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|IELTS_importance of academic qualifications and personality in employment
2 - After reading your passage,in addition to some of the influent sentences,I feel you'd better think about how to make...
Writing Feedbackchfrank - Oct 7, 2012 / Jue - Oct 7, 2012
|SAT essay -Which is more powerful? Conscience Vs Money, Fame, or Power
NEW - I would like some feedback on improving this, also, I would like to know what score I would get,...
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|IELTS; parents and schools are able to share the responsibility to educate children
Writing FeedbackTran Tong - Oct 2, 2012 / April April - Oct 6, 2012
|Report on culture shock between China and French for exchange student
NEW - Hey, it is a little bit longer. Please help me look at the structure and writing. Thank you ...
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|IELTS letter: requesting some information about the scholarship
3 - jue, thanks for your suggestions by which make the viewpoint more convinced by giving more elabration on the application...
Writing Feedbackredstone - Oct 5, 2012 / redstone - Oct 6, 2012
|Nuclear Family Essay - needs a LOT of reconstructing
2 - On the first sentence i think you shld remove 'or not' because it will sound better if there's only...
Writing Feedbacksamanthaxo - Oct 5, 2012 / jomk - Oct 6, 2012
|Factors influencing job satisfaction; salary and high level position in ranking
Writing Feedbackjahan - Oct 3, 2012 / jahan - Oct 6, 2012
|Outline-- Responses in relation to the attacks of September 11
5 - Man that must be a big essay, for the general idea, try to include things about how the planes...
Writing Feedbackttc1234 - Apr 21, 2009 / saichicka39 - Oct 5, 2012
|TOEFL essay - help / technology effects
4 - internet,which -> Use space after commas internet, which is the grand an invincible product of technology of 21...
Writing FeedbackJue - Oct 5, 2012 / krishnakant - Oct 5, 2012
|Movies expand our knowledge and information about other countries. TOEFL Essay
2 - The last and most important but not the least reason is that movies enhance/escalate our knowledge about other countries....
Writing Feedbacknavid_zarif - Oct 5, 2012 / krishnakant - Oct 5, 2012
|IELTS: Should University education be free? 'Everything has two sides'
Writing Feedbackquy - Oct 5, 2012 / pgaur - Oct 5, 2012
|Essay about a car incident
6 - First try to focus on maintaining the structure of the essay. I mean there should be introduction which clearly...
Writing FeedbackArmo - Jan 27, 2009 / quy - Oct 5, 2012
|Government expenses for roads and highways or public transportation - TOEFL essay
Writing FeedbackJue - Oct 5, 2012 / besttermpaper - Oct 5, 2012
|Sat essay; punishment as kids teaching method. Intro and Body - grade it, any ways to improve it?
2 - Hi, I made a few corrections/suggestions to your essay. Hope they help. Sorry I couldn't get the strike through...
Writing FeedbackAminemouj - Oct 4, 2012 / Duffy1513 - Oct 4, 2012
|IELTS task 2 - What criteria should be used to decide how much people are paid?
2 - This statements is too broad and does not establish a close link to your topic theme.... Specify the...
Writing Feedbacklavinia94 - Oct 3, 2012 / dumi - Oct 4, 2012
|IELTS - International travel and mass media: Duchess Kate topless
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|ancient humans formed rhythms by stones; traditional vs international music
Writing Feedbackorkhan - Sep 26, 2012 / orkhan - Oct 3, 2012
|IELTS TASK 1 - Immigration figures for the UK
3 - Thank you so much. Those are basic errors. Unacceptable. Normally, I cannot see all of my errors, even I've...
Writing FeedbackTran Tong - Oct 2, 2012 / Tran Tong - Oct 2, 2012
|IELTS ; The roads are getting more crowded with increasing number of cars
2 - With the number of cars increasing,roads are getting more crowded and the environment is becoming more polluted. But I...
Writing Feedbackgoldmanswalking - Oct 2, 2012 / giaaahhh28 - Oct 2, 2012
|'How has technology affected relationships' I am preparing to score band 7+ in IELTS
3 - Hey pgaur, thanks for you comment. But could you please elaborate on this more by giving me some...
Writing Feedbackgoldmanswalking - Oct 1, 2012 / goldmanswalking - Oct 1, 2012
|Creative artists should be given liberty to express themselves; like on Facebook
3 - 1. Actually i try to show that yes freedom to be given to creative persons but with some restrictions....
Writing Feedbackpgaur - Oct 1, 2012 / pgaur - Oct 1, 2012
|Cell Phones Impact on Society - they have made communication easier
3 - thank you so much!! yes you did help me alot; i added few things thanks to ur feedback...is that...
Writing Feedbackrwony - Oct 1, 2012 / rwony - Oct 1, 2012
|'comparison the sales of CD' - Bar chart of IELTS task-1
Writing Feedbacknitish582 - Sep 3, 2012 / color - Oct 1, 2012
|There are many diffrent types of music in the world today. Whay do we need music ?
NEW - Hi everybody, I am a newcomer, and I am trying to improve my writing to get ielts examination next...
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|Prehistoric village of Palea, evidences. GRE Argument topic 1
6 - Hi Westway50 Thanx for your grading my essay. I seek your suggestion for the practice of Essay. Can...
Writing FeedbackMriytunjay - Sep 12, 2012 / Mriytunjay - Oct 1, 2012
|'Past achievements are requirements of a significant contribution' A GRE ISSUE
2 - Your introduction is a bit unclear, it is wordy and hard to understand. write it in a clear concise...
Writing Feedbackiceyniex - Sep 17, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 30, 2012
|Should we trust someone in the first impression or not?
NEW - Hi everybody, please give me some your comments for my essay. Thank you very much :) Some people...
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|TOEFL Essay,"It is not possible to eliminate poverty"
3 - Yes, you are right, but at the end of each para, I have mentioned solution or my opinion, that...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Sep 25, 2012 / ana_p - Sep 29, 2012
|Human needs vs endangered animals. TOEFL IBT ESSAY
NEW - here is the topic: some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than...
Writing Feedbackafsanehrazi - Sep 29, 2012 / — -
|IELTS CUe card. Describe someone you know who made a wrong decision.
NEW - Describe someone you know who made a wrong decision. You should say: who the person was what the situation...
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|Toefl Essay "Parents should let their children to make mistakes"
3 - Dear ana_p Many thanks for your assistance I rewrite this topic Parents should let their children to make...
Writing Feedbackya3r - Sep 28, 2012 / ya3r - Sep 28, 2012
|'Education should be free to all people' Do you agree or disagree with this statement
3 - thank you for your cerrection for my task. this is a practice task for my IELTS Examination. i think...
Writing Feedbacksmxzdy528 - Sep 23, 2012 / smxzdy528 - Sep 28, 2012
|Two types of transportation: Is Compare and Contrast Clear Enough?
Writing Feedbacklibrarylover - Apr 7, 2010 / mmouse - Sep 28, 2012
|TOEFL - Should schools focus more on teaching cooperation or on teaching competition?
2 - Your essay is pretty good. It's persuasive and well written. There are some minor errors -> myself...
Writing Feedbackhovan0201 - Sep 25, 2012 / hxuanhung - Sep 28, 2012
|TOEFL - 'Beethoven' - A person in history whom you want to talk to
NEW - Music has become an essential part of every one's life and many musical artists have also been idols of...
Writing Feedbackhovan0201 - Sep 28, 2012 / — -
|The process of chocolate production; IELTS (Report)
2 - For the word ingredient, you could try replacing some with words like "components" or "factors" Also, your introduction sentence...
Writing Feedbackthe optimists - Sep 28, 2012 / dianephm - Sep 28, 2012
|College narrative essay on a moment of success.
Writing Feedbackomo5031 - Sep 17, 2012 / the optimists - Sep 28, 2012
|Having two phases - Information gathering & Analyzing; Approach of problem solving
3 - People use different solution methods: 1. Define the problem. 2. Reasons why the problem occured. 3. What do you...
Writing Feedbackmeili luo - Sep 22, 2012 / cahillcahill - Sep 28, 2012
|Concert Report for Les Miserables at Ellen Eccles Theater
3 - I would like feedback from a person that knows music.. No offense but I'm not getting graded on sentence...
Writing Feedbackmdehek - Sep 22, 2012 / mdehek - Sep 27, 2012
|"Winning is..." ENGL101 Honors English 101 class Narrative Essay
3 - I have this condition. It is hard to explain what happens, but mainly that is because for the most...
Writing Feedbackcrackhamster - Sep 27, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 27, 2012
|My Essay "Heros or Tyrants?" - Needs critique and help with transitions......
Writing FeedbackJMcClain - Sep 20, 2012 / elevit2 - Sep 27, 2012
|"Do zoos serve any useful function?" - TOEFL ESSAY - ZOOS
2 - You can try to expand more the third paragraph. I think it's quite short compared to the second paragraph....
Writing Feedbackhovan0201 - Sep 22, 2012 / hxuanhung - Sep 27, 2012
|It all began when I moved away from my life in Siberia; Life Story/ GCSE ESSAY
Writing Feedbackconversefloss - Sep 15, 2012 / EF_Susan - Sep 27, 2012
|SAT essay [Do people learn who they are when they are forced into action?] Thanks
Writing FeedbackMacSydney - Sep 25, 2012 / eason chen - Sep 27, 2012
|Writing Task 1: Computer terminals available to students in different faculties
2 - Hi Rooseveltsea, welcome your essay do not have introduction. you started your essay with overall view. It...
Writing FeedbackRooseveltsea - Sep 14, 2012 / layla88 - Sep 27, 2012
|'Radical reaction and educating / warning people' - IELTS 8 WRITING TASK 2 PAG 79
Writing Feedbackpitchulinha - Sep 26, 2012 / layla88 - Sep 26, 2012
|IELTS:The graph compares the number of visits: Pop Parade vs Music Choice
Writing Feedbackdidiconopidi - Sep 10, 2012 / didiconopidi - Sep 26, 2012
|'Luciano Pavarotti' - SAT ESSAY: Is it better for people to have limited choices?
NEW - One's life is constantly affected by the choice he or she has made. It is generally borne in on...
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|IELTS - Education is a critical driver and a game changer for any country's development
Writing Feedbackvikki - Sep 22, 2012 / layla88 - Sep 26, 2012
|Why Sports Should Be Made Compulsory In School
3 - Thank you for your feedback. I really appreciated it!!! Sorry, i forgot to post the reference list. Anyway, I...
Writing Feedbackbeatc - Sep 24, 2012 / beatc - Sep 25, 2012
|[TOEFL] Being active has a lot of advantages than being passive
NEW - I'm a beginner of TOEFL writing, really hope can get some useful feedback from here to improve my poor...
Writing Feedbackelsaswhuang - Sep 25, 2012 / — -
|'Ah Kang' - Narrative writing- freedom
3 - Thank you very much and your comment is really helpful~ LOL ya it is indeed quite a silly mistake...
Writing Feedbacksecschoolboy - Sep 20, 2012 / secschoolboy - Sep 25, 2012
|I'm having trouble with my introduction. I'm afraid it may be deemed as plagerism?
4 - You actually don 't have to worry too much abt the intro cauze it happens quite often that the...
Writing FeedbackFiction - Sep 24, 2012 / DrDraco - Sep 25, 2012
|TOEFL - People should have hobbies and activities different from their own work
Writing FeedbackEVAzyy - Sep 22, 2012 / dumi - Sep 25, 2012
|IELTS - To reduce traffic in cities, we should reduce traveling by people
Writing Feedbackhoshmp - Sep 20, 2012 / dumi - Sep 25, 2012
|'Dieting - a billion dollar market' - ielts
5 - You are really just bulleting facts. You need to add connecting sentences in between each of the sentences. Your...
Writing Feedbackvikki - Sep 24, 2012 / oksanavy7 - Sep 24, 2012
|Why Materialistic People Are Less Happy in Marriage?
5 - cool!...
Writing Feedbackzer000 - Sep 12, 2012 / ThreeFive2Hood - Sep 24, 2012
|ielts : financial education in school - should be mandatory
Writing Feedbackvikki - Sep 24, 2012 / joythblessy - Sep 24, 2012
|IELTS: Impacts of Technology and its crucial part of our lives
7 - nice work but you have stressed only on security .. technology is a general term and so it requires...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Aug 19, 2012 / vikki - Sep 24, 2012
|[TOEFL] Impacts of airplanes on modern life
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