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|What ways do you suggest to make ads effective? What are their good and bad effects on the society?
11 - In advertising, the term "effective ad" means both improved marketing and consumer reception. The better they market the product,...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 16, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 17, 2015
|Telecommuting suits only to devoted workers, who know how to manage their time and personal life.
3 - Thank you for amazing suggestions, I appreciate. I am going to check it carefully following your advice....
Writing FeedbackAcioncion - Jan 16, 2015 / Acioncion - Jan 16, 2015
|Rational leader or mindless lunatic? Hero or a traitor? Louis Riel essay
2 - Interesting paper! There are few run-on words (no space in between) and issues with dates (e.g. October 22nd...
Writing FeedbackCesauto - Jan 16, 2015 / EF_Sheri - Jan 16, 2015
|Some countries follow religious laws in its way of punishment such as Saudi Arabia and Iran.
Writing Feedbackfatine - Jan 13, 2015 / fatine - Jan 15, 2015
|A large portion of country's budget should be diverted to health and preventive measures.
2 - Alleb, when you write an introductory statement, make sure to present the prompt in the first sentence by rephrasing...
Writing Feedbacktantadedanaan - Jan 13, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 15, 2015
|How do you show your appreciation to your family and friends-agree or disagree
4 - When a topic asks you to agree or disagree, you don't have to necessarily choose a specific side, provided...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 14, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 15, 2015
|GRE: Teaching should be both a pull and push, where praise is given when the student does right
Writing Feedbacksumdysan - Jan 12, 2015 / smilex0 - Jan 13, 2015
|The apple campany's slogan: "Think Different" has become a motto of the new generation.
3 - @stretchthelimit Thank you for your evaluation. I just feel that 25 minutes is so short for an SAT essay...
Writing FeedbackCharlesD - Jan 10, 2015 / CharlesD - Jan 13, 2015
|Computer technology is the present world. It's shaping our futures at rates unprecedented in history
2 - As a result, its profound effects on our education system ... it is profound By all means, answer to...
Writing FeedbackSundus - Jan 11, 2015 / Fardhani Putri - Jan 13, 2015
|Mom vs. Mom: The differnce between employed mothers and stay-at-home mothers
2 - The first sentence should have plural nouns: homemakers and caregivers. In fact, 61% of the total people employed......
Writing Feedbackreilmikaylie1 - Jan 5, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Jan 12, 2015
|What age group do you prefer to spend your time with? Your own age group or other ones?
2 - One of the significant influences that play a pivotal roles in a person's socialization process of a person ...
Writing Feedbackssaallaamm - Jan 10, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Jan 12, 2015
|It is common knowledge that time is flying way too fast - time is money
2 - Time is irreversible, and consequently it must be valued. People say that time is money and it's hard...
Writing FeedbackJuliett - Dec 9, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Jan 11, 2015
|I desire a farm house and natural atmosphere - "upside and downside of living in countryside"
Writing Feedbackfrazier - Jan 10, 2015 / frazier - Jan 10, 2015
|Does a country want its students to be mentally and physically ill? Sports and social activities.
2 - Since we know what prompt you are answering, you don't need to restate it. "...opinion by three...
Writing Feedbackfaezehch - Jan 9, 2015 / anonymous2014 - Jan 9, 2015
|TOEFL ESSAY -WHAT CHANGE WILL 21ST CENTURAY BRING?
2 - The essay as a whole is fairly impressive but try changing the beginning of the second sentence. Instead of...
Writing FeedbackTrinity - Jan 8, 2015 / digvijaymore - Jan 9, 2015
|There have always been scandals in history from ancient to modern society. Are scandals useful?
2 - A very good essay might need some improving in the first para From then on very flawless kudos!...
Writing Feedbacktico82 - Jan 8, 2015 / huzefaa - Jan 9, 2015
|Do you believe that elderly people used to live in a better world? IELTS-task2
Writing Feedbackssaallaamm - Jan 8, 2015 / ssaallaamm - Jan 9, 2015
|[IELTS Writing task 1] US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone
Writing Feedbackkamikazexoxo - Jan 8, 2015 / Trinity - Jan 8, 2015
|[IELTS] Writing Task 1 - The Unemployment Rate in 2 Advanced Countries
Writing Feedbackruwchii - Dec 19, 2014 / kamikazexoxo - Jan 8, 2015
|I had to choose between entering the scientific section or the literary section
Writing Feedbackabdulaziz966 - Jan 6, 2015 / naghmeh_ms - Jan 7, 2015
|Human being inherently tends to experience different things in their entire life. Changing job
NEW - Hey guys, after a long time I started preparing myself for the IELTS test again. Here is my first...
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|The internet has caused a considerable discrepancy between modern life and past life.
2 - There are obvious capitalization errors in your paper. You need to learn to proof read your work and use...
Writing Feedbacknaghmeh_ms - Jan 6, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 6, 2015
|Concern about judging criminals with the death penalty
3 - Thanks!...
Writing FeedbackBigger - Jan 5, 2015 / Bigger - Jan 6, 2015
|Sixty nine percent of waste materials in Korea is being disposed of by means of recycling
4 - I would say Korea and Sweden do not practice the process of disposing unwanted resources through chemical treatment or...
Writing FeedbackLady Elle - Jan 5, 2015 / KrithikaK - Jan 5, 2015
|A number of facts as to why computers are considered more of a disadvantage than an advantage.
3 - might want to exceed the 250 word minimum you can do this by elaborating and broadening your scope, incorporating...
Writing FeedbackLady Elle - Jan 5, 2015 / lynn1997h - Jan 5, 2015
|Waste Disposal Method, destroying dangerous waste products - Pie charts
4 - It is not stated which part of Korea is using that particular method of waste disposal, so I think...
Writing Feedbackviolethoang - Jan 2, 2015 / Lady Elle - Jan 5, 2015
|Whenever something becomes too much for me, my mother is there calming me
3 - As a whole, use stronger words and for the grammar and syntax stuff, say your essay out loud and...
Writing Feedbackmema - Jan 5, 2015 / lynn1997h - Jan 5, 2015
|Life without changes means life without emotions. Psychologists help is suggested.
3 - Keep in mind the spelling and that mistakes such as "depretion" when i assume you really mean "depression" can...
Writing Feedbacknaghmeh_ms - Jan 4, 2015 / lynn1997h - Jan 4, 2015
|The two illustrations show Coca-cola Company's percentage of sales in a pie graph
Writing FeedbackLady Elle - Jan 4, 2015 / Lady Elle - Jan 4, 2015
|A person develops different qualities and traits as he grows up from a child into an adult
4 - Thank you vincenm for your candid opinion. How can I improve my intro and conclusion? I learned from a...
Writing Feedbacksyedali1 - Jan 3, 2015 / syedali1 - Jan 4, 2015
|Why do you do what you do? The point of reading is something every already reader knows
Writing Feedbackcastor - Jan 2, 2015 / samkazmi - Jan 3, 2015
|Governments and individuals collective responsibility may be solution for the global warming.
2 - The greenhouse gases are consisted by various gases, but the most typical factor is Carbon Dioxide, which is mostly...
Writing Feedbackyen_vely - Jan 2, 2015 / stretchthelimit - Jan 2, 2015
|Questions 1-6 - openings and finales only
Writing Feedbackruwchii - Dec 19, 2014 / SHanafi - Jan 2, 2015
|Changes of the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. IELTS Task 1
3 - Thank you Kevin for your compliment and the problems you pointed out also. I'll try harder next time :)...
Writing Feedbackmanutd9111993 - Jan 1, 2015 / manutd9111993 - Jan 1, 2015
|It is clear to be seen that NGOs, social groups and communities are ubiquitous in recent years
Writing Feedbackmanutd9111993 - Jan 1, 2015 / manutd9111993 - Jan 1, 2015
|Laser Fungal Therapy Essay for Research Project
2 - Insurances do not cover... It might be clearer to say 'Insurance policies do not.." But that is nitpicking; I...
Writing Feedbackstephspecht - Dec 27, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Jan 1, 2015
|Further study is necessary - many young people want to start earning money as soon as possible.
2 - Change words in the essay like "I Think" to something like "I Know" to show that your firm on...
Writing Feedbackwangyu - Jan 1, 2015 / smunoz23 - Jan 1, 2015
|SPECIAL NEEDS KIDS DESERVE BETTER
2 - With the right accommodations they can have equal educational opportunity. (I think it's more accurate to say this instead...
Writing FeedbackLor2062005 - Dec 29, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Jan 1, 2015
|I am unsure of my exact future study plans; Cornell Arts and Sciences App
4 - I would come up with a list of your passions do you like to learn about people? create? conduct...
Writing Feedbackelissamardiney - Dec 26, 2012 / melissae - Dec 31, 2014
|In the north of Colombia there are a small native people who live on the top of mountains
2 - The sentence has some grammar I suggest using this website called ginger for grammar correction it helped me...
Writing Feedbackjhon81 - Dec 30, 2014 / nada1998 - Dec 31, 2014
|Nationality of natural persons in relation to the succession of States. Country: Indonesia
3 - Thanks, you're right, now that i read it again i realise i should work on a conclusion that creates...
Writing FeedbackCamilabido - Dec 29, 2014 / Camilabido - Dec 30, 2014
|Is it more important to have an enjoyable life than to earn a lot of money? [ielts writing task 2]
Writing FeedbackLFAle - Nov 17, 2014 / raj_ielts - Dec 30, 2014
|The Starry Night and city life NYU supplement essay
5 - Love the Van Gogh quote. Beautifully written.This is under the wordcount so you can write about 50 words more....
Writing Feedbackmelissae - Dec 21, 2014 / zeeconomist - Dec 29, 2014
|Higher education is the surest ticket to a better career life. What is important in schools?
2 - great job of providing specific examples. A couple grammar issues in the first sentence of the last paragraph. From...
Writing FeedbackJadewan - Dec 28, 2014 / jricha - Dec 28, 2014
|Anti-radiation scarf and poncho stanford intellectual vitality
2 - Well, this is a very interesting take on radiation and how it can affect the mindset of people. This...
Writing Feedbackskwangar - Dec 27, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 28, 2014
|Sugar; The new addiction. A change is needed to help us help ourselves in what we eat.
Writing FeedbackDanV - Dec 27, 2014 / keavdarapper - Dec 27, 2014
|I've written 3 paragraphs of urban life - an introduction, central paragraph and conclusion
2 - Sahar, these are not 3 paragraphs. A paragraph is composed of 3 sentences minimum with a specific topic discussed...
Writing Feedbackmissytender - Dec 26, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 26, 2014
|There is no future for public transport because travelling by car is so much more convenient.
2 - This is just my opinion, but if you don't have a word limit I would elaborate each paragraph. Also...
Writing FeedbackDieuHuong - Dec 26, 2014 / freedl21 - Dec 26, 2014
|Fame should be a surprise, not a goal.
2 - Im assuming this is suppose to 5 Paragraph essay style? If so, you need to indicate your thesis -...
Writing Feedbacknikkisia - Dec 24, 2014 / Pereirar23 - Dec 24, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 - Personal saving as a percentage of personal income
Writing Feedbackmidorimido - Dec 23, 2014 / eddies - Dec 24, 2014
|I believe we can have some measure in place to help tackle the environmental woes. IELTS TASK2
Writing FeedbackSummer LIN - Dec 23, 2014 / eddies - Dec 24, 2014
|Misconceptions about volunteer work and see their work in the right perspective
Writing Feedbackshtpcks - Dec 23, 2014 / jaark3927 - Dec 23, 2014
|It is clear that the amount of acid rain emissions in the four given sectors declined considerably
Writing Feedbacklinh_bui - Dec 22, 2014 / TheBestK - Dec 23, 2014
|Meat: Mystery and History - Pomona College Supplemental Essay
6 - Thank you for taking my suggestions into consideration. I can see the marked difference in the two essay versions...
Writing FeedbackMaxbradley - Dec 21, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 22, 2014
|Children can lead a better life if they gain the ability of both competition and cooperation
3 - Thank you very much, SHanafi. It's so nice of you. I think it's better than before and I'll follow...
Writing Feedbacktcyy - Dec 18, 2014 / tcyy - Dec 21, 2014
|My personal preference is do not have pets at all; it's not good idea to treat them as family member
2 - I did some rewrites, see if this sounds better! great ideas though Pets should be treated like family...
Writing FeedbackBlackS12 - Dec 21, 2014 / Maxbradley - Dec 21, 2014
|IELTS - the number of young people perpetrating a crime has risen significantly.
5 - The sharp increase of juvenile delinquentcy has been happened due to several causes In my view your conclusion...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Dec 18, 2014 / Azeez - Dec 21, 2014
|Transporting food by air now provides market opportunities both exporting and importing countries.
3 - Air transport has experienced the fastest growth. For this reason, some people prefer selecting this as the main...
Writing Feedbackruwchii - Dec 19, 2014 / eddies - Dec 21, 2014
|IELTS: The pattern of studying plays a major crucial aspect in the academic achievements
3 - (1)aspect to/from (2)students' academic attainment (3) As this sentence didn't support the topic well, I would say that...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Oct 27, 2014 / eddies - Dec 21, 2014
|It is not easy to describe what happiness is. IELTS essay topic.
3 - Happiness is considered important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important for achieving happiness?...
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