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|Most significant challenge you have faced (dormitory life) and why MIT course 6-2 appeals to me
Undergraduatebaba1 - Nov 3, 2018 / baba1 - Nov 4, 2018
|THE SWEET IN THE SWEAT - Common app essay prompt 2.
3 - Wankunda, you are not really overcoming an obstacle in this essay. I believe that your work is more suited...
UndergraduateChimba - Nov 2, 2018 / Holt - Nov 3, 2018
|Singapore Military Service Personal Statement
3 - @Holt, thank you so much for the advice. Yes, I completely agree with what you're saying. This background I...
Undergraduatermukerji - Nov 1, 2018 / rmukerji - Nov 3, 2018
|Cornell Arts and Sciences Supp - the ability to combine my interests in biology and research
2 - If this is for early, my feedback might be too late... I think that rather than naming and describing...
Undergraduatebrookedelprete - Oct 31, 2018 / nyangi - Nov 1, 2018
|UVA Supplement - solar powered fridge project for third world countries
2 - For the second paragraph, I think the sentence, "The use of solar energy is especially helpful when considering the...
Undergraduatepacificshawty - Oct 31, 2018 / laurenholes - Nov 1, 2018
|SOCIAL DOGMA OF MATHEMATICS - Common App Essay on Math (Prompt #3)
2 - Nafee, you have chosen a very boring topic to discuss in this essay, Math. Which you know most people...
UndergraduateNafeeJ - Nov 1, 2018 / Holt - Nov 1, 2018
|How tutoring English leads to a pursuit in communications - Supplement
Undergraduatelynnlynn - Oct 31, 2018 / lynnlynn - Nov 1, 2018
|Common App Essay on movie spoilers (Prompt #7)
4 - Kevin, you may want to balance the discussion with a representation of who you were before you decided to...
Undergraduateomnibutt - Oct 30, 2018 / Holt - Oct 31, 2018
|Sloppy Joe Symphony - Common App Draft; something that sparked a period of personal growth
6 - This story reminds me of a personal experience in my past that I have written about. I have written...
UndergraduateSmolBean15 - Oct 29, 2018 / spelkey - Oct 31, 2018
|Fear of asking for help - Common App Essay
5 - Great essay! I think that you can definitely extend your reflection on the first leadership experience and write...
Undergraduatelynnlynn - Oct 12, 2018 / jasmine17 - Oct 31, 2018
|Successful students at Johns Hopkins make the biggest impact by collaborating with others
2 - Hazel, the learning in this essay should not be limited to collaboration. You should also consider the lessons that...
UndergraduateItshazell - Oct 29, 2018 / Holt - Oct 30, 2018
|An Indonesian student in the United States - Common App Essay - 1st Prompt
3 - Hi Hany. This is a very strong essay that responds clearly to the prompt requirements. You have a truly...
Undergraduatejasmine17 - Oct 29, 2018 / Holt - Oct 30, 2018
|Main common app essay -- my job at Starbucks
2 - Your opening sentence is weak Try? Each night, I arrive home from the late shift, exhausted and reeking of...
Undergraduatemirandaam - Oct 28, 2018 / brookedelprete - Oct 30, 2018
|Caltech Supplemental #1 (STEM Experience)
3 - @buzzfeed For this type of essay, you don't need to delve into too deep a detail for the presentation....
Undergraduatebuzzfeed - Oct 28, 2018 / Holt - Oct 29, 2018
|Why Purdue? I enjoy nothing more than computer science - Supplemental #1
3 - The response that you have given is what is called a cookie cutter response. Meaning, every other student will...
Undergraduatenvijai - Oct 28, 2018 / Holt - Oct 29, 2018
|How being stuck in a foreign country affected me - common app essay
2 - This is a good read but what is the prompt of this essay? Anyway, you've been on terrifying situation...
Undergraduatesoysauce99 - Oct 27, 2018 / Legecy - Oct 28, 2018
|My passion for programming and music college computer science essay
2 - Vivialin, why don't you consider changing your introduction from using keyboard keys to computer keys instead? There are software...
Undergraduatevivianlin45 - Oct 27, 2018 / Holt - Oct 28, 2018
|Being a fearless orator is what I am proud of. Self presentation essay
2 - wild fire -----is it necessary? ... earned me the title of being "Ambitious".---Just show. Don't tell. We get...
UndergraduateHetav Pandya - Oct 27, 2018 / lolessay - Oct 27, 2018
|Overcoming Me: "bump in the road" UCF Statement
2 - Hi Sarah, It's a nicely written essay, however I feel like you could add more on how your personal/academic...
UndergraduateRere454 - Oct 26, 2018 / ayunovianti - Oct 27, 2018
|My Favorite word is family! This word includes whoever I enjoy spending time with.
3 - Phani, I wish that you had included the instructions for the writing of this essay along with the response...
Undergraduatephani75 - Oct 25, 2018 / Holt - Oct 26, 2018
|Research world journey - Common app for research universities: Prompt no 5
2 - @lolessay What is the maximum word count for this essay? The reason I ask is that it feels too...
Undergraduatelolessay - Oct 24, 2018 / Holt - Oct 25, 2018
|Growing up as Indian in America - What was the environment in which you were raised?
4 - s nothing like the first type: it is more fast-paced, filled with inflections, and sprinkled with Gujarati words I...
Undergraduatevanshika2001 - Oct 21, 2018 / lolessay - Oct 24, 2018
|"Picture perfect" kid - Common Application Prompt Number Two
3 - Beginning from Transportation part..... to.... working six days of week I think it is better to condense it without...
Undergraduatebrookedelprete - Oct 24, 2018 / lolessay - Oct 24, 2018
|Physical Geology nightmare; FAILURES AND OBSTACLES COMMON APP ESSAY
4 - Anytime that the student uses technical information in an essay, you better hope that a professional in the field...
Undergraduateseeb8 - Oct 22, 2018 / Holt - Oct 24, 2018
|'Playing around in microchip design' - My interest in studying at Michigan - Prompt
4 - Thanks for the info! Thanks for the constructive feedback. I have changed the sentences that you highlighted in order...
Undergraduatepetamat - Oct 22, 2018 / petamat - Oct 23, 2018
|Cooking is science and science is cooking. Common App Essay on Cooking (Prompt 1)
3 - R, I understand that you are applying for admission to the Physics course of this university. That is why...
Undergraduatelinr2 - Oct 23, 2018 / Holt - Oct 23, 2018
|UGRAD SOP - US can broaden up my horizons
2 - Umta, this is a god draft. For the second draft, you will need to omit certain references in this...
Undergraduateumta - Oct 22, 2018 / Holt - Oct 23, 2018
|''Talent is equally distributed but opportunity is not'' - undergraduate program application
2 - You should talk more about specifics- what field you are going in to, what events are you participating in,...
UndergraduateLifechaser - Oct 21, 2018 / seeb8 - Oct 22, 2018
|My Passion for Art - Essay about hobby/experience and how it affected you Upitt
2 - Sasha, I think that you are presenting the essay in reverse. Since you have an interest in Chemistry, then...
Undergraduatesg2468 - Oct 21, 2018 / Holt - Oct 22, 2018
|Essay for Princeton University - why you are interested in studying Engineering?
3 - thanks, I'll look over your essay when I have time sometime this week. How was the actual essay in...
Undergraduatemkim4 - Oct 21, 2018 / mkim4 - Oct 22, 2018
|"What are you going to be?" My identity essay for college
UndergraduateLeHoangVu2001 - Oct 21, 2018 / sg2468 - Oct 21, 2018
|My interest in Mathematics & Computer Science- UIUC Undergraduate
5 - Since this is an essay for UIUC, I would suggest including some specific details about UIUC's program that makes...
Undergraduatepshah35 - Oct 20, 2018 / sg2468 - Oct 21, 2018
|Bringing Diversity to Duke - Essay Prompt
2 - I think that along with the description of your family, you could write more about how diversity has affected...
Undergraduateanguyen44 - Oct 20, 2018 / pshah35 - Oct 21, 2018
|My American teacher. UVA supplement essay, is this good?
Undergraduatedaniel6shin - Oct 15, 2018 / yoleichen - Oct 20, 2018
|"Each of us strengthens all of us"....Villanova supplementary
2 - Lauren, is there any chance that you can pick a different topic for the prompt? The subject you have...
Undergraduatelawalks - Oct 20, 2018 / Holt - Oct 20, 2018
|You're So Immature - Common App Essay; something that sparked a period of personal growth
7 - I'll try to rearrange it! However, do you think the prompt I chose has a connection to my essay?...
Undergraduatenatasha1313 - Oct 18, 2018 / natasha1313 - Oct 20, 2018
|Common App Essay for Rice "My Mother Taught Me"
2 - Your observations are correct. I learned more about your mother's history than I did about you in this essay....
Undergraduatenajma101 - Oct 19, 2018 / Holt - Oct 19, 2018
|College entrance essay for Pitt. How have you made an impact?
3 - Emily, the essay flies off in 2 different directions. The first, indicates how you participate in Valentine's Day activities...
Undergraduatequeenlcg - Oct 18, 2018 / Holt - Oct 19, 2018
|The Match-Deciding Goal - Common App Essay Prompt 2
2 - Tahmeed, you have written a relevant essay but, you are using too many technical jargons in the essay. You...
UndergraduateTmos - Oct 18, 2018 / Holt - Oct 19, 2018
|Contributing to Community - MIT Supplemental Essay
2 - Jackie, you can improve this essay by first, removing the reference to Grey's Anatomy. You just don't know how...
Undergraduatejjw1711 - Oct 17, 2018 / Holt - Oct 18, 2018
|Fresh off the Boat and Me - US College Essay (Harvard)
3 - Thank you for the feedback! The idea was supposed to be how my background inspired a passion/ talent which...
Undergraduatenesasux - Oct 16, 2018 / nesasux - Oct 17, 2018
|'I can't take it anymore I want to quit!' Common App Essay for University of Michigan
2 - Hannah, the personal growth in this essay is almost an afterthought in the discussion. When you read the essay,...
Undergraduatehec2019 - Oct 16, 2018 / Holt - Oct 17, 2018
|BEING ON THE OTHER SIDE OF THE COURT -- (COLLEGE ESSAY)
2 - Ameya, don't use this essay. The common app prompts come with 2 specific and separate topics for discussion. Those...
Undergraduateameyajain07 - Oct 14, 2018 / Holt - Oct 16, 2018
|Essay about the environment I was raised in and how it shaped me as a person.
Undergraduateamanda_sauce - Oct 14, 2018 / amanda_sauce - Oct 16, 2018
|A custom question on academic and career goals, that received criticism
3 - Ali, your essay is so roundabout in responding to the prompt that you ended up giving a non-response to...
Undergraduatesomething411 - Oct 14, 2018 / Holt - Oct 15, 2018
|Academics and community. Who or What influenced you to apply to Syracuse? 250 word cap
3 - Thank you! Really appreciated the grammatical comment and the part to be more specific about the learning communities. Glad...
UndergraduateLuchianoP - Oct 10, 2018 / LuchianoP - Oct 14, 2018
|William and Mary "What Makes You Unique?" Essay: Amiibo Collecting Essay
3 - Thank you for the feedback Holt, I really appreciate it. With regards to going full circle with the unbox...
Undergraduatepietrom - Oct 13, 2018 / pietrom - Oct 14, 2018
|What have motivated you to study in the eight-year program? My love for Science
2 - Sydney, when you say that you were too young to understand what the illness of your uncle meant, exactly...
Undergraduatesmarquez16 - Oct 13, 2018 / Holt - Oct 14, 2018
|Essay about a story of my life that demonstrates my character or helped to shape it
2 - Sabrina, I learned more about the type of character your father has and your family struggles in this essay...
UndergraduateAriesa7 - Oct 13, 2018 / Holt - Oct 14, 2018
|The powerful aromas of ginger and turmeric - 'encountering an obstacle' essay
2 - Sam, the prompt you picked does not fit the response that you wrote. This is not an obstacle you...
UndergraduateSammy123 - Oct 13, 2018 / Holt - Oct 14, 2018
|Parents and Pastors - AppplyTexas essay topic A
UndergraduateJames1135 - Oct 12, 2018 / James1135 - Oct 13, 2018
|UBC Personal Profile Answer - 'kindness is a virtue??'?
4 - Hello! I'm still new to replying and providing feedback on here but I hope to provide you with some...
Undergraduatetastpom - Sep 24, 2018 / ctbouzan - Oct 13, 2018
|How has a film influenced me (NYU Tisch Prompt)
2 - Nirvigna, don't narrate the movie to the reviewer. He already knows what the movie is about and what aspects...
Undergraduateproxyishere - Oct 11, 2018 / Holt - Oct 13, 2018
|Georgia tech application - Describe a day in your life
Undergraduatejoshuaronis - Oct 12, 2018 / Holt - Oct 13, 2018
|FILM/TV Student Why NYU College ESSAY (400 words)
5 - Nirvigna, this essay does not need any background music. You don't need to "love me like you do". You...
Undergraduateproxyishere - Oct 10, 2018 / Holt - Oct 13, 2018
|Common App Application - How building my first computer impacted me
2 - Hi James. After reviewing your essay, I have come to the conclusion that your language teacher is right. It...
UndergraduateJalspaw096 - Oct 12, 2018 / Holt - Oct 12, 2018
|Common App essay on baking. Cake as a form of expression
4 - I am confused about the actual point of this open topic essay. What was the personal prompt that you...
Undergraduatekebegan - Oct 12, 2018 / Holt - Oct 12, 2018
|My Bucket List 1.SELECT ONE EXAMPLE HAVEN'T FINISHED IN YOUR BUCKET LIST 2.HOW TO FINISH THIS GOAL
Undergraduates89180 - Oct 11, 2018 / Holt - Oct 12, 2018
|My ticket of success, ticket of dreams and ambition - College essay "ticket in hand" prompt
Undergraduateleilo10 - Oct 10, 2018 / leilo10 - Oct 11, 2018
|Helping Community in Florida - MIT Supplemental Essay
3 - Jackie, your presentation is too short. Aim to present at least 200 words for this response essay. By increasing...
Undergraduatejjw1711 - Oct 11, 2018 / Holt - Oct 11, 2018
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