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|UBC College Essay Prompt 1 - about me in my community - and my attempt (undergrad)...
4 - Thanks for the feedback. The essay is 249 words excluding the words in the brackets. Perhaps you also had...
Undergraduateurbestpal - Oct 10, 2018 / urbestpal - Oct 11, 2018
|Reasons to choose UWaterloo and Software engineering
3 - Thank you Holt for your suggestions are these edits alright :- # I want to build a startup in...
UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Oct 9, 2018 / Hetav Pandya - Oct 10, 2018
|My friends and family would describe me as someone who is very supportive and hardworking. UBC essay
2 - Hi Victoria, have you given any thought to providing the response to this question by interviewing one specific person...
Undergraduatevictoria_003 - Oct 9, 2018 / Holt - Oct 9, 2018
|Common APP : Self Reflection Essay - God's plan for me
3 - Jesutofonmi, when I read a highly religious response to a given prompt, even for an open topic one, I...
UndergraduateJayalli - Oct 7, 2018 / Holt - Oct 8, 2018
|I know that I belong at FIT - I will be able to thrive there and meet my full potential
UndergraduateArmelle - Oct 3, 2018 / Armelle - Oct 7, 2018
|Texas A&M Topic A College Application Essay - How my family and responsibilities have impacted me
2 - This is a solid essay that responds to the prompt in a highly informative and imaginative way. I can...
Undergraduatedanacschubert - Oct 6, 2018 / Holt - Oct 7, 2018
|Parents' advice about thinking - TEXAS A&M UNIVERSITY ESSAY QUESTION
9 - Lara, at this point, any changes or additions to the statement that you wrote is actually up to you....
Undergraduatelaradonabedian - Sep 28, 2018 / Holt - Oct 7, 2018
|UChicago Required Short Essay - a chess match is my most prevalent memory of Chicago
2 - This is the essay that the reviewer will use to determine if you are a determined applicant whose academic...
Undergraduateczhang - Oct 5, 2018 / Holt - Oct 5, 2018
|Part of me knows the vital and constitutive ideals of the environment I am accustomed to live with
2 - The essay does not need help when it comes to bettering the content. The information is too complete, engaging,...
UndergraduateJGiselle123 - Oct 4, 2018 / Holt - Oct 5, 2018
|Help me to correcting my introduction essay :)
6 - @btoguntade Thank you very much for your kindness to help me :) your suggestions are very helpful. I'll try...
UndergraduateEsseenn - Oct 4, 2018 / Esseenn - Oct 4, 2018
|Common App Essay - Baking. I love baking. I stress-bake. I bake when I'm happy, sad, angry, or tired
2 - I think you should describe it more clearly. I think this prompt likes describing your hobbies or something like...
Undergraduatedelfin2001 - Oct 4, 2018 / mainguyengoc2908 - Oct 4, 2018
|"I did my best" - Describe a time that you were late for and event:
2 - @khuong97dx2 between the tense usage problem, lack of connecting word usage, and vocabulary mistakes which all led up to...
Undergraduatekhuong97dx2 - Oct 3, 2018 / Holt - Oct 4, 2018
|KGSP Program for Undergraduate/Study plans to improve foreign languages (Korean, English, etc)
Undergraduateluisa998483 - Oct 1, 2018 / luisa998483 - Oct 2, 2018
|Request to review my AIF for University of Waterloo on Programming Knowledge
4 - @terminal28 Oh yeh thanks, I forgot to mention that these programs are written in python. @cao1km I will...
UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Sep 28, 2018 / Hetav Pandya - Sep 30, 2018
|My transfer application essay to UIUC Aerospace Engineering
2 - Hello, I am a final year Computer Science and Engineering student. I have a few points in mind...
Undergraduatethescholar123 - Sep 30, 2018 / datascienceboy1 - Sep 30, 2018
|UBC Entrance Essay on Unfamiliar Situation and Learning Outcomes - Airplane Engine Failure
2 - Dimitri, this is a very weak response to the prompt. The lesson learned is not impressive because there was...
Undergraduatedimitri0071 - Sep 29, 2018 / Holt - Sep 30, 2018
|Passion for music and computer science. While playing the piano I'm also practicing programming.
3 - ... are not all that different --> do you think that "that" is necessary here. ... I remembered buying...
Undergraduatevivianlin - Sep 27, 2018 / cao1km - Sep 29, 2018
|My first microscope - University of Illinois at Chicago admission essay
2 - Hamza, the focus of your essay is supposed to be Biological Science right? I take it that you are...
Undergraduatehamz787 - Sep 28, 2018 / Holt - Sep 28, 2018
|The freedom to think, innovate and create something solely using imagination and logical reasoning
2 - Hetav, your first paragraph is totally irrelevant to the question being asked. This is not a reason for choosing...
UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Sep 27, 2018 / Holt - Sep 28, 2018
|UofT One Idea Supplementary Essay (similar to the common app essay) - learning from failure
2 - Ophelia, consider shortening the backstory for your essay. It is way too long and creates a really boring component...
Undergraduatebhcc21 - Sep 26, 2018 / Holt - Sep 27, 2018
|What shaped you into the person you are today? 2019 college application essay
4 - @cao1km thank you for the feedback, I changed the "if" and "would" part and they still have the same...
UndergraduateMiguelolvera1 - Sep 24, 2018 / Miguelolvera1 - Sep 25, 2018
|My tours - review my Personal Profile (about myself) for UBC
3 - Hetav in order to bring this essay down to within the word count, you can remove the reference to...
UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Sep 24, 2018 / Holt - Sep 25, 2018
|An impromptu speech without any earlier preparation - my response for a problem
3 - Hetav, there is no need, in my opinion, to change anything in this response statement. It is simple and...
UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Sep 23, 2018 / Holt - Sep 24, 2018
|West Union Building: A metaphor for my life (WHY DUKE ?)
2 - Kartik, it would do your essays well if you stop with the imagery and simply respond to the prompts...
Undergraduatekartikt - Sep 23, 2018 / Holt - Sep 24, 2018
|Request to review personal profile for admission in UBC
4 - Hetav, for this essay, you just need to rearrange some of your presentation in order to make your response...
UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Sep 23, 2018 / Holt - Sep 24, 2018
|QuestBridge Miscelleneous Short Questions for college application
3 - 1. You are not talking about an achievement and what it says about you. Rather, you are discussing a...
UndergraduateJainam_Shah - Sep 23, 2018 / Holt - Sep 24, 2018
|THE BRILLIANT FOLLY OF A MAGNET DRIVEN CAR - Amherst Supplement Essay
2 - Kartik, from the point of view of an admissions officer, I would rather read about your high school realizations...
Undergraduatekartikt - Sep 22, 2018 / Holt - Sep 23, 2018
|Why are you applying and how can we help you achieve your goals at Syracuse?
2 - There are three points on which I believe your first essay can be developed- 1. You could include specific...
Undergraduatestatic100 - Sep 22, 2018 / kartikt - Sep 22, 2018
|Grey Hair and Stuffed Rooms - Common App Essay
3 - Thank you sooo much for your valuable feedback ! Astronomy is my central hook for the entire application. I...
Undergraduatekartikt - Sep 21, 2018 / kartikt - Sep 22, 2018
|How to effectively describe my career goals? - Indiana University
2 - Zach, the best way to approach this essay is to first, think about what your immediate plans are for...
Undergraduatezachfl - Sep 20, 2018 / Holt - Sep 21, 2018
|UW Eau Claire essay for why I'm interested
4 - Tyler, your essay doesn't really address the proper prompt requirements. You are responding to the questions provided from a...
Undergraduateb7tyler - Sep 20, 2018 / Holt - Sep 21, 2018
|Love for cooking - something you do for the pleasure of it. MIT
2 - Sasha, there is a part that is written in Ukrainian in your response. Please make sure to change that...
Undergraduatesg2468 - Sep 19, 2018 / Holt - Sep 20, 2018
|Why Tulane Essay: "finding a school that shares your values"
2 - Molly, you have pretty much addressed everything that relates to your personal goals in choosing a university. What is...
Undergraduatedillybar - Sep 18, 2018 / Holt - Sep 19, 2018
|"My Best Friend's Suicide" Coalition Prompt of Choice
2 - Matt, there are several confusing references in the third paragraph. Let me outline it for you below followed by...
Undergraduatemattyonolan - Sep 13, 2018 / Holt - Sep 14, 2018
|Emerson College Storytelling prompt - what would you title your story and why?
2 - Hi Annette. Yes, you are most certainly correct, your response is too vague to be considered a story about...
Undergraduateanne1875 - Sep 13, 2018 / Holt - Sep 13, 2018
|"Breaking Free from the Herd" - Barnard Personal Statement #1
2 - Hi Camryn, I think you are selling yourself short in this essay. You have a 250 word maximum for...
Undergraduatecamrynh508 - Sep 12, 2018 / Holt - Sep 13, 2018
|Being a big sister taught me about the importance of being a responsible person
2 - I suggest you to check your few grammar errors especially the pronouns such as: My little brother whom I...
Undergraduatekalitahon - Sep 11, 2018 / kalyn - Sep 13, 2018
|I love running. - one of MIT short essays
2 - Erkhes, when you are asked about doing something just for the pleasure of it, that means you do something...
UndergraduateNoviceWriter1999 - Sep 10, 2018 / Holt - Sep 11, 2018
|Why I want to go to a Christian College- College Application
2 - Elizabeth, I believe that this essay is well written but can still be improved. For starters, rather than saying...
Undergraduatelschwegler - Sep 9, 2018 / Holt - Sep 10, 2018
|How can society's standards shape one's schema? Biographical Essay about life influence
UndergraduatePhili010 - Sep 4, 2018 / Phili010 - Sep 8, 2018
|Why ISU is fit for your educational goals and explain your academic strengths and weaknesses
3 - Taylor, your essay is nowhere near what the prompt is asking you to explain. You do not have any...
Undergraduatemichalektaylor - Sep 7, 2018 / Holt - Sep 8, 2018
|College Essay for University of Texas at San Antonio (Topic A) Household, community, and environment
2 - Sofie, this essay has a razor sharp focus on your unique family unit that helps it tell an interesting...
UndergraduateSofieb52 - Sep 6, 2018 / Holt - Sep 7, 2018
|Why do you want to study your chosen major at Georgia Tech? - GATech Supplement #1
2 - Bill, your explanation still does not explain why you chose to enroll at GT. The why is not clear...
Undergraduatebguo919 - Sep 2, 2018 / Holt - Sep 3, 2018
|A letter to express my interest in the Radiology program at Kerman University of Medical Sciences
Undergraduatebanknotes2233 - Sep 1, 2018 / banknotes2233 - Sep 3, 2018
|The time to act is now. Personal Statement - this is for my college
2 - This essay was very touching and personal to you, but also deals with a subject impacting many people. The...
Undergraduaterobledo723 - Aug 23, 2018 / dgb621 - Aug 30, 2018
|It is my first time writing a personal statement about myself can you guys review it ?
3 - Thanks for your helpful reply, i appreciate it. i understanding now what should be. i will make it much...
Undergraduatediyar95 - Aug 28, 2018 / diyar95 - Aug 29, 2018
|Education - the key to freedom. An attempt to write Statement of Purpose essay for UT
4 - Callie, the University of Baylor discussion takes up too much of the essay even though you are not transferring...
UndergraduateCallieO - Aug 21, 2018 / Holt - Aug 28, 2018
|"I wanted to become a wizard, but there is no salary for them" KGSP personal statement
2 - Alex, the personal statement for a KGSP scholarship program has a specific set of questions that need to be...
UndergraduateAlexsisGrimm - Aug 25, 2018 / Holt - Aug 26, 2018
|'Whatever we had missed, we possessed together the precious, the incommunicable past.'
2 - Gatik, what was it that your mother did which emancipated you from your father's brothers? How did this show...
UndergraduateGatikGola - Aug 21, 2018 / Holt - Aug 22, 2018
|KGSP Undergraduate Applications Personal Statement - Born to be a Filmmaker
3 - Louie, you only addressed 2 aspects of the overall prompt. The overall essay is perfect in terms of responding...
Undergraduateigeunamja - Aug 19, 2018 / Holt - Aug 20, 2018
|If there has been and obstacle in your life, explain the circumstances. UCF APPLICATION ESSAY
Undergraduateisabelantelo - Aug 17, 2018 / Holt - Aug 18, 2018
|How does this look as a gap year essay? Taking a gap year and going to plan a startup or something..
3 - Sujhan, the first thing you have to change with this essay is the tone of disinterest or lack of...
Undergraduatesujhang - Aug 16, 2018 / Holt - Aug 17, 2018
|USNA Application; explain your interest in the naval service and describe a personal experience
2 - Taelyn, I think that for the first part of the essay, the one about your initial interest, you could...
UndergraduateTaelynmro - Aug 12, 2018 / Holt - Aug 13, 2018
|Failure is simply the opportunity - Common App Essay First Draft - Motivation Essay
2 - Grace, it would be better for us to review your essay based on the common app prompt that you...
Undergraduategracecurry01 - Aug 12, 2018 / Holt - Aug 13, 2018
|Pa-rth foundation Scholarship. why a degree in Nursing? How will you give back to your community?
3 - Thanks for your advice. i really appreciate. i will correct and delete the ones you mentioned. could you help...
Undergraduatevalentine44 - Aug 9, 2018 / valentine44 - Aug 10, 2018
|Describe how your life experiences can contribute to pomonas educational mission around diversity
2 - Samantha, you seem to have misunderstood the prompt requirement. What the reviewer would like to learn about from you,...
Undergraduatesam2019 - Aug 5, 2018 / Holt - Aug 6, 2018
|UT Austin Spring Transfer (from UTSA to UT) Statement of Purpose
2 - Sean, paragraphs 3 and 4 are the most appropriate parts of this essay that you should open with. Revise...
Undergraduateseanq1 - Aug 5, 2018 / Holt - Aug 6, 2018
|Rice University Personal Perspective Prompt Response - Dance and Perseverance
2 - Amanda, being a dancer in this instance, does not seem to be a unique life experience. The role that...
Undergraduateaj5048 - Aug 4, 2018 / Holt - Aug 5, 2018
|Georgia Tech Personal Essay (Why I chose Georgia Tech)
3 - Justin, your response to the essay prompt is nowhere near the question being asked. The question is asking you...
Undergraduatejddn6704 - Aug 4, 2018 / Holt - Aug 4, 2018
|'the cultures and traditions that co-exist with mine' - short essay on why I chose NYU
3 - @Holt i had a paragraph that talked about the courses i would like to pursue and what my future...
Undergraduatepolythurene - Jul 29, 2018 / polythurene - Aug 1, 2018
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