff88 - Mar 9, 2013 / temptprovidence - Mar 10, 2013
|IELTS ; I believe that capital punishment is important to arrest the level of crimes
Writing Feedbacknazguul17 - Mar 9, 2013 / temptprovidence - Mar 10, 2013
|IELTS, Shopping as hobby positive or negative development. Explain with reasons
Writing Feedbackbanjo - Mar 9, 2013 / dumi - Mar 9, 2013
|"Heal the world"; Many meaning songs make us more proud of our country
2 - In my opinion, whether it is traditional or international, music is very important because it brings many...
Writing Feedbacktaihm - Mar 1, 2013 / dumi - Mar 9, 2013
|IELTS; Home schooling Vs Learning at schools - Which is better?
Writing Feedbackmalhamed - Mar 7, 2013 / malhamed - Mar 9, 2013
|Cheap Air travel gives ordinary people a chance, but adds to environmental problems
Writing Feedbackwendylo78 - Mar 8, 2013 / dumi - Mar 9, 2013
|To find a better job the T2 qualified people are moving to more wealthy countries - IELTS
5 - This is a well written essay. Never crossed the world limit. Strong points and connecting words and punctuation. Well...
Writing Feedbackmhss - Mar 1, 2013 / banjo - Mar 9, 2013
|TOEFL; I would purchase a house instead of a business if I have enough money!
2 - In this task, they expect you to introduce your topic in the introduction. So, don't answer to the...
Writing Feedbackfarbodsalahi - Mar 1, 2013 / dumi - Mar 9, 2013
|"keep your hands to yourself"; SAT ( keep things private?)
2 - .... this comparison is somewhat confusing... first part talks of young children and the second part does not...
Writing Feedbackemily54 - Mar 8, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|toefl - independence from parents, or living with family?
Writing Feedbackshack555 - Mar 5, 2013 / shack555 - Mar 8, 2013
|I suppose that parents are really best teachers!
4 - First, parents are the first teachers in our lives. ... now give examples; They are the people who...
Writing Feedbacktranthucbkv - Feb 28, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|Overpopulation of urban areas has lead to numerous problems.
2 - ... I suggest; The main reason is that every individual adds trash to the environment through his...
Writing FeedbackLilu Nguyen - Feb 28, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|A cultural experience that has given me the greatest satisfaction
Writing FeedbackRaghvi - Mar 8, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|TOEFL; We must admit young people in the past were more innocent
Writing Feedbacklittlekid 986 - Mar 7, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|Civilized behavior is one of the most valuable traditions of ancient Chinese good moral
5 - yes dumi, I am preparing for the Toefl test. THank you so much for suggestions and proofreading. I also...
Writing FeedbackAseaDai - Mar 6, 2013 / AseaDai - Mar 8, 2013
|In university, we can augment our knowledge; why go to university?
4 - Alright... Good to know that.... When you post your TOEFL essays mention that and also include your prompt. That...
Writing Feedbackabcdefgh - Mar 6, 2013 / dumi - Mar 8, 2013
|Vaule of Money & Hardwork: work experience
Writing Feedbackstinna11 - Feb 26, 2013 / dumi - Mar 7, 2013
|Teachers' performance should be evaluated by students; 'biased judgment'
7 - Thank you so much for your useful tips. I will revise it and post the 2nd edition, hopefully I...
Writing FeedbackFaroe - Mar 6, 2013 / Faroe - Mar 7, 2013
|IELTS, Should government pay for looking after old aged people
Writing Feedbackbanjo - Mar 7, 2013 / banjo - Mar 7, 2013
|IELTS; Alternate solution for energy crisis - Nuclear energy?
4 - Hi toant. You should split your essay into paragraphs. Follow this style Introduction --A background sentence --A...
Writing Feedbacktoantva509 - Mar 5, 2013 / banjo - Mar 7, 2013
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