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|Toefl: people judge others by external appearance but is better also to consider the inner qualities
3 - Thank you Dear dumi.You helped me before a lot. I appreciate your concern. Actually I had a mistake...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 22, 2014 / hamedmas - Aug 25, 2014
|TOEFL: 'joining sport team' - the best way for students to make new friends?
3 - Thanks a lot!...
Writing FeedbackPenny Chou - Aug 24, 2014 / Penny Chou - Aug 24, 2014
|"Closing My Eyes" - driving on the expressway at night - PLACE YOU FEEL CONTENT...
4 - I definitely think you should start over. I suggest that you outline the reasons you feel content in your...
Writing FeedbackIyeshaferguson - Aug 24, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 24, 2014
|TOEFL - people are way more disparate at the exterior contrary to what they are inside
4 - I think you need to pay more attention to the approach. Your essay does not contain a good introduction...
Writing Feedbackshreyansh13 - Jul 28, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|Why study? Knowledge, experience and career are essential for today's young people to concentrate on
5 - It is clearobvious that knowledge is an important key which leads to success. Most people believe that university and...
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Aug 24, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|TOEFL: new factory will enhance the quality of life and our town's image promotion
4 - Some people who disagree with the idea of building of the factory argued argue (keep it in present tense...
Writing FeedbackMckenzie - Aug 10, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 24, 2014
|People nowadays don't spend too much time on their personal enjoyment because they can't - TPO
Writing Feedbacksircampbell - Aug 24, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 24, 2014
|GRE - Issue task - People should undertake risky action only after they consider its consequences.
5 - Thank you D! It really helps that you clearly mention what the problem is, and I also think the...
Writing FeedbackLauren5102 - Aug 20, 2014 / Lauren5102 - Aug 24, 2014
|Writing is one of the things I used to hate the most - My first Reflective essay
2 - You were really able to express yourself well in this essay even though you are not a native English...
Writing Feedbackaizuddin - Aug 24, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 24, 2014
|NUCLEAR TECHNOLOGY: The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace.
2 - Nuclear technology is a much debatedheatedissuetopic . Some people think that there are several benefits to use nuclear power...
Writing FeedbackDuong68 - Aug 13, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|IELTS: 'bring happiness to my nearest and dearest' - which salary would be better?
4 - I too agree with Pahan. You display good writing skills, good grammar, vocabulary knowledge, sentence structures etc. What you...
Writing Feedbackdiidoobiib - Aug 23, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|TOEFL -advices from senior people are more valuable than from people at our age
5 - I feel you have uploaded a wrong topic for this essay .... I cannot find any relevance between...
Writing Feedbackjamie3160003 - Jul 1, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|'new and exciting sport should be welcomed' - IELTS: Essay on whether to ban dangerous sports
2 - Very good essay so far. Here are my grammar suggestions: "should let people do what they want yet...
Writing Feedbackthanhthanhdo10 - Aug 23, 2014 / yazoo - Aug 23, 2014
|Learn variety of cultures, traditions by engaging with local people and visiting historical places
Writing Feedbacklatkhan - Aug 22, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: WOMEN AND MEN EXCLUDED FROM SPECIFIC JOBS ?
2 - leads to the distribution of both genders in some specific... --- This sentence got a little too long and...
Writing FeedbackShinigami97 - Aug 22, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Aug 23, 2014
|Bad memories leaves scars in the heart.
4 - .I agree that memories hinder one to learn past ans success in the future CORRECT IS I agree that...
Writing FeedbackAnouar - Aug 20, 2014 / sadia22 - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: 'opportunity to be healthier physically and mentally' - Children are given too much free time
Writing FeedbackSaadhin - Aug 19, 2014 / Anouar - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS - dramatic increase in the number of Japanese people travelling abroad - Bar chart, Line Graph
5 - Thank Dumi, Eddies, and Pyon9x so much. I will try to understand and fix my mistakes now. Then I...
Writing Feedbackviolethoang - Aug 21, 2014 / violethoang - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS - Compulsory voluntary work is a contradiction, and not only in a literal way
5 - On one hand, the purpose of community service or any form of voluntary work is a question still upopen...
Writing FeedbackBurguete - Jul 27, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 23, 2014
|TOEFL - Finding a good job and increasing the knowledge are the main reasons for study
4 - First of all, people want to enter to theattend university to improve their knowledge. These people want to...
Writing Feedbackabedkh - Aug 7, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 23, 2014
|Event letter in ielts exam - "International Day"
3 - I am so pleased to hear thatabout this wonderful event "International Day" whichwillis going to be held next week....
Writing FeedbackGood2690108411 - Jul 7, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: The contribution of agriculture, manufacturing and business sectors to the UK economy
7 - Between the intro and the body paras, insert an Overview which gives an overall idea to the reader :)...
Writing Feedbackmanutd9111993 - Jul 29, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: The increasing demand for oil and gas has made it necessary to look for these sources
3 - This is a good intro, especially in terms of introducing the background of your issue topic. However, since your...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Aug 6, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: 'disaster situations' - todays individuals are becoming more dependent on each other
4 - It seems that people have heavy reliance on othersone another because they have to collaborate with each other(sounds repetitive...
Writing Feedbackswfchn - Aug 7, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|Those who are aware of where to go, customs and life are likely to experience satisfactory journey
4 - These days the number of visitors who are travel to foreign countries hashave been markedlysignificantly increased. Culture awareness lead...
Writing Feedbackali1 - Aug 8, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: Charity among UK people between 1990-2010 in five age groups
4 - The bar chart showpresents data about the proportion of UK people giving money to charity by age range between...
Writing Feedbacklinusyu0313 - Aug 7, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|IELTS: It is necessary for people to choose the appropriate working mode in career growth
2 - Well, I see a difference in what you say by "permanently in the same company" and "not changing...
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Aug 9, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|Studying major cities helps to understand the most important characteristics of a society -GRE Issue
3 - Thanks Binte! Now that I read again the prompt, I might have understood the statement. I should have focused...
Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Aug 23, 2014 / dunguyen - Aug 23, 2014
|TOEFL: Drivers have to pay a fee for driving in Rush Hour
4 - Started in theFrom the beginning of late eighteenth century, the industrialization and urbanization witnessed thean explosion in number of...
Writing Feedbackchenwc1 - Aug 11, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|Bill Gates as University Professor? - TOEFL Essay
2 - Successful entrepreneurs and sport stars can inspire the lives of many people. Well, I see you are...
Writing Feedbackluongminh97 - Aug 12, 2014 / dumi - Aug 23, 2014
|Self Introduction For UN Young Professional Programme
7 - Dear all of advisers. I try to make a revision. Particularly, the recruiter wants to know the candidate based...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Aug 6, 2014 / SHanafi - Aug 22, 2014
|IELTS: some people think the government should spend more money on science than art. Do you agree ?
4 - (the) amount of is followed by uncountable noun (the) number of followed by plural noun excellent...
Writing Feedbacksky1997 - Jul 21, 2014 / eddies - Aug 22, 2014
|IELTS: Living away from parents provide youngsters opportunity to meet variety of new people
8 - In recent years, Majormajor cities have seen unprecedented growth (of what? you need to specify! ) and have become...
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Aug 8, 2014 / dumi - Aug 22, 2014
|TOEFL_inventors and science pioneers always try new things and take risks
2 - Throughout history, there have been many inventions and breakthroughs have inventedmade by brave persons. Well.... your sentences...
Writing Feedbackmasih65 - Aug 22, 2014 / dumi - Aug 22, 2014
|IELTS: public transportation and more flyovers as a solution for traffic congestion
2 - It is true that traffic congestion is now an increasingly serious problem that many major cities have to face...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Aug 22, 2014 / dumi - Aug 22, 2014
|IELTS: higher education or workplace? Professional knowledge is the most decisive factor.
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Aug 19, 2014 / Pyon9x - Aug 21, 2014
|Experience plays an important role in our lives and teach us valuable lessons which help us succeed
5 - Get rid of the entire first paragraph " personally, I agree..." You don't have to tell the readers this,...
Writing Feedbacksaakshi - Aug 11, 2014 / jwajwa - Aug 21, 2014
|Well-known people who do not go away from the converses of people should be always very affluent
3 - Well, it is better if you align your arguments more with the prompt. Your prompt is focused on...
Writing Feedbackvery_soon - Aug 11, 2014 / dumi - Aug 21, 2014
|Parents teach their children the most important and necessary things; they are the best teachers.
3 - You need to improve the presentation of this sentence. There's lots of redundancy I find there :( This...
Writing Feedbacknasrullah - Aug 17, 2014 / dumi - Aug 21, 2014
|New way of communication can lead to some undesirable results by preventing direct social contact
Writing Feedbackmacduck - Aug 21, 2014 / dumi - Aug 21, 2014
|Does a person's character determine that person's success in life ?
Writing FeedbackAnouar - Aug 20, 2014 / Anouar - Aug 21, 2014
|Ielts: it is necessary that parents should be obliged to protect their offspring by vaccination
6 - This sentence has several issues that include clarity issues and grammar issues. Let's take this part ; ...
Writing Feedbackthu van nguyen - Aug 9, 2014 / dumi - Aug 21, 2014
|IELTS: Athletes are very magnificent and important role models for people in their young ages.
4 - This is a poor beggining :( You should begin your essay with a catchy sentence that is meaningful...
Writing Feedbacksoon_Ielts - Aug 9, 2014 / dumi - Aug 21, 2014
|TOEFL: The Face-to-Face communication makes it easy to understand emotion senses.
5 - AsWith the rapid development of technology, many communication tools makehave made it easyeasier for us to communicate with others.each...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 17, 2014 / dumi - Aug 21, 2014
|IELTS: The earlier ages for learning the second language the better
5 - Nowadays, you can find every parents lookSing forward to plan teaching a foreign language for their children at early...
Writing Feedbackzovaa - Aug 20, 2014 / eddies - Aug 20, 2014
|Unlimited Golden Stars- MIT essay
Writing Feedbacktdshah1 - Aug 19, 2014 / Anouar - Aug 20, 2014
|TOEFL: Next 20 years - transportation goes ahead and novel version of automobile will be produced.
4 - Is this you mean? There are many things individuals can do to reduce harmful emissions to our air,...
Writing Feedbackmarger - Aug 18, 2014 / eddies - Aug 20, 2014
|a Table about proportion of female & male genders in sports
Writing Feedbacksssenyoritaa - Aug 19, 2014 / eddies - Aug 20, 2014
|IELTS :Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people
Writing Feedbacklatkhan - Aug 12, 2014 / fikri - Aug 20, 2014
|UK: significant increase in the using of debit cards and a steady rise in the using of credit cards
Writing FeedbackNaiman - Aug 17, 2014 / Naiman - Aug 20, 2014
|TOEFL: the part-time job can let students experience the real adult life and know more about it
3 - I don't think this is a very good start ... The first sentence of your introduction, ideally a...
Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Aug 18, 2014 / dumi - Aug 20, 2014
|SAT topic: Is knowledge a benefit or a budern?
3 - Knowledge used to stand a dispensable role in the society due to different levels of classes, and it is...
Writing Feedbackd_ooo70189 - Aug 18, 2014 / dumi - Aug 20, 2014
|Virtual learning beneficials
4 - Let see how I can contribute to you :D Not only the Internet is in urgent need of communities...
Writing Feedbacksssenyoritaa - Aug 19, 2014 / dumi - Aug 20, 2014
|IES: the state pay all students tuition fees, or students should pay themselves?
7 - College education is a business- and any good business knows to offer good incentives to its clients. And I...
Writing Feedbackbsm_25 - Apr 27, 2014 / tdshah1 - Aug 19, 2014
|GRE: Woven baskets were passed from Palea to Lithos not the vice versa? It's doubtful.
3 - Thank you so much for the reply!! I have never seen the list of logical fallacies before, just googled...
Writing Feedbackteresassssun - Aug 18, 2014 / teresassssun - Aug 19, 2014
|[IELTS] - Earlier Technologies vs Recent Technologies
Writing FeedbackJwala - Aug 16, 2014 / dumi - Aug 19, 2014
|IELTS: World Wide Web has been very beneficial invention for humanity
3 - There are a lot of online shopping websites wherethat allow people canto purchase or buy anything from the comfort...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Aug 15, 2014 / dumi - Aug 19, 2014
|IELTS: Music has come to human kind as a valuable gift that is necessary for a better life
Writing Feedbackvmtct - Aug 18, 2014 / fikri - Aug 19, 2014
|IELTS school non academic subjects assist in physical development and learning important life skills
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Aug 19, 2014 / EF_Sheri - Aug 19, 2014
|What God thinks about it? - Why cosmetic surgery must be banned
2 - the negative effects <of >cosmetic surgery - In fact, cosmetic surgery is a short term, waste of money, and...
Writing Feedbackgerrard - Aug 17, 2014 / sssenyoritaa - Aug 19, 2014
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