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|TASK 1. the table shows the consumer durables owned in Britain from 1972-1983
5 - I think this linking part (as well as) here is inappropriate. Here is the example of the use:...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 21, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|Toefl Essay - Historical building or new building
3 - Firstly, constructing new buildings would improve over all architecture and infrastructure of the city because modern designs and patterns...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 21, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : average annual Gross Domestic Products (GDP)
12 - Actually the chart presents details and data. It is you who compare and analyse. So, The chart presents...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 17, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Different views about the rising consumption of consumer products
4 - Well, I think you have given enough explanations as to how the economy would be boosted by enhancing public...
Writing Feedbackcrystal941 - Mar 22, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS writing task 1: a table about poverty rates among Australian.
Writing FeedbackBanshee611 - Mar 23, 2014 / Banshee611 - Mar 23, 2014
|Tobacco and alcohol are drugs. Should made legal or illegal?
4 - Some people on the other hand might argue that these products should be legal as it helpinghelpsto boost employment...
Writing Feedbackbwosti - Mar 23, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|The Boy whose Parents were Murdered by Life
6 - Rafiq opened his eyes and started cryingto weep.He cried out a flood of tears. ''KILL ME! KILL ME NOW,...
Writing FeedbackSaqib - Mar 14, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the the number
5 - Others makekeep themselves busy on sports like playing basketball or even volleyball to engage onin healthy physical activities and...
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|"It sucks that we're dead." ; SHORT STORY
3 - The oldest, wisest and most responsible one among them, Prudent, thought Reck a nuisance and felt that the...
Writing FeedbackTempest2455 - Mar 23, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|Parents are the best teachers ? It's a controversial issue
9 - Include the purpose of your writing, e.g. IELTS, TOEFL,GRE etc. in the title itself. Then we can provide you...
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|THE POWER LIES WITHIN YOU - Changing a country
5 - Well, moderators perform administrative functions on this site in addition to making their contributions to help others improve their...
Writing FeedbackTo2ahassan - Mar 14, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS: Most significant invention of the last 30years - Internet
6 - ---> This statement leaves me in the state of assumption. I can understand that Internet helps us to...
Writing FeedbackNhasir Rahmatia - Mar 21, 2014 / Arun0506 - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS 2 - Retirement homes or Living with families? Which way is better for the elderly?
12 - Thank you all for your time and suggestions. I certainly appreciate it. Well, I'd like to suggest you...
Writing Feedbackconviction - Mar 20, 2014 / conviction - Mar 23, 2014
|Labelling any art work as a Master Piece is not appropriate!
Writing FeedbackDiana_saak - Mar 22, 2014 / Diana_saak - Mar 23, 2014
|When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.
Writing Feedbackonlineuser - Mar 22, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Pros and cons of Credit card
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 17, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS task II : Illiteracy rates by region and gender; 'it was tearful'
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 4, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 22, 2014
|IELTS PART 1 - Car ownership in Britain 1971-2007
5 - First, you should have uploaded your graph for us to make more meaningful comments. Use the Attach file(s) feature...
Writing Feedbackle_kimhung - Mar 21, 2014 / dumi - Mar 22, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 - Internet Use in Europe
Writing FeedbackJasS - Mar 13, 2014 / Misnariah Idrus - Mar 22, 2014
|Liberty and Functioning Democracy: What is Liberty? How Practical is it in a Functioning D
Writing Feedbacko5vx - Mar 15, 2014 / theresaypil - Mar 22, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: full-time education for young people 18 and below; agree or disagree
Writing Feedbackilufatsy16 - Mar 22, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 22, 2014
|Boston Leadership Institute (spelling and grammar)
Writing FeedbackWoodstock - Mar 19, 2014 / niesaysi - Mar 21, 2014
|TOEFL ESSAY - PERSISTENCE IS KEY TO SUCCESS - AGREE OR DISAGREE.
NEW - THE PHRASE NEVER, NEVER GIVE UP MEANS TO KEEP TRYING NEVER STOP WORKING FOR YOUR GOALS. DO YOU AGREE...
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|Conclusion for compare/ contrast essay - solar energy and wind energy.
2 - Although both solar power and wind power are never-ending and create absolutely no pollution, they differ in some aspects...
Writing Feedbackfei114 - Mar 20, 2014 / sandipsinh - Mar 21, 2014
|Is homeschooling preferable to traditional school education?
Writing Feedbackrespina - Mar 20, 2014 / respina - Mar 21, 2014
|IELTS writing task 2. Visitors should follow local behavior or not ?
7 - Thank you dumi. You are right, I need to improve my clarity, since the examiner is not a thought-reader......
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Mar 19, 2014 / Mowonight - Mar 21, 2014
|Many students choose to attend schools or universities outside their home countries. toefl
3 - ... this sentence needs better presentation. It doesn't flow well :( Other than learning a new...
Writing Feedbackhakuyo1112 - Mar 20, 2014 / dumi - Mar 21, 2014
|IELTS writing task 1: describe a line graph about modern technology usage in the UK.
5 - The graph reveals information about the percentage usage of modern technology by the households in Britain during the period...
Writing FeedbackBanshee611 - Mar 14, 2014 / dumi - Mar 21, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2 question. 'Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant..'
Writing Feedbackaddictivemate - Mar 19, 2014 / eddies - Mar 21, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Idea of going overseas for university study. To What extend do you agree ?
2 - First, you need to comply with the forum rules; You should open all IELTS essays in Writing Feedback forum....
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 20, 2014 / dumi - Mar 21, 2014
|task 1. visits abroad made by UK residents from 1994 to 1998 by purpose and destination
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 20, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 20, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Fitness membership among male and female (rewrite)
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 20, 2014 / eddies - Mar 20, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 (Line Chart) - Goods Transported by Four Modes of Transport.
Writing FeedbackJasS - Mar 20, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 20, 2014
|The chart shows the leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 19, 2014 / JasS - Mar 20, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 (Diagrama) - The Process of Cement and Concrete Production.
Writing FeedbackJasS - Mar 20, 2014 / puman - Mar 20, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - transport and car use in Edmonton
3 - Follow dumi's suggestion for this task, :) This task is to assess your report writing skills and...
Writing Feedbackphuong8593 - Mar 17, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 20, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Reasons for studying history and the effect of not studying history
Writing Feedbackcrystal941 - Mar 19, 2014 / dumi - Mar 20, 2014
|I stole my friend's money; learn from my makes mistakes!!
4 - My mistake ishad been that I stolestolen money from my friend,i hasI learnedlearn from my mistake and i try...
Writing Feedbackthjchlachjeu - Mar 19, 2014 / dumi - Mar 20, 2014
|Toefl essay - AGREE OR DISAGREE - ONE LONG VACATION OR SEVERAL LONG VACATION.
6 - It's like this; QUESTION; Where did you go? (past tense) Where do you go? (present tense) ANSWER; I...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 18, 2014 / dumi - Mar 20, 2014
|Celebrities benefits obtained through their popularity largely outweigh the issues tackled by them
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Mar 19, 2014 / dumi - Mar 20, 2014
|Do you think that studying abroad is advantages ?
Writing Feedbackheram - Mar 18, 2014 / eddies - Mar 19, 2014
|Ielts: The population growth! each period of time had different leaders
5 - Hi, Abdurasul I wanna suggest you in a simple thing. To me, better you separate each paragraph. It is...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Mar 18, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 19, 2014
|Credit Cards do good to people ? Agree/ Disagree
7 - You need to improve a lot on the essay structure. In your other threads, I have given you the...
Writing Feedbackbwosti - Mar 15, 2014 / dumi - Mar 19, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 - Total UK School Spendings!
Writing FeedbackJasS - Mar 18, 2014 / dumi - Mar 19, 2014
|Toefl - Differences between parents' generation and our generation.
7 - Yes, that's correct. It helps you tell facts to the reader without wasting his time which the reader...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 17, 2014 / dumi - Mar 19, 2014
|Celebrity/ famous film star/ sports personality - 'opt for entertainment field'
Writing FeedbackNaveed786 - Mar 17, 2014 / Naveed786 - Mar 18, 2014
|task-2 General ielts- Industrial pollution is increasing all around the world.
6 - Hey, Use of comma,semi-colon, period is required at many places in your essay. Always read your essay a...
Writing Feedbackamu1988 - Mar 15, 2014 / sandipsinh - Mar 18, 2014
|CONDITIONING STYLES; Child conditioning
3 - From the moment people are born, they begin to learn things and this learning process continues till the...
Writing Feedbackrivers785 - Mar 13, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 18, 2014
|One national cirriculum is forcing students to study materials they dont want to
5 - Well, I think should have not opened your essay with a statement expressing your opinion. You need to tell...
Writing Feedbacksudeepdai - Mar 7, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 18, 2014
|IELTS task 1: How a thermos flask works.
4 - Next part is called vacuum flask THAT IS OR WHICH IS divided into two parts: This part is divided...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Mar 7, 2014 / sandipsinh - Mar 18, 2014
|"Many holidaymakers would rather stay in a hotel room. Others prefer a campsite." (Essay)
Writing FeedbackGustav02 - Mar 16, 2014 / Gustav02 - Mar 18, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : Developing on Chorleywood Village
4 - hi, eddies . Can I say that you mean tenses consistency usage (continuous and past simple). When...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 18, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 18, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1; Country Food/ Drinks/ Tobacco/ Clothing/ Footwear/ Leisure/ Education
5 - The table illustrates the need for different items in 5 countries in 2002. In general, the percentage of national...
Writing Feedbackthuylinh - Mar 18, 2014 / thuylinh - Mar 18, 2014
|IELTS: Should whistle blowers be immune from punishment?
Writing Feedbackkai_tabz - Mar 18, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 18, 2014
|TOEFL:Travel from home to a place 40 miles away. Which method of travel you would choose ?
4 - However, train would not be a suitable option in this case because most of the trains in my city...
Writing Feedbackmax2014 - Mar 14, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 18, 2014
|IELTS; 'every student either male or female should be given equal opportunity'
12 - purse- pusue Anyway, I can see the argument here and it does make sense. :) I am totally agreed...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Mar 16, 2014 / ieltspinoy - Mar 18, 2014
|PTE essay----Do governments have a legitimate role to legislate to protect citizens?
3 - Tobacco is a prevalent drug attracting over a billion of adults every day. However, long-term consuming tobacco regularly for...
Writing Feedbackdorisluo - Mar 14, 2014 / dumi - Mar 18, 2014
|Why are Cities Becoming Overcrowded? - IELTS topic.
Writing Feedbackuzboy - Mar 13, 2014 / uzboy - Mar 18, 2014
|Essay on the extent to which living in a city in the 21st century is stressful
5 - Living in a city is totally different from living in the countryside. ...You have not yet told...
Writing Feedbackmadona - Mar 15, 2014 / dumi - Mar 18, 2014
|"Where I see myself in ten years" but written in third person essay.
3 - Many people thingthink about their future and the things theydream about their desiresto achieve . A student may want...
Writing FeedbackEms27 - Mar 6, 2014 / dumi - Mar 18, 2014
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