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|Person with Humor - Humor is an important trait
4 - First, you should have mentioned what had been the purpose of writing this essay. It is an important aspect...
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|Practice Essay for CLEP College Comp - Are Scandals Useful
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|Human cloning should remain banned.
Writing Feedbackbora99 - Apr 14, 2014 / bora99 - Apr 15, 2014
|people living longer nowadays. Is it good or bad?
Writing Feedbackbwosti - Apr 10, 2014 / kikiliyik - Apr 15, 2014
|IELTS: more and more people are going to other countries for significant period
Writing Feedbackchaaaany - Apr 7, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 15, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Stagnation in Health and fitness
Writing Feedbackzjxhz - Apr 14, 2014 / zjxhz - Apr 15, 2014
|IELTS Task 1. University graduates, Canada, 1992-2007
Writing FeedbackMisnariah Idrus - Apr 15, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 15, 2014
|Life comes in different shapes and sizes; staying in one place or moving- choice
4 - This is a pretty confusing sentence :( You should present your ideas more clearly. You have to rephrase...
Writing Feedbacksayes - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - Apr 15, 2014
|Movies & TV affect people. 'Vietnamese man who hasn't gone to other countries'
9 - Try direct speech. You can express ideas much clearer and effectively when you write in direct speech, not...
Writing Feedbackkurapika312 - Apr 9, 2014 / dumi - Apr 15, 2014
|Toefl essay - Science or art - contributed more in the society
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Apr 2, 2014 / Jaanu - Apr 15, 2014
|Cambridge English IELTS 9, Test 1; island/ tourist facilities
5 - I like the notes eddies have provided you :) You need to follow dumi's suggestion seriously. Your...
Writing FeedbackRobotintheworld - Apr 2, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 15, 2014
|IELTS: Children should begin learning a foreign language; 'every-day habit'
10 - Well, the last sentence of your intro is not serving any purpose for your essay and instead it breaks...
Writing Feedbackridwan - Apr 2, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 15, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 : Modern forms of communication; 'electronic letter'
Writing Feedbackaryaayra - Apr 14, 2014 / aryaayra - Apr 15, 2014
|'computers & gadgets' - Modern forms of communicate with people
7 - In conclusion, based on the above reasoning, I believe that modern forms of communications have made our lives...
Writing FeedbackApsari - Apr 14, 2014 / dumi - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS: What gift would you give to a child develop? 'It is computer'
5 - Developing the classical five paragraph essay or more will send you to earn a very impressive result, but this...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 2, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|TOEFL - Most important room; Bathroom is my essential demand
6 - I see you write good, but It is always better if you take much consideration for the following point...
Writing Feedbackyanhongnanbk - Apr 8, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS - advantages and disadvantages of machines instead of human to do the work
9 - I feel this sentence contains many words and has faulty comparison between human and machines: "It is undoubted that...
Writing Feedbackduo008 - Apr 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|TOEFL: Some people are attracted to dangerous sports? 'feel more alive'
4 - Developing the classical five paragraph essay or more will send you to earn a very impressive result, but this...
Writing Feedbacksamiraaa - Apr 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|TOEFL) have phones and internet made our personal relationships decreased?
6 - A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro...
Writing Feedbacksetsam - Apr 13, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2; More people want to buy famous brands. Give reason and opinion
Writing FeedbackBig B - Apr 13, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS: There have been significant developments in the field of IT!
6 - Working with an essay's layout, you' better pay particular attention to this point: Developing the classical five paragraph essay...
Writing Feedbacktechgeek - Apr 9, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|'Internet is helping humankind for getting information important from corner of the world'
15 - A small tip when you work with the classical five paragraph essay Developing the classical five paragraph essay or...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Mar 29, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS: mobile phone; "Iron man" / "Weichat" - destroy social interactions?
8 - A small tip working with an essay's layout: Developing the classical five paragraph essay or more will send you...
Writing Feedbackxingshigang - Apr 11, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|Television should have only shows and entertainment programs?
Writing FeedbackMari5464 - Apr 1, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 14, 2014
|About My Times of Life - 'I had a nice childhood'
Writing FeedbackStwhWindresides - Apr 13, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 14, 2014
|progress is always precarious; every step toward it brings suffering, sacrifices
6 - Let me also give some help here :D Well, if you particularly struggle with the hook, straightaway start with...
Writing Feedbackhere2study - Apr 10, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS task II Learning by Gadgets than books.
9 - Yes, time is a very important aspect when you deal with IELTS and TOEFL tasks. With regard to word...
Writing FeedbackApsari - Apr 11, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 14, 2014
|[ESSAY] How people's food choices are a reflection of large values they hold?
Writing FeedbackSP88 - Apr 13, 2014 / dumi - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS Task II The different of Life Culture in the past and in the modern era
Writing FeedbackApsari - Apr 9, 2014 / Apsari - Apr 14, 2014
|Ielts task 2: Who is responsible for helping to poorer nations.
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Apr 13, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS 1;comparisons where relevant to bulid new mall in the city of Brandfield .
3 - I have noticed that you have the habit of using "both" and "two" together. Since they both have...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 13, 2014 / dumi - Apr 14, 2014
|Classification essay on music; "When the Music's Over"
2 - Music is used for entertainmentto entertain us and it can effectaffect us emotionally, and even impact our physical...
Writing FeedbackOrangeeskies - Apr 13, 2014 / dumi - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 - plan to build new supermarket in the city of Garlsdon.
7 - Thanks to Google, here is information regarding Maps in IELTS: Generally there are two types of maps in...
Writing FeedbackEva Novita Sari - Apr 13, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The map below is of the town of Garlsdon.
6 - I am googling now. This is information about maps in IELTS. Generally there are two types of maps in...
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 13, 2014 / eddies - Apr 14, 2014
|IELTS: The map of Brandfield city - new shopping mall
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 13, 2014 / eddies - Apr 13, 2014
|A Touching Story; a dog that I found when I was 10 years old
6 - Possibly write down a list of emotions you felt after finding the dog. The list may help you realize...
Writing Feedbackenglishlover - Apr 12, 2014 / Orangeeskies - Apr 13, 2014
|People who achieved incredible success in their life seem not to encounter a failure.
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - Apr 12, 2014 / Shokhusrav - Apr 13, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1; Cinema attendance in the UK
Writing Feedbackupinipin - Apr 10, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 13, 2014
|IELTS: The map of Pellington city; new hypermart, near Hampford town.
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 13, 2014 / dumi - Apr 13, 2014
|Ielts task 2: Benefits and drawbacks of having several careers.
3 - In our culturelanguage there is a proverb "For a person, even 70 crafts isare not enough" .......
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Apr 13, 2014 / dumi - Apr 13, 2014
|The problem of deforestation, my opinion about it.
5 - Hello! Thank you for your feedback, I'm glad to hear that my essay is good enough:) Yes, it is...
Writing Feedbacklaziiza - Apr 12, 2014 / laziiza - Apr 13, 2014
|GREAs people rely on technology to solve problems, our ability turns upside down
3 - Thank you for your kind help and advice. Your suggestions are helpful as you have pointed out the weakness...
Writing Feedbacksntinn - Apr 10, 2014 / sntinn - Apr 13, 2014
|IELTS - GT: On recent Holiday you lost valuable item, claim to insurance
Writing FeedbackNaveed786 - Apr 10, 2014 / Naveed786 - Apr 13, 2014
|What are the advantages and disadvantages for children of watching TV? IELTS
Writing Feedbackuzboy - Apr 12, 2014 / Abdurasul - Apr 13, 2014
|The possibility of choosing the physical characteristics of a child!
Writing Feedbackkdr98 - Apr 12, 2014 / kikiliyik - Apr 13, 2014
|Toefl - enforce limit the use of automobile for the betterment of our earth
4 - The second reason is that increasedinincrease in number of automobile has produced inconveniencyinconvenience in our life. We cannot...
Writing Feedbacksayes - Apr 1, 2014 / dumi - Apr 13, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1; The map about Garlsdon City.
4 - You need to improve on your structure and I hope you follow dumi's approach. This should come...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 12, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 13, 2014
|IELTS; Jewelry or concert tickets; What is more important for you?
6 - Well, your topic is not exactly argumentative type, but you can have it fitting into the above structure. For...
Writing FeedbackPurwati Ayu - Apr 6, 2014 / dumi - Apr 12, 2014
|Soul of American: Integrity and Ethics Essay.
Writing Feedbackkserc - Apr 12, 2014 / englishlover - Apr 12, 2014
|'relieve tension' - Going to a new school is exciting / frustratating
4 - What is the purpose of writing this essay? Is this for TOEFL or IELTS? It is always better the...
Writing FeedbackSandP - Apr 2, 2014 / dumi - Apr 12, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Changes in one city spending patterns in 1966.
Writing FeedbackBOMAT_IRA - Apr 11, 2014 / upinipin - Apr 12, 2014
|IETS Task 1 : Propotion of Canadian graduates by gender
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 12, 2014 / SHanafi - Apr 12, 2014
|IELTS: Emigration intentions, Bulgarian aged 15-60, 2001 & 2006
9 - A few words for the layout of the paragraph: Developing the classical five paragraph essay or more will send...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 28, 2014 / eddies - Apr 12, 2014
|Choice between academic qualifications vs personal experience and values, when hiring
4 - I see you try to vary your sentences by using synonyms, but you should remember not all synonyms have...
Writing Feedbackmshojaei - Mar 25, 2014 / eddies - Apr 12, 2014
|IELTSTask1: Music choice VS Pop parade music
7 - Hi Pahan, I think if the statements which are connected with but , you should use coma before...
Writing Feedbackernhy - Apr 11, 2014 / Eva Novita Sari - Apr 12, 2014
|Such a surprised day! Yesterday's weather was hard. It was changeable.
3 - Thank you so much. Actually, this is a record about my daily life. Thanks for correcting my mistakes turn...
Writing FeedbackStwhWindresides - Apr 11, 2014 / StwhWindresides - Apr 12, 2014
|'Gender and jobs relate to gender' - Equal numbers of male and female students
Writing FeedbackTruong Nguyen - Apr 6, 2014 / eddies - Apr 12, 2014
|IELTS: How many people listened to different types of music in Tokyo last month
3 - As can be seen from the table, a massivea large majority of 79% of males use Mp3-players to listenfor...
Writing Feedbackcrystal941 - Mar 28, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 12, 2014
|The most beneficial discovery in last 100 years - internet invention; many impacts
7 - Yes,as dumi says it is the contents and presentation matter more than the word count (however, you should...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 24, 2014 / Pahan - Apr 12, 2014
|'dissatisfaction with the house' ; IELTS TASK 1
14 - Were I you, I would start constructing the bodies of the paragraph, like this: Para 2: Thank him for...
Writing Feedbackgoyote - Mar 31, 2014 / eddies - Apr 11, 2014
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