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|TOEFL - automobiles have changed our lives
3 - In my personal view automobiles are the ones that have brought have a new era of transportation. Yes... I...
Writing Feedbackshreyansh13 - Jun 27, 2014 / dumi - Jul 20, 2014
|[IELTS] The role of parents and school in teaching children
2 - Firstly, parents have major influence on children's behaviour, especially when they are 3-to 5-years-olds.very young. Children, by...
Writing Feedbacktoanci - Jun 28, 2014 / dumi - Jul 20, 2014
|What is alternatives to reduce industrial pollution? replace harmful industries
2 - Pollution is a vital problem worldwide. Developing countries are becoming industrialized that leads to increase pollutedmore environmental pollutionenvironment. In...
Writing Feedbackhk_apm789 - Jun 28, 2014 / dumi - Jul 20, 2014
|"Another First Date" - my narrative essay
2 - I am in the bathroom getting ready for, yet another "first date." At this point, I do not have...
Writing FeedbackLuna2014 - Jul 9, 2014 / niesaysi - Jul 19, 2014
|IELTS: spending more money on promoting healthy lifestyle or treatment
NEW - Some people think it is more important for government to spend more money on promoting healthy lifestyle in order...
Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Jul 19, 2014 / — -
|GRE-118: views we share vs views contradict our own and learning from it
2 - Why are you having three parts for the introduction. You should have had all these sentences in on para...
Writing Feedbackbuonarroti - Jun 8, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|IELTS Education plays an important role in the socioeconomic status of a country
3 - Well... you write very well. Good grammar, vocabulary , flow etc. However, I believe you need to pay a...
Writing Feedbacktink3r - Jun 24, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|(IELTS) Studying abroad is a trend among university students in Turkey
5 - It is always good to include your prompt in the post so that we can have a better understanding...
Writing Feedbackkbektas - Jun 24, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|IELTS: Abortion Should Be illegal? People should think of the consequences
4 - Recently, abortionsincreaseshave increased rapidly and becomesthe issue has become a controversial topic. Some people supposebelieve that abortions should...
Writing Feedbackthanhmai - Jun 24, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|(IELTS) a country benefits from more and more university students
5 - However, the publicsome people has doubt about the beneficial effect of college education and they believe these policies will...
Writing Feedbackpatdr - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|IELTS Essay Task 2: entertaining and educational functions of Museums
Writing FeedbackMiaCuthbert - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|TOEFL: 11 month study period for a better, more efficient education
2 - You need to improve your approach for introduction. This introduction fails to introduce your prompt to the reader....
Writing Feedbackkurosusu - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|TOEFL ESSAY - center for business vs agriculture (farming) research choice
3 - I agree with eddies .... your intro needs improvement. I think you better introduce the prompt itself. In this...
Writing Feedbackilaha - Jun 26, 2014 / dumi - Jul 18, 2014
|IELTS: How British people spending their money on fast foods? Chart
Writing Feedbackgns5958 - Jul 16, 2014 / iamchop - Jul 17, 2014
|[IELTS TASK 2] Some sectors request many well-qualified people - career choices for young generation
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 30, 2014 / iamchop - Jul 17, 2014
|TEXT Messages - novelty for us
Writing FeedbackLobocor - Jul 14, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 17, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY; Movies and computer games containing violence are very popular.
NEW - QUESTION: Nowadays movies and computer games containing violence are very popular. Some people believe that they have negative effect...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jul 17, 2014 / — -
|IELTS: Advertising makes people buy products that they really do not need
8 - You have written this very clearly. However, it does not follow the most appropriate approach for the intro....
Writing FeedbackMiaCuthbert - Jun 23, 2014 / dumi - Jul 17, 2014
|Person can only be happy if he has got a job which he enjoy
4 - It is always good to include the purpose of writing , e.g. IELTS, TOEFL etc., in your title for...
Writing Feedbackshreyansh13 - Jun 22, 2014 / dumi - Jul 17, 2014
|Making money or traveling before entering university is valuable for students
2 - At present, it is commonlyoften recommended that young people graduate from high school should to go out to work...
Writing Feedbackkevin1983 - Jul 16, 2014 / dumi - Jul 17, 2014
|What should a country do: run/ carry out the policy of isolating from the world or engaging others?
3 - I will present my thoughts in the order of your essay's content. Don't be wordy (from my viewpoint, I...
Writing Feedbackthoomr - Jul 15, 2014 / dchege711 - Jul 16, 2014
|GRE best way to understand the character of a society
2 - You're essay is very good and well written, just the excess of large words makes it hard to get...
Writing FeedbackYoullee - Jun 26, 2014 / malsackey - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS - learning languages at an early age bracket benefits more than deteriorates.
4 - Sure :) This my suggestion for your introduction; Literacy on foreign languages is a great advantage in the modern...
Writing Feedbackerocdrah - Jul 15, 2014 / dumi - Jul 16, 2014
|I definitely agree - pressure of school and parental pressure should be reduced
3 - Don't write lengthy sentences to open your essay. Begin your essay with a more catchy, interesting and meaningful...
Writing Feedbackatmnbnnr - Jul 15, 2014 / dumi - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS; working and travelling a year before university is a good idea
Writing Feedbackskyman - Jul 15, 2014 / dumi - Jul 16, 2014
|The importance of utilizing advisement globally continues to increase each year
Writing Feedbackdondon26 - Jun 21, 2014 / dumi - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS The environment problems facing today's world are so great that there is
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Jul 15, 2014 / MisterWandering - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS: 'The apple never falls far from the tree' - Parents should teach children
10 - For this essay, I think one body paragraph is not enough to cover all the question from the prompt....
Writing Feedback19epuzam - Jun 14, 2014 / eddies - Jul 16, 2014
|Toefl : Begin learning a foreign language as soon as starting school
5 - This sentence is too long and contains much vague information when it comes to an opening paragraph. according...
Writing Feedbackitspueng - Jun 14, 2014 / eddies - Jul 16, 2014
|IELTS; School teachers used to be the source of information
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Jul 15, 2014 / digitalidea - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS Writing task 2 - Some people say that the Internet is making the world
Writing FeedbackSabi Thapaa - Jul 4, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|Parents should have much time for their children which are lonely sometimes
5 - It is sometimes hard to share writing feedback if you don't include a complete hook. Secondly, when you open...
Writing Feedbackanthonypasha - Jul 6, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS - GUN CONTROL & INCREASING VIOLENCE
13 - All in all, it is obvious thatObviously,there isa poorthis proves that there is no valid relationship between polices carrying...
Writing Feedbackicebeating - Jun 22, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS : negative effects of technological process ( agree or disagree )
5 - This is not a clear example, I think. Have journalistic questions to build a clear example. Let's say:...
Writing Feedbackthanhphongct1 - Jun 13, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY: Computers - What things will they be used for in the future?
Writing Feedbackrockybir - Jun 11, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|Young people should spend time on traveling before beginning their studies
Writing Feedbackwinnietseng - Jul 3, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|[TOEFL essay] Internship prepare students better for their careers
6 - Also doing internship programmes in the university also helpS students have some soft skills, such as team working, colleague...
Writing Feedbackeragon26050 - Jul 8, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS writing task 1 - Reject a company offer - letter
3 - Begin your letter with a positive note although it is to inform something negative; I am very thankful...
Writing Feedback12thaugust2005 - Jul 6, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|Ielts: apology letter - 'evenings noise'
4 - I am writing to apologize for the noise that spoilsdisturbed your evenings and causescaused you some distress.inconvenience. As you...
Writing Feedbackganggang - Jun 25, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|Video games are harmless fun. Disagree or Agree?
4 - I think the expression 'etc' is neither very appropriate in academic writings, nor be counted as a word, so...
Writing FeedbackMinhMinh - Jul 15, 2014 / erocdrah - Jul 15, 2014
|[IELTS Task 2] Text messages or phone calls; I prefer talking on the phone
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jul 7, 2014 / eddies - Jul 15, 2014
|Today's charity - support made by wealthy nations must be voluntary
4 - Money flow to the poorest nations in African and Asian continents riseshas risen magnificently during the last decade. ...
Writing FeedbackLazira - Jul 2, 2014 / Pahan - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS 2 Working hoursare toolong and people don't have time for family
Writing FeedbackNatalia1988 - Jul 14, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|GRE Issue "The best way to understand the character of a society..."
2 - Hi! I think you should make your stand clearer on the introduction and most importantly in conclusion. Instead of...
Writing FeedbackTila Tequila - Jul 13, 2014 / eirehc - Jul 15, 2014
|PUBLIC LIBRARIES SHOULD NOT BE MAINTAINED
NEW - TOPIC: PUBLIC LIBRARIES SHOULD NOT BE MAINTAINED ANYMORE SINCE WE ALREADY HAVE COMPUTER TECHNOLOGY. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU...
Writing Feedbackeirehc - Jul 15, 2014 / — -
|SAT : Is the world changing for the better ?
2 - I think you should try to arrange the thoughts on your paragraph. Try writing 1 thought per paragraph. The...
Writing Feedbackamanyeid - Jul 14, 2014 / eirehc - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS Task 1. Chocolate production sequences
3 - Where is the diagram? It is important to upload the diagram if you wish to earn more meaningful comments....
Writing FeedbackNatalia1988 - Jul 14, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|Short Description on Myself
Writing FeedbackLuqman Nul Haki - Jul 13, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|Children should learn to compete rather than be cooperative. What's your opinion
4 - Child-rearing has always been a topical issues over a long period of time, which is the result of parent's...
Writing FeedbackQuynhAnh - Jul 7, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS: procedure of making cement / traffic congestion & air pollution
4 - Have two different threads for each task. By having both in one thread, you would lose your chances of...
Writing Feedbackhoho8453 - Jul 3, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS: Music makes our lifes magical and meaningful
7 - I hope you pay more attention to eddies comments. You need to change your approach for this task if...
Writing FeedbackTuti gunner - Jul 4, 2014 / dumi - Jul 15, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Old home Cares: Who should be responsible ? family or Governmnet
3 - Thank you eddies and dummy . I have made changes according to you suggestions . Kindly take a look...
Writing Feedbackharis86 - Jul 12, 2014 / haris86 - Jul 14, 2014
|IELTS essay on video games - pros and cons
2 - n recent years, video games hashave increased itstheir popularity around the world. This has aroused considerable controversy in society...
Writing Feedbackloxm - Jul 2, 2014 / dumi - Jul 14, 2014
|ielts: the chart gives information about UK travel between 1979 and 1999
3 - Good advice by tiaDS. This is the approach I too suggest to everybody who prepare for this task....
Writing Feedbacksara88fte - Jul 3, 2014 / dumi - Jul 14, 2014
|IELTS : 'domestic usage for all technology gradually increased' - graph
Writing FeedbackMakorn - Jun 29, 2014 / dumi - Jul 14, 2014
|[IELTS] The two main materials of making cement are limestone and clay
3 - in my opinion there are 2 kinds of template: the first one is as you mentioned; the 2nd contain...
Writing Feedbackxizon7777 - Jul 14, 2014 / xizon7777 - Jul 14, 2014
|[IELTS task2]: some people argue that fashion items cost too much money.
6 - I suggest you to have a more meaningful sentence to open your essay. This should hook your reader...
Writing FeedbackNatalia1988 - Jul 11, 2014 / dumi - Jul 14, 2014
|[IELTS task2] Job for a few years between school and university
7 - If you look at all the prompts of IELTS task 2 more closely in Cambridge IELTS Student's Book,...
Writing FeedbackNatalia1988 - Jul 11, 2014 / eddies - Jul 14, 2014
|Toefl essay - We all work or will work in our jobs with many different people
2 - 1-It is better to use synonyms of "co-worker" such as "colleague" for avoiding repetition of the word. 2- For...
Writing Feedbackyashaswinisrini - Jul 9, 2014 / masih65 - Jul 14, 2014
|Dressing in school uniforms indeed prompt students to learn well
2 - Hi memory9711, First of all, you need to pay attention to your punctuation. After period [.], you need to...
Writing Feedbackmemory9711 - Jul 7, 2014 / Ulaai - Jul 13, 2014
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