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|IELTS General writing task II:Advantages and disadvantages of using mobile phones
9 - .... wrong grammar :( On one hand, mobile phone is a very beneficial communication solution for modern lifestyle....
Writing Feedbackdeyangsh - Feb 17, 2014 / dumi - Feb 18, 2014
|IELTS task2 : People reluctant to changes. What are the issues and possible solutions?
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 29, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 17, 2014
|I live in a country where poverty is a massive problem, and the lack of resources is very common
3 - There are some unacceptable spelling errors such as "First of all", "project". My suggestion is always to proofread after...
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 17, 2014 / Alison - Feb 17, 2014
|TOEFL :Technology designed to make people's lives simpler often make them more complicated
Writing Feedbackkrnjeong - Feb 17, 2014 / krnjeong - Feb 17, 2014
|Responsibility of both visitors and the host to respect culture differences
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 6, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 17, 2014
|Higher salaries, risky job is better; 'people are motivated by their distress'
5 - First, open your threads for TOEFL essays in Writing Feedback forum. This has been transferred from Undergraduate to Writing...
Writing Feedbackmassiekur - Feb 17, 2014 / dumi - Feb 17, 2014
|TOEFL, It is impossible to be completely honest with friends.
5 - In many instances, people tend to lie to their friends in view of not hurting them by telling...
Writing Feedbackkihong3625 - Feb 9, 2014 / dumi - Feb 17, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: DISTANCE EDUCATION AND CLASSROOM-BASED EDUCATION
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 16, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 17, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Male and female number in University (re-write)
5 - In this sentence try to make link before describe about requirement (high school report and university early examination)....
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 16, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 17, 2014
|Modern parents are more devoted to their children's education than parents in the past.
4 - Yes, you should have included the prompt of the essay so that we can have a better understanding about...
Writing Feedbackkrnjeong - Feb 16, 2014 / dumi - Feb 17, 2014
|IETLT Task I : Spending leisure time by young individuals and couples
12 - if I omitted "are" means that no verbs the main clause, but I agree with your second correction....
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 11, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 17, 2014
|Toefl - Government should spend money for developing ICT or meeting basic needs of people?
5 - sandipsinh: Thirdly, many countries of the world are trying to combat low - employment problem and impacted population of...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 14, 2014 / aldebaran - Feb 16, 2014
|Toefl-Government's attention should be on ICT development or Meeting basic needs of people
4 - My Gratitude to u guys, Ill keep on practicing so that i could able to write effectively in time....
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 14, 2014 / sandipsinh - Feb 16, 2014
|TOEFL: Which makes more impact on happiness? Job or social life?
6 - Your writing is good. I enjoy reading it. However, it takes many words. When facing the exam, I think...
Writing Feedbackmassiekur - Feb 10, 2014 / eddies - Feb 16, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: RICH NATION HELP POOR TO ESTABLISH HEALTH, EDUCATION AND TRADE AREAS
6 - some countries. When you use the negated verb(s) or a negative meaning such as decline or refuse,...
Writing Feedbacksabakhai - Feb 13, 2014 / eddies - Feb 16, 2014
|My Flight to The U.S.A
6 - In a while, the pilot greeted us and made his anouncement "Good afternoon ladies and gentlemen! this is...
Writing Feedbackrashs - Feb 15, 2014 / dumi - Feb 16, 2014
|TOEFL-AD. Television has had a greater effect on people's lives than the telephone has.
Writing FeedbackCassieM - Feb 14, 2014 / CassieM - Feb 16, 2014
|Vulnerable social groups like youth and elders need social welfare system - IELTS
5 - This is pretty confusing and fails to convey your idea to the reader clearly :( Second, the old...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 15, 2014 / dumi - Feb 16, 2014
|toefl - governments should spend more money improving on roads or public transportation?
3 - Ok, let's see what mistakes you have done in this intro- 1. You have not introduced your prompt...
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 15, 2014 / dumi - Feb 16, 2014
|[ESSAY]: INDUSTRIALIZED NATIONS AND THE DUTY FOR GLOBAL WARMING. AGREE OR NOT ?
6 - hi initially it is really great task and you support it with detailed scientific data introduction thesis sentence is...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Feb 15, 2014 / orthofracture - Feb 16, 2014
|Having a trip with a tour leader definitely helps the one to enjoy his trip in the best way
5 - If you use paired conjunctions, like not only but also in the first of the sentence, generally the...
Writing Feedbackentezarifateme - Feb 10, 2014 / eddies - Feb 15, 2014
|IELTS task 2: kindly check my introductory paragraph (hook, etc)
6 - Thank you for all contributors and our moderator for the thoughtful feedback. I get much help for my writing,...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 14, 2014 / eddies - Feb 15, 2014
|IELTS Task I : Coastal Villange changing (Map Description)
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 15, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 15, 2014
|toefl: Learning with a teacher is more efficient than by myself.
5 - Not sure about this: It gives you a chance to concentrate on what you learn causebecause there is no...
Writing Feedbackodon - Feb 14, 2014 / aldebaran - Feb 15, 2014
|Capital Punishment Essay Introduction
4 - Well, this thread should have been opened in Writing Feedback forum (transfered from Essay term paper to Writing Feedback)....
Writing Feedbackscowan99 - Feb 3, 2014 / dumi - Feb 15, 2014
|Renewable sources of energy (sun, water, wind) will soon replace fossil fuels
Writing FeedbackGabriella - Feb 15, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 15, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Joint family versus Independent family
5 - in this part, i recommend you to use more advanced vocabulary. You could write and develop your essay...
Writing Feedbacksabakhai - Feb 14, 2014 / agi - Feb 15, 2014
|Some people think that cars should be banned from large cities. Do you agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 11, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 15, 2014
|evaluating argument : arranged marriage
2 - Most often parents are the initiators of these types of marriages, although other family members and friends may also...
Writing Feedbacklisa93 - Feb 13, 2014 / dumi - Feb 15, 2014
|IELTS TAsk 1 : Small fishing village become European tourist resort (Picture)
3 - .... you need to mention about the tourist resort because it may mean a little different from a...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 14, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 15, 2014
|toefl - what are the qualities of a good neighbor? 'friendly and trustworthy'
6 - Thanks for your appreciation :) Yes, this forum is a great platform for collaboration. We all help each other...
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 14, 2014 / dumi - Feb 14, 2014
|a short essay describing yourself as a person
Writing Feedbackhopeanngroff - Feb 13, 2014 / dumi - Feb 14, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Electronic calculators should not be allowed in school
3 - ... well this sentence is pretty confusing :( You need to express your ideas clearly and completely. The...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 4, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 14, 2014
|Disenfranchising women voters
6 - In this modern age of 21st century, nations can never think of development without equal contribution of both...
Writing FeedbackAlexx - Jan 25, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 14, 2014
|Solutions to improve public health.
6 - Thank you so much for your comments, will concentrate on the point you mentioned going further....
Writing FeedbackAbi90 - Feb 12, 2014 / Abi90 - Feb 14, 2014
|John Diefenbaker A Legendary Man Biography Essay
Writing FeedbackQammer - Jan 6, 2014 / dumi - Feb 13, 2014
|TOEFL: Professors should do more research or teach students?
Writing Feedbacknotusramone - Feb 9, 2014 / notusramone - Feb 13, 2014
|"pen and paper" examinations and your view.
Writing Feedbacktuanvn - Jan 5, 2014 / dumi - Feb 13, 2014
|Hydro-electric power generation
Writing Feedbackanhpham89 - Feb 13, 2014 / anhpham89 - Feb 13, 2014
|The ocean is much like a woman; Descriptive piece about the ocean- 10 high level English
3 - Hi, This essay should have been opened in Writing Feedback forum which is the most appropriate forum for this...
Writing Feedbackvictoriarichtst - Jan 29, 2014 / dumi - Feb 13, 2014
|Winter Carnival Queen Scholarship Pageant Essay
Writing Feedbackraya1001 - Feb 12, 2014 / dreamer7 - Feb 12, 2014
|Child is like a piece of white paper available for anything to be written on
2 - Better you do not narrow down the scope of your prompt which talks about "foreign languages" in a...
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 12, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 12, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : School attendance in the UK in 2007
7 - I would have written: The pie chart given elucidates information on reasons why British pupils are absent at school...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 12, 2014 / Meyfam70 - Feb 12, 2014
|IELTS equal numbers of male and female students; equality is not always possible
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 11, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Feb 12, 2014
|Agree or disagree with the following statement? Face-to-face Communication is better?
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 8, 2014 / sandipsinh - Feb 11, 2014
|Best way to solve growing traffic & pollution; 'consumption policy development'
8 - abnous81 this essay is too wordy. it has many not necessary word that does not support main idea;...
Writing Feedbackabnous81 - Feb 8, 2014 / agi - Feb 11, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Some people fail on their school but achieve success in their adult
3 - This idea you have presented in a more complicated manner which is not very good. The reader needs...
Writing Feedbacksweetstar - Feb 10, 2014 / dumi - Feb 11, 2014
|IELTS Task : Provide a free mobile phone and free access to find jobs
4 - From Paragraph 1: This is good as the paraphrased statement from the question, but you should pay...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 11, 2014 / eddies - Feb 11, 2014
|spend as much money as possible exploring outer space vs basic needs on Earth - TOEFL
3 - I Pahan, I really appreciate your comment. As you said, time is important and I am trying work on...
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 10, 2014 / aldebaran - Feb 10, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: unpaid community service makes children kind and unselfish
3 - Well, the children are not only taught everything about Pythagorean Theorem, but there are so many other theorems...
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Feb 10, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 10, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TAKE A YEAR OFF BETWEEN HIGH SCHOOL AND UNIVERSITY
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 9, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 10, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Accepting Change Vs Resisting Change
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 4, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 10, 2014
|IELTS Writing task II: discussion about children's ill behavior
5 - Hi Dumi I tried to rewrite my intro with your suggestion, how do you think about it? Thank you...
Writing Feedbackdeyangsh - Feb 9, 2014 / deyangsh - Feb 10, 2014
|Loneliness is a complex and usually unpleasant emotional response
5 - Pahan Yup i understand what you mean. I did not write that sentence based on logical thinking but it...
Writing Feedbackyuvan32 - Feb 7, 2014 / yuvan32 - Feb 10, 2014
|IELTS Writing: government should spend more money on public services
6 - Pay attention to your essay structure and follow the suggestion provided by Pahan regarding that. .... wrong...
Writing Feedbackvz33 - Jan 20, 2014 / dumi - Feb 10, 2014
|The reasons why friendships sometimes die
6 - I agree with eddies. I too have no experience in assessing your writing. I only can help you with...
Writing Feedbackhaizzz1994 - Feb 8, 2014 / dumi - Feb 10, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1: BAR CHARTS- Married and Divorced in the USA
8 - hello pahan, i totally agree with you, i do want to describe more detail about the downward trend of...
Writing Feedbackleoking - Feb 8, 2014 / leoking - Feb 10, 2014
|Why or why not should high schools require hours of community work? GOVERNORS SCHOOL
6 - Young people under the age of 18 are the best candidates to volunteer in the community because they...
Writing Feedbackmishal_horan - Jan 6, 2014 / halleybachelor - Feb 9, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Non-exam subject that should be compulsory in curriculum
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 30, 2014 / halleybachelor - Feb 9, 2014
|IELTS: Art subject can be accepted as compulsory subject if it brings positive role for students
4 - This sentence is too very long and disturbs the clarity of your ideas. Do not write long sentences....
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 30, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 9, 2014
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