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|IELTS TASK 1 : Bricks process
2 - Your essay is really specific. And a lot of concrete verbs. I think it's really good. However, there are...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 20, 2014 / BRonnie - Apr 20, 2014
|IELTS: Life was better when technology was simpler.
5 - I like this paragraph. You have composed a good strategy. Beginning by describing a scenario, you end with...
Writing Feedbackalexwater - Apr 17, 2014 / eddies - Apr 19, 2014
|'it is not permanent'; enjoy your money when you earn or save for your future
6 - Write "I think", instead of according to which is used when saying what people, organizations, and reports have...
Writing FeedbackJaanu - Mar 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS; 'unique from other animals' - How life cycle of a frog?
3 - Well, the mating part of the frogs not shown or indicated in the diagram. Do not write anything...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 19, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 19, 2014
|Ielts: Life cycle of frog - from eggs to adult frog
2 - These sentences do not provide any useful detailed information to the reader. This is a task that attempts...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 19, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 19, 2014
|'Many small businesses focus on individualism' - teamwork versus individual work
4 - For this reason, organizations make teams of employees with complementary skills who can work with each other, sharing experiences...
Writing Feedbackwhonevercome - Apr 18, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS; 'six processes' - Cycle life of frog
4 - You should use complex structure of sentences dumi's advice to put an overview after the introduction is good as...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 19, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 19, 2014
|Ielts: Bricks manufacturing process from clay
2 - You should write at least 150 words, otherwise your essay score will be low. Try to use linking words...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 19, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS - "India Takes Pole Position" - FII Flow to Emerging Markets
6 - Oh...yes... I am pretty late to find this post. This is not at all acceptable to be published...
Writing FeedbackEssayForumSB - Apr 17, 2014 / dumi - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS: Should a jury know about previous crime records of a defendant?
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - Apr 16, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS: Canadian students graduated; 3 pharagraphs
6 - Your total words is 160+, i think you could simplified some sentences such as even though more...
Writing Feedbackandial - Apr 14, 2014 / Big B - Apr 19, 2014
|TALKS IELTS 1: The map of Pellington city - new shopping mall
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 13, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : The precentages of library books read at Starmouth School
2 - a problem with Dangling particle. Visit this link: usu.edu/markdamen/writingguide/10dangpt.htm a problem with Sentence fragments. Visit this...
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 18, 2014 / eddies - Apr 18, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1; Hawaiian island chain in the center of Pacific Ocean
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|IELTS TASK 2 : success is ten per cent talent and ninety per cent hard work?
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 9, 2014 / aryaayra - Apr 18, 2014
|TOEFL composition, about effective leadership
5 - thank you~I made an elementary mistake ⊙-⊙... not clear...do you mean the following words seems unconvincing?or I should do...
Writing Feedbackbestgen - Apr 17, 2014 / bestgen - Apr 18, 2014
|GRE ISSUE: Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning
Writing Feedbackscsqpd - Apr 17, 2014 / scsqpd - Apr 18, 2014
|TOEFL - Universities offer people opportunity to learn and improve their skills
Writing Feedbackscsqpd - Apr 9, 2014 / scsqpd - Apr 18, 2014
|IELTS task 1- summarize charts information budget allocation
Writing Feedbackminhvo - Apr 17, 2014 / minhvo - Apr 18, 2014
|Biographical sketch on experiences or events with significant effect on you- BYU
Writing Feedbacksjaqj04 - Apr 15, 2014 / sjaqj04 - Apr 18, 2014
|TOEFL: Scientists' contribution vs. artists' contributions
5 - Align your writing more with the topic; On the one hand, we should not forget the contribution that...
Writing Feedbackenikolova - Apr 16, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 17, 2014
|The Argumentative Essay - Eliminating Extreme Poverty
3 - Poverty is one of the most arduous challenges facing the world is facing today Similar to the poor,...
Writing Feedbackemma13 - Apr 17, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 17, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Male graduate from Cullum university
9 - Yes, I agree with MisterWandering. It is always better to reflect on the number of redundant expressions people constantly...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 15, 2014 / eddies - Apr 17, 2014
|Are people today live a healthier life than ancient people did or not?
Writing Feedbackljjay - Apr 17, 2014 / eddies - Apr 17, 2014
|Writing: The high sales of popular consumer goods/ advertising as extremely powerful tool
15 - A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro...
Writing FeedbackLinh Hoang - Mar 25, 2014 / eddies - Apr 17, 2014
|Ielts task 1 : the number of animals with tha amount of rainfall
6 - Hey, upload the graph using the Attach file(S) feature in the Message block :) Without seeing that it is...
Writing FeedbackApsari - Apr 16, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 17, 2014
|Life is unfair; Big money for some modern artist while other struggle to survive
Writing Feedbackandial - Apr 17, 2014 / eddies - Apr 17, 2014
|WRITING IELTS TASK 2: Artists, Money and Government
Writing FeedbackNhasir Rahmatia - Apr 17, 2014 / dumi - Apr 17, 2014
|GRE test prepar. - memo from the vice president of a food distribution company
Writing FeedbackAsallam - Apr 16, 2014 / scsqpd - Apr 17, 2014
|IELTS: 'everal reasons rates as adults' decision to study' - A REPORT FOR A UNIVERSITY LECTURER.
6 - This is good, but shows complexity. Let me give a try: A subject's preference breaks a record...
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 15, 2014 / eddies - Apr 17, 2014
|IELTS bar - post-school qualifications in Australia; 70%<females undergraduate
6 - Restrict the usage of commas to only where it is absolutely necessary. Alternatively, structure your sentences in such a...
Writing Feedbackammus1 - Apr 16, 2014 / EssayForumSB - Apr 17, 2014
|Parents are the best teachers; 'they play vital role on children's education'
8 - I agree with eddies on the use of articles. They're slightly...awkward, I would say, just by looking at where...
Writing FeedbackBRonnie - Apr 14, 2014 / iamnicholas1 - Apr 16, 2014
|parents go abroad for work with their family.
8 - Bad grammar in Correlative Conjunctions. To learn more, visit this link: grammarly..../handbook/grammar/conjunctions/4/correlative-conjunctions/ When you write...
Writing Feedbackammus1 - Apr 15, 2014 / eddies - Apr 16, 2014
|Public transportation is a great way to travel
4 - A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro...
Writing FeedbackIELTSScorer - Apr 16, 2014 / eddies - Apr 16, 2014
|IELTS TASK1; the number of Canadian university based on sex
7 - As per the basic rule, a paragraph is a collection of related sentences dealing with a single topic. You...
Writing FeedbackNhasir Rahmatia - Apr 15, 2014 / eddies - Apr 16, 2014
|International student from an emerging market economy; course essay
8 - Serg, Duminda's suggestion is a very good one. You should dedicate one paragraph to each of these questions....
Writing FeedbackSerg007 - Apr 14, 2014 / pdcohen - Apr 16, 2014
|higher price of petrol vs traffic and pollution; 'odd-even traffic restrictions'
Writing FeedbackBINGBINGLIANG - Apr 14, 2014 / enikolova - Apr 16, 2014
|IELTS-GT: Our Dependency on computers, & computer's use in future.
Writing FeedbackNaveed786 - Apr 15, 2014 / dumi - Apr 16, 2014
|Person with Humor - Humor is an important trait
4 - First, you should have mentioned what had been the purpose of writing this essay. It is an important aspect...
Writing Feedbackyparekh - Apr 15, 2014 / dumi - Apr 16, 2014
|Practice Essay for CLEP College Comp - Are Scandals Useful
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|Human cloning should remain banned.
Writing Feedbackbora99 - Apr 14, 2014 / bora99 - Apr 15, 2014
|people living longer nowadays. Is it good or bad?
Writing Feedbackbwosti - Apr 10, 2014 / kikiliyik - Apr 15, 2014
|IELTS: more and more people are going to other countries for significant period
Writing Feedbackchaaaany - Apr 7, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 15, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Stagnation in Health and fitness
Writing Feedbackzjxhz - Apr 14, 2014 / zjxhz - Apr 15, 2014
|IELTS Task 1. University graduates, Canada, 1992-2007
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Apr 15, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 15, 2014
|Life comes in different shapes and sizes; staying in one place or moving- choice
4 - This is a pretty confusing sentence :( You should present your ideas more clearly. You have to rephrase...
Writing Feedbacksayes - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - Apr 15, 2014
|Movies & TV affect people. 'Vietnamese man who hasn't gone to other countries'
9 - Try direct speech. You can express ideas much clearer and effectively when you write in direct speech, not...
Writing Feedbackkurapika312 - Apr 9, 2014 / dumi - Apr 15, 2014
|Toefl essay - Science or art - contributed more in the society
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Apr 2, 2014 / Jaanu - Apr 15, 2014
|Cambridge English IELTS 9, Test 1; island/ tourist facilities
5 - I like the notes eddies have provided you :) You need to follow dumi's suggestion seriously. Your...
Writing FeedbackRobotintheworld - Apr 2, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 15, 2014
|IELTS: Children should begin learning a foreign language; 'every-day habit'
10 - Well, the last sentence of your intro is not serving any purpose for your essay and instead it breaks...
Writing Feedbackridwan - Apr 2, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 15, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 : Modern forms of communication; 'electronic letter'
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 14, 2014 / aryaayra - Apr 15, 2014
|'computers & gadgets' - Modern forms of communicate with people
7 - In conclusion, based on the above reasoning, I believe that modern forms of communications have made our lives...
Writing FeedbackApsari - Apr 14, 2014 / dumi - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS: What gift would you give to a child develop? 'It is computer'
5 - Developing the classical five paragraph essay or more will send you to earn a very impressive result, but this...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 2, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|TOEFL - Most important room; Bathroom is my essential demand
6 - I see you write good, but It is always better if you take much consideration for the following point...
Writing Feedbackyanhongnanbk - Apr 8, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS - advantages and disadvantages of machines instead of human to do the work
9 - I feel this sentence contains many words and has faulty comparison between human and machines: "It is undoubted that...
Writing Feedbackduo008 - Apr 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|TOEFL: Some people are attracted to dangerous sports? 'feel more alive'
4 - Developing the classical five paragraph essay or more will send you to earn a very impressive result, but this...
Writing Feedbacksamiraaa - Apr 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|TOEFL) have phones and internet made our personal relationships decreased?
6 - A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro...
Writing Feedbacksetsam - Apr 13, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2; More people want to buy famous brands. Give reason and opinion
Writing FeedbackBig B - Apr 13, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS: There have been significant developments in the field of IT!
6 - Working with an essay's layout, you' better pay particular attention to this point: Developing the classical five paragraph essay...
Writing Feedbacktechgeek - Apr 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|'Internet is helping humankind for getting information important from corner of the world'
15 - A small tip when you work with the classical five paragraph essay Developing the classical five paragraph essay or...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Mar 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
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