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|Security vs freedom - living freely is much more important than security.
2 - Vns, while you offer a very good argument in support of your stand, you have failed to recognize the...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 4, 2014
|I think, no one can't live these days without a mobile phone and a computer.
Writing Feedbackrokajo5 - Oct 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 4, 2014
|I was only thirteen at the time but old enough to understand that Leukemia was cancerous; UC essay
4 - Wow! Can I just say that your introduction was so unexpected? I loved your essay. It really pulled me...
Writing FeedbackTeeddy - Oct 3, 2014 / eldubb - Oct 4, 2014
|What are the advantages and disadvantages of traveling by air?
Writing FeedbackKristy Nguyen - Oct 3, 2014 / Kristy Nguyen - Oct 4, 2014
|TOEFL: Pets not only can be our best and helpful friends but they also bring happiness for us.
Writing Feedbackmaryailt - Oct 4, 2014 / maryailt - Oct 4, 2014
|My Castle - it all started from one brick. This is the place I feel comfortable in.
Writing FeedbackKM97 - Oct 4, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 4, 2014
|Mahatma Gandhi, is the most important spiritual guide in contemporary world; important world leader
Writing Feedbackmaryailt - Oct 4, 2014 / maryailt - Oct 4, 2014
|'For many years the city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony'; GRE
Writing Feedbackpeyman_np - Oct 3, 2014 / peyman_np - Oct 4, 2014
|motives of people applying for work / forms of transport used for journey - IELTS Task 1
4 - Thanks you bros! I think that before writing two detailed paragraphs, I have mentioned an overall trend as an...
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Oct 3, 2014 / vincentfreeman - Oct 3, 2014
|Too much attention on small things!
4 - Vns, you can add more to this introduction so that you can strengthen your opinion on the matter....
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 3, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 3, 2014
|Response to an article "Struggle for perfection"
Writing FeedbackNoumanAhmad - Oct 3, 2014 / NoumanAhmad - Oct 3, 2014
|The first and foremost consideration is to be able obtain a stable job, satisfaction would be next..
2 - - William, you forgot to introduce the topic statement prior to entering your full discussion. Without the topic...
Writing Feedbackwilliam731 - Oct 3, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 3, 2014
|Zoos may not act as the best interest of animals since they are profit earning entities.
3 - Thank you for your correction. I agree with your other comments but I think "whose" is used to...
Writing Feedbackwilliam731 - Oct 2, 2014 / william731 - Oct 3, 2014
|The content of the Internet controlled by a single powerful global agency?
Writing Feedbackchucnt - Oct 2, 2014 / chucnt - Oct 3, 2014
|'health is a primary need' - alternative forms of medicine
8 - Do not commence your essay with those words such as i agree or disagree, save it for the conclusion...
Writing Feedbackwirawiri - Sep 23, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 2, 2014
|Modern Technology is creating a single world culture?
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Oct 1, 2014 / hamedmas - Oct 2, 2014
|IELTS writing task 2: Opinions about a four-year high school education proposal
5 - Oh, that really surprised me that my essay is high assessed like that. Thanks you very much guys!!! I...
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Oct 1, 2014 / vincentfreeman - Oct 2, 2014
|"How have you contributed to your school" - HELP, Writer's block
2 - Daltos, when you are writing an essay geared towards a scholarship application, it is best to familiarize yourself with...
Writing FeedbackDaltos - Oct 2, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 2, 2014
|what is the true maker of success? provide evidence and citation
2 - This is a pretty powerful sentence and make me realize what you think is the most important factor...
Writing FeedbackTbontb - Oct 1, 2014 / Adamtong - Oct 2, 2014
|I BELIEVE IN PICTURES - they have power of repairing unrepairable hearts
6 - Redy, please allow me to edit your essay whenever possible to keep it short but interesting ok? Thanks :-)...
Writing Feedbackredy - Oct 1, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 2, 2014
|IELTS: improving sports facilities can increase public health but other factors are also important
2 - Hi, fadlan 1. Avoid using "there" in your starting. It effects nothing to catch your examiner's attention....
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Oct 1, 2014 / SHanafi - Oct 1, 2014
|IELTS: It is unrealistic for a school to provide so called parenting training for its students
7 - Hamed, never take a quote from the person advising the original poster who had quoted the original work in...
Writing Feedbackmark xia - Sep 27, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 1, 2014
|Angel from Heaven (Memoir)
2 - This is a very well thought out and developed essay. However the part about your taking the first Math...
Writing Feedbackhihi2000 - Oct 1, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 1, 2014
|Internet is the most considerable invention due to its simplicity of gaining new knowledge.
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 1, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 1, 2014
|Thankfully my obstacle was a shared one and I had the support of my family to help me get through it
2 - Your introduction must be a little bit more vague! save some of your experiences and stories later for your...
Writing Feedbackrachgreene - Oct 1, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 1, 2014
|Separating Male and female ! Gender Segregation in Schools
3 - #By way of an illustration, I can envision a male who does not communicate any single female at school.Here...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Sep 30, 2014 / redy - Oct 1, 2014
|TOEFL: excellent knowledge is better than ability to adopt oneself.
4 - Well, the structure of your essay is quite interesting . However, try to paraphrase ,,excellent knowledge'';D and do not...
Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 20, 2014 / Vns9x - Oct 1, 2014
|IELTS Task 2 : Causes and solutions student less leisure
6 - your position is given indisputable and is aware inspiring i would like to able in terms of writing like...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Sep 24, 2014 / Timberlake - Oct 1, 2014
|Discuss your academic goals and how American University would help you achieve them??
3 - Your essay is good, but there are a few things I'd recommend you revise; "It is what drives my...
Writing Feedbackrestinpizza - Sep 30, 2014 / hpharsh5 - Oct 1, 2014
|Exposure to foreign language at primary school should be encouraged as much as possible - IELTS
11 - hail everyone! This essay, in fact, impressed me,because idea of your was given very clearly and sparkly in terms...
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Sep 27, 2014 / Timberlake - Oct 1, 2014
|Who am I? 'do my best and let my God do the rest' - homework task
Writing FeedbackIscha - Sep 30, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 1, 2014
|IELTS: The chief factor of someone to prosper is the goal of that person; talent isn't a must
Writing Feedbackhsamadii - Oct 1, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 1, 2014
|Educational Inequality Essay - UT Austin Essay E
4 - You sound like you are trying to lecture the admission officer rather than offering him or her an insight...
Writing Feedbacktexasbreed13 - Sep 23, 2014 / vangiespen - Oct 1, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Public health and related measurements.
6 - I think you should not put your opinion in body paragraphs it is better to write it in conclusion...
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Sep 29, 2014 / hsamadii - Oct 1, 2014
|IELTS: Tests and examinations still present major problems, which can produce unrealistic results.
Writing Feedbackcloverie - Sep 30, 2014 / vincentfreeman - Sep 30, 2014
|IELTS: Young people are not fit for key roles until they are well-trained and mature enough
Writing Feedbackmarisameng - Sep 29, 2014 / marisameng - Sep 30, 2014
|experience vs. taking advice
2 - First of all, you have to at least paraphrase the statement. Otherwise, it will either show the raters that...
Writing Feedbacksahar_hmd1363 - Sep 30, 2014 / Vns9x - Sep 30, 2014
|I believe the most important problems affecting our society today can be solved within our lifetime
4 - My grandmother always says to us change says to said In the first sentence, the punctuation is all...
Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Sep 30, 2014 / restinpizza - Sep 30, 2014
|Old Friends VS. New Friends
3 - you may wonder how they have maintained their friendship if it is the right thing to do? = if...
Writing FeedbackKasra1992 - Sep 30, 2014 / sahar_hmd1363 - Sep 30, 2014
|I strongly believe that primary school is the best time for children to learn a foreign language
Writing Feedbackhsamadii - Sep 29, 2014 / JessieCarpenter - Sep 30, 2014
|Honesty is always the most important consideration in any relationship - statement essay
Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Sep 26, 2014 / Adamtong - Sep 30, 2014
|IELTS In my opinion government help should be given to those who work on art that is less commercial
Writing FeedbackSAM2014 - Sep 29, 2014 / SAM2014 - Sep 30, 2014
|'Never has food failed to attract people's eyes' - I prefer cooking at home; TOEFL essay
3 - The last but not the leastLast but not least , preparing food is an excellent activity to enhance the...
Writing Feedbacksanxiawu00 - Sep 30, 2014 / masih65 - Sep 30, 2014
|New announcements from our president
4 - I think your introduction should be general for example talk about construction how it gonna be noisy and then...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Sep 28, 2014 / nosha - Sep 30, 2014
|People should satisfy with their destiny because we can not change - Toefl exam essay
Writing Feedbacknosha - Sep 29, 2014 / nosha - Sep 30, 2014
|the responsibility of government and new buildings' style
Writing Feedbacklastsky - Sep 29, 2014 / ritairianti - Sep 30, 2014
|IELTS: children should studying hard or playing sport? Both can improve their future
5 - Hi Friends, sam1, sa1na, thanks in advance for your attention, those are really help me . my weakness...
Writing Feedbackritairianti - Sep 28, 2014 / ritairianti - Sep 29, 2014
|Losing Faith in my Faith (College Essay)
3 - Wow, many thanks Kevin! This is my first attempt submitting my essay to a forum and I am pleased...
Writing Feedbackyounge223 - Sep 29, 2014 / younge223 - Sep 29, 2014
|IELTS: a notable number of children are working in different occasions in today's business life
4 - I do not find such a contrast in these paragraphs, the second paragraph support the paragraph before, so you...
Writing Feedbackahmadbk - Sep 28, 2014 / fikri - Sep 29, 2014
|GRE: People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
3 - Counter-arguments help an argumentative essay greatly. Provide a counter-argument and then state your opinion as to why this counter-argument...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 27, 2014 / Ominous1337 - Sep 29, 2014
|Overall, it's clear that the unemployment rate in the US dropped from 7% to around 5% (1993 - 1999)
3 - The line chart illustrates the proportion of workforce which indicates the idleness rates in America and Japan over...
Writing Feedbackbayratak - Sep 29, 2014 / tiaDS - Sep 29, 2014
|Grandmother, the inspiration of my life (her pictures, love, and sacrifice)
5 - 1. who loves me and sacrifice (sacrifices) for me and my father most (not needed- or: more than...
Writing Feedbackvietanhphan - Sep 15, 2014 / sa1na - Sep 29, 2014
|IELTs Task 1 - Map - An island before and after conctruction
NEW - The two maps below show an island before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information...
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|IELTS: What measures could be taken to solve increasing weight of some people?
Writing FeedbackTimberlake - Sep 28, 2014 / ritairianti - Sep 28, 2014
|Both my parents are 100% Indian, but you wouldn't know just by looking at me - MIT Essay (100 words)
Writing Feedback12nikki12 - Sep 28, 2014 / samarina - Sep 28, 2014
|Sick of Ego - Essay based on a favorite quote
2 - Grammar: In the first sentence, there should be a comma between the two very's. "the feeling of dese to...
Writing Feedbacksa1na - Sep 28, 2014 / LittleRed2016 - Sep 28, 2014
|IELTS: fathers and mothers are used to set role models to their children
3 - 1. i think your introductory very short, you should paraphrase the topic in your introductory. 2. you should create...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Sep 28, 2014 / ritairianti - Sep 28, 2014
|[IELTS 1] Time Spent in different media by teenagers and US Adults.
6 - hey guys, i'm totally appreciate every single feedback so much helpful for me. i will trying hard in the...
Writing Feedbackritairianti - Sep 26, 2014 / ritairianti - Sep 28, 2014
|Teacher can either affect positively or negatively so being strict and hard disciplined is necessary
6 - Hi! Firstly, you should provide us with full prompt(agree vs disagree .. IELTS, TOEFL ...), so that we...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Sep 27, 2014 / Abdurasul - Sep 28, 2014
|'I argue that children's behavior does not rely on by television' - IELTS WRITING TASK 2
3 - In introduction paragraph, I suggest you to write 2 sentence. - 1 sentence to paraphrase the issues/ the...
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