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|Scholarship Essay "Why should you be considered for a scholarship by the Alumni of your school"
2 - Sebastian, being a graduate of this university and applying for an alumna scholarship requires a specific type of scholarship...
ScholarshipTRD006 - Jun 11, 2017 / Holt - Jun 11, 2017
|Prompt by scholarship committee about my goals for the future
2 - You are saying a lot of things of interest in your essay but none of these responses directly respond...
Scholarshiphealthstudent - Jun 8, 2017 / Holt - Jun 9, 2017
|I am a medical student on my way to becoming a physician
2 - Amit, this is a pretty interesting essay. The only critique that I can give you is that the essay...
Scholarshiphealthstudent - Jun 8, 2017 / Holt - Jun 8, 2017
|Endeavour scholarship (Master in sustainable devlopment)
4 - little changes..... Since very early age I was interested in science; finding the truth; I took my keen...
ScholarshipEndeavourguy - Jun 1, 2017 / Endeavourguy - Jun 1, 2017
|Statement explaining how the scholarship will support your educational and career objectives
2 - Lilian, all I read about here are your skills and educational background. You have spoken of possible objectives for...
ScholarshipLILIB - May 30, 2017 / Holt - May 30, 2017
|K-ARTS Scholarship Self Introduction essay for Film and Media Graduate students
3 - @Holt Thanks for your valuable remarks .In this essay ,I talked about the university because they wanted to know...
ScholarshipJsheikh - May 28, 2017 / Jsheikh - May 29, 2017
|PERSONAL STATEMENT ON WHY I SHOULD BE CONSIDERED FOR SCHOLARSHIP AT HERRIOT WATT UNIVERSITY.
5 - @Holt I sincerely appreciate your comment. I have several academics accomplishment, but as it is now I don't have...
ScholarshipHussein17 - May 12, 2017 / Hussein17 - May 28, 2017
|A decent aspirant to obtain a scholarship prize
3 - Ciara, when you apply for a scholarship, the first that you have to look at are the requirements of...
ScholarshipciaraM - May 23, 2017 / Holt - May 26, 2017
|Learning nationalism through activities in education, youth, and Indonesian culture
5 - @Holt Thank you, Holt, your advice did improve the essay! I would also love to use the private service...
Scholarshipflykitten - May 22, 2017 / flykitten - May 22, 2017
|SCHOLARSHIP: Short essay on something of personal importance to you
2 - Lih, this topic doesn't have a personal tone to it. There is nothing in what you wrote that would...
Scholarshipskullyton - May 22, 2017 / Holt - May 22, 2017
|University of Auckland Scholarship Essay_Skill and Knowledge gained from the study
3 - Thank you @Mary Rose for the feedback. I have revised the essay based on your comment. Please give any...
Scholarshipkris_2017 - May 18, 2017 / kris_2017 - May 18, 2017
|University Scholarship Cancellation Appeal Letter
Scholarshipacecomer98 - May 18, 2017 / acecomer98 - May 18, 2017
|Brunel University - Country Specific Scholarship
4 - A LOT OF CHANGES NEEDED: Just first paragraph done here. As an engineer working in construction field (for...
ScholarshipEng Phin - May 4, 2017 / sartajzzz - May 15, 2017
|AAS Supporting statement No.4. Practical examples of how you intend to use the knowledge
4 - Your examples are fantastic. The manner by which you wish to use the knowledge you will be gaining is...
Scholarshipaz23 - May 3, 2017 / Holt - May 5, 2017
|In which way this study will enhance your chance for a great career?
2 - Husam, your essay concentrates too much on hypothetical situations instead of real world applications. Since this is a masters...
Scholarshiphusam bari - May 3, 2017 / Holt - May 4, 2017
|Reasons and Study Objectives Behind Proposed Course and Institution - AAS 2017 Essay Task 1
3 - I don't think you can write in excess of 2,000 characters on the application page. So please be sure...
ScholarshipMonica26 - Apr 30, 2017 / az23 - May 3, 2017
|Sydney university - "Technology that is designed to delight its users" - AAS supporting statement 1
2 - Ida, totally remove your first paragraph and make the current second paragraph your first paragraph instead. Just merge the...
Scholarshipkanbin - May 1, 2017 / Holt - May 2, 2017
|Study Objectives Essay For Fulbright Scholarship Program 2018 From Pakistan
4 - Bilal, in my honest opinion, your essay doesn't really respond to the question. The development of your essay response...
Scholarshipbilal_engineer - Apr 30, 2017 / Holt - May 1, 2017
|STATEMENT OF PURPOSE FOR OFID SCHOLARSHIP AWARD - PAKISTAN RISK
4 - @bilal_engineer thank you dear bilal. I have modified it totally now, looking at the suggestions made by you people....
ScholarshipFarmancus - Apr 27, 2017 / Farmancus - Apr 30, 2017
|The road to abolish energy poverty from my country
4 - @azadsaleem71 Dear Azad, Salam buddy! I've proofread your essay and following is some of the parts which...
Scholarshipazadsaleem71 - Apr 29, 2017 / bilal_engineer - Apr 30, 2017
|"How I Intend to use benefits from scholarship and possible constraints" - AAS 2017 Essay Task 3
2 - Monica, all of your reference to the actual application of your course of study is vague and general in...
ScholarshipMonica26 - Apr 30, 2017 / Holt - Apr 30, 2017
|Task 1 for AAS application. Reasons for choosing to study the course and the institution.
3 - @Holt Thank you for your feedback. I have made a revision with your suggestions. Please have a look...
ScholarshipbushraAhmed - Apr 28, 2017 / bushraAhmed - Apr 29, 2017
|Space - Essay FOR Australian Award Scholarship
NEW - How did you choose your proposed course and institution*? Spatial Engineering I did study about Spatial Engineering,...
ScholarshipRisty1994 - Apr 26, 2017 / — -
|Environment and economic in Australia - Supporting Statement for AAS: Task 1
NEW - Hi everyone, please help me to review my first task in supporting document for AAS. Any respond will be...
Scholarshipfarkud - Apr 26, 2017 / — -
|Communication and media - challenging world; study plan for scholarship
3 - Bambina, your essay does not completely respond to the prompt requirements. You wrote this essay without regard for the...
Scholarshipbambina - Apr 24, 2017 / Holt - Apr 26, 2017
|Becoming a geotechnical lecturer in civil engineering major is the career that I want to pursue
2 - Putri, don't explain about the pedagogy part in this essay. It sounds like you are lecturing the reviewer. It...
Scholarshipflykitten - Apr 24, 2017 / Holt - Apr 25, 2017
|AAS supporting statement (review needed) - Task 1 choosing my course and institution
4 - Audi, consider writing a new response for the required prompt. The response that you should be giving in terms...
Scholarshipodunkz - Apr 24, 2017 / Holt - Apr 25, 2017
|My contribution to help in developing my country to be a global center of financial services
3 - @Holt thank for response and valuable comment on my essay. and i tried to response again on your comment...
Scholarshipbilguunsaikhan - Apr 22, 2017 / bilguunsaikhan - Apr 24, 2017
|I choosed Australia National University. Need your help in checking my essay down below.
ScholarshipTickyMik - Apr 22, 2017 / TickyMik - Apr 24, 2017
|Scholarship contribute to the organisation's human resource development needs. AAS support statement
4 - @holt , thanks for your comment. It is very helpful, especially about "Don't focus so much on yourself" ...
Scholarshipfajarlombok - Apr 23, 2017 / fajarlombok - Apr 23, 2017
|AAS Supporting statement No.3 about doing something meaningful for the society
4 - Your essay does not properly work for the prompt. You have to use a situation at your office or...
Scholarshipaz23 - Apr 23, 2017 / Holt - Apr 23, 2017
|Owning a law company with a group of skillful associates - my future career
3 - @Holt Thank you for your comments as always. In fact, I don't get why the contribution of my studies...
Scholarshipaz23 - Apr 23, 2017 / az23 - Apr 23, 2017
|How did you choose Master of Agricultural Sciences The University of Queensland?
4 - @trayaa91 I'm applying to AAS too. Below are few comments on the current version of your essay: -it is...
Scholarshiptrayaa91 - Apr 23, 2017 / az23 - Apr 23, 2017
|My research about about Australia Awards Scholarship, what led me to this institution
3 - @flykitten I think in paragraph two you should write about what you have done to research the major which...
Scholarshipflykitten - Apr 22, 2017 / fajarlombok - Apr 23, 2017
|JAMES COOK UNIVERSITY. Proposed course and institution. AAS supporting statement.
3 - Fajar, in my opinion, the first paragraph of your essay should be reserved to open the essay response about...
Scholarshipfajarlombok - Apr 22, 2017 / Holt - Apr 22, 2017
|Details of any other experience/information which you consider relevant to your application
3 - Bolarinwa, while I consider your current draft a slight improvement on your previous post, I must say that you...
Scholarshipbolarinwa - Apr 16, 2017 / okorobiadimma14 - Apr 22, 2017
|I chosed University of Melbourne and Monash University. AAS 2018 Supporting Statement
Scholarshipaz23 - Apr 16, 2017 / az23 - Apr 22, 2017
|Analyst of Marine Protected Area. Three practical examples in Australia Awards Scholarship
2 - Fajar, with a 2000 character count in the essay, your work has room for improvement. However, before I start...
Scholarshipfajarlombok - Apr 21, 2017 / Holt - Apr 21, 2017
|Scholarship Questions - what are your intentions after graduating from school?
3 - Stef, the opening sentence of your essay is a good foundation for the response. However, the rest of the...
Scholarshipvasillisa - Apr 21, 2017 / Holt - Apr 21, 2017
|Applying master degree of Naval Architecture. Supporting Statement for Australian Award Scholarship
3 - May. none of your responses are accurate enough to be considered an exemplary response to the prompt. What you...
ScholarshipBerg - Apr 20, 2017 / Holt - Apr 21, 2017
|After study I want to be involved in maintaining the quality of Indonesia's marine environment
5 - I think you should make example which is applicable to implement in Indonesia. I am Indonesian too. are u...
Scholarshipgries_en - Apr 19, 2017 / fajarlombok - Apr 21, 2017
|Supporting statement - how will the study contribute (AAS - Applied Linguistics)
3 - @Holt Thank you for the detailed feedback and suggestion . I will change the approach and rephrase it as...
Scholarshiptetuyul - Apr 19, 2017 / tetuyul - Apr 20, 2017
|OFID scholarship essay - Reforming the tax system in Tunisia
2 - Chiraz, this is totally the wrong approach to responding to the prompt. In order to create a more relevant...
Scholarshipchiraz2017 - Apr 19, 2017 / Holt - Apr 19, 2017
|I choose Subsea Engineering at the Curtin University, because...
2 - Nurul, there needs to be an equal discussion coverage of both the reasons why you chose to enroll in...
ScholarshipNurulNaval - Apr 18, 2017 / Holt - Apr 19, 2017
|Master of Environment - proposed course and institution for Australian Awards Scholarship
3 - @Holt Hello Holt, thanks for your feedback. Actually the next question in supporting statements needed in the scholarship application...
Scholarshipfillingthedots - Apr 16, 2017 / fillingthedots - Apr 18, 2017
|Discuss the disappointments, failure, or risks in your life so far and your responses to them
5 - @Holt Hmmm I see . The problem is that I don't have any other stories that talks about disappointments...
ScholarshipBluemoom - Apr 15, 2017 / Bluemoom - Apr 16, 2017
|Specific examples of dealing with difficult situation, providing a good change
4 - Ayu, let's get one thing straight, the issue you are supposed to present has to do with your most...
Scholarshipmissayufitri - Apr 15, 2017 / Holt - Apr 16, 2017
|This school will lead me to the teacher profession. Australia Awards Scholarship Essay 2
Scholarshipmissayufitri - Apr 10, 2017 / missayufitri - Apr 11, 2017
|My Engineering & Construction Experience for Scholarship Essay Purpose
2 - Ananto, your essay is extremely difficult to read sure to the horrible English sentence structure and development. Collectively, the...
Scholarshipansufw - Apr 11, 2017 / Holt - Apr 11, 2017
|Rotary's motto is Service above Self. How have you served your community in the past and now?
2 - Joseph, due to the length of the word requirement of essay for the prompts provided, I'm constrained by forum...
Scholarshipjoseph256 - Apr 11, 2017 / Holt - Apr 11, 2017
|Personal statement "why I wish to be considered for a Scholarship"
3 - @missayufitri I used advices that Holt gave to me in my previous thread: essayforum.com/scholarship/education-investment-statement-76061/ Of all the...
ScholarshipArchF - Apr 10, 2017 / ArchF - Apr 10, 2017
|Why I chose the following Master's programs and institutions
3 - @kacanakya try answering the following questions in your essay: What is your college major? If you are a high...
Scholarshipkacanakya - Apr 8, 2017 / ayazemj - Apr 9, 2017
|Education is as an investment. Personal statement for a Scholarship
2 - Arsenij, I am of the opinion that this essay cannot help your scholarship application. It is weak and does...
ScholarshipTweenkyx - Apr 9, 2017 / Holt - Apr 9, 2017
|Short essay on "Why I want to study abroad and what makes me a good candidate" - in English.
4 - @Holt Thank you, Holt. I wrote a whole new essay based on your instructions. But since I am new...
Scholarshipayazemj - Apr 3, 2017 / ayazemj - Apr 8, 2017
|How your training at Stanford will impact the economical growth of Africa?
4 - Awoga, your response to the prompt should be set aside for a more relevant topic for discussion. It does...
Scholarshipklegou - Apr 7, 2017 / Holt - Apr 8, 2017
|Personal statement for Loughborough University graduate school african trust fund
3 - @Holt Thanks for your comment. what about this PERSONAL STATEMENT "Education is a companion which no future can...
ScholarshipPhocus - Mar 25, 2017 / Phocus - Apr 7, 2017
|Master TESOL - special subjects or skills that you would like to include in your choice? - AAS Essay
Scholarshipd2ny - Mar 21, 2017 / d2ny - Apr 5, 2017
|How studying media and communication contributes to my career
2 - Katya, try to show a familiarity with the program that you are applying for in reference to your career....
Scholarshipkacanakya - Apr 4, 2017 / Holt - Apr 4, 2017
|Working in an union business - my scholarship proofreading
3 - Duvuldil, before you can convince a person to join the union, you must first explain to him the history...
Scholarshipduvuldil - Apr 1, 2017 / Holt - Apr 1, 2017
|Practical Example After Graduating - primary health center and health promotion media
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