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|TOEFL: Would you choose your own roommate?
2 - I think you should rewrite these 2 sentences :) They are simple and not quite clear, and maybe...
Writing FeedbackAudi - Jun 18, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 19, 2014
|In many countries there has been increase in social problems involving teens
6 - It is always good to mention the purpose of writing your essay in the title itself. I guess this...
Writing FeedbackSabi Thapaa - Jun 14, 2014 / dumi - Jun 19, 2014
|IELTS: the graph show the number of passenger railway journeys
4 - You need to upload the graph for the reader to have a better understanding about what it presents...
Writing Feedbackiamchop - Jun 6, 2014 / dumi - Jun 19, 2014
|IELTS - The gender issue for getting education needs
Writing Feedbackagienugroho - May 25, 2014 / Henie - Jun 19, 2014
|Grandparents are significant source of experiences; childrens education big role
2 - Well you should combine sentences two make complicated one. For example, you should combine sentence 2 and...
Writing Feedbackreza10977 - Jun 19, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 19, 2014
|IELTS : Police force carries guns - significant impact for level of violence
6 - I recommend you next time pay attention to big mistakes and help suggest as much as possible, this is...
Writing Feedbackthanhphongct1 - Jun 9, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 19, 2014
|[IELTS] Prisons have various purposes
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 18, 2014 / reza10977 - Jun 19, 2014
|Why arranged marriage is bad idea? Descriptive paragraph
2 - arrangedArranged marriage is a bad idea simply because it does not gain the acceptance from both parties who are...
Writing Feedbacksonyta - Jun 12, 2014 / dumi - Jun 18, 2014
|SAT essay sample - how important is to look beyond superficial appearances?
Writing Feedbackmonmomo04 - May 28, 2014 / monmomo04 - Jun 18, 2014
|[TOEFL] People were more satisfied in the past in comparison to today's people/
2 - First of all, you should have included the essay prompt in the post for us to understand what it...
Writing Feedbackpeyman_np - Jun 18, 2014 / dumi - Jun 18, 2014
|[TOEFL] 'friends talk' - telephone is more influential than the television
2 - I have a question about TOEFL preparing process. How should I reinforce my grammar? Is there any good way...
Writing FeedbackCute Scott - Jun 17, 2014 / peyman_np - Jun 18, 2014
|Ielts: letter and gift to a friend who has just had a baby recently
Writing Feedbackganggang - Jun 17, 2014 / aklochkova1 - Jun 18, 2014
|IELTS Essay - Children are raised by grandparents. How family is affected?
7 - my eyes are really out after having finished checking the essay above. So can I get my essay checked?...
Writing Feedbackmsarkar - Jun 2, 2014 / MiaCuthbert - Jun 18, 2014
|"broken chopsticks" - letter to the shop manager; writing task in IELTS 8
Writing Feedbacksam4 - Jun 15, 2014 / sam4 - Jun 17, 2014
|Government should spend national budget for roads, highways and public transport
NEW - Transportation is an important living factor, and also influences to country's economy. Both quality of route for any vehicle...
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|[IELTS] Keeping pets is good or not? Discuss both views? Personal opinion?
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 15, 2014 / thanhphongct1 - Jun 17, 2014
|New shopping centre in your neighborhood - do you agree or not?
4 - Thank you very much! Precious suggestions! I was a little bit nervous when i wrote this essay because my...
Writing FeedbackAngelaB - Jun 15, 2014 / AngelaB - Jun 16, 2014
|TOEFL ESSAY - taking jobs with high salary but risks or low salary but secure?
2 - Well, I like if this sentence has been a bit shorter. Ideally, you should start the essay with...
Writing Feedbackjessiebaojie - Jun 15, 2014 / dumi - Jun 16, 2014
|GRE ISSUE - People who make decisions based on emotion
2 - This issue revolvingthat people who make decisions based on emotions is quite an interesting one. Furthering to that we...
Writing Feedbackmkunaparaju - Jun 15, 2014 / dumi - Jun 16, 2014
|divorce: Causes and effects on children
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|IELTS : Could Fame Be All Good?
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|IELTS argument essay large amount of violence in television programs
6 - to make your essay more specific, you can take some examples from your experiences or your daily life. it...
Writing Feedbackwzncx8879 - Jun 14, 2014 / fikri - Jun 15, 2014
|'human beings are far from perfect' - Essay about an ideal wife
Writing FeedbackAkatsuki - Jun 14, 2014 / Akatsuki - Jun 15, 2014
|my best friend - Champ ; Descriptive paragraph about person who I feel admirable
Writing Feedbacklittle_shimmery - Jun 14, 2014 / little_shimmery - Jun 15, 2014
|Puppy love should be agreed or not?
2 - Love is a lifelong word, directly or indirectly, reminding us of each milestone we have suffered from no matter...
Writing Feedbackgarung1187 - Jun 14, 2014 / eva_lim - Jun 15, 2014
|'bored of being a social nobody' - more money for student's social activities?
4 - thanks for your help! can you give me some suggestions of how to solve this problem? i have already...
Writing Feedbackzcb56123 - Jun 13, 2014 / zcb56123 - Jun 14, 2014
|Ielts: The gap between poor and rich countries has been large from longtime ago
NEW - The inequality between rich and poor nations is wider than it has ever been before. What do you think...
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|A day to spend the way you wish
Writing Feedbackmodakindia - Jun 10, 2014 / modakindia - Jun 13, 2014
|GRE Issue Topic: Understanding a society by studying the major cities
NEW - Issue topic: To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Major...
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|Advantages of Having a Part-Time Job While Studying at the University
Writing FeedbackCa2014 - Jun 12, 2014 / Ca2014 - Jun 13, 2014
|'follow the rules of the nature' - changes are essential for improving our lives
Writing Feedbackreza10977 - Jun 12, 2014 / fikri - Jun 13, 2014
|Good grades, so what? How it is important for the future?
2 - i see the title "Good grades, so what? How it is important for the future?", meaning i should talk...
Writing Feedbackjiasyuen - Jun 12, 2014 / nitex - Jun 13, 2014
|Extended Definition Descriptive Essay for English Course (Subject - Family)
Writing FeedbackAutorock - Jun 12, 2014 / reza10977 - Jun 12, 2014
|IELTS: Doing same things vs Making change - Which is good?
Writing FeedbackDinhlan - May 25, 2014 / dumi - Jun 12, 2014
|Toefl: 'our useful friends' - pets deserve to be treated like family members
3 - Thank you very much dumi! Regarding the introduction, I am trying to follow your precious suggestions.. that's why I...
Writing FeedbackAngelaB - Jun 12, 2014 / AngelaB - Jun 12, 2014
|ielts: the reason why sports competions has replaced war
Writing Feedbackieltswriter - May 26, 2014 / fikri - Jun 12, 2014
|IELTS: People have different views about who is responsible for raising chilrden
6 - please, give space to show the differences between each paragraphs also, you need to explain more by giving...
Writing Feedbackfreesoul123 - May 27, 2014 / fikri - Jun 12, 2014
|[IELTS] Technology supports working from home
5 - Hello Eddies, This is my new conclusion and I really need your suggestion. Thank you so much....
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 12, 2014 / tiaDS - Jun 12, 2014
|Ielts: job inquiry - guide tourists in you town for a travel company
Writing Feedbackganggang - May 28, 2014 / fikri - Jun 12, 2014
|Kuya - my second family - He loves to call himself "pogi"
2 - ...
Writing FeedbackAal - Jun 11, 2014 / AngelaB - Jun 12, 2014
|People are able to work or study from home, no need to travel to work or college
NEW - In some countries, with the widespread use of the internet, people are able to work or study from home,...
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|[IELTS] The two approaches to life: change or unchange? Personal preference?
5 - yeah I know, but if I'm comparing based on two criterias, then they must be used in the paragraph...
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 11, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 12, 2014
|Chart - contribution of selected categories in total spending of five countries
3 - Second part of first paragraph is not a sentence. Respectively includes more than one factor....
Writing FeedbackHung Arsenal - Jun 5, 2014 / iamchop - Jun 11, 2014
|Nuclear weapons, boon or curse ?
6 - Dear Madam, I am really grateful to you for reviewing and correcting bits and parts of my essays !...
Writing FeedbackRevin - Jun 7, 2014 / Revin - Jun 11, 2014
|IELTS: Do young people have much greater influence nowadays than it was?
Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - May 29, 2014 / fikri - Jun 10, 2014
|IELTS; Letter to a friend - he agreed to look after your house and pet
Writing FeedbackJoyce68 - May 30, 2014 / fikri - Jun 10, 2014
|IELTS: The three-column figure illustrates a survey of 1000 teenagers
Writing Feedbacklindaqueen - Jun 10, 2014 / lindaqueen - Jun 10, 2014
|Always prefer prevention from the every first stage of any health problem
2 - Presently, people do not take the problem seriously until it to a harmful stage. For example, the awareness...
Writing FeedbackHumza33 - Jun 9, 2014 / ibk - Jun 10, 2014
|IELTS: How to teachers' gender are taking part in the six different school
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 9, 2014 / tiaDS - Jun 10, 2014
|IELTS: Steps in the hiring process
5 - Sorry it's biased not unbiased. I'll try to research regarding the use of personal pronouns in IELTS but I...
Writing Feedbacklewyne - Jun 9, 2014 / tinubalde - Jun 10, 2014
|IELTS pie chart and table - agricultural crisis
Writing Feedbacktinubalde - Jun 5, 2014 / lewyne - Jun 9, 2014
|When I was 8 years old, I learnt how to play a guitar and sing popular songs
3 - Thank you, Ahmad, for your contributions! Answering your question, it was the first time I entered this site,...
Writing FeedbackRicardo - Jun 8, 2014 / Ricardo - Jun 9, 2014
|Is the economic development more important than protecting the environment?
Writing FeedbackTranAnh - Jun 8, 2014 / TranAnh - Jun 9, 2014
|GRE- Technology and human ability to think.
2 - Although the above statement is quite extreme but both facets of technology have to be taken into consideration. Technology...
Writing Feedbackhimanshimathur - Jun 8, 2014 / Vihuynh - Jun 9, 2014
|old and new generation; role of young and elder people in the society
3 - I think you should not give an example in the very first line of the introduction paragraph. Thank you....
Writing Feedbackreza10977 - May 30, 2014 / Humza33 - Jun 8, 2014
|Ielts - Fast food popularity- Positive or Negative?
3 - it's not an essay. The structure of an essay must have introduction by 1 paragraph, body by 2-3...
Writing Feedbackbakhadeer - Jun 7, 2014 / TranAnh - Jun 8, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Share expenditure for selected categories in four countries
9 - Dear Ahmad, Thanks for your detail correction. I really appreciate for advice. Tinubalde, thanks for a...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 4, 2014 / tiaDS - Jun 8, 2014
|What is one thing you will do to improve your community?
Writing Feedbackjm06633 - May 30, 2014 / jm06633 - Jun 8, 2014
|There are more benefits to travel in your own country than travelling in foreign
Writing Feedbackdurai_ielts - Jun 4, 2014 / ah_zafari - Jun 8, 2014
|IELTS - Tourism: good or bad? - it's a modern form of colonialism
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