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|IELTS Writing task 1: Lonely life by gender profile
Writing Feedbacknhatanh - Sep 3, 2013 / nhatanh - Sep 7, 2013
|Sharing room with other students or living on one's own?
2 - Overall pretty good essay, just a few grammar problems. Living in a dormitory is a very good opportunity...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 5, 2013 / kaybee - Sep 7, 2013
|Shopping has become a favorite pastime among young people.
4 - You need to present this idea better. This is what I suggest; Nowadays many people do shopping as...
Writing Feedbackssv_1368 - Sep 1, 2013 / dumi - Sep 7, 2013
|IELTS-Write a letter to your friend about a public event
Writing Feedbackredstone804 - Sep 5, 2013 / dumi - Sep 7, 2013
|technology and its impact, ability of humans to think for themselves will deteriorate
Writing FeedbackfaraNY - Sep 2, 2013 / dumi - Sep 7, 2013
|[TOEFL] Ideas about having university education should be available for all or not
Writing FeedbackJintastic - Sep 5, 2013 / dumi - Sep 7, 2013
|IELTS; increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18
4 - Very good, this is very clear. You know, it's important to have clarity in your writing more than...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 4, 2013 / dumi - Sep 7, 2013
|Notting Hill shows the highest and Fulham is the least in both rental cost and salaries - the table
4 - Hi, You write well, but I feel you better improve on structure. Iwish you followed this structure for this...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 6, 2013 / dumi - Sep 7, 2013
|IELTS 1: A letter to the shop manager - 'it is broken'
11 - Have a separate paragraph for your introduction in which you introduce yourself and introduce your problem.This is what...
Writing Feedbackherzchen85 - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 5, 2013
|Should we learn about the country & the cultures and lifestyles to learn a language?
7 - i think you should express that understanding culture can help you use this language more exact. You talk about...
Writing Feedbackseptem1821 - Sep 3, 2013 / huyentrang - Sep 5, 2013
|Reasons for overweight children in developed countries...
6 - 1) the consumption of fast food has accelerated ...you need to write the causes for its popularity among children...
Writing FeedbackLorachan - Aug 30, 2013 / septem1821 - Sep 4, 2013
|[IELTS] Inner Four Planets of the Solar System
Writing Feedbackalicanunlu - Sep 2, 2013 / alicanunlu - Sep 3, 2013
|IELTS letter ; Changing the booking of travel abroad
Writing Feedbacksophisticated - Sep 3, 2013 / huyentrang - Sep 3, 2013
|IELTS;Some people think parents should read or tell stories
Writing Feedbackseptem1821 - Sep 2, 2013 / septem1821 - Sep 3, 2013
|IELTS TASK1:Letter to complain about neighbor
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Sep 2, 2013 / gmad06 - Sep 3, 2013
|IELTS 2: Too much exercise is bad for one's health
Writing FeedbackPlank - Sep 2, 2013 / MisterWandering - Sep 3, 2013
|"my worst day in recent memory"; College Essay
2 - forty-fourth president It wasn't clear to me how can this be the worst day? i mean. what makes it...
Writing Feedbacktymack - Sep 2, 2013 / penparker - Sep 2, 2013
|My tears were overflowing; Like the Wind, Like God
Writing Feedbackpenparker - Sep 2, 2013 / chessman567 - Sep 2, 2013
|【TOEFL】 Young people now are more willing to help others than those in the past
4 - Start with a better hook that gives the reader a punch and grab his attention.Then go onto explain...
Writing FeedbackHsinyu - Aug 22, 2013 / dumi - Sep 2, 2013
|IELTS; Popular advertisement makes people to buy various goods
4 - I'm going to suggest you a structure for your introduction. Hook - The statement that can grab reader's attention....
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 22, 2013 / dumi - Sep 2, 2013
|ielts; gender segregation; Women should be allowed to join the armed forces
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 29, 2013 / niesaysi - Sep 2, 2013
|To have my own zoo that exhibits a focus on reptiles ; lifetime goals
2 - Looks good :) But, I would not go on details of test scores,etc. I heard that colleges don't really...
Writing FeedbackDillJone - Aug 28, 2013 / 1365violin - Aug 31, 2013
|Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. Suggest some mea
Writing Feedbackprixie - Aug 31, 2013 / ShowMeHow - Aug 31, 2013
|Trying new things and taking risks means to succeed
3 - Thanks....
Writing Feedbackramshah - Aug 31, 2013 / ramshah - Aug 31, 2013
|IELTS-technology will completely teacher in classroom. Do you agree or disagree?
3 - Nowadays, technology is presented in everything and everywhere. Classroom is not an exception. I...
Writing Feedbacknovembernqk - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Aug 31, 2013
|[TOEFL] A/D Challenges are different from generation to generation
6 - Well, you've already done it in the introduction; This is it and that's fine. I just suggested...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 30, 2013 / dumi - Aug 31, 2013
|People visit museums when they travel to new places; 'National Museum of Iraq'
6 - Museums contains the largest collection of the art works.These collections represents the true heritage,customs and traditions of the great...
Writing Feedbacktarbiat - Aug 18, 2013 / thomascarlson - Aug 31, 2013
|IELTS;Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us
5 - There are some grammatical errors in a few sentences causing problems to convey the exact meaning, however, linking words...
Writing Feedbackshreyansh - Aug 29, 2013 / ojhel - Aug 30, 2013
|[TOEFL] A/D Making sure that your strengths are known by others leads to success
5 - Excellent hook :) Very good introduction, body para and conclusion. This is a very good essay...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 29, 2013 / dumi - Aug 30, 2013
|[GRE Issue] The ability to think will deteriorate as people rely more on technology
NEW - This is my first time post a thread in essayforum.com :). There's a month for the test so I...
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|If you could meet a historical figure, who would it be? TOEFL essay
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 25, 2013 / shreyansh - Aug 30, 2013
|IELTS;Air travel can only benefit the richest people in the world
Writing Feedbackshreyansh - Aug 28, 2013 / shreyansh - Aug 29, 2013
|City living or country living? advantages and disadvantages
4 - I guess youare preparing for IELTS or TOEFL. It's always good to include the purpose (IELTS, TOEFL, GRE etc.)...
Writing Feedbackshinjitsu - Aug 28, 2013 / dumi - Aug 29, 2013
|IELTS Bar graph; How people invested money
2 - Hi Where is the graph? Use the "Attach file (s)" feature in your message screen to uplord your graph....
Writing Feedbacknadrian - Aug 29, 2013 / dumi - Aug 29, 2013
|High schools should allow students to study the courses that students want to study.
2 - Well for one read it aloud like how you think it should be spoken. Then definitely tone it down...
Writing Feedbackm64 - Aug 26, 2013 / DillJone - Aug 28, 2013
|IELTS:mobile phones have become a crucial part of human life
NEW - Nowadays, mobile phones have become a crucial part of human life and are as popular as the internet. People...
Writing FeedbackLorachan - Aug 28, 2013 / — -
|Thanks to Technology, quality of life has been greatly enhanced!
2 - However, this also raises a question of whether technology has a good or bad effect on people's relationships nowadays....
Writing Feedbacknikoomaram - Aug 25, 2013 / Mehdi20032003 - Aug 28, 2013
|IELTS; SUCCESS DEPENDS ON THEORITICAL KNOWLEDGE?
Writing Feedbackgoldv - Aug 27, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 28, 2013
|Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people
3 - I definetely support this argument. Well.... you have ahook and you have clearly expressed your opinion. However, you...
Writing FeedbackAloha363 - Aug 27, 2013 / dumi - Aug 27, 2013
|IELTS-TASK1-Describing changes taking place at an island
4 - ==> should not use and 2 times. no building except a few trees distributed in the eastern and...
Writing Feedbackyucky - Aug 25, 2013 / seabird88 - Aug 27, 2013
|IELTS; Population control is one of the greatest concerns in this current environment
Writing Feedbackshreyansh - Aug 26, 2013 / shreyansh - Aug 27, 2013
|Agree or disagree : Younger school children should study art and music (TOEFL)
6 - You can but it is not necessary to talk about those two things..Your essay will become longer than it...
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Aug 25, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 26, 2013
|Ielts 2: How far do you agree with this latter statement?
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Aug 26, 2013 / Shasvat Shukla - Aug 26, 2013
|Improving roads and highways or public transportation? It completely depends on dependency of public
NEW - Should government spend money on improving roads and highways or should government spend more money on improving public transportation...
Writing Feedbackibimali0425 - Aug 26, 2013 / — -
|Children should only play sports for fun, not in competitions or contests.(TOEFL)
12 - All right~~my major has nothing to do with your major at all~haha, accounting,actually~ I love scientific guy though I...
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Aug 23, 2013 / Allen Hu - Aug 25, 2013
|[TOEFL] Do you agree that telephones play more effective role than television?
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Aug 25, 2013 / Allen Hu - Aug 25, 2013
|TOEFL:UNIVs pay attention to sports and social activities as the educational issues?
Writing FeedbackQUPHAS - Aug 24, 2013 / hohuuhoa - Aug 25, 2013
|[GRE Issue essay] Corporations have responsibility to promote well-being of societies
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Aug 23, 2013 / testtaker - Aug 24, 2013
|[GRE: Analyze an Argument] Reduce operating expenses to reverse decline in profits
6 - Hi shadman19222! Sorry that I forgot to address your last query. I think I crossed the 30-minute time limit...
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Aug 23, 2013 / testtaker - Aug 24, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:Spending leisure time with different and the same age group
4 - Dear Gmad06 your introduction and 2 body paragraphs are good organized, but in my point of view in...
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Aug 23, 2013 / mahgh123 - Aug 24, 2013
|Young vs. Old generation - who is having more fun? - TOEFL
Writing Feedbacknlakhots - Aug 23, 2013 / blackbird2013 - Aug 24, 2013
|Individuals can do nothing on environmental issues, Agree or disagree?(TOEFL)
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Jul 17, 2013 / Allen Hu - Aug 23, 2013
|Compare and contrast your way of live with your parents
3 - We are now living in the age of information and communication technology where the world runs at a...
Writing Feedbackdoli - Aug 23, 2013 / dumi - Aug 23, 2013
|TOEFL: job has more effect on your happiness; brings the sense of accomplishment
4 - I have seen many people begin their essays like this. However, I find it's not an interesting hook...
Writing FeedbackHsinyu - Aug 22, 2013 / dumi - Aug 23, 2013
|Working in supplementary task besides studying at high school may bring benefits
2 - I think you need to pay attention to the essay structure. Your introduction should contain three main parts. The...
Writing Feedbackmahgh123 - Aug 23, 2013 / dumi - Aug 23, 2013
|Students staying away from parents as they mature - TOEFL
Writing Feedbacknlakhots - Aug 21, 2013 / nlakhots - Aug 22, 2013
|Perfect Man.-Short Descriptive writing :)
2 - Your writing is free and soaring. It has feeling which touches me. Although I am not native, just...
Writing FeedbackEmax3 - Aug 22, 2013 / Minions144 - Aug 22, 2013
|Ielts2: should rich countries help poor countries?
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Aug 22, 2013 / shadman19922 - Aug 22, 2013
|IELTS ; Increased prices of petrol can solve growing traffic and pollution issues
5 - Dear redtape, I highly appreciate your comment. I will save your advice. Thank you so much for...
Writing FeedbackMinions144 - Aug 21, 2013 / Minions144 - Aug 22, 2013
|TOEFL - Impact made by fast food on our lives
7 - One of those aspects is the decreasing the time given for preparing he food which made the people face...
Writing Feedbackfaheddarmoch - Aug 19, 2013 / congchop - Aug 22, 2013
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