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|IELTS General Training; 'growing trend of increasing the retirement age'
4 - also, I just give additional advise, try to give specific details, you can take some events from your real...
Writing Feedbackvarsha2606 - Apr 22, 2014 / fikri - Apr 27, 2014
|Teaching in group along with specialised education according to abilities
Writing Feedbackclairpure - Apr 13, 2014 / fikri - Apr 27, 2014
|GRE: Development of technology and the way people rely on it too much.
2 - Hey, this essay is so good considering its your first. You almost have no mistakes however, I think you...
Writing Feedbackkarltran3s - Apr 27, 2014 / Itsyasmeens - Apr 27, 2014
|'homeless or in jail'; Parents are the best teachers; I agree with the statement
4 - Obviously, you write small letter "i" not just once but several times. Practice writing it in capital. Otherwise,...
Writing Feedbackmikoo4444 - Apr 8, 2014 / niesaysi - Apr 27, 2014
|IELTS: The relative electricity consumption; 'spa is more extravagant used'
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 24, 2014 / eddies - Apr 27, 2014
|compare and contrast your fashion style with that of someone you know
3 - Here is I found on the net that should be followed as an organizational structure for your compare and...
Writing Feedbackmina karimi - Mar 7, 2014 / eddies - Apr 26, 2014
|SAT essay: 'Taking a bad decision is way better than the terror of indecision'
3 - Thanks man!...
Writing Feedbackofficialseif - Apr 26, 2014 / officialseif - Apr 26, 2014
|college or university; Success or a good life in future through knowledge
Writing Feedbackthaontt1408 - Apr 26, 2014 / eddies - Apr 26, 2014
|broad knowledge vs many academic subjects; various subjects in order to be wise
4 - Thank you very much! And do you mean that my paragraph structure is not clear enough? I just think...
Writing FeedbackFYR - Apr 25, 2014 / FYR - Apr 26, 2014
|Wealthy nation shares to support poor countries at the solidarity among nations
7 - Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 8, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 26, 2014
|Toefl- The qualities of a good neighbor - should be sociable and helpful
6 - Ok, so the idea is good but some sentences arent written in a right form so here's the correction:...
Writing FeedbackJaanu - Apr 15, 2014 / Itsyasmeens - Apr 25, 2014
|Every movie made in a country can reflect some realities about that country
5 - For example, when we are watching a picture made in Iran.. The right form is: when we are watching...
Writing Feedbacksevan_777 - Apr 24, 2014 / Itsyasmeens - Apr 25, 2014
|IELTS-GT (task2): Working Extended hours should restricted. (Agree/Disagree)
6 - I would strongly emphasis and recommend, Government must include the clause of maximum number of working hours in its...
Writing FeedbackNaveed786 - Apr 24, 2014 / sevan_777 - Apr 25, 2014
|Ielts 1 enquire letter - English lessons questions
4 - Overall, you are being asked to use Present simple, Present continuous, Present perfect, and Future. For the next...
Writing Feedbackxingshigang3030 - Apr 23, 2014 / eddies - Apr 25, 2014
|Controversial: Teenagers are working while they are still students
4 - Pahan is right. I too think this phrase adds no value. they can arrange time when they should...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 1, 2014 / eddies - Apr 25, 2014
|Toefl - Is technology creating single world culture? fights for culture & belief
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 31, 2014 / eddies - Apr 25, 2014
|Article: "What do you want to when you grow up?" medical student
5 - Doctor is one of the highest paying professions, (stop here) For example,thean average family doctor has an annual salary...
Writing FeedbackSaqib - Mar 31, 2014 / eddies - Apr 25, 2014
|Education of boys & girls in separate schools; 'distracting and hamper progress'
Writing Feedbackrsaca - Apr 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 25, 2014
|IELTS: Modern artist is a sort of high paid profession; 'preparation process'
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Apr 17, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 24, 2014
|Fixed punishment or flexible one?
Writing FeedbackLinh Hoang - Apr 15, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 24, 2014
|During this 25 year period, consumption of pizza and hamburgers by Australian teenagers increased
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 24, 2014
|Toefl-Teachers encouraging students to question everything 'for our knowledge, o
9 - Pay attention to the approaches we have suggested to you above as your essay looks so lengthy and you...
Writing Feedbacktairisca - Mar 29, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 24, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 : High sum of money of modern artist
4 - . It is true while the modern artists who implementemploy their creative thinking onto high value creations are paid...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 23, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 24, 2014
|These days, fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in high schools.
Writing Feedbackuzboy - Apr 22, 2014 / Arun0506 - Apr 24, 2014
|Do you agree that the traditional skills will die out? -- IELTS Essay
7 - Alright.... the ideal way is to write a catchy short hook that provides a very good entrance to...
Writing FeedbackGoleo8 - Apr 20, 2014 / dumi - Apr 24, 2014
|Apple canning process; 'sterilizing from bacteria'
8 - The diagram shows a process of making an apple canningproducing canned apple . This is totally irrelevant...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 19, 2014 / dumi - Apr 24, 2014
|IELTS: The diagram about the evolution of the horse
5 - Once the first two evolution stages finishedwere completed, it can be seen that equineEquin e transformed into Merychippus with...
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - Apr 22, 2014 / dumi - Apr 24, 2014
|IELTS; mobile phone impacts on people's lives
6 - From my point of view, your introduction is quite long compared with 3 or 4 sentences for a model...
Writing Feedbacklinh110 - Apr 21, 2014 / ningo - Apr 24, 2014
|IELTS; mobile phones and precautions
7 - Can someone help me correct and make this sentence more academic ? I don't know how to express properly...
Writing Feedbacklinh110 - Apr 22, 2014 / linh110 - Apr 24, 2014
|Pain (First writing Essay) - 'Pain is a word that most of us hate'
6 - Google is the best friend. Everything you can find there. Also, If you think that you need some...
Writing FeedbackAlpha - Jan 25, 2012 / eddies - Apr 24, 2014
|IELTS: The process of apple how to be canned; 'apple tree'
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 19, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 24, 2014
|Researching the Collapse of 2008: The Rise, Fall, and Flat Line
2 - But for recent college graduates- (I prefer using a comma, instead of hyphen) the group of immediate interest for...
Writing FeedbackMitchyy - Mar 30, 2014 / eddies - Apr 23, 2014
|Ielts: apple is canned; 'there are many processes'
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 18, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|Write a report about education in Australia between 1997 and 2005.
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 22, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|Doctor is the most important person for society
5 - Ok, I see :D They think the doctors can help society from their illness.save others lives which is an...
Writing FeedbackApsari - Apr 23, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|Task - Are Macro-sports events good in easing international tensions?
5 - I suggest you to leave a blank line between your paragraphs to present your essay better and impress the...
Writing FeedbackThomas1948 - Apr 12, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1: The winter heating costs according to heating fuel type
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 23, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|Radio and television audience in UK
4 - The TV audience is pretty less in numbers from 1.00 to 11.00 Thereafter the audience begins to grow and...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 23, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Advertising increase tendency to buy unneeded thing
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 22, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 23, 2014
|Individuals should not be allowed to carry guns - 'used for illegal purposes'
Writing FeedbackUmidabonu - Apr 19, 2014 / bestonline99 - Apr 23, 2014
|GRE: analyze and issue -- technology will deteriorate human thinking
NEW - -- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for...
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|IELTS: Sector of the economy - different age groups were employed.
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 22, 2014 / dumi - Apr 23, 2014
|Ielts: Discuss both harms and good of advertising & give your opinion
Writing Feedbackningo - Apr 22, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The unemployment rates: US and Japan - 5% in March 99
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 22, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1; region and by gender for the year 2000.
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 10, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 23, 2014
|What are the qualities of a good neighbor? 'care your attitude to other people'
7 - sing or plur...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Mar 26, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The sector of economy for employment
3 - what does the word 'than' means? you put 'than' twice in a sentence before 'than' you put 'the...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 22, 2014 / fikri - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS: Sector of the economy - employment by age
5 - this sentence makes me confuse, you wrote too long. it would be better if you separate them into...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 22, 2014 / fikri - Apr 23, 2014
|IELTS: visits abroad; some persons visit to abroad because they have some gains
4 - you should use present on your introduction because it covers all parts of the report, it does not...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 22, 2014 / fikri - Apr 23, 2014
|'various viewpoints' Extreme sports should be banned or not?
5 - The topic of extreme sports is too broad. Why? sports are considered 'extreme' is debatable. Lead your reader by...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Mar 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: Visits abroad by UK residents by purpose of visit
7 - Yes, follow dumi's advice on structuring your writing for this task. It is important that you have those three...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 22, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|Lost flight data recorders! What is going on?
Writing Feedbackdon2074978 - Apr 22, 2014 / uzboy - Apr 22, 2014
|Parents should allow their children to select their own profession
7 - Dear Aisha, kindly let us know the purpose of your wirting, whether are you preparing for IELTS or any...
Writing FeedbackAisha Baloch - Apr 19, 2014 / Arun0506 - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: Marriages are bigger and more expensive nowadays than in the past. Why is this?
5 - Pay serious attention to improve your essay structure. Hope you would follow what dumi has suggested. That structure contains...
Writing FeedbackStella Croatia - Mar 27, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS; Learning with a teacher or learning alone - Which one do you prefer?
5 - None of these sentences provide any idea to the reader. You need to improve clarity of your sentences...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Mar 27, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|Ielts: 'the corner stone' - Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?
3 - Your writing is good. However, you should polish the structure of your essay more. Try to follow the structures...
Writing Feedbacksamsonyeung - Apr 22, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 22, 2014
|Toefl - going to classes should be optional for the students
4 - BecauseSince the university students haveare intellectually matured enoughgrown up , they have enoughthe ability to read and understandthe concepts...
Writing FeedbackJaanu - Apr 22, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|An increasing number of people change their career and place of residence
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|advertising issues; regulate a law prohibiting unacceptable advertising
Writing Feedbackcodeblue - Mar 28, 2014 / eddies - Apr 22, 2014
|Painter, director, writter, photographers - creatives artists, expressing their own ideas.
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