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|IELST TASK 1: Australian kids' leisure actives.
Writing Feedbackharry109 - Jan 24, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Jan 26, 2014
|GMAT - ANALYTICAL WRITING ASSIGNMENT - AVIA AIRLINES
3 - Thanks for the advice. I believe the same too, however in the GMAT you're asked to state two or...
Writing Feedbackfrancoise - Jan 20, 2014 / francoise - Jan 25, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1: LINE GRAPH/ change in fish and other three types of meat consumption
7 - This could be replaced by the overview paragraph, which is often written after the introduction....
Writing Feedbackleoking - Jan 24, 2014 / MisterWandering - Jan 25, 2014
|IELTS; what people say about advertisement?
7 - Hi Fikri, As dumi said do not narrow down you scope in the introduction itself In several parts of...
Writing Feedbackfikri - Jan 23, 2014 / Arun0506 - Jan 25, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : The main reasons for study and the amount of study grant
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 24, 2014 / tiaDS - Jan 25, 2014
|Ielts - changes in weekly spending by Britons on three types of fast food
5 - Good introduction :) Well, according to my knowledge the minimum word count should be 150 and...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 21, 2014 / dumi - Jan 25, 2014
|The given chart compares the amount of sales taking different products: games software, DVD and CDs
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 19, 2014 / tiaDS - Jan 24, 2014
|My sister got sick - I had embarrassing experience then.
2 - Hello Elhaam, I found some punctuation errors in your paragraph. Always space after (,)and (.) You don't have to...
Writing FeedbackElhaam - Jan 24, 2014 / Neupane3 - Jan 24, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: How color influence people's health and capacity for work
5 - Let's do one for this following this approach; Colors have a great impact on our lives (hook) According to...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 23, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 24, 2014
|"Inventions vs doctors"; 'broken bones, diseases, pain and suffering'
NEW - Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extend do you agree with this statements? Give...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 24, 2014 / — -
|TECHNOLOGY; PROBLEM AFFECTING MY COMMUNITY
6 - Well, your question asks you to write about a problem that affects your community. So, you need to talk...
Writing Feedbackshaii - Jan 22, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 24, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The graph shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Jan 20, 2014 / ARIA - Jan 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Summarising two charts (Demand and electricity usage during typical day)
6 - Hi Hanafi The most important point in IELTS writing task 1 is structure. As "dumi" explained you need...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 20, 2014 / ARIA - Jan 23, 2014
|Parents presently tend to let their children study or research subjects freely what they want
3 - Hi hoangle308 . I think i should have been This is because parents allow their little kids not only...
Writing Feedbackhoangle308 - Jan 23, 2014 / odon - Jan 23, 2014
|TOEFL; Do you prefer to eat out or eat at home ?
Writing Feedbackodon - Jan 22, 2014 / odon - Jan 23, 2014
|Letters, email, or telephone communication? Yes - it's more comfortable and can save time and money
5 - Gabriella especially when we are talking about embarrassing moments or apologizing for what I have done wrong especially...
Writing FeedbackGabriella - Jan 23, 2014 / odon - Jan 23, 2014
|Tourism; When visiting another country, huge cultural differences may arise.
3 - You haven't used the most important word here which is "TOURISM". It is good to have a multicultural environment...
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Jan 21, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 23, 2014
|People attend university for many different reasons. 'making more money'
4 - Your essay seems to be a bit lengthy, especially the size of the paragraphs. TOEFL has a major bearing...
Writing Feedbacktarabas - Jan 20, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 23, 2014
|IELTS task 1: the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040
6 - Ok... this is what I suggest' Similarities - From 2030 onward the aging population of all three countries...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 22, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 23, 2014
|IELST Task 2: Should people be exempted from taxes?
Writing Feedbackharry109 - Jan 22, 2014 / eddies - Jan 23, 2014
|Why people work? Money or Pleasure
4 - ok,,thank you Pahan n SHanafi I will try to make it better.. thanks very much for your advice,,this...
Writing Feedbackfikri - Jan 22, 2014 / fikri - Jan 23, 2014
|The bar chart depicts the percentage how Britons spent the amount of money for buying fast foods
2 - Your should adopt a more formal style of writing that suits report writing. Be concise and clear in...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 22, 2014 / dumi - Jan 23, 2014
|IELTS: Who should care for the elders?
Writing Feedbackanusha38 - Jan 22, 2014 / anusha38 - Jan 23, 2014
|TOEFL/Disagree Playing Computer Games wastes time and students should not be allowed!
3 - You should separate this sentence into two sentences, and in fact, these sentences should be put in...
Writing Feedbackcshcara - Jan 22, 2014 / sntinn - Jan 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Process of Making Chewing Gum
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 19, 2014 / SHanafi - Jan 23, 2014
|IELTS essay - Teenage or Adult life - which brings more happiness in life?
7 - learning new things is a common phenomenon throughout one's life. The biggest advantage during teenage years compared to...
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Jan 21, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 22, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : The challenges people face when they go to live in other countries
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 22, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 22, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Global population figures and figures for urban populations
5 - society means "the aggregate of people living together in a more or less ordered community" or "an organization or...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 20, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 22, 2014
|IELTS task 1: the chart in global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 19, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 22, 2014
|IELTS - wealth countries achieved over 4.0% in 60s and declined sharply under 3.0 percent in 1970
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 17, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 22, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : The percentage of international student in different Canadian provinces
3 - The chart indicates the percentage of overseaforeigngraduate students from universities based on several regions in Canada from 2001...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 20, 2014 / dumi - Jan 21, 2014
|What would I change in my village if I could get an opportunity!
Writing Feedbackmehraban - Jan 21, 2014 / mehraban - Jan 21, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Population figures in Japan
5 - It's good for putting effort to improve your grammar by constructing more complex sentences. However, for this task,...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 20, 2014 / dumi - Jan 21, 2014
|Human is a complicated creature; Classifying people
3 - It classifies people .... Interesting classification - trying to figure out to which I'm falling ....LOL...
Writing Feedbacknosomi - Jan 21, 2014 / dumi - Jan 21, 2014
|Why people go to the museum ?
Writing Feedbackodon - Jan 20, 2014 / odon - Jan 21, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 travel alone or with friends?
10 - okey MisterWandering,, many thanks for the advice I will try to rewrite again and we can discuss again about...
Writing Feedbackfikri - Jan 20, 2014 / fikri - Jan 21, 2014
|IELTS task 1: A survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company.
4 - The given bar chart illustrates ten factors that influence work effectiveness of two different age groups in a...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 20, 2014 / MisterWandering - Jan 21, 2014
|(IELTS TASK 2) closing offices to save energy
Writing Feedbackfikri - Jan 19, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 21, 2014
|IELTS: Residents of Germany have allocated less money amongst the four European countries
5 - Wow... Pahan, thank you very much. You have shown me more than I expected. Once more, these points, as...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 19, 2014 / eddies - Jan 21, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 General: Job application for a waiter position
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 18, 2014 / Oryx97 - Jan 20, 2014
|[TOEFL] is following the customs of the new country better?
Writing Feedbacksomething - Jan 20, 2014 / dumi - Jan 20, 2014
|'when the world was created, music was born'; Traditional vs International music
7 - In my opinion, you have organized your essay well. But, make it better, so that the readers could understand...
Writing Feedbackmyth - Jan 18, 2014 / fikri - Jan 20, 2014
|Cities that you want to visit - London, Rome, Paris, New York, Los Angeles, & Washington
Writing Feedbackdana27 - Jan 18, 2014 / something - Jan 20, 2014
|TOEFL' Library or Sport , Which one do you think more important ?
Writing Feedbackodon - Jan 19, 2014 / something - Jan 20, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The graph shows the average GDP growth
4 - Thanks Dumi. You have spent your time to mark my writing and gave me some notable feedback and the...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 18, 2014 / eddies - Jan 19, 2014
|My View on Poverty in my Country
Writing Feedbackbutterflypan - Jan 19, 2014 / dumi - Jan 19, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Harbour City Tourism
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 18, 2014 / fikri - Jan 19, 2014
|LUCK Vs HARD WORK ; 99% of the success depend on hard work
Writing Feedbackodon - Jan 18, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 19, 2014
|IELTS TASK2: Best farming methodolgy : Current modern or traditional
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 18, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 19, 2014
|Providing financial support for elders is the responsibility of governments or not?
3 - You take the position of disagreeing with the statement. i.e. you hold the view that governments have an obligation...
Writing Feedbacksa_228 - Jan 5, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 19, 2014
|IELTS>criminal trials in law court are telecasted on Television for public
5 - Thanks for all comments Specially,Pahan,with your help, I today passed Ielts as it was almost similar question. However, I...
Writing Feedbackznack - Jan 16, 2014 / znack - Jan 18, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: the advantages and disadvantages living in a small village
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 17, 2014 / dumi - Jan 18, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Best way to improve public health.
2 - There is no doubt about your writing skills. You display excellent writing skills :) However, IELTS tasks have major...
Writing Feedbackthakursajeeb - Jan 18, 2014 / dumi - Jan 18, 2014
|[TOEFL] learning about life by other experience or your own experience?
3 - This is exactly what others are doing here by giving their comments. It is our pleasure to help you...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Jan 17, 2014 / dumi - Jan 18, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The brief summary of healthcare and life expectancy
3 - Yes, Pahan has given you good advice. This is the structure we suggest you to follw; 1. Introduction (one...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 17, 2014 / dumi - Jan 18, 2014
|IELTS task 2: farming methods
Writing Feedbacktranminh97 - Jan 17, 2014 / dumi - Jan 18, 2014
|AP English class, We need to write a 300-400 essay on WHAT HOME IS?
5 - Hi There! I attend Townsend Harris Highschool, a humanities school and they teach us english till it becomes...
Writing Feedbackdaydreamer08 - Jan 15, 2014 / tharrisite15 - Jan 17, 2014
|Two limits for each crime type is needed: the upper and the lower - for equity
Writing Feedbackorthofracture - Jan 16, 2014 / orthofracture - Jan 17, 2014
|TOEFL: Serious movies or comedies ? Which is better?
6 - If you improve your essay structure, you can easily aim a score more than 25/30. Your sentences are well...
Writing Feedbackzsy1990325 - Jan 16, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 17, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 :Children need to eat a healthy meal at school!
4 - ....Actually I think this is out of question. Everybody agrees with the statement and therefore this sentence sounds...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 16, 2014 / dumi - Jan 17, 2014
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