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|Task 1. imprisonment in five counties between 1930 and 1980
5 - ... thirty thousand or 30 thousand ... The chart illustrates imprisonment level in five major countries...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 23, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 24, 2014
|(IELTS essay)Topic- in some countries young people have little leisure time...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Mar 23, 2014 / Slim shady - Mar 24, 2014
|IELS - A cheap air travel? advantage/ disadvantage; overweight - safety considerations
4 - This is what I have from your intro: A cheap air travel is becoming more popular than ever before....
Writing FeedbackBINGBINGLIANG - Mar 23, 2014 / eddies - Mar 24, 2014
|Can money bring happiness ? why or why not ?
Writing FeedbackSpecialK - Mar 21, 2014 / Linh Hoang - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS-GT: it's important for parents to teach their children about the importance of money
3 - In IELTS, you'd better avoid using idioms or sayings which either state the obvious or seem out place...
Writing FeedbackNaveed786 - Mar 23, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|TOEFL - HOUSE OR BUSINESS? Which do you prefer more?
Writing Feedbackhakuyo1112 - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK II : "Mother is the dead heart of the family" - Fatherhood vs Motherhood
7 - Do you write a 5-paragraph essay? Yes. You write one introduction, three bodies, and one conclusion. In the bodies,...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 27, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|People who do not prefer change are pessimistic and who like changes- optimistic
6 - When you deal with IELTS, the first thing the assessor sees is your layout, which shows whole of your...
Writing Feedbackrachana - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|Raise of awarness; Younger are much more aware about issues like environment
6 - Do you write 3 paragraphs? Yes, but tell you the truth, you are playing with fire. You need an...
Writing Feedbackbilalakoz - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|TOEFL; In general , people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of phenomenon
6 - Yes, I agree I know you write well. However, you'd better always try to include the prompt. To...
Writing Feedbackhakuyo1112 - Feb 27, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 the most important thing in applying for jobs
2 - All of people need a job for earning money for surviving their life. Most of people need a job...
Writing FeedbackNhasir Rahmatia - Mar 23, 2014 / Restu - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 2- Modern buildings vs traditional buildings
5 - Nowadays, there are increasing number of modern buildings to meet different needs of office workers and residents. Modern...
Writing Feedbackrachelaska - Mar 22, 2014 / crystal941 - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS-GT (Task-1): You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work
7 - Thanks pahan...
Writing FeedbackNaveed786 - Mar 20, 2014 / Naveed786 - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TO PROTECT ANIMALS OR TO TACKLE PROBLEMS OF HUMAN BEINGS?
2 - Good writing. With relevant arguments, against the main opinion, which is valuable in this kind of exercise. Btw I...
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Mar 23, 2014 / Mowonight - Mar 23, 2014
|There are many different types of music in the world today. 'enjoy, pleasure'
3 - On the new screen that opens up, under the LOGO "EssayForum", Find and select your essay file on the...
Writing Feedbackcodeblue - Mar 23, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|TASK 1. the table shows the consumer durables owned in Britain from 1972-1983
5 - I think this linking part (as well as) here is inappropriate. Here is the example of the use:...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 21, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|Toefl Essay - Historical building or new building
3 - Firstly, constructing new buildings would improve over all architecture and infrastructure of the city because modern designs and patterns...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 21, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : average annual Gross Domestic Products (GDP)
12 - Actually the chart presents details and data. It is you who compare and analyse. So, The chart presents...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 17, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Different views about the rising consumption of consumer products
4 - Well, I think you have given enough explanations as to how the economy would be boosted by enhancing public...
Writing Feedbackcrystal941 - Mar 22, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS writing task 1: a table about poverty rates among Australian.
Writing FeedbackBanshee611 - Mar 23, 2014 / Banshee611 - Mar 23, 2014
|Tobacco and alcohol are drugs. Should made legal or illegal?
4 - Some people on the other hand might argue that these products should be legal as it helpinghelpsto boost employment...
Writing Feedbackbwosti - Mar 23, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|The Boy whose Parents were Murdered by Life
6 - Rafiq opened his eyes and started cryingto weep.He cried out a flood of tears. ''KILL ME! KILL ME NOW,...
Writing FeedbackSaqib - Mar 14, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the the number
5 - Others makekeep themselves busy on sports like playing basketball or even volleyball to engage onin healthy physical activities and...
Writing Feedbackieltspinoy - Mar 18, 2014 / ramshah - Mar 23, 2014
|"It sucks that we're dead." ; SHORT STORY
3 - The oldest, wisest and most responsible one among them, Prudent, thought Reck a nuisance and felt that the...
Writing FeedbackTempest2455 - Mar 23, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|Parents are the best teachers ? It's a controversial issue
9 - Include the purpose of your writing, e.g. IELTS, TOEFL,GRE etc. in the title itself. Then we can provide you...
Writing FeedbackVanthai - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|THE POWER LIES WITHIN YOU - Changing a country
5 - Well, moderators perform administrative functions on this site in addition to making their contributions to help others improve their...
Writing FeedbackTo2ahassan - Mar 14, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS: Most significant invention of the last 30years - Internet
6 - ---> This statement leaves me in the state of assumption. I can understand that Internet helps us to...
Writing FeedbackNhasir Rahmatia - Mar 21, 2014 / Arun0506 - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS 2 - Retirement homes or Living with families? Which way is better for the elderly?
12 - Thank you all for your time and suggestions. I certainly appreciate it. Well, I'd like to suggest you...
Writing Feedbackconviction - Mar 20, 2014 / conviction - Mar 23, 2014
|Labelling any art work as a Master Piece is not appropriate!
Writing FeedbackDiana_saak - Mar 22, 2014 / Diana_saak - Mar 23, 2014
|When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.
Writing Feedbackonlineuser - Mar 22, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Pros and cons of Credit card
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 17, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS task II : Illiteracy rates by region and gender; 'it was tearful'
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 4, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 22, 2014
|IELTS PART 1 - Car ownership in Britain 1971-2007
5 - First, you should have uploaded your graph for us to make more meaningful comments. Use the Attach file(s) feature...
Writing Feedbackle_kimhung - Mar 21, 2014 / dumi - Mar 22, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 - Internet Use in Europe
Writing FeedbackJasS - Mar 13, 2014 / Misnariah Idrus - Mar 22, 2014
|Liberty and Functioning Democracy: What is Liberty? How Practical is it in a Functioning D
Writing Feedbacko5vx - Mar 15, 2014 / theresaypil - Mar 22, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: full-time education for young people 18 and below; agree or disagree
Writing Feedbackilufatsy16 - Mar 22, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 22, 2014
|Boston Leadership Institute (spelling and grammar)
Writing FeedbackWoodstock - Mar 19, 2014 / niesaysi - Mar 21, 2014
|TOEFL ESSAY - PERSISTENCE IS KEY TO SUCCESS - AGREE OR DISAGREE.
NEW - THE PHRASE NEVER, NEVER GIVE UP MEANS TO KEEP TRYING NEVER STOP WORKING FOR YOUR GOALS. DO YOU AGREE...
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|Conclusion for compare/ contrast essay - solar energy and wind energy.
2 - Although both solar power and wind power are never-ending and create absolutely no pollution, they differ in some aspects...
Writing Feedbackfei114 - Mar 20, 2014 / sandipsinh - Mar 21, 2014
|Is homeschooling preferable to traditional school education?
Writing Feedbackrespina - Mar 20, 2014 / respina - Mar 21, 2014
|IELTS writing task 2. Visitors should follow local behavior or not ?
7 - Thank you dumi. You are right, I need to improve my clarity, since the examiner is not a thought-reader......
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Mar 19, 2014 / Mowonight - Mar 21, 2014
|Many students choose to attend schools or universities outside their home countries. toefl
3 - ... this sentence needs better presentation. It doesn't flow well :( Other than learning a new...
Writing Feedbackhakuyo1112 - Mar 20, 2014 / dumi - Mar 21, 2014
|IELTS writing task 1: describe a line graph about modern technology usage in the UK.
5 - The graph reveals information about the percentage usage of modern technology by the households in Britain during the period...
Writing FeedbackBanshee611 - Mar 14, 2014 / dumi - Mar 21, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2 question. 'Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant..'
Writing Feedbackaddictivemate - Mar 19, 2014 / eddies - Mar 21, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Idea of going overseas for university study. To What extend do you agree ?
2 - First, you need to comply with the forum rules; You should open all IELTS essays in Writing Feedback forum....
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 20, 2014 / dumi - Mar 21, 2014
|task 1. visits abroad made by UK residents from 1994 to 1998 by purpose and destination
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 20, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 20, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Fitness membership among male and female (rewrite)
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 20, 2014 / eddies - Mar 20, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 (Line Chart) - Goods Transported by Four Modes of Transport.
Writing FeedbackJasS - Mar 20, 2014 / MisterWandering - Mar 20, 2014
|The chart shows the leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 19, 2014 / JasS - Mar 20, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 (Diagrama) - The Process of Cement and Concrete Production.
Writing FeedbackJasS - Mar 20, 2014 / puman - Mar 20, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - transport and car use in Edmonton
3 - Follow dumi's suggestion for this task, :) This task is to assess your report writing skills and...
Writing Feedbackphuong8593 - Mar 17, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 20, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Reasons for studying history and the effect of not studying history
Writing Feedbackcrystal941 - Mar 19, 2014 / dumi - Mar 20, 2014
|I stole my friend's money; learn from my makes mistakes!!
4 - My mistake ishad been that I stolestolen money from my friend,i hasI learnedlearn from my mistake and i try...
Writing Feedbackthjchlachjeu - Mar 19, 2014 / dumi - Mar 20, 2014
|Toefl essay - AGREE OR DISAGREE - ONE LONG VACATION OR SEVERAL LONG VACATION.
6 - It's like this; QUESTION; Where did you go? (past tense) Where do you go? (present tense) ANSWER; I...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 18, 2014 / dumi - Mar 20, 2014
|Celebrities benefits obtained through their popularity largely outweigh the issues tackled by them
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Mar 19, 2014 / dumi - Mar 20, 2014
|Do you think that studying abroad is advantages ?
Writing Feedbackheram - Mar 18, 2014 / eddies - Mar 19, 2014
|Ielts: The population growth! each period of time had different leaders
5 - Hi, Abdurasul I wanna suggest you in a simple thing. To me, better you separate each paragraph. It is...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Mar 18, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 19, 2014
|Credit Cards do good to people ? Agree/ Disagree
7 - You need to improve a lot on the essay structure. In your other threads, I have given you the...
Writing Feedbackbwosti - Mar 15, 2014 / dumi - Mar 19, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 - Total UK School Spendings!
Writing FeedbackJasS - Mar 18, 2014 / dumi - Mar 19, 2014
|Toefl - Differences between parents' generation and our generation.
7 - Yes, that's correct. It helps you tell facts to the reader without wasting his time which the reader...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 17, 2014 / dumi - Mar 19, 2014
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