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|IELTS Task 2: Electronic calculators should not be allowed in school
3 - ... well this sentence is pretty confusing :( You need to express your ideas clearly and completely. The...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 4, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 14, 2014
|Disenfranchising women voters
6 - In this modern age of 21st century, nations can never think of development without equal contribution of both...
Writing FeedbackAlexx - Jan 25, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 14, 2014
|Solutions to improve public health.
6 - Thank you so much for your comments, will concentrate on the point you mentioned going further....
Writing FeedbackAbi90 - Feb 12, 2014 / Abi90 - Feb 14, 2014
|John Diefenbaker A Legendary Man Biography Essay
Writing FeedbackQammer - Jan 6, 2014 / dumi - Feb 13, 2014
|TOEFL: Professors should do more research or teach students?
Writing Feedbacknotusramone - Feb 9, 2014 / notusramone - Feb 13, 2014
|"pen and paper" examinations and your view.
Writing Feedbacktuanvn - Jan 5, 2014 / dumi - Feb 13, 2014
|Hydro-electric power generation
Writing Feedbackanhpham89 - Feb 13, 2014 / anhpham89 - Feb 13, 2014
|The ocean is much like a woman; Descriptive piece about the ocean- 10 high level English
3 - Hi, This essay should have been opened in Writing Feedback forum which is the most appropriate forum for this...
Writing Feedbackvictoriarichtst - Jan 29, 2014 / dumi - Feb 13, 2014
|Teenagers are encouraged to have part-time jobs - What do you think about this?
2 - I need to request two things from you - First, have a meaningful title for your essay when you...
Writing Feedbackjacquelyn - Feb 13, 2014 / dumi - Feb 13, 2014
|Winter Carnival Queen Scholarship Pageant Essay
Writing Feedbackraya1001 - Feb 12, 2014 / dreamer7 - Feb 12, 2014
|Child is like a piece of white paper available for anything to be written on
2 - Better you do not narrow down the scope of your prompt which talks about "foreign languages" in a...
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 12, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 12, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : School attendance in the UK in 2007
7 - I would have written: The pie chart given elucidates information on reasons why British pupils are absent at school...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 12, 2014 / Meyfam70 - Feb 12, 2014
|IELTS equal numbers of male and female students; equality is not always possible
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 11, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Feb 12, 2014
|Agree or disagree with the following statement? Face-to-face Communication is better?
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Feb 8, 2014 / sandipsinh - Feb 11, 2014
|Best way to solve growing traffic & pollution; 'consumption policy development'
8 - abnous81 this essay is too wordy. it has many not necessary word that does not support main idea;...
Writing Feedbackabnous81 - Feb 8, 2014 / agi - Feb 11, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Some people fail on their school but achieve success in their adult
3 - This idea you have presented in a more complicated manner which is not very good. The reader needs...
Writing Feedbacksweetstar - Feb 10, 2014 / dumi - Feb 11, 2014
|IELTS Task : Provide a free mobile phone and free access to find jobs
4 - From Paragraph 1: This is good as the paraphrased statement from the question, but you should pay...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 11, 2014 / eddies - Feb 11, 2014
|spend as much money as possible exploring outer space vs basic needs on Earth - TOEFL
3 - I Pahan, I really appreciate your comment. As you said, time is important and I am trying work on...
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Feb 10, 2014 / aldebaran - Feb 10, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: unpaid community service makes children kind and unselfish
3 - Well, the children are not only taught everything about Pythagorean Theorem, but there are so many other theorems...
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Feb 10, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 10, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TAKE A YEAR OFF BETWEEN HIGH SCHOOL AND UNIVERSITY
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 9, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 10, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Accepting Change Vs Resisting Change
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 4, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 10, 2014
|Loneliness is a complex and usually unpleasant emotional response
5 - Pahan Yup i understand what you mean. I did not write that sentence based on logical thinking but it...
Writing Feedbackyuvan32 - Feb 7, 2014 / yuvan32 - Feb 10, 2014
|IELTS Writing: government should spend more money on public services
6 - Pay attention to your essay structure and follow the suggestion provided by Pahan regarding that. .... wrong...
Writing Feedbackvz33 - Jan 20, 2014 / dumi - Feb 10, 2014
|The reasons why friendships sometimes die
6 - I agree with eddies. I too have no experience in assessing your writing. I only can help you with...
Writing Feedbackhaizzz1994 - Feb 8, 2014 / dumi - Feb 10, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1: BAR CHARTS- Married and Divorced in the USA
8 - hello pahan, i totally agree with you, i do want to describe more detail about the downward trend of...
Writing Feedbackleoking - Feb 8, 2014 / leoking - Feb 10, 2014
|IELTS Writing task II: discussion about children's ill behavior
Writing Feedbackdeyangsh - Feb 9, 2014 / halleybachelor - Feb 9, 2014
|Why or why not should high schools require hours of community work? GOVERNORS SCHOOL
6 - Young people under the age of 18 are the best candidates to volunteer in the community because they...
Writing Feedbackmishal_horan - Jan 6, 2014 / halleybachelor - Feb 9, 2014
|IELTS: Art subject can be accepted as compulsory subject if it brings positive role for students
4 - This sentence is too very long and disturbs the clarity of your ideas. Do not write long sentences....
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 30, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 9, 2014
|Society advances most when people break from the traditions of their predecessors.
3 - There is no specific example to back your justification. You need to pay attention to the structure of...
Writing FeedbackPepsicub - Jan 29, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 9, 2014
|TOEFL: a study with regular exercises generates dual thinking
3 - Your body paragraphs do not contain specific examples that are important for you to get a decent score. So...
Writing Feedbackvijay01 - Jan 30, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 9, 2014
|Today's fast paced and busy life demands quicker and easier food preparing methods
Writing Feedbackvijay01 - Jan 30, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 9, 2014
|The Dancing girl; SHORT STORY WRITING!
5 - Thx a lot for your comments! They are really helpful! Well, my initial idea is to create a rather...
Writing Feedbackannang - Feb 9, 2014 / annang - Feb 9, 2014
|If you were an employer, which kind of worker would you prefer to hire: an inexperienced
3 - .... you remember what? This sentence is incomplete :( For example, My previous employer which was a computer...
Writing Feedbackmanojkumar - Feb 7, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 9, 2014
|chart show the changing of patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in UK
2 - Your answer to this task prompt needs lots of improvement. Follow dumi's suggestion and re-write this according to the...
Writing Feedbackzola5000 - Feb 9, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 9, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The percentage of housing owned and rented in the UK in 1985 and 2005.
3 - This is to test you on report writing skills. So your tone should strictly support report writing and...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 7, 2014 / dumi - Feb 9, 2014
|What problem will arise if we are not using standard unit
Writing Feedbackchew - Feb 6, 2014 / chew - Feb 9, 2014
|IELTS task 1- water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries
4 - Yes, it is very important that you upload your graph. Use the "Attach file(s)" feature above and upload...
Writing FeedbackJennyPham - Feb 7, 2014 / dumi - Feb 9, 2014
|Limit absurd contents from children viewing - filtering the Internet access at home as a solution
9 - This is quite natural with all candidates, especially when the exam date approaches :D However, you do not have...
Writing FeedbackAlison - Feb 3, 2014 / dumi - Feb 9, 2014
|IELSTS WRITING TASK 2: COMPETITION OR CO-OPERATION
5 - ... I think this sentences overusing commas.. You can separate per sentences because it makes the readers confuse....
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 6, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Feb 8, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Arithmetic vs Calculator for student
5 - some benefits and drawbacks This sentence is not give clear meaning as an introduction. You need...
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Feb 4, 2014 / eddies - Feb 8, 2014
|IELTS:Task 2 Essay- Threat/Benefit of nuclear technology
11 - Thank you.. I noticed that too. I'm still experimenting with how I write essays. I'm not quite very liberal...
Writing FeedbackRhane - Feb 4, 2014 / Rhane - Feb 7, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: British's Pollution due to use of cars
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Feb 5, 2014 / Rhane - Feb 7, 2014
|IELTS TASK I: Earnings in London City
6 - I feel that you are using the same word repetitively. Let's take the word "more" as an example. You...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 5, 2014 / Alison - Feb 7, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephon
5 - Well, this sounds more or less like an overview which should have come earlier in your essay. For...
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Feb 5, 2014 / dumi - Feb 7, 2014
|IELTS: nature outweighs nurture regarding the role it play for people
2 - Your prompt is not about personality or development of a person. It is about the person's characteristics of...
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Feb 6, 2014 / dumi - Feb 7, 2014
|TOEFL; Self employment or Work for someone else?
Writing FeedbackCactuck - Feb 5, 2014 / halleybachelor - Feb 6, 2014
|Has ease of cooking improved life?
7 - This sentence is not grammatically wrong. But as the last sentence, I think it is better to say...
Writing Feedbacksevil - Feb 4, 2014 / halleybachelor - Feb 6, 2014
|Toefl: The truth issue - Relationships are boon to humans in this world
7 - I think you should pay some attention to punctuations. For example, there should be a coma after "on the...
Writing FeedbackBharu - Jan 8, 2014 / halleybachelor - Feb 6, 2014
|there should be a complete ban on the advertising of dangerous products (120-180 words)
Writing Feedbackmika1998 - Feb 5, 2014 / mika1998 - Feb 6, 2014
|IETLS: The revolution of nuclear technology brings huge merits and also demerits
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 6, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 6, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Information Technology in Human's Life
7 - I don't think it is appropriate to say "throughout 21st century" because this century is still not over....
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 27, 2014 / halleybachelor - Feb 6, 2014
|'A' mark-Parents are best teachers? Yes, they are the best teacher in whole time
Writing FeedbackZoloo - Feb 6, 2014 / halleybachelor - Feb 6, 2014
|Comfort Food: Coffee?; English 1A essay
3 - As a kid, I rejected everything that had the coffee flavor. However, as I grew, my taste buds...
Writing Feedbackmariannasoto - Feb 6, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 6, 2014
|TOEFL: supporting sports and social activities Vs supporting the libraries
Writing FeedbackToefler - Feb 5, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 6, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: the sleep patterns of people in five different occupations
13 - Very much thank you, MisterWandering. I really appreciate your thoughtful feedback I read all your writings posted...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 1, 2014 / eddies - Feb 6, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Total earnings and average annual salaries in the City of London
5 - Then, the total earning in that year was just £ 3,355 million.Compared in 1995, commodity trading earned much...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 5, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Feb 6, 2014
|Weather in Dubai is extremely contrasted - IELTS Task
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 21, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 5, 2014
|The worlds friendliest city
3 - I want to mention that Rio which know as highly criminalization city is the friendliest city in the...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 23, 2014 / SHanafi - Feb 5, 2014
|IELTS ; "where words leave off music begins"
Writing Feedbackmanugmc - Feb 4, 2014 / manugmc - Feb 5, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Earning in the City of London and Average annual salaries of executives.
5 - Dear dumi and pahan, thanks for your suggestion. There are the total earning of City of London in...
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