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|[TOEFL] experiences that have shaped your outlook and the way you live
5 - Take out "are" in the second sentence. Dont tell your audience what your are foing to do, do it....
Writing Feedbacksomething - Nov 20, 2013 / JulieRose - Nov 20, 2013
|Some people say that increasing working hours leads to economic success
Writing Feedbackgerelmaa - Nov 13, 2013 / gerelmaa - Nov 20, 2013
|IELTS Essay, Advantages and disadvantages living in a house and apartment
5 - There is nothing wrong with both. They are both grammatically correct. Well... they follow a marking...
Writing Feedbackasmy - Nov 20, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 20, 2013
|major cities are essential sources of information about the culture of a country
5 - First sentence : Major cities are heart of a country. It would be better : Major cities are the...
Writing Feedbacknilka61 - Oct 21, 2013 / SalehMamdouh198 - Nov 20, 2013
|Topic: Books can lead us and give a heads up on some topics
5 - we come across new situations which can not be directly solve using the books so we try to find...
Writing Feedbacksky2586 - Nov 7, 2013 / aoey - Nov 20, 2013
|IELTS chart - the nutritional consistency of two dinners
3 - Pahan It seems like you are experienced and professional :-) . Thank you for the feedback, really....
Writing Feedbackpakias - Nov 19, 2013 / pakias - Nov 20, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay: Is nuclear energy is better source of power?
5 - Your example is good but I think you should expand more about the consequences of this accident. Because...
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Nov 19, 2013 / ldlsky03 - Nov 20, 2013
|Whether to offer a higher education in high unemployment rate countries? ielts essay.
3 - Thank you DUMI Thank you for reminding me of cutting the sentence shortly to looks more brief. i will...
Writing FeedbackEricidelia - Nov 19, 2013 / Ericidelia - Nov 20, 2013
|toefl writing task 2, Many parts of the world are losing important natural resources
Writing Feedbacktevezmahmoud - Nov 12, 2013 / tevezmahmoud - Nov 20, 2013
|Toefl essay : Most important character
4 - This is your prompt and let see how you have introduced it to the reader in your introduction;...
Writing Feedbackpaulinavita - Nov 16, 2013 / dumi - Nov 20, 2013
|[TOEFL] Should replace normal classroom with online computer classes?
3 - This is because the classrooms are well equipped with resources that help students to comprehend their lessons better....
Writing Feedbacksomething - Nov 19, 2013 / dumi - Nov 20, 2013
|Private and public health care system s- IELTS Academic essay
Writing FeedbackDuva - Nov 19, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 19, 2013
|IELTS Essay; Education is a key factor for a successful life
3 - ..."immature period of life" does not sound proper; It is argued that children should start schooling from young...
Writing Feedbackpooh - Nov 18, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 19, 2013
|Multiple Pregnancies - Research paper - Preterm Labor
2 - Pregnancies can be difficult and dangerous whichand this is why mothers need to follow the instructions of doctors to...
Writing Feedbackbkewing3 - Nov 16, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 19, 2013
|[TOEFL] marry someone who is similar to you, rather than someone who is different
Writing Feedbacksomething - Nov 19, 2013 / something - Nov 19, 2013
|[TOEFL] Random roommate or roommate you choose, which one is better?
5 - Thank you :)...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Nov 11, 2013 / something - Nov 19, 2013
|Abortion Controversey -some choices come with consequences
Writing Feedbackimani18 - Nov 13, 2013 / dumi - Nov 19, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay: Old people take a while to begin using new technology such as mobile
5 - you have to take care about your conclusion part. you have to mention any connecting word at starting of...
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Nov 19, 2013 / reddy - Nov 19, 2013
|Tv advertising is not good, agree or dis agree (IELTS)
Writing Feedbackasifulizlam - Nov 15, 2013 / dumi - Nov 19, 2013
|Some Governments and Businesses prohibit smoking.Do you agree or disagree
Writing Feedbackreddy - Nov 18, 2013 / reddy - Nov 19, 2013
|[TOEFL] Which is better: one, two close friends - a large number of casual acquaintances?
2 - First, this sentence is too very long and it really disturbs its flow. Second, you have not introduced...
Writing Feedbackphuongnam95 - Nov 19, 2013 / dumi - Nov 19, 2013
|IELTS part1 - Number of minutes of telephone calls in Australia
Writing Feedbackpakias - Nov 18, 2013 / pakias - Nov 19, 2013
|Essay about people taking more than one job to earn extra money
Writing Feedbackpakias - Nov 17, 2013 / pakias - Nov 19, 2013
|Hobbies are a regular activities that is done for pleasure
2 - As we all know, hobbies are regular activities in which we engage for pleasure and relaxation during our...
Writing Feedbackazdim - Nov 16, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 18, 2013
|With all the troubles in the world today, money spent on space exploration is a waste!
3 - ... very good introduction :) Yes, I too agree... Your introduction is superb. However, your body paragraphs...
Writing Feedbacktarhuna16 - Nov 17, 2013 / dumi - Nov 18, 2013
|Eco tourism. (for and against essay) - benefits far outweigh the negatives
2 - ... empowering what? Community members stay involved at all stages of the process, having them empowered with ?????...
Writing Feedbackdashka_6539 - Nov 17, 2013 / dumi - Nov 18, 2013
|Most countries are compared by economic success. Do you think any other factors?
Writing Feedbackprashanti - Nov 15, 2013 / prashanti - Nov 18, 2013
|Choose two topics from the book and reflect it to your life!
Writing Feedbacktabithamica - Nov 17, 2013 / tabithamica - Nov 18, 2013
|MY IDEAL HOME; Apartment surrounded by a few shops and a park
5 - Oh sorry! The reason I crossed out some words and sentences is because it's not needed. Make the...
Writing Feedbackshatha100 - Nov 17, 2013 / tabithamica - Nov 18, 2013
|Increasing population required many energy sources to meet what people need
2 - You had better provide us with the full prompt of the essay. Also, you have to revise your grammar...
Writing FeedbackSafa Abulhail - Nov 16, 2013 / MisterWandering - Nov 18, 2013
|The internet as a reliable/unreliable source of information
Writing Feedbacksara373 - Nov 13, 2013 / sara373 - Nov 18, 2013
|IELTS essay, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before
3 - In the conclusion, you wrote although.... . This sentence is incomplete. The sentence structure goes like this: Although... ,...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Nov 17, 2013 / pakias - Nov 18, 2013
|Some people think secondary students should study international news as a school subject
Writing FeedbackBobbypark - Nov 17, 2013 / Bobbypark - Nov 18, 2013
|This movie is very hysterical when one is watching it alone; Film Review - The Dictator
2 - ... your focus is on Aladeen and therefore I feel you should not talk about the actor's roles...
Writing FeedbackJulieRose - Nov 17, 2013 / dumi - Nov 18, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay: Is increasing working hours leads to economic success?
4 - companies' main goal working overtime affects work-related problems such as health, meltal and social...
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Nov 14, 2013 / phuoc - Nov 17, 2013
|Effect of Technology on Children - Persuasive
3 - This issue is very important to all of us. Global warming is actually related to technology. I loved the...
Writing Feedbackbtime - Nov 15, 2013 / Jumanaa - Nov 16, 2013
|Cinema was born in 1895
2 - It's good essay and the best thing you chose many example but i think it need more linking word...
Writing Feedbackpainaidee - Nov 14, 2013 / Safa Abulhail - Nov 16, 2013
|Unreal movies are not worth watching - Toefl essay writing
Writing Feedbackrisa_xp - Nov 12, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 16, 2013
|Some people think that increasing business and cultural contacts have positive influences
7 - sure.... let's do your introduction following that structure; Unlike in the past, we live in a heavily...
Writing FeedbackBobbypark - Nov 14, 2013 / dumi - Nov 16, 2013
|Hiking a memorable experience; academic writing skills course
Writing Feedbackfz_wikiN - Nov 15, 2013 / fz_wikiN - Nov 15, 2013
|IELTS Reduce air travel to protect the environment. Agree or Disagree ?
2 - You don't have the presence of a hook in your introduction that helps grab reader's attention to your...
Writing Feedbackgabbie - Nov 14, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 15, 2013
|In many cases the development of a country is accompanied by pollution and environmental d
Writing Feedbackseoudima - Nov 14, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 15, 2013
|[TOEFL] Has the change of easier food preparation improved the way people live?
Writing Feedbackaoey - Nov 14, 2013 / aoey - Nov 15, 2013
|'Salary, work atmosphere' - factors contribute to job satisfaction?
3 - Dear Dumi, Thank you for your kind attention. You're right. My purpose is to prepare for the IELTS General...
Writing Feedbackash_qorbani - Nov 14, 2013 / ash_qorbani - Nov 15, 2013
|IELTS; Some people argue that smoking should be made illegal.
5 - The number of teenagers becoming addicted to smoke is heavily increasing. Furthermore, many teens have become...
Writing Feedbackraufh05 - Nov 9, 2013 / aoey - Nov 14, 2013
|Students under 18 should not be allowed to hold jobs
4 - I would suggest you merge some of the paragraphs. For instance, paragraph 3 and 4 an be merged. It...
Writing FeedbackGahui - Nov 11, 2013 / hemip000 - Nov 14, 2013
|IELTS task 2: EDUCATION MUST BE COMPULSORY ?
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Nov 11, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 14, 2013
|Definition essay: Relevant unimportance (Defining: " oxymoron" )
2 - Now a days one can realize that(Try "Today, it is easy for one to realize that life is chaotic...
Writing Feedbackjorgearmando18 - Nov 6, 2013 / iamnicholas1 - Nov 14, 2013
|[TOEFL] Different Reasons for attending college or universtiy
Writing Feedbackaoey - Nov 13, 2013 / aoey - Nov 13, 2013
|International tourism promotes many aspects of the destination country's economy
3 - Let us take Cambodia for example. A large number of foreign tourists arrive there in view of visiting Angkowat...
Writing Feedbackphuoc - Nov 11, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 13, 2013
|Expanding a ban on texting, talking on the phone and internet access while driving
5 - ... wrong grammar ! There are some other phone applications that are not yet banned. Therefore...
Writing FeedbackCollege girl 13 - Nov 5, 2013 / Pahan - Nov 13, 2013
|IELTS General task 1- You have a full time job and also doing a part time evening course.
Writing Feedbackmalsha - Nov 11, 2013 / dumi - Nov 13, 2013
|[TOEFL] Parents' involvement with their children's studies - Past Vs Present
4 - It is always recommended to conclude your introduction with a clear statement that expresses your opinion about the argument....
Writing Feedbackphuongnam95 - Nov 11, 2013 / dumi - Nov 13, 2013
|IELTS Academic essay: Is academic qualifications important than personal life experience a
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Nov 11, 2013 / JethroJosh - Nov 13, 2013
|TOEFL: Whether countries have moral obligation to help each other or not ?
Writing Feedbackthwadu - Oct 28, 2013 / thwadu - Nov 13, 2013
|why do we need music? Traditional Vs Contemporary Music
Writing Feedbackashalatha - Nov 4, 2013 / ashalatha - Nov 12, 2013
|IELTS Task 2: Traffic flow problems
NEW - Traffic Ruins Cities With the number of cars continuously growing, more and more city centres encounter a problem...
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|[TOEFL] Integrated writing in toefl ibt.; Migration Hypothesis
Writing Feedbackphuongnam95 - Nov 11, 2013 / legend777 - Nov 12, 2013
|IETLSome people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay tax to the state.
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|IELTS Academic essay: Modern communication systems benefit many people yet there are some
3 - This idea seems to be dragged too much. This is your hook (I have suggested the structure for...
Writing FeedbackAltaa - Nov 11, 2013 / dumi - Nov 12, 2013
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