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|The next generation of technology - Personal statement for apply the British university.
UndergraduateVoidburn Rong - Sep 15, 2020 / imhana - Sep 15, 2020
|Mother's departure - personal statement for college application
3 - @Holt thank you so much for your message. Let me try and make things a bit Clearer. I'm answering...
UndergraduateThams - Sep 2, 2020 / Thams - Sep 7, 2020
|Naval Academy / Curious - USNA Personal Statement
2 - The interest in the Navy needs to show a progression on your part. The way you tell the story,...
Undergraduatesmugdrip - Sep 1, 2020 / Holt - Sep 2, 2020
|Texas A&M Transfer Essay- Agricultural Economics/ Agricultural Business
2 - Remove the last 2 paragraphs as these are irrelevant to the discussion prompt. Not only that, but it is...
Undergraduatekneeii - Aug 29, 2020 / Holt - Aug 30, 2020
|"Dreamers cannot be tamed." - Common Essay --Aiming for the elite colleges
5 - while I think that you are quite a great story-teller, please consider using less fancy words, I get that...
UndergraduateAtharvraturi27 - Jul 25, 2020 / KurekoHikari - Aug 24, 2020
|'Blue scrubs was all I knew growing up' - An event that sparked a period of personal growth.
2 - The focus of this essay is too much on your grandmother, the relationship you have with your grandmother, and...
UndergraduateKaylaburks28 - Aug 21, 2020 / Holt - Aug 21, 2020
|How would I describe the culture of my school community? Personal profile question
Undergraduatemahek agarwal - Aug 10, 2020 / mahek agarwal - Aug 12, 2020
|Flagler College 2020 Make History Essay
2 - The essay is confusing to read because of the timeline reference. You are moving from past to present tense...
Undergraduatejessicagiraldo02 - Aug 7, 2020 / Holt - Aug 8, 2020
|Fashion Business Management - FIT NYC FBM MAJOR UNDERGRADUATE
UndergraduateMissmay14th - Aug 2, 2020 / Holt - Aug 2, 2020
|Being the CEO - Describe a person that you admire
4 - "He changed my thought when I heard his life." Maybe add "about" after heard. Also,"He actually is an English...
UndergraduateHuong789456123 - Aug 1, 2020 / Dolly Doloris - Aug 1, 2020
|Essay for common app: montage structure essay about my planner.
3 - @Holt Thank you for your insight!! Out of all the common app prompts I chose "Some students have a...
UndergraduatelittleKivy - Jul 25, 2020 / littleKivy - Jul 26, 2020
|Virtual information session - Why Lafayette?
3 - The focus should not only be on the Dyer Center. You should also be focusing on addressing how your...
UndergraduateDilli - Jul 25, 2020 / Holt - Jul 25, 2020
|Influencing people - Leadership Chevening essay
UndergraduateThebiod - Jul 21, 2020 / Thebiod - Jul 23, 2020
|KGSP scholarship - I should not overlook this opportunity
UndergraduateKimmie3 - Jul 18, 2020 / Kimmie3 - Jul 19, 2020
|My answer prompt for essay question 1 of GSEP Program Application in Titech.
2 - Your essay is far off base, you actually forgot what the original prompt is about. You were being asked...
Undergraduateshahriar10 - Jul 17, 2020 / Holt - Jul 18, 2020
|I am going to apply for GSEP Program for Bachelor study in TITECH, Japan.
2 - I m afraid that you missed responding properly to several discussion points. You have to be clearer in your...
Undergraduateshahriar10 - Jul 15, 2020 / Holt - Jul 16, 2020
|Medical school personal statement - fortunate and grateful
Undergraduatetiredpremed - Jul 14, 2020 / Holt - Jul 15, 2020
|My own chords - Common App Essay
Undergraduatealsu03 - Jun 26, 2020 / wmm88 - Jun 28, 2020
|Nursing School Admissions Essay (assault, abuse, poverty, mental illness)
2 - What you have to understand is that the reviewer is looking for a unique backstory that will reflect the...
Undergraduatevioletmoon - May 28, 2020 / Holt - May 29, 2020
|Readmission Essay- Overcoming Academic Suspension
2 - I believe that you have written a tremendously strong, detailed, and insightful readmission request letter. You have acknowledged your...
UndergraduateDreamstofollow - May 28, 2020 / Holt - May 28, 2020
|Dreams, plans for the future and reasons for choosing KAIST
3 - @Holt Wow, thank you so much for the detailed feedback. Really though, I see you everywhere, pretty much a...
Undergraduategabriellesinaga - May 14, 2020 / gabriellesinaga - May 16, 2020
|Cybersecurity - how did you choose your proposed course and institution?
3 - @ChrisPra One of the poorest essays I have ever seen. Think twice, thrice before you write an important thing....
UndergraduateChrisPra - May 11, 2020 / TaraAryal23 - May 14, 2020
|Fulbright essay-personal statement- economic development
3 - @Holt How can I contact you privately? You may contact us at: firstname.lastname@example.org (request me for a private service)....
UndergraduateNiko_s - May 12, 2020 / Niko_s - May 12, 2020
|Why did you choose chemical engineering?
3 - This is not a statement that actually responds to the prompt. Your reasons are generic. It could apply to...
Undergraduatejhonferisaltamba - Apr 27, 2020 / Holt - Apr 27, 2020
|Personal statement to apply to universities in the UK (just the introduction and the conclusion)
2 - It would have been alright for you to post just the beginning and end of your personal statement if...
Undergraduatethuychitran - Apr 23, 2020 / Holt - Apr 24, 2020
|"Why Do You Want To Attend a Service Acdemy?" Question(s) for Nomination
3 - @Holt I appreciate the sincerity of your response. Honestly I was taken aback at first then realized that you're...
Undergraduatewilly_mcnilly - Apr 16, 2020 / willy_mcnilly - Apr 21, 2020
|[PERSONAL STATEMENT] If you could change anything about the way you were raised, what would it be?
2 - Let's consider what the prompt is asking you to discuss. What is it about your upbringing that you would...
Undergraduategrace261202 - Apr 9, 2020 / Holt - Apr 9, 2020
|Common App Essay, Non-Catholic attending Catholic School
Undergraduatepaigecaskey - Apr 6, 2020 / Holt - Apr 7, 2020
|SCAD Statement of Purpose - Transfer/ Illustration Major
2 - The essay is weak in two parts: (1) the preparation that you have done throughout that will make you...
UndergraduateNadai25 - Apr 1, 2020 / Holt - Apr 2, 2020
|NUS personal statement + SOP essay for science
2 - The reviewer is not asking you to enumerate your accomplishments and seminars attended. Instead, the statement requires you to...
UndergraduateSshreya - Mar 30, 2020 / Holt - Mar 31, 2020
|Statement of purpose AMA+ K'art, Screenwriting
3 - In my view, your essay is too informative, which is difficult for the reviewer to get into your story....
UndergraduateMelitanh - Mar 24, 2020 / khangdu8897 - Mar 24, 2020
|Germany - Personal Statement Essay for AFS Application - Proof-reading
2 - This is an excellent start to your response essay. You provide enough basic answers to the the questions. What...
Undergraduatevibrance - Mar 9, 2020 / Holt - Mar 10, 2020
|Canada Cartage - Waterloo Admission Information Form - Additional Information
2 - Talking about your part time job is the perfect way to respond to the instruction. There are no hard...
UndergraduateAbhayWalia - Feb 27, 2020 / Holt - Feb 27, 2020
|Waterloo AIF - Circumstances with an adverse effect on my academic performance
UndergraduateAbhayWalia - Feb 27, 2020 / AbhayWalia - Feb 27, 2020
|SAIC application - Artist Statement
2 - This is a very strong essay unto itself. However, it lacks one important aspect. You have spoken of any...
Undergraduatespidernovna - Feb 26, 2020 / Holt - Feb 27, 2020
|Columbia Science Honors Program Essay Revision - interests and background in science and mathematics
UndergraduateRithvik - Feb 26, 2020 / Rithvik - Feb 26, 2020
|Waterloo AIF Form (Mathematics)
3 - It is useless to discuss your academics in this part of the statement because you were given several chances...
Undergraduatehanxuan - Feb 24, 2020 / Holt - Feb 25, 2020
|Help with Waterloo AIF form (Part a, Computer/electrical Engineering)
UndergraduatePeterra - Feb 24, 2020 / Peterra - Feb 24, 2020
|NUS (NATIONAL UNIVERSITY OF SINGAPORE) PERSONAL STATEMENT FOR ARCHITECTURE UNDERGRADUATE.
3 - @Holt First of all, Thank you for your feedback. I am writing my personal statement again and I think...
Undergraduatehrishi - Feb 17, 2020 / hrishi - Feb 18, 2020
|CHANGING SCENERY; Loyola Marymount University application question - Critical thinking
2 - This is a somewhat correct response to the prompt. Depending upon what your word allotment is, you could have...
Undergraduatekevinjbarr - Feb 17, 2020 / Holt - Feb 18, 2020
|Essay about a place - Ho Chi Minh
2 - I'll assume that you are practicing to write in British English and use that as the reference point. Remember...
UndergraduateThnhNgn - Feb 16, 2020 / Holt - Feb 17, 2020
|The Disciples of Christ Church - Chapman Personal TRANSFER essay
2 - I believe that you misunderstood the instruction for the discussion. It is not asking you for your path throughout...
Undergraduateaanselmostudent - Feb 15, 2020 / Holt - Feb 15, 2020
|My reason for choosing the data science and CFM majors at Waterloo University
2 - Try to open the statement with the factual presentation that you were attracted to the Waterloo curriculum and courses...
Undergraduatealice725 - Feb 15, 2020 / Holt - Feb 15, 2020
|UWaterloo AIF Help (Computer Science and Data Science) - reasons of your program choice
4 - Hi. I think you need to be more specific about what sparked your interest in CS and Data Science....
UndergraduateAcedia1001 - Feb 10, 2020 / Ulaai - Feb 14, 2020
|What is your main reason to study media and communication? Bachelor Degree
Undergraduatehatdenhoxxx - Feb 13, 2020 / Holt - Feb 14, 2020
|Help with my Waterloo AIF! (Comp. Sci / Math [Data Science])
3 - There are two keywords in this essay that will weaken your consideration for a student slot. The words are...
Undergraduateheet - Feb 11, 2020 / Holt - Feb 12, 2020
|Middle school teacher - The most memorable person in your life
3 - The introductory sentence is missing the subject "person" as indicated in the title of the statement. The sentence does...
Undergraduatephu nhuyen - Feb 11, 2020 / Holt - Feb 11, 2020
|'amazing, a wonderful friend and an even better person' - Other people's opinions of me
2 - If you just revise the beginning of the statement to exclude the reference to your brother and focus instead...
Undergraduateash1699 - Feb 10, 2020 / Holt - Feb 10, 2020
|My Younger Brothers Cancer
3 - Writing: Your writing is very good, I am just pointing out some grammatical and spelling mistakes that I found...
Undergraduatepaigecaskey - Feb 10, 2020 / Gaucho - Feb 10, 2020
|IVEY AEO ESSAY (Character in Leadership)
4 - Well, this is certainly a very reflective essay response. You actually managed to respond to the prompt in a...
Undergraduateyellowjello123 - Jan 14, 2020 / Holt - Feb 1, 2020
|The swimming community- Advice on my Queen's PSE Essay
UndergraduateFercruz - Jan 29, 2020 / Fercruz - Jan 31, 2020
|Essay on an important political issue concerning my community and my generation. -UT Austin prompt
Undergraduatezanwar2 - Jan 29, 2020 / zanwar2 - Jan 29, 2020
|Computer Science - Undergraduate application Jacobs University
2 - This statement is too general in terms of references. You are not really giving the reviewer any information that...
UndergraduateOngun1905 - Jan 28, 2020 / Holt - Jan 28, 2020
|Describe a situation when it was important for you to work with someone you didn't know
7 - @Holt I suggest you rewrite this essay using a situation in which you met the lecturer of yours half...
UndergraduateSunday Ujong - Jan 20, 2020 / ReginaOtu - Jan 25, 2020
|What does diversity mean to you and why do you think society needs diversity? No more than 250 words
Undergraduatejacobs - Jan 24, 2020 / Holt - Jan 25, 2020
|NTU - Skin problems / Describe a person who has had an influence on you.
2 - Is there a character limitation on your statement? If so, you should lessen the description of your skin problems...
Undergraduatejtjt99 - Jan 23, 2020 / Holt - Jan 23, 2020
|Tell us about a time when you learned from failure - UofT One Idea Application
4 - Merged: Tell us about a time when you learned from failure - UofT One Idea Application During...
Undergraduateguyucguy - Jan 21, 2020 / guyucguy - Jan 23, 2020
|Part A, Waterloo AIF - biomedical program, pharmacy
2 - The essay is weak and unimpressive for the most part. However, there are certain sections that you can use...
Undergraduatevmsl1937 - Jan 21, 2020 / Holt - Jan 21, 2020
|Describe a situation when you had to work very hard to achieve what was required.
UndergraduateEvidenceBrown - Jan 20, 2020 / EvidenceBrown - Jan 21, 2020
|AIF Extracurriculars Essay - additional information
3 - This is meant to be only a response statement as it offers only a 600 character allotment. So you...
Undergraduategeorgiaberg - Jan 20, 2020 / Holt - Jan 20, 2020
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