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|"my worst day in recent memory"; College Essay
2 - forty-fourth president It wasn't clear to me how can this be the worst day? i mean. what makes it...
Writing Feedbacktymack - Sep 2, 2013 / penparker - Sep 2, 2013
|My tears were overflowing; Like the Wind, Like God
Writing Feedbackpenparker - Sep 2, 2013 / chessman567 - Sep 2, 2013
|【TOEFL】 Young people now are more willing to help others than those in the past
4 - Start with a better hook that gives the reader a punch and grab his attention.Then go onto explain...
Writing FeedbackHsinyu - Aug 22, 2013 / dumi - Sep 2, 2013
|IELTS; Popular advertisement makes people to buy various goods
4 - I'm going to suggest you a structure for your introduction. Hook - The statement that can grab reader's attention....
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 22, 2013 / dumi - Sep 2, 2013
|ielts; gender segregation; Women should be allowed to join the armed forces
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 29, 2013 / niesaysi - Sep 2, 2013
|To have my own zoo that exhibits a focus on reptiles ; lifetime goals
2 - Looks good :) But, I would not go on details of test scores,etc. I heard that colleges don't really...
Writing FeedbackDillJone - Aug 28, 2013 / 1365violin - Aug 31, 2013
|Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. Suggest some mea
Writing Feedbackprixie - Aug 31, 2013 / ShowMeHow - Aug 31, 2013
|Trying new things and taking risks means to succeed
3 - Thanks....
Writing Feedbackramshah - Aug 31, 2013 / ramshah - Aug 31, 2013
|IELTS-technology will completely teacher in classroom. Do you agree or disagree?
3 - Nowadays, technology is presented in everything and everywhere. Classroom is not an exception. I...
Writing Feedbacknovembernqk - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Aug 31, 2013
|[TOEFL] A/D Challenges are different from generation to generation
6 - Well, you've already done it in the introduction; This is it and that's fine. I just suggested...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Aug 31, 2013
|People visit museums when they travel to new places; 'National Museum of Iraq'
6 - Museums contains the largest collection of the art works.These collections represents the true heritage,customs and traditions of the great...
Writing Feedbacktarbiat - Aug 18, 2013 / thomascarlson - Aug 31, 2013
|IELTS;Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us
5 - There are some grammatical errors in a few sentences causing problems to convey the exact meaning, however, linking words...
Writing Feedbackshreyansh - Aug 29, 2013 / ojhel - Aug 30, 2013
|[TOEFL] A/D Making sure that your strengths are known by others leads to success
5 - Excellent hook :) Very good introduction, body para and conclusion. This is a very good essay...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 29, 2013 / dumi - Aug 30, 2013
|[GRE Issue] The ability to think will deteriorate as people rely more on technology
NEW - This is my first time post a thread in essayforum.com :). There's a month for the test so I...
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|If you could meet a historical figure, who would it be? TOEFL essay
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 25, 2013 / shreyansh - Aug 30, 2013
|IELTS;Air travel can only benefit the richest people in the world
Writing Feedbackshreyansh - Aug 28, 2013 / shreyansh - Aug 29, 2013
|City living or country living? advantages and disadvantages
4 - I guess youare preparing for IELTS or TOEFL. It's always good to include the purpose (IELTS, TOEFL, GRE etc.)...
Writing Feedbackshinjitsu - Aug 28, 2013 / dumi - Aug 29, 2013
|IELTS Bar graph; How people invested money
2 - Hi Where is the graph? Use the "Attach file (s)" feature in your message screen to uplord your graph....
Writing Feedbacknadrian - Aug 29, 2013 / dumi - Aug 29, 2013
|High schools should allow students to study the courses that students want to study.
2 - Well for one read it aloud like how you think it should be spoken. Then definitely tone it down...
Writing Feedbackm64 - Aug 26, 2013 / DillJone - Aug 28, 2013
|IELTS:mobile phones have become a crucial part of human life
NEW - Nowadays, mobile phones have become a crucial part of human life and are as popular as the internet. People...
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|Thanks to Technology, quality of life has been greatly enhanced!
2 - However, this also raises a question of whether technology has a good or bad effect on people's relationships nowadays....
Writing Feedbacknikoomaram - Aug 25, 2013 / Mehdi20032003 - Aug 28, 2013
|Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people
Writing FeedbackAloha363 - Aug 27, 2013 / Aloha363 - Aug 28, 2013
|IELTS; SUCCESS DEPENDS ON THEORITICAL KNOWLEDGE?
Writing Feedbackgoldv - Aug 27, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 28, 2013
|IELTS-TASK1-Describing changes taking place at an island
4 - ==> should not use and 2 times. no building except a few trees distributed in the eastern and...
Writing Feedbackyucky - Aug 25, 2013 / seabird88 - Aug 27, 2013
|IELTS; Population control is one of the greatest concerns in this current environment
Writing Feedbackshreyansh - Aug 26, 2013 / shreyansh - Aug 27, 2013
|Ielts 2: How far do you agree with this latter statement?
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Aug 26, 2013 / Shasvat Shukla - Aug 26, 2013
|Improving roads and highways or public transportation? It completely depends on dependency of public
NEW - Should government spend money on improving roads and highways or should government spend more money on improving public transportation...
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|IELTS TASK1:Complain letter about an online purchase
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Aug 21, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 25, 2013
|Children should only play sports for fun, not in competitions or contests.(TOEFL)
12 - All right~~my major has nothing to do with your major at all~haha, accounting,actually~ I love scientific guy though I...
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Aug 23, 2013 / Allen Hu - Aug 25, 2013
|[TOEFL] Do you agree that telephones play more effective role than television?
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 25, 2013 / Allen Hu - Aug 25, 2013
|TOEFL:UNIVs pay attention to sports and social activities as the educational issues?
Writing FeedbackQUPHAS - Aug 24, 2013 / hohuuhoa - Aug 25, 2013
|[GRE Issue essay] Corporations have responsibility to promote well-being of societies
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Aug 23, 2013 / testtaker - Aug 24, 2013
|[GRE: Analyze an Argument] Reduce operating expenses to reverse decline in profits
6 - Hi shadman19222! Sorry that I forgot to address your last query. I think I crossed the 30-minute time limit...
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Aug 23, 2013 / testtaker - Aug 24, 2013
|Young vs. Old generation - who is having more fun? - TOEFL
Writing Feedbacknlakhots - Aug 23, 2013 / nlakhots - Aug 24, 2013
|Individuals can do nothing on environmental issues, Agree or disagree?(TOEFL)
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Jul 17, 2013 / Allen Hu - Aug 23, 2013
|Working in supplementary task besides studying at high school may bring benefits
3 - Dear dumi, I introduce current world with real events at the introduction. I bring reasons and depict those with...
Writing Feedbackmahgh123 - Aug 23, 2013 / mahgh123 - Aug 23, 2013
|Compare and contrast your way of live with your parents
3 - We are now living in the age of information and communication technology where the world runs at a...
Writing Feedbackdoli - Aug 23, 2013 / dumi - Aug 23, 2013
|TOEFL: job has more effect on your happiness; brings the sense of accomplishment
4 - I have seen many people begin their essays like this. However, I find it's not an interesting hook...
Writing FeedbackHsinyu - Aug 22, 2013 / dumi - Aug 23, 2013
|Students staying away from parents as they mature - TOEFL
Writing Feedbacknlakhots - Aug 21, 2013 / nlakhots - Aug 22, 2013
|Perfect Man.-Short Descriptive writing :)
2 - Your writing is free and soaring. It has feeling which touches me. Although I am not native, just...
Writing FeedbackEmax3 - Aug 22, 2013 / Minions144 - Aug 22, 2013
|Ielts2: should rich countries help poor countries?
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Aug 22, 2013 / shadman19922 - Aug 22, 2013
|IELTS ; Increased prices of petrol can solve growing traffic and pollution issues
5 - Dear redtape, I highly appreciate your comment. I will save your advice. Thank you so much for...
Writing FeedbackMinions144 - Aug 21, 2013 / Minions144 - Aug 22, 2013
|TOEFL - Impact made by fast food on our lives
7 - One of those aspects is the decreasing the time given for preparing he food which made the people face...
Writing Feedbackfaheddarmoch - Aug 19, 2013 / congchop - Aug 22, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: ZOOs are only to entertain people?
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Aug 17, 2013 / congchop - Aug 22, 2013
|[TOEFL] Once you are unique enough, you are already on the way to success.
3 - I didn't see any obviously grammatical problems. Beside, I do like your point of view!! Wish you good luck!...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 22, 2013 / Hsinyu - Aug 22, 2013
|[TOEFL] Working at home V.S Working in a company; Which do you prefer?
4 - Hi Your essay is well organised, especially your introduction. However, I have only one note on this sentence ''Moreover,...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 21, 2013 / moutaz1978 - Aug 22, 2013
|[TOEFL] Successful people try new things; Do you agree?
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 21, 2013 / joyhu - Aug 22, 2013
|IELTS Task 1 - line graph (UNEMPLOYMENT RATES IN THE US AND JAPAN)
4 - Thank you very much guys, I will definitely keep on eye on my mistakes and learn from them :)...
Writing Feedbackteehee123 - Aug 18, 2013 / teehee123 - Aug 21, 2013
|Now many employees have the option to telecommute - why?
Writing Feedbacknlakhots - Aug 19, 2013 / nlakhots - Aug 21, 2013
|IELTS : The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men & women
2 - Bivek3 I don't know how to give a mark. The writing looks excellent, though. ...status between the years...
Writing FeedbackBivek3 - Aug 21, 2013 / EF_Kevin - Aug 21, 2013
|[IELTS] 'Developed Countries' - World literacy rates by region and by gender.
2 - The bar chart shows illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Overall, it can clearly...
Writing Feedbackbozhidar94 - Aug 21, 2013 / Bivek3 - Aug 21, 2013
|IELTS:apprehensive mind; learning a foreign language at primary/secondary school
10 - 1-Please post your IELTS essays to Writing Feedback forum to have more attention and feedbacks. 2-I will describe...
Writing Feedbackmahgh123 - Aug 4, 2013 / moutaz1978 - Aug 21, 2013
|Reactions Upon the Gross Effects of Typhoon Maring and Monsoon
NEW - Question: Write in essay about your personal reactions why Filipinos experience the gross effects of typhoon Maring and monsoon....
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|IETLS General Task 1: You have taken apart time job. issue with them and its solution
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Aug 20, 2013 / Arun0506 - Aug 20, 2013
|[Proficiency exams ]Argument essay arguing in favour of or against advertising..
4 - ... People include both sellers and buyers. That is to say they represent both advertisers and consumers. So,...
Writing FeedbackDeli52 - Aug 10, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 20, 2013
|Installing lights to reduce accidents. GRE Analyze an argument. Feel free to comment.
5 - Hi Pahan, Sorry, the first mistake came about as a result of typing too fast and not proofreading it...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 19, 2013 / shadman19922 - Aug 20, 2013
|Petition to University administration/ GRE analyze
6 - ... lacking in the fact????? do you mean that author's argument lacks factual evidence? .... I...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 19, 2013 / dumi - Aug 20, 2013
|TOEFL: sometimes it is good to learn with a teacher and sometimes on my own
5 - Your opening statement talks about different learning methods and this one comes without introduction as to what those...
Writing Feedbackramshah - Aug 18, 2013 / dumi - Aug 20, 2013
|IELTS Task 1 General training : A friend has agreed to look after your house and pets
5 - Well Arun.... by reading your prompt, I understand your friend has agreed to look after your house and pet...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Aug 14, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 20, 2013
|IELTS; FIXED PUNISHMENT FOR CRIMES? Or they need to be based on circumstances?
7 - In my opinion, you have taken an example of a child for the fixed punishment system where there...
Writing FeedbackDreqc - Aug 18, 2013 / Redtape - Aug 20, 2013
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