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|TOEFL; Gender differences and how they apply on jobs they do?
2 - Well ... you are preparing for TOEFL independent writing task which requires you to write an essay with certain...
Writing Feedbacksepideh_dodaran - Aug 9, 2013 / dumi - Aug 9, 2013
|Compare and contrast: home-cooked food vs fast food
3 - Please try and use comparison adjectives in your work. E.g While, whereas,meanwhile,also,on the contrary,in contrast etc. "Lastly" was used...
Writing Feedbackyucky - Jul 25, 2013 / posdream - Aug 9, 2013
|IELTS; Governments can ensure all its people are educated by providing free education
Writing Feedbackposdream - Aug 8, 2013 / sepideh_dodaran - Aug 9, 2013
|TOEFL / How teachers can make the subject interesting to students( new)!
Writing Feedbacksepideh_dodaran - Aug 8, 2013 / sepideh_dodaran - Aug 8, 2013
|IELTS; Will traditional skills and way of life die with technological advancement? No
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Aug 8, 2013 / congchop - Aug 8, 2013
|IELTS; Flour consumption in six countries
Writing Feedbacktkp - Aug 7, 2013 / dumi - Aug 8, 2013
|ILETS: Should children be never educated at home? 'Coaching a little angel'
Writing Feedbackzoha - Aug 6, 2013 / zoha - Aug 7, 2013
|TOEFL Children should learn to manage their own money; views differ considerably
Writing Feedbackjoyhu - Jul 24, 2013 / joyhu - Aug 7, 2013
|IELTS ; Should developing countries concentrate on improving industrial skills?
Writing Feedbackzoha - Aug 6, 2013 / dumi - Aug 7, 2013
|TOEFL- How teachers can make the subject interesting to students!
3 - There are many ways of teaching. Some people believe that strictly and carefully presenting theories in the class is...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 7, 2013 / dumi - Aug 7, 2013
|[TOEFL] People who can't accept others' criticism can't succeed in group working
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Jul 31, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 6, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1; % of money spent on food, drinks & tobacco by people in Europe
5 - I would suggest to add variety to your vocabulary. For example, you have used " spent; country; education; leisure;...
Writing FeedbackEnid - Jul 23, 2013 / zoha - Aug 6, 2013
|GRE Issue：Education institution should dissuade students from pursuing area they ...
2 - There is a claim that suggests education institutions persuade students to orient their studies towards the directions which...
Writing FeedbackDan0912 - Jul 31, 2013 / huyenanh1508 - Aug 6, 2013
|IELTS: TASK 2 - different attempts on introduction writing
Writing FeedbackTobi - Aug 5, 2013 / Tobi - Aug 6, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:Young people becoming less respectful and polite these days
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jul 22, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 6, 2013
|Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of travel or work after high school.
11 - Hi Kelvin, I am back...it's pretty long time. I did it, got pretty "cool" IELTS grades for entering into...
Writing FeedbackLynn Truong - Jul 10, 2010 / Lynn Truong - Aug 6, 2013
|IELTS: TASK 1 question - electricity usage in England
2 - you need a conclusion in the end of your essay, otherwise , you will lost marks from not doing...
Writing FeedbackTobi - Aug 5, 2013 / Ibrahim_Xian - Aug 5, 2013
|IELTS: Is change good for people or not?
Writing Feedbacksukhjit - Aug 4, 2013 / Ibrahim_Xian - Aug 5, 2013
|IELTS:should students who majored in education or medicine work in rural areas first
Writing FeedbackIbrahim_Xian - Aug 5, 2013 / Ibrahim_Xian - Aug 5, 2013
|IELTS: Task 1, line graph that shows unemployment rates in US & Japan.
3 - Thanks Ibrahim_Xian for the feedback. next time I will try to improve my mistakes that is mentioned by you....
Writing FeedbackWarlock - Aug 5, 2013 / Warlock - Aug 5, 2013
|Travel helps to increase understanding between countries
2 - You say you need to prepare for IELTS. If so, you need to pay attention very seriously to your...
Writing FeedbackEdna - Aug 5, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 5, 2013
|IELTS: Nowadays many people do longer work hours and have more stress..
3 - .... The most important thing in writing is clarity. Without clarity of a sentence you cannot impress anybody....
Writing FeedbackDaniel Guo - Jul 30, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 5, 2013
|Can Human nature produce crimes?
Writing Feedbacksilknguyen - Aug 3, 2013 / silknguyen - Aug 5, 2013
|University entrance exam should no longer be mandatory
5 - University entrance exams are a common feature in the education system in some Asian countries such as Japan,...
Writing FeedbackLittleCat264 - Jul 23, 2013 / dumi - Aug 5, 2013
|[TOEFL] Should we require our young children to learn music and art...
2 - .... Parent means mother or father. Parents mean both mother and father. So it should be; All parents...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Aug 5, 2013 / dumi - Aug 5, 2013
|IELTS: It is essential to have the death penalty to reduce violent crime.
Writing Feedbackme4mbd - Aug 2, 2013 / Ibrahim_Xian - Aug 5, 2013
|IELTS_writing: should people exploit animals for human purposes?
4 - First, I wish to request you to post your IELTS essays into Writing Feedback forum which is dedicated for...
Writing FeedbackIbrahim_Xian - Aug 4, 2013 / dumi - Aug 4, 2013
|Which do you prefer ? To study alone or To study with a group of students?
8 - You need to pay serious attention to essays structure. Follow what dumi suggests. A few other mistakes I found;...
Writing FeedbackYorgun95 - Jul 28, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 4, 2013
|ILETS:Schools should concentrate on teaching students the academic subjects
Writing Feedbackmonica1515 - Aug 1, 2013 / mahgh123 - Aug 4, 2013
|Visiting museums during travel; to become familiar with other cultures & history
4 - ote=ramshah]They may think that in their limited time of residencestay in a foreign land, visiting museums is better and...
Writing Feedbackramshah - Aug 3, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 4, 2013
|SPORTING CHAMPIONS ARE MOTIVATED BY DESIRE OR MONEY!
3 - Any champion wants to excel his performance. ... tell it was the love for the sport that motivated...
Writing Feedbacka_mesripour - Aug 3, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 4, 2013
|The advertisements consist of all the shining information about the product
2 - I guess you are preparing for IELTS or TOEFL. It's a good practice to include your task in the...
Writing Feedbacksevenauz - Aug 3, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|IELTS:Good members of society - Who's Responsible?
4 - ... keep it in present tense. ... educational organizations ... educated person ---------- now you get the difference!...
Writing Feedbackvananhnguyen - Jul 22, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|Teenagers and jobs paragraph - it is my blog for writing
7 - Are you talking about the gap year? It's difficult to provide you with relevant comments when we don't know...
Writing FeedbackYuliak - Jul 23, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2: RURAL DEPOPULATION: Discuss the effects and suggest some ways
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Jul 20, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|Generation gap between ours and our parents
Writing Feedbackmaryam_f65 - Aug 1, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|Cinema is coming to an end or not?
3 - ...very good point :) .... I'm going to change the order a bit; The exciting atmosphere that the...
Writing FeedbackNguyenanh - Aug 3, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|IELTS-task2: The increase in weight but decrease in health
Writing Feedbackkhanhlinhpham - Aug 3, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|IELTS, How immigration change the life in both industrialised and developed countries
4 - Thank you for your comment, could you say me what my score would be approximately in an ielts exam...
Writing Feedbackthereafter - Aug 2, 2013 / thereafter - Aug 3, 2013
|Truth should be noticed substantially - it's the foundation of any relationship
Writing Feedbackvidaardroudi - Jul 30, 2013 / ramshah - Aug 3, 2013
|'Children are free birds' - Best times in life; IELTS
2 - Your essay seems to be too short. How many words? As dumi suggests it's always good to state your...
Writing Feedbackanushakorada - Aug 2, 2013 / Pahan - Aug 3, 2013
|Learning a foreign language early bring additional tension & stress to children
3 - Thank you so much for the detailed analysis and feedback. I will check the other essays and follow the...
Writing Feedbackbobinv - Aug 2, 2013 / bobinv - Aug 3, 2013
|Today's youth is more knowledgeable about issues than previous generations
4 - Give more prominance to your reason as you have already introduced your tpic and no need in repeating...
Writing FeedbackTonyNguyen - Aug 1, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|[IELTS] Tourists should follow local customs or host should welcome differences
4 - This trend has sparkedca concern as to how people should behave when they are in another country where...
Writing Feedbackkayo1996 - Aug 2, 2013 / dumi - Aug 3, 2013
|'No clear illustration' - 2 IELTS What factors contribute to Happiness?
Writing Feedbackmangdoli - Aug 2, 2013 / dumi - Aug 2, 2013
|Firstly by participating in community service , one becomes more responsible and independent.
8 - I think you should replace the second 'people' by 'employers'. I'm quite confused when I read to there...
Writing Feedbackbobinv - Jul 27, 2013 / kayo1996 - Aug 2, 2013
|IELTS: Table graph writing, modes of travelling in England.
3 - khanhlinhpham Thanks for the assistance because I was confused that how to make it impressive. But you give me...
Writing Feedbacksukhjit - Aug 1, 2013 / sukhjit - Aug 2, 2013
|IELTS TASK2:Teenagers encouraged to work part-time.Good or bad?
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Jul 30, 2013 / gmad06 - Aug 1, 2013
|students' next step: Should they travel or work for a year before university?
Writing Feedbackkhanhlinhpham - Jul 30, 2013 / khanhlinhpham - Aug 1, 2013
|IELTS ; Should we not pay tax to the authorities?
Writing Feedbackivyzqq - Jul 26, 2013 / ivyzqq - Aug 1, 2013
|Continued use of fossil fuels is incompatible with avoiding harmful climatic changes
2 - ... This is an incomplete sentence and we don't get your idea clearly :( Your introduction needs...
Writing Feedbackleadero - Aug 1, 2013 / dumi - Aug 1, 2013
|[TOEFL] Should we pay professional athletes (entertainers) a high salary?
5 - Wages are set by skill set. All skill sets are different depending on many attributes, level of education, fit...
Writing Feedbackalice0209 - Jul 30, 2013 / Sacredhoop56 - Aug 1, 2013
|Sharing wealth between rich and poorer nations
Writing Feedbackalvanitto - Aug 1, 2013 / temptprovidence - Aug 1, 2013
|Increasing amount of violence on TV has a negative impact on children's behavior
Writing FeedbackYami - Jul 31, 2013 / Yami - Aug 1, 2013
|ILETS: Should Crime be penalized with fixed or variable sentences ?
Writing Feedbackzoha - Jul 28, 2013 / zoha - Aug 1, 2013
|IELTS: Areas where Computer are more important & where Teachers are more important
6 - ldlsky03: I noticed several grammatical errors but I want to give more emphasis on the task and your...
Writing Feedbackldlsky03 - Jul 30, 2013 / gmad06 - Jul 31, 2013
|IELTS Task2 - people relationship has changed because of technology
8 - As far as I know Use of personal pronouns should be avoided. 'I think that...' would become: 'It is...
Writing Feedbackmahgh123 - Jul 16, 2013 / shimshel - Jul 31, 2013
|1.) Prompt: Again and again we hear the complaint that we have no heroes anymore.
4 - examples of people who became can be changed to for instances it is more formal. you used stood many...
Writing FeedbackJOSCONIC - Jul 31, 2013 / hili - Jul 31, 2013
|IELTS TASk 2-Many species of animals and plants are in danger of being extinct. What
Writing Feedbackbobinv - Jul 30, 2013 / bobinv - Jul 31, 2013
|IELTS essay: Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of living off-campus?
Writing FeedbackHelinkway - Jul 25, 2013 / Harneet Kaur - Jul 31, 2013
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