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|Let's make mineral soup..........
4 - yep.... now understand what your task expects. :) However, as Pahan also had some concerns above, I too...
Writing FeedbackDuave - Feb 26, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|Its Hard to say Goobye
3 - Pay attention what Pahan suggested to you :) sheShe had Bowel Cancer, but she never told anyonetill about a...
Writing Feedbackmgurl101 - Feb 26, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|Paid work must be appreciated but it must be good for children's health and mind
5 - In many under developed countries, poverty is the biggest problem and people cannot afford basic needs of life such...
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Feb 25, 2014 / dumi - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : About Overweight
2 - In your first paragraph you should make it clear what you want to say in the following paragraph, in...
Writing Feedbackehaforyou - Feb 27, 2014 / nightmare2k - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: advantages and disadvantages of working mother
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 23, 2014 / ehaforyou - Feb 27, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: The best way to improve public health- increasing sports facilities?
4 - Moreover, improving sports facilities may motivate more and more people to take care of their health and fitness because...
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Feb 25, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 27, 2014
|Graduates from coeducational schools are more likely to integrate into the real life effortlessly
4 - Where is your opinion? It is always good to conclude an intro stating your opinion clearly if the...
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|Toefl - essay evaluation - Many subject learning is better or specializing in one subject
2 - which can be availed.... "avail" may not be the best word for this idea. My suggestion; Knowledge is...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS TASK2: WHY DO YOU NEED MUSIC?
Writing FeedbackPhuong Thao - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|What is Love? What does it mean to you?
3 - Why not keep this in present tense? Of course we need love today and also tomorrow :D Therefore,...
Writing Feedbackjordandhale - Feb 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 26, 2014
|Toefl evalution - Impact of television on children
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 25, 2014 / sandipsinh - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: WHO DECIDE TO CHOOSE SUBJECT FOR CHILDREN
4 - It is nicer if you could construct this into: 1. a 'conclusion' signal: In conclusion, ....etc, 2. a...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Feb 25, 2014 / eddies - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS Being a volunteer in the community is not rare among high school students
Writing FeedbackWendyli - Feb 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 26, 2014
|Internet advantages and disadvantages.
4 - Using internet becamehas become an indispensable part of life for many people.However, some people think that it has a...
Writing Feedbacknigulina - Feb 25, 2014 / niesaysi - Feb 26, 2014
|BENEFITS AND DRAWBACKS OF CREDIT CARDS
6 - They have performed many essential roles in daily people's basics, however, they containing the threat of substantial debt due...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Feb 24, 2014 / niesaysi - Feb 26, 2014
|"Prevention is better than cure". Out of a country's health budget,
9 - In conclusion, it is the duty of governments that they provide better health services as well as educate their...
Writing Feedbackmariasultana - Feb 24, 2014 / mariasultana - Feb 26, 2014
|A paragraph for IELTS: benefits of mobile phones
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Feb 23, 2014 / Atakeielts - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS 7 WRITING TASK 2: ARE THE ENTERTAINERS PAID TOO MUCH?
3 - It is common to rouse a debate on whether celebrities deserve their paymentssuch high revenueswhenever we talk about them....
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Feb 25, 2014 / dumi - Feb 26, 2014
|IELTS TASK II : Distance Education or Classroom-based learning. Agree Disagree
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 25, 2014 / dumi - Feb 25, 2014
|Every generation has a lot of differences - because problems, technology and ideology surrounded
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 25, 2014 / niesaysi - Feb 25, 2014
|Toefl Topic: which is better? Gaining knowledge from books or experience?
3 - Hi, It's common that most people would think naturally that knowledge we gain is literally knowledge from books. True,...
Writing FeedbackCharlos0987 - Feb 23, 2014 / aldebaran - Feb 25, 2014
|How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?
8 - ... this sentence is very confusing. Just like dumi, I too cannot understand what you are trying to...
Writing Feedbackmontegrappa - Feb 23, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 25, 2014
|Help With Drugs and Alcohol Psych Class Thesis Statement
Writing Feedbackpsychkate - Feb 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 25, 2014
|IELTS (Writing 2) - Personality development - Born characteristics Vs Experiences
3 - Hi dear, Thanks for your comment. Would you have any suggestions on separating this thesis statement for...
Writing Feedbackmontegrappa - Feb 25, 2014 / montegrappa - Feb 25, 2014
|IELTS Task I : Housing owned and rented in UK
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 7, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 25, 2014
|IELTS Task II : the influence of advertisement on children
Writing FeedbackMaisy - Feb 19, 2014 / Shinigami97 - Feb 25, 2014
|Some people deny changes and choose to stay in their comfort zone
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 8, 2014 / eddies - Feb 24, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Diagram of Earthquake-resistant buildings
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 23, 2014 / eddies - Feb 24, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: the advantage and disadvantage of media for communicating information
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 22, 2014 / Shinigami97 - Feb 24, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2 : About Technology Effect
3 - As the high developing of technology,With the rapid development of information communication technologies, people now have a lot of...
Writing Feedbackehaforyou - Feb 23, 2014 / dumi - Feb 24, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: AIR TRANSPORT USED TO EXPORT FOOD
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 23, 2014 / Purwati Ayu - Feb 24, 2014
|IELTS. The Question is: The replacement of old workers. Do you agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackgerman89 - Feb 23, 2014 / dumi - Feb 24, 2014
|It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents.
5 - essayforum. com/graduate-essays-4/realistic-expectation-job-satisfaction-all- workers-56004 Please also comment on my other piece if possible :] Many thanks!!...
Writing Feedbackmontegrappa - Feb 23, 2014 / montegrappa - Feb 24, 2014
|IELTS: Usually directors are paid much higher salaries than simple workers.
3 - MostIn most of the big corporation's,their CEO's salary is incomparable to that of ordinary workers. Some people believe...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 23, 2014 / dumi - Feb 24, 2014
|Report of Numeracy Skill in 24 Countries
10 - This is a fragment sentence. You need a main sentence to lead your reader understanding the topic of...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 22, 2014 / eddies - Feb 23, 2014
|The chart below display skill levels of male and female employees in a British company in
5 - I am not sure enough this is the right sentences. This indicates run-on sentences. (two main sentences running...
Writing FeedbackJennyPham - Feb 11, 2014 / eddies - Feb 23, 2014
|Should a new restaurant be built in your neighborhood?
5 - You put too many commas in this paragraph. You'd better end your paragraph with a simple structure which only...
Writing Feedbackodon - Feb 11, 2014 / eddies - Feb 23, 2014
|IELTS ; Should tax be paid ? Advantages and Disadvantages
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 17, 2014 / Atakeielts - Feb 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than
Writing FeedbackALEX NGUYEN - Feb 22, 2014 / ALEX NGUYEN - Feb 22, 2014
|Toefl - Which Technology in the past 50 years has changed your life the most?
4 - Pahan, thanks for your feedback. I looked at the sample essays that you mentioned. They are very helpful. I...
Writing Feedbacktoefltest123 - Feb 21, 2014 / toefltest123 - Feb 22, 2014
|The Perceptions of The Electronic Device in Modern Era
3 - hi, Electronic devices are the best stuff in the world to communicate. To compare it on a couple ofSome...
Writing Feedbackgerman89 - Feb 22, 2014 / aldebaran - Feb 22, 2014
|first impression about a person´s character - toefl
5 - As I said before this a pretty cool website. Very useful for those who want to improve their writing...
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 20, 2014 / aldebaran - Feb 22, 2014
|IELTS - "Health is wealth " ; average weight of people is increasing
6 - hello Thank you for reviewing my essay. I will consider your suggestions and improve my writing....
Writing Feedbackmottana - Feb 20, 2014 / mottana - Feb 22, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 - Whether necessary to travel abroad to learn about foreign culture or not
6 - Well... in this task, you would be given marks for particular features of your essay. That is why...
Writing Feedbackrogerl - Feb 22, 2014 / dumi - Feb 22, 2014
|IELTS Task I : Describing Map Chorleywood Area
11 - hi, Pahan. while I mention the technical content, like diagonally area and darkly area, it makes reader easier...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 17, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 22, 2014
|Nowadays, food travels thousands of miles from the farm to the consumer. --ielts
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Feb 18, 2014 / dumi - Feb 22, 2014
|Some employers are giving increased importance to social skills --ielts
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Feb 16, 2014 / Atakeielts - Feb 22, 2014
|IELTS 1; Global sales of games software, Ds and Video or DVD
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 19, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 22, 2014
|Nowadays it is easy to apply for and be given a credit card. -- ielts
Writing FeedbackAtakeielts - Feb 18, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 22, 2014
|IETLS Task II : News Editor decide to broadcast or print in news paper
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 21, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 22, 2014
|Toefl - Work in GROUP or Work independently?
6 - Hi, I want to request you to have a more meaningful topic for your essay. The title should carry...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 20, 2014 / dumi - Feb 21, 2014
|Task I, consumption and expenditure of Fast food
3 - The first chart provides agglomerationdetails of expenditure for fast food based on per-capita income and the second graph illustrates...
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 21, 2014 / dumi - Feb 21, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Equal number of gender in the universities entrance
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 12, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 21, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : The Freedom of Creativity
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 11, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 21, 2014
|Task 2. Crime and Punishment. IELTS
9 - For me, you write well enough. Also, if you could, you might construct your conclusion with this structure: ...
Writing FeedbackKarlito - Feb 13, 2014 / eddies - Feb 21, 2014
|IELTS Task II: Dress reflects Chracter
10 - if you could, you might construct your conclusion with this structure: The Concluding Paragraph has three parts: 1. a...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 10, 2014 / eddies - Feb 20, 2014
|IELTS Some people think that government should provide unemployed people with a free cell
11 - Hellooo.., I strongly suggest you to follow Pahan's approach for your introduction. Also, if you could, you...
Writing Feedbackagi - Feb 11, 2014 / eddies - Feb 20, 2014
|IELTS TASK I Fitnes Membership
4 - Turning to the bar chart for fitness members can be seen that from 1970 onwards the proportion of fitness...
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Feb 20, 2014 / tiaDS - Feb 20, 2014
|I am applying Semester at Sea and I just want feedback!
2 - Since youthmy very young days , I have been listening to my father tell thefather's stories of adventures he...
Writing Feedbackjordifg - Feb 20, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 20, 2014
|GRE1. dependence on technology weaken thinking ability
Writing FeedbackSarah Park - Feb 20, 2014 / Sarah Park - Feb 20, 2014
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