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The most important function of music is relieving people's stress. Do you agree/disagree?

2 - The arguments presented in this essay are very good but incorrectly presented. Since you are not contradicting your personal...

Writing FeedbackArinaNguyen - May 19, 2023 / Holt - May 20, 2023

In this day and age, the number of aspiring teachers is on the decline

2 - The prompt restatement + writer's opinion paragraph is too busy, too confusing to read. You need to understand how...

Writing FeedbackTran Phuong Linh - May 18, 2023 / Holt - May 19, 2023

The graph shows the number of boys and girls is playing sport in England town in 2012

2 - Do not write the first line, the summary sentence, of the task 1 essay in all caps. Do not...

Writing Feedbackhagis - May 18, 2023 / Holt - May 19, 2023

A glance at graph provided reveals the individual carbon dioxide emissions in 4 European countries

4 - @sooan thank you so much...

Writing FeedbackCANDY ZHUANG - May 16, 2023 / CANDY ZHUANG - May 19, 2023

The charts compare the number of people per household in the UK in 1981 and 2001

3 - I think you should add sentences that compare the numbers with each other because in the graphs in ielts,...

Writing Feedbackhopybuddy - May 15, 2023 / sooan - May 18, 2023

Some people think that the use of plastic bags should be banned.

2 - This essay can only receive a partial score since the response is not aligned with the writing requirements. The...

Writing Feedbacksienna - May 15, 2023 / Holt - May 17, 2023

TASK 2: Prioritising economic progress? The government should not overlook other types of growth

2 - The summary overview is incomplete. You must restate both public opinions before presenting your opinion in support of one...

Writing Feedbackscitechalon - May 15, 2023 / Holt - May 17, 2023

Task 2: Games bring demerits in terms of physical health as well as mental behavior to children

2 - Do not use an empty response to the questions provided in your writer's opinion section. The examiner scores that...

Writing FeedbackAnnienguyen - May 15, 2023 / Holt - May 17, 2023

Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss

NEW - Human activities indeed lead to the creatures facing extinction and damaging the ecosystem. This essay will discuss the rationale...

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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and its planned future development

NEW - planned future development The graphics illustrate how the industrial park of Norbiton town will be changed for development...

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Unisex educational institutions better than single-sex education?

3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your comments....

Writing Feedbacklinavu9x - May 7, 2023 / linavu9x - May 15, 2023

Why should guns be enacted?

2 - The first paragraph should be revised to place the question about gun laws being enacted at the end. The...

Writing FeedbackJazming - May 14, 2023 / Holt - May 15, 2023

Some people find advertisements amusing or annoying and they are not influenced by this

3 - In my point of view, i think that your essay have true reasons for annoying advertisements, but the problem...

Writing Feedbackmyahh - May 12, 2023 / vietnamkun - May 14, 2023

TASK 1: The proportion of dwellers' increase in New Zealand between 1950 and 2020

2 - The word count is far more than what you can actually write during the actual test. Using a 20...

Writing FeedbackSallyTTT - May 14, 2023 / Holt - May 14, 2023

IELTS Writing Task 2 - In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries

3 - Thank you so much for your detailed comment. Your advice is really valuable and helps me a lot to...

Writing FeedbackNgaZuna - May 10, 2023 / NgaZuna - May 12, 2023

Two main tendencies in choosing subjects among different gender students

2 - Use the correct alternative gender assignment. While it is now commonplace to avoid using gender references, the English...

Writing Feedbackdiepnkn123 - May 11, 2023 / Holt - May 12, 2023

In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas why do you think

2 - You need to provide a sense of order in your prompt restatement and writer's opinion. Follow the flow of...

Writing Feedbacktungaan - May 11, 2023 / Holt - May 12, 2023

Write a brief overall description of what happening in the following volcabulary:

3 - @Holt Thank you so much! I will try my best, Blessings on your day!...

Writing Feedbackquochoa01 - May 9, 2023 / quochoa01 - May 10, 2023

Writing task 1 - The rate of women and men who passed their driving test in an Asia country

2 - The summary overview is a run-on sentence. This must be presented within 2 sentences since there are 2 different...

Writing FeedbackUang2307 - May 6, 2023 / Holt - May 8, 2023

[WR T2] Is it necessary for schools to prize 'high-grade' students?

2 - You do not need to repeat the instructions to the examiner. He knows what you are supposed to...

Writing FeedbackDang Quy - May 6, 2023 / Holt - May 8, 2023

[WRTING TASK 2] Some people think it is more beneficial to take part in team sports than solo sport

3 - + Opinions differ on ... I am of the opinion ... -> Ever since the emergence of sports, there...

Writing FeedbackVivian Slay - May 5, 2023 / myieltsw2sucks - May 7, 2023

The proportion of travelers who visited Aquarium, Castle, Zoo and festivals in Scotland 1980-2010

2 - This essay cannot be reviewed as an accurate sample of your task 1 essay writing skills. That is because...

Writing FeedbackLinhtthao - May 5, 2023 / Holt - May 7, 2023

Opinion Essay: Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it almost impossibl to define?

2 - Consider properly timing yourself when you write the essay next time. Use an exam setting where you have an...

Writing Feedbacksunnychan1223 - May 5, 2023 / Holt - May 5, 2023

IELTS Writing Task 1 about how the population component in Australia varies through a period of 15 y

2 - The bar chart is already a drawing of a measurement set. Next time, identify the type of chart...

Writing Feedbackcchauaim8 - May 5, 2023 / Holt - May 5, 2023

Opinion essay: Some people think news has no connection to people's lives.

3 - Last paragraph : In conclusion, I wholeheartedly believe that recent news is always in connection with people's life because...

Writing FeedbackNgoc Anh Le - Apr 27, 2023 / duiter1 - May 4, 2023

Essay: should students have a part-time job

5 - Last paragraph : To conclude, having a part-time job along with studying brings students a substantial number of benefits....

Writing FeedbackNgan555 - Apr 30, 2023 / duiter1 - May 4, 2023

the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one

2 - Follow the basic rule for English writing. That is, the first word of a sentence is always written with...

Writing Feedbacknickki - May 3, 2023 / Holt - May 4, 2023

IELTS TASK 2 ON TRAFFIC JAMS

4 - metrolotians: i think it's a word to address people not" very big city". You can use" metropolis" instead...

Writing Feedbackanialee - Apr 27, 2023 / Ngan555 - May 3, 2023

[WRITING TASK 2]- MAGAZINES

2 - You have written 390 words. A number of words that cannot be accomodated during the split writing time between...

Writing FeedbackTynitex - Apr 30, 2023 / Holt - May 1, 2023

today is a beautiful day and i want to eat sushi

2 - You have a tendency to write long and rambling sentences. These do not help with your score in the...

Writing Feedbackmyieltsw2sucks - Apr 30, 2023 / Holt - May 1, 2023

The table describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901

2 - The essay is overwritten by 11 words. This could result in a lack of time to develop a proper...

Writing Feedbackakbotanuedu - Apr 29, 2023 / Holt - Apr 30, 2023

How has the Internet changed the way we form and maintain friendship?

2 - When writing a task 2 essay, you need to write more than 250 words. While that number is the...

Writing Feedbackduiter1 - Apr 29, 2023 / Holt - Apr 30, 2023

[WRITING TASK 2]: SCHOOL VIOLENCE

2 - Unnecessary reference point. Such exaggerations will not earn extra points and will result in deductions instead. Stick close...

Writing Feedbacknhuquynh7898910 - Apr 28, 2023 / Holt - Apr 29, 2023

the values of artists in era of modern technology

2 - The opening statement does not help the reader understand what the writer is actually driving at as the central...

Writing Feedbacksuccess1901 - Apr 27, 2023 / Holt - Apr 29, 2023

[IELTS Task2] More and more plastic waste is polluting the world's city, countryside and ocean.

3 - In my opinion, you have a wide range of vocabulary and use some effective sequencing adverbs ( firstly, secondly,...

Writing FeedbackPingkuo - Apr 22, 2023 / rubinguyen - Apr 24, 2023

WRITING TASK 2 | WORK AND STUDY

2 - Incorrect sentence formatting. The writing instruction is asking what your opinion is. Since the essay cannot write itself,...

Writing Feedbackngtlinh - Apr 21, 2023 / Holt - Apr 22, 2023

IETLS ESSAY ABOUT EDUCATION

4 - You may need to mention more about the school factor in the second body paragraph. Besides, I heard that...

Writing Feedbackktekte - Apr 19, 2023 / jinnakamura - Apr 21, 2023

IELTS TASK 2 ABOUT HEALTH

2 - 3 problems with this opening sentence. First, it is stating a personal opinion of the writer instead of...

Writing Feedbackmandoo - Apr 19, 2023 / Holt - Apr 20, 2023

IELTS essay about people's tendency to live alone and in small households.

NEW - TOPIC: More people are living alone and in small households. What are the reasons behind this trend? What effects...

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IELTS WRITING TASK 2 ABOUT NEWSPAPERS & TV

3 - I recommend you review your word choices. Several words are used incorrectly due to a lack of understanding of...

Writing FeedbackFantasy11 - Apr 16, 2023 / chinhsy2 - Apr 19, 2023

The graph below shows a typical American and a Japanese office. Summarise the information by selecti

2 - I cannot properly assess this writing based on the task 1 scoring requirements because it does not follow the...

Writing Feedbackhongan - Apr 16, 2023 / Holt - Apr 17, 2023

The chart below the number of visitors to museum during the yeaar before and after it was refurbish

2 - This presentation will receive an automatic failing score due to the insufficient word count. It is important that you...

Writing Feedbacktaam - Apr 16, 2023 / Holt - Apr 17, 2023

The increase in people's life lenght means that they have to work older to pay for their retirement

2 - The essay came in at exactly 300 words. That is the only positive thing about this essay that makes...

Writing Feedbacklequanganh - Apr 16, 2023 / Holt - Apr 17, 2023

· Task 1: The plans below show how the ground of a particular building has changed over time.

2 - This essay uses 382 words. That means the writer will be writing this essay well over the 20 minute...

Writing Feedbackthucuyen1712 - Apr 14, 2023 / Holt - Apr 15, 2023

Task 2: The pros and cons of advertisements

2 - The topic restatement paragraph is incomplete. It must introduce both public opinions to the reader before introducing the writer's...

Writing Feedbacklannguyenaaaaa - Apr 13, 2023 / Holt - Apr 15, 2023

The impact of climate change and sustainability

2 - The introduction and thesis paragraph, also known as paragraph one, is so grammatically problematic that you, as the writer,...

Writing Feedbacknguyenkhuyenpka - Apr 12, 2023 / Holt - Apr 13, 2023

Writing Task 2 - Socialising online or in person

3 - Thank you for your detailed feedback!...

Writing Feedbackjinnakamura - Apr 6, 2023 / jinnakamura - Apr 12, 2023

IELTS TASK1: THE PERCENTAGE OF ELDERY CITIZEN IN THREE COUNTRIES.

3 - In task 1, they just want you to compare, so you should state detailed changes. You can illustrate the...

Writing Feedbacklinhdan000 - Mar 24, 2023 / Krystal Tran - Apr 12, 2023

What is the best way to store knowledge? Give reasons for your answer and include any examples

3 - In conclusion, with the advance of saving knowledge on the Internet. It is undoubted that there are some disadvantages...

Writing Feedbackmdgbao1807 - Apr 6, 2023 / gongjunim - Apr 11, 2023

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income

3 - I agree that this essay is a bit wordy and has complex word usages like instantaneous. I did this...

Writing Feedbackgracegracegraxe - Apr 7, 2023 / gongjunim - Apr 11, 2023

An essay on the benefits and drawbacks of online learning

2 - Try to avoid the constant use of English colloqualisms in your writing. Although this shows a familiarity with the...

Writing FeedbackNatasha_Crosslog - Apr 9, 2023 / Holt - Apr 10, 2023

IELTS WRITING TASK 2 ABOUT SHOPPING IN THE FUTURE

2 - As an IELTS task 2 response essay, this will get an automatic failing score since it has 226/250 words...

Writing FeedbackEllyLe - Apr 9, 2023 / Holt - Apr 10, 2023

Financial aid to poor countries - does it work?

2 - Please contact me privately to inquire about IELTS rubic scoring review of your essay. I apologize as that is...

Writing Feedbackhmythecutest - Apr 8, 2023 / Holt - Apr 8, 2023

School curriculum which prepare students to meet the requirements of the labor market

2 - This has created an incorrect prompt restatement. There is no reference to opposing points of view in the...

Writing FeedbackDungnguyen132 - Apr 7, 2023 / Holt - Apr 8, 2023

Violence in playgrounds is increasing so parents should not teach their children to hit back.

2 - This is a well developed point of view discussion. The problem points were targeted, proper opinions were presented, and...

Writing Feedbackminhanhessay - Apr 6, 2023 / Holt - Apr 8, 2023

WRITING TASK 2: Positive of ONLINE NEWS

2 - You do not need to indicate this at the end of your opinion presentation. The examiner already knows...

Writing Feedbackphuongchu - Apr 5, 2023 / Holt - Apr 6, 2023

The line graph compares changes in terms of the number of cars owned per household in Great Britain

2 - This isi indicative of only a single line of measurement in the image. There are actually several lines...

Writing Feedbacknamnguyen101 - Apr 4, 2023 / Holt - Apr 6, 2023

The picture shows how many travelers from overseas visited countries in Europe

2 - A picture was not presented for this discussion. If it was a picture, it would have been an...

Writing Feedbackhaumilk - Apr 4, 2023 / Holt - Apr 6, 2023

IELTS Writing - Living in a big city is not as good for familes as living in a small town

2 - It is always better to be specific when indicating your point of view in a measured response opinion....

Writing FeedbackEpiphany - Apr 3, 2023 / Holt - Apr 6, 2023

[WRITING TASK 1] - ENERGY IS USED, THE GREENHOUSE GAS EMISSIONS WHICH IS RESULT FROM THIS ENERGY USE

2 - Do not just tell the reader that pie charts were provided. Be specific about the number. Why should you...

Writing Feedbackjelly jelly - Mar 28, 2023 / Holt - Apr 6, 2023

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