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|The children in my family have always had different expectations depending on their gender.
2 - In terms of sentence structure, flow, and clarity, try not to rely on too many prepositional phrases. An example...
Writing FeedbackTheEstudiante - Nov 19, 2014 / EF_Sheri - Nov 19, 2014
|The development of economy, technology & many other fields has profoundly transformed human society
2 - Vi, the introduction is incomplete because you did not present your point of view as part of the first...
Writing Feedbackbicaosang - Nov 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 19, 2014
|Plants can provide food, shelter, clothing, or medicine. What is one kind of plant that is important
2 - Shin, save for a few negligible grammatical errors in your essay this is a pretty good effort on your...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 19, 2014
|Each generations have unique features with technology development. My time is different in many ways
3 - Meenu, this is supposed to be approached as a compare and contrast essay between two generations. Therefore, when you...
Writing Feedbackchani - Nov 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 19, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : The influence of advanced technology in people's lives
4 - , "This" word refers to what ? Its a new paragraph, so the subject should be mentioned clearly....
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Nov 15, 2014 / mvettri - Nov 19, 2014
|EssaySome movies are serious,other movies are amuse and entertain.Which type of movie do you prefer?
2 - Sami, there was really no need to discuss the other movie types in this essay. It was only mentioned...
Writing Feedbackgeosami - Nov 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 19, 2014
|We can get knowledge from news, but some people think we can't trust the journalist. IELTS essay
6 - thanks...
Writing Feedbacklogo3098 - Nov 17, 2014 / logo3098 - Nov 19, 2014
|IELTS - Experience is becoming more and more demanding for job application.
2 - Experience is becoming more and more demanding for job application. This is more of a fragment than a clear...
Writing FeedbackFrostmire - Nov 18, 2014 / aveiz100 - Nov 18, 2014
|Why Plato's philosopher king isn't going to turn this world into paradise
2 - I would work a little bit more on the vocabulary and details in some of the support paragraphs. It...
Writing FeedbackLefique - Nov 17, 2014 / aveiz100 - Nov 18, 2014
|Most of parents tend to consider their teenagers as too young and inexperienced to decide anything
3 - nice friends youth and teenagers are most important for this society. i find a site that is providing free...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 18, 2014 / huma1985 - Nov 18, 2014
|Does working with others lead to better results than acting as an individual? Score?
Writing Feedbacksunny17 - Nov 17, 2014 / lightjade - Nov 18, 2014
|"Which One Would You Choose, Traditional or Modern Medicine?" - Article review on medicine
2 - The article I'm about to review is entitled "Which One Would You Choose, Traditional or Modern Medicine?", the author...
Writing Feedbackfirstywrites - Nov 16, 2014 / logo3098 - Nov 18, 2014
|Teacher vs student - it would be ideal if students had some opportunities to talk during the lecture
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 18, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 18, 2014
|The best way to help developing countries is to give them financial aid - [IELTS task 2]
2 - The essay is definitely well-written. Unfortunately, there are some advice for you to consider. It would be better if...
Writing Feedbackrhino - Nov 17, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 18, 2014
|A common phenomenon that people who live in flourishing city are leading a life with lower qualities
4 - their body w unhealthy Anyhow, you have some good ideas to decode the prompt. However, i consider that you...
Writing FeedbackJimYeah - Nov 18, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 18, 2014
|Do you support or oppose with the plan of the a new restaurant? TOEFL independent task
4 - Ronei, there is actually a simpler way to write your essay. Just remember the IBC rule of essay writing:...
Writing FeedbackJuniorR - Nov 17, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 17, 2014
|Should the attendance be mandatory in universities?
Writing Feedbacksvdenurr - Nov 16, 2014 / svdenurr - Nov 17, 2014
|The best form of care for the elderly depends on the family situation
4 - This is definitely better than the first one Pham. I am just wondering if you cannot be discussing more...
Writing FeedbackTeddy Pham - Nov 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 17, 2014
|Achy Breaky Heart - Article Review
3 - Is this okay? The title had my attention almost immediately, because not only is it so ear-catching unlike...
Writing Feedbackfirstywrites - Nov 16, 2014 / firstywrites - Nov 17, 2014
|Memory Course - write a letter to the course convenor (IELTS)
2 - I am an university student,enrolled in a graduate engineering degree, in my last year, this means that I have...
Writing Feedbackpolotokin - Nov 14, 2014 / logo3098 - Nov 17, 2014
|Any leader who is quickly and easily influenced by shifts in popular opinion will accomplish little
2 - One of the major issues in immediate reaction to public opinion, is that public opinion changes faster than...
Writing FeedbackKennyRie - Nov 15, 2014 / sunny17 - Nov 17, 2014
|The way of using internet is developing during the time especially in the globalization era; IELTS
NEW - Discuss advantages and diadvantages of internet The way of using internet is developing during the time especially in the...
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|Grading System Essay (Persuasive, academic, 10th grade level)
2 - Hello! This is an unusual request... interesting. : ) Thanks for bringing it. You could use logo, ethos,...
Writing Feedbackwfe2014 - Nov 13, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Nov 16, 2014
|Beauty isn't the most important, but inner beauty is - judging by external appearances
2 - There are many issues you need to solve when it comes to the essay. Firstly, your introduction is...
Writing Feedbackgeosami - Nov 15, 2014 / alberic - Nov 16, 2014
|"The biggest risk is not taking any risk." - TOEFL
Writing FeedbackCarolst - Oct 21, 2014 / alberic - Nov 16, 2014
|TOEFL: Some people prefer to play team sports, while others prefer to play individual sports.
4 - In my opinion team sports give more benefits to a person in terms of personal development than individual kinds...
Writing FeedbackVadimKlimenko - Aug 4, 2014 / alberic - Nov 16, 2014
|TOEFL: complex problems faced by humankind can not be resolved by independent genius.
2 - Well, there are some typos such as independently engineering humankind analyze. However, they are minors. So, try to type...
Writing FeedbackVadimKlimenko - Nov 15, 2014 / alberic - Nov 16, 2014
|'The definition of the word globalization' - Introductory Paragraph for Essay on Globalization
5 - Thanks for the feedback it was really helpful. I want to complete it, but my assignment was only to...
Writing Feedbackfirstywrites - Nov 10, 2014 / firstywrites - Nov 16, 2014
|Quick "my weekend" essay
4 - Thank you :)...
Writing Feedbackmrtamago - Nov 14, 2014 / mrtamago - Nov 15, 2014
|TOEFL - Doing homework every day, like the light of the sun, can furnish students with advantages
3 - Today'sModern society is much more complex, diverse and shift changeable than ever before, making every social membersa sailor driving...
Writing Feedbackace0dream - Oct 24, 2014 / VadimKlimenko - Nov 15, 2014
|Success means that the desire was strong enough? To what extent do you agree or disagree?
4 - Tinash, there are many small mistakes in your essay.For instance,peoples -people,be the attributed for ,must has to graduates from...
Writing Feedbacktinash - Nov 13, 2014 / Domain - Nov 15, 2014
|Ielts task 1: Pass rates of undergraduates in their first academic year
3 - As can be easily seen, the amount ofpercentage of/figure for students did not fail at the end of the...
Writing Feedbackthuyvu - Nov 13, 2014 / eddies - Nov 14, 2014
|My Writing Improvement - I don't have a lot of writing experiences, especially in English
7 - It would be better to enhance your conclusion. Write in addition how your writing skills will help you...
Writing Feedbackfadoola123 - Nov 13, 2014 / Opuntia - Nov 14, 2014
|Some international student choose American roommates. Others choose students from their own country.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 13, 2014 / Robert_T - Nov 14, 2014
|I'm more than meets the eye. I am unique. Describe yourself in 140 characters?
3 - Please try to cut out anything which is unnecessary. I am sure you will be able to sum-up yourself...
Writing Feedbacka_sweezy - Nov 9, 2014 / samramandy - Nov 14, 2014
|Both art and science greatly influence our world in a positive manner - Artists vs scientists
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 13, 2014 / shanexo - Nov 13, 2014
|Why do many people use Facebook? (cause and effect essay)
Writing Feedbackanmaihung - Nov 12, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 13, 2014
|UM-Twin Cities Educational Interests American Studies
6 - vengiespen Thank you very much for your help! I corrected my sentences as you indicated, and I could...
Writing Feedbackkitakaname - Nov 11, 2014 / kitakaname - Nov 13, 2014
|Clothes have always played a leading role when it comes a person's behavior.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 12, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 13, 2014
|Along with job, marriage, having a child comes the moment when you cannot escape from being an adult
5 - All throughout the essay, you made it clear that you were speaking on general terms, that means you were...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 12, 2014
|High salaries and not disturbing during work are the key factors of encouraging people to teach
3 - - Abdurasul, I suggest that you learn how to discuss each of your reasons as separate paragraphs so that...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Nov 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 12, 2014
|People should use phone in correct occasions and should not use it in specific public areas; IELTS
6 - First of all, it is obvious that human have rights to do their favorable things which is are not...
Writing Feedbacklogo3098 - Nov 11, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 12, 2014
|It is significant that zoos are used to protect rare animals - IELTS essay
Writing Feedbacklogo3098 - Nov 6, 2014 / logo3098 - Nov 11, 2014
|Telling the truth is the best policy that a person can adopt in his life.
6 - thanks...
Writing Feedbackebrahimsangsefi - Nov 11, 2014 / ebrahimsangsefi - Nov 11, 2014
|Willy Loman - Family Man, Father, Fake, Fraud - [High School] [Death of a Salesman]
Writing Feedbackorlandok - Nov 10, 2014 / orlandok - Nov 11, 2014
|Is soaring petrol price the best way to tackle traffic congestion and pollution?
2 - Do not utilize 5 body paragraphs. In other words, try to merge some of your reasons. In fact, by...
Writing FeedbackChrissiePK - Nov 11, 2014 / logo3098 - Nov 11, 2014
|It takes failure to achive success. SAT
4 - - I suggest that you bring this up as your introductory paragraph. It has an intriguing hook that...
Writing Feedbackmilamiller - Nov 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 11, 2014
|A new now technology will soon become out of date or even useless; education for further development
4 - - Trung, this is an effective opening statement but it lacks the most important part in an opinion...
Writing FeedbackCE_15 - Nov 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 11, 2014
|Traditional music has the least amount of listeners and this number is more and more shorten
Writing Feedbackel_lee88 - Nov 6, 2014 / el_lee88 - Nov 11, 2014
|Difference between the book and computer
Writing FeedbackDaniellePeazer - Nov 11, 2014 / DaniellePeazer - Nov 11, 2014
|Would I rather be loved for the imperfect person that I am, or for amazing qualities I don't have?
Writing Feedbacksunny17 - Nov 11, 2014 / sunny17 - Nov 11, 2014
|People's life expectancy is getting longer and longer due to many external factors
6 - Shon, you still need to do more work on this essay. Please refer to my notes as suggestions for...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 10, 2014
|IELTS essay question: if international collaboration is the only way to tackle most problems?
2 - Many people believe that the world's most urgent problems can only be solved by international collaboration, Do u agree...
Writing FeedbackJeffGC - Nov 10, 2014 / mvettri - Nov 10, 2014
|Technology is the tool that reinforce people to get numerous knowledge overnight
8 - Shon, it will certainly boost your essay score because it will show that you are comfortable with the English...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 10, 2014
|By 2000, in Australia, the level of electricity generated through hydropower slightly increased
3 - Thank you *confusing girl "*second sentence confusing! how was it different? that was two sentences combined!" - Yes, I...
Writing Feedbackhokagepato - Nov 9, 2014 / hokagepato - Nov 9, 2014
|Write an essay that either supports or opposes the use of cell phones.
7 - This essay reminds me of a picture that you could reference if you please, it's a picture of everything...
Writing Feedbackjk98 - Nov 8, 2014 / STEMkid - Nov 9, 2014
|Topic: Causes Reducing the amount of book-reading "READING-CULTURE WHETHER IT STILL EXISTS"
4 - Thien, it is important that you learn how to outline your essay before you write the draft. The outline...
Writing Feedbackhnlt1093 - Nov 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 9, 2014
|People in the past ate healthier (food) than people do today
3 - An increasing number of people begin to discuss whether people in the past ate healthier food. Many people are...
Writing Feedbackthegreatwall - Nov 8, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 9, 2014
|Events like FIFA world cup can positively improve the international relationships
4 - It is certainly true that international sporting occasions like foot ball cups are very popular incidents, so I strongly...
Writing Feedbackabdelrashed - Nov 4, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 9, 2014
|Headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia - GRE / Argument
5 - Dear Louisa, Thanks for the time that you have given for me to advice about English writing. I...
Writing Feedbackstrider10 - Nov 6, 2014 / strider10 - Nov 8, 2014
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