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|In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money..
3 - This sounds a bit stereotype beginning. You should make it more interesting for the reader :) It is...
Writing FeedbackEric0511 - Sep 1, 2014 / dumi - Sep 2, 2014
|IELTS: Children always follow their parents rules and techniques to save money for future planning
4 - I'd like to add my voice to this discussion by offering some advice as well :-) I believe that...
Writing Feedbackblue eyes - Aug 31, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 2, 2014
|Internet is just a tool based on different inventions such as the computer, electricity and language
5 - You begin your essay with expressing your opinion on the issue. It is better if you first introduced...
Writing Feedbackcamilourac - Sep 1, 2014 / dumi - Sep 2, 2014
|Increasing Crime And Solutions For Governments - IELTS task 2
3 - For one,First,unemployment is one of the reasons that can drive people to commit a range of both violent and...
Writing Feedbackjoe9 - Sep 1, 2014 / dumi - Sep 1, 2014
|IELTS: Strict regulations can effectively reduce the problem of overfishing by large corporations
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Sep 1, 2014 / Pahan - Sep 1, 2014
|Ignoring what others' think and others' opinions is clearly the more successful path in life
9 - Ok. I already left feedback earlier about the shortcomings of your essay. I will not repeat it in great...
Writing FeedbackAnouar - Aug 31, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 1, 2014
|IELTS: New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming to the lives of consumers.
2 - Security and quality are described as the large problems when using new latest (redundant) gadgets. Online crimesshoppers take...
Writing Feedbacknguoi_co_doc - Sep 1, 2014 / niesaysi - Sep 1, 2014
|How important is to seek the opinions of others when making significant personal decisions ?
Writing FeedbackAnouar - Aug 30, 2014 / Anouar - Sep 1, 2014
|IELTS Task 2: What can be done to maintain biodiversity ?
6 - Anyway, it seems like you've covered most of the part that I suggested. So, good job! Next time...
Writing Feedbacknguoi_co_doc - Aug 31, 2014 / Xiaokai Jin - Aug 31, 2014
|IGCSE ; Comparitive Essay ( Big Supermarket Vs Local Shops)
4 - This version is most certainly much improved over the first one. It now reflects all sides of the argument...
Writing FeedbackLam97 - Aug 31, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 31, 2014
|IELTS - 'Teachers are the second parents in the school' - RESPONSIBILITY FOR TEACHING
5 - Generally, your essay does not use range of structures. Most of the sentences are mostly S+V+O, you should use...
Writing Feedbackbarbie_M - Aug 28, 2014 / nguoi_co_doc - Aug 31, 2014
|IELTS - the best factor to measure the status of a country is its standard of education.
5 - The essay asks what other factors should be considered when measuring a country's success. You mentioned the education as...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Aug 30, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 31, 2014
|Ielts 2- Rise in crimes committed by young people in cities
3 - => i think you could replace the word "rise" with increase or growth so that you'll avoid copying...
Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Aug 30, 2014 / Pyon9x - Aug 30, 2014
|GRE - Impossible to make a significant contribution without strongly influenced by past achievements
3 - Hi vangiespen, Thank you so much for all corrections! I am writing this essay again based on your...
Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Aug 30, 2014 / dunguyen - Aug 30, 2014
|What is one important "easy answer" that we should resist? what dangerous misconceptions hold?
6 - it's an SAT essay thanks for correcting my mistakes and for analyzing my faults Actually I am an unternational...
Writing FeedbackAnouar - Aug 23, 2014 / Anouar - Aug 30, 2014
|IELTS : rural to major city : challenges and strategies?
7 - As for language argument I think that it is not strong enough you must analyze it more deeply...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Aug 28, 2014 / Anouar - Aug 30, 2014
|[IELTS Task 1] the number of population in three different countries - biggest in Washington
3 - The introduction is too bulky. Why don't you start writing this: The line graph shows a large portion...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Aug 28, 2014 / eddies - Aug 30, 2014
|[IELTS Task 1] The proportion of energy from coal
4 - A closer look at the data reveals that the percentage of coal energy which is(This brings a problem, in...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Aug 28, 2014 / eddies - Aug 30, 2014
|TOEFL A/D: Companies should use money to reward their employees rather than use public recognition
2 - Let's start off with a few grammar corrections: - ... number of people havebegun .. whether a...
Writing Feedbackhappyhappy120 - Aug 30, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 30, 2014
|Nowadays, there is change in the way people interact because of technology
Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Aug 29, 2014 / swathi_12345 - Aug 30, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Modern Stress - relating factors and potential measures
3 - Your comment is very detailed, it is really useful for me as I can realize my numerous errors....
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Aug 29, 2014 / vincentfreeman - Aug 29, 2014
|IELTS: Gentle manners vs Material possessions.
7 - "In conclusion, I believe that the value of kindness outweighs any material possession and keeps being the most important...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Aug 19, 2014 / yazoo - Aug 29, 2014
|The basic part a skeleton of every relationship is trust - reliability as a most important trait
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 28, 2014 / hamedmas - Aug 29, 2014
|IELTS: Issue regarding the real efficiency of examinations using pen and paper
3 - Generally, your vocabulary range is pretty good but your cohesion and coherrent is weak. You need to strengthen your...
Writing Feedbacknguoi_co_doc - Aug 29, 2014 / vincentfreeman - Aug 29, 2014
|IELTS: the figure reflect equally in subjects related to service community; foreign and UK students
Writing Feedbacknguoi_co_doc - Aug 7, 2014 / nguoi_co_doc - Aug 29, 2014
|[IELTS Task 2] Technologies have suggested everyone in the world.
4 - Hi TiaDS, You misunderstood me. In this particular essay, you are being required to use your personal opinion...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Aug 28, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 28, 2014
|Doing activities in a short time or live life in slow pace?
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 27, 2014 / Pyon9x - Aug 28, 2014
|Work and travel for a year? - do not forget to read enough books and improve your knowledge
9 - Vangiespan, good advises, try to put them into practice. P.s. I'm new here, but this is an awesome...
Writing FeedbackGaziF - Aug 27, 2014 / GaziF - Aug 28, 2014
|IELTS : intelligent machines replacing human beings : advantages and disadvantages
4 - Pyon9x, you can talk about Henry Ford and how he decided that creating a factory line would make cars...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Aug 27, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 27, 2014
|No one understands you more than yourself, so do not waste too much time trying to be someone else
6 - Well, the TOEFL is more for American studies while the IETLS is for Canadian/British/Australian studies. So it really depends...
Writing Feedbackjackthomas - Aug 27, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 27, 2014
|'we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level' - GRE essay
4 - Cancellation is singular form. Since you are talking about more than one advertisement being cancelled, it goes into plural...
Writing FeedbackMysoon - Aug 26, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 26, 2014
|IELTS : The examination for alternative energy sources : beneficial or harmful?
6 - Thank Dumi for correcting, your advices are always helpful to me :) can you please tell me what...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - Aug 25, 2014 / Pyon9x - Aug 26, 2014
|Arts and public services are both important to the community and should be invested properly - IELTS
9 - I have just found it on Appstore and installing it, It seems good as it has 4.5/5 star. Thanks...
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Aug 25, 2014 / vincentfreeman - Aug 26, 2014
|GRE essay: Many important discoveries or creations are accidental
Writing Feedbackasdsa111 - Aug 14, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|Internet will help student only if he has a desire to study
Writing Feedbackrassul - Aug 3, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|[TOEFL] Every experience always gives us something to learn and keep for life
2 - I think you need to fine tune your approach on the introduction. You should have introduced the issue to...
Writing Feedbacksky2586 - Aug 2, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|Ielts writing task1 - percentages of population and wealth in world
5 - Well, if this is for IELTS TASK1, you should have uploaded your graphs to enable us providing you with...
Writing Feedbackhandsome7boy - Aug 9, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|The bar chart shows the amount of sales in silver goods in 000's of units for two companies nextyear
4 - Yes, you need to upload the image. Use the "Attach file(s)" feature in the Message Block to upload...
Writing FeedbackGulnar604 - Jul 30, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|Computer skills reassure the future work-life - is it good to use computers from primary school age?
3 - In modern world, the knowledge and skills in computer science is an indispensable requirement. I think...
Writing Feedbackparand - Aug 6, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|IELTS writing part 1. Popularuty of on-line purchases in different countries.
Writing FeedbackLenaKuzn - Aug 26, 2014 / LenaKuzn - Aug 26, 2014
|toefl: multiple short breaks are good for children to do well in their school life
Writing Feedbacksayes - Aug 6, 2014 / dumi - Aug 26, 2014
|'I'm really keen on cook since I was a little girl' - Describe a hobby
3 - I'm really keen on cooking since I was a little girl. I usually learn how to cook by searching...
Writing FeedbackJanice yang - Aug 25, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 25, 2014
|Internet and TV have a greater influence over people's lives than politicians. Do u agree?
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Aug 25, 2014 / ruffruff999 - Aug 25, 2014
|Ielts: Modern technology has impacted the traditional cultures in both negative and positive ways.
5 - to me, your essay is overally good, your opinion is well developed with many interesting examples, just a few...
Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Aug 25, 2014 / Pyon9x - Aug 25, 2014
|TOEFL: Some students live in their hometowns, but others in different cities - which do you like?
Writing Feedbackkathyt - Aug 17, 2014 / kathyt - Aug 25, 2014
|'there will be more equipment and we will be dependent on them' - conveniences vs development
2 - You did an excellent job on this essay. You created valid points by using real life examples and made...
Writing Feedbackpinaksalvekar - Aug 25, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 25, 2014
|Contemporary life prevent people from developing into strong and independent individual - Gre Issue
Writing FeedbackNinad09 - Aug 22, 2014 / pinaksalvekar - Aug 25, 2014
|Toefl: It should be mandatory for every company to substitute their old equipment with new ones.
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 21, 2014 / hamedmas - Aug 25, 2014
|Toefl: people judge others by external appearance but is better also to consider the inner qualities
3 - Thank you Dear dumi.You helped me before a lot. I appreciate your concern. Actually I had a mistake...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 22, 2014 / hamedmas - Aug 25, 2014
|TOEFL: 'joining sport team' - the best way for students to make new friends?
3 - Thanks a lot!...
Writing FeedbackPenny Chou - Aug 24, 2014 / Penny Chou - Aug 24, 2014
|"Closing My Eyes" - driving on the expressway at night - PLACE YOU FEEL CONTENT...
4 - I definitely think you should start over. I suggest that you outline the reasons you feel content in your...
Writing FeedbackIyeshaferguson - Aug 24, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 24, 2014
|TOEFL - people are way more disparate at the exterior contrary to what they are inside
4 - I think you need to pay more attention to the approach. Your essay does not contain a good introduction...
Writing Feedbackshreyansh13 - Jul 28, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|Why study? Knowledge, experience and career are essential for today's young people to concentrate on
5 - It is clearobvious that knowledge is an important key which leads to success. Most people believe that university and...
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Aug 24, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|TOEFL: new factory will enhance the quality of life and our town's image promotion
4 - Some people who disagree with the idea of building of the factory argued argue (keep it in present tense...
Writing FeedbackMckenzie - Aug 10, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 24, 2014
|People nowadays don't spend too much time on their personal enjoyment because they can't - TPO
Writing Feedbacksircampbell - Aug 24, 2014 / Pahan - Aug 24, 2014
|GRE - Issue task - People should undertake risky action only after they consider its consequences.
5 - Thank you D! It really helps that you clearly mention what the problem is, and I also think the...
Writing FeedbackLauren5102 - Aug 20, 2014 / Lauren5102 - Aug 24, 2014
|Writing is one of the things I used to hate the most - My first Reflective essay
2 - You were really able to express yourself well in this essay even though you are not a native English...
Writing Feedbackaizuddin - Aug 24, 2014 / vangiespen - Aug 24, 2014
|NUCLEAR TECHNOLOGY: The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace.
2 - Nuclear technology is a much debatedheatedissuetopic . Some people think that there are several benefits to use nuclear power...
Writing FeedbackDuong68 - Aug 13, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|IELTS: 'bring happiness to my nearest and dearest' - which salary would be better?
4 - I too agree with Pahan. You display good writing skills, good grammar, vocabulary knowledge, sentence structures etc. What you...
Writing Feedbackdiidoobiib - Aug 23, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
|TOEFL -advices from senior people are more valuable than from people at our age
5 - I feel you have uploaded a wrong topic for this essay .... I cannot find any relevance between...
Writing Feedbackjamie3160003 - Jul 1, 2014 / dumi - Aug 24, 2014
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