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|Air Force Academy - Ethical Dilemma essay; The following story was real and not fabricated
2 - had the right ofto distributing untouched leftovers among employees I think your essay is generally well-written....
Writing Feedbackfotuniverse - Mar 25, 2014 / ramshah - Mar 26, 2014
|Toefl essay - stress are relieved by people by reading, gardening, exercising.
3 - These books address enormous matters that sometime serve us solutions for our problems All embracing books hashave proven inexpensive...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 25, 2014 / ramshah - Mar 26, 2014
|IELTS:Working people are busy -don't have time for family and friends; severe consequences
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Mar 6, 2014 / eddies - Mar 26, 2014
|TOEFL IBT: Why people want to move to big cities to settle down?
Writing Feedbackluonghao - Apr 10, 2013 / luonghao - Mar 25, 2014
|IELTS: Water Cycle from the ocean to air and to the Earth surface
7 - Hi, all. As my effort to improve my ability, I write this prompt repetitively. I am glad that you...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 11, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 25, 2014
|IELTS exam: studying at university is the best route to reach successful career
8 - Being at a univerity is better: -gives time to find yourself -harder to work pay check by pay check,...
Writing Feedbackandial - Mar 24, 2014 / SalomeA - Mar 25, 2014
|Begin learning EL at primary rather than secondary school?Advantages outweigh disadvantage
4 - First of all, at primary school,younger the brain of children caneasier and quicker to learn aadapt to new langguage...
Writing FeedbackLinh Hoang - Mar 24, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 25, 2014
|Politicians are the most important people on earth! -- They have the final say
4 - Well, generally you use examples to support your justifications and they come in body paras. Introduction is meant for...
Writing Feedbackesmayli - Mar 24, 2014 / dumi - Mar 25, 2014
|IELTS: the high sales of goods & power of advertising - 'what we buy is up to ourselves'
Writing FeedbackRebeccaZ - Mar 24, 2014 / RebeccaZ - Mar 25, 2014
|Toefl essay - Media invading public figures privacy.
3 - News that can be defined as" north east west south" provides happening of all these four zones of the...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 21, 2014 / dumi - Mar 25, 2014
|IELTS: Elderly Population in three different countries: Japan, Sweden and USA
7 - Overall, while Japanese elderly population takes moved slightly before roserising dramatically, the elderly proportion of the two western countries,...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 2, 2014 / dumi - Mar 25, 2014
|IELTS: Living in modern Apartment or Traditional House - support your choice
4 - Yes, it is not delivering the idea you want to convey to the reader. Afford means having enough money...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 25, 2014
|IELTS :Distance-learning cannot bring the benefits that traditional colleges offer; Agree?
3 - This indicates you don't care enough to finish a sentence properly. You don't need to use lazy...
Writing Feedbackanselzhang - Mar 4, 2014 / eddies - Mar 25, 2014
|TOEFL: friends you can have fun with or those who can help you?
4 - AsBeing a kind of social animal, our human beings needthe human needs company of others .attention and love from...
Writing Feedbackcococherry - Mar 24, 2014 / dumi - Mar 24, 2014
|IELTS: Pros and Cons - advertisement - has become integral part of modern society's life
5 - I strongly advise you to follow Pahan's suggested structure for this task. Time is a critical factor for this...
Writing Feedbackandial - Mar 22, 2014 / dumi - Mar 24, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 : Young people now have a lot of pressure .
Writing Feedbackchunguyen97 - Mar 4, 2014 / eddies - Mar 24, 2014
|Ielts Task 2:Our cities are noisier than ever before. Why is this so, and what can be done
4 - Working to a very tight deadline , construction companies would prefer to choose continuously operation and apply heavy...
Writing Feedbackleoking - Mar 15, 2014 / eddies - Mar 24, 2014
|internet is the great innovation in our lives; be selective to see many effects
6 - You don't need to use this. In IELTS, this is called 'Lazy expression', belonging more to oral presentation....
Writing FeedbackRestu - Mar 23, 2014 / eddies - Mar 24, 2014
|Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share.
3 - Use these phrases to avoid repetition of words in your visual writing: The number of = the figure for...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 24, 2014 / eddies - Mar 24, 2014
|TOEFL: Keep trying and never stop working for your goals.
6 - Thank you dumi. That is very kind of you. I would certainly try to improve my introduction. ^...
Writing Feedbacksntinn - Mar 24, 2014 / sntinn - Mar 24, 2014
|Watching television is one of the simplest ways to relax after hard working time
Writing Feedbacknoriaki - Mar 23, 2014 / noriaki - Mar 24, 2014
|IELTS-GT: it's important for parents to teach their children about the importance of money
4 - Firstly, I am not quite sure that you finish it in 40 minutes. Practise using controlled time ...
Writing FeedbackNaveed786 - Mar 23, 2014 / andial - Mar 24, 2014
|TOEFL: Why museums nowadays are so popular places to visit while traveling?
NEW - Could you please give me a feedback on this independent TOEFL essay? Many people visit museums when they...
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|IELTS - Crime in UK; percentage of criminality of British people in different age/gender
11 - Use these phrases to avoid repetition of words in your visual writing: The number of = the figure for...
Writing FeedbackJasS - Mar 11, 2014 / eddies - Mar 24, 2014
|Hand work culture elimination is the 1st thing that would be cherished by human
4 - Use of machineriesmachines isare less time consuming. Theyit can complete a task in few minutes or hours.much shorter...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 23, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 24, 2014
|Toefl essay: Should we only watch movies that can teach us something about real life?
Writing FeedbackSpookysnoopy - Mar 23, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 24, 2014
|[TOEFL] The internet provides people with a lot of valuable info or problems?
Writing Feedbackramshah - Mar 23, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 24, 2014
|IELTS: highly qualif graduates without employment are frequent, why? cutthroat competition
3 - But this sole factor don't explain the whole problem, which is much more complex and difficult to deals with....
Writing FeedbackMowonight - Mar 23, 2014 / dumi - Mar 24, 2014
|(IELTS essay) It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media
4 - I am sorry, shady. I really want to describe the part of my suggestion clearly. Unfortunately, when I want...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Mar 24, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 24, 2014
|Task 1. imprisonment in five counties between 1930 and 1980
5 - ... thirty thousand or 30 thousand ... The chart illustrates imprisonment level in five major countries...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 23, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 24, 2014
|(IELTS essay)Topic- in some countries young people have little leisure time...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Mar 23, 2014 / Slim shady - Mar 24, 2014
|IELS - A cheap air travel? advantage/ disadvantage; overweight - safety considerations
4 - This is what I have from your intro: A cheap air travel is becoming more popular than ever before....
Writing FeedbackBINGBINGLIANG - Mar 23, 2014 / eddies - Mar 24, 2014
|Can money bring happiness ? why or why not ?
Writing FeedbackSpecialK - Mar 21, 2014 / Linh Hoang - Mar 23, 2014
|TOEFL - HOUSE OR BUSINESS? Which do you prefer more?
Writing Feedbackhakuyo1112 - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK II : "Mother is the dead heart of the family" - Fatherhood vs Motherhood
7 - Do you write a 5-paragraph essay? Yes. You write one introduction, three bodies, and one conclusion. In the bodies,...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 27, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|People who do not prefer change are pessimistic and who like changes- optimistic
6 - When you deal with IELTS, the first thing the assessor sees is your layout, which shows whole of your...
Writing Feedbackrachana - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|Raise of awarness; Younger are much more aware about issues like environment
6 - Do you write 3 paragraphs? Yes, but tell you the truth, you are playing with fire. You need an...
Writing Feedbackbilalakoz - Feb 28, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|TOEFL; In general , people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of phenomenon
6 - Yes, I agree I know you write well. However, you'd better always try to include the prompt. To...
Writing Feedbackhakuyo1112 - Feb 27, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 the most important thing in applying for jobs
2 - All of people need a job for earning money for surviving their life. Most of people need a job...
Writing FeedbackNhasir Rahmatia - Mar 23, 2014 / Restu - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 2- Modern buildings vs traditional buildings
5 - Nowadays, there are increasing number of modern buildings to meet different needs of office workers and residents. Modern...
Writing Feedbackrachelaska - Mar 22, 2014 / crystal941 - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS-GT (Task-1): You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work
7 - Thanks pahan...
Writing FeedbackNaveed786 - Mar 20, 2014 / Naveed786 - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TO PROTECT ANIMALS OR TO TACKLE PROBLEMS OF HUMAN BEINGS?
2 - Good writing. With relevant arguments, against the main opinion, which is valuable in this kind of exercise. Btw I...
Writing Feedbackhalleybachelor - Mar 23, 2014 / Mowonight - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: Different views about the rising consumption of consumer products
Writing Feedbackcrystal941 - Mar 22, 2014 / crystal941 - Mar 23, 2014
|There are many different types of music in the world today. 'enjoy, pleasure'
3 - On the new screen that opens up, under the LOGO "EssayForum", Find and select your essay file on the...
Writing Feedbackcodeblue - Mar 23, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|TASK 1. the table shows the consumer durables owned in Britain from 1972-1983
5 - I think this linking part (as well as) here is inappropriate. Here is the example of the use:...
Writing FeedbackBob brother - Mar 21, 2014 / eddies - Mar 23, 2014
|Toefl Essay - Historical building or new building
3 - Firstly, constructing new buildings would improve over all architecture and infrastructure of the city because modern designs and patterns...
Writing Feedbacksandipsinh - Mar 21, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : average annual Gross Domestic Products (GDP)
12 - Actually the chart presents details and data. It is you who compare and analyse. So, The chart presents...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Jan 17, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS writing task 1: a table about poverty rates among Australian.
Writing FeedbackBanshee611 - Mar 23, 2014 / Banshee611 - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS: Most significant invention of the last 30years - Internet
Writing FeedbackNhasir Rahmatia - Mar 21, 2014 / Nhasir Rahmatia - Mar 23, 2014
|Tobacco and alcohol are drugs. Should made legal or illegal?
4 - Some people on the other hand might argue that these products should be legal as it helpinghelpsto boost employment...
Writing Feedbackbwosti - Mar 23, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|The Boy whose Parents were Murdered by Life
6 - Rafiq opened his eyes and started cryingto weep.He cried out a flood of tears. ''KILL ME! KILL ME NOW,...
Writing FeedbackSaqib - Mar 14, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the the number
5 - Others makekeep themselves busy on sports like playing basketball or even volleyball to engage onin healthy physical activities and...
Writing Feedbackieltspinoy - Mar 18, 2014 / ramshah - Mar 23, 2014
|"It sucks that we're dead." ; SHORT STORY
3 - The oldest, wisest and most responsible one among them, Prudent, thought Reck a nuisance and felt that the...
Writing FeedbackTempest2455 - Mar 23, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|Parents are the best teachers ? It's a controversial issue
9 - Include the purpose of your writing, e.g. IELTS, TOEFL,GRE etc. in the title itself. Then we can provide you...
Writing FeedbackVanthai - Feb 28, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|THE POWER LIES WITHIN YOU - Changing a country
5 - Well, moderators perform administrative functions on this site in addition to making their contributions to help others improve their...
Writing FeedbackTo2ahassan - Mar 14, 2014 / dumi - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS 2 - Retirement homes or Living with families? Which way is better for the elderly?
12 - Thank you all for your time and suggestions. I certainly appreciate it. Well, I'd like to suggest you...
Writing Feedbackconviction - Mar 20, 2014 / conviction - Mar 23, 2014
|Labelling any art work as a Master Piece is not appropriate!
Writing FeedbackDiana_saak - Mar 22, 2014 / Diana_saak - Mar 23, 2014
|When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.
Writing Feedbackonlineuser - Mar 22, 2014 / Pahan - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS Task II : Pros and cons of Credit card
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Feb 17, 2014 / SHanafi - Mar 23, 2014
|IELTS task II : Illiteracy rates by region and gender; 'it was tearful'
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