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|'free entrance to museums and art galleries' -revise my IELTS writing task 2
6 - Hm, you didn't add anything useful. You just rewrote Grama's input... You should add someting more unique....
Writing Feedbackoptal - Sep 10, 2012 / ace - Sep 11, 2012
|'The quest to be Lake City's new mayor' - Argument writing
Writing Feedbackgolnar - Aug 15, 2012 / sanyagoyal1988 - Sep 11, 2012
|[IELTS]Men and women employed in full-time jobs have to share evenly household chores
3 - In your second as well as third para you didn't mention the present situation/modern world in which Men and...
Writing FeedbackTomy6240 - Sep 10, 2012 / amittt - Sep 11, 2012
|'overseas investment by companies' - IELTS Essay
Writing Feedbackqinying - Sep 8, 2012 / qinying - Sep 11, 2012
|IELTS MODERN SOCIETIES NEED SPECIALIST IN CERTAIN FIELDS
3 - It depends on your opinion. If you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages you should mention more positive...
Writing Feedbackdidiconopidi - Sep 9, 2012 / ah_zafari - Sep 11, 2012
|IELTS Essay: Scientific research sould be carried out by the governments or not?
3 - You have repeated the word "some" frequently. Synonyms for "some" could be various, several etc.....
Writing Feedbackrocia0717 - Aug 26, 2012 / Tomy6240 - Sep 10, 2012
|Obamacare: Heading Down? (against the health care programs promoted)
5 - You should look at the advantages and disadvantages of Obamacare then come up with a stronger thesis which will...
Writing Feedbackjamessuh - Feb 6, 2011 / oscarsalmons - Sep 10, 2012
|TOEFL: Making large amounts of money or earning a comfortable living ?
4 - Thanks for corrections by contributors, I want to ask you people if we made corrections how to make improvements?...
Writing Feedbackthaonguyen1901 - Sep 7, 2012 / amitt - Sep 10, 2012
|Traffic Congestion - The fundamental problem of modern cities
Writing FeedbackArienne - Sep 9, 2012 / Amany - Sep 10, 2012
|IELTS - give us your view about engertainment and educative museums .
3 - Hi, For this kind of essay, you must discuss both views in two paragraphs (one for entertainment and...
Writing FeedbackSaeed7 - Sep 6, 2012 / April April - Sep 10, 2012
|College is a waste of money and time/ ROI in sending teenagers to University
2 - Haha that would be true if you're speaking of community colleges or low-mid tier colleges. But the benefits and...
Writing Feedbackzhuyian - Sep 5, 2012 / Dactylic126 - Sep 9, 2012
|IELTS: Causes and solution of today teenagers' behaviour
3 - nguyen has offered excellent help for you by editing your essay. ------- when you say parents'performance, the...
Writing Feedbackstraw99 - Sep 6, 2012 / dumi - Sep 8, 2012
|IELTS: punishment policies in schools
2 - This sounds better if you write it in direct speech; Schools adopt their policies to ensure that there...
Writing Feedbacklsalamon - Sep 8, 2012 / dumi - Sep 8, 2012
|Internet, social networks and Internet to humankind - IELTS
4 - This sentence does not provide much enthusiasm to your reader. In my view, you better state your opinion...
Writing Feedbackenchanted178 - Sep 8, 2012 / dumi - Sep 8, 2012
|GRE;People are too quick to take action; issue based essay
NEW - Issue: "People are too quick to take action;instead they should stop to think of possible consequence of what they...
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|Difference between present and past generation about stress
5 - Give some examples and explain the example: such as stress due to study,money pressure,stress to employer due to meet...
Writing Feedbacksarahira - Sep 4, 2012 / Siddharthvora01 - Sep 8, 2012
|GRE: students choose their fields on study based on their long-term career goals
2 - Open the introduction with a "Motivator" and then write the thesis statement. What you wrote as an introduction...
Writing Feedbackmohammmo - Sep 8, 2012 / ah_zafari - Sep 8, 2012
|Toefl ibt :Salary increases and promotions to new positions are not the only ways to
2 - It is unquestionable that salary increases and promotions to new positionsare very common ways to reward employees for their...
Writing Feedbacklebay153 - Sep 7, 2012 / dumi - Sep 7, 2012
|Topic : The effect of the illiteracy
3 - try lengthier paragraphs. the diction is interesting though, but this could be a lot better with mroe substance...
Writing Feedbackcaihuu - Sep 6, 2012 / katiecohen96 - Sep 6, 2012
|Students should value their present time and use it right so that they will never regret later.
Writing Feedbackthaonguyen1901 - Sep 6, 2012 / thaonguyen1901 - Sep 6, 2012
|'the shortest and the safest goals' - Why do you think people attend universities?
4 - Hi Moonmoon I am just new. I'd like to comment your essaybriefly as follows: 1/ Your ideal is so...
Writing FeedbackMoonMoon - Sep 1, 2012 / caihuu - Sep 6, 2012
|Topic: studying abroad & studying in Viet Nam
NEW - Some people would like to attend universities in VN while others love studying abroad. Although both studying abroad or...
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|'an imaginary pupil' - Rousseau essay (english lit)
NEW - okay first off i am terribly in english i just would apperisate it if someone would look over and...
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|Scandals are useful - they stir up all people in any level of classification
Writing Feedbackhsn - Sep 4, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 5, 2012
|Compare the contributions of artists to society - 'scientist is more important'
Writing FeedbackLena05031 - Sep 5, 2012 / Lena05031 - Sep 5, 2012
|ESSAY ON ALCOHOL - lowered or not?
3 - Thanks so much for the response. I did realize my mistakes and about how i kept asking questions, i...
Writing Feedbacksillyxo - Sep 5, 2012 / sillyxo - Sep 5, 2012
|Museum; see things in reality and feel their texture - it's unforgettable moment
4 - An interesting Topic. I think your writing is rather short and need some ideas. I suggest you some more...
Writing Feedbackgag379 - Sep 4, 2012 / thaonguyen1901 - Sep 5, 2012
|Pets should be treated as family members or not? 'pets are also live creatures'
5 - Thank you guys, especially Jennifer for your precise responses. Although I was overtime for this writing ( 40 mins...
Writing Feedbackthaonguyen1901 - Sep 4, 2012 / thaonguyen1901 - Sep 5, 2012
|Paid work in children - My discussion essay written following writing task 2 IELTS
Writing Feedbackanhtu214 - Sep 4, 2012 / dumi - Sep 4, 2012
|I believe that teachers are responsible for motivating students to learn
Writing Feedbackfarnaz_nouri - Sep 4, 2012 / MoonMoon - Sep 4, 2012
|GRE ISSUE; TOURISM WILL BECOME OBSOLETE DUE TO TELEVISION & WORLDWIDE COMPUTER
2 - Television and world wide computer connections arethe greatesta great boon to users . ComputerThe internet connects us to...
Writing FeedbackSiddharthvora01 - Sep 4, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 4, 2012
|Healthy Lives for Plainsville residents - GRE
2 - The perspetive of the vice president of Nature's way to expand the business by opening stores of food and...
Writing FeedbackSiddharthvora01 - Sep 4, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 4, 2012
|'Left to be Forgotten' Short story. Narrative about toy raccoon for english 10 CP
Writing Feedbackrochelleleeo - Sep 1, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 4, 2012
|TOEFL; plethora of convenient stores in Taiwan: 7-11, Family
2 - has greatly enhance the quality of people's lifestyle due to the fact that there is more expand time we...
Writing FeedbackJinFay - Sep 4, 2012 / April April - Sep 4, 2012
|Parents have a greater influence on their children's; "parents training courses"
4 - If you have time & you want to pour your ideas without any grammatical mistakes with full confidence then...
Writing Feedbacklengoctrang - Sep 1, 2012 / amitt - Sep 4, 2012
|'Choosing an interesting profession' - essay about job satisfaction - IELTS task 2
5 - try to improve your vocabulary use some linking words give two to three ideas and evidences to get a...
Writing Feedbackmehdi0912 - Aug 24, 2012 / nitish582 - Sep 4, 2012
|In general all communicating media are important and have their own advantages
Writing Feedbacksara_venusir - Sep 3, 2012 / dumi - Sep 4, 2012
|"Chocolat" movie essay
Writing Feedbackm1994 - Sep 3, 2012 / ace - Sep 3, 2012
|IELTS- latest topic from this month's exam: Internet replacing books
Writing Feedbackcharrmaine - Sep 1, 2012 / nitish582 - Sep 3, 2012
|'expressing myself in deferent's ways' - My passion for singing
Writing FeedbackCrysta - Sep 3, 2012 / Crysta - Sep 3, 2012
|Proposal Essay - 'It's Time Athletes Stop Getting Played'
2 - To be more objective, I think you need to discuss the issue of steroids in sports. The problem is...
Writing FeedbackADR21_2 - Sep 1, 2012 / ace - Sep 3, 2012
|'fair government' - Patriot's Pen - Essay bout founding fathers and America
2 - Hello, thanks for commenting on my PAtriot's Pen essay. I'll provide a few comments on yours. If you see...
Writing Feedbackaspiringwriter - Sep 1, 2012 / chessman567 - Sep 3, 2012
|IBT essay.. What do you do for good health?
Writing Feedbackchallagali - Sep 2, 2012 / dumi - Sep 3, 2012
|TOEFL: which do you prefer: A high paying job or quality sparse time
2 - Open the introduction with a motivator and then write the thesis statement. Try to write the reasons (Several...
Writing Feedbackmamad60 - Sep 3, 2012 / ah_zafari - Sep 3, 2012
|Maxim: Beggars are not the choosers.
4 - I also think that the essay should be more decisive on your views. Establish both points but make it...
Writing Feedbackken99m - Jul 22, 2012 / Macrusa - Sep 2, 2012
|'your own magical show stage' essay
Writing FeedbackPieng - Aug 23, 2012 / Macrusa - Sep 2, 2012
|Plan to build a new restaurant - do you support or oppose essay
2 - please se the attached file, you dedicated a large portion of the essay for strictly "personal" reasons. I...
Writing Feedbackneo1989 - Sep 1, 2012 / mohammmo - Sep 2, 2012
|Essay about National education in Hong Kong
3 - Not sure how to help but i'' provide you with my personal suggestions on some phrases. They are only...
Writing Feedbackwalterbb - Aug 27, 2012 / mohammmo - Sep 2, 2012
|TOEFL: Why visit MUSEUMS? Learn History &Culture, Making friends
3 - the topic is: Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people...
Writing Feedbackmeili luo - Sep 2, 2012 / layla88 - Sep 2, 2012
|"Arrival to the United States" - Culture Shock Essay
2 - I remember when I first arrived to the United States, my family and I was were, not was because...
Writing Feedbackrabeyar22 - Sep 1, 2012 / twinklae - Sep 1, 2012
|What do you want to change about your school?
5 - I think your essay needs some transitional expressions,such as :First of all, However,Finally... That would make your essay seem...
Writing Feedbacklayla88 - Sep 1, 2012 / Jason sp - Sep 1, 2012
|Fictional or Historical Character Essay: Selfless Selfishness
Writing Feedbackmolluscs - Aug 28, 2012 / pretty3295 - Sep 1, 2012
|IELTS- In some countries people are not taking care of their elderly relatives
8 - can't we say this includes : medical management and promoting regular performance of their daily life activities???...
Writing Feedbackclarkmc - Sep 1, 2012 / amitt - Sep 1, 2012
|My visit to a beautiful place (Hyderabad in India)
8 - Actually I know what you meant by your bolded letters but the thing is one must point out what's...
Writing Feedbackstephenie - Sep 1, 2012 / stephenie - Sep 1, 2012
|TOEFL--It is more important to relate well with people than studying hard at school.
Writing FeedbackJason sp - Sep 1, 2012 / ace - Sep 1, 2012
|Creativity can be dangerous when exercised excessively
Writing Feedbackjisthesmartest - Aug 31, 2012 / amitt - Sep 1, 2012
|The influence of globalization on the world's economics
2 - outer space means space beyond the earth's atmosphere or beyond the solar system. production of...
Writing Feedbacksweetdreamzz - Aug 27, 2012 / layla88 - Aug 31, 2012
|'improve and evolve' - SAT: to learn from the past in order to understand the present
Writing Feedbackbeibeibajin - Aug 26, 2012 / MoonMoon - Aug 31, 2012
|[IELTS] different preferences of leisure activities
Writing Feedbackclarkmc - Aug 26, 2012 / clarkmc - Aug 31, 2012
|'the progress of the nation' - spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding
3 - performing the same things repeatedly --- you just used the exact same phrase in the intro. ''the same set...
Writing Feedbackumasampath54 - Aug 30, 2012 / April April - Aug 31, 2012
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