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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree ?

2 - You only wrote 212 words. That is an automatic failing essay score. That is because the minimum count is...

Writing FeedbackAndy Lee - Jan 28, 2024 / Holt - Jan 28, 2024
TASK 2 IETLS WRITING ON EDUCATION

2 - You are not discussing the essay based on the correct task requirement. The question was, if this is a...

Writing FeedbackLydia65 - Jan 27, 2024 / Holt - Jan 28, 2024
Some companies block their employees from using social media networks and websites such as facebook.

2 - It is important that you are consistent in your response presentation. That means, allowing yourself to defend only one...

Writing Feedbacktuanchill - Jan 26, 2024 / Holt - Jan 28, 2024
ยท TASK 2: Work from home You should spend about 40 minutes on this task

2 - Your prompt restatement is a mix of the original prompt information and your personal point of view. Avoid presenting...

Writing FeedbackQuynhNhu512 - Jan 26, 2024 / Holt - Jan 28, 2024
Should parents control their child's free time?

4 - "I understand the points you're trying to convey to the reader. However, your opening sentence could be improved to...

Writing FeedbackSinnubuyaaa - Jan 21, 2024 / alizarincrimsons - Jan 27, 2024
Some people enjoy working alone. Others would rather work in a group. What is your preference?

3 - You have the idea for the essay. However, your direction in this essay only focuses on the reasons rather...

Writing Feedbacktyratw4 - Jan 14, 2024 / alizarincrimsons - Jan 27, 2024
What problems do children face in the age of social media?

5 - Thank you so much. Could you correct my post ?...

Writing Feedbackpth2024 - Jan 17, 2024 / pth2024 - Jan 25, 2024
The table below gives information about some of the world's most studied languages.

4 - You are generalizing for the most part. Remember the format: Intro-overview-details. You can only generalise in overview but not...

Writing Feedbacktharo - Jan 19, 2024 / Mochi_Krystal - Jan 24, 2024
people today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out . What are the causes and solution

4 - @buitiendung i think you have to be more clear and distinct with your points and make sure all your...

Writing Feedbackbuitiendung - Jan 16, 2024 / triplej - Jan 24, 2024
Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh its disadvantages?

2 - Local what? The idea presentation is incomplete. The subject is missing. Please remember that if you think in...

Writing Feedbacktuunhi01 - Jan 24, 2024 / Holt - Jan 24, 2024
Foreign visitors should pay more than local people

2 - Do not exaggerate when stating the original topic. There is no heated controversy, there is only a public...

Writing FeedbackChanminanh - Jan 24, 2024 / Holt - Jan 24, 2024
IELTS WRITTING TASK 2 : With the rise of the ebooks comes the decline in paper books

2 - Well, you only met the requirements of the writing task halfway. The score for this presentation can only be...

Writing FeedbackLinhw - Jan 23, 2024 / Holt - Jan 24, 2024
IELTS Writing task 2: Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen, pencil or brush.

2 - This is your personal opinion. It is not an accurate representation of the original prompt. Being your writer's...

Writing Feedbackcaohuyen93 - Jan 23, 2024 / Holt - Jan 24, 2024
Some children spend hours everyday on their smartphones. Reasons, positive or negative development?

3 - @hbcrosese I think you should include some positive arguments about the use of smartphones by children, such as how...

Writing Feedbackhbcrose - Jan 21, 2024 / sankook - Jan 23, 2024
TASK 2 was it good? :)Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier

4 - @Kaypea The ideas are all clear and useful, but you should consider more abt your writting construction, which you...

Writing FeedbackKaypea - Jan 6, 2024 / Linhw - Jan 23, 2024
Some people think that students who perform better in school should be rewarded.

2 - You cannot say that the statement made in the presentation is true. That is because the first paragraph is...

Writing FeedbackDuckie2 - Jan 20, 2024 / Holt - Jan 20, 2024
In some cultures, children are often told that thay can achieve anything if they try hard enough.

2 - There is no need to include this in the summary paragraph. You are not being asked to give...

Writing FeedbackTOM PARKER - Jan 18, 2024 / Holt - Jan 20, 2024
Some people think that schools should choose students according to their academic abilities

2 - The opening statement will recieve a failing score. You have not properly restated the public opinions and there is...

Writing FeedbackTNhi2003 - Jan 17, 2024 / Holt - Jan 20, 2024
A noticeable lack of students opting for science subjects at universities is observed

2 - You will lose TA points for simply repeating the writing questions instead of creating a writer's opinion based...

Writing FeedbackANDYBAO123 - Jan 17, 2024 / Holt - Jan 20, 2024
IELTS Task 2- children spend hours every day on their smartphones

2 - While the English language used in the presentation is not perfect, it is acceptable enough to receive good GRA...

Writing Feedbackg1131692 - Jan 17, 2024 / Holt - Jan 20, 2024
IELTS Writing Task 1 (Line graph) - The money spent by British parents on their children's sport

2 - A chart is different from a line graph. The original prompt uses the term "chart" to describe the...

Writing Feedbackuyen_465 - Jan 16, 2024 / Holt - Jan 20, 2024
A writting task 1 about some changes in an area

2 - Incorrect image identifier. This is a map illustration, not a graph. this mistake in image reference will affect...

Writing FeedbackPhongbeo12 - Jan 16, 2024 / Holt - Jan 20, 2024
Allowing children to use phones at the school

2 - Well, the discussion approach could be better. For these types of comparison essays, the examiner gives extra points for...

Writing FeedbackRahma20 - Jan 15, 2024 / Holt - Jan 20, 2024
Some people think the government funding should not be used for supporting art and culture

2 - Do not exaggerate your response. Know when to use a measured response to the question and when not...

Writing Feedbackkhanhan - Jan 14, 2024 / Holt - Jan 20, 2024
IELTS-TASK2: Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.

3 - @Holt Thank you for your help, Im truly appreciative and I will find ways to fix it. Just one...

Writing Feedbackcaohuyen93 - Dec 28, 2023 / caohuyen93 - Jan 18, 2024
IELTS task 1 report on Dairy products

3 - @Holt I want to say thank you so much for your assessment. Would it be fine if I create...

Writing Feedbacksummerchilld - Jan 13, 2024 / summerchilld - Jan 14, 2024
Visitors to Ashdown Museum: IELTS - Describe table and charts

2 - What was the rate for the extremely unfulfilled visitors? You did not indicate the percentages for that section of...

Writing Feedbackthienji - Jan 14, 2024 / Holt - Jan 14, 2024
IELTS WRITTING TASK 2 Question: some people argue that university students should be free to choose

2 - Your first sentence in the first paragraph is misleading. There is no fiery discussion sparked across the globe. A...

Writing FeedbackLinhw - Jan 13, 2024 / Holt - Jan 14, 2024
IELTS what do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

3 - Your introduction is irrelevant to the topic - you are supposed to paraphase the topic in your own words,...

Writing Feedbacknguyendf - Jan 7, 2024 / Lyth - Jan 13, 2024
BRAZILIAN EMIGRATION (essay for an exam)

3 - @Holt Hi, Holt! Thank you very much for your feedback. I carefully read your response and I will try...

Writing Feedbackgmt16 - Jan 12, 2024 / gmt16 - Jan 13, 2024
Modern technology makes people less creative?

3 - @Holt thank you so much, but can you elaborate on more about anchor topics? i actually find this term...

Writing Feedbackwalk0nastarry9 - Jan 7, 2024 / walk0nastarry9 - Jan 13, 2024
[IELTS Writing task 2] Countries are becoming more and more similar

3 - I think your ideas are a little seperated. Instead of listing different reasons, try to elaborate on only one...

Writing Feedbacksnackara - Jan 4, 2024 / Lyth - Jan 13, 2024
Task 2: There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company.

2 - You have an under developed essay presentation. The first reasoning paragraphs that explains the reason for money as a...

Writing FeedbackLyth - Jan 12, 2024 / Holt - Jan 13, 2024
The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities

2 - The original prompt indicates pie charts, plural form (+S) so in your representation, you should mention the number of...

Writing Feedbackhanaaa - Jan 12, 2024 / Holt - Jan 13, 2024
Online shopping: do the pros outweight cons? - ielts essay - estimated score and advice

2 - Your essay is over discussed. You only need have presented 2 reasons for your opinion. Believe me, you did...

Writing Feedbacktteruchan65 - Jan 10, 2024 / Holt - Jan 13, 2024
The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organisations.

2 - The essay is more than 300 words long, This could pose a problem during the actual test if you...

Writing Feedbackphanuyen2156 - Jan 8, 2024 / Holt - Jan 13, 2024
data on expenditure on the needs of older people in Australia

2 - While the essay meets the appropriate number of words to be considered for high marks per scoring section, the...

Writing Feedbackahmad irfan - Jan 8, 2024 / Holt - Jan 13, 2024
Financial support for poor countries

2 - I cannot expertly review this essay because you have not met the correct requirements for scoring. You need to...

Writing FeedbackPhammy architect - Jan 7, 2024 / Holt - Jan 13, 2024
IELTS 16:The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane

2 - The essay should be 3 paragraphs long. This writing barely meets the word count minimum, which indicates that the...

Writing FeedbackPhuonglynnh - Jan 6, 2024 / Holt - Jan 13, 2024
TASK 1- PROCESS: Describe the process of the water cycle

3 - Hi Julie11, While expanding on the information shown in the diagram is necessary, I would suggest to refrain from...

Writing FeedbackJulie11 - Jan 4, 2024 / himca - Jan 12, 2024
TASK 1: LINE GRAPH - Comparison of the number of 13-year-olds learning French and Mandarin

2 - Examine the graph presented. It clearly indicates that the measurements are applicable up to the present date. It...

Writing Feedbacktrucly182 - Jan 6, 2024 / Holt - Jan 12, 2024
Peace & Justice Difficult situation in conflict resolution. How you handled the situation. (CBEST)

2 - Okay, your eventual solution was violence. That has no place in these peace loving times. Threatening to beat up...

Writing FeedbackNorbsidy - Jan 11, 2024 / Holt - Jan 11, 2024
Write about your hero. Identify who the person is, and why he or she is your hero...... CBEST

2 - You are over dramatizing the situation. Keep it logical and based within the realms of reality. The scream of...

Writing FeedbackNorbsidy - Jan 6, 2024 / Holt - Jan 11, 2024
Children should be banned from using their phones during the school day or not. Both views & yours

3 - I believe the prompt want you to state your personal opinion on the matter and reasons for you support...

Writing Feedbacklinh2806 - Dec 26, 2023 / Norbsidy - Jan 11, 2024
Writing Task 1 Ielts - the inquiries volume

3 - Good job. But your essay seems concerned about meeting the word count. Those can cause you not to express...

Writing Feedbackthaopiu - Dec 25, 2023 / Norbsidy - Jan 11, 2024
IELTS WRITING TASK 2-work-based training's advantages outweigh its disadvantages

2 - Explain your opinion. What is the basis of your explanation in the earlier sentence? Give a summarized representation...

Writing FeedbackOhMyV4g - Jan 3, 2024 / Holt - Jan 9, 2024
(Writing task 2) Foreign tourists should pay more for cultural and historical places

2 - The prompt restatement section is acceptable enough. However, the lack of a properly referenced writer's opinion, using a clear...

Writing Feedbacktrongdiablo03 - Jan 2, 2024 / Holt - Jan 9, 2024
The chart show the number of Internet users in 3 countries

2 - When creating the trending statement, focus on either the highest or lowest number presentation. For task clarity purposes,...

Writing FeedbackJeongbi - Jan 2, 2024 / Holt - Jan 9, 2024
Save money. Should or shouldn't?

3 - The essay has some grammatical errors and lack clarity. For instance, on your second paragraph ..."They have enough money...

Writing Feedbackphamhuyentrang - Dec 28, 2023 / Norbsidy - Jan 6, 2024
Some people say that online learning is the most effective and convenient way to learn.

3 - I believe the points listed in your paragraph should be well developed, hence it looks like a draft. Secondly,...

Writing Feedbackcghvngvhj - Dec 31, 2023 / Norbsidy - Jan 6, 2024
Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty

2 - Your thesis statement is missing from the presentation. What sort of alternative aid do you think should be provided...

Writing FeedbackSyedatanjin - Dec 30, 2023 / Holt - Jan 6, 2024
IELTS-TASK 2:Money is important in most people's lives

2 - Your overall discussion is choppy. It sometimes veers off topic and does not provide a clear connection with the...

Writing FeedbackHuy12022007 - Dec 30, 2023 / Holt - Jan 6, 2024
ielts writing task 2 University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies.

2 - The writer's opinion does not follow the required format for the essay. The prompt is asking you to simply...

Writing Feedbackmaysqv - Dec 28, 2023 / Holt - Jan 6, 2024
Diagram about the change of building between 1957 and 2007 -

3 - @Holt Which band I could get for this essay ?...

Writing Feedbackalexdinh - Dec 27, 2023 / alexdinh - Dec 28, 2023
Some people think that young people should spend free time with families

3 - I think it's important to clarify your opinion in the introduction. Like: People hold different opinions about whether youngsters...

Writing FeedbackHaohao0719 - Dec 27, 2023 / caohuyen93 - Dec 28, 2023
Letter of Motivation for Erasmus Mundus Joint Masters

2 - The mention of your mother at the end of the motivational letter is totally out of place. That is...

Writing FeedbackRehman Sadaqat - Dec 27, 2023 / Holt - Dec 27, 2023
Although more and more people read the news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the main source

2 - I am glad that you understood most of the question being asked. Your response would have been perfect...

Writing Feedbacknoanh532 - Dec 26, 2023 / Holt - Dec 27, 2023
WRITING TASK 2: Measures for intelligence

3 - In the first body paragraph, you mention that an intelligent individual is often more successful, but you acknowledge exceptions....

Writing Feedbackdilema - Dec 23, 2023 / Nandia701 - Dec 27, 2023
WRITING TASK 1: INCIDENCE OF X DISEASE IN SOMELAND

3 - In the second paragraph, consider clarifying the phrase "proportion of being get X disease" to enhance readability. You might...

Writing Feedbacklinhvi - Dec 25, 2023 / Nandia701 - Dec 27, 2023
Start school earlier or older

2 - This is a 40 minute task essay. You will be incapable of completing 560 words during the actual test...

Writing Feedbackpamhtir - Dec 24, 2023 / Holt - Dec 25, 2023

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