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|ielts writing task - Causes of obesity and worsening people's health and fitness
5 - My best advice for you is that do not worry about how well your writing would impress the reader....
Writing Feedbackkikiliyik - Apr 4, 2014 / dumi - Apr 5, 2014
|IELTS task 1: Two possible sites for the supermarket
4 - Hey, sure :D This is excellent :) You have followed the most appropriate structure, good clear sentences, good...
Writing Feedbackpuman - Apr 3, 2014 / dumi - Apr 5, 2014
|IELTS: solution for arresting traffic & pollution?; 'proper mass transportation'
Writing Feedbackkikiliyik - Apr 3, 2014 / dumi - Apr 5, 2014
|parents are the best teachers. use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
7 - 1. When you write your essay, the first thing the reader sees is your layout, which shows whole of...
Writing Feedbackprii - Mar 11, 2014 / eddies - Apr 5, 2014
|Parents are the best teachers? YES! 'mother always give you motivation, and love'
Writing Feedbackridwan - Mar 26, 2014 / juliajonk5 - Apr 4, 2014
|Ielts: Causes of worldwide land degradation; 'over-grazing'
3 - As a salient example, I can give Europe. Because this continent's lands are do not begin a sentence with...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Apr 3, 2014 / codeblue - Apr 3, 2014
|TOEFL: 'my rest time' - Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life
7 - I think the structure suggested by Dumi can help you a lot, Asia97. And below is not a complete...
Writing FeedbackAsia97 - Mar 27, 2014 / Rolla Ngo - Apr 3, 2014
|Your teamwork experience that you have learned the most from (300ws)
3 - Thank you Asia97 :) What about the body and the conclusion? Please give me a piece of advise if...
Writing FeedbackRolla Ngo - Apr 2, 2014 / Rolla Ngo - Apr 3, 2014
|Ielts : academic writing ; Learning A New Language Fast and Properly
2 - You cannot use "I, you, we" in IELTS, and must change to objective words. eg. Some say..., most people...
Writing Feedbackxlife - Apr 3, 2014 / puman - Apr 3, 2014
|The 21st century; world always changes - technology, transportation, and humankind
6 - Well, if you have a question that you don't like at all, then you can write with a 5-paragraph...
Writing Feedbackkukuh - Mar 27, 2014 / eddies - Apr 3, 2014
|'heat-debated topic'; Everyone has the right to get university education?
5 - I have seen this phrase from different corners of the world. It is too common for words. You'd...
Writing Feedbackclairpure - Apr 2, 2014 / eddies - Apr 3, 2014
|Classmates can have positive or negative impact on a child's behaviour at school
Writing FeedbackNickar - Feb 27, 2014 / eddies - Apr 3, 2014
|not to separate influence of parents & school on child; useful member of society
Writing FeedbackBINGBINGLIANG - Apr 1, 2014 / BINGBINGLIANG - Apr 3, 2014
|Museum is a place that retain of history object; Visiting museums during travel.
3 - It is always good to mention the purpose of writing your essay in the title itself. For e.g. IELTS,...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - Apr 3, 2014
|Travel within a group with guide? 'we do not enjoy the traveling, can't go everywhere'
8 - Problems with grammatical mechanics for this sentence. One of them is called comma splice, occuring when you use...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Mar 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 2, 2014
|Grievance is unsatisfaction about quality; complaint by writing more effective
Writing Feedbackridwan - Apr 2, 2014 / BOMAT_IRA - Apr 2, 2014
|'culture of conserve'; company should give money to support the arts
Writing Feedbackridwan - Apr 1, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 2, 2014
|Many teachers assign homework to students every day; 'not important in Physics'
3 - Some people think homework can help students toexercise comprehension toward lessons.comprehend and memorize what they learn in the classroom....
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - Apr 2, 2014
|IELTS: phone calls in UK; 35 billions minutes in 2002
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Apr 2, 2014 / Mowonight - Apr 2, 2014
|policies to deter negative effects; Urbanization is an important ongoing process
Writing Feedbackmonshri1979 - Mar 21, 2014 / monshri1979 - Apr 2, 2014
|IELTS: Some people enjoy change, new experiences. Changing our habits is making us better
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Mar 28, 2014 / ridwan - Apr 2, 2014
|'Today 's children are tomorrow's citizen' - good members of SOCIETY
Writing Feedbackammus1 - Apr 1, 2014 / ammus1 - Apr 1, 2014
|Internet and school teachers. 'Teachers are much more essential than computers'
2 - I can't even provide you the examples, dear :D Well, I think the best examples come from your...
Writing Feedbackningo - Mar 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 1, 2014
|IELTS: Young people commiting serious crimes should be punished as adults
9 - Yes, she is right. When you deal with IELTS, the first thing the assessor sees is your layout,...
Writing Feedbackningo - Mar 31, 2014 / eddies - Apr 1, 2014
|hard work vs luck - become the person what you are trying to be, not by the luck
5 - When introducing the topic and expressing your opinion, you do this in the introduction . (redo this in the...
Writing Feedbacknhando - Mar 28, 2014 / eddies - Apr 1, 2014
|WHAT SHOULD YOU CONSIDER TO SET A NEW BUSINESS ?
Writing FeedbackNgochieu - Mar 31, 2014 / Ngochieu - Apr 1, 2014
|Earning of money differs from person to person; 'money doesn't give success'
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful....
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|IELTS: Some people like to do only what they already do well.
10 - [quote=]Additionally, I people need changes make our lives more beautiful and exiting. [/quote] I think if you want...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Mar 28, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 1, 2014
|Toefl essay. Computer vs book - chose to buy computers
3 - It is nicer when you conclude the intro with a statement expressing your opinion very clearly. 5...
Writing Feedbackhakuyo1112 - Mar 27, 2014 / eddies - Apr 1, 2014
|IELTS-GT: Women in Navy or Air Forces - should not be allowed; instead: career, children
Writing FeedbackNaveed786 - Mar 27, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 1, 2014
|IELTS: Children to learn about money via parents - educate about the significance of money
10 - Amazing score :-) let me try your idea in my next writing. Thanks for sharing your experience....
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Mar 27, 2014 / Arun0506 - Apr 1, 2014
|Televised talent shows is not only to entertain
9 - Honestly I find my self too confused in developing my idea to support my view. As the question stated...
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Mar 22, 2014 / Misnariah Idrus - Apr 1, 2014
|IELTS; electricity volume for two major seasons in UK
2 - First, a few admin requests :) 1. Have a more meaningful title for your essay. This one has been...
Writing Feedbackgggooniel - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - Apr 1, 2014
|Advantages outweigh the disadvantages to starting foreign language early
3 - and, my conclusion style will be like: In conclusion, despite that fact ... may be beneficial for...., ...are...
Writing Feedbackcrystal941 - Apr 1, 2014 / duo008 - Apr 1, 2014
|IELTS: Prediction of world population growth - 4000 millions of people in 2040.
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 28, 2014 / Mowonight - Apr 1, 2014
|IELTS: unemployment rate comparaison between US and Japan mar.93-mar.99
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Mar 31, 2014 / crystal941 - Apr 1, 2014
|Dormitory rooms shared by two students. Choice of room should be allowed.
6 - You need to pay attention to grammar because you tend to make some minor grammar errors; University is...
Writing FeedbackPriya1 - Mar 30, 2014 / dumi - Apr 1, 2014
|Toefl - teacher evaluation; students can learn more
3 - I totally agree with Pahan. Alignment between your writing and the prompt is a mandatory requirement for this...
Writing Feedbacksayes - Mar 31, 2014 / dumi - Apr 1, 2014
|Technology become Culture - big effect to our lives
7 - ridwan, you should mention what type of your writing, whether it is ielts or toefl essay, so that the...
Writing Feedbackridwan - Mar 26, 2014 / fikri - Apr 1, 2014
|Teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Good Idea? Knowledge vs Money.
8 - Hi Mrs.Ira, I think if you want to use the affirmative statements connected with and, after and you...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Mar 27, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 1, 2014
|IELTS: languages die out annually. The greatest victims: history and culture
Writing Feedbackpuman - Mar 31, 2014 / puman - Mar 31, 2014
|Toefl - 'members can learn more' - live a life without any burdens
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better to be a member of a group than...
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|If I am to travel 40 miles distance, I would choose the train
Writing Feedbackoktavianna - Mar 21, 2014 / tiaDS - Mar 31, 2014
|conventional medicine, is it safe or not?
Writing Feedbackcodeblue - Mar 31, 2014 / dumi - Mar 31, 2014
|'TV disease' - How do movies or television influence people's behavior?
3 - 1.instead of addition to that,it will be better if you write in addition to that 2.from above mentioned channel...
Writing Feedbackmihayliuk - Sep 18, 2011 / sayes - Mar 31, 2014
|IELTS: people's weight has increased, levels of health decreased; Solusions
7 - Well, I feel you need to get hold of a strong essay structure that helps you include all essential...
Writing FeedbackNamMon - Mar 22, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 31, 2014
|IELTS; Fish and Meat consumption in European country between 1979 and 2004
5 - The graph illustrates the different needs for fish and somekindsthree types of meat in a European country between 1979...
Writing Feedbackthuylinh - Mar 18, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 31, 2014
|It's better to enjoy your money save it for the future? Family-Fixed Income
Writing Feedbackaisha2014 - Mar 18, 2014 / eddies - Mar 31, 2014
|Should wealthy nations be required to share among poorer; education and food - government
7 - You need to consider other sides of the argument and say why they're wrong not just state your own...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 28, 2014 / collegebound28 - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS Essay: teachers lesson vs other sources; 'one click of a button'
3 - Bad grammar. You may use these: alternative sources of information or alternative information sources or other secondary...
Writing Feedbackzztrieuman - Mar 30, 2014 / eddies - Mar 30, 2014
|Relying more on technology to solve problems let human ability deteriorate.
Writing Feedbackpedramcontrol - Mar 30, 2014 / niesaysi - Mar 30, 2014
|Persuasive essay on banning schoolies forever
Writing Feedbackirasa_lafi - Mar 6, 2014 / irasa_lafi - Mar 30, 2014
|money as a cause of happiness; the important necessity in human life
Writing FeedbackNhasir Rahmatia - Mar 29, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 30, 2014
|ToEFL EVALUTION - government money grant for arts or enviornment safety.
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|Commonly understood; Game are as important for adults as they are for children.
6 - Yes, actually the most important part in the intro is the background. It is the skeleton and other...
Writing Feedbackidok - Mar 27, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS: best way to improve public health; lack of exercise
7 - Did you miss "this" between "that" and "should"??? I think you should not use some meaningless...
Writing Feedbackpuman - Mar 20, 2014 / zztrieuman - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS: Japanese tourists in Australia - numbers went from 0% to 6%
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Mar 29, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS: Energy consumption by fuel in the USA (1980-2030) nuclear, solar, wind, hydro power
Writing Feedbackpuman - Mar 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|Toefl evalution - STAYING IN A PLACE WHERE SEASON CHANGE OR IN A PLACE WHERE IT DO NOT.
3 - I quite agree with Pahan. This is something we often notice here in IELTS and TOEFL essays. Students tend...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
|IELTS: Boys and Girls leisure activities; computer games, netball, basketball
5 - A closer look at the counterpartboys show thatwhile coming second 17 percent of boysthemenjoys Basketball. theThe highest percentage of...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 30, 2014
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