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|My View on Poverty in my Country
Writing Feedbackbutterflypan - Jan 19, 2014 / dumi - Jan 19, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Harbour City Tourism
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 18, 2014 / fikri - Jan 19, 2014
|IELTS TASK2: Best farming methodolgy : Current modern or traditional
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 18, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 19, 2014
|'when the world was created, music was born'; Traditional vs International music
5 - Well, your introduction is the place in your essay where you should introduce your topic to the reader. You've...
Writing Feedbackmyth - Jan 18, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 19, 2014
|Providing financial support for elders is the responsibility of governments or not?
3 - You take the position of disagreeing with the statement. i.e. you hold the view that governments have an obligation...
Writing Feedbacksa_228 - Jan 5, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 19, 2014
|LUCK Vs HARD WORK ; 99% of the success depend on hard work
Writing Feedbackodon - Jan 18, 2014 / SHanafi - Jan 19, 2014
|IELTS>criminal trials in law court are telecasted on Television for public
5 - Thanks for all comments Specially,Pahan,with your help, I today passed Ielts as it was almost similar question. However, I...
Writing Feedbackznack - Jan 16, 2014 / znack - Jan 18, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: the advantages and disadvantages living in a small village
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 17, 2014 / dumi - Jan 18, 2014
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Best way to improve public health.
2 - There is no doubt about your writing skills. You display excellent writing skills :) However, IELTS tasks have major...
Writing Feedbackthakursajeeb - Jan 18, 2014 / dumi - Jan 18, 2014
|[TOEFL] learning about life by other experience or your own experience?
3 - This is exactly what others are doing here by giving their comments. It is our pleasure to help you...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Jan 17, 2014 / dumi - Jan 18, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The brief summary of healthcare and life expectancy
3 - Yes, Pahan has given you good advice. This is the structure we suggest you to follw; 1. Introduction (one...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 17, 2014 / dumi - Jan 18, 2014
|IELTS task 2: farming methods
Writing Feedbacktranminh97 - Jan 17, 2014 / dumi - Jan 18, 2014
|AP English class, We need to write a 300-400 essay on WHAT HOME IS?
5 - Hi There! I attend Townsend Harris Highschool, a humanities school and they teach us english till it becomes...
Writing Feedbackdaydreamer08 - Jan 15, 2014 / tharrisite15 - Jan 17, 2014
|Two limits for each crime type is needed: the upper and the lower - for equity
Writing Feedbackorthofracture - Jan 16, 2014 / orthofracture - Jan 17, 2014
|TOEFL: Serious movies or comedies ? Which is better?
6 - If you improve your essay structure, you can easily aim a score more than 25/30. Your sentences are well...
Writing Feedbackzsy1990325 - Jan 16, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 17, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 :Children need to eat a healthy meal at school!
4 - ....Actually I think this is out of question. Everybody agrees with the statement and therefore this sentence sounds...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 16, 2014 / dumi - Jan 17, 2014
|IELTS - Compulsory military service for men and women
Writing Feedbackmiri - Jan 16, 2014 / miri - Jan 17, 2014
|In democracy the media can be controlled in terms of avoiding misrepresentation of information
6 - In the introduction, just mentioning your position is quite enough. If you have time, then you can mention...
Writing Feedbackmiri - Jan 14, 2014 / dumi - Jan 16, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 13, 2014 / znack - Jan 16, 2014
|Technology is huge part or our daily life
Writing FeedbackDave2014 - Jan 15, 2014 / dumi - Jan 16, 2014
|Everyone likes to be famous in their own field and they put great effort for that; "Celebrities"
3 - I think you need to improve a bit more on the introduction. (The problem is with the Background...
Writing Feedbackthakursajeeb - Jan 16, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 - Newspaper and books are outdated. What is your opinion?
6 - don't you think that it could be better to seperate books from news papers, I mean write one paragraph...
Writing FeedbackmayaRa - Jan 1, 2014 / miri - Jan 16, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Planning for the town
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 15, 2014 / thakursajeeb - Jan 16, 2014
|Toefl: The reasons that people visit museums.
Writing Feedbacktippabim - Jan 6, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|IELTS: Government's financial support for elderly people
Writing Feedbackkitty_9010 - Jan 14, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|IELTS; buildings often reflected the culture of a society !
4 - Yep... The IELTS requires specific features in your essay structure, otherwise you would not be able to score well....
Writing Feedbackbatais - Jan 14, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|IELTS task 1:the fishers in different regions and the world's top ten exporter of fish
2 - It is always good to include your graph together with the essay. Use the "Attach file(s)" feature for uploading...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 15, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|Has the widespread use of the internet influenced taken the world`s control?
4 - As others have commented, you need lots of improvement with regard to presentation and essay structure. I don't have...
Writing Feedbacktrouble - Jan 15, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|music can nurse and improve feeling; The traditional vs international music
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 15, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : customer satisfaction lever with airlines and aspects of air travel
2 - You should have uploaded the chart together with your essay. It helps us to provide you more relevant comments....
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jan 16, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 16, 2014
|IELTS; government´control on water´using.
11 - Hey. Thanks for commenting on my essay. After reading through all the comments, there really isn't anything more to...
Writing Feedbackznack - Jan 14, 2014 / thenewdude - Jan 15, 2014
|Argumentative Essay: Singer's Strategy for Fighting Poverty--Refute, Qualify, or Support
Writing Feedbacknolanhamilton - Jan 14, 2014 / tiaDS - Jan 15, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Summarize a map of the city of Brandfield
4 - I think this sentence should be the different paragraf, because it has coherence with the next paragraf (paragraf...
Writing Feedbackeddies - Jan 14, 2014 / tiaDS - Jan 15, 2014
|IELTS Human's dependence in the modern world
5 - There is no harm in expressing your view in the introduction itself and still progress discussing both views....
Writing Feedbackznack - Jan 13, 2014 / dumi - Jan 15, 2014
|Essay about my classmate - English Essay
Writing Feedbackartem1395 - Jan 14, 2014 / dumi - Jan 15, 2014
|[TOEFL] higher education should be available only to good students or not
2 - No one can disagree that knowledge is the most important wealth for everyone. Colleges and universities play...
Writing Feedbacksomething - Jan 14, 2014 / dumi - Jan 14, 2014
|IELTS Essay: Old people health care. Is it the responsibility of the family or government
7 - ... State your opinion more clearly and more direct when concluding your introduction. ... Your prompt...
Writing Feedbackbapu_60 - Jan 11, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 14, 2014
|How technology affected the types of relationships people make?
4 - Yes, you need to improve your essay structure. Especially, your body paragraphs seem to be extensively longer. It is...
Writing Feedbacknzy576 - Jan 2, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 14, 2014
|We now live in 'consumer societies' where money and possessions are given too much import?
2 - In act, it is undeniable that the more the society be developed, higher the money be valued. ...
Writing Feedbacksa_228 - Jan 10, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 14, 2014
|IELTS: TECHNOLOGY affects the way we interact with other people!
4 - It's good to have your own opinion in the introduction. That helps you to have your reader following your...
Writing Feedbackfreakingout - Jan 10, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 14, 2014
|IELTS;"Responsible Tourist" - Agree or Disagree type essay
5 - State your opinion more direct and clear.... Your body paragraphs do not contain any specific examples that are...
Writing Feedbacksharonpan - Jan 4, 2014 / dumi - Jan 13, 2014
|Toefl: "never, never give up" means to keep trying and never stop working for your goals
3 - Well.... if you are preparing for TOEFL, then you need to pay attention to the essay structure that contains...
Writing FeedbackDelusional_mell - Jan 13, 2014 / dumi - Jan 13, 2014
|IELTS task 1 General Training : Letter to landlord
7 - Thanks again Pahan and Dumi. Will follow the standard structure for letter writing as below 1) Introduce you...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 12, 2014 / Arun0506 - Jan 13, 2014
|You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business.Which could you prefer ?
6 - Hmm... sorry but couldn't you apply every point you made arguing for the mouse to the business? Just asking...
Writing Feedbackasokh - Jan 7, 2014 / PeteSkizzle - Jan 13, 2014
|IELTS - Children should be brought up under strict rules of behavior or not?
5 - Mostly it does. There may be small adjustments you need to make depending on the essay type (I mean...
Writing Feedbackfly2shashi - Jan 12, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 13, 2014
|Shakespeare's Social Critique in Much Ado About Nothing - Hero Character Analysis Essay
Writing FeedbackPeteSkizzle - Jan 12, 2014 / travisl - Jan 12, 2014
|IELTS essay-Modern children are suffering from the diseases like obesity. Causes&solutions
8 - From nutrition class, I know that taste is very important. Rather than having children told what to eat. People...
Writing FeedbackSreeSam - Jan 7, 2014 / nimroz93 - Jan 11, 2014
|IELTS ESSAY:Government responsibility to provide infrastructure and Defence not others
NEW - Question: A government's role is only to provide defense capability and Urban infrastructure (roads, water supply etc.).All other services...
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|IELTS task 2 topic:Why are young people leaving their homes from rural areas to study or
Writing Feedbackdy0693 - Jan 3, 2014 / dy0693 - Jan 10, 2014
|ielts task2-it is beneficial to enlighten young people to be good parents in school.
Writing Feedbackjannychen - Jan 2, 2014 / jannychen - Jan 10, 2014
|"A simple life" - intro to my essay
5 - A simple life is a free and easy life which people live in without any complications and don't use...
Writing FeedbackLatifahH - Apr 30, 2010 / Loriww - Jan 10, 2014
|IELTS: more and more young people go oversea for further studies. Some people think it
Writing Feedbackleoking - Jan 9, 2014 / leoking - Jan 9, 2014
|Corrupt Hope: An argument for fighting corruption
Writing Feedbacktwinkinstar - Jan 8, 2014 / animecomics - Jan 9, 2014
|'government is in charge' - equal numbers of male and female students
Writing Feedbackminaf - Jan 9, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 9, 2014
|People should scrutinize the ideas and actions of people in positions of authority - Napoleon story
Writing FeedbackUtau4928 - Jan 6, 2014 / znack - Jan 9, 2014
|SAT essay - TELEVISION
Writing FeedbackUtau4928 - Dec 28, 2013 / dumi - Jan 9, 2014
|How to write a persuasive essay arguing for the use of school uniforms at my school?
3 - Thank you for your feedback. I will take that into mind. I'll post my edited version and you can...
Writing Feedbackilovemkim13 - Jan 7, 2014 / ilovemkim13 - Jan 8, 2014
|IELTS-Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths
Writing Feedbackravenet - Jan 6, 2014 / ravenet - Jan 8, 2014
|GRE; Political leaders must yield to public opinion
2 - Hi...I'm new to this forum and I'm a novice in writing and correcting essays, but I'm trying to help...
Writing Feedbackrazzack - Jan 7, 2014 / gBv - Jan 8, 2014
|More reliance on technology reduces human thinking ability
2 - You assume that your reader knows the statement. If this is an essay task, the generally accepted norm...
Writing FeedbackSourabhSN - Jan 8, 2014 / Pahan - Jan 8, 2014
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