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Due to a higher life expectancy rates nowadays, the retirement age of employees should be increased

3 - @Holt Thanks for replying and advising me. Actually, I tried really hard to keep this essay under 300, but...

Writing Feedbackrakeshkukkar013 - Mar 2, 2023 / rakeshkukkar013 - Mar 2, 2023
TOEFL task 2 essay on dancing aiming for a full score

2 - Try to avoid using contractions in your academic writing presentations. Always spell out the 2 words necessary to deliver...

Writing FeedbackTOEFLtaker2023 - Mar 2, 2023 / Holt - Mar 2, 2023
Sugar-based drinks are more popular in many countries. What is it caused by?

2 - You are not being asked if the subject posed is true or false. So it is not necessary for...

Writing Feedbackkaililam260 - Mar 1, 2023 / Holt - Mar 2, 2023
IELTS 2: Surveys show that people are living longer in many countries.

2 - In the prompt restatement, why did you indicate "individuals" alone, which has an all encompassing age reference as opposed...

Writing Feedbacknightrain - Mar 1, 2023 / Holt - Mar 2, 2023
IELTS 2: Different views about whether teachers should give their students assignments or not

3 - Further explanation for P2 'Furthermore...view about school' will make this reason more convincible, why asking children to do homework...

Writing Feedbacktrangta0807 - Feb 14, 2023 / nightrain - Mar 1, 2023
Young people today spend too much money and time following fashion trends (clothing, technology)

3 - 1. your essay is too long for IELTS writing. 2. informal writing, such as putting 'and' 'but' at the...

Writing FeedbackBeanMiller - Feb 27, 2023 / nightrain - Mar 1, 2023
More and more people no longer read newspaper or watch tv programs to get news. They get news about

3 - wow, thanks for your reply. if I rewrite the third paragraph's first sentence: even though the trend is good,...

Writing Feedbacknightrain - Feb 28, 2023 / nightrain - Mar 1, 2023
Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treat

2 - The essay has not followed the discussion requirement for the task. Hence, it will receive an automatic failing score...

Writing FeedbackGigi Clarkson - Feb 28, 2023 / Holt - Feb 28, 2023
IELTS: Parents responsibility of making their obese children fat. Should they be punish for it?

6 - The essay is quite brief and needs more supporting ideas. It is also founded several grammatical errors. I must...

Writing FeedbackKrystal Tran - Feb 18, 2023 / andrepr1 - Feb 28, 2023
The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, on average, at one university

4 - The essay presented a clear overview and analyzed some primary points. There are a few grammatical errors and I...

Writing Feedbackrishabhk4896 - Feb 21, 2023 / andrepr1 - Feb 27, 2023
IELTS WRITING PART 2: the importance of homework for children

4 - Hi @Holt Thanks for the frank feedback. I noticed that my restatement is inaccurate and can cause a...

Writing Feedbackandrepr1 - Feb 20, 2023 / andrepr1 - Feb 27, 2023
The percentages of four recycled materials, namely paper, glass, aluminium and plastic

3 - There are lots of grammar mistakes in your essay I can barely understand your essay at some point because...

Writing Feedbackrishabhk4896 - Feb 12, 2023 / Panjasrose - Feb 26, 2023
IELTS Task 1 The chart below shows the percentage of people accessing news via different media

2 - You are prone to using word fillers in your reporting essays. This is not a positive thing when it...

Writing Feedbackrishabhk4896 - Feb 22, 2023 / Holt - Feb 26, 2023
Writing task 1 : top ten countries which have the highest number of Internet users

2 - This is not a part of the image presentation so the reference to China's actual population is not...

Writing FeedbackPanjasrose - Feb 23, 2023 / Holt - Feb 26, 2023
The percentage of people in each age group who watched a film in cinema regularly (1984-2003)

2 - Even though you wrote 7 words over the advised 200 maximum word count for this presentation, the report itself...

Writing FeedbackPanjasrose - Feb 24, 2023 / Holt - Feb 26, 2023
Some say that the university students should pay the full cost of their studies

2 - I have to immediately call your attention to the presentation format of this essay. I am not sure if...

Writing Feedbackabsarkhan125 - Feb 25, 2023 / Holt - Feb 26, 2023
Ielts2: Video records are better way to learn the way people in the world live rather than documents

2 - Well, it appears that you are 25 words short of the acceptable word count in this presentation. That poses...

Writing Feedbackaqua modern 409 - Feb 25, 2023 / Holt - Feb 26, 2023
Essay about whether or not change is good

2 - You did a very good job in the prompt restatement. Your opinion was also well developed but came short...

Writing Feedbackbaongan00006 - Feb 25, 2023 / Holt - Feb 25, 2023
(writing task 1) The title: Percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited different attractions.

2 - While the writer did meet the minimum word count at just over 150 words, 152 words to be precise,...

Writing FeedbackVang - Feb 24, 2023 / Holt - Feb 25, 2023
[Ielts 1] Numbers of young people in four countries using three types of transportation in a year

2 - The summary overview is lacking in information. There must be a reference to the measurement type, which is by...

Writing Feedbackceewlz - Feb 24, 2023 / Holt - Feb 24, 2023
Task 2: Many people think that it is a waste of money to save animals of endangered species like the

2 - The prompt restatement should have integrated the animal examples from the original because these animals are expected to be...

Writing FeedbackSachin341 - Feb 24, 2023 / Holt - Feb 24, 2023
Should governments invest money into repairing roads and highways rather than on public transport?

2 - Why did you write almost 400 words for a task 2 essay? My guess is that you did not...

Writing Feedbackacountforessays - Feb 24, 2023 / Holt - Feb 24, 2023
(IELTS Essay) In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large

2 - The second sentence in your prompt restatement is a problem. While it does represent a part of the original...

Writing Feedbackaurangzaib517 - Feb 24, 2023 / Holt - Feb 24, 2023
[Ielts 1] The proportion of school boys, based on two groups of age, who took part in various sports

3 - I'm not an expert but I think there are some major errors in this report 1. The data is...

Writing Feedbackceewlz - Feb 23, 2023 / Sachin341 - Feb 24, 2023
Task 2: Some people believe that governments should take large proportions of people's salary

4 - @Holt Thanks for feedback, I'll look forward to correct my mistakes....

Writing FeedbackSachin341 - Feb 23, 2023 / Sachin341 - Feb 24, 2023
TASK 1 the percentage of people of different age groups who watched a movie in cinema once a month

5 - @claireorg Though your response is somehow meeting the task requirement, I think you need to work on the...

Writing Feedbackclaireorg - Feb 22, 2023 / aurangzaib517 - Feb 24, 2023
The proportion of jobless women in 4 different countries of Britain in 2013 and 2014

2 - Do not forget that the task 1 essay always uses plural word references. None of the information that is...

Writing Feedbacksomeoneishere - Feb 12, 2023 / Holt - Feb 24, 2023
WRITING TASK 1: The graph below shows consumers' average annual expenditure on cell phone, national

2 - Try to stay under the 200 word count for the task 1 essay. The last thing you would want...

Writing Feedbackpigchienn - Feb 22, 2023 / Holt - Feb 23, 2023
Sugar-based drinks trend in mordern life

3 - From my experience , you have a grammar and vocabulary knowledge but you need to use more connect words...

Writing FeedbackKieuVan - Feb 22, 2023 / Panjasrose - Feb 23, 2023
The benefits for Vietnam as a member of international organisations

3 - From my experience ,Your essay do not go straight to the main point but the content is good ....

Writing FeedbackNguyencki - Feb 20, 2023 / Panjasrose - Feb 22, 2023
IELTS 1: Number of visitors to Louvre, Vatican Museums, London Science Museum, and Shenzhen Museum

3 - There are some serious issues with your essay in my opinion.... 1. This line ..... Looking at the details...........to...

Writing FeedbackDat Nguyen - Feb 20, 2023 / rishabhk4896 - Feb 21, 2023
TASK1: The given line graph illustrates the average carbon dioxide emissions per person, 1967-2007

3 - I feel the main problem with this report is underdeveloped and incorrect data. Example of undeveloped data..It moderately increased...

Writing FeedbackDat Nguyen - Feb 19, 2023 / rishabhk4896 - Feb 20, 2023
Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce crime

3 - Okay so there are many errors in your essay but most significant are these: Spelling errors.. these can cost...

Writing Feedbackdaidang869 - Feb 19, 2023 / rishabhk4896 - Feb 20, 2023
TASK 2: Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious problems,

3 - You used " on the other hand" twice in two different paragraph. It might lead to misunderstanding...

Writing Feedbackduonghien - Feb 18, 2023 / Dat Nguyen - Feb 19, 2023
Online shopping is increasing dramatically. How could this trend affect our environment?

3 - Modern way of transaction via social networks may not a strong argument. Because online transaction based on e-banking system...

Writing Feedbackquoctinhdk25 - Feb 14, 2023 / Dat Nguyen - Feb 19, 2023
"Depression" - An experience that has shaped my character

2 - Who placed the call? I know you are going for dramatics here but, dramatics without proper buildup just...

Writing Feedbackthaonhhi29 - Feb 19, 2023 / Holt - Feb 19, 2023
Ielts writing task 2: Economic growth, environment damage

2 - The first paragraph is not completely developed. You did not present your clear opinion, either in support of one...

Writing FeedbackAndrew198 - Feb 18, 2023 / Holt - Feb 18, 2023
IELTS WRITING PART 2: buy product made in other countries

2 - The prompt restatement will receive a failing score as it is not a prompt restatement but rather, the beginning...

Writing Feedbackzth - Feb 17, 2023 / Holt - Feb 18, 2023
In the near future, car without drivers can be created. Do you think this development is positive?

2 - This essay would normally receive an automatic failing score because it does not meet the 250 minimum word count...

Writing FeedbackPanjasrose - Feb 17, 2023 / Holt - Feb 18, 2023
People are consuming more and more sugar-based drinks. Why? What can be done to reduce sugary drink

2 - Although you have managed to achieve a good word count in the essay, I am afraid the final score...

Writing Feedbacklinaa121 - Feb 17, 2023 / Holt - Feb 17, 2023
IELTS WRITING PART 2: Printed newspapers - some people say we don't need them anymore

2 - The prompt restatement and writer's opinion is well developed. The thesis statements are clear to the examiner and fully...

Writing Feedbackmatchanh - Feb 16, 2023 / Holt - Feb 17, 2023
IELTS 1: The given diagram demonstrates the figure for shops closing and opening from 2011 to 2018

3 - @Holt Thank you so much for your constructive comment!...

Writing Feedbackanhnhat - Feb 12, 2023 / anhnhat - Feb 16, 2023
Social vs academic qualifications - Ielts task 2

2 - The writing task gives you a full 1 hour to complete your tasks. 20 minutes for the first task,...

Writing Feedbackredchild - Feb 16, 2023 / Holt - Feb 16, 2023
The main factors causing less productive agricultural land, and how it affects three world regions

2 - This is an automatic fail essay based on the 138/150 word count. When the word count minimum is not...

Writing Feedbacknguyenthiminh180 - Feb 15, 2023 / Holt - Feb 16, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 2 (topic : international aids to poor countries)

3 - @Holt I wrote the essay with 2 reasons in 2 different paragraphs. I don't really understand your comment about...

Writing Feedbackdathao - Feb 14, 2023 / dathao - Feb 15, 2023
The pie chart below shows the share of Oscar winners by film genre for 2003 and 2008.

2 - The number of pie charts and what sections each pie chart represents should be a part of the summary...

Writing Feedbackharleneeee - Feb 14, 2023 / Holt - Feb 15, 2023
WRITING TASK 1: Police budget sources and their use in 2017 and 2018

2 - This is a failing task 1 essay. The major problems I found here have to do with C+C and...

Writing FeedbackPnnm604092 - Feb 13, 2023 / Holt - Feb 14, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the UK

2 - Rewrite this essay because you are definitely over the word count for the 20 minute writing time frame. You...

Writing Feedbackhnathu - Feb 13, 2023 / Holt - Feb 14, 2023
IELTS Students who gave a ''very good'' rating to the resources

4 - @rishabhk4896 thank you so much <3...

Writing Feedbackxuanmai2911 - Feb 12, 2023 / xuanmai2911 - Feb 13, 2023
IELTS 2: Country is already rich, any addition in economic wealth does not make its citizens happier

2 - You have tendency to be highly verbose in your writing. Using over complicated sentence presentations that could be better...

Writing Feedbackd2507 - Feb 12, 2023 / Holt - Feb 13, 2023
Essay about educational policy which favor certain subjects

2 - The prompt restatement is slightly incorrect. The first presentation, which you are restating does not indicate that the government...

Writing FeedbackNamLeHanoi - Feb 12, 2023 / Holt - Feb 13, 2023
Even though governments have worked hard to bring about improvements in the healthcare system

2 - Avoid exaggerations in the prompt restatement. This paragraph in particular must be as true to the original presentation...

Writing Feedbackkesky101 - Feb 12, 2023 / Holt - Feb 13, 2023
IELTS WRITING TASK 1: The chart shows the percentage of people born in and outside of Australia...

3 - Your number of sentences is quite short for writing task 1. Moreover, the descriptive comparison is quite simple. Especially...

Writing Feedbacknh_thanhnha - Jan 30, 2023 / someoneishere - Feb 12, 2023
Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through online learning - pros and cons

2 - While some people truly type quite fast and could manage to click off a series of sentences within the...

Writing Feedbacksomeoneishere - Feb 12, 2023 / Holt - Feb 12, 2023
IELTS Writing task 1 - Museum Maps

4 - You did a great job keeping the word count around 200. The numbers included in the bulk, are outstanding...

Writing Feedbackrishabhk4896 - Feb 10, 2023 / someoneishere - Feb 12, 2023
The bar chart below gives information about four countries' spending habits of shopping on consumer

2 - An examiner would consider this task 1 essay under developed because it contains only the minimum word count number....

Writing Feedbackmoonsun06_56 - Feb 11, 2023 / Holt - Feb 12, 2023
The rise in the production of consumer items leads to the damage of the natural environment

3 - I think the essay is very well written but most of the sentences are in informal language, like cause...

Writing Feedbackwho know - Feb 11, 2023 / rishabhk4896 - Feb 11, 2023
Technology inventions making people socially less interactive

3 - I think this essay is overdone and you need to understand the essay type prior to plan your essay....

Writing Feedbackthanhtammm - Feb 10, 2023 / rishabhk4896 - Feb 11, 2023
Writing task 1: Top seven movie genres from 1995 to 2005

2 - 235 is considered an overwritten task 1 report. It is impossible to complete this type of long form analysis...

Writing Feedbackdominhhieupro69 - Feb 11, 2023 / Holt - Feb 11, 2023
Essay about whether technology has made shopping today easier or not.

2 - The opening statement is acceptable but could use improvements in relation to the effectiveness of the restatement and opinion....

Writing FeedbackThanhvinhtran - Feb 10, 2023 / Holt - Feb 11, 2023

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