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|The convenience and security enjoy more by the people who live in apartments
Writing Feedbackdil77 - May 21, 2014 / odon - May 21, 2014
|IELTS Task1; percentage of total US population aged 65 and over between 1900 and 2000
3 - This adds no value. You'd better present this Writing task 1with more formal tone. Avoid personal opinions...
Writing Feedbackrushil1995 - May 19, 2013 / eddies - May 21, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Satisfactory level on fitness membership
2 - ... Your intro needs better clarity; The table givesprovides information about the number of satisfactory levels ofon...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 21, 2014 / dumi - May 21, 2014
|IELTS: Intended instruction hours in public institution
3 - IELTS Task 1 : Intended instruction hours in public institution (re-write - ITALY) The chart compares the number...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 19, 2014 / SHanafi - May 21, 2014
|IELTS TASK 1 : Factors influence job performance
5 - The bar chart compares the affecting factors on job performance in number of the 2 aged groups. Overall,...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 15, 2014 / SHanafi - May 21, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Number of childeren ever born from mother aged 40-45
6 - The table shows the percentage of baby born from Mother aged 40-44 in Australia during particular periods from 1981...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Apr 25, 2014 / SHanafi - May 21, 2014
|Parents are the best teachers - they teach us at any time, with no any fee
2 - Firstly, one of the reasons parents are best teachers is because they are full time teachers... ....no...
Writing Feedbackxomarleal - May 20, 2014 / okdeerpass - May 20, 2014
|Have humans harmed the earth or Made it a better place?
2 - In this solar system earth is the only planet that supports life form. Earth is a 2.3 million...
Writing FeedbackDragon9090 - May 20, 2014 / xomarleal - May 20, 2014
|Toefl: 'helpful bursaries' - Teenagers have jobs while they are still students.
4 - Can you add more details or words to explain why students have to get highest grades for future...
Writing FeedbackAngelaB - May 19, 2014 / okdeerpass - May 20, 2014
|Judgement and verification. Understand concepts and ideas is MORE IMPORTANT than learning facts?
Writing FeedbackJangGemini - May 3, 2014 / okdeerpass - May 20, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: factor of choosing a career.
9 - This sentence is pretty long. When you write longer sentences, the reader has to keep memorizing the details...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 12, 2014 / Pahan - May 20, 2014
|GRE: fields of study in which students are unlikely to succeed should be banned
5 - Based on this knowledge, they can better choose their field of education for themselves rather than an outsider choosing...
Writing FeedbackKMeghji - May 13, 2014 / Pahan - May 20, 2014
|GRE Essay: major cities study to learn characteristics of a society
5 - That is something I did not think about while writing the paragraph. I'll think of something else to include...
Writing FeedbackKMeghji - May 13, 2014 / KMeghji - May 20, 2014
|GRE Issue Essay: Kindly check the response and advice accordingly.
6 - Dumi and Pahan: Thank you for the appreciation and correctiions. Pahan, I will keep it in my mind....
Writing FeedbackKMeghji - May 6, 2014 / KMeghji - May 20, 2014
|TOEFL writing; I'm against providing more money to professors
5 - Besides, the ultimate purpose is to change, to motivate students to be better. To improve education, spending more moneyallocating...
Writing FeedbackTiffany Lin - May 18, 2014 / dumi - May 20, 2014
|TOEFL writing: Handmade objects are more beneficial than machine made ones
Writing Feedbackksr10 - May 19, 2014 / dumi - May 20, 2014
|IELTS - International tourism leads to both - tension and understanding
Writing Feedbackyirunli - May 19, 2014 / thiagocardoso - May 19, 2014
|Should children start learning foreign language as soon as they start school
Writing FeedbackSalMon - May 19, 2014 / SalMon - May 19, 2014
|Public health improvement essay - number of facilities
3 - First of all, enhancing the number of sporting facilities will certain have positive effects on people's health. For example,...
Writing Feedbacksamir_2905 - May 4, 2014 / Pahan - May 19, 2014
|Government impose heavy tax on air traffic to reduce noise pollution
4 - One of the most conspicuous trends in the 21st century is the blooming of the aviation industry. It is...
Writing FeedbackAlexenderGG - May 6, 2014 / dumi - May 19, 2014
|"water car" - If I could invent something new
Writing Feedbackxomarleal - May 18, 2014 / dumi - May 19, 2014
|GRE Argument Essay: 'A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian .....'
5 - Actually, this is grammatically accepted. "Survey" is a noun that modifies methodologies. Thus, 'survey' is a modifier. ...
Writing FeedbackShourya - May 14, 2014 / niesaysi - May 19, 2014
|IELTS: How to learn children more efficiently. Should they watch more tv?
2 - To begin with, classic teaching methods hashave been scientifically proven and utilized as the best mode ofto educate a...
Writing FeedbackAndy_Vo - May 18, 2014 / dumi - May 19, 2014
|IELTS: improve health by increasing sport facilities; 'regimen of nutrition'
Writing FeedbackDinhlan - May 16, 2014 / msarkar - May 18, 2014
|Not like my expected club; 'Art club is the best club I've joined'
4 - I've always wanted to take up an artistic hobby, and I finally got the chance! There was new club...
Writing Feedbackyuarar - May 16, 2014 / Tiffany Lin - May 18, 2014
|What is the best age to start schooling?
Writing Feedbackreza10977 - May 18, 2014 / reza10977 - May 18, 2014
|TOEFL: working three or five days a week? "killing two birds with one stone"
Writing FeedbackTiffany Lin - May 18, 2014 / Tiffany Lin - May 18, 2014
|[TOEFL WRITING] Technology create more problem than it solves?
Writing Feedbackvincethahaha - May 14, 2014 / Tiffany Lin - May 18, 2014
|"The Decline of Manners" by Judy Martin
3 - In "The Decline of Manners," by Judy Martin, the author states that people of today are rudermuch more rude...
Writing FeedbackHaogicel - May 16, 2014 / dumi - May 18, 2014
|Is Censorship Always a Bad Thing?
5 - One of the primary reasons for censorship is to protect children from any material that is immoral and harmful...
Writing FeedbackRtzn1234 - May 17, 2014 / dumi - May 17, 2014
|CBEST- Imagine yourself as a child... (personal experience essay)
4 - Feeling excited, I would follow her to explore those beautiful walking paths. We used to pretend...
Writing Feedbackokdeerpass - May 16, 2014 / Pahan - May 17, 2014
|ATTRACTIVE PLACES IN TARAKAN. IELTS TASK 2
6 - Secondly is Derawan Island. This place is a small island and found near by tarakanTarakan and it takes only...
Writing Feedbackadinur - May 3, 2014 / Pahan - May 17, 2014
|Advantages and disavantages of gap year
7 - Here, you are using the same second person voice (you) which refers to your examiner (as dumi has...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - May 15, 2014 / Pahan - May 17, 2014
|IELTS - Reading books or Watching TV? 'Equal credits should be given'
7 - Your essay is so interesting to read since your pov is clean and very persuasive . because the faults...
Writing Feedbackzeable - May 16, 2014 / Pyon9x - May 17, 2014
|TOEFL: Teaching is harder than it was in the past.
Writing FeedbackNancy is here - May 11, 2014 / dumi - May 17, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: UK telephone calls - number of mins
3 - Amount is used with uncountable nouns. In this case, you should use "number" instead. dramatically ...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - May 17, 2014 / MisterWandering - May 17, 2014
|IELTS: traditional skills and ways of life die out because of technology
5 - Hi, I am also working on Ielts preparation. Very happy to read your eaasy and share my knowledge with...
Writing Feedbackmohamedtheking - May 15, 2014 / zeable - May 17, 2014
|Non-academic subject should stay in school syllabus along with academic subjects
3 - Primarily, physical education should be mandatory to be included in school syllabus because it brings many benefits to the...
Writing Feedbackammus1 - May 16, 2014 / niesaysi - May 17, 2014
|Classical Conditioning Narrative - Psychology 101 Course
2 - Classical Conditioning isas defined by Gerrig (2012) asis "a type of learning in which a conditioned response comes to...
Writing Feedbackbrandymhunter - May 15, 2014 / niesaysi - May 17, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Are changes negative or positive???
6 - Hi, this eassy is well written, also your grammar is very good. Only one sentence concern me if I...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 14, 2014 / zeable - May 16, 2014
|TOEFL: Your job brings you more happiness that your social life does
5 - In your body paras, you should give reasons to justify your opinion on the issue and then support them...
Writing Feedbackma_shelley - May 16, 2014 / Pahan - May 16, 2014
|Ielts task 2: Recent medical problems and sedentary lifestyle.
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 11, 2014 / candy07 - May 16, 2014
|IELTS: 'right proportion of raw materials'; Cement and Concrete production
Writing Feedbackandial - May 12, 2014 / candy07 - May 16, 2014
|Toefl: you have received a gift of money - jewelleries are always a asset for us
4 - Everyone loves to have gifts. weWe had gotten many gifts in our life, some may be money while some...
Writing Feedbackbrisky - May 15, 2014 / dumi - May 16, 2014
|Britain is the country with the highest amount spent on the six consumer goods.
4 - Yes, this is very important for us to provide you with meaningful feedbacks. Use the "Attach file (s)"...
Writing Feedbackmohamedtheking - May 15, 2014 / dumi - May 16, 2014
|IELTS: animal experiments & animal rights
7 - .... LOL ... looks like Pahan got so excited over your comment :D .... No wonder because he keeps...
Writing FeedbackStarSea - May 13, 2014 / dumi - May 16, 2014
|Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational
6 - Returning to previous research In the findings of the same research I cited in the previous paragraph,...
Writing Feedbackdil77 - May 15, 2014 / dumi - May 16, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: The best period to start learning languages?
2 - you're far better writer comparing to me :D your passage's structure is well-organized and the words used are flexible,...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 15, 2014 / Pyon9x - May 15, 2014
|[Toefl] It is not necessary for university students to attend classes ......
Writing FeedbackCute Scott - May 15, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|Should all young adults require to perform national services?
3 - Also, what is the purpose of writing this essay? Is this a practice essay for TOEFL or IELTS? If...
Writing Feedbackhere2study - May 12, 2014 / Pahan - May 15, 2014
|Misbehaviour of students at school
4 - Nevertheless, issues relating to bad behavior of students can be addressed to a great extent. First,...
Writing Feedbackammus1 - May 12, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|IELTS: Nature or nurture is more influential in children education?
6 - Education and upbringing are quintessentialquite essentialelements forfor one's development. For instance, children who are exposed to violence tend...
Writing Feedbackmeomeo3892 - May 3, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|Being a celebrity has plenty of benefits than downsides
6 - ... ok, let's do this para according to the approach I suggested; First, the celebrities are generally very...
Writing Feedbackdil77 - May 11, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TAST 2：REPEATED OFFENSE
2 - The best solution tofor this problem is to make prisons fulfill the function of rehabilitation.change the prison environment to...
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - May 14, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|Student's Executive Summary (Finance and Business Marketing)
2 - It takes into consideration that CSL is not a part of the labour intensive industry and cannot use direct...
Writing FeedbackBachChaconne2 - May 14, 2014 / dumi - May 15, 2014
|Brave new world and Children of men; Dystopia Comparison Essay
Writing Feedbackvincentvincent - May 12, 2014 / dil77 - May 15, 2014
|Problems overrellance on cars can cause/suggest at least one possible solution.
Writing FeedbackBob brother - May 14, 2014 / Bob brother - May 14, 2014
|Watching movies vs. reading the original books
4 - Second of allSecondly , are nearlythe movie can take about maximumtwo hours and the film director cannot possibly accommodate...
Writing Feedbackr1996mm - Apr 27, 2014 / Pahan - May 14, 2014
|IELTS: Children from poorer families are more successful in the future life.
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 11, 2014 / Abdurasul - May 14, 2014
|Both Working parents and problems faced and how does it effect family
Writing Feedbacksreddy - May 13, 2014 / sreddy - May 14, 2014
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