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Forward or first page - A Book I am Writing

18 - Much more to come; I appreciate this venue to at least get over my fear of never being good...

Writing FeedbackJeannie - Nov 17, 2009 / Jeannie - Nov 29, 2009
"Categories of Criminals" - Stanford Intellectual Vitality Essay

5 - wow, i really like yours. its interesting, but is it related to what major you're applying for? also, i...

Writing Feedbackfallen92 - Nov 20, 2009 / luu123 - Nov 29, 2009
Argument Essay on Security Cameras - Feedback / Revision

2 - The growing use of surveillance cameras in today's society has led to several privacy issues being raised. The...

Writing Feedbacksonic_fanrs - Nov 27, 2009 / EF_Susan - Nov 28, 2009
Essay about city living and country living

2 - In opposite, persons who live in a country, don't do not have wide choice of shops. "Do not"...

Writing FeedbackJannaiska - Nov 28, 2009 / ayida365 - Nov 28, 2009
'A few years ago, boarding school was a fresh coming thing for us' - IELTS: Boarding school

3 - Hi maymay513,thanks for helping me. You help me find some errors which I did not realize. Thanks again!!! You...

Writing Feedbacksupersophie - Nov 26, 2009 / supersophie - Nov 27, 2009
TOEFL "Building a new movie theater in nighborhood.."

2 - When I saw the announcement about a plan for building a new cinema near my house , I became...

Writing Feedbackhitchhike - Nov 26, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 27, 2009
TOEFL living in places different weather condition vs same weather condition

6 - Margarita, one of my teacher, who taught writing, told about this limitations. By taking into consideration of time we...

Writing Feedbackmargarita - Nov 18, 2009 / hitchhike - Nov 26, 2009
The lifestyle we live today is leading us down the path of an evolutionary disaster; choices we made

2 - Yes, the second para is much stronger than the first. Often, we need to cut the first para, because...

Writing Feedbackneuromancer - Nov 25, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2009
IELTS:Are International Sporting Occasions a Safe Way for Releasing Emotions??

2 - Above, there are 2 spelling errors, so be sure to run this through a spell checker. Also, in...

Writing FeedbackRuah - Nov 24, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2009
TOEFL "why is music important?"

2 - In the beginning of this essay, it is not quite right to say it is impossible to imagine a...

Writing Feedbackhitchhike - Nov 24, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2009
A Descriptive essay about Beauty feedback

2 - Use a comma: Beauty is not always what people think it may be, especially... It helps if an...

Writing Feedbacknursehelp - Nov 24, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2009
Today people are using nuclear energy and interested in it!

2 - issue. Moreuse. Then clean and cheap energy [cheaper* really? didn't know that. I thought uranium is very expensive.] choose...

Writing Feedbackchile - Nov 26, 2009 / meisj0n - Nov 26, 2009
Skepticism in students' study---GRE ISSUE

2 - Doubts lead to experiments, and experiments lead to deeper understanding, to solution, it and in this way skepticism can...

Writing Feedbackbluebonnet - Nov 24, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 25, 2009
Germany, Italy, France, Britain - The Amount Spent on Consumer Goods

5 - Thank you very much Tim , that was really helpful :) hope you could give me your opinion on...

Writing FeedbackRuah - Nov 23, 2009 / Ruah - Nov 24, 2009
Multi-Language Clash Synthesis essay

6 - Well... in order to see how it actually is an independent clause, think of this sentence: However,...

Writing FeedbackJoeyson - Nov 19, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 24, 2009
Advertisement is not a waste of money but an effective method of sales promotion

2 - Hello First off all , I would like to mention how well written this essay is and the vocabulary...

Writing Feedbackpretty0407 - Nov 24, 2009 / Ruah - Nov 24, 2009
TOEFL preference essay " sports vs.arts" - feedback welcomed :)

4 - I believe when you are asked to stay and support your preference about two o more topics, subjects or...

Writing Feedbackeng_student - Nov 18, 2009 / margarita - Nov 23, 2009
TOEFL - Is it important to donate money to protect environment? New Era diseases

6 - Well this seems to go well with the title... With TOEFL, I assume you are more concerned with...

Writing FeedbackPoojasugandhi - Nov 5, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 23, 2009
Experience is the best teacher; influential person - Preparing for the Clep exam

4 - Susan and Kevin - thank you for the feedback. I studied the mistakes you pointed out and understand now...

Writing Feedbackpaula - Nov 17, 2009 / paula - Nov 23, 2009
TOEFL EASSY-- the ability of planning and organizing is essential for young

2 - They want to make everything perfect but they usually feel lost because they don't know which the most important...

Writing Feedbackpretty0407 - Nov 21, 2009 / sofiaz - Nov 22, 2009
Literary Analysis on The Haunting of Hill House

4 - Pheelks, good call! I agree....

Writing Feedbackkparham322 - Nov 19, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 22, 2009
TOEFL ; Recent story that affected me the most was Pig Flu

4 - I don't know the name of the rule associated with this. You can write, "My jacket is here." and...

Writing FeedbackHelin - Nov 17, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 22, 2009
compare between your childhood and right now.

16 - learned to live in the "jungle"? [note: that was a metaphor? or really where you live?] hahah. what...

Writing Feedbackbilal ABUZENAH - Nov 16, 2009 / bilal ABUZENAH - Nov 22, 2009
Humankind has undergone many changes in the eating habit - food is easier to prepare

2 - gahhhh! I spent an hour typing stuff up and the browser messed up. o well, guess u'll have to...

Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Nov 20, 2009 / meisj0n - Nov 21, 2009
essay about Siddhartha's Teachers

3 - 1 you have used "siddhartha" a lot of times try to use more of pronouns. 2 i liked your...

Writing Feedbackluny - Nov 20, 2009 / harsha9 - Nov 21, 2009
COUNTRY BOYS - REACTION PAPER - edit this essay, I'm non native English speaker

2 - "Country boys" is the most unique type of documentary movie that I have ever watched, because it is not...

Writing Feedbackjhung620 - Nov 19, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 21, 2009
Toefl essay - "Learning about past has its significance"

2 - Can knowledge about the past be beneficial for those of us livin g in present? I think that...

Writing FeedbackPoojasugandhi - Nov 19, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 20, 2009
Toefl Integrated task" William shakespeare"

2 - Thanks, Mashhadi, for this great work. I know that takes a long time! I hope your teachers will someday...

Writing FeedbackPoojasugandhi - Nov 18, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 20, 2009
Toefl essay on Silvio Berlusconi.

4 - Yes, I know what you mean!! You are great, I'm inspired by bilingual people. You wrote know...

Writing Feedbackdar81 - Nov 18, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 20, 2009
[TOEFL]Tidal Power_Integrated task.

3 - This is perfect English! You don't have any mistakes that I can see. I just have some ideas...

Writing Feedbackyin - Nov 18, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 20, 2009
TOEFL: "Studying alone or in a group"/ Which do you prefer?

NEW - Some students prefer to study alone. Others prefer to study with a group of students. Which do you prefer?...

Writing Feedbackhitchhike - Nov 20, 2009 / — -
TOEFL:::working for a small company - more chances are to boost in your job

2 - You did a good job of making clear your thesis statement at the end of the first paragraph. Your...

Writing Feedbackmashhadi - Nov 18, 2009 / EF_Susan - Nov 20, 2009
Toefl : lifestyle individualism VS collectivism

2 - This is coming out very well, but I did find a few mistakes; Living in community based upon...

Writing FeedbackBabies - Nov 18, 2009 / EF_Susan - Nov 20, 2009
IELTS essay"people think children's spending time on TV, video..is good,while.."

NEW - Some people think children's spending time on TV, video and PC games is good, while others think it is...

Writing Feedbackleonyan938 - Nov 20, 2009 / — -
Smoking ban - essay argumentative

5 - thanks...

Writing FeedbackAbutaleb2009 - Nov 14, 2009 / Abutaleb2009 - Nov 20, 2009
Toefl"A person you know is planning to move to your town. What do you think..

2 - The beginning is great! It is actually quite interesting at the start, because I think it is intriguing that...

Writing FeedbackPoojasugandhi - Nov 17, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 19, 2009
My Two Sons - Thesis statement for Comparison essay

5 - I have two fantastic boys in my family that were born four years apart and are as different as...

Writing Feedbackbmerrell - Nov 17, 2009 / TFS109201 - Nov 19, 2009
my art essay, parthenon vs pantheon

6 - omg i think you are in my class! i have the same thing... 4 exam questions too for my...

Writing Feedbackstockwell - Nov 17, 2009 / sesudita - Nov 19, 2009
Essay on events that have changed Australia's multicultural society - feedback.

3 - Looking good. If you get inspired, maybe you will come up with a more intriguing first line. This is...

Writing Feedbackdubulee - Nov 17, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 19, 2009
International Studies Paper on the effects of war.......

2 - How true and terrible that Twain quote is! Hey, I don't understand that last sentence of the first...

Writing FeedbackMGH1989 - Nov 17, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 18, 2009
Toefl- Do you think it is good for teenagers to work while schooling?

3 - Good corrections! But, you are wrong to think they can be corrected by reading aloud. People learning English...

Writing FeedbackPoojasugandhi - Nov 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 18, 2009
Studying people and events of the past time is very useful

3 - Hi, what I can suggest about the timings is... 1.Do practice with timer on. Say 20 mins for typing....

Writing Feedbackhitchhike - Nov 18, 2009 / Poojasugandhi - Nov 18, 2009
Toefl - "not everything in life is according to our wish"

2 - This is basic part of our life. There are many things in our lives which are forced to...

Writing FeedbackPoojasugandhi - Nov 17, 2009 / EF_Susan - Nov 18, 2009
Toefl essay which changed people's lives automobiles bicycles airplanes

3 - Although new invention will changed the world more or less, only a few inventions can take the significant change...

Writing Feedbackrmli - Nov 18, 2009 / Jin - Nov 18, 2009
What are the problems with English Education in Korea?

9 - Throughout my middle school and high school educational courses, I had a good grade in English. I earned good...

Writing Feedbackkimster79 - Nov 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 18, 2009
Toefl essay"What are the qualities of the good coworker?"

4 - Throughout in my experience, I noticed that good co worker should have certain qualities. She or he should work...

Writing FeedbackPoojasugandhi - Nov 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 18, 2009
Comparative Essay for ENG 1100... subject: Depression

3 - thanks for the help...

Writing FeedbackMaethirion - Nov 15, 2009 / Maethirion - Nov 17, 2009
Important teenage decisions should be taken by parents or elders

3 - Thanks, Arjun, I noticed some of the same things. The age of fifteen is a time of numerous...

Writing Feedbackhatung94 - Nov 16, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 17, 2009
Are human needs for farmland, housing, industry more important than saving lands

3 - Nowadays, a growing number of people focus on an issue that which is the most important for human beings...

Writing Feedbacktiantianwenzi - Nov 16, 2009 / EF_Susan - Nov 17, 2009
Failed Descriptive Essay Subject Costa Rica

2 - No using cliches at EssayForum! :-) Just kidding... cliches are people, too. By the way, thanks so...

Writing FeedbackMaethirion - Nov 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 17, 2009
Toefl;Government should definitely spend money in improving transportation services

2 - From the great, great work that margarita and rmli did, I can see that you have to work on...

Writing FeedbackPoojasugandhi - Nov 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 17, 2009
Cbest Essay - Person Most Instrumental in Shaping Your Life

6 - thanks will keep in mind your comments....

Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Sep 15, 2009 / elainedlcruz - Nov 16, 2009
ESSAY ON "THE WAR ROOM" MOVIE ABOUT CLINTON'S '92 PRESIDENTIAL ELECTION CAMPAIGN

2 - Wow, you're a very good writer! Your essay is powerful and interesting all the way through. The election...

Writing Feedbackkyleroland - Nov 15, 2009 / EF_Susan - Nov 16, 2009
Compare and contrast between living in the countryside and the suburbs

3 - I am impressed! Most compare/contrast essays are very rigid and robotic, but your opening paragraph is so natural and...

Writing FeedbackThuy Nguyen - Nov 15, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 16, 2009
TOEFL essay "homework - necessary or not"

6 - I think some statements in your essay don't develop well. For example" If a teacher wants to assign homework...

Writing Feedbacksilver_bullet - Nov 8, 2009 / tiantianwenzi - Nov 16, 2009
the main purposes of a country's education system

6 - talk about the variety in public school curriculum, private schools, boarding schools, athletes, scholarships, neighborhood, admission process, money. ...

Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 19, 2009 / kyleroland - Nov 15, 2009
Advertisement Analysis Essay Help - A $385 Billion Dollar Image

2 - Thanks for posting, long-time lurker! your last para needs help: As we have analyze these advertisements, we...

Writing FeedbackMCafOcc - Nov 13, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Nov 15, 2009
"Why people love watching action movies" Formal Essay

3 - "Action movies are full filling to many movie watchers because it supplies audiences with electrifying excitement, presents us a...

Writing FeedbackYojimbo_bobobo - Nov 10, 2009 / car3n - Nov 15, 2009
Water is the most common element for ordinary people; A paragraph about water

4 - thanks for helping me!...

Writing Feedbackapi - Nov 13, 2009 / api - Nov 15, 2009
TOEFL:External appearances can provide important clues to a person

6 - I am a chinese student who will take toefl test. My essay's structure is similiar with yours. I think...

Writing Feedbacklyqinyi - Nov 2, 2009 / tiantianwenzi - Nov 15, 2009

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