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|IELTS TASK 1 THE GRAPH SHOWS THE PERCENTAGE OF UK ADOLESCENTS FOLLOWING A VEGETARIAN DIET
5 - Hi, your essay failed to reach 150 words, however with only one line in the graph it's difficult to...
Writing Feedbackshin122 - Oct 1, 2013 / Traveler - Oct 2, 2013
|TOEFL - Should we tell the truth always to our friends?
5 - Hi Dumi thanks for your attention As I read so many answer templates , all of them had mentioned...
Writing Feedbackghazal85 - Oct 1, 2013 / ghazal85 - Oct 2, 2013
|People naturally resist making changes in their lives.What kind of problems can this cause
4 - ... I think it is not fair to make such generalization. In the contrary, people look forward to...
Writing Feedbacksaddream - Sep 29, 2013 / dumi - Oct 2, 2013
|Gre -- Argument; homeowners in nearby Brookville community
2 - This sentence is poorly constructed. In the first place, it's too long and at the end of your...
Writing Feedbackjunisha - Oct 2, 2013 / dumi - Oct 2, 2013
|[TOEFL] Secure job or satisfying job ? Which option would you take?
3 - .... the right word is affecting , not effecting; Affect means have an effect on; make a difference...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 26, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 2, 2013
|For & Against Topic (TOEFL) . Students should attend to classes or it should be optional?
3 - .... here you need to tackle why these teachers can explain those lessons thoroughly - It is because...
Writing FeedbackGolnazgol - Sep 29, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 2, 2013
|Involvement of children in different paid work, is it good or bad?
3 - I like this introduction. It is simple, yet interesting and contain all necessary features. .... great...
Writing FeedbackEnglish_Learner - Oct 1, 2013 / Pahan - Oct 2, 2013
|whether job is only for money or there are several other reasons for it..
4 - thank u very much,dumi and pahan for ur suggestions.i will try my best,not to make this type of mistakes...
Writing Feedbackprakrit - Sep 30, 2013 / prakrit - Oct 1, 2013
|IELTS (Charts); electricity generation by source in New Zealand and Germany
Writing Feedbackhisho88 - Sep 27, 2013 / hisho88 - Oct 1, 2013
|TOEFL;should universities spend more money on salaries for university professors?
4 - .... here there are several grammar issues. Also, ideas are scattered here and there. Arrange them according to...
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 27, 2013 / dumi - Oct 1, 2013
|IELTS writing task 2.........Eating habits and lifestyle of children and their effects
Writing Feedbackhisho88 - Sep 30, 2013 / gmad06 - Sep 30, 2013
|GRE ISSUE --''bookish knowledge without experience is useless''
4 - Well... I think you need to work a lot on your grammar and sentence structure. There are many mistakes...
Writing Feedbackjunisha - Sep 26, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 30, 2013
|TOEFL _ what do you prefer to be? a leader or a member of a group?
3 - ...." powerful" is not so appropriate because it deals with power and that can be external sources. (e.g....
Writing Feedbackmoonname - Sep 27, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 30, 2013
|WHAT ARE YOUR OPINIONS ON CITY VERSUS COUNTRY LIVING ARGUMENT ?
Writing FeedbackKillions23 - Sep 29, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 30, 2013
|Capital punishment has been a major source of concern for the last two decade
Writing Feedbackgtamani - Sep 26, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 30, 2013
|What is "happiness"? ; It is the inner state of well-being and satisfaction!
Writing FeedbackFiras - Sep 29, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 30, 2013
|The essay on life cycle of salmon
4 - The diagram illustrates the life cycle of salmon fish which consists of eight main stages. The cycle begins...
Writing Feedbackkin - Sep 26, 2013 / dumi - Sep 30, 2013
|Reading books continuous/ separate ; Which is better?
Writing Feedbacknhip2912 - Sep 30, 2013 / dumi - Sep 30, 2013
|TOEFL:What is a important skill to succeed in life.
8 - Impessive...
Writing Feedbacktippabim - Sep 23, 2013 / Killions23 - Sep 29, 2013
|SAT: What motivates people to change something in their life?! (I wrote in 25 minutes)
Writing FeedbackAs is - Sep 29, 2013 / dumi - Sep 29, 2013
|People Learn from Their Mistakes
Writing FeedbackAk_Mueller - Sep 19, 2013 / dumi - Sep 29, 2013
|TOEFL- increasing professors' salary as an effective factor influencing educational system
5 - Nice job! But I think you should introduce the backgroud in short, otherwise your eaasy may seem a bit...
Writing Feedbackmoonname - Sep 28, 2013 / Antonio Lu - Sep 29, 2013
|IELTS:There is no doubt that globalization affects the world's economies positively
Writing Feedbackzoha - Sep 27, 2013 / Antonio Lu - Sep 29, 2013
|[toefl] Youth do not give enough time to help their society?
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 27, 2013 / raya1001 - Sep 29, 2013
|Capital punishment and criminal execution essay
3 - Well.... what is this essay for? Is it for IELTS or TOEFL? It's better you mention this purpose in...
Writing FeedbackYahyaSl - Sep 13, 2013 / dumi - Sep 29, 2013
|Agree or disagree? it is essential to have ability to plan and organize(TOEFL)
Writing FeedbackAllen Hu - Sep 26, 2013 / Erikd - Sep 28, 2013
|GRE issue essay about "educational institutes responsability"
4 - .... I wish you improve this line a bit mre; This responsibility is not limited to ensuring the...
Writing Feedbackquique7991 - Sep 11, 2013 / dumi - Sep 28, 2013
|Technology has become integral part of twenty first century
2 - contribution to what? You need to tell .... I believe that contribution that technology has made to upgrade...
Writing FeedbackShriji - Sep 26, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 27, 2013
|IELTS; Increase in crimes among young people - Social & Emotional learning
Writing Feedbackhisho88 - Sep 27, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 27, 2013
|[GRE] - The indicator of a great nation is represented by the general welfare
3 - From my point view too, I believe that general welfare of citizens needs to be considered as a...
Writing Feedbackxiaoheng - Sep 9, 2013 / dumi - Sep 27, 2013
|TOEFL; Parents are our important teachers during children's life
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 27, 2013 / dumi - Sep 27, 2013
|[GRE] - University should require students to take various courses
3 - ... Why do you include the word "physically"? I feel many universities deal more with intellectual development and...
Writing Feedbackxiaoheng - Sep 9, 2013 / dumi - Sep 27, 2013
|Ielts line graph-percentage of population aged 65 and over
7 - i think your task must be divided into paragraphs and try to connect the sentences more effectively...
Writing Feedbackyucky - Sep 19, 2013 / hisho88 - Sep 27, 2013
|IELTS: different levels of post-school qualifications in australia in 1999
NEW - The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women...
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|IELTS; TECHNOLOGY Vs TRADITIONAL SKILLS
Writing Feedbackle soleil - Sep 25, 2013 / something - Sep 26, 2013
|The influence of popular music on young people?
4 - "hear"...
Writing Feedbackcrystella - Sep 22, 2013 / something - Sep 26, 2013
|[GRE argument task] A newsletter offers advice to invest to a new venture
Writing Feedbacktesttaker - Aug 30, 2013 / testtaker - Sep 26, 2013
|[toefl] important business woman; business or house?
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 12, 2013 / dumi - Sep 26, 2013
|Qualities of a good son/daughter? - Cultural influence and Time factor
5 - Of course your essay displays good writing skills, especially with the sentences construction and vocabulary. You can score more...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 26, 2013
|Essay Title: Something Different That Day
3 - ... By any chance, do you mean fifteen minutes ? quarter minute means one quarter of a minute...
Writing FeedbackKiarasparks16 - Sep 7, 2013 / dumi - Sep 26, 2013
|A little inaccuracy saves a world of explanation; SAT peparatory essay
Writing Feedbackaneeta - Sep 6, 2013 / dumi - Sep 26, 2013
|Amount of violence in films - ACADEMIC IELTS Writing task2 essay
Writing FeedbackMjkk91 - Sep 21, 2013 / dumi - Sep 25, 2013
|[toefl] people born with certain talents or they are taught?
6 - Some people think that talented people are the God's gifted creatures. What's your opinion? State it...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 25, 2013
|[TOEFL] What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for my country
Writing Feedbacksomething - Sep 25, 2013 / something - Sep 25, 2013
|Leave my country and move to another; Overcome a challenge
3 - you begin your writing with this sentence: "The decision to leave my country and move to another is going...
Writing FeedbackJessicax84 - Sep 24, 2013 / moonname - Sep 25, 2013
|Ielts Writing task 1: The portion of different ages of the population in Yemen and Italy
4 - ... Good introduction. However, I feel it is good if your intro is followed by an overview of...
Writing Feedbacktrangkhanhle - Sep 18, 2013 / dumi - Sep 25, 2013
|'I feel much more safe'; Traditional house or a modern apartment building? Toefl
Writing Feedbackmoonname - Sep 25, 2013 / dumi - Sep 25, 2013
|the best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones
Writing Feedbackaparna ram - Sep 23, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 25, 2013
|Toefl; CITY OR COUNTRY? Which place is more appealing for living?
6 - .... farming includes growing crops and raising livestock (e.g. cattle, chicken etc.) Actually, the reason here...
Writing Feedbacksr005307 - Aug 31, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 25, 2013
|IELTS: Compare and contrast:taking a trip by oneself and taking a group tour with guidance
Writing Feedbackminhvupt - Sep 25, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 25, 2013
|TOEFL [To be a financially responsible adult, children should manage their own money at]
3 - ... you used the same term "money management" in the previous sentence. So avoid repeating it in this...
Writing FeedbackShawn1974 - Sep 25, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 25, 2013
|IELTS - Movies or Books? Which is beneficial for a child's development?
Writing Feedbackcactus2601 - Sep 23, 2013 / cactus2601 - Sep 24, 2013
|IELTS Task 2 writing. Who should be responsible for subjects taught in schools?
Writing FeedbackARIA - Sep 19, 2013 / ah_zafari - Sep 24, 2013
|IELTS - CAM 4 - TASK 1 - DEMAND FOR ELECTRICITY IN ENGLAND
Writing FeedbackTraveler - Sep 18, 2013 / ARIA - Sep 24, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: THE MAPS / coastal resort of Templeton
2 - Hi, The maps illustrate marked changes which have takentook place at the coastal resort of Templeton through/over the...
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 23, 2013 / ah_zafari - Sep 24, 2013
|Ielts: Should we ban private education? NO!
4 - All students are not getting opportunities to learn in a normal school.This may be due to several reasons.Sometimes it...
Writing Feedbackjflo - Aug 26, 2013 / margaretsales - Sep 23, 2013
|May's Camping Trip; stay on topic of the title is the instructions
2 - .... this is all good except for the repetition of the word "camp" in every sentence. Avoid that...
Writing FeedbackAngiesclark - Sep 23, 2013 / Pahan - Sep 23, 2013
|Personal learning style - How and Where I position myself in Kolb's style
Writing Feedbacko5vx - Sep 22, 2013 / o5vx - Sep 23, 2013
|IELTS; Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money
6 - your writing is good but you must pay special attention to your writing coherency and fluency. you have to...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 20, 2013 / hoseini57 - Sep 23, 2013
|Value of Education; Which education do you believe is most important?
Writing Feedbackttsao88 - Sep 22, 2013 / dumi - Sep 23, 2013
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