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|IELTS: task 2 Some people think the foreign visitors should be charged more than the local
3 - ....Great start ... very good :) .... well this disturbs your flow... the first sentence give...
Writing Feedbackpijiuwdw - Sep 20, 2013 / dumi - Sep 20, 2013
|IELTS: Today the high sale of popular consumer goods reflex the power of advertising
4 - Nowadays there are many products with the same usage that compete heavily in the market. Therefore, the only...
Writing Feedbacksaphirblu - Sep 8, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|IELTS; The famous sports professionals profit a lot of money in the field of sport profession
4 - Sports professionals enjoy many other facilities in addition to their lucrative income levels. They enjoy tax...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 24, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|TOEFL;The rapid growth of cities in today's world - Positive development?
5 - ...not "can", but it is :D Traffic congestion impacts very negatively on a city. ....very good...
Writing Feedbackblackwoman - Sep 11, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|[TOEFL]The environmental issue is too complex to be handled by the individual.
4 - This is actually an example. The reason is ; Secondly, there are many things that individuals should be...
Writing FeedbackDYDXY - Aug 25, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|IELTS; people prefer to repeat the same things and avoid changes
4 - Life is full of dynamic forces that make the change an inevitable phenomenon. They express that...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 27, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: Students should be organised into groups or study alone
4 - On the other hand, students also need to enhance their individual skills in studying that will help them...
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Sep 5, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|What are some important qualities of a good supervisor (boss)?
4 - Rather, he should try to get the subordinates involved in decision making by consulting their ideas and opinions...
Writing Feedbackyunjaeclyn - Sep 13, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|IELTS; the number of people continuing their education after school has increased,
3 - In recent years more and more number of people are seen persistingpursuing higher education Good introduction :) ...
Writing Feedbackhpatel - Sep 20, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|The proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia
3 - It's good to have your diagram here. Why not upload it? The structure I would follow is that; 1....
Writing FeedbackAmritpal Singh - Sep 2, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|[Toelf] idea or fact? which one is important
3 - ...very true...good point Because anything that is not convinced strongly would be forgotten as time passes...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 15, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|Happiness Vs Success; Which is more important?
2 - As you know, happiness and success determines your quality of life. Happiness is the best emotion...
Writing Feedbackchoutxu - Sep 11, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|TOEFL; "traveling ten thousands miles"; The best way to travel is in a group
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 19, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|It has been said, "Not all learning takes place in the classroom." Compare and contrast
Writing Feedbacksohailuv - Sep 17, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|GUN CONTROL LAWS in the USA; ENG 102 Essay
3 - ... I think you need to give more emphasis to the term "law" instead of "politicians". Nearly every...
Writing Feedbackgoodchild - Sep 20, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 20, 2013
|Illegal immigrants return after deportation with reasonable explanations
2 - good job!...
Writing FeedbackLucynore - Aug 31, 2013 / pijiuwdw - Sep 20, 2013
|knowledge consolidating; Teachers should assign homework for students every day
6 - well... may be the vocabulary that confused me ... "knowledge system" does not refer to anything straight. It...
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Sep 18, 2013 / dumi - Sep 20, 2013
|IELTS Writing Task 2: being a celebrity - Pros & Cons
Writing Feedbackmazharbari - Sep 19, 2013 / hpatel - Sep 20, 2013
|IELTS: Task 2 The best way of spreading news
6 - Very good introduction. Clear and interesting :) First of all, the Internet is the fastest form...
Writing Feedbackpijiuwdw - Sep 12, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|[TOEFL] the portrait of Jane Austen; Integrated Writing
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 30, 2013 / ARIA - Sep 19, 2013
|[GRE Issue task] Sports stars & movie stars have obligation to behave as roll models
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Aug 30, 2013 / testtaker - Sep 19, 2013
|TOEFL; making teachers' social or political views known to students cannot be judged completely.
10 - I think you still have enough time. You are now almost there. It's a matter of keep practicing as...
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 18, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 19, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: Children consume too much unhealthy food. Cause & solution?
4 - .... you should not crowd your sentences with too many words unnecessarily. That harms your flow ; The...
Writing Feedbackmuffle - Sep 14, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 19, 2013
|WRITING TASK 1: THE LINE GRAPH/ fast food consumed by teenagers
NEW - The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from...
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 19, 2013 / — -
|[IETLS Task2] Celebrities gain more benefits from their jobs, popularity, and human network
Writing Feedbackchungun - Sep 19, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 19, 2013
|[IELTS] consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat - GRAPH
5 - Hi, Please open IELTS related writing in Writing Feedback forum. Also, you can use the feature, "Attach file(s) "...
Writing Feedbackmatthewdang131 - Sep 12, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991
3 - Where is the table? Use the "Attach file(s)" feature to upload the table. It is always good to upload...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 16, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|We look up people who have many unique qualities that make them our role models
Writing FeedbackCathAni - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|Summary of Alexie's " The Joy of Reading and Writing: Superman and me" Draft
3 - Sherman Alexie wrote "The Joy of Reading and Writing: Superman and Me" with the purpose of informing his...
Writing Feedbackmopoohaddict - Aug 29, 2013 / dumi - Sep 19, 2013
|[IELTS] Issue on Retirement Age! Agree or Disagree?
5 - .... don't use synonyms if you are not very familiar with their usage. They may mean something very...
Writing FeedbackHai An Hoang - Sep 10, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 18, 2013
|TOEFL; TV has adverse effects on friends and family
4 - Instead of spending time with family or friends, they indulge themselves sitting in front of a TV for...
Writing Feedbackmjlm - Sep 10, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS-In many countries there are many highly qualified graduates without employment.
Writing Feedbackpuman - Sep 1, 2013 / trangkhanhle - Sep 18, 2013
|Extended family is less important than before; 'lifestyle has changed'
4 - ... ok... you are talking about the joint family concept that helped people to manage their family farms...
Writing Feedbackfs7 - Sep 12, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 18, 2013
|You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose?
3 - this is well written. Only issue is it does not introduce your prompt to the reader. No where...
Writing Feedbacksohailuv - Sep 18, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS - WRITING TASK 1 - Top internet purchase categories by country
3 - Thank you very much, your passage seems to be better than me, I have difficulty in expressing my ideas...
Writing FeedbackTrang Nguyen - Sep 17, 2013 / Trang Nguyen - Sep 18, 2013
|WRITING TASK 1: THE GRAPH; three different categories in the Britain economy
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 17, 2013 / trangkhanhle - Sep 18, 2013
|In some countries, traditional food is being replaced by international fast food.
Writing FeedbackOliviaZeng - Sep 2, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|Global world changes rapidly with the influx of technology but cultural heritage never changes
3 - It's always good to include the prompt with your essay so that we know what it expects. Is this...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 3, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS Academic Writing Task 2: OPINIONS ABOUT GOVERNMENT FUNDING OF ARTISTS.
5 - Thanks guys. First of all you are right, I needed to put "alternative sources" instead of " health and...
Writing FeedbackARIA - Sep 13, 2013 / ARIA - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: Studying the past can help us better understand present or not
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Sep 3, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|full time university students spend most of time studying or doing other activities
3 - First, it is always better that you mention the purpose (i.e. TOEFL, IELTS, GRE etc.) in the topic so...
Writing Feedbackhuyentrang - Sep 3, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS: Education is the main determinant of a country's future development
3 - .... What do you mean by "highest education levels"? Do you mean to say that they have better...
Writing Feedbackzoha - Sep 11, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|[TOEFL] Changing something in time from the past
Writing Feedbacksomething - Sep 8, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|IELTS (Letter)- Invite your friend for a vacation
Writing Feedbackssaallaamm - Sep 9, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|GRE ARGUE: A "Palean" Basket Was Discovered in Lithos
Writing Feedbackharry52 - Sep 14, 2013 / aliceNN - Sep 18, 2013
|TOEFL; WITHOUT A GOOD SENSE OF HUMOR LIFE WILL BE NOT ANY DIFFERENT FROM DEATH
2 - ....make the people... i think you should use "people" instead of "person" . person is a singular noun...
Writing FeedbackEnas30 - Sep 17, 2013 / Kalyn17992 - Sep 18, 2013
|TOEFL; Ability to Relate Well to people Vs Studying Hard
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 17, 2013 / aliceNN - Sep 18, 2013
|Artists contributions to society - Music, painting, dancing - make life colorful
3 - This is well written, but a fairly lengthy introduction. If you are preparing for TOEFL or IELTS, this is...
Writing Feedbackfannasster - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|Trusting everyone; CBEST/ memorable childhood experience
3 - Well... you talk little about this experience, instead you talk more about your nature of trusting others. Therefore...
Writing Feedbackclau089 - Aug 28, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|Gre essay review Claim: The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievement
3 - ...narrowed down to what? need to specify! Technological development alone will not help a nation to...
Writing Feedbackgurumonk - Aug 28, 2013 / dumi - Sep 18, 2013
|[TOEFL] Whether it is better to have broad knowledge or not
2 - ... I find this is not adding much value to your introduction. Finish it with stating your position....
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|Governments should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and develop
Writing Feedbackgurumonk - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|Writing Task 1: The pie chart; People living in poverty in the UK
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 17, 2013 / Kalyn17992 - Sep 17, 2013
|TV Vs. Literature. GRE Analyze an Issue
2 - Throughout history, we find various efforts taken by people to record events for future references. ......
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Sep 11, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|[GRE Argument]To alleviate serious unemployment problem Autotech should be encouraged
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Sep 6, 2013 / testtaker - Sep 17, 2013
|Plato statement - There are many different types of music; Why we need it?
Writing Feedbackcactus2601 - Sep 15, 2013 / cactus2601 - Sep 17, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: the development of technology and its implication
2 - I feel you should have a hook that relates more with your prompt.Your prompt actually talks about technology...
Writing Feedbackbsm_25 - Sep 16, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|Do you think mathematics can predict divorces ?
2 - In the contemporary eras, predicting divorces based on Mathematics is a matter of increasing concerns . Some people...
Writing FeedbackAloha363 - Sep 16, 2013 / JDCho - Sep 17, 2013
|GRE Analyze an argument. Restoration of local news and weather forecast time
4 - The author's recommendation for anto increase in the time devoted infor the coverage of local and weather news cannot...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|GRE: Arts does not needs to have the public eyes.
3 - ... The word "society" is getting repeated too much. Your opinion is not very clear (highlighted sentence). I...
Writing Feedbackleebongho - Aug 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
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