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|The effects of cheaper flights - IELTS Essay
7 - immense advances = I am afraid it is inappropriate if you using "immense" to "advances" Businessman = business...
Writing FeedbackRemansou - Nov 6, 2014 / fadlanmuzakki - Dec 2, 2014
|IELTS: What is the most happy age between teenage and adult. Discuss both views.
5 - It is always struggle among people which period of life is the best. In childhood period, children think...
Writing Feedbackzigolf - Nov 6, 2014 / ali27 - Dec 2, 2014
|To get them ready for the adult life, should teenage children be encouraged to take a part-time job?
3 - Thanks for your compliment Mahmoud. Actually I agree with the topic statement that parents should encourage their kids to...
Writing Feedbackrongmui - Nov 30, 2014 / rongmui - Dec 2, 2014
|Every individual has a responsibility to obey just laws and to disobey and resist unjust laws
Writing Feedbackraynus - Nov 30, 2014 / raynus - Dec 1, 2014
|It is difficult for mothers and fathers to understand their children because of generation gap
3 - 212 words. This is not suitable to your essay development, as you are asking to write 250 words and...
Writing Feedbackdtthuydang259 - Dec 1, 2014 / eddies - Dec 1, 2014
|IELTS essay. Deforestation caused by human activity.
Writing FeedbackMarceline - Nov 29, 2014 / SHanafi - Nov 30, 2014
|Would you prefer Indoor or Outdoor for your leisure activities.
Writing Feedbackkoraykirdinli - Nov 29, 2014 / koraykirdinli - Nov 30, 2014
|Introductory Paragraph about causes of HIV in children
6 - Hi vangiespen, thanks for your input and support. I have now posted my completed essay, maybe you can take...
Writing Feedbackfirstywrites - Nov 23, 2014 / firstywrites - Nov 30, 2014
|'The solid state; crystalline and amorphous solids' - learning scientific writing
Writing FeedbackSwiny - Nov 28, 2014 / firstywrites - Nov 30, 2014
|I was like every child in my community
16 - Vangiespen, you're amazing. Thanks for your help, more data to your devices, in surfing EF. Yes, British English. Please...
Writing FeedbackModewap - Nov 23, 2014 / Modewap - Nov 30, 2014
|Who has the most enormous impact among people around the world?
Writing Feedbacklogo3098 - Nov 23, 2014 / logo3098 - Nov 30, 2014
|If you could create a new holiday, what person or event would it honor, the way of celebration
4 - Like I said, you need to learn to divide your essay into specific topic paragraphs. Right now you have...
Writing Feedbackkoraykirdinli - Nov 29, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 30, 2014
|Tragic decrease in the life quality in many major cities; Causes, solutions for poor living standard
2 - Hi Van. You need to focus your writing frame. In the introduction restate the question and tell the readers...
Writing FeedbackVan Anh Nguyen - Nov 28, 2014 / Rogerb - Nov 29, 2014
|Should people be treated by what they have achieved or what they are capable of?; SAT essay
Writing Feedbacksmartfeet - Nov 28, 2014 / koraykirdinli - Nov 29, 2014
|'A students needs to fill his free time with enjoyable hobbies' - Sports or libraries?
Writing Feedbackmashf - Nov 26, 2014 / mashf - Nov 29, 2014
|Some people are very excited to go to live venue of a sporting event - watching home or at stadium?
NEW - Q) Some people like to go to a live sporting event, while others prefer to stay at home and...
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|The green spaces are source of knowledge that can provide significant profit for human
2 - I see some keywords/terms to use in the essay, so you can get full credit: economic gain, views on...
Writing Feedbacktagoyaki - Nov 27, 2014 / EF_Kevin - Nov 27, 2014
|In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly
3 - Thanks eddies for your suggested introduction. Followed is my revised statement for the 2nd paragraph. Is it better? ...
Writing Feedbackrongmui - Nov 26, 2014 / rongmui - Nov 27, 2014
|In fields such as business, politics, etc, its leaders should be renewed every five years.
3 - Thank you for your recommendation man! It's still hard for me to organize everything and write in down...
Writing Feedbacktagoyaki - Nov 24, 2014 / tagoyaki - Nov 27, 2014
|An intelligent audience watching TV acquire positive sides from it - the perception is important
2 - "They say, population relationships was more strengther than today, because they had more recreation customs which needs presence...
Writing Feedbackali27 - Nov 27, 2014 / zigolf - Nov 27, 2014
|Roadways remains the most popular mode of transportation in UK; graph
Writing FeedbackSid1316 - Nov 26, 2014 / Sid1316 - Nov 26, 2014
|My Town: Six independent pairs of eyes fling suspicious glances at me, they shake heads in confusion
3 - Thanks for the correction. I want the reader to have a glimpse of where I come from, and make...
Writing Feedbackdchege711 - Nov 26, 2014 / dchege711 - Nov 26, 2014
|Unhealthy lifestyle - Perfect health in the way of life is a vital aspect in human life
NEW - Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To...
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|This mean, stubborn, moody and bad-tempered person is my best friend
2 - maybe you can write about something you guys did together or something she does that is unique to her....
Writing Feedbackmorasan - Nov 26, 2014 / SaritaM - Nov 26, 2014
|The idea of giving financial aid to developing countries is a concept that is valued by most people.
3 - Your writing reflects that you are familiar with writing journals specifically in economic issue. You have wide range of...
Writing Feedbackkayjex31 - Nov 19, 2014 / SHanafi - Nov 26, 2014
|"Who drove them out to the streets?"
Writing Feedbackacc123 - Nov 24, 2014 / acc123 - Nov 26, 2014
|Reckless drivers in United States threaten the lives of thousands of people every year
2 - On grammar, check your subject-verb agreement. "...causes for reckless driving is (are) similar to ones (those)...punishments such as fines...
Writing Feedbacksoriginal - Nov 24, 2014 / dchege711 - Nov 26, 2014
|Big city have many entertainment centers, better learning conditions and more jobs there
4 - Then your essay should have a minimum of 50 words per paragraph. Try not to use word fillers like...
Writing Feedbackpnthien2451 - Nov 25, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 25, 2014
|TOEFL : Young adults preference on how long they should live with their parents before moving out
Writing Feedback99winterfell - Nov 24, 2014 / 99winterfell - Nov 25, 2014
|Study English in an English-speaking Country is the best ?
4 - I think you can try this. " americanaccent " I've try it before, it shows you how native speakers...
Writing FeedbackDoanhty - Nov 11, 2013 / alan1213 - Nov 24, 2014
|I-E-L-T-S competition and co-operate
4 - This intro uses a straightforward way to your point of view. However, this failed to present what the...
Writing Feedbackjyx940709 - Nov 23, 2014 / eddies - Nov 24, 2014
|Internet is an excellent source of communication, but some people suggest it's hard to find info
Writing FeedbackLFAle - Nov 21, 2014 / bang - Nov 24, 2014
|Should parents interfere in any money-spending decision of their kids?
2 - Phuong, though your essay is too wordy, it has actually answered the prompt provided. You could have actually discussed...
Writing Feedbackrongmui - Nov 23, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 24, 2014
|'The world is changing day by day gradually' - essay about consumerism
3 - but this changing is not always occurs (occurring) in a good way. Human activities on the world effects (effect)...
Writing FeedbackFavelani - Nov 23, 2014 / logo3098 - Nov 23, 2014
|If we want to save the future of the planet,we will have to drastically change our life. Do you agre
Writing FeedbackSaint Patience - Nov 23, 2014 / Saint Patience - Nov 23, 2014
|Process of making maple syrup... - IELTS WRITING TASK 1
5 - I tried uploading a picture but wasn't successful. Can you help me with the overview please Eddies....
Writing FeedbackSid1316 - Nov 23, 2014 / Sid1316 - Nov 23, 2014
|Descriptive writing; unexpected events, unpredictable situations and unforgettable moments in life
2 - Kanyepi, before I comment on the descriptive essay, may I know what your are being asked to describe in...
Writing FeedbackRosette - Nov 23, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 23, 2014
|Nowadays, technology and social media is the fourth need of people after food, shelter and clothes
2 - Nisarg, you need to review the content of your essay. While you wrote a very good essay, it does...
Writing Feedbacksaketnisarg - Nov 23, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 23, 2014
|About the situation of the extinct languages - [IELTS task2]:
3 - I know that you try to use comparison language here. However, you failed to present what the prompt...
Writing FeedbackyoshieB - Nov 19, 2014 / eddies - Nov 22, 2014
|Putting criminals into prisons is not an effective way to deal with them - IELTS essay
4 - Identifying the part of question to avoid out of topic: Putting criminals into prisons is not an effective...
Writing FeedbackYiliang Chen - Nov 21, 2014 / tiaDS - Nov 22, 2014
|Advantages and disadvantages of arranged marriages as compared to love marriages
2 - Ahmed, is this paper to be submitted as a response paper, comparison essay, or opinion paper? Can you providing...
Writing Feedbackahmedraj446 - Nov 20, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 22, 2014
|Many students have to live with roommates while going to school or university. Good roommate?
2 - Hi! Volkano Generally, you could add more details to your examples. Even though the number of words reaches the...
Writing Feedbackvolkano - Nov 21, 2014 / Ada1206 - Nov 22, 2014
|Tourism has increased so much over the last 50 years that it is having a mainly negative impact
2 - It is certain that the tourism increase job opportunities for locals, which help them to lift up their...
Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Nov 20, 2014 / Deepamar - Nov 22, 2014
|I'm in need of help on how to convey myself better
Writing Feedbackktran - Nov 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 21, 2014
|Youth crime are increasing rapidly around the world. What are the reasons & suggest solution
2 - improve the intro. Correcting yours. "Nowadays The intensity of youth crimeS are THE most familiar throughout in the world,...
Writing Feedbackbang - Nov 20, 2014 / LFAle - Nov 21, 2014
|Living room has tremendous of contemporary technologies - Your favorite room.
3 - "when it comes to my house" why not simply "Living room is the most important one in my house"...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 20, 2014 / LFAle - Nov 21, 2014
|My responsibilities and contributions to my household
2 - - I grew up in a community where children were expected to help out with the simple household chores....
Writing FeedbackModewap - Nov 20, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 20, 2014
|Crime and fixed punishments. Discuss both views and give opinion
2 - - Chris, you don't provide this last, you provide this as a part of your introduction in order...
Writing FeedbackChris Yip - Nov 20, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 20, 2014
|Crime is an act that violates the norms of criminal law. Ielts Task 2 - Crime Teenagers
3 - You misspelled "happened" in by teenagers happend disciplining them ineffective --> ineffectively Lack of family support is such as...
Writing FeedbackSatria - Nov 20, 2014 / chdboy - Nov 20, 2014
|I strongly oppose to the use of TV ads on young children
5 - e can watch any programs it would be better to utilize this V ads makers has been showing their...
Writing Feedbackrongmui - Nov 19, 2014 / Vns9x - Nov 20, 2014
|The children in my family have always had different expectations depending on their gender.
2 - In terms of sentence structure, flow, and clarity, try not to rely on too many prepositional phrases. An example...
Writing FeedbackTheEstudiante - Nov 19, 2014 / EF_Sheri - Nov 19, 2014
|The development of economy, technology & many other fields has profoundly transformed human society
2 - Vi, the introduction is incomplete because you did not present your point of view as part of the first...
Writing Feedbackbicaosang - Nov 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 19, 2014
|Plants can provide food, shelter, clothing, or medicine. What is one kind of plant that is important
2 - Shin, save for a few negligible grammatical errors in your essay this is a pretty good effort on your...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 19, 2014
|Each generations have unique features with technology development. My time is different in many ways
3 - Meenu, this is supposed to be approached as a compare and contrast essay between two generations. Therefore, when you...
Writing Feedbackchani - Nov 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 19, 2014
|EssaySome movies are serious,other movies are amuse and entertain.Which type of movie do you prefer?
2 - Sami, there was really no need to discuss the other movie types in this essay. It was only mentioned...
Writing Feedbackgeosami - Nov 19, 2014 / vangiespen - Nov 19, 2014
|We can get knowledge from news, but some people think we can't trust the journalist. IELTS essay
6 - thanks...
Writing Feedbacklogo3098 - Nov 17, 2014 / logo3098 - Nov 19, 2014
|IELTS - Experience is becoming more and more demanding for job application.
2 - Experience is becoming more and more demanding for job application. This is more of a fragment than a clear...
Writing FeedbackFrostmire - Nov 18, 2014 / aveiz100 - Nov 18, 2014
|Why Plato's philosopher king isn't going to turn this world into paradise
2 - I would work a little bit more on the vocabulary and details in some of the support paragraphs. It...
Writing FeedbackLefique - Nov 17, 2014 / aveiz100 - Nov 18, 2014
|Most of parents tend to consider their teenagers as too young and inexperienced to decide anything
3 - nice friends youth and teenagers are most important for this society. i find a site that is providing free...
Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 18, 2014 / huma1985 - Nov 18, 2014
|Does working with others lead to better results than acting as an individual? Score?
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