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|Common App significant experience:moving to America
Undergraduateebby2010 - Oct 19, 2009 / ebby2010 - Oct 20, 2009
|Want to get help on my Common Application Essay: an experience
UndergraduateBrezeck - Oct 20, 2009 / Brezeck - Oct 20, 2009
|'strong and critical mind' - Brown supplement-why does Brown appeal to me.
7 - Thank you, Stephen! I'll probably post my answer to the same prompt as well as another in the...
Undergraduatelmy125 - Oct 20, 2009 / dramacratic - Oct 20, 2009
|Common App Short Answer Green Team!
6 - Much better....
Undergraduatecvh2010 - Oct 20, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 20, 2009
|Common App. - extracurricular activity - football - I love this game
9 - Much better, and I think that all the comments from everybody helped. You're on the right track now....
Undergraduatelmacdaddy88 - Oct 19, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 20, 2009
|Michigan Setback Essay - Irritable Bowel Syndrome
5 - The vocabulary issue was identified. That was what I noticed first. Always use words you normally use while you're...
Undergraduateqyuiosilent - Oct 18, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 20, 2009
|'Jay Gatsby's poverty' - Common App Personal essay: character from fiction
2 - Outstanding! You've answered the prompt very well, applying it eloquently to your self. There are a few errors....
Undergraduatevronpolin - Oct 20, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 20, 2009
|University of Florida: Undergraduate essay on life experience
13 - Okay, I'm hesitant, but I think I'm almost done. Thanks guys, and thanks in advance for any insight on...
Undergraduatedaniamxg - Oct 17, 2009 / daniamxg - Oct 20, 2009
|UW MADISON- how will your presence enrich our community?
Undergraduatemabdul - Oct 17, 2009 / mabdul - Oct 20, 2009
|common app essay- topic of your choice- "Rock Around the Clock"
2 - quick fyi: there is no proof that Galileo actually dropped things from the leaning tower. he actually rolled spheres...
Undergraduateikiz - Oct 19, 2009 / klk - Oct 20, 2009
|Why do i want to join" Teach for India?
3 - Thaks!...
Undergraduateruchika kumari - Oct 20, 2009 / ruchika kumari - Oct 20, 2009
|UF essay: there are only few organisations that strive to better this world
2 - Your essay drifts from past to present and back too often. Pick a tense and stick with it. The...
Undergraduateellab1363 - Oct 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 20, 2009
|Language has always intrigued me; UCF Why UCF? and Unique characteristics
Undergraduatecollegen00b - Oct 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 20, 2009
|It was hard to believe and admit the loss - robotics Common app prompt #1
2 - I have a question before I start reading it. From you first paragraph I can say that you most...
Undergraduatejinu9104 - Oct 20, 2009 / prompter - Oct 20, 2009
|"educational interests and goals" - U of Minnesota essay
3 - Thank you! I tried to connect those points together. How my backgroud endowed me important traits and then...
Undergraduatecatherineding - Oct 19, 2009 / catherineding - Oct 20, 2009
|'Building a Robot' - common app essay - significant achievement
Undergraduatejinu9104 - Oct 19, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 20, 2009
|Common Application Short Response: How SGA is my favorite activity!
4 - anyone......
Undergraduateomarxcore - Oct 19, 2009 / omarxcore - Oct 20, 2009
|"Speak Up" - college essay. NEEDS REVISIONS
6 - hey! I enjoyed ur essay cuz i had similar experiences and standing up for ur own cause is really...
Undergraduatestopdropandroll - Oct 6, 2009 / lefx - Oct 20, 2009
|uc essay #1 describing world i came from
3 - Here's what I think you should change in your last paragraph. My introvert personality shaped my world of...
Undergraduateshy1 - Oct 18, 2009 / herb107 - Oct 20, 2009
|Kinds of family do you want- a large family or a small one
Undergraduatevothiha - Oct 1, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 20, 2009
|Common App Essay: What I learned playing piano at a nursing home.
5 - Thank you all for this advice! I've added information about research that Dr. Oliver Sacks has done, fixed my...
Undergraduatenadabatu - Jul 19, 2009 / nadabatu - Oct 19, 2009
|MIT Aspirations Essay?
2 - "ven early on it had always seemed predetermined that the duration of my life would be spent in mathematics....
Undergraduatevcolts18 - Oct 19, 2009 / ebby2010 - Oct 19, 2009
|Fortification - Rice Supplement Essay
Undergraduatesv6554 - Oct 18, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 19, 2009
|Brown Supplement:what don't you know.DREAM SCHOOL!
8 - The essay is a good one, and the comments are very helpful. Try reading it aloud. You'll hear...
Undergraduatelmy125 - Oct 19, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 19, 2009
|'Papua New Guinean-born Filipino-Nigerian' - U of M Short Answer - Diversity
10 - xlcyx you have to click on new thread then copy and paste your document into the text box then...
Undergraduateemjay1264jr - Oct 18, 2009 / emjay1264jr - Oct 19, 2009
|I am a devout Muslim, but it was not always that way... University of Chicago Extended Essay
7 - It seems pretty solid overall. Some things to look out for are verb tense agreement and contractions. For example,...
Undergraduateebby2010 - Oct 18, 2009 / stopdropandroll - Oct 19, 2009
|"Diversity makes us a better university for learning, for teaching, and for conducting research."
5 - Here's my second try. I'm having a hard time answering both parts of the prompt sufficiently in so little...
UndergraduateDylanH - Oct 5, 2009 / DylanH - Oct 19, 2009
|quantum mechanics - Why does Brown interest me?
14 - the essay is well written, but it doesn't really answer the prompt. The purpose of these kind of prompts...
Undergraduateyoungjoony - Sep 3, 2009 / ebby2010 - Oct 19, 2009
|Essay :Choose one of your community, employment, or extracurricular, experiences
Undergraduatebulgakov - Oct 18, 2009 / bulgakov - Oct 19, 2009
|Stanford short answer. My favorite books, Spending my summers riding and JFK
UndergraduateCollegehopefull - Oct 18, 2009 / tsunami - Oct 19, 2009
|"I have traveled to many places" - UC Application Essay Prompt 2
Undergraduatetsunami - Oct 18, 2009 / tsunami - Oct 19, 2009
|I brought Kiara into my family: UF ESSAY
3 - The beginning of your essay is not strong enough (just as Imy125 had said). I think if you developed...
UndergraduateJpaz330 - Oct 18, 2009 / ellab1363 - Oct 19, 2009
|"My IB career" - UF Admissions Essay
Undergraduatedahpongliu - Oct 19, 2009 / joshgesa - Oct 19, 2009
|MIT Essay - Fun Activity
Undergraduate2010szhou - Sep 20, 2009 / thatkidjosh - Oct 19, 2009
|Italian Studies - Why Brown short answer! (1000 char)
Undergraduatesammiepuddle - Oct 18, 2009 / daniamxg - Oct 19, 2009
|'Live music' - Common app short answer - piano
Undergraduatesammiepuddle - Oct 18, 2009 / sammiepuddle - Oct 19, 2009
|Common App Essay - Topic of Choice - "Gateway to knowledge, highway to hell"
Undergraduatesupermodella - Oct 17, 2009 / supermodella - Oct 19, 2009
|" volunteered in a kindergarten" - Common Application short essay
10 - EF_Stephen You're right! Reading it out loud sounds awkward! Sometimes just feel not fluent enough.I am gonna to...
Undergraduatecatherineding - Oct 18, 2009 / catherineding - Oct 19, 2009
|'High Heels award' - Personal essay for UCLA(Transfer to film major)
Undergraduatelxhtin - Oct 17, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 19, 2009
|Adult returning to school... review/critique this very ROUGH draft?
8 - Hey Eric, Thanks so much for this!! It was exactly what I was looking for in regards to criticism...
Undergraduateboosted_347 - Oct 15, 2009 / boosted_347 - Oct 19, 2009
|richmond supplement: out of the comfort zone- comments appreciated
2 - This is basically a good essay and and an interesting one, too. But it needs more paragraphs (break...
Undergraduateariel0812 - Oct 19, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 19, 2009
|"The Reason We Trust", "Cured" - my two personal essays for common app
2 - These are both very good essays. The first one is the stronger of the two. The dialogue I'm guessing...
Undergraduatemiffy2002 - Oct 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 19, 2009
|Carleton college short answer: teacher who most influenced you.
2 - Before getting into the grammar, which needs a lot of work, let's look at the content. Tou speak about...
Undergraduatelinhexi - Oct 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 19, 2009
|"How reoccurring nightmares helped me choose Psychology as a major"- UF Prompt
2 - Not bad. The television metaphor you use in your introduction doesn't really work, though. For one thing, ...
Undergraduatemusicloverabby - Oct 17, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 19, 2009
|"experienced a lot of new things" - Common Application.
2 - Admissions essays should say something good about you. This doesn't, really, except that you like to procrastinate, and know...
UndergraduateGHS2UChicago - Oct 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 19, 2009
|'Music based on Math' - Stanford essay: intellectually engaging experience
4 - Thanks a lot for the responses guys....I'm gonna structure it a bit more and come back with a new,...
Undergraduatelonestranger - Oct 17, 2009 / lonestranger - Oct 19, 2009
|Common App 150 word short answer, My Favorite Sport
6 - Try to show your passion. Not the sport itself. The reader knows how the game works. But dont worry....
Undergraduatenike t - Oct 17, 2009 / youngjoony - Oct 19, 2009
|'Not afraid of challenges' - Duke engineering why essay
3 - "For me, there are both individual and social purposes of education: one is to gain knowledge to enrich myself,...
Undergraduateikiz - Oct 17, 2009 / youngjoony - Oct 19, 2009
|Computer Science usage - Help with Carnegie essay prompt
Undergraduateprompter - Oct 18, 2009 / prompter - Oct 19, 2009
|"we are both geniuses" - U of M Essay (3rd option)
5 - I think your writing carefully and you have your own understandin about biology. Which is good~~ I chose to...
Undergraduateemjay1264jr - Oct 18, 2009 / miffy2002 - Oct 19, 2009
|"that this is the lowest price" - my short essay of the common app
4 - Maybe the common is using this topic to ask you an activity that is important for us, not only...
UndergraduateMrJ - Oct 18, 2009 / zealzou - Oct 19, 2009
|I still don't know, what who I want to become
6 - I completely agree with Tsunami! For one, just take out "type of" in the first line. It makes it...
Undergraduatesnow153 - Oct 15, 2009 / gongan - Oct 19, 2009
|"In my hands, I held a jar of flames" (U of I admission essay)
8 - Do you think if I added a paragraph describing what I want out of my college education in between...
Undergraduatebuglady - Sep 24, 2009 / buglady - Oct 18, 2009
|"i need to get out of this bubble"...MSU undergrad essay
4 - its funny i just covered passive voice in my writing class...guess this is why i didn't do so great...
Undergraduaterrayyan6 - Oct 18, 2009 / rrayyan6 - Oct 18, 2009
|"underestimating" - Common Application short answer. 150 words or less....
12 - EF_Stephen lol, THANK YOU! that word would most likely to be used in any of my essays, since it's...
UndergraduateGHS2UChicago - Oct 18, 2009 / GHS2UChicago - Oct 18, 2009
|"the Renewal Foundation" - MIT Creativity Essay
Undergraduateanniebiotic - Oct 18, 2009 / MakeAnImpact97 - Oct 18, 2009
|A fresh palette full of oil colors ; U of I (Career Aspirations - Visual Arts)
2 - I like it! This is what they are looking for. No university or scholarship committee wants to know what...
UndergraduateMojoRising - Oct 18, 2009 / MakeAnImpact97 - Oct 18, 2009
|Sarcastic Common Application Essay
7 - Hi, Ok, I understand your style and your intention. It would be better if you can improve the...
Undergraduatebob92 - Oct 18, 2009 / qyuiosilent - Oct 18, 2009
|"leaving the gym after a solid workout" - common app short answer critique
4 - I think that your updated version more closely resembles your second essay (just on observation). You have struck a...
Undergraduateeric412 - Oct 18, 2009 / supadupaman7 - Oct 18, 2009
|"Benny? Benny?! Where are you?" (Rutgers essay appl.)
Undergraduatevlatski - Oct 3, 2009 / rrayyan6 - Oct 18, 2009
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