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Does everyone see everything from the same perspective- SAT essay

2 - How can I rate it?! People often ask for a score, but what criteria should be used? ...

Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Sep 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
How technological development affect traditional skills and way of life in a country?

3 - thank u very much......

Writing Feedbackdrrahulsolanki - Sep 4, 2010 / drrahulsolanki - Sep 8, 2010
In our time, specialists of all kind (generalists and specialists): GRE topic

3 - Thank you so much Kevin! I promise I'll follow your directions in my essay writing. I really appreciate your...

Writing FeedbackMaxim - Sep 6, 2010 / Maxim - Sep 7, 2010
living in a house compared with in an apartment; 'scarce land resources'

3 - The work you all did here is excellent. I am happy to see you setting good examples for the...

Writing Feedbackiishine - Sep 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 7, 2010
Advertising causes unhealthy eating habits. Do you agree or disagree?

4 - Practice 10 times whenever you see a correction. In recent weeks, I have begun to think that is very...

Writing Feedbackthaitam - Sep 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 7, 2010
The extended family less important; 'not bother to contact relatives anymore'

4 - Hey, I do not think the sentences are too long. Many TOEFL writers have sentences that are too long,...

Writing Feedbackryutei133 - Sep 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 7, 2010
Now and then: the mass movement of people into the cities

11 - Oh... yes, you will have difficulty as long as you come up with ideas first and then look for...

Writing FeedbackBrandon Zhou - Sep 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 7, 2010
Climate changes is a threat to our planet, but there is not enough political pressure

2 - Your essay showed that you indeed had knowledge on global warming. But I felt that you could have talked...

Writing Feedbacksandeepkale - Sep 7, 2010 / PurpleBook - Sep 7, 2010
TOEFL--A job with more vacation time is better....& Teachers should show their...

6 - Famous writers use commas in different ways, and their uses have changed with time. My favorite approach...

Writing Feedbackryutei133 - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 6, 2010
"alcohol is the cause of most College student death" - My significant moment

3 - This has too many unnecessary details. Imagery details are great, but meaningless details like names and street addresses are...

Writing FeedbackMikey305 - Sep 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 6, 2010
IELTS essay: More stress for younger generation?

11 - Well, it could result in disaster if the method I describe is used incorrectly, but what I have in...

Writing Feedbackcathead_2307 - Aug 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 6, 2010
Comprehensive Note on ' The impossible is often the untried'

3 - Nice! Simpler really is better. It is easier for the writer and for the reader, so it enables...

Writing Feedbackasad - Sep 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 6, 2010
Past gives us preponderance experience which might be good or bad

4 - I think here is the mistake and it should be improved this way: good experience is seldom remembered...

Writing Feedbackjems007 - Sep 6, 2010 / Maxim - Sep 6, 2010
TOELF: Thomas Edison - One famous person you would like to meet

7 - Thank you for your help. I already made the list. Your corrections are not a waste of time, I...

Writing Feedbackmuroslav - Sep 3, 2010 / muroslav - Sep 6, 2010
Revolutionary / communication is better than other types of communication

2 - However, I still assert that face-to face communication is superior to other means. For example, the modern logistics...

Writing FeedbackAnnie Ma - Sep 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
Comprehensive Note on ' Flatterers get together,the devil goes for dinner'

4 - Corruption, nepotism, favoritism is are some byproducts of this evil. The flattered person loses touch with reality...

Writing Feedbackasad - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
IELTS: effects of globalization (decrease in global tension)

3 - Let's fix the clarity here: Although it has undeniably beneficial effects on the economics of the world, it also...

Writing Feedbackhaghshenas - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
Too much is spent on pets than starving people of Africa, your opinion.

3 - But because of this, do we neglect our own species across the ocean in Africa, where they do not...

Writing FeedbackAndy Nguyen - Sep 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
The advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits.

6 - I don't think irreplaceable is good here, because it implies that we want advertising to play this role......

Writing Feedbackryutei133 - Sep 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
IELTS:Giving aid to poorer countries has more negative effects than positive effect

3 - This sentence is awkward: In this world, there is no one who does not know this world 'globalization', which...

Writing Feedbackhealing80 - Sep 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
the media focuses too much on celebrity.how far do you agree?? a general paper essay

4 - Use a capital letter for the first word of a sentence: It is one of the most ... ...

Writing Feedbackyuvly - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 4, 2010
Grade is an assessment that encourages students to learn more.do you agree?

4 - Here is the way to follow the rule called 'number agreement' Keep singular with singular and plural with plural:...

Writing Feedbackdivya2010 - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 4, 2010
money either to protect arts or the environment - source of our livelihood

3 - This is a good idea for your argument. I think, though, that it should also include some mention...

Writing Feedbackdivya2010 - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 4, 2010
IELTS - the idea of talking about students behaviours.

4 - I suggest to use some specific examples to support your viewpoint in each paragraph....

Writing Feedbackjcmorais - Aug 18, 2010 / Annie Ma - Sep 4, 2010
What, in your opinion should be the main function of a university?

2 - HELLO! I moved this essay to a new thread. When you post a new essay, please start a new...

Writing Feedbackhaghshenas - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 3, 2010
"Parents should never try to be a child's "friend" - Descriptive/Narrative Essay

2 - This is a common idea. Only when you think of a very original, intriguing, or useful idea would...

Writing Feedbackrhamrick - Sep 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 3, 2010
"Being a Foreigner" - a narrative essay

5 - Hello Amal! I'll change many sentences in your essay. I hope you have time to read them aloud...

Writing Feedbackamal omar - Aug 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 2, 2010
IELTS essay: compare the advantages and disadvantages of TV,books and radio.

3 - thetre a lot of grammatical mistakes in your essay. and its spelt as although. sentences should be short n...

Writing Feedbackanhduy_tran - Aug 31, 2010 / divya2010 - Sep 2, 2010
Ielts: Study at school or get a job?

3 - Thank you so much ^^ Both of you are so kind! I'll make a correction of it XD...

Writing Feedbackreiichi - Aug 31, 2010 / reiichi - Sep 2, 2010
Influence of past achievements is necessary for making a significant contribution

2 - How is your vocabulary poor? you are writing on the meanings behind words- pioneer. I somewhat disagree that they...

Writing Feedbackershad193 - Sep 1, 2010 / meisj0n - Sep 1, 2010
IELTS TASK 1: The US's energy consumption and production

4 - The most significant rise happened in the period between around 1955 and 1972, when the Americans ' energy production...

Writing Feedbackcathead_2307 - Aug 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2010
'Change will change a person' - avoiding change essay

2 - Cutting edge refers to the most advanced technology, which exists in every era... so I think this needs...

Writing Feedbacksandeepkale - Aug 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2010
Sex Trafficking, an issue of international significance

3 - It can be from a little girl, to a grown woman, or even a teenage boy. Better not...

Writing FeedbackMiss_Swiss - Aug 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2010
TO SPEND BILLIONS OF MONEY ON THE SPACE PROGRAM? CLEP essay

6 - Yeah, I can see what a mess you are....

Writing Feedbackritu40 - Aug 28, 2010 / ershad193 - Sep 1, 2010
Does the end justify the means? - GRE issue essay.

6 - No comma necessary in that first sentence. This question is about whether a moral end justifies immoral methods....

Writing Feedbackershad193 - Aug 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2010
Originality is an identity. Every idea generated in this world is as original as its originator.

2 - I enjoyed thoroughly your discussion on originality! Some details, amoxicilline for instance, might not be easily absorbed by the...

Writing FeedbackKapayapaanify1 - Sep 1, 2010 / Shadow93 - Sep 1, 2010
Discoveries - Subject of your interest or subject good for career?

4 - when a person chooses a subject he is interested in , he will be easily engaged in it. -...

Writing Feedbackcanizarro - Aug 27, 2010 / thaitam - Sep 1, 2010
Mistakes in the tenses, could you check these sentences and their verbs?

3 - ... had already gotten ... Spent is correct. were wearing and had are correct. All verbs...

Writing FeedbackTetanya - Aug 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 31, 2010
New idea always faces contradiction desipte its reasonalbilty

4 - I think your thesis misses the point being asked in the prompt. You probably made a mistake distinguishing between...

Writing FeedbackKapayapaanify1 - Aug 29, 2010 / ershad193 - Aug 30, 2010
Essay about the importance of human needs for land and animal protection.

3 - The word "Nowadays" is not very great. It is a word people don't use very often. It might be...

Writing FeedbackAnnie Ma - Aug 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
''University is a only way lead people to success''

4 - Thanks Tina! I hope you don't mind if I offer another way, though. There are still a few mistakes....

Writing Feedbacksamac - Aug 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
The Internet - technological innovation that you think is important

3 - When you say 'many,' you have to pluralize the noun. Many innovation innovations like the computer, Internet, digital...

Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Aug 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
Peer Pressure: Recalling an Experience (Autobiographical Narrative)

3 - Often I tell people that giving the name of someone like Mr. Tomanio is an unnecessary detail. Here, it...

Writing Feedbacknicole6370 - Aug 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
Peoples behavior is impacted by Television & Movies

4 - Watching television and movies is the cheapest and fastest way to transform information and entertainment . However, TV...

Writing Feedbackthaitam - Aug 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
"parents are the best teacher of their children'' - agree or not?

7 - Secondly , parent's teaching methods regularly have strong influence on their children's behaviour, because they understand their children better...

Writing Feedbacknamtuocbonghong - Aug 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
IELTS essay: whether not teachers and doctoes should work in rural for many years

2 - Hi Cat Head, I think the writer was intending to use the word "heard" At present, it...

Writing Feedbackjszwan - Aug 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 28, 2010
The best to improve the quality of education is to increase teacher's salary

3 - Nowadays, the question of how to provide qualititve a high quality education arouses widespread attention. Increasing the...

Writing Feedbackgarywang - Aug 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 28, 2010
exciting and colorful - ielts: doing the same thing or change?

2 - "as well as" is a difficult phrase to use. It might be better this way: ...point of view and...

Writing Feedbackreiichi - Aug 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 28, 2010
Technology Gap Between Generations, Interview Essay. Am I doing this correctly?

5 - yuck. Use an apostrophe to show possession. Obviously frustrated, he exclaimed, "These darn things!", while tossing the phone...

Writing Feedbackbookerhost09 - Aug 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 28, 2010
A JOB YOU LOVE or A JOB THAT PAYS YOU WELL?

3 - I don't think it is correct to say it recently has come into public focus. It is a...

Writing Feedbackcanizarro - Aug 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 28, 2010
discuss the changes in society which have an efect on teenagers?

4 - This is the only statement you make about how changes affect teenagers, and it is not very clear....

Writing Feedbacklynaz - Aug 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 27, 2010
The most important qualities of a good supervisor (boss) - rate my essay

3 - All Employees in different work situations experience dissimilar behaviors from their bosses, but they believe that some same...

Writing Feedbackhamed6134 - Aug 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 27, 2010
What do you think are the duties of vietnamese youths nowsadays?

3 - Let's use the word "thoughtful" It's widely seen that in order to survive and improve we must be important...

Writing Feedbackthaitam - Aug 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 27, 2010
Easier cooking food deteriorates our life in aspects of: health, happy status and traditional value

6 - In modern life, everything is made more suitable for humankind. Among the things made more suitable is food, which...

Writing FeedbackSophie Tran - Aug 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 27, 2010
Positive or negative aspects of giving aid to the poorer countries: An IELTS

2 - Actually, I do think an essay of 434 words is accepted in IELTS, provided that you spend no longer...

Writing FeedbackNash - Aug 26, 2010 / cathead_2307 - Aug 27, 2010
"The study of history has value only when it is relevant to our daily life." -GRE

3 - Thank you very much Kevin! I will keep practising and I love this website very much!...

Writing Feedbackustcly - Aug 23, 2010 / ustcly - Aug 26, 2010
Cosmetic surgery - agree or disagree with this trend?

NEW - Nowadays, people try to change their life by changing their clothing styles, wearing jewelers, changing their appearances through cosmetic...

Writing Feedbackkang - Aug 26, 2010 / — -
Catostrophic earthquake in Southern Haiti: issue of international significance

5 - Well, I can tell you have a good mind for language. You can write very well. It is important,...

Writing FeedbackMiss_Swiss - Aug 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 26, 2010
human needs for framland .housing and industry are more than saving land for endan

2 - Hi Goat, I'm glad you are participating here! Do you have any questions about Eugene's corrections? Please type the...

Writing FeedbackWKPKOBE - Aug 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 26, 2010
Beach vacation are ideal for relaxing

2 - Beach vacations are ideal for relaxing. A beach has a beautiful view for relaxing. The combination of blue...

Writing Feedbackn_tina59 - Aug 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 26, 2010

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