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|IELTS: people's weight has increased, levels of health decreased; Solusions
7 - Well, I feel you need to get hold of a strong essay structure that helps you include all essential...
Writing FeedbackNamMon - Mar 22, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 31, 2014
|IELTS; Fish and Meat consumption in European country between 1979 and 2004
5 - The graph illustrates the different needs for fish and somekindsthree types of meat in a European country between 1979...
Writing Feedbackthuylinh - Mar 18, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 31, 2014
|It's better to enjoy your money save it for the future? Family-Fixed Income
Writing Feedbackaisha2014 - Mar 18, 2014 / eddies - Mar 31, 2014
|Should wealthy nations be required to share among poorer; education and food - government
7 - You need to consider other sides of the argument and say why they're wrong not just state your own...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 28, 2014 / collegebound28 - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS Essay: teachers lesson vs other sources; 'one click of a button'
3 - Bad grammar. You may use these: alternative sources of information or alternative information sources or other secondary...
Writing Feedbackzztrieuman - Mar 30, 2014 / eddies - Mar 30, 2014
|Relying more on technology to solve problems let human ability deteriorate.
Writing Feedbackpedramcontrol - Mar 30, 2014 / niesaysi - Mar 30, 2014
|Persuasive essay on banning schoolies forever
Writing Feedbackirasa_lafi - Mar 6, 2014 / irasa_lafi - Mar 30, 2014
|money as a cause of happiness; the important necessity in human life
Writing FeedbackNhasir Rahmatia - Mar 29, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 30, 2014
|ToEFL EVALUTION - government money grant for arts or enviornment safety.
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|Commonly understood; Game are as important for adults as they are for children.
6 - Yes, actually the most important part in the intro is the background. It is the skeleton and other...
Writing Feedbackidok - Mar 27, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS: best way to improve public health; lack of exercise
7 - Did you miss "this" between "that" and "should"??? I think you should not use some meaningless...
Writing Feedbackpuman - Mar 20, 2014 / zztrieuman - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS: Japanese tourists in Australia - numbers went from 0% to 6%
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Mar 29, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS: Energy consumption by fuel in the USA (1980-2030) nuclear, solar, wind, hydro power
Writing Feedbackpuman - Mar 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|Toefl evalution - STAYING IN A PLACE WHERE SEASON CHANGE OR IN A PLACE WHERE IT DO NOT.
3 - I quite agree with Pahan. This is something we often notice here in IELTS and TOEFL essays. Students tend...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS: Boys and Girls leisure activities; computer games, netball, basketball
5 - A closer look at the counterpartboys show thatwhile coming second 17 percent of boysthemenjoys Basketball. theThe highest percentage of...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|I prefer to live in small town, big city is terrible and have much pollution
Writing Feedbackridwan - Mar 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS: Popular events are essential; world sport events provide positive waves
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Mar 29, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|Older people lived with their children - multifarious Nursing Home Advantages
2 - Logon to EF On the new screen that opens up, under the LOGO "EssayForum", Find and select your essay...
Writing Feedbackjassi - Mar 30, 2014 / eddies - Mar 30, 2014
|Early children formal education - kids need to play making them happy
4 - Hallo brother. i want to comment your writing. i think, your grammar is good. But, you forget put article...
Writing Feedbackkukuh - Mar 29, 2014 / ridwan - Mar 30, 2014
|food security / sustainability assignment; scenario
2 - An interesting way to look at this might be to look into urban agriculture; people in cities are looking...
Writing Feedbackfeversome - Mar 26, 2014 / collegebound28 - Mar 29, 2014
|IELTS: Why study at formal educations is so important? for diploma and better future.
Writing FeedbackSigit_EngLearn - Mar 28, 2014 / Sigit_EngLearn - Mar 29, 2014
|I am inclined to believe that the TV advertisements which are directing to youngs should be banned
3 - Logon to EF On the new screen that opens up, under the LOGO "EssayForum", Find and select your essay...
Writing FeedbackKamranKhan - Mar 12, 2014 / eddies - Mar 29, 2014
|IELTS: age percentage of people in Yemen and Italy between 2000 and 2050
Writing Feedbackpuman - Mar 21, 2014 / puman - Mar 28, 2014
|Analysis of a questionnaire on kids activities - IELTS writing task 1 sample: Pie Graph
Writing Feedbackchichiua - Mar 14, 2014 / chichiua - Mar 28, 2014
|small town vs big city - pros and cons
4 - Small towns and big citycities have very different environmentsthat it is very different. The big city hasis subject to...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Mar 27, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 28, 2014
|IELTS: The same money for sport activities or libraries? They assemble money from learner
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Mar 26, 2014 / eddies - Mar 28, 2014
|IELTS: Main reason for study; different age groups; employer support
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 27, 2014 / eddies - Mar 28, 2014
|IELTS: Studying at university to be successful? Yes, but it is not main decisive element.
6 - Maybe your sentence was not clear and the moderator replaced it with a more meaningful one. Anyway, the...
Writing FeedbackLinh Hoang - Mar 25, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 27, 2014
|food from restaurants or from home - it doesn't matter; food just must have good nutrition
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Mar 26, 2014 / ernhy - Mar 27, 2014
|IELTS; The ability of students in the areas of literacy and numeracy have declined
15 - Topic: Many people believe that the ability of students in the areas of literacy and numeracy have declined...
Writing Feedbackkobehstan - Mar 15, 2014 / eddies - Mar 27, 2014
|Eassy For Toefl: computer for students vs books for library
Writing Feedbackjon_snow - Mar 7, 2014 / sntinn - Mar 27, 2014
|IELTS: Who concerns issues more? Young people or elderly people?; equally concerned
NEW - Young people are much more aware of and concerned about issues like the environment, poverty, and animal welfare than...
Writing Feedbackcrystal941 - Mar 27, 2014 / — -
|IELTS: High price of petrol as sollution the traffic and pollution;the Nederland
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 26, 2014 / crystal941 - Mar 27, 2014
|IELTS International sporting games are essential in releasing patriotic emotions; safe way
2 - Sports unite peoples from different corners of the world. (Hook) For some people, sport events heighten...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 25, 2014 / eddies - Mar 27, 2014
|Traditional and International - Why do we need music? 'essence of individuals and society'
3 - From the beginning of civilisationcivilization music was one of the most fundairtentalfundamentalpartsaspects of our society. Every one listen to...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 26, 2014 / dumi - Mar 27, 2014
|Toefl essay - CELEBRITY OR ATHLETE - WHOM DO YOU WANT TO MEET AND WHY?
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 26, 2014 / dumi - Mar 27, 2014
|IELTS: Expenditure on fast food by Income groups in UK; hamburger and pizza
6 - The bar chart compares the expenditure of three income groups of Britain on three types of fast foods...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 23, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 27, 2014
|IELTS: International imprisonment level report; 'USA recorded the top notch level rate'
5 - ...Thank you for the correction, andial :D. I should be more careful to choose appropriate word...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 22, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 27, 2014
|It is better to have a broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one
6 - ramshah... please consider eddies' analyses regarding your essay. I think that your statement ... gain a...
Writing Feedbackramshah - Mar 26, 2014 / andial - Mar 26, 2014
|IELTS exam; changes to the educational system; good & bad effects
3 - I feel this sentence is incomplete, disrupting the free flow of the ideas in this paragraph. ...
Writing Feedbackgoraya - Mar 26, 2014 / eddies - Mar 26, 2014
|IELTS: Studying in univ. or finding a job? High education prospects a successful career
5 - High education and higher education do not have similar meanings. Higher education means education beyond high school such...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 26, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 26, 2014
|price of petrol vs traffic & pollution - temporary solution
3 - In my opinion, the hike of petrol's price has various effects to people. Spelling: sollution (solution)...
Writing FeedbackLinh Hoang - Mar 26, 2014 / niesaysi - Mar 26, 2014
|TOEFL evalution -PEOPLE LEARN THINGS FROM LISTENING OTHER, SELF- EXPERIENCE, READING.
3 - this essay is not good in organization. You need 3 paragraphs, each paragraph has: Thesis, detail, concusion. hey...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 25, 2014 / sandipsinh - Mar 26, 2014
|Some people prefer to eat meals at home. Other people would rather eat at restaurants.
Writing Feedbackgoraya - Mar 22, 2014 / goraya - Mar 26, 2014
|some high school leavers choose to work/travel; a matter of personal preference
Writing Feedbackzztrieuman - Mar 26, 2014 / tiaDS - Mar 26, 2014
|IELTS: BENEFICIAL INTERNET AND TRAFFIC CONGESTION; encyclopedia of human
3 - First of all, it cannot be denied that the Internetinternet has revolutionizedthe way people used to communicatepeople's communication. ...
Writing Feedbackhunglk - Mar 26, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 26, 2014
|Power of advertising; My two friends who owned well serviced car bought the same car
Writing FeedbackPrabina12 - Mar 25, 2014 / dumi - Mar 26, 2014
|Essay For Toefl: taking risk vs careful planning
7 - This preposition can be used when saying what people, organizations, and reports have said, not quoted from your...
Writing Feedbackjon_snow - Mar 8, 2014 / eddies - Mar 26, 2014
|Air Force Academy - Ethical Dilemma essay; The following story was real and not fabricated
2 - had the right ofto distributing untouched leftovers among employees I think your essay is generally well-written....
Writing Feedbackfotuniverse - Mar 25, 2014 / ramshah - Mar 26, 2014
|Toefl essay - stress are relieved by people by reading, gardening, exercising.
3 - These books address enormous matters that sometime serve us solutions for our problems All embracing books hashave proven inexpensive...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 25, 2014 / ramshah - Mar 26, 2014
|IELTS:Working people are busy -don't have time for family and friends; severe consequences
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Mar 6, 2014 / eddies - Mar 26, 2014
|TOEFL IBT: Why people want to move to big cities to settle down?
Writing Feedbackluonghao - Apr 10, 2013 / luonghao - Mar 25, 2014
|IELTS: Water Cycle from the ocean to air and to the Earth surface
7 - Hi, all. As my effort to improve my ability, I write this prompt repetitively. I am glad that you...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 11, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 25, 2014
|IELTS exam: studying at university is the best route to reach successful career
8 - Being at a univerity is better: -gives time to find yourself -harder to work pay check by pay check,...
Writing Feedbackandial - Mar 24, 2014 / SalomeA - Mar 25, 2014
|Begin learning EL at primary rather than secondary school?Advantages outweigh disadvantage
4 - First of all, at primary school,younger the brain of children caneasier and quicker to learn aadapt to new langguage...
Writing FeedbackLinh Hoang - Mar 24, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 25, 2014
|Politicians are the most important people on earth! -- They have the final say
4 - Well, generally you use examples to support your justifications and they come in body paras. Introduction is meant for...
Writing Feedbackesmayli - Mar 24, 2014 / dumi - Mar 25, 2014
|IELTS: the high sales of goods & power of advertising - 'what we buy is up to ourselves'
Writing FeedbackRebeccaZ - Mar 24, 2014 / RebeccaZ - Mar 25, 2014
|Toefl essay - Media invading public figures privacy.
3 - News that can be defined as" north east west south" provides happening of all these four zones of the...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 21, 2014 / dumi - Mar 25, 2014
|IELTS: Living in modern Apartment or Traditional House - support your choice
4 - Yes, it is not delivering the idea you want to convey to the reader. Afford means having enough money...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 25, 2014
|IELTS :Distance-learning cannot bring the benefits that traditional colleges offer; Agree?
3 - This indicates you don't care enough to finish a sentence properly. You don't need to use lazy...
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Mar 4, 2014 / eddies - Mar 25, 2014
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