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|Contributing to Community - MIT Supplemental Essay
2 - Jackie, you can improve this essay by first, removing the reference to Grey's Anatomy. You just don't know how...
Undergraduatejjw1711 - Oct 17, 2018 / Holt - Oct 18, 2018
|Fresh off the Boat and Me - US College Essay (Harvard)
3 - Thank you for the feedback! The idea was supposed to be how my background inspired a passion/ talent which...
Undergraduatenesasux - Oct 16, 2018 / nesasux - Oct 17, 2018
|'I can't take it anymore I want to quit!' Common App Essay for University of Michigan
2 - Hannah, the personal growth in this essay is almost an afterthought in the discussion. When you read the essay,...
Undergraduatehec2019 - Oct 16, 2018 / Holt - Oct 17, 2018
|BEING ON THE OTHER SIDE OF THE COURT -- (COLLEGE ESSAY)
2 - Ameya, don't use this essay. The common app prompts come with 2 specific and separate topics for discussion. Those...
Undergraduateameyajain07 - Oct 14, 2018 / Holt - Oct 16, 2018
|Essay about the environment I was raised in and how it shaped me as a person.
Undergraduateamanda_sauce - Oct 14, 2018 / amanda_sauce - Oct 16, 2018
|A custom question on academic and career goals, that received criticism
3 - Ali, your essay is so roundabout in responding to the prompt that you ended up giving a non-response to...
Undergraduatesomething411 - Oct 14, 2018 / Holt - Oct 15, 2018
|Academics and community. Who or What influenced you to apply to Syracuse? 250 word cap
3 - Thank you! Really appreciated the grammatical comment and the part to be more specific about the learning communities. Glad...
UndergraduateLuchianoP - Oct 10, 2018 / LuchianoP - Oct 14, 2018
|William and Mary "What Makes You Unique?" Essay: Amiibo Collecting Essay
3 - Thank you for the feedback Holt, I really appreciate it. With regards to going full circle with the unbox...
Undergraduatepietrom - Oct 13, 2018 / pietrom - Oct 14, 2018
|What have motivated you to study in the eight-year program? My love for Science
2 - Sydney, when you say that you were too young to understand what the illness of your uncle meant, exactly...
Undergraduatesmarquez16 - Oct 13, 2018 / Holt - Oct 14, 2018
|Essay about a story of my life that demonstrates my character or helped to shape it
2 - Sabrina, I learned more about the type of character your father has and your family struggles in this essay...
UndergraduateAriesa7 - Oct 13, 2018 / Holt - Oct 14, 2018
|The powerful aromas of ginger and turmeric - 'encountering an obstacle' essay
2 - Sam, the prompt you picked does not fit the response that you wrote. This is not an obstacle you...
UndergraduateSammy123 - Oct 13, 2018 / Holt - Oct 14, 2018
|Parents and Pastors - AppplyTexas essay topic A
UndergraduateJames1135 - Oct 12, 2018 / James1135 - Oct 13, 2018
|UBC Personal Profile Answer - 'kindness is a virtue??'?
4 - Hello! I'm still new to replying and providing feedback on here but I hope to provide you with some...
Undergraduatetastpom - Sep 24, 2018 / ctbouzan - Oct 13, 2018
|How has a film influenced me (NYU Tisch Prompt)
2 - Nirvigna, don't narrate the movie to the reviewer. He already knows what the movie is about and what aspects...
Undergraduateproxyishere - Oct 11, 2018 / Holt - Oct 13, 2018
|Georgia tech application - Describe a day in your life
Undergraduatejoshuaronis - Oct 12, 2018 / Holt - Oct 13, 2018
|FILM/TV Student Why NYU College ESSAY (400 words)
5 - Nirvigna, this essay does not need any background music. You don't need to "love me like you do". You...
Undergraduateproxyishere - Oct 10, 2018 / Holt - Oct 13, 2018
|Common App Application - How building my first computer impacted me
2 - Hi James. After reviewing your essay, I have come to the conclusion that your language teacher is right. It...
UndergraduateJalspaw096 - Oct 12, 2018 / Holt - Oct 12, 2018
|Common App essay on baking. Cake as a form of expression
4 - I am confused about the actual point of this open topic essay. What was the personal prompt that you...
Undergraduatekebegan - Oct 12, 2018 / Holt - Oct 12, 2018
|My Bucket List 1.SELECT ONE EXAMPLE HAVEN'T FINISHED IN YOUR BUCKET LIST 2.HOW TO FINISH THIS GOAL
Undergraduates89180 - Oct 11, 2018 / Holt - Oct 12, 2018
|My ticket of success, ticket of dreams and ambition - College essay "ticket in hand" prompt
Undergraduateleilo10 - Oct 10, 2018 / leilo10 - Oct 11, 2018
|Helping Community in Florida - MIT Supplemental Essay
3 - Jackie, your presentation is too short. Aim to present at least 200 words for this response essay. By increasing...
Undergraduatejjw1711 - Oct 11, 2018 / Holt - Oct 11, 2018
|UBC College Essay Prompt 1 - about me in my community - and my attempt (undergrad)...
4 - Thanks for the feedback. The essay is 249 words excluding the words in the brackets. Perhaps you also had...
Undergraduateurbestpal - Oct 10, 2018 / urbestpal - Oct 11, 2018
|Reasons to choose UWaterloo and Software engineering
3 - Thank you Holt for your suggestions are these edits alright :- # I want to build a startup in...
UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Oct 9, 2018 / Hetav Pandya - Oct 10, 2018
|My friends and family would describe me as someone who is very supportive and hardworking. UBC essay
2 - Hi Victoria, have you given any thought to providing the response to this question by interviewing one specific person...
Undergraduatevictoria_003 - Oct 9, 2018 / Holt - Oct 9, 2018
|Common APP : Self Reflection Essay - God's plan for me
3 - Jesutofonmi, when I read a highly religious response to a given prompt, even for an open topic one, I...
UndergraduateJayalli - Oct 7, 2018 / Holt - Oct 8, 2018
|I know that I belong at FIT - I will be able to thrive there and meet my full potential
UndergraduateArmelle - Oct 3, 2018 / Armelle - Oct 7, 2018
|Texas A&M Topic A College Application Essay - How my family and responsibilities have impacted me
2 - This is a solid essay that responds to the prompt in a highly informative and imaginative way. I can...
Undergraduatedanacschubert - Oct 6, 2018 / Holt - Oct 7, 2018
|Parents' advice about thinking - TEXAS A&M UNIVERSITY ESSAY QUESTION
9 - Lara, at this point, any changes or additions to the statement that you wrote is actually up to you....
Undergraduatelaradonabedian - Sep 28, 2018 / Holt - Oct 7, 2018
|UChicago Required Short Essay - a chess match is my most prevalent memory of Chicago
2 - This is the essay that the reviewer will use to determine if you are a determined applicant whose academic...
Undergraduateczhang - Oct 5, 2018 / Holt - Oct 5, 2018
|Part of me knows the vital and constitutive ideals of the environment I am accustomed to live with
2 - The essay does not need help when it comes to bettering the content. The information is too complete, engaging,...
UndergraduateJGiselle123 - Oct 4, 2018 / Holt - Oct 5, 2018
|Help me to correcting my introduction essay :)
6 - @btoguntade Thank you very much for your kindness to help me :) your suggestions are very helpful. I'll try...
UndergraduateEsseenn - Oct 4, 2018 / Esseenn - Oct 4, 2018
|Common App Essay - Baking. I love baking. I stress-bake. I bake when I'm happy, sad, angry, or tired
2 - I think you should describe it more clearly. I think this prompt likes describing your hobbies or something like...
Undergraduatedelfin2001 - Oct 4, 2018 / mainguyengoc2908 - Oct 4, 2018
|"I did my best" - Describe a time that you were late for and event:
2 - @khuong97dx2 between the tense usage problem, lack of connecting word usage, and vocabulary mistakes which all led up to...
Undergraduatekhuong97dx2 - Oct 3, 2018 / Holt - Oct 4, 2018
|KGSP Program for Undergraduate/Study plans to improve foreign languages (Korean, English, etc)
Undergraduateluisa998483 - Oct 1, 2018 / luisa998483 - Oct 2, 2018
|Request to review my AIF for University of Waterloo on Programming Knowledge
4 - @terminal28 Oh yeh thanks, I forgot to mention that these programs are written in python. @cao1km I will...
UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Sep 28, 2018 / Hetav Pandya - Sep 30, 2018
|My transfer application essay to UIUC Aerospace Engineering
2 - Hello, I am a final year Computer Science and Engineering student. I have a few points in mind...
Undergraduatethescholar123 - Sep 30, 2018 / datascienceboy1 - Sep 30, 2018
|UBC Entrance Essay on Unfamiliar Situation and Learning Outcomes - Airplane Engine Failure
2 - Dimitri, this is a very weak response to the prompt. The lesson learned is not impressive because there was...
Undergraduatedimitri0071 - Sep 29, 2018 / Holt - Sep 30, 2018
|Passion for music and computer science. While playing the piano I'm also practicing programming.
3 - ... are not all that different --> do you think that "that" is necessary here. ... I remembered buying...
Undergraduatevivianlin - Sep 27, 2018 / cao1km - Sep 29, 2018
|My first microscope - University of Illinois at Chicago admission essay
2 - Hamza, the focus of your essay is supposed to be Biological Science right? I take it that you are...
Undergraduatehamz787 - Sep 28, 2018 / Holt - Sep 28, 2018
|The freedom to think, innovate and create something solely using imagination and logical reasoning
2 - Hetav, your first paragraph is totally irrelevant to the question being asked. This is not a reason for choosing...
UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Sep 27, 2018 / Holt - Sep 28, 2018
|UofT One Idea Supplementary Essay (similar to the common app essay) - learning from failure
2 - Ophelia, consider shortening the backstory for your essay. It is way too long and creates a really boring component...
Undergraduatebhcc21 - Sep 26, 2018 / Holt - Sep 27, 2018
|What shaped you into the person you are today? 2019 college application essay
4 - @cao1km thank you for the feedback, I changed the "if" and "would" part and they still have the same...
UndergraduateMiguelolvera1 - Sep 24, 2018 / Miguelolvera1 - Sep 25, 2018
|My tours - review my Personal Profile (about myself) for UBC
3 - Hetav in order to bring this essay down to within the word count, you can remove the reference to...
UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Sep 24, 2018 / Holt - Sep 25, 2018
|An impromptu speech without any earlier preparation - my response for a problem
3 - Hetav, there is no need, in my opinion, to change anything in this response statement. It is simple and...
UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Sep 23, 2018 / Holt - Sep 24, 2018
|West Union Building: A metaphor for my life (WHY DUKE ?)
2 - Kartik, it would do your essays well if you stop with the imagery and simply respond to the prompts...
Undergraduatekartikt - Sep 23, 2018 / Holt - Sep 24, 2018
|Request to review personal profile for admission in UBC
4 - Hetav, for this essay, you just need to rearrange some of your presentation in order to make your response...
UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Sep 23, 2018 / Holt - Sep 24, 2018
|QuestBridge Miscelleneous Short Questions for college application
3 - 1. You are not talking about an achievement and what it says about you. Rather, you are discussing a...
UndergraduateJainam_Shah - Sep 23, 2018 / Holt - Sep 24, 2018
|THE BRILLIANT FOLLY OF A MAGNET DRIVEN CAR - Amherst Supplement Essay
2 - Kartik, from the point of view of an admissions officer, I would rather read about your high school realizations...
Undergraduatekartikt - Sep 22, 2018 / Holt - Sep 23, 2018
|Why are you applying and how can we help you achieve your goals at Syracuse?
2 - There are three points on which I believe your first essay can be developed- 1. You could include specific...
Undergraduatestatic100 - Sep 22, 2018 / kartikt - Sep 22, 2018
|Grey Hair and Stuffed Rooms - Common App Essay
3 - Thank you sooo much for your valuable feedback ! Astronomy is my central hook for the entire application. I...
Undergraduatekartikt - Sep 21, 2018 / kartikt - Sep 22, 2018
|How to effectively describe my career goals? - Indiana University
2 - Zach, the best way to approach this essay is to first, think about what your immediate plans are for...
Undergraduatezachfl - Sep 20, 2018 / Holt - Sep 21, 2018
|UW Eau Claire essay for why I'm interested
4 - Tyler, your essay doesn't really address the proper prompt requirements. You are responding to the questions provided from a...
Undergraduateb7tyler - Sep 20, 2018 / Holt - Sep 21, 2018
|Love for cooking - something you do for the pleasure of it. MIT
2 - Sasha, there is a part that is written in Ukrainian in your response. Please make sure to change that...
Undergraduatesg2468 - Sep 19, 2018 / Holt - Sep 20, 2018
|Why Tulane Essay: "finding a school that shares your values"
2 - Molly, you have pretty much addressed everything that relates to your personal goals in choosing a university. What is...
Undergraduatedillybar - Sep 18, 2018 / Holt - Sep 19, 2018
|"My Best Friend's Suicide" Coalition Prompt of Choice
2 - Matt, there are several confusing references in the third paragraph. Let me outline it for you below followed by...
Undergraduatemattyonolan - Sep 13, 2018 / Holt - Sep 14, 2018
|Emerson College Storytelling prompt - what would you title your story and why?
2 - Hi Annette. Yes, you are most certainly correct, your response is too vague to be considered a story about...
Undergraduateanne1875 - Sep 13, 2018 / Holt - Sep 13, 2018
|"Breaking Free from the Herd" - Barnard Personal Statement #1
2 - Hi Camryn, I think you are selling yourself short in this essay. You have a 250 word maximum for...
Undergraduatecamrynh508 - Sep 12, 2018 / Holt - Sep 13, 2018
|Being a big sister taught me about the importance of being a responsible person
2 - I suggest you to check your few grammar errors especially the pronouns such as: My little brother whom I...
Undergraduatekalitahon - Sep 11, 2018 / kalyn - Sep 13, 2018
|I love running. - one of MIT short essays
2 - Erkhes, when you are asked about doing something just for the pleasure of it, that means you do something...
UndergraduateNoviceWriter1999 - Sep 10, 2018 / Holt - Sep 11, 2018
|Why I want to go to a Christian College- College Application
2 - Elizabeth, I believe that this essay is well written but can still be improved. For starters, rather than saying...
Undergraduatelschwegler - Sep 9, 2018 / Holt - Sep 10, 2018
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