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|'various viewpoints' Extreme sports should be banned or not?
5 - The topic of extreme sports is too broad. Why? sports are considered 'extreme' is debatable. Lead your reader by...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Mar 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: Visits abroad by UK residents by purpose of visit
7 - Yes, follow dumi's advice on structuring your writing for this task. It is important that you have those three...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 22, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|Lost flight data recorders! What is going on?
Writing Feedbackdon2074978 - Apr 22, 2014 / uzboy - Apr 22, 2014
|Parents should allow their children to select their own profession
7 - Dear Aisha, kindly let us know the purpose of your wirting, whether are you preparing for IELTS or any...
Writing FeedbackAisha Baloch - Apr 19, 2014 / Arun0506 - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: Marriages are bigger and more expensive nowadays than in the past. Why is this?
5 - Pay serious attention to improve your essay structure. Hope you would follow what dumi has suggested. That structure contains...
Writing FeedbackStella Croatia - Mar 27, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS; Learning with a teacher or learning alone - Which one do you prefer?
5 - None of these sentences provide any idea to the reader. You need to improve clarity of your sentences...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Mar 27, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|Ielts: 'the corner stone' - Is freedom of speech necessary in a free society?
3 - Your writing is good. However, you should polish the structure of your essay more. Try to follow the structures...
Writing Feedbacksamsonyeung - Apr 22, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 22, 2014
|Toefl - going to classes should be optional for the students
4 - BecauseSince the university students haveare intellectually matured enoughgrown up , they have enoughthe ability to read and understandthe concepts...
Writing FeedbackJaanu - Apr 22, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|An increasing number of people change their career and place of residence
Writing Feedbackammus1 - Apr 22, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 22, 2014
|advertising issues; regulate a law prohibiting unacceptable advertising
Writing Feedbackcodeblue - Mar 28, 2014 / eddies - Apr 22, 2014
|Painter, director, writter, photographers - creatives artists, expressing their own ideas.
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Mar 28, 2014 / eddies - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: people should create a sense of co-operation in their children
6 - The above approach I have given is for your introduction. Follow this one for your overall essay structure and...
Writing FeedbackUmair Bandhani - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 22, 2014
|Honesty vs Telling lies - persuasive essay
Writing FeedbackAndy01 - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS :How apple is canned? 'durable before it is bought'
3 - These are not relevant stuff for reporting what you observe in the diagram. In this task, you should...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2; Students VS Homework - unnecessary encumbrance
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 5, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 22, 2014
|IELTS: 'all processes occur in the water' - Live cycle of a frog
3 - ... Good introduction :) .... this needs improvement; Overall, there are seven stages in the life...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 19, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS: The method of bricks; heated in high temperature 200-1300C
2 - The diagram explains the method entire process of how bricks how to make it become material that people can...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 19, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|We have to bend children in the starting stage otherwise we can not stop them after growing
Writing Feedbackbhanusri - Apr 18, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS:The process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 19, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|Enterprises should never put all eggs in one basket - Money in advertising.
Writing FeedbackBRonnie - Apr 20, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS Exam; essay part, intro, every related information
2 - Well, you need to have a good essay structure, good grammar and clarity in your sentences, good flow of...
Writing Feedbackravneets007 - Apr 21, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS: with increasing use of computers, letters writing will disappear
Writing Feedbackalexwater - Apr 14, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The results of a survey by the UK residents
4 - This sentence has several issues. First, what the tables show are not reasons of a survey. What they...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 21, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS: Education in Australia
2 - The tables show the results of a survey abouton education in Australia between 1997 and 2005. And then,...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 21, 2014 / dumi - Apr 21, 2014
|IELTS: Why students should have laptop in their learning process? Wikipedia, Google, Bing
5 - A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro...
Writing FeedbackSigit_EngLearn - Mar 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 20, 2014
|Ielts task 2: In some countries the average weight of people is increasing.
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Apr 19, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 20, 2014
|Some sportsmen earn more money than other professionals; 'specialist of sphere'
10 - Thank you very much! You all have helped me very greatly! I am grateful that there are people like...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Apr 16, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 20, 2014
|IELTS-International tourism should respect local cultures; 'Chinese restaurants'
Writing Feedbackilovemilch - Apr 14, 2014 / eddies - Apr 20, 2014
|IELTS : Contacting nowadays seems to be not a difficulty anymore; technology
9 - Look at what Dumi suggests you with the structure (a 4-paragraph essay). With this structure, you are easy...
Writing FeedbackKellyChu - Apr 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 20, 2014
|IELTS: man to man interaction changed; reason - technology
Writing Feedbackchien - Apr 19, 2014 / chien - Apr 20, 2014
|How should children be taught?
6 - Yes, good advice by Pahan With this structure, you are easy to develop your paragraph properly. This is...
Writing FeedbackKelly219 - Apr 16, 2014 / eddies - Apr 20, 2014
|TOEFL - Scientist are responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries.
Writing Feedbackthalac - Apr 16, 2014 / eddies - Apr 20, 2014
|IELTS: The Charts show the proportion of the population of two countries
NEW - The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections...
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|IELTS TASK 1 : Bricks process
2 - Your essay is really specific. And a lot of concrete verbs. I think it's really good. However, there are...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 20, 2014 / BRonnie - Apr 20, 2014
|IELTS: Life was better when technology was simpler.
5 - I like this paragraph. You have composed a good strategy. Beginning by describing a scenario, you end with...
Writing Feedbackalexwater - Apr 17, 2014 / eddies - Apr 19, 2014
|'it is not permanent'; enjoy your money when you earn or save for your future
6 - Write "I think", instead of according to which is used when saying what people, organizations, and reports have...
Writing FeedbackJaanu - Mar 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS; 'unique from other animals' - How life cycle of a frog?
3 - Well, the mating part of the frogs not shown or indicated in the diagram. Do not write anything...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 19, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 19, 2014
|Ielts: Life cycle of frog - from eggs to adult frog
2 - These sentences do not provide any useful detailed information to the reader. This is a task that attempts...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 19, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 19, 2014
|'Many small businesses focus on individualism' - teamwork versus individual work
4 - For this reason, organizations make teams of employees with complementary skills who can work with each other, sharing experiences...
Writing Feedbackwhonevercome - Apr 18, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS; 'six processes' - Cycle life of frog
4 - You should use complex structure of sentences dumi's advice to put an overview after the introduction is good as...
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 19, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 19, 2014
|Ielts: Bricks manufacturing process from clay
2 - You should write at least 150 words, otherwise your essay score will be low. Try to use linking words...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 19, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS - "India Takes Pole Position" - FII Flow to Emerging Markets
6 - Oh...yes... I am pretty late to find this post. This is not at all acceptable to be published...
Writing FeedbackEssayForumSB - Apr 17, 2014 / dumi - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS: Should a jury know about previous crime records of a defendant?
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - Apr 16, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS: Canadian students graduated; 3 pharagraphs
6 - Your total words is 160+, i think you could simplified some sentences such as even though more...
Writing Feedbackandial - Apr 14, 2014 / Big B - Apr 19, 2014
|TALKS IELTS 1: The map of Pellington city - new shopping mall
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 13, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 19, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : The precentages of library books read at Starmouth School
2 - a problem with Dangling particle. Visit this link: usu.edu/markdamen/writingguide/10dangpt.htm a problem with Sentence fragments. Visit this...
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 18, 2014 / eddies - Apr 18, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1; Hawaiian island chain in the center of Pacific Ocean
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 13, 2014 / ernhy - Apr 18, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 : success is ten per cent talent and ninety per cent hard work?
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 9, 2014 / aryaayra - Apr 18, 2014
|TOEFL composition, about effective leadership
5 - thank you~I made an elementary mistake ⊙-⊙... not clear...do you mean the following words seems unconvincing?or I should do...
Writing Feedbackbestgen - Apr 17, 2014 / bestgen - Apr 18, 2014
|GRE ISSUE: Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning
Writing Feedbackscsqpd - Apr 17, 2014 / scsqpd - Apr 18, 2014
|TOEFL - Universities offer people opportunity to learn and improve their skills
Writing Feedbackscsqpd - Apr 9, 2014 / scsqpd - Apr 18, 2014
|IELTS task 1- summarize charts information budget allocation
Writing Feedbackminhvo - Apr 17, 2014 / minhvo - Apr 18, 2014
|Biographical sketch on experiences or events with significant effect on you- BYU
Writing Feedbacksjaqj04 - Apr 15, 2014 / sjaqj04 - Apr 18, 2014
|TOEFL: Scientists' contribution vs. artists' contributions
5 - Align your writing more with the topic; On the one hand, we should not forget the contribution that...
Writing Feedbackenikolova - Apr 16, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 17, 2014
|The Argumentative Essay - Eliminating Extreme Poverty
3 - Poverty is one of the most arduous challenges facing the world is facing today Similar to the poor,...
Writing Feedbackemma13 - Apr 17, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 17, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Male graduate from Cullum university
9 - Yes, I agree with MisterWandering. It is always better to reflect on the number of redundant expressions people constantly...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 15, 2014 / eddies - Apr 17, 2014
|Are people today live a healthier life than ancient people did or not?
Writing Feedbackljjay - Apr 17, 2014 / eddies - Apr 17, 2014
|Writing: The high sales of popular consumer goods/ advertising as extremely powerful tool
15 - A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro...
Writing FeedbackLinh Hoang - Mar 25, 2014 / eddies - Apr 17, 2014
|Ielts task 1 : the number of animals with tha amount of rainfall
6 - Hey, upload the graph using the Attach file(S) feature in the Message block :) Without seeing that it is...
Writing FeedbackApsari - Apr 16, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 17, 2014
|Life is unfair; Big money for some modern artist while other struggle to survive
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