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|IELTS Task 1: Three decades of the Nathan's Hot Dog Eating Contest, between 1980 and 2010.
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 3, 2014 / eddies - Feb 4, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Diet and General Health of Students
3 - You need to cite the major trend or observations in the overview. Overall, the group that consumes food with...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 3, 2014 / dumi - Feb 4, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2; Technology vs Traditional Skills
4 - In introduction you can write your opinion, such as In my view....,or while...,I believe... so it makes easy for...
Writing Feedbacksabakhai - Feb 4, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Feb 4, 2014
|ielts writing task 1 book 3 test 3 , kindly correct the errors.
2 - Where are your charts? Upload them using the "Attach file(s)" feature in the message block so that other members...
Writing Feedbackgollu - Feb 3, 2014 / dumi - Feb 4, 2014
|Experience = wisdom; the book is a transport - it get us through knowledge to the next generation.
Writing Feedbackserjee - Feb 4, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Feb 4, 2014
|Video game: State of Emotional Decay
2 - Could you please tell the purpose of writing. I believe for TOFEL / IELTS, this eassay is long....
Writing Feedbackpescobosa - Feb 4, 2014 / sabakhai - Feb 4, 2014
|IELTS; Paid work by children - Is it wrong?
3 - I observe many students use synonyms without having a proper knowledge on their right usage. This is very...
Writing Feedbackgollu - Feb 3, 2014 / dumi - Feb 4, 2014
|IELTS: Fitness betwen 1970 to 2000; 'Since 1970 men became higher membership'
3 - The bar chart describesillustrates the details of fitness membership of fitness between men and women over thirty years,...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 3, 2014 / dumi - Feb 4, 2014
|distance-learning versus attending college or university
5 - ... your opinion should be more focused on whether distance learning brings same benefits of attending college or...
Writing Feedbackmelisia - Feb 3, 2014 / dumi - Feb 4, 2014
|IELTS: Some people believe that competitive sports have no place in the school curriculum.
6 - Good introduction. The only missing feature is your hook because you straight away start with paraphrasing your prompt to...
Writing FeedbackAlison - Feb 3, 2014 / dumi - Feb 4, 2014
|the percentage, family spent, restaurant meals, fast food restaurants, sit-down restaurant
NEW - The pie charts tell about the proportion of meal the average of budget of relatives expended on cafeteria foods...
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|Have children or not - Decision; 'Fatherhood should not be ignored'
5 - Moreover, I think next time you should write the complete question, because in IELTS writing we should focus on...
Writing Feedbacksabakhai - Feb 2, 2014 / indah_hai - Feb 3, 2014
|TOEFL Essay: Some people prefer to take a position in a company and work for the company.
Writing Feedbacksmmmmi - Feb 1, 2014 / smmmmi - Feb 3, 2014
|Japanese tourists travelling abroad and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market
5 - Hi Harry, According to my knowledge, when talking about number, it is Plural which is usually used....
Writing Feedbackharry109 - Feb 3, 2014 / eddies - Feb 3, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Fixed Punishments for each type of crime
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 3, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 3, 2014
|Advertisement encourages customers to buy the products and to increase high income for company
4 - Dumi and harry, thanks for your suggestion, it will improve my writing skill. Well, i didn't mention...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 2, 2014 / tiaDS - Feb 3, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: A Letter to a friend in an English speaking country
8 - .... sounds too slang. Avoid such phrases and keep your writing in line with a more professional approach...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 1, 2014 / dumi - Feb 3, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Need help to find out appropriate introductions
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Feb 1, 2014 / indah_hai - Feb 3, 2014
|TOEFL; Playing Computer games can have negative impact on society
7 - Now days, the computer games are not only fun but they also possess some significant features and all of...
Writing Feedbackahmadeng - Jan 27, 2014 / MelisaStewart - Feb 3, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: the benefits of technologies mobility outweigh the disadvantage
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 28, 2014 / dumi - Feb 2, 2014
|İELTS ESSAY- TASK 1 -MAP- AN İSLAND AFTER AND BEFORE CONSTRUCTİON
Writing FeedbackStudent_17 - Feb 2, 2014 / Student_17 - Feb 2, 2014
|Is it true that people's worth is related to their social status and material possessions?
Writing Feedbackraflo - Jan 27, 2014 / raflo - Feb 2, 2014
|Toefl: The characteristic of best friend that you prefer the most.
4 - Admittedly, intelligent friends help us find great solutions for our issues while the friends with humor keep our...
Writing Feedbacktippabim - Jan 5, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 2, 2014
|Education & Individual Development & Well-being of societies
2 - If this is for TOEFL or IELTS, then it looks too short. You need to meet their respective word...
Writing Feedbacklindaqueen - Jan 7, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 2, 2014
|Home is not a place, structure, or a coordinate on a map; What is home?
Writing Feedbackdaydreamer08 - Jan 19, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 2, 2014
|Nowadays there are more opportunities for women than there were in the past.
5 - Once upon a time, women's rights were significantly limited, and thanks forto exemplary decision judgedtaken by the Institution of...
Writing Feedbackhandsome7boy - Jan 26, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 2, 2014
|IELTS Introductions; Need correction only for introduction.
5 - Well, still your issue is not getting conveyed properly. That should be the core of your introduction. However,...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 1, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 2, 2014
|Need evaluation on my 4 latest essays from Writing Task
6 - The bar chart illustrates the amountnumber of the undergraduates of Computer Science in a faculty of United Kingdom from...
Writing Feedbacksfinosg - Feb 1, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 2, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Nathan's Hot Dog Eating Contest in Brooklyn's Coney Island, USA
6 - You are very good with your intro and overview. I think now you are clear about dumi's point too...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Feb 1, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 2, 2014
|Ielts test task 2: Air transportation for fruits and vegetables
5 - I think you write extremely well. Excellent grammar, sentences, vocabulary and ideas. It is only that you need to...
Writing FeedbackLetwind - Feb 1, 2014 / Pahan - Feb 2, 2014
|Adult decide to study because of interest in subject/max% cost shared by himself
8 - ...its better if you paraphrase and linked the introduction. ....I think it is not appropriate if...
Writing FeedbackDish1 - Feb 1, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Feb 2, 2014
|Influence on children. Does it depends on sex of a parent? IELTS Task 2
Writing Feedbacksynako - Feb 1, 2014 / indah_hai - Feb 2, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Increasing fuel price is best way to solve traffic.agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackthakursajeeb - Jan 28, 2014 / dumi - Feb 1, 2014
|IELTS: women's work / historic buildings / equal numbers of male and female students
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Feb 1, 2014 / dumi - Feb 1, 2014
|IELTS:become a huge ordeal; Children learning foreign language in primary school
7 - I'm little bit confuse with the question .. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? I think...
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Jan 30, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Jan 31, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : The main function of a university
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 30, 2014 / Fardhani Putri - Jan 31, 2014
|IELTS - Junk food consumption Vs Health
7 - Especially children, they are the most vulnerable group who could affectedby the accessibility of the junk food because...
Writing FeedbackSogdiana - Jan 30, 2014 / indah_hai - Jan 31, 2014
|University plays a responsibility to deliver knowledge which is useful in the workplace
3 - Dear friend, your essay lacks good alignment with your prompt and hence we feel as if you are...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 30, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 31, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: People with Certain Talent VS Not Having a Certain Talent
4 - Well, you need to introduce the issue in the introduction and that is very very important. You don't...
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 31, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 31, 2014
|The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facil
Writing FeedbackSerapke - Jan 26, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 30, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Some educationalists argue about arts-based subject.
5 - For me, this is still confusing and less meaningful. It's still very difficult to capture your idea. Why...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 30, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 30, 2014
|[IELTS] The traditional skills and ways of life dying out.
8 - I don't know. Personally, I found this essay quite interesting. You have a wide-ranged vocabulary. Fix those errors other...
Writing Feedbackmrmo2610 - Jan 17, 2014 / Serapke - Jan 30, 2014
|Children under drug influences and solutions
4 - In conclusion, the drugs have always been a serious threat to our society, and the younger generation in...
Writing Feedbackmrbin - Jan 28, 2014 / dumi - Jan 30, 2014
|Road accidents claim too many lives. What can governments and individuals do to reduce it?
Writing Feedbackyohooooo - Jan 25, 2014 / dumi - Jan 30, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: Influence of Colours in humans' feeling
10 - Thanks znack and Vijay. Vijay, I dont think it is necessary to mention any research names in Introduction and...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 27, 2014 / Arun0506 - Jan 30, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Non-exam subject that should be compulsory in curriculum
2 - Your body paras need improvement. First tell the reason why you hold that opinion. And then support your reason...
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 30, 2014 / dumi - Jan 30, 2014
|Task 2 : Importance of studying history
5 - No, I don't say it is irrelevant. However, your topic is a general one that includes everybody irrespective or...
Writing FeedbackAlison - Jan 30, 2014 / dumi - Jan 30, 2014
|Moving to a new place is always challenging - you have to adapt quickly.
5 - In my opinion I would prefer to move in search of new places as it is challenging and adventurous....
Writing Feedbackvijay01 - Jan 30, 2014 / dumi - Jan 30, 2014
|IETLS; Agree or Disagree on every year several languages die out?
5 - be careful when you try to use long sentence. try to organize well and consider the right pattern....
Writing Feedbackhisho88 - Jan 14, 2014 / fikri - Jan 30, 2014
|IELTS- Number of visits to the two new music sites - fifteen days period
Writing Feedbackluanawars - Jan 29, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS ( TASK 1 ) Expenditure on Health & Education , UAE as % of GDP
5 - This statement seems to be a bit too compact. Have two sentences, one that describes the main observation...
Writing Feedbackrockmanvnx6 - Jan 29, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|People rely more on technology to solve problems impacting ability of humans to thinking.
Writing FeedbackEssay4gre - Jan 28, 2014 / Essay4gre - Jan 29, 2014
|Toefl; Childhood is the happiest time of our life (My weakness point is writing)
Writing Feedbackaldebaran - Jan 28, 2014 / aldebaran - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Erosion of a headland
3 - you need to follow struture : 1. Intro sentences : introduce the topic of the chart [Paraphrase] 2. Overview...
Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Jan 27, 2014 / rockmanvnx6 - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 1: First Year Assessments
Writing Feedbackindah_hai - Jan 27, 2014 / rockmanvnx6 - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS Task 2:How technology has changed the way people interact?Advantages/Disadvantages.
3 - Let's check this intro with dumi's suggested structure; With the advancement in the field of communication technology and IT...
Writing Feedbackthakursajeeb - Jan 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|Robert Pattinson is for me the best actor around the world
5 - This sentence is way too long and cramped up with so many ideas. So this lacks good presentation....
Writing FeedbackMira97 - Jan 15, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|IELTS task2 : People reluctant to changes. What are the issues and possible solutions?
2 - Journey of life is generally a collection of inevitable changes in which people happen to face both positive and...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 29, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
|People need fight against unfairness of authorities decision and protect themselves from its results
5 - Hi You should have opened this thread in "Writing Feedback" forum which is the most appropriate forum for this...
Writing Feedbackbraska1 - Jan 4, 2014 / dumi - Jan 29, 2014
|Hello! I am studying in class 7 I want to improve my English help me.
Writing Feedbackkrity - Jan 27, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 29, 2014
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