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|IELTS: Nowadays, many secondary schools teach business and communication skills
Writing Feedbackgustmd09 - Aug 19, 2013 / gustmd09 - Aug 19, 2013
|Child Abuse and my Future; How I learned to become a man!
7 - Red: Really appreciate the effort, especially at what time it is! Blue: I really try to put passion,...
Writing FeedbackIvykid96 - Aug 4, 2013 / Ivykid96 - Aug 19, 2013
|IELTS; Competition instills confidence into the child's mind.
5 - I request both Pahan and Dumi to use marking pen when you suggest me writing new sentence instead of...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 19, 2013 / fahadbd - Aug 19, 2013
|The sense of competition and the spirit of cooperation, I believe are equally essential to children.
7 - ... I guess you should have used a different wording :) It is essential to promote cooperation in...
Writing Feedbackking jane - Aug 18, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 19, 2013
|IELTS: It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be.
6 - ... this is an interesting simple idea which you have presented in a very complicated manner. Also, this...
Writing Feedbackme4mbd - Aug 18, 2013 / dumi - Aug 19, 2013
|Student behavior has became major problem in world .causes and solution .
6 - What's the purpose of this essay? Are you preparing for IELTS, TOEFL or what? It's better you mention the...
Writing FeedbackMohkam - Aug 18, 2013 / dumi - Aug 19, 2013
|IELTS : ESSAY ON DESCRIPTIVE WRITING FOR GRAPHICAL DATA
Writing FeedbackDreqc - Aug 19, 2013 / Dreqc - Aug 19, 2013
|[TOEFL] Deal with the cane toad; Integrated Writing Task
3 - ... this is not grammatically incorrect. But I wish you changed the beginning a little bit; Both the...
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 19, 2013 / dumi - Aug 19, 2013
|IELTS: Some people think that sense of competition in children should be encouraged.
NEW - Please grade my essay by your valuable suggestions. Topic: Some people think that sense of competition in children...
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|IELTS_cultural traditions will be destroyed by developing tourism. right/wrong?
Writing FeedbackIbrahim_Xian - Aug 15, 2013 / Ibrahim_Xian - Aug 19, 2013
|Stay in one job or change jobs frequently.Discuss both and give your own opinion.
7 - However, this does not mean you can't do better. Your ideas and essay structure are good though. So hopefully...
Writing FeedbackRealTMac - Aug 18, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 19, 2013
|GRE:Development of technology should improve our ability to think for ourselves
Writing Feedbackmilanbuffon - Aug 7, 2013 / milanbuffon - Aug 18, 2013
|A person should be very careful when making a decision - think carefully before any judgement
8 - Think about how each paragraph connects to the previous one. For example, for your third paragraph, you could...
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Aug 13, 2013 / Sybrinth - Aug 18, 2013
|TOEFL- UNIVERSITY STUDENTS SHOULD ATTEND CLASSES OR NOT?
6 - I think your content is good and well developed, but you'd better use the topic sentences of your paragraphs...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 13, 2013 / ramshah - Aug 18, 2013
|IELTS; GAP YEAR is helpful for students to gain experience through work or travel
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 18, 2013 / king jane - Aug 18, 2013
|Creative artists should be given the freedom to express - 'range of limitation'
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 15, 2013 / me4mbd - Aug 18, 2013
|IETLS General Task 1: You have lost your credit card. Letter to manager
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Aug 16, 2013 / Arun0506 - Aug 18, 2013
|Gender equality in University Admission
6 - Thaks Dumi, sry for late reply.u r gentle,not rude at all,and the strcture really helps me a lot.and i...
Writing Feedbackking jane - Aug 14, 2013 / king jane - Aug 18, 2013
|IELTS TASK: an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18.
3 - .... Yes, I too believe this has a major hand in these recent violence happenings. However, you need...
Writing Feedbacknhonphan - Aug 17, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 18, 2013
|In order to have a better future, every high school student should take at least one economic course
3 - First, since a basic economics course would be intended for providing students with a general understanding of economics,...
Writing Feedbackshiyayewu - Aug 18, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 18, 2013
|IELTS: Public Libraries and computer technology
Writing Feedbackjflo - Aug 10, 2013 / jflo - Aug 18, 2013
|Teachers' performance evaluation; 'People seldom agree with eachother'
Writing Feedbackfuqiangang - Aug 12, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 18, 2013
|GRE; Educational inst are responsible for guiding students in their study fields
6 - Thanks a lot for the help dumi... Yes this is not the complete essay.. I will write another essay...
Writing FeedbackAakash13 - Jul 24, 2013 / Aakash13 - Aug 18, 2013
|Last few years, authority as well as government is highly concerned about the school atmosphere.
6 - instead of "student's manner" you could use "Etiquette" For instance, mother/father = for instance parents to conclude...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 16, 2013 / Dreqc - Aug 18, 2013
|Male & female equal in universities; Different subjects according to the gender
4 - Well... it's better you mention the purpose somewhere in your post. You find some good video clips on google...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 17, 2013 / dumi - Aug 18, 2013
|TOEFL-- The inernet is dangerous and unreliable
Writing FeedbackHELLOJOY11 - Aug 14, 2013 / tarbiat - Aug 17, 2013
|Toefl: Treat pets like family members or not? 'it is not a good idea'
7 - I think the biggest problem with your essay is that it is too formal. It follows the traditional essay...
Writing Feedbackeden68 - Aug 10, 2013 / Sybrinth - Aug 17, 2013
|GRE ISSUE- A public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards
3 - Read the caption below which is written on how the introduction (GRE Issue) should be constructed. Then compare what...
Writing Feedbackioancelot - Aug 14, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|IELTS- NECESSITY OF THIRD LEVEL EDUCATION FOR SUCCESS? AGREE OR DISAGREE?
Writing Feedbackblessy - Aug 15, 2013 / blessy - Aug 17, 2013
|Entrepreuners and Jobs - GRE Issue essay (rate and comment)
3 - External factors have always had an impact on man and history and it shows that many a great or...
Writing Feedbackishas - Aug 11, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|SAME JOB Vs CHANGING JOBS - Discuss both views
Writing Feedbackpooneh - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|"Is Legalizing the Right Choice?" - It's the right decision!
3 - Marijuana has been gaining in popularity for many years and its popularity never ceased to grow until to...
Writing FeedbackWilliamProsch - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|IELTS - Too much noise in public places; Causes and Measures
6 - In order to address this problem, cooperation of governments, educational institutes as well as individuals is needed. Such...
Writing Feedbackhomsai - Aug 8, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|IELTS;Research suggests characteristics we are born with are stronger than experience
3 - ... this is a pretty simple idea, but you have presented it to sound very complicated. Be more...
Writing Feedbackgivemebrave - Aug 13, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|'Humans are bound to do mistakes' - I prefer machine made items
5 - Another reason is that machine made clothes isare less time consuming. There is lot of time wastage in...
Writing FeedbackLaw - Aug 12, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|Has people's interaction changed because of technology? IELTS
5 - people's .... In fact some have literally almost died down Old ways of communication is fading...
Writing Feedbackposdream - Aug 13, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|IELTS - 'slight difference'; The illiteracy rates around the world
Writing Feedbackxucoi - Aug 10, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|Ielts task 1- give me feedback, and mark on /9.0
Writing Feedbackanliv - Aug 17, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|Essay written on Back to basic; CBEST
Writing Feedbackpig1 - Aug 15, 2013 / Aakash13 - Aug 17, 2013
|Write the short opening chapter to a novel called A Summer Romance.
Writing FeedbackAjia11 - Aug 4, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|TOEFL; What's more important: hard work or luck? not reckon on luck in our plan
Writing Feedbacktarbiat - Aug 16, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|transportation vehicles you think it has changed people's lives.
2 - Thanks to many advanced technologies these days the human life has become more comfortable and convenient. ...
Writing FeedbackNgoc Tran - Aug 17, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 17, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2:Some people argue that the purpose of zoos is only to entertain people.
7 - great advice congchop! :) Your conclusion too needs to be aligned with your prompt. So you need...
Writing Feedbackraulfanc - Aug 15, 2013 / dumi - Aug 17, 2013
|Ielts- The internet and change of lives
Writing Feedbacktmtrang91 - Aug 15, 2013 / tmtrang91 - Aug 16, 2013
|IELTS:Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each crime type
8 - Hi Talwinder, I feel that the first two paragraphs look similar and it better to make it one ....
Writing Feedbacktalwinder - Jul 24, 2013 / Arun0506 - Aug 16, 2013
|IELTS Task2: Technological developments in the past few decades. Positive ?
4 - Hi Dumi / Pahan, Thanks for your time in correcting my essay. I have noted your points and will...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Aug 15, 2013 / Arun0506 - Aug 16, 2013
|Studying in a group has a lot of advantages that can promote learning process
4 - ... give more focus to your reason; First, group study provides the opportunity to benefit from each others'...
Writing Feedbackmoonname - Aug 9, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 16, 2013
|Describe what responsibilty you think you will face as a GP in other country?
Writing Feedbackhili - Jul 30, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 16, 2013
|'the life itself'; PARENTS Vs TEACHERS ; Reasons & Examples
5 - .... this is an incomplete sentence. This is alright for your speaking task, but in writing you need...
Writing Feedbackfaheddarmoch - Aug 9, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 16, 2013
|GRE ; Advancing our understanding of the world
2 - Accepted Wisdom is correct in mosesome cases and can be exper imented. overall, your writing is good...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 16, 2013 / fahadbd - Aug 16, 2013
|What are some other reasons than money, that people work?
Writing FeedbackRpuiii - Aug 15, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 16, 2013
|WHO HAVE BETTER INFLUENCE ON STUDENTS - TEACHERS OR PEERS?
4 - make your intro a little more captivating, hook the audience/reader. And like Dumi said, express your view lucidly, it...
Writing Feedbacktpo112358 - Aug 15, 2013 / Ivykid96 - Aug 16, 2013
|Popular events like the Football World Cup release patriotic emotions.
6 - no problem :) I tell the guys who post in wrong forums with the intention of correcting the usage...
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Aug 10, 2013 / dumi - Aug 16, 2013
|Equal Oppurtunity And Parity in Pay. GRE Analyze an issue
3 - Thanks for the grammar and spell check. Would you like to say anything about the content of the essay...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 13, 2013 / shadman19922 - Aug 16, 2013
|Happiness is considered very important in life. 'Defining depends on the ages'
6 - ... Great hook....very impressive :) Most people have the tendency to link happiness with wealth or...
Writing Feedbackjustinjustinlee - Aug 14, 2013 / dumi - Aug 16, 2013
|The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.
5 - Well... this is no doubt for your IELTS preparedness. So, please post these essays to Writing Feedback forum....
Writing Feedbackmrabbas - Aug 6, 2013 / dumi - Aug 16, 2013
|IELTS writing task 1 - line graph on usage of cars in the UK
5 - Thank you everyone who had help marking this essay :) By the way, do the percentages matter if...
Writing FeedbackHA254 - Aug 15, 2013 / HA254 - Aug 16, 2013
|FOOD STANDS Vs EATING AT HOME ; I support the latter!
Writing Feedbacknedkaangelova - Aug 2, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 15, 2013
|'Climate change'; Some believe that the Earth is being harmed by human activity
3 - ... Why do you narrow the scope of your prompt to one particular type of natural disaster? Your...
Writing Feedbackmaidh91 - Aug 1, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 15, 2013
|IELTS_should government pay for people's education and health care?
2 - .... Let see how it sounds when the order is changed slightly; First of all, education and medical...
Writing FeedbackIbrahim_Xian - Aug 11, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 15, 2013
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