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|Describe how you can apply the knowledge gained from your master studies to contribute to your home
2 - This essay was almost a total throw away. That is, until I reached the last portion of the final...
UndergraduateAkinola98 - Dec 6, 2020 / Holt - Dec 7, 2020
|UBC Essay - My way to react to an issue and/or an unfamiliar situation
2 - The essay should have a singular topic for its focus. At this point, you are merely narrating all of...
Undergraduatevchndr - Dec 6, 2020 / Holt - Dec 6, 2020
|University of British Columbia Essay - How would you describe yourself?
2 - The reviewer will read this and know that you are writing about yourself, using other people as the reference...
Undergraduatebrothify - Dec 6, 2020 / Holt - Dec 6, 2020
|NTU Scholarship Essay - Personal Importance - How a simple incident in my life had motivated me
2 - The essay that you wrote is nothing more than a suck up presentation, hoping that making it seem like...
UndergraduateNahrafe - Dec 6, 2020 / Holt - Dec 6, 2020
|"You're such a mom" - Yours and others opinion about yourself
2 - It is an incorrect response to the prompt. Tell us about who you are always asks you to present...
Undergraduatedorkystudent - Dec 3, 2020 / Holt - Dec 3, 2020
|Undergraduate Common App Essay - "Mirror-crafter"
3 - @Holt Thank you! Your insight is always helpful. I'll change the prompt and title to accommodate the essay....
UndergraduateLc10077917 - Nov 30, 2020 / Lc10077917 - Dec 1, 2020
|Tell us your biggest fear (this is the prompt). To being bullied
3 - As Holt mentioned earlier, I think this essay focused more on overcoming previous conflicts rather than describing the biggest...
Undergraduatekthienfighting - Nov 29, 2020 / Lc10077917 - Nov 30, 2020
|A problem and/or an unfamiliar situation essay - delegating tasks to solve long line issue
2 - This is a highly effective response essay. As far as I am concerned, your essay portrays you as a...
Undergraduateknices - Nov 30, 2020 / Holt - Nov 30, 2020
|UBC personal profile question on how you dealt with unfamiliar and difficult situation
5 - Merged: UBC personal profile question on how you dealt with unfamiliar and difficult situation try #2 I...
UndergraduateSofiaJohnson - Nov 29, 2020 / SofiaJohnson - Nov 30, 2020
|UC Application Essay: leadership + forming a black student union
3 - Being a co-leader is not the same as being a leader. As a co-leader, you shared responsibilities and decision...
Undergraduatestargirl21 - Nov 28, 2020 / Holt - Nov 29, 2020
|College Entrance Exam practice — I have a dream
3 - You should try to avoid using 2 quotations in a single personal essay. Kicking it off with the quote...
UndergraduatePeggy1116 - Nov 28, 2020 / Holt - Nov 29, 2020
|Insulting words - Tell us your biggest fear
3 - @Holt thank you so much for the evaluation!! I have one question: What I fear most is the widespread...
Undergraduatekthienfighting - Nov 28, 2020 / kthienfighting - Nov 28, 2020
|Wonderland - The prompt is what is your favorite word and why
3 - You cannot make your favorite word the title of the response and then never mention it within the essay....
Undergraduatehahasowhat - Nov 25, 2020 / Holt - Nov 26, 2020
|Shy, curious, analytical - UBC Personal - Tell us about who you are.
4 - What the contributor Holt said is important, you should change your writing and describe yourself based on the opinion...
Undergraduater1852z - Nov 24, 2020 / ItziMh - Nov 25, 2020
|UBC - Application essay which define who I am
Undergraduatexxdior - Nov 25, 2020 / xxdior - Nov 25, 2020
|Black History - the most important Activity essay for UBC PERSONAL PROFILE!
Undergraduateseun1234 - Nov 24, 2020 / seun1234 - Nov 25, 2020
|Yale Essay - How COVID-19 helped me manifest a dream
3 - Hi, It is difficult to review this essay because there are several essays that Yale requires their students to...
Undergraduateprathamchawla - Nov 23, 2020 / Holt - Nov 24, 2020
|UBC - tell us about who you are: intiative-taker
Undergraduateturtleneckturtle - Nov 23, 2020 / turtleneckturtle - Nov 23, 2020
|UBC 1. How you responded to a problem and/or an unfamiliar situation - work shift
Undergraduatesauderacceptme - Nov 22, 2020 / sauderacceptme - Nov 22, 2020
|Initiative - What is important to you? And why? UBC PERSONAL PROFILE
2 - Reviewers really dislike applicants who open their responses with a quote from a well known figure. While you think...
Undergraduateemmmyyy - Nov 21, 2020 / Holt - Nov 22, 2020
|My future after high school graduation - Help With Clearly Expressing My Personal Qualities
3 - We no longer offer proofreading as a part of our free services. For that, you need to make this...
UndergraduateSwoleMcBro - Nov 20, 2020 / Holt - Nov 21, 2020
|Time Management - Tell Us About Who You Are UBC Personal Profile Question
2 - There is a lack of clarity in some of your sentence presentations. For example: - I have always been...
Undergraduatejenniexd - Nov 20, 2020 / Holt - Nov 20, 2020
|Extremely opinionated - Tell us about who you are. UBC application essay
4 - @Mazid1989 I appreciate your contribution. The question was "Tell us about who you are. How would your family, friends,...
Undergraduatetemiajare - Nov 17, 2020 / temiajare - Nov 19, 2020
|The most important thing to me is family - UBC Personal Statement
3 - @Holt thank you so much for your comment. I'll work on other things that I value which play important...
Undergraduatexkq0802 - Nov 18, 2020 / xkq0802 - Nov 19, 2020
|A creative family - What is important to you? And why? UBC APPLICATION
3 - Your response is not properly focused. You are discussing creativity in relation to your family. Which has led you...
Undergraduatejosh b - Nov 18, 2020 / Holt - Nov 19, 2020
|Freedom - the right to choose. What is most important to you and why?
Undergraduatetemiajare - Nov 17, 2020 / temiajare - Nov 18, 2020
|Well-balanced and fulfilling life - APPLICATION FOR UBC -- TELL US ABOUT WHO ARE
4 - Generally well written essay but I would advise a look at your sentence beginnings. Variety is the hallmark of...
Undergraduatechrispereira - Nov 7, 2020 / temiajare - Nov 15, 2020
|SAIC Art Statement - My Reflections Off Art
2 - I would try to enhance the discussion about your participation in the Texas State Fair art exhibit and the...
UndergraduateLc10077917 - Nov 14, 2020 / Holt - Nov 14, 2020
|Tulane University - why Tulane - it will allow me to flourish and make an impact in New Orleans
2 - When applying to colleges, it is better to never mention any professors names, just the classes you plan to...
Undergraduateolivia1234 - Nov 14, 2020 / Holt - Nov 14, 2020
|My educational goals, interests in the chosen program and why Waterloo
2 - The response you have given is uninspired, common, and in need of more academic goal focus. You have to...
Undergraduatefrezzyrish - Nov 12, 2020 / Holt - Nov 13, 2020
|The letter to explain why I want to study in Australia and how this would fit my goals and career
2 - This is more of a personal statement that describes your interest in the course rather than a plan for...
UndergraduateWhippy - Nov 11, 2020 / Holt - Nov 12, 2020
|Why Tufts essay about me having many interests
UndergraduateCong Nguyen Chi - Nov 8, 2020 / Holt - Nov 9, 2020
|Social anxiety - UBC Personal Profile - Tell us about who you are
3 - You need to work out the requirements of the prompt. There are 3 aspects of your personality you should...
UndergraduateEHH03 - Nov 3, 2020 / Holt - Nov 4, 2020
|Naval Academy Personal Statement - why this service, long range goals and character development
2 - As a Naval Academy student, you need to present a long term goal other than just being loyal to...
Undergraduateevh353 - Nov 2, 2020 / Holt - Nov 3, 2020
|Core Youth Team - UBC Application Essay for personal profile (activities that are important to you)
5 - @Holt Would it work if I added in, after the first sentence, something along the lines of 'I was...
Undergraduateayra4027 - Oct 31, 2020 / ayra4027 - Nov 3, 2020
|Personal Statement Coalition essay
NEW - Directions: Tell a story from your life, describing an experience that either demonstrates your character or helped to shape...
Undergraduateteddyz - Nov 2, 2020 / — -
|A story from your life, showing an experience that demonstrates your character or helped to shape it
Undergraduateteddyz - Nov 1, 2020 / Holt - Nov 1, 2020
|Common App Essay - Immigrating from Russia
Undergraduateivantheperson - Oct 29, 2020 / Holt - Oct 30, 2020
|My mom smashed my violin commonapp essay-- would appreciate any input on how to make it better
2 - The use of three different topics in the response will tend to confuse the reader. Since you gave a...
Undergraduatecaseydilla - Oct 28, 2020 / Holt - Oct 29, 2020
|SAO - essay task 1 (250 words) "Physics of the Future" by "Michio Kaku" - I enjoyed this reading
2 - Okay, you have already finished reading the book. You have already enjoyed the written material. As such, you should...
Undergraduatemaormendel - Oct 28, 2020 / Holt - Oct 29, 2020
|Not afraid teen - what you are proud of. UBC Personal Profile Question - Admission Essay
Undergraduatemugdho - Oct 26, 2020 / mugdho - Oct 28, 2020
|Common App Essay - Translation from Chinese to Me
2 - Which prompt are you responding to? I am not sure about the relevance of your response or which parts...
UndergraduateFallon - Oct 28, 2020 / Holt - Oct 28, 2020
|Dynamic phase! - Explain how you responded to a problem . What did you do ? What was the outcome?
3 - Your paragraph doesn't really respond to the prompt, adding on to what Holt said. There is no clear problem...
UndergraduateTansheen25 - Oct 26, 2020 / Fallon - Oct 28, 2020
|Reading, family, and knowledge - What is important to you? And why?
3 - @ody0397 Yes I think it's dull too. Maybe I should re-write and focus on one important experience. Thanks for...
UndergraduateL1ght1107 - Oct 26, 2020 / L1ght1107 - Oct 26, 2020
|Communication and Learning - What is important to you? And why?
3 - Hello, I wanna ask if this question can only describe one thing or multiple things? Thanks for...
UndergraduatePypip - Oct 26, 2020 / L1ght1107 - Oct 26, 2020
|What motivates you to join 'Teach for india'
2 - You are off track with this presentation. You have not really convinced the reader that you are interested in...
Undergraduateanas3223 - Oct 21, 2020 / Holt - Oct 21, 2020
|Common Application Essay about the Fashion Industry
3 - @Holt Thank you so much for the feedback! I'll get rid of the first 2 paragraphs and shorten the...
UndergraduateArtlover1623 - Oct 18, 2020 / Artlover1623 - Oct 18, 2020
|Common App Essay: Khushi Means Happiness
3 - @Holt The word count this year is 650. How can I make it more engaging? Do you think shortening...
Undergraduatekvyas123 - Oct 16, 2020 / kvyas123 - Oct 18, 2020
|Why I hate the questions where are you from
7 - @MattiaPiaggi I think only last part of your essay indicates why you want to be in NYU. I would...
UndergraduateMattiaPiaggi - Oct 12, 2020 / lylrose - Oct 17, 2020
|WHY DAVIDSON COLLEGE? I've thought of several things and these really stood out to me
2 - The first paragraph is of an excessive length. Remove the reference to the major you have chosen to pursue...
Undergraduateawelawi - Oct 15, 2020 / Holt - Oct 16, 2020
|Lifelong bonds - What is important to you? And why?
2 - There is a disconnection between the first few sentences in your presentation and the rest of your essay. You...
Undergraduateheheh123 - Oct 13, 2020 / Holt - Oct 13, 2020
|Struggling to answer UBC personal profile prompts because of my personal circumstance.
UndergraduateDragonlady - Oct 12, 2020 / Dragonlady - Oct 13, 2020
|Personal Statement for Uk University - Consulting Company Experience
2 - You have not written a personal statement. This is a curriculum vitae. It is not considered a proper personal...
Undergraduateabdullahmo - Oct 11, 2020 / Holt - Oct 12, 2020
|Common App Essay - Prompt 4 "how I defeated my social anxiety"
3 - With the limited word count that you were provided, it is impossible to accommodate a highly intricate explanation of...
Undergraduateaklflol - Oct 9, 2020 / Holt - Oct 10, 2020
|Autobiography about myself - for university scholarship
2 - This is an excessively long essay. I am sure that you were provided with a minimum and maximum word...
Undergraduatehuean217 - Oct 8, 2020 / Holt - Oct 9, 2020
|Columbia Essay on an active role in my community. A sock drive for a local homeless shelter
2 - I like this essay. It is engaging, informative, and fun to read. You pretty much covered all of the...
Undergraduatejenincollege - Oct 7, 2020 / Holt - Oct 8, 2020
|Prompt: Discuss a popular stereotype that you believe people might have about YOU. Explain
Undergraduatejustagirl - Oct 6, 2020 / justagirl - Oct 7, 2020
|Common App Essay - A Year in Japan Prompt 1 - identity, interest, or talent
2 - Try to come up with a more interesting title for the essay. One more descriptive of the discussion you...
UndergraduateHaruka_na - Oct 5, 2020 / Holt - Oct 6, 2020
|BFA Photography and Video - Statement of Intent
4 - A statement of intent needs to prove that you are a qualified candidate for the course you hope to...
UndergraduateFreedomGround - Oct 3, 2020 / Holt - Oct 4, 2020
|Tell us about who you are; I have the will and patience it takes to make a strong individual.
4 - The essay asks you to choose between your friends or community for the second description regarding how other people...
Undergraduatesaatvik7 - Oct 3, 2020 / Holt - Oct 4, 2020
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