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|if it should be parents who choose the partner of their children
5 - I guess you have written this essay in preparation for IELTS or TOEFL. It's always good to include that...
Writing Feedbackmonokakau - Nov 14, 2013 / dumi - Dec 8, 2013
|The charts below show the number of girls per 100 boys in all levels of education.
2 - Use the "Attach file(s)" feature that appears on the top in the Message block. Then select your file and...
Writing Feedbacktarhuna16 - Nov 12, 2013 / dumi - Dec 8, 2013
|Public utilities and surroundings are the primary factors to consider before moving to a place
7 - I don't find much meaning in this line.... Your introduction sounds better without this line. Therefore,...
Writing Feedbackaoey - Nov 21, 2013 / dumi - Dec 8, 2013
|"Whether or not violent media has a harmful effect on children"
3 - First of all, what is the purpose of writing this essay? Is this for practicing for TOEFL or IELTS?...
Writing FeedbackT1G - Nov 11, 2013 / dumi - Dec 8, 2013
|university students required to attend classes; learn better when attend
3 - .... Secondly followed by Firstly gives a bit of an odd feeling to the reader. You better rephrase...
Writing Feedbackanteros06 - Dec 7, 2013 / dumi - Dec 8, 2013
|IELTS letter- request for a training course to your manager
5 - Many thanks to sigh3508,dumi,pahan. I rewrite this letter to make it more convincing. I am writing to...
Writing FeedbackFrankZheng - Dec 6, 2013 / FrankZheng - Dec 8, 2013
|Difference between Public and Private School
6 - I'm not sure if your post is looking for help in general or just grammar help, but there seems...
Writing Feedbacklaxmineupane - Dec 7, 2013 / Lydmeister - Dec 8, 2013
|The salary of top management stuff and menial workers in big companies differ
3 - The salaries between the top management members and the members of lower grades differ significantly. This...
Writing Feedbacktarhuna16 - Nov 10, 2013 / dumi - Dec 7, 2013
|TOEFL: people can communicate faster and more conveniently using phone or e-mail
Writing Feedbackphuongnam95 - Dec 4, 2013 / phuongnam95 - Dec 7, 2013
|University studies are easier than you think
Writing FeedbackYazale - Dec 3, 2013 / dumi - Dec 7, 2013
|IELTS Writing Task 2; Old values have no relevance in the modern world
Writing Feedbackgreenleaf - Dec 5, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 7, 2013
|[TOEFL] Agree/Disagree? - Secure job with low pay or job with high pay but easy to lose
4 - ... well, it is not necessarily that lower payment relates to less working time. You need to be...
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Dec 5, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 7, 2013
|"Adolescence Stripped Away"
Writing FeedbackGreg Wolf - Dec 3, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 7, 2013
|TOEFL PRACTICE - I prefer to live in big city - more convenient and appropriate
Writing Feedbackllxcodegeass - Dec 5, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 6, 2013
|IELTS practice-Government should subsidize traditional arts? by doing what?
Writing Feedbackterry_tian - Dec 5, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 6, 2013
|Toefl. Should countries engage with others or they should isolate from other countries.
Writing Feedbacksanzhar - Dec 4, 2013 / sanzhar - Dec 6, 2013
|IELTS1: process by which academic books are published
4 - Where is the flow chart? It's good to upload all the diagrams so that others can refer to them...
Writing Feedbackinhe - Nov 11, 2013 / dumi - Dec 6, 2013
|Lots of people choose to have a pet as a companion in their lives
6 - Some grammatical errors: teach somebody something (to do something); expect somebody to do something I think you...
Writing FeedbackKate64 - Nov 23, 2013 / greenleaf - Dec 6, 2013
|IELTS: ECOLOGICAL BALANCE; 'technology as major culprit for ecological impact'
Writing Feedbackgtamani - Nov 23, 2013 / dumi - Dec 6, 2013
|No field of study can advance significantly unless it incorporates outside knowledge.
2 - What is the purpose of this writing? Is it for GRE? It's always better you include this purpose in...
Writing FeedbackPriGo - Nov 28, 2013 / dumi - Dec 6, 2013
|[IELTS ,Letter] Apply for a housekeeping position
Writing FeedbackFrankZheng - Dec 5, 2013 / FrankZheng - Dec 6, 2013
|agree that telephones are playing a more effective role than television in people's life
Writing Feedbacksurichen - Dec 5, 2013 / haodiep7640 - Dec 5, 2013
|IELTS (Academic)Task 2- Responsibility to pay for the cost of road development
Writing FeedbackRachel26HJ - Nov 28, 2013 / JethroJosh - Dec 5, 2013
|In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods.
Writing FeedbackCASOON - Dec 3, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 5, 2013
|IELTS Task 2 - Will the Internet make schools unnecessary in the future?
2 - voldemortlucky [i][i]Hi My first language is not English, may be I'm not good at telling you how to correct...
Writing Feedbackvoldemortlucky - Dec 4, 2013 / buheboljgin - Dec 4, 2013
|Is the Affordable Care Act a good idea;English1001 Explanatory Paper on Health Care Reform
2 - Yh that's really good.you shouldn't include 'the main sticking point'!try something like the main priority stance is.......
Writing FeedbackRowbear - Dec 3, 2013 / Emerald123 - Dec 4, 2013
|IELTS; Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together
4 - I think that the second sentence is like a fact and Internet not only touched aspect in the past,...
Writing Feedbackgtamani - Dec 4, 2013 / phuongnam95 - Dec 4, 2013
|Ielts ;Does modern technology make life more convenient, or otherwise?
Writing FeedbackLorax - Dec 1, 2013 / gtamani - Dec 4, 2013
|School violence is one of the social issues that is demanding corrective attention
Writing Feedbackhaodiep7640 - Nov 30, 2013 / haodiep7640 - Dec 4, 2013
|Toefl Essay- How do movies and TV Influence our behavior?
Writing FeedbackAlice123 - Nov 29, 2013 / sanzhar - Dec 4, 2013
|IELTS : consumers and advertisements
Writing Feedbackgavin - Dec 3, 2013 / gavin - Dec 4, 2013
|Do you agree that every organization has a right to set age maximum for the candidates ?
6 - Hey...don't worry, with practice you'll get over it :D You need a good hook to start with. This hook...
Writing Feedbackalex90 - Nov 30, 2013 / dumi - Dec 4, 2013
|IELTS (Academic)Task 2- Museums VS. Internet
Writing FeedbackJiaYin - Dec 2, 2013 / MisterWandering - Dec 3, 2013
|some people prefer to eat at food stands. other people prefer to eat food at home.
Writing Feedbacksaadati - Nov 24, 2013 / saadati - Dec 3, 2013
|Does Media Violence Cause Violent Behavior?
3 - dumi ty...
Writing FeedbackTiffanye Duthie - Dec 2, 2013 / Tiffanye Duthie - Dec 3, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1; Making sea water drinkable
Writing Feedbackhanasaka - Dec 1, 2013 / khodekhodam - Dec 3, 2013
|Introduction of essay: How to become a doctor
Writing FeedbackPraewa - Dec 3, 2013 / Praewa - Dec 3, 2013
|Toefl ; Independence from parents
2 - First, it is better if you post the prompt together with your essay so that we can understand what...
Writing Feedbacksanzhar - Dec 3, 2013 / dumi - Dec 3, 2013
|'Jail time or community sevices work' - Ielts essay 02
5 - First, I have an admin request for you - IELTS threads should be opened in Writing Feedback forum (...
Writing FeedbackHgly - Nov 21, 2013 / dumi - Dec 3, 2013
|IELTS (Academic)Task 2- Is advertisement just a form of entertainment?
2 - Well, I think this introduction of the background of this issue is somewhat deviated from the actual one....
Writing FeedbackRachel26HJ - Dec 2, 2013 / dumi - Dec 2, 2013
|IELTS academic - increase petrol price to reduce traffic and pollution
6 - Generally, it is easier for you to take one side of the argument and then give reasons to support...
Writing Feedbacksri_1 - Nov 28, 2013 / dumi - Dec 2, 2013
|IELTS - Is consumerism a Positive or negative development?
3 - The traditional attire for Indian women is saree. Why yous link it with history? sounds redundant :( You...
Writing Feedbackieltsp - Dec 1, 2013 / dumi - Dec 2, 2013
|World Cub can bring people of different ethics, color and language together
3 - ... pretty good introduction.... the only thing that is missing out is your opinion on the issue. It...
Writing Feedbackbatais - Dec 1, 2013 / dumi - Dec 2, 2013
|'Teaching children and goals' - IELTS essay
4 - .... this sentence has many issues.... most importantly clarity and redundancy of words :( There is no denying...
Writing Feedbackqazzas - Nov 30, 2013 / dumi - Dec 1, 2013
|IELTS: The wealth gap between 1st world countries and 3rd world countries
4 - .... let's take this hook statement. I find this has a powerful idea, but it is not presented...
Writing FeedbackGulala - Nov 30, 2013 / dumi - Dec 1, 2013
|IELTS Task 1 : Water consumption around the world
Writing Feedbackbinhpht - Dec 1, 2013 / binhpht - Dec 1, 2013
|Museums - Why People Visit Museums?
5 - yes, the topic suggests so :D What dumi says is that you should have kept the introduction in...
Writing FeedbackOguzhan - Nov 29, 2013 / Pahan - Dec 1, 2013
|'Radio and Television users' - IELTS - Line Graph
Writing FeedbackLifeBringer - Nov 24, 2013 / LifeBringer - Dec 1, 2013
|Every day computer use by children - 'Computer is a miraculous tool'
Writing FeedbackMe1992 - Nov 22, 2013 / Me1992 - Dec 1, 2013
|'Making money first' - IELTS- task 2 cause and effect writing
4 - Than you for your advises. I found that I focus on causes too much then make my solutions weak....
Writing FeedbackOlivia Han - Nov 30, 2013 / Olivia Han - Dec 1, 2013
|IELTS; Freedom, economics and education in China
5 - Economic success is considered to be one of the most important factors in the classification of the countries. ...
Writing Feedbackqusay_75 - Nov 30, 2013 / dumi - Dec 1, 2013
|The 2nd Holocaust - Argumentative essay about Death Penalty.
Writing Feedbackjorgearmando18 - Nov 27, 2013 / batais - Dec 1, 2013
|IELTS-Line graph ( The rate of smoking in Someland - men and women)
Writing Feedbackbloodkid - Nov 28, 2013 / bloodkid - Dec 1, 2013
|IELTS- parents give children TV/PC game to make them quiet,Give your solutions and reason~
7 - thanks dumi!!...
Writing Feedbackduo008 - Nov 28, 2013 / duo008 - Nov 30, 2013
|IELTS task 1 (Cambridge 1) a survey of adult education. (two charts)
5 - Oh, thank you Dumi! You are always in proper time! I noticed that pie-chart is small. But I tried...
Writing Feedbackladyjoy - Nov 28, 2013 / ladyjoy - Nov 30, 2013
|IELTS essay, Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities
7 - great.... I think you should what you desire :) Let us know when you get your score. Also, keep...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Nov 22, 2013 / dumi - Nov 30, 2013
|IELTS academic - Rules on loan and credit card
Writing Feedbacksri_1 - Nov 27, 2013 / joythblessy - Nov 30, 2013
|IELTS academic - teaching good manners by parents or teachers
4 - This is a very good essay. Your grammar and vocabulary are also good as well. But I think you...
Writing Feedbacksri_1 - Nov 28, 2013 / haodiep7640 - Nov 30, 2013
|"book smarts" and "street smarts" ; The Intellectual Aspect of Nursing essay
Writing FeedbackDonnanicole - Nov 27, 2013 / dumi - Nov 30, 2013
|Journalism article for Final Paper on the Berley brothers
Writing Feedbackariulloa - Nov 25, 2013 / ivylaw - Nov 29, 2013
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