Writing Feedback / Most people in all surveyed countries tend to spent their money on food, drinks, and tobacco [3]

The table above gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table shows the cost percentage of consuming various items in five different countries in 2002. Overall, most people in all of the five countries tend to spent their money on food, drinks, and tobacco than clothing/footwear and leisure/ education. The highest percentage of is Turkey in spending money on food, drinks, and tobacco consumption.

According to data, Turkey was the highest consumption in meals, beverage, and tobacco about 32.14 percent. Ireland, Spain Italy were above Turkey in 28.91, 18.80, and 16.36. After that, Sweden had at least percentage in consumption food, drinks, and tobacco which was 15.77 percent.

The highest consumer spending in clothing/footwear happened in Italy about 9 percent. The other five different countries had above 5 percent in those consumptions. The lowest percentage in Sweden which was 5.40 percent. In contrast, leisure/education category had under 4 percent in every different country. But the percentage of the highest consumption was 4.35 percent in Turkey and the lowest percentage was 1.98 percent in Spain.

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Writing Feedback / Happiness itself differ from one to another and it cannot be explained by words [2]

Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?

Happiness is a goal for living gained by people in many ways. Happiness itself differ from one to another and it cannot be explained by words because it comes from our feeling that we gained. It is the reason why it is too difficult to define and most of us are still trying to find out the happiness trough life.

A psychologist and author named Dr. Shefali Tsabary defined the happiness. He said that only when we fill our own need and feel satisfied from within can we truly be fulfilled and happy. In his definition, we can conclude that if someone has a desire, they make it happen successfully and gain the happiness. For instance, an artist who finished drawing a beautiful landscape feels happiness even his paint cannot sell to public. But his goal is different from others thinking of him. He wants to finish that and he will be happy. As a result, happiness which is hard to define has various goals from different people.

There are many ways to achieve happiness and everybody have different aspects in gaining happiness. Some of them will be happy if they do a little thing. In contrast, others will gain the happiness if they reach something hard as high as mount everest. For instance, i am happy when i successfully clean my entire room but, my father will be happy if he can reach the highest position in his office. So, happiness in every person can be define in different ways.

To conclude, happiness is everyone's goals and each person has many different things to get the happiness. If we satisfied in something that we reached, we can fulfil our happiness.

Writing Feedback / When a high school students graduate, most of them are encouraged to postpone their studies [2]

In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

When high school student graduated from school, most of them encouraged to postpone their studies and decided to work or travel. Taking this decision actually has many advantages and disadvantages not only for the students but also their parents. I believe that the disadvantages of postponing a year to study at university are outweigh its advantages.

Most people who graduated from high school are less of experience. They are too young to get to work or travel alone. In addition, knowledge which got in school is not enough for them to get a job. For instance, a movie which was titled 'LOL' played by Miley Cyrus. She was 18 years old when she graduated from high school, she worked and travelled a lot with her friends. To shorten the stories, she finally did not want to go to university because of the convenience whereas she just wanted to postpone a half year in the beginning. As a result, young adults in that ages are confusing and always changing minds. Parents are responsible for guiding their children and putting their children to university directly after graduated.

In contrast, deciding to work or travel before entering the university has advantages such as children can get the new experience and refresh they mind after studied almost 12 years. For instance, my friends who joined in social backpacker community learned about the geography of Indonesia almost a year before he entered university. Because of his parents' approval, he could travel around while teaching in poverty areas. When he finished travelling, he could decide the major based on his experience a year before. It can be seen that experience can teach us to cover the future.

To sum up, people have to consider the effect of deciding work or travel before continue studies in university. I suggest to ask parents before doing something because of at the age, children still need a guidance when planning something.

Writing Feedback / Which way a cargo were delivered in UK in the 28 years timeframe? [5]

The graph above shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The line graph gives the information about how much goods distributed by various types of transportation in the UK between 1974 and 2002. Overall, it can be seen that most of all kinds of transportation fluctuated but pipeline was an upward trend. Road is the most popular mode of transport among others.

In 1974, about 70 million tonnes of goods distributed by road and over the 28 years still the highest amount of goods were delivered which reached a peak at under 100. In contrast, transportation with the pipeline is the lowest among others. Started from under 10 in the first year and ended at above 20 in 2002.

Rail and water had the same starting point in delivering goods at above 40 million tonnes. From 1982 to 1994, transportation by water stabled at around 60 while rail fluctuated and bottomed at above 20 in 1994. In 2002, distribution of water is higher than rail about 65 and 40

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Writing Feedback / The concrete is processed by mixing all of the ingredients into the concrete mixer. [3]

The diagrams show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams illustrate the manufacturing process of cement and concreting cement as a source to composite other materials when building things. When processing cement, limestone and clays are used as inputs. After that, cement as an output in cement production become an input in concrete production with sand, water, and gravel.

Making cement consists of the crusher, mixer, rotating heater, and grinder as the equipment. Firstly, limestone and clay are put into crusher. Below the crusher, there is powder which is needed to make crusher whirl. Secondly, the mixture of limestone and clay through the mixer machine and get into a rotating heater. While it is rotated, fire heats the mixture. Following this, it will be demolished in grinder machine and put into the cement bags.

Concreting cement is processed by mixing all of the ingredients into the concrete mixer. 15 percent of cement is needed to create concrete cement. At the same time, sand about 25 percent and 50 percent gravel are put into concrete mixer. Afterwards, 10 percent of water is poured into all the materials. Finally, concrete mixer blend all of the materials and produce the concrete cement.

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Writing Feedback / A controversial issue about how to give the punishments to perpetrators. [3]

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime.

There is a controvercial issue about how to give the punishments to perpetrators. Some people think that every crime have to be punished in accordance to the regulations. In contrast, others believe that the consideration of the crime background is an important aspect when making a punishment. Personally, every crime that happened should be investigated before giving a judgement. Because every people deserve to get a justice

Regarding to human rights, we have to find out the motivation of criminals when commit a crime before giving a punishment. For instance, husband killed his sister-in-law when he came to her house. Due to the accident, he must get into the prison. But, when police look out the reason why he did it, they found that he has a mental illness. Automatically, He cannot get the fixed punishment based on the type of crime that he did

On the other hand, others who believe that every crime should be punished based on applicable law, did not care about themotivation of the crime. Every person who did the same crime, must be justice as a standard punishment. For instance, the penalty of the every killer who planned its murder is 20 years in prison. So, every teenagers or adults does not matter. They have to convicted in the same way

All in all, i personally think that each crime should be investigated specifically and should be punished according to the appropriate judgement. We have to consider the reason why they commit crimes because it is the human rights. However, the judgement should be held righteously.

Writing Feedback / The information about the percentage of budget allocated by a school in UK for some aspects [3]

These three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001

The pie charts give the information about outcome aspects in the one of school in the UK according in 1981, 1991, and 2001. Overall, The highest spending money was paid for teachers' salaries in the three different years. Most of the aspects fluctuated even there were an increase and decrease trends in insurance and salaries of other employees.

In 1981, The school spending money to pay teachers' salaries and resources at 40 percent and 15 percent. By the next ten years there was an increased by 10 percent and 5 percent. In 2001, the percentage went down at 45 percent and 9 percent. Payment of furniture and equipment fluctuated In 1981 and 1991 slightly from 15 percent to 5 percent but increased by 18 percent in 2001.

In contrast, in 1981 and 1991, the percentage of other workers' salaries fell by 6 percent while insurance payment rose by 1 percent. In the next decade, there was a slight decrease from 22 percent to 15 percent in salaries of other employees while insurance went up at 8 percent

Writing Feedback / Big traffic of cars makes congestion and pollution, so high petrol price is the best way to solve it [2]

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollutions problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective?

In the recent years, many people prefer to using car to travel around. It will cause the congestion and pollution so that increasing petrol price is the best way to solve those problems. I believe that way can decrease the number of cars but the are cons in our society

When the number of cars decline because of increment petrol price, inhabitants will protest to the government. Although people cannot buy the petrol, they do not have any comfortable choice to travel around the cities. For instance, increasing petrol which happened in 2015 made a confrontation from people because they cannot buy a petrol but government did not provide the feasible public transport. That is the reason why increasing petrol is not only the way to reduce the emission and congestion in many cities.

On the other hand, traffic jam and pollution can be reduced by building the public facilitation. It will be more effective than only increasing the fuels. For example, Japan has shinkansen trains which are comfortable and fast kind of vehicle. Japan's inhabitant are always using that public transport to travel them everywhere. The impact of fascinating facilities in Japan provides the people comfortable in using that facilitation. As a result, it proved that building a convenience public transportation can reduce the utilization of cars.

To sum up, increasing the fuels prices is not only way to reduce the pollution and gas emissions. Building convenience public transportation can reduce the use of cars. Inhabitants can automatically leaving their cars at home and changing their model of transportation. Hopefully, the other countries can solve their own problems with Japan as an inspiration.

Writing Feedback / Healthy food is needed by school children to provide their ability to study effectively. [2]

To learn effectively, children need to eat healthy meal at school. How true is this statement? Whose responsibility is it to provide food for school children?

Healthy food is needed by school children to provide their ability to study effectively. Because food consumption is important for children growth. The quality of food will affect children's brain. Both of parents and schools are responsible to maintain children's food every day.

School children use their brain to study at school. They spent at least six hours at school. They must eat to improve their ability to get knowledge. The ingredients of food are matters. For instance, school children need seafood and eggs to provide protein or milk to give calsium to their body or vegetables to make them more healthy. In addition, the way food is cooked become the aspect to make healthy meals. Meals which is cooked cleanly will produce a healthy food. That is the reason why healthy food can help the children learn effectively.

On the other hand, not only their parents but also schools have responsibility to serve healthy food for children. For example, in my experience, my mother always cooked the breakfast for me. But, my mother is a teacher so that she cannot make a lunch for me. That it the reason why i have to eat lunch at school. Unfortunately, my school has a canteen which usually sell the healthy food. The school headmaster always concern about the quality of children's food. That is why my mother can trust school while she cannot give me the healthy food for my consumption. So, when both parents and school concern about children food consumption, children actually will get the healthy food and because of the food, they can study effectively and accept the subject easily. As a result, the continuity of consuming healthy food will affect the long-term effectiveness in learning.

All in all, when both parents and school serve the healthy food for children, they can provide the best quality of the food and ther brain can work as the way what they want.

Writing Feedback / The level of customer satisfactory in the US when travelled with airplanes [3]

The chart and table below show customer satisfaction levels in the US with airlines and aspects of air travel in 1999, 2000, and 2007.

The bar chart show the level of satisfactory costumer in the US when travelled with airplanes and the table gives information about the percentage of satisfactory aspect in flying experience at surveys in 1999, 2000, and 2007. Overall, most of costumer was fascinated when flying with airplanes which had an upward trend by the following survey years. The reason why people attracted in flying experience was the courtesy of flight attendants

In 1999, 65 percent of correspondent was satisfied in the nation's major airlines was doing. By the next survey, the percentage increased slightly from 69 percent to 72 percent. In contrast, costumer who dissatisfied was a downward trend. Begins at 32 percent in 1999, the percentage went down gradually by 3 percent in the next survey. The last year of survey, the satisfaction levels dipped to 24 percent

The specific aspects of the experiences using airplane was a slight increase among three different years. The ability of flight attendant was the most important aspects for costumer about 92 percent. Flight schedule and courtesy of gate agents became the next important matters for costumer about 88 percent and 79 percent. Prices of tickets was a slight difference from the percentage of schedule's airplane. However, under 47 percent of costumer thought that the seat comfort made them satisfied.

Writing Feedback / Some people think that clothes are the most important aspects to indicate a personality of someone [2]

Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear

Some people think that clothes are the most important aspects to indicate the personality of what they like. But others think that we should not judge people from what they like to wear. Actually, people is using the kinds of clothes for many reasons in their daily lives. They always change the way they dress depend on the destination. So, i think we cannot judge people by the clothes that they wear

People's clothes depend on where they want to go. For instance, a lawyer always uses the formal suit every day because the purpose of what they wear is to attract their clients so that they can use their service or in different occasion they use formal suit to convince judges from client's problem. So, they wear kind of suit to get the impression of people around them

In contrast, when we meet the lawyer outside their workplace such as in the supermarket, wearing a t-shirt and bracelet in their hand, we cannot judge him as a punk because they wear it outside the work. They actually can wear everything what they like but the personality is more important than the clothes that we wear. Another example, a rock singer using black pants and tight shirt when in the stage. We cannot blame her directly as a bad person because they use it for work and we do not know her personality

All in all, there is a quote 'do not judge a book by its cover' it is the reflection of many statements above. I believe that people using clothes based on what they like and what occasion they wanted to come and it cannot be equal from people's personality

Writing Feedback / Atmosphere in a workplace - connection between a worker and his boss. [2]

The charts below show the result of surveys in 2005 and 2009 asking workers about their relationships with their supervisors and their co-workers.

The pie charts show the connection between the employees' supervisors and co-workers from survey which is held in two different years. Overall, most of employees have a very good relationship between their senior and junior in their workplace. Relationship was getting higher in 2005 and 2009.

In 2005, there was 61 percent of employees had a very good relationship with their supervisors. In the next four years survey, that relationship was stronger about 65 percent. In contrast, good and fair connection decreased by 4 percent and 2 percent. Unfortunately, from twice surveys, there was 2 percent of employees had poor relationships with their supervisors

From two different years surveys, very good relationships between employees and co-workers increased from 63 percent to 70 percent. However, there was a slight decrease in good and fair connection by 3 percent and 4 percent. In 2009, none of the employees had a poor relationship with their co-workers even they still had a fair relationship about 3 percent with their co-workers.

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Writing Feedback / The businessmen avoids to concentrate only on making money. [6]

The purpose of business is to make money and they should concentrate only on this. Do you agree or disagree?

Business is made by some people to make money for themselves and their focus only to make a profit. Personally, i totally disagree with that statement because business is the place for other people who looking for salary and the businessmen avoid to concentrate only on making money. Because business has bigger opportunity become huge companies if their focus not only on getting them rich

Businessmen have to think about the productivity of their business. Throughout the employee, business will get the optimum productivity and highest profit. For instance, businessmen provide the safety tools, average temperature of the workplace and maintain break schedule to make their employee comfortable when they are working so that they can improve their work and prove the high performance. The comfortable zone that businessmen create, will provide much cost so that they have to prepare the unplanned cost for their employee. As a result, they will get profit from employees' performance indirectly

In addition, a business which only thinks about profit did not think about the environment. They only concentrate on making the process low budget but high profit. However, they can get profit from their waste. For example, the factory has a lot of waste in their every department, the great businessmen will get the benefit from those waste and build the facility to reduce their waste. Maybe it will not make a huge profit but productivity will increase and the business can stand for along time.

To sum up, businessmen should focus not only for money but also for employee and environment. Because the productivity of business is more important than its profit. When the productivity increases, the profit will follow.

Writing Feedback / The picture illustrates the flow of air leaks and heat loss in houses [5]

The diagram below shows how heat is lost and energy wasted in a house because of air getting into and out of the house.

The picture illustrates the flow of air leaks and heat loss in houses. overall, the amount of air getting into houses is more than the amount of air out of houses. air leaking into the house from many pathways of house but air leaking out of the house only from the top of houses.

The air gets into the first floor in houses through many ways such from outdoor faucet, electrical faucet and window which is built in houses. Second floor houses have many sides from the air leaking into houses. The other places come from second floor which is window and kitchen fan vent.

After that, Air is processed around the houses and loss heated throughout the attic hatch which is located in the middle of the second floor. Bathroom releases heat from its fan vent . In addition, recessed light in bathroom and kitchen cause the heat loss in houses.

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Writing Feedback / Dealing with client as an external communication skill and listening carefully to colleagues ... [2]

The table gives the results of two surveys, in 1997 and 2006, in which people were asked which communication skills were essential in their jobs.

The table gives information about the essential communication skills in people's job through internal and external communication surveys in 1997 and 2006. Overall, the most important skill needed by people was dealing with client as an external communication skill and listening carefully with colleagues as an internal communication skill.

In 1997, the percentage of external aspect which was dealing with people at 60 percent. In the next nine years, it rose at 65 percent. Communication in knowledge of product or service and giving advice for clients was a slight increase by 6 percent and 3 percent. Only ability to sell product or service went down from 24 percent to 21 percent

In contrast, all of aspects in internal communication survey within 1997 and 2006 rose respectively. Listening to colleagues was the highest skill among other which is 47 percent in 2006. Ability to training people and persuading each other in the office went up by 5 percent among 1997 and 2006. Making speech in front of employees become the most problematic from people because only 11 percent fell the essential from others.

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Writing Feedback / These days, electronic media are commonly used by people in the world [6]

The use of electronic media has negative effects on personal relationships between people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the recent years, electronic media commonly used by people in the hemisphere. One of negative effects has shown which is personal relationship become interrupted. In my view, i extent to agree because direct communication is more important than communication which is used electronic media

Handphone is a common technology which is used by people to communicate without seeing each other.This type of indirect communication has an advantage such as we can communicate with colleagues have a distance with us. We can keep in touch with them using social media. For example, people who work far away from their family hang them life to their phone because that is the only way so that people can communicate with family or colleagues from distance.

On the other hand, using handphone usually make people less aware of people around them. Feeling happy with their own world through their handphone. Because of handing the gadget, they can forget people around them. For instance, people who come to the mall for little reunion with friends, ending to talk with their handphone and do not talk to each other. That is the reason why electronic media can ruin our relationship with others. As a result, Because of high technology attraction, people become uncared with their surroundings.

In conclusion, it is true that electronic media can take care of relationship among colleagues in distance. However, the negative effect of using electronic media is more problematic. I suggest to using the electronic media wisely so that we can divide time for people around us.