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|Study blindfoldedly without analyzing the assumptions made in it will certainly bring one's downfall
2 - this is not a nice approach of questioning a work. The data are not "trustable", "legitimate" or "valid"...
Writing Feedbackthelearner - Jan 28, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 28, 2015
|The current energy sources that we use, contaminate our environment, as well as the mankind.
4 - just electricity? I suggest to change electricity to "energy" as a more general term. electricity...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 27, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 27, 2015
|Essay on being unique - Everybody is unique in their own way.
4 - this essay has alot of great ideas just try avoiding the part where you say because although it shows...
Writing Feedbackrone - Jan 26, 2015 / omarsamahy - Jan 27, 2015
|The creation of a government is definitely for solving the problems (welfare) of the society
2 - The creation of a government is definitely for solving the problems(welfare) of the society, and problems here does not...
Writing Feedbackthelearner - Jan 27, 2015 / confusee123 - Jan 27, 2015
|Media should be allowed to publish information about the private life: Discuss two different views
2 - Okay, first up, you were being asked to only discuss 2 opinions in this essay, the pro and the...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 27, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 27, 2015
|If the students study the same nation curriculum then they can equally perform in all the field
3 - I would change more things, however beyond your scripture and grammatical errors, you used India and GRE to develop...
Writing Feedbackkumawatakki - Sep 19, 2014 / Elith - Jan 27, 2015
|Ielts: People watch more movies from overseas? What are the reasons for this?
Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 27, 2015
|Piano, my source of motivation - Umich/ Extracurricular CommonApp Essay
2 - Yes, you should make applause italics in the middle of the paragraph. It signifies that the action is not...
Writing Feedbackf3bruar7z - Jan 26, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 26, 2015
|Weddings in Vietnam and America - two different ways to celebrate it
2 - Lin, I am not sure where you got your ideas about how the American wedding is celebrated but there...
Writing Feedbacklinhchi - Jan 26, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 26, 2015
|Spending for space Project is Justify, other consider to be useless.
3 - To conclude, spending government money on the space exploration is not wisely a wise decision On balance, my...
Writing Feedbackfarazshamsi - Jan 24, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 26, 2015
|Experiences will aid you in various ways, but are no more sufficient for this contemporary world
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 26, 2015 / swathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015
|Ielts - "successful in an egalitarian society or Capitalistic"
2 - First, the essay contains only 248 words, less than 250. Be careful, no matter how well you can write,...
Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 26, 2015
|Women should stay at home and raise children: Do you agree or disagree
4 - OK Luisa, I rewrote the essay, can you please have look at this version? For centuries the patriarchy...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 25, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 26, 2015
|The different floor plan design; sharing space, bedroom, toilet, tatami room, balcony, kitchen
2 - Overall flow is good. There are some grammatical errors like : It very convenience if we have toilet...
Writing Feedbackkonbon - Jan 24, 2015 / swathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015
|Animals vs human needs; we should know how to protect the animals and suppress our avarice
2 - It has always been aquite contentious sincethere is an abundance of people who consider that , it ...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 25, 2015 / swathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015
|IELTS - Paying for clothes, haircuts and beauty products - just to enhance own appearence?
Writing FeedbackShankargouda - Jan 25, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 26, 2015
|English usage is increasing day by day, therefore various local languages are becoming extinct IELTS
Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Jan 25, 2015 / myngoc311 - Jan 25, 2015
|Modern technology has more negative effects than positive ones: Agree or disagree?
5 - Thank you very much Luisa. I'm happy this time the argument was not lacking any part of the prompt....
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 24, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 25, 2015
|Children don't think too much while acting. They have all freedom to do anything what they want.
Writing Feedbackrohitkhadse - Jan 23, 2015 / rohitkhadse - Jan 25, 2015
|Have you ever had the feeling of leaving your own country behind for an exciting adventure overseas?
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 24, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 24, 2015
|A cornerstone for a person to get successful in life is planning. TOEFL activities Essay
3 - Sorry to inform you but this essay needs lots of works. Glaringly, you could have introduced your ideas in...
Writing Feedbackblackcat - Jan 23, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 24, 2015
|TOEFL: People always debate on whether or not children should follow their parents' career paths.
6 - Albeit, it is quite a salient and interesting essay to read. Notwithstanding, i want to point out some of...
Writing Feedbacksimonexi - Jan 23, 2015 / Vns9x - Jan 24, 2015
|While studying some students take weekend or evening jobs to help with expenses. Share your opinion.
3 - Thank you for guiding me .. It was a big mistake and I even didn't notice!! Will correct soon...
Writing FeedbackPayaldx - Jan 24, 2015 / Payaldx - Jan 24, 2015
|Online Shopping increase in our daily life
2 - Faraz, kindly review your essay for capitalization errors and problems. The country is called the United States and is...
Writing Feedbackfarazshamsi - Jan 24, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 24, 2015
|TOEFL: The famous adage 'No pain, no gain' is by far the most logical expression I have ever heard.
4 - Yes, it is not only a deviation from the topic but it is also out of place. Your relationship...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 23, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 24, 2015
|Do you think that arts need to take a large part of the school timetable? Agree or disagree
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 24, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 24, 2015
|Students need to learn practical skills: Agree or disagree?
8 - Honestly, the essay is fine. The only problem like I previously mentioned, is that you use examples that require...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 23, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 24, 2015
|Making noise as much as you can!! Discuss two viewpoints :)
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 23, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 23, 2015
|TOEFL: The best way to relax and reduce stress is by spending some time alone.
4 - Kim, while your second paragraph does present a negative light of the way group relaxation may not be the...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 23, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 23, 2015
|SAT: "If you tell the truth, you don't have to remember anything"
2 - I believe you meant to say "harmless" in the last sentence of the third paragraph when you said harmful....
Writing FeedbackBurki - Jan 22, 2015 / AndrewB - Jan 23, 2015
|Every single man and woman has the freedom to believe what they wish to believe. TOEFL
5 - Your diction was impressive! Your word choice was on point at all times. At the beginning of the...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 22, 2015 / abgalpal101 - Jan 22, 2015
|TOEFL: Is it better to watch serious movies that are designed to make you think than just to watch?
5 - I agree... The time for a TOEFL writing in cruel... a full 4-5 paragraph essay in 30 minutes... It...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 22, 2015 / kibz95 - Jan 22, 2015
|"Dad, I am hungry!!" | "Hi hungry, I am dad!" - Change Leads to Growth
2 - The language and grammar that you use in this essay is casual yet respectful. It is reflectively written and...
Writing Feedbackoctober12 - Jan 22, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 22, 2015
|A/D It is important for families to regularly eat their meals together.
6 - Burki, Really? That's all you are going to offer? I just saw your comment on Ah_Zafari thread. You're not...
Writing Feedbackdreamcomestrue - Jan 21, 2015 / kibz95 - Jan 22, 2015
|Trying to devise an optimal way to teach has always been one of the priorities in pedagogic research
NEW - The best way to teach-whether as an educator, employer, or parent-is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones....
Writing Feedbackethenian - Jan 22, 2015 / — -
|TOEFL: Television advertising directed toward children under the age of five should not be allowed.
6 - Hmm. I understand what you are trying to say... And don't worry about not replying, I understand your situation....
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 18, 2015 / kibz95 - Jan 22, 2015
|National curriculum has been introduced into many countries for a long time
2 - I COULDN'T FIGURE OUT HOW TO USE BOLD OR COLORING TO CORRECT A FEW ERRORS. THEY ARE WRITTEN IN...
Writing Feedbackethenian - Jan 20, 2015 / amandamayet - Jan 21, 2015
|TOEFL: Today, life is easier and cozier than it was then out grandparents were young.
2 - The Idea that today is easier than the past is interesting. First I would explain what you mean by...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 21, 2015 / yoman316 - Jan 21, 2015
|As I study math finance-essay for SEAMS-UGM Conference 2015 quarter
2 - Hi dianessay. I am an economic graduate, and I hope my adivce would be helpful. Government bonds is...
Writing Feedbackdianessay - Jan 21, 2015 / ethenian - Jan 21, 2015
|Countless student at universities causes comptetion. Do you agree or disagree? Is it a good or bad?
10 - I guess my TOEFL experience is way different from that of the IELTS. Thanks for letting me know about...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 19, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 21, 2015
|TOEFL: environment issues are far too difficult for ordinary people to comprehend
3 - Thanks again Ahmad, I am in your debt. I understand what you are trying to say. I panicked when...
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 20, 2015 / kibz95 - Jan 21, 2015
|Spending money on appearance: right or wrong? Discuss both sides
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 19, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 20, 2015
|Have you ever play 'Rock paper scissors' with your relatives when you were little?
Writing FeedbackLulu_827 - Jan 8, 2015 / Lulu_827 - Jan 20, 2015
|Special Schools for Special Kids. Peer Review for English 102 - Guidelines included
NEW - I am looking for a peer review of my research essay fro English 102. Bellow are a few guidelines...
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|Since its invention television has been loved widely across the whole world and addicted many people
Writing Feedbacklionontheshore - Jan 20, 2015 / lionontheshore - Jan 20, 2015
|Humans are the most clever and talented creature across the world
2 - Humans are veryclever and talented . One thing that separates humans from from other living beings is their ability...
Writing Feedbacknaghmeh_ms - Jan 20, 2015 / Enchantress07 - Jan 20, 2015
|Using animals as a tools. Animals' right regulation has generated a great deal of discussions.
3 - Dear EF_Sheri, Thank you very much for your correction. how about my flow sentence and my idea? because...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Jan 16, 2015 / fadlanmuzakki - Jan 20, 2015
|Most people have watched a comedy show on TV with their families at least once in their lives; TOEFL
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 20, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 20, 2015
|Lately, many high school students try to search for a job instead of going to universities; TOEFL
5 - Yes, I do see your point... Perhaps something like calculating taxes or bills would be plausible....
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 19, 2015 / kibz95 - Jan 20, 2015
|People are living longer now - medicine is more advanced
2 - Hi! First, your thesis statement is a bit unclear and confusing to readers. I think you should clarify the...
Writing Feedbacksuncult - May 2, 2013 / BioCat - Jan 19, 2015
|IELTS Task 2: Elderly people should live in nursing homes or with younger people!
2 - Hello Mr. Nguyen. I know this essay stated to provide arguments from both sides but it also gave you...
Writing Feedbacksophienguyen92v - Aug 6, 2012 / kibz95 - Jan 19, 2015
|I started my first job as a Graduate Engineer Trainee; SOP - Applying for Master's
3 - Your essay is quite strong and certainly presents the 4 major information requirements that led you to consider enrolling...
Writing Feedbackvella88 - Jan 19, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 19, 2015
|Spend money on computers or teachers' wages? discuss both viewpoints
6 - Excellent work! You not only considered both sides of the issue, but you also successfully argued both sides in...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 17, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 19, 2015
|It is important that children should study hard at school. But playing sport is also necessary.
Writing FeedbackMisstuyet94 - Dec 27, 2014 / kibz95 - Jan 18, 2015
|In my view staying with the family for a longer time is better.
Writing Feedbackrohitkhadse - Jan 17, 2015 / rohitkhadse - Jan 18, 2015
|Staying well-informed in this time and age is simple, but which information is true and which is not
Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 18, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 18, 2015
|Should the government spend money on outer space projects?
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 17, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 18, 2015
|Should we wait for destiny to pave way for us or is it better to work hard instead?
2 - The comparison here is between destiny and working hard playing a role in the future or a person. There...
Writing FeedbackAreeba96 - Jan 17, 2015 / vangiespen - Jan 17, 2015
|Socialization process. Who influences you more? Peers or parents and teachers?
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 16, 2015 / Acioncion - Jan 17, 2015
|Information war in my motherland, Ukraine. Small essay about mass media (302 words)
6 - OK I copied an example from the book "practical writing with reading" below: Do you realize that newly born...
Writing FeedbackAcioncion - Jan 15, 2015 / ah_zafari - Jan 17, 2015
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