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|How chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up - [IELTS Writing Task 1]
3 - Hi PJ Maybe you should replace the percentage (37%,34%,15%,10%,4% ) with other words to avoid repetitions....
Writing FeedbackPJmustbebetter - Dec 15, 2014 / ayulia - Dec 16, 2014
|Considerations and factors influence the universities budget allocation to meet students' demand
2 - Try to type as much as possible within thirty minutes, maybe 700 words and avoid using one word twice...
Writing Feedbackkid09321 - Dec 16, 2014 / Zyy242 - Dec 16, 2014
|'it reached a peak of 34.7% in 2011' - National Recycling Rates, 1960 to 2011
2 - There are some missing punctuation such as '.' and ',' There are also incomplete sentences. Try again,...
Writing Feedbackimmobulus - Dec 16, 2014 / somasalims - Dec 16, 2014
|The diagram ilustrates how to make chocolates and the pie chart describes the price of chocolate bar
2 - it should be illustrates you should use present participle for the word 'produce' because the sentence...
Writing Feedbackayulia - Dec 15, 2014 / ruwchii - Dec 16, 2014
|To learn effectively, children need to eat a healthy meal and study in a comfortable atmosphere
2 - Let me try to correct the last paragraph, I think the conclusion is not clear. It should revert to...
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|The table describes the number of cinema viewers for four type films in four different nationalities
Writing Feedbacksomasalims - Dec 14, 2014 / somasalims - Dec 15, 2014
|[IELTS Task 1] The Number of Travellers Using Three Major Airports In New York City
3 - The bar chart gives the information about the visitors at three airports in New York City and is...
Writing Feedbackakhfan - Dec 14, 2014 / tiaDS - Dec 15, 2014
|IELTS - Satisfaction is no longer guaranteed by just simply adequate salaries
Writing Feedbackelsten123 - Dec 9, 2014 / immobulus - Dec 15, 2014
|'wrongly convicted, jailed or fined' - Capital Punishment research paper topic.
2 - Cristian, we aren't an essay writing service. Posting the prompt for your essay here will not get the essay...
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|Which of my qualities would add value to community of scholars?
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|The best day of my life (so far) was. tell a story that allows us to experience your best day
2 - This is a truly creative story that relates your immigration experience. The problem is the lack of emotional connection...
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|Effect of the Social Media on Adolescents (Argumentative Essay)
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|Students spending time studying, but what about physical activities?
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|(INTERESTING) The bar chart reveals the mean growth of GDP of three types of countries; IELTS
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|Will Artificial Intelligence Mark the End of Humanity?
Writing Feedbackjus2151738 - Dec 9, 2014 / jagdeep5171 - Dec 14, 2014
|To speak a foreign language well, you need to adopt some of their traditions. - IELTS
2 - Your task is to simply introduce the background information retrieved from the prompt. Also, make sure that you...
Writing Feedbackzigolf - Dec 13, 2014 / eddies - Dec 13, 2014
|Teaching as a Professional Career
2 - Hanan, you need to learn to proof read your essay before submitting it. I see that you started the...
Writing Feedbackhanan attia - Dec 13, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 13, 2014
|School is the one of my important things on my life.
NEW - School is the one of my important things on my life. Many people learn about many subject, sport, art,...
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|TOEFL - Topic : Competition among friends can destroy a friendship.
4 - I think this is a really good work with great structures and examples that perfectly fit the topic. This...
Writing Feedbackpaladiner55 - Dec 8, 2014 / katetan - Dec 11, 2014
|What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? - IELTS
3 - Nice work, dear friend. the structure is wonderful, while some words need to be replaced i guess. here it...
Writing Feedbackmoonvlin - Dec 8, 2014 / elsten123 - Dec 11, 2014
|If you could uninvent one of a major inventions, what would it be? Brandeis Supplemental Essay
2 - Excellent essay! I do not see any need to add anything to this discussion nor correct any content within...
Writing Feedbackdh132 - Dec 10, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 10, 2014
|School subjects are equally beneficial to students' future career success IELTS
NEW - Hi guys, can you guys do me a favor and review my IELTS Writing Test Part 2, really appreciated,...
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|The average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year - IELTS Task 1
Writing Feedbackrhino - Dec 5, 2014 / rcpjj - Dec 10, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Different courses in England - Two pie charts
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Nov 23, 2014 / SHanafi - Dec 10, 2014
|Exploration of Alternate Realities In My Final Graphic Texts Project
NEW - There were almost no requirements to this essay. It is supposed to be about a piece I created and...
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|'Organic food products and walking on foot' - many factors contribute to the length of human life
2 - Your essay is good.I'd just like to leave some comments: Nowadays, many factors such as environmental pollution and...
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|Imposing stricter punishment is likely to lead reducing the number of crimes
NEW - Some people think the best way of reducing crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, think there...
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|"Success in not final, failure is not fatal; it is the will to continue that counts"
3 - Masroor, your essay contains detailed example, which is quite impressive. However, in my own point of view, i could...
Writing FeedbackMasroor 25 - Dec 8, 2014 / moonvlin - Dec 9, 2014
|Schools should continue to focus on teaching students but not eliminating music and sports subjects
NEW - Task 2# Schools should concentrate on teaching students the academic subjects that will be useful for their future career....
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|Should teachers be paid more when some people gain huge money, out of scale of their work importance
5 - briannalottchea How about this: appreciate dignity and ethics, which are priceless gifts that many people want to exchange for...
Writing Feedbackvlinh1991 - Dec 2, 2014 / vlinh1991 - Dec 9, 2014
|TOEFL: Films are so popular today mainly due to the benefits they bring to human beings
4 - Really good essay, breathtaking introduction! I'd like to point out some minor mistakes in order to help you to...
Writing FeedbackMarianaS - Dec 8, 2014 / Zoriana - Dec 9, 2014
|TOEFL: Should land be developed or left in natural condition?
4 - Your essay is great! I'd like to point out some minor errors: Doubtlessly , intensive use of land for...
Writing FeedbackMarianaS - Dec 6, 2014 / Remansou - Dec 9, 2014
|Fundamental stage for the future - Two main reasons for study in college or university
Writing Feedbackadad1120 - Dec 3, 2014 / adad1120 - Dec 9, 2014
|Allah always gives the perfect and most suitable things for us, so we must trust Him and do our best
Writing Feedbacknermeen_s3d - Dec 8, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 8, 2014
|Social involvement is a good way for students to develop their skills, necessary in further life
3 - Try to avoid describing two separate ideas within one passage. For instance, in this paragraph you are writing about...
Writing Feedbackthanhtam_tma - Dec 7, 2014 / MarianaS - Dec 8, 2014
|Pick your favorite artist or designer. Write about a day that you would spend with her/him...
Writing FeedbackRhea97 - Dec 5, 2014 / Rhea97 - Dec 8, 2014
|ESSAY: RELATED TO COMPUTERS vs EDUCATION
Writing Feedbackcisco - Dec 5, 2014 / cisco - Dec 8, 2014
|Both parents should have the same impact on raising their own children - IELTS
4 - Hi patrick Jarguz, however Tam Le has been corrected your essay in relation to missed spelling, allow me to...
Writing FeedbackDaelen - Dec 7, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 8, 2014
|Ebola prevention research paper
2 - Savannah, your paper would be better if you provided a clear thesis statement in the introductory paragraph. That would...
Writing Feedbacksavannacrosser - Dec 8, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 8, 2014
|[essays] is it appropriate for magazine or newspaper to give private information about people?
2 - There is a side to the argument that you have failed to present as a counter argument to your...
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Dec 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 7, 2014
|Tall and loving it - I reached the height of six-foot-two when I was done growing
Writing Feedbacksweetpea123 - Dec 7, 2014 / sweetpea123 - Dec 7, 2014
|Democracy does flourish best in societies with high socio-economic development. Aristotle
2 - Reza, your SOP is highly academic in nature and not technical. A proper SOP requires you to present your...
Writing Feedbackrezajoon - Dec 7, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 7, 2014
|TOEFL: Ability to read and write - today, those basic skills make society more comfort for living.
Writing FeedbackZoriana - Dec 6, 2014 / thanhtam_tma - Dec 7, 2014
|IELTS: Modern children's game
Writing Feedbackthanhtam_tma - Dec 6, 2014 / thanhtam_tma - Dec 7, 2014
|Television: a Microcosm of the Political Culture and Economy of China - Pomona College essay
2 - You have presented quite an interesting topic for the study. The fact that very little is known about Chinese...
Writing Feedbackfpu97 - Dec 6, 2014 / vangiespen - Dec 6, 2014
|IELTS - Young or old employees? Which are more valuable for the company?
2 - Every manager's goal is to select the best personnel. What kind of stuff they must choose (don't use stuff,...
Writing Feedbackel_lee88 - Dec 5, 2014 / orian2014 - Dec 5, 2014
|Various issues will have to be faced by the government throughout its tenure - GRE Issue Essay
2 - I think, in the first paragraph you must say which do you accept : to solve the immediate problems...
Writing Feedbackmac1994 - Dec 4, 2014 / el_lee88 - Dec 5, 2014
|Would it be better if more good news was reported? - IELTS
Writing Feedbackel_lee88 - Dec 4, 2014 / el_lee88 - Dec 5, 2014
|Nowadays people are valued by their social rank or materialistic activity - IELTS essay
4 - perhaps, you should hide several words such as and there are inappropriate for academic writing....
Writing Feedbackbang - Nov 26, 2014 / rhino - Dec 5, 2014
|Dance is very important for the popularity of the country.
Writing Feedbackkoraykirdinli - Dec 4, 2014 / koraykirdinli - Dec 5, 2014
|Children are misled, while promoters consider advertising as a source of useful information
NEW - There are many advertisements directed at children. Parents argue that children are misled, while advertisers consider advertising a source...
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|IELTS: The changes in share price of Outokumpu enterprises - Writing task 1, Line graph
Writing Feedbackbongbang - Dec 4, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 5, 2014
|What do accountants do? What characteristics make a good accountant?
Writing Feedbackjjk1346 - Dec 3, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 4, 2014
|TOEFL: writing integrate question about "Productivity and Rewards"
2 - May be you can smootly add the topics in one sentence to your introduction. It might be more effective....
Writing Feedbackatousa64 - Dec 4, 2014 / koraykirdinli - Dec 4, 2014
|Traditional skills; keep them alive or let them die out ?
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|Assisted Suicide Should be a Persons Final Civil Right
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|Everywhere people spent more on food, drinks and tobacco; consumer spending - table
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|IETLS W1 poverty rates by age and gender (bar chart) and family composition of women in poverty...
3 - Thanks to Dumi, our moderator and contributor here, the first and foremost lesson I learn from her is that...
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|Dream, the only harmless drug in the world - gap year explanation
Writing Feedbackgia - Nov 19, 2014 / gia - Dec 3, 2014
|IEITS-It is better for people to be unemployed than people to be employed but they are not happy.
7 - It is not bad as a first attempt.. Try to rewrite the third paragraph,it is not clear enough....
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