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|TOEFL: Making relationship with pet means readiness to bear huge responsibility
3 - Louisa, I am very grateful for your support! Frankly, it takes me more time to write an essay than...
Writing FeedbackMarianaS - Sep 11, 2014 / MarianaS - Sep 12, 2014
|Informations from books or from real life?; unexpected things happening everyday
2 - Let's not worry about your grammar problems for now. Let's get the message of the essay cleaned up first....
Writing Feedbackkordestanchi - Mar 1, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 12, 2014
|Friendship does not have to be limited to people living and working around you anymore - CLEP Essays
2 - Rucha, let me offer you some words of advice in order to help polish your essay. You have written...
Writing FeedbackRucha - Nov 14, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 12, 2014
|Toefl- Government should spend more money on improving roads or public transport?
Writing FeedbackSyed Abrar - Mar 4, 2014 / Lian Li - Sep 11, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: the positive and negative effects of the increase in the elders
2 - Crystal, the prompt begs you to discuss the topic in the manner of a compare and contrast essay. That...
Writing Feedbackcrystal941 - Apr 21, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|Young people and their participation in helping their communities
3 - I agree with xatutik. While you presented a well thought out essay. There was a failure on your part...
Writing Feedbackmtkee - May 14, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|IELTS: "Countryside resort"; Where would you like to spend you unforgettable holidays next summer?
5 - By way of personal explanation,summer holiday is one of the best possible ways to get away from the...
Writing FeedbackLuke Cameron Jr - Sep 11, 2014 / fikri - Sep 11, 2014
|GRE: It is very responsible task to create school nationwide curriculum
2 - Xatutik, while you present an immediate and effective body paragraph to the prompt, you still need to establish your...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|Is homeschooling a good alternative to public education?
2 - Faith, I would advise you to please create an introductory statement that gives an overview of the topic being...
Writing FeedbackFaith318 - Mar 14, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|Telling truth has been a debatable issue among people from the past till now
Writing Feedback600score - Nov 26, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|TOEFL-ETS Some people believe that automobiles are useful and necessary.
2 - You present an interesting position on the topic provided. However, there is a lot more you can do to...
Writing FeedbackTareqkh - Jun 16, 2013 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|GRE: Scandals are really a way of information spreading, yet it often spread unwarranted information
2 - I have a few suggestions and revisions that I believe you can use to further improve the content of...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 11, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|New seafood restaurant: profit or no profit
5 - ok thank you...
Writing Feedbacksonumehta - Sep 11, 2014 / sonumehta - Sep 11, 2014
|Toefl - Replacing old buildings is important for any city but it should not affect historic houses
9 - Having taken the TOEFL in the past, I can understand your concerns. The key to passing the TOEFL lies...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|TOEFL: In modern world, everyone should learn to be polite to others under any circumstance
4 - Hi, Ryan! Thank you for the constructive comments. I myself feel that my sentence is choppy too. But I...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Sep 5, 2014 / Xiaokai Jin - Sep 11, 2014
|The author's conclusion about woven baskets is based on the assumptions that are not very strong
Writing Feedbacksonumehta - Sep 10, 2014 / sonumehta - Sep 11, 2014
|Opportunities to learn more about various aspects of life encourage people to watch movies
Writing FeedbackMarianaS - Sep 4, 2014 / MarianaS - Sep 11, 2014
|Fashion is becoming more and more important in choosing cloths
4 - Frankly, I am not familiar with IELTS requirements, but it seems to me that your essay is too short....
Writing Feedbacknazanin5879 - Sep 10, 2014 / MarianaS - Sep 11, 2014
|Ielts task II : Vegetarianism vs meat-containing diets.
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Sep 4, 2014 / eddies - Sep 11, 2014
|Do you think it is necessary to take an entrance exam to enter a college or university?
4 - I tried to revise your opinion paragraph. Please look it over. I think I was able to keep the...
Writing FeedbackLourdes - Sep 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 11, 2014
|[GRE ISSUE] Government regulation in the economy.
Writing Feedbackalbertlee1224 - Sep 10, 2014 / albertlee1224 - Sep 10, 2014
|IELTS: we can not forcedly put the same numbers of males and females into every subject
Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Sep 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 10, 2014
|[GRE] ARGUE, changing radio station - memorandum from the manager of WWAC
Writing Feedbackalbertlee1224 - Sep 4, 2014 / albertlee1224 - Sep 10, 2014
|IELTS: 'appropriate infrastructure to spur growth and prevent the damage caused to environment'
4 - it will seem more interesting if you separate it into two sentences, this is too long for only...
Writing Feedbackmvettri - Sep 5, 2014 / fikri - Sep 10, 2014
|IELTS : 'We should have choice to play' - dangerous sports should be banned? I disagree.
6 - Singular and plural forms are commonly misused in this essay, for example: some other minor comments:...
Writing FeedbackerikaJP - Sep 7, 2014 / zjxhz - Sep 10, 2014
|'Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions' - GRE Argument Essay
2 - You wrote a very good argument that could refute the claims of the author. However, your arguments also lacked...
Writing Feedbackisyemky - Sep 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 10, 2014
|TOEFL: "what you should believe finally is not others, not any book, but only you" knowledge gained
Writing Feedbackyocoambush - Sep 10, 2014 / yocoambush - Sep 10, 2014
|People care more about public recognition than about money
Writing Feedbackkarenchen - Sep 9, 2014 / dumi - Sep 10, 2014
|The colours and sounds of Rain - imaginative writing
2 - Rain is not unusual weather. The prompt is asking you to write about an extreme weather experience. Most likely...
Writing FeedbackAlleo - Sep 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 9, 2014
|A lot of students from rural areas and poor families cannot go to school due to lack of money
3 - It's quite a long sentence which does't give a clear and attractive idea. My suggestion is: In some...
Writing Feedbackgarung1187 - Aug 14, 2014 / ningo - Sep 9, 2014
|We are bombarded with news every day, ranging from the frivolous to the catastrophic - serious issue
3 - Thank you! :-) I understood that I have to show direct answers to the prompt, and I am thinking...
Writing Feedbackuic - Sep 9, 2014 / uic - Sep 9, 2014
|Eating at home is far better than to dine in a restaurants - IELTS writing task 2
Writing Feedbackgela07 - Sep 9, 2014 / gela07 - Sep 9, 2014
|TOEFL - There are many parents that invest more and more money to prosper their children
2 - You presented a good but somewhat unclear discussion about the topic so I tried to clean it up for...
Writing Feedbackmasih65 - Sep 9, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 9, 2014
|variety is the spice of life - making life worthwhile
4 - The topic is quite rich that's why, it needs more analyze.So I think you need to re-write your arguments...
Writing Feedbacksadia22 - Aug 20, 2014 / Anouar - Sep 8, 2014
|GRE It is hard task to find the best way of exploring and understanding characteristics of a society
4 - Thank you for your kind comments. As for your inquiry about the language you used in the essay, I...
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 8, 2014
|Ielts: gender equality - behavior of people become different from past to present
Writing Feedbackgela07 - Sep 8, 2014 / gela07 - Sep 8, 2014
|Experiences make people prepared for the future problems - valuable lessons
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 2, 2014 / gela07 - Sep 8, 2014
|Issue Essay Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields
Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 5, 2014 / gela07 - Sep 8, 2014
|Toefl: work for themselves vs work for employer
5 - A hundred people will have a hundred ways of answering any essay. Each of them believing that their...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 8, 2014
|Smokers jeopardize also the people nearby them - it's clear that banning of smoking will be prudence
5 - Thank you so much for sharing your opinions with me guys! I will try to rectify some flaws in...
Writing FeedbackJustinong - Sep 7, 2014 / Justinong - Sep 7, 2014
|Going to other countries to work or study is a optimistic indicator about globalization.
2 - I would like to suggest that you mention globalization at the start of the essay as one of the...
Writing Feedbackthuylinh08 - Sep 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 7, 2014
|IELTS: Gender distribution of teachers in different educational institutions
6 - Please allow me to give a try for the introduction and overview: The bar chart illustrates the proportion...
Writing Feedbacktrantrunghieu - Aug 10, 2014 / eddies - Sep 7, 2014
|GRE Issue: Governments should focus to solve today problems rather future ones
5 - Obviously, human is still working to combat the increasingly forecast number of other lethal diseases like cancers. -...
Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Sep 6, 2014 / patriot1776 - Sep 6, 2014
|"My Father" - Teachers day
Writing Feedbackksingh - Sep 5, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 6, 2014
|IELTS: "the best teacher in children's live is their parents"; how to be a good member of society
2 - ...school is best spot to learn everything either social life or other about life's fields. ..school only the place...
Writing Feedbackfadlanmuzakki - Sep 6, 2014 / Anouar - Sep 6, 2014
|[TOEFL] Children are rather free from most of regulations and obligations in this society
5 - Thanks guys. Btw can someone change my title of post? I never wrote 'Children are rather free from...
Writing Feedbackchilly1363 - Sep 5, 2014 / chilly1363 - Sep 5, 2014
|[IELTS Task 2] Pollution and damage of environment are resulted from a country developing.
6 - People's activities change the atmosphere and environmental condition. Many people (1) regard that in a non-globalized country, (2) a...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Sep 4, 2014 / eddies - Sep 5, 2014
|Which is a more powerful force of social change: Power of patience?
3 - Hi, well that's just it. Religion is a very explosive thing to discuss as every religion has a specific...
Writing FeedbackAnouar - Sep 5, 2014 / vangiespen - Sep 5, 2014
|Liberty or Rules- Which is better?
3 - @BachChaconne2 Yes u were quite helpful.. This is the first discussive essay i have written so i was already...
Writing FeedbackAva_21 - Sep 4, 2014 / Ava_21 - Sep 5, 2014
|Ielts - Colleges are definitely the doors opening to new areas of knowledge
NEW - Please give me your feedbacks. Thanks so much! Topic: People attend college or university for many different reasons. Why...
Writing Feedbackningo - Sep 4, 2014 / — -
|[IELTS Task 1] The line chart shows popularity of fast food among Australian young people
2 - The line chart below illustrates the kinds of fast food that Australian teenagers consume every year. ...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Sep 4, 2014 / BachChaconne2 - Sep 4, 2014
|IELTS: Should we ban combat sports which depend on violence for their entertainment
4 - 322 words is too long. A shorter introduction would leave more time for the body. people have...
Writing Feedbacknguoi_co_doc - Sep 4, 2014 / phuoc - Sep 4, 2014
|All kinds of medical health expenditures should be borne by the government; do you agree or not .
Writing FeedbackAshikk - Sep 2, 2014 / Ashikk - Sep 4, 2014
|IELTS: Media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children.
Writing Feedbacknguoi_co_doc - Sep 2, 2014 / Xiaokai Jin - Sep 4, 2014
|Retail cashier job - my very first job experience
3 - Yes, this is a very important thing.... you should tell us why and for what purpose you wrote...
Writing Feedbackmrszlexilandero - Aug 27, 2014 / dumi - Sep 4, 2014
|Writing Task 1 - Ticket buying Chart Comparison
4 - First, this task is aimed at assessing your report writing skills and therefore you should present details in...
Writing FeedbackRomeD - Sep 3, 2014 / dumi - Sep 3, 2014
|Ielts - Advertisements have become part of our life and it is impossible to ban them
Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Sep 3, 2014 / dumi - Sep 3, 2014
|Awareness among people about a healthier lifestyle leads to the need to look for a specific food
2 - I like that you use transitional words such as "in addition", "in conclusion" to emphasize the structure of your...
Writing Feedbackpriskeith - Sep 3, 2014 / MarianaS - Sep 3, 2014
|IELTS: What can be done to discourage people from using their cars?
3 - Essay is clear and coherent. There are few grammatical errors which you might need to work on. Some of...
Writing Feedbacknguoi_co_doc - Sep 3, 2014 / swathi_12345 - Sep 3, 2014
|Ielts - Museums and art galleries be free of charge for the general public
Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Aug 30, 2014 / swathi_12345 - Sep 3, 2014
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