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|Author's argument on non-Palean woven baskets does not seems to make a cogent case. GRE argument
3 - Hi, yes this seems much more convincing, plus I think it is better organized, with each paragraph having a...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Oct 29, 2015 / TJLuschen - Nov 2, 2015
|Children being addicted to these high-tech entertainments are often failing in exams. Education
Writing Feedbackakiraaa - Nov 2, 2015 / akiraaa - Nov 2, 2015
|IELTS TASK 1: The charts below show household spending patterns in two countries between 1980 & 2008
NEW - The breakdown of the proportion of patterns' household spending in UK and New Zealand from 1980 to 2008, a...
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|Task 1 - The amount of waste production in six countries.
3 - A breakdown of the rate of waste production in different regions over following (need a comma here) a twenty-year...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Nov 2, 2015 / hasdymath - Nov 2, 2015
|The number both sexes joining the evening courses and the proportion of ages following these courses
NEW - A breakdown of the number of both sexes attending several evening courses in adult education center in 2009 and...
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|IELTS TASK 1 - Sales of Fairtrade labelled coffe and bananas in 1999 and 2004
NEW - The tables illustrate the amount of fair-trade branded bananas and coffee in UK, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden from...
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|Money plays a core role, however it doesn't always ensure the better life for human
2 - hello Abraham, let me try to give some recommendations on your passage. in that case, i guess...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Nov 2, 2015 / irfan727 - Nov 2, 2015
|Task 2 - A foreign language and adopting the traditions
3 - a great deal of invasions comeS to a country "comes" refer to a great deal, a singular subject. ...
Writing Feedbackirfan727 - Nov 2, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Nov 2, 2015
|Study of RHESUS MONKEYS- birth order affecting stimulation level of individual: GRE argument essay
2 - In summary, I would state to solidify this argument the author should present a far more far-detailed study relating...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Nov 1, 2015 / irhame - Nov 2, 2015
|Social and economic indicators: developed countries Vs undeveloped countries - IELTS writing task 1
2 - ... better economic and social state than the other two countries. In any case, Zaire has the worst education...
Writing Feedbackochio - Nov 1, 2015 / Bayuwibowo - Nov 2, 2015
|The wind turbine design and the proper position to locate it in order to generate more energy
3 - Hello, let me try to give some recommendations on your passage please try to use a two-sentence...
Writing Feedbackochio - Nov 1, 2015 / irfan727 - Nov 2, 2015
|Working at workplace has merits which can't be achieved in a solitary environment of home
3 - On the other hand, working in workplace is veryhighly important. People have toshould go to workplaces to do...
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Nov 1, 2015 / anggicaroot - Nov 2, 2015
|People today are more likely to be selfish - their wish is just to fulfill their daily needs
NEW - People in the past used to be more dependent on one another, whereas nowadays they lead a more dependent...
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|I'm having an essay about 2001: A Space Odyssey (1968). Check if I made any grammar mistakes.
2 - In summary, notnor ostentatious noror much explanation. In 2001 as the viewer experience the film as a whole block....
Writing Feedbacklongnguyen312 - Oct 30, 2015 / irhame - Nov 2, 2015
|Diversity of household activities based on sex in the United Kingdom
2 - Halloo... Let me help you to give some advices :) The chart gives information about diversity of household...
Writing Feedbackochio - Nov 1, 2015 / anggicaroot - Nov 2, 2015
|IELTS Task 1 : The intention of students for schooling.
2 - In Specialist Schools, it remained stable over the period Itwhose percentage stood at 12% in the beginning year, and...
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Nov 1, 2015 / lacusclyne - Nov 1, 2015
|The Air Exchange: Discards Steam and How Heat Dissappears (IELTS Task 1)
2 - - In the first floor, the house experienceshas dryer vent and crawl spacein the first floo r, thenwhile in...
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Nov 1, 2015 / ochio - Nov 1, 2015
|The wind turbines for electricity.
2 - Hi Clark Just few suggestions from my side : ... consists of five simplysimple materials.... ...affect...
Writing FeedbackClark Kent - Nov 1, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Nov 1, 2015
|People are able to communicate easier than in the past decade since internet has been developed
3 - Hi again Luthfia dewi, let me try give you some corrections. 1. if you use one sentence connector, that...
Writing FeedbackLuthfia Dewi - Oct 31, 2015 / Clark Kent - Nov 1, 2015
|Discuss both of perspectives about do talents come from parents or not?
4 - Hi Luthfia dewi, let me try to give you some suggestions. first, pay more attention to give an...
Writing FeedbackLuthfia Dewi - Oct 25, 2015 / Clark Kent - Nov 1, 2015
|The charity in USA - there are six different ways which Americans can use to give their contribution
NEW - The pie charts show the percentage of sources of income and expenses of a social foundation in USA during...
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|Increase in number of skateboard users in Central Plaza leading to descent of business-GRE argument
2 - in the first sentence of the third paragraph, you have three verbs but just one sentence connector, you should...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Oct 31, 2015 / Clark Kent - Nov 1, 2015
|Teenagers who commit major crimes should be received adult punishment.
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - Oct 27, 2015 / Clark Kent - Nov 1, 2015
|The Result of Social Economic Index: A Measurement in Several Represent Regions (IELTS Task 1)
2 - Hi Mujahid, these are my suggestion.. Firstly, there are many parentheses used. secondly, correction for your last paragraph.. ...
Writing Feedbackmujahid_fadli - Oct 31, 2015 / Pramudita - Nov 1, 2015
|Companies should allocate a certain percentage of job positions to women. Do you agree?
4 - Thank you. Yes, I think you are right. I have a difficulty getting an acceptable conclusion due to...
Writing FeedbackOctocaesar - Oct 27, 2015 / Octocaesar - Nov 1, 2015
|IELTS task 1: Men and women arrested between 1989 and 1994
NEW - The pie chart reveals the percentage of men and women arrested, while the bar chart shows reasons why people...
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|We learn to talk, walk, differentiate good from bad, and learn manners from our parents. TOEFL Essay
3 - Hi Chandnimaishery I believe one shouldn't start the essay with words like Obviously as we have to prove that...
Writing Feedbackchandnimaishery - Oct 31, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Oct 31, 2015
|More funding to education and healthcare sectors may help with lowering mortality and illiteracy
2 - Hi Abraham, here are my few suggestions . ....However, a negative side to this funding..., several sectors will...
Writing FeedbackAbraham22 - Oct 31, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Oct 31, 2015
|[IELTS Task 1] Consumer Spending on Several Items (Cambridge IELTS 7)
2 - Halo fahd93. Nice to meet you, firstly. It was pleasant I get occasion find and read your task here....
Writing Feedbackfadh93 - Oct 31, 2015 / mujahid_fadli - Oct 31, 2015
|Essay media effects - people follow some behaviors and manners by what they watch
Writing Feedbackannahatef - Oct 29, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Oct 31, 2015
|GOAL OF POLITICS - Idealism vs finding common ground and reaching reasonable consensus.
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Oct 28, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Oct 31, 2015
|Barney & Friends episodes and their effect on children watching - I just need to check my grammar
2 - Hi i rephrased a few lines to just improve grammar and polish your well- thought out essay. If you...
Writing FeedbackKMG - Oct 29, 2015 / FARZ1 - Oct 31, 2015
|In any field-business, politics, education, government, rulers should concede after 5 years in power
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Oct 28, 2015 / FARZ1 - Oct 31, 2015
|Do you agree that women should be given equal chance to participate in the military?
Writing FeedbackOctocaesar - Oct 27, 2015 / fadh93 - Oct 31, 2015
|RESTRICTION TO THE FREE TURKISH MEDIA
Writing Feedbackrosemaryyy - Oct 31, 2015 / rosemaryyy - Oct 31, 2015
|Many people use distance learning programs to study at home
3 - It is always good to include your prompt, so this can be our guideline. The influx of cutting-edge...
Writing FeedbackChaiko2015 - Oct 29, 2015 / eddies - Oct 30, 2015
|GRE argument task : Budgeting riverside recreational activities in Manson River
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Oct 7, 2015 / liying - Oct 28, 2015
|GRE argument task : Altering news content for late-night show
2 - Hi, I have just finished a GRE test and might give you some advice. As for the essay content,...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Oct 11, 2015 / liying - Oct 28, 2015
|GRE Issue Essay from the Manhattan 5lb practice booklet for GRE study.
2 - The interesting of these two candidates is that they both also have equally balanced experience levels. Its only when...
Writing Feedbackanthonyzampolin - Oct 27, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Oct 28, 2015
|TOEFL essay: should universities provide their students with a wide range of courses?
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Oct 28, 2015 / theninjacrab - Oct 28, 2015
|'Nowadays, students study a gamut of subjects in different fields'. TOEFL - Writing question
2 - Chadni, in your opening statement, don't say that you believe students should not make student study many subjects in...
Writing Feedbackchandnimaishery - Oct 28, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 28, 2015
|People should read or watch news presented by people whose views are different from your own?
2 - My point of view is not professional, but I would like to outline what I have inferred about essays...
Writing Feedbackhypersis - Oct 27, 2015 / fa1therr - Oct 27, 2015
|RHETORICAL ANALYSIS ESSAY: "Entropic Homogeneity Isn't Why No One Hits .400 Any More"
2 - I AM CAPTIVATED BY YOUR INTRODUCTION- THESIS. Throughout 20th century, it had changed a lot, and therefore, contains plenty...
Writing Feedbackturkmen4ik - Oct 25, 2015 / Mensa418 - Oct 27, 2015
|[IELTS] The causes of increasing average weight and measures to solve them.
3 - I think sometime people have chronic diseases such as heart disease,diabetes and hypertension. Some of them cannot exercise regularly...
Writing Feedbackmarcosi2718 - Oct 27, 2015 / rozhnaz - Oct 27, 2015
|Essay - Education(ESL STUDENT) - should kids have a school curriculum for being a good parent?
2 - Thomas, your essay is uses quite a lot of words. However, not all of those words were necessary in...
Writing Feedbackmaltekun - Oct 26, 2015 / vangiespen - Oct 27, 2015
|In many countries people are concerned about the number of children who are overweight.
2 - Those children that are under the effect ofare affected by genetic causes (delete comma)haveeat healthy food and exercise regularly,...
Writing Feedbackrozhnaz - Oct 26, 2015 / cassitylys - Oct 26, 2015
|Teachers should pay more attention on how to improve their teaching ability and not play politics
3 - Thank you for your comments on my grammers and vocabularies! Some small mistakes will ruin a good essay!...
Writing FeedbackRainbows - Oct 26, 2015 / Rainbows - Oct 26, 2015
|Disadvantages of watching TV - not only personal scale
5 - I am also preparing for TOEFL and GRE and i learned that these exams look more for open mindedness...
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Oct 21, 2015 / Ssakshijain - Oct 26, 2015
|GRE practice essay on 'Restriction of waste disposal to check environmental problems'
NEW - Hi , help me with the issue topics for the analytical writing section of the GRE . Please feel...
Writing FeedbackSsakshijain - Oct 25, 2015 / — -
|Quality Analyst and Metrology Supervisor - Scholarship essay for Chevening
2 - Hi Leonardo. Here are some corrections that I suggest: -I worked as an intern at Metrology Department...
Writing FeedbackLeonardoMelo31 - Oct 25, 2015 / thedeepazure - Oct 25, 2015
|Human intervention vs machines
3 - Let me work for your intro and conclusion, since these two points need slight improvements. :D Intro: It...
Writing Feedbacklacusclyne - Oct 24, 2015 / eddies - Oct 25, 2015
|Money is a measure of success- Agree or disagree?
4 - Thank you @eddies and @katevb. This feedback is specific and valuable. I need more coaching advice in presenting the...
Writing Feedbacksingr7 - Oct 24, 2015 / singr7 - Oct 25, 2015
|【TOEFL】Do students learn more effectively in team work?
Writing Feedbackzaza2932 - Oct 23, 2015 / zaza2932 - Oct 25, 2015
|Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media rich society
3 - Media is a two-sided sword. double-edged The other mistakes were caught by singr7. I like your approach and...
Writing Feedbackhayaalqasem - Oct 24, 2015 / Earthyrain - Oct 24, 2015
|The capacity to accept criticism from others, though harsh vituperation, has a great role in a team
Writing Feedbackhypersis - Oct 22, 2015 / hypersis - Oct 24, 2015
|"Should we always suspect people's ulterior motives?" SAT essay prompt
2 - your first essay is good and informative as you did use evidence to support your idea. But be aware...
Writing Feedbackkiemvinh - Oct 23, 2015 / lacusclyne - Oct 23, 2015
|ESSAY HELP FOR ENGLISH 101 - a curiosity project for every week
4 - Ali, the assignment is simply asking you for two things; - write something that you know you want...
Writing FeedbackAL95 - Oct 18, 2015 / justivy03 - Oct 23, 2015
|'smiling at my own face' - AN ESSAY ABOUT MYSELF...WHAT MAKES ME 'ME'
6 - That awkward moment when you read your old posts... Like, damn! T_____T So, to everyone reading it now,...
Writing FeedbackGuest - Jul 9, 2012 / Guest - Oct 22, 2015
|School paper about My Weekend
2 - Hey, so there are some couple of mistakes which I have corrected so check it out, My weekend starts...
Writing Feedbackk3ne - Oct 12, 2015 / Hargun003 - Oct 21, 2015
|When a country develops its technology, is it pointless to keep old ways of life alive?
2 - "Modern life of 21st century has seen constant integration ..."-> modern life of the 21st century has constantly bore...
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