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|Male or female are become the peaceful leader (IELTS task 2)
3 - Hi SHanafi, as I have said several days ago, I would like to discuss about your flows and sentence....
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 12, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Feb 15, 2015
|Worst criminals in our society. Murderers and their destiny! IELTS task 2
2 - Hi, Vns9x, I didn't think this one was that convincing. I don't think murderers are more likely to escape...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 13, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 14, 2015
|The global issues about taking job or traveling than go to university directly IELTS TASK 2
2 - that makes a sense ( i have no clues whether this beginning will work, but i would recommend you...
Writing FeedbackBrian Trinanda - Feb 14, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 14, 2015
|Manufactured products reached a peak just under 45 mln, whilst others deteriorated dramatically
2 - Your essay needs some works. 1. Your introduction should not contain any specific information such as Manufactured products 23-34...
Writing FeedbackMukhammad Ali - Feb 13, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 14, 2015
|IELTS: The first diagram exhibits the way the structure produces its electricity
2 - The first diagramexhibits the way the structure produces its electricity is by having a wave as the source...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 13, 2015 / vahid11 - Feb 14, 2015
|Each year the university managers allocate the budget among different activities at the school
3 - Hello Thanks for reading my essay. 1. Do you have any suggestion to rephrase this "in this way...
Writing Feedbackvahid11 - Feb 14, 2015 / vahid11 - Feb 14, 2015
|Obesity in modern society - people are lacking a healthy diet and getting fatter. IELTS
2 - Buddy, you will definitely be able to exceed your band 5 in writing. Anyways, here are some suggestions for...
Writing Feedbackmymai14493 - Feb 14, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 14, 2015
|Number of companies that are selling their products worldwide is increasing - globalization effects
2 - Secondly, High quality products will be available at cheaper price. Secondly,high quality products.... Correct me if i am wrong....
Writing Feedbacktushartawanee - Feb 13, 2015 / Sherlockzz - Feb 14, 2015
|Human expression; art-based subjects should be compulsory in the curriculum - IELTS TASK 2
2 - Hi, I thought your essay was pretty good and I think your structure could be effective. But you need...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 13, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 13, 2015
|More or Less People? Why are environmental issues caused by population difficult to address?
2 - Since we are living in a planet with limited resource, population has been an important environmental concern for many...
Writing Feedbacklooperacorn - Feb 11, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 13, 2015
|As the day goes by, the increasing of crime rate has never been stopped
2 - Along with this new condition, gradually Police can be a good figure for the society, be a hero for...
Writing FeedbackBrian Trinanda - Feb 13, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 13, 2015
|Happiness period varies from person to person and from society to society (Teenage vs Adulthood)
2 - This essay will discuss both ages and then it will form an opinion based on those points. This sentence...
Writing Feedbackizhar - Feb 13, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 13, 2015
|Teenagers should not only watch the TV program, but also take responsibility to practice the sport
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Feb 7, 2015 / Anfalia - Feb 13, 2015
|A/D: Who is a better leader, an old person or a young one?
8 - Ahmad, no, I did not fail to take Steve Jobs and Bill Gates into consideration when I wrote my...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Feb 9, 2015 / vangiespen - Feb 13, 2015
|One's success determines through rewarding career. People are choosing to change careers, why?
4 - Imad thank you for remind me, I almost forget for the form of comparative. :) Moleman Wow!! It...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 11, 2015 / Anfalia - Feb 13, 2015
|Children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need; children and crimes
2 - Your essay is really very good.I think you can also include the following staements somewhere in your essay to...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 12, 2015 / Jenya1970 - Feb 12, 2015
|IELTS: Big outdoor public space is necessary for all cities and towns, agree or disagree?
3 - Your writing skills is far better than mine, but I still want to point out something that I reckon...
Writing Feedbackmoleman - Feb 11, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 12, 2015
|Starting earlier, you will encounter more types of sentence structures, grammars and vocabulary
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 11, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 12, 2015
|Learning a foreign language will encourage the curiosity of children
5 - The first-grade children have to learn a language outside their own country. I personally believe that this situation has...
Writing FeedbackImaduddinnst - Feb 1, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 12, 2015
|'Overall, all three museums had an upward trend' - Museums and its attenders. IELTS task 1
NEW - The line graph provides a breakdown of information in terms of thousands of numbers of visitors per month in...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 12, 2015 / — -
|We meet many people in the course of our lifetimes. Choose one who is most unforgettable and why.
2 - A good essay. I think the first paragraph is a bit of a drag and unnecessarily wordy. You can...
Writing FeedbackJenya1970 - Feb 10, 2015 / pbjc7991 - Feb 12, 2015
|GRE-The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority
2 - This essay is quite informative, and that is what i like about it. Notwithstanding, this is a GRE exam,...
Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Feb 11, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 11, 2015
|A typical day of the underground station, rush hours in London train station - IELTS task 1
2 - My humble thoughts: your essay is wanting in holistic views, particularly in your detection/generalization of trends. I suppose that...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 11, 2015 / dunguyen - Feb 11, 2015
|IELTS Task 1: Coffee exports in 3 different nations.
2 - This is the first time you mention, so Indefinite article is needed: A 10-year period Semi-colons...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Feb 11, 2015 / eddies - Feb 11, 2015
|Coffee export in three different countries in South America - IELTS task 1
2 - Overall, what stands out from the graph examines that coffee exports experienced bothan upward and downward trends . On...
Writing FeedbackCuynomellen - Feb 11, 2015 / eddies - Feb 11, 2015
|Budget - thought-provoking issue among scholars to bring about and to desire for.
3 - Thank you very much, indeed. I will take into account your insightful comments in my next writing. ...
Writing Feedbackeftekharizade - Feb 11, 2015 / eftekharizade - Feb 11, 2015
|A horizon communication these days speaks more than one language. Learning foreign language issue
2 - A horizon communication these days speaks more than one language. As the country's future asset, children are able to...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 11, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 11, 2015
|Who should be responsible for the welfare of poor nations?
4 - Some thoughts as follows. caveats: I am not a native, let alone a IELTS rater. 1.Your interpretation of...
Writing Feedbacktopeayowole - Feb 10, 2015 / moleman - Feb 11, 2015
|'many young people feel tired from studing'; To work or to travel after finishing high school? IELTS
3 - Your essay is quite solid, but i have encountered a few apparent mistakes of yours. 1. The prompt...
Writing FeedbackAinura23 - Feb 3, 2015 / Rich Monte - Feb 11, 2015
|Writing Task 2 : Public transportation still has possibilities to pollute environment
4 - I find it a little bizarre to see no transition from the second paragraph to the third one. In...
Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Feb 9, 2015 / Rich Monte - Feb 11, 2015
|A prominent task of universities is to enroll prospective students for further next. IELTS
5 - wow! thank you so much for all comments. It is really improve my writing. Fadlanmuzakki, thank you for your...
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 6, 2015 / Anfalia - Feb 11, 2015
|A whole culture has grown up around the new possibilities of keeping in touch on the Web
Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Feb 6, 2015 / Anfalia - Feb 11, 2015
|Pushed by eager mother to enter sports clubs because it builds 'character'. Competition or fun?
2 - Very interesting introduction, but there is an issue with the introductions you write. There are lots of details in...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Feb 11, 2015 / ah_zafari - Feb 11, 2015
|Immigrants shouldn't be responsible for adjusting in their newly adopted country.
2 - Hello Mr. THiet, I may be too harsh in evaluating this essay, but I hope you don't feel offended...
Writing Feedbackthiet sun - Feb 10, 2015 / kibz95 - Feb 10, 2015
|Nowadays, the environment where people live affects them so much
3 - There are some weaknesses in your writing. You need to focus on your vocabulary. For pragmatic instance, in...
Writing FeedbackTillie - Feb 9, 2015 / Rich Monte - Feb 10, 2015
|It is unlikely nowadays not to get influenced by the trends, including related to fashion as well.
2 - You have an abundance of wonderful ideas in your essay! But anyways, in the formal writing i would personally...
Writing Feedbacksambhavsh - Feb 10, 2015 / Rich Monte - Feb 10, 2015
|The House At The End Of The Driveway - iGCSE descriptive coursework.
2 - This essay is undoubtedly a well-written one. Congratulations! Notwithstanding, here are some of its setbacks. 1. Pure, (comma...
Writing Feedbackamyneave - Feb 4, 2015 / Rich Monte - Feb 10, 2015
|With the proliferation of high-tech media, internet, several issues always confront young people
NEW - Beside a lot of advantages, some people believe that the internet creates many problems. To what extend do you...
Writing Feedbackleekiwon - Feb 10, 2015 / — -
|What cause of people life longer ? is that positive of negative development? (IELTS Task 2)
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 9, 2015 / Anfalia - Feb 10, 2015
|Start to develop the electric cars or solve the problem of transportation system?
3 - Hi, I thought your writing was pretty good, but your essay was not that convincing to me. I would...
Writing FeedbackImaduddinnst - Feb 9, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 9, 2015
|Spend Money for City's Development - quality and a quantity of public service facilities
Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Feb 9, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 9, 2015
|Elements and proper locations for the installation of wind turbine (IELTS Task 1)
NEW - The diagram illustrates the construction of a wind turbine which is consist of 4 crucial elements while the second...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 9, 2015 / — -
|I still hear my grandmother yelling at me asking me to stop playing on the streets
4 - Personally you should add some specific details. You also should check the grammatical error after finishing your essay. For...
Writing Feedbackvidhyamouli - Feb 6, 2015 / Tillie - Feb 9, 2015
|IELTS-Writing Task2: Renewable Energy and Public Transportation as one of responsible to environment
3 - If you want to use an abbreviation, you have to write an explanation in the beginning then use it...
Writing FeedbackLiliy - Feb 9, 2015 / akhfan - Feb 9, 2015
|Help to only our own community or nation, as it is not possible to help each and every one?
3 - Appreciate your feedback myngoc311. :) I liked the way you transformed the second paragraph and also the tips which...
Writing Feedbackabracadabra - Feb 2, 2015 / abracadabra - Feb 9, 2015
|In India, as in worldwide, the most famous organisation is 'Athithi Dev Bavo'
4 - Yes, it can be used. Multiple of examples for exact phrase "Crime is soaring" and of course "day...
Writing FeedbackSabby multani - Feb 8, 2015 / Opuntia - Feb 9, 2015
|Alternative energy cars become recent technology invention today.
2 - -'Pollution are the biggest contribute in global warming which are caused by private cars on the roads '...
Writing Feedbackymahanani - Feb 9, 2015 / somasalims - Feb 9, 2015
|Directing people away from desire to have own vehicle will reduce the pollution; A/D?
NEW - The proliferation of private cars on the roads in many parts of the world has led to serious problems...
Writing Feedbacknisamumtaz - Feb 9, 2015 / — -
|A toddler have the cognitive capacity to learn approximately 20 new words each month.
4 - it will effect on children are notcompletely understand their mother tongue. from my perspective you can change the...
Writing Feedbacktphy - Jan 31, 2015 / AinunAlfatih - Feb 9, 2015
|Learning foreign language from the earliest grades - Javanese example
3 - Hai su_ja, I think when you use adverb clause showing your reason, you better put "because" in the middle...
Writing Feedbacksu_ja27 - Feb 2, 2015 / Liliy - Feb 8, 2015
|Foreign Language Foster Student's Abilities
3 - I think you better use first language than mother language. Moreover, it is possible to use mother tongue too....
Writing Feedbackymahanani - Jan 30, 2015 / tphy - Feb 8, 2015
|Body Scanner and CCTV have significantly enhanced our safety and security
3 - Governments play a pivotal role [in enhancing the] to enhance safety and security of their citizens[, w]hich is why...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Feb 8, 2015 / TJLuschen - Feb 8, 2015
|Professional jobs are undervalued, whilst actors or company bosses are paid huge money
3 - 1. Needs an article here 2. Write: People with different ... 3/5. This is called sentence fragments. You...
Writing FeedbackCuynomellen - Feb 6, 2015 / eddies - Feb 8, 2015
|Tax is aiding to creep the authority revenue by directly or indirectly way from public.
Writing FeedbackSabby multani - Feb 5, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 8, 2015
|Players and supporters in particular, should be supportive and responsible for the sporting events
3 - "In recent years, lots of international sporting events have been organised by international organisation in order to raise patriotic...
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Feb 8, 2015 / EF_Kevin - Feb 8, 2015
|It is extremely arduous for globalization to completely eliminate our precious culture.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 8, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 8, 2015
|Parents show us how to recognize the rights and the wrongs
Writing FeedbackTillie - Feb 8, 2015 / Tillie - Feb 8, 2015
|The present way of preparing food has helped consumers to save time, effort and money.
Writing Feedbackajreyes - Feb 8, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 8, 2015
|Books have always been read by many individuals since they can provide you with abundant knowledge
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Feb 6, 2015 / Vns9x - Feb 8, 2015
|Overall, transportation, housing, and food were the underlying utilities of all four countries.
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