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|IELTS - If Police should carry guns or not?
8 - It is very common that in various countries the police are carryingcarryguns when they are on patrol in many...
Writing Feedbackyirunli - Jun 3, 2014 / dumi - Jun 7, 2014
|IELTS : Vegetarianism - why some people are choosing to become vegetarian?
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - May 29, 2014 / dumi - Jun 7, 2014
|Media plays a huge role in bringing to the sight of people the latest news
3 - Media plays an inevitable role in bringing to the sight ofeducating people with the latest news on various topics....
Writing FeedbackRoar - May 28, 2014 / dumi - Jun 7, 2014
|IELTS - Zoos are cruel or useful?
6 - it seems extremely unbalanced, try to make it balance by giving more details in the third paragraph,...
Writing Feedbackyirunli - May 28, 2014 / fikri - Jun 7, 2014
|IELTS - To encourage old people using mobile phones and the internet
3 - small mistakes may decrease your score,,be more careful,, can better our life it should be can make our...
Writing Feedbackyirunli - Jun 6, 2014 / fikri - Jun 7, 2014
|If people have opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right awayI
5 - .... well, I have a problem with this sentence. I agree that secure job is not necessarily be...
Writing Feedbackpeyman_np - Jun 4, 2014 / Pahan - Jun 6, 2014
|[IELTS] FUTURE INFORMATION TECHNOLOGY: POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE?
Writing FeedbackSalMon - May 29, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 6, 2014
|Community service in high school has many benefits
Writing FeedbackVihuynh - Jun 5, 2014 / Vihuynh - Jun 6, 2014
|IELTS: The zoo deserves maintenance and public respect
13 - as means of...
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 1, 2014 / yirunli - Jun 6, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 : government involvement in people life syle
4 - Sticking "No Smoking" campaign in public area, for instance, is one of the accepted regulations made by government which...
Writing Feedbackandial - Jun 3, 2014 / niesaysi - Jun 5, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2 : Universities provide students with the additional skills
Writing Feedbackandial - Jun 3, 2014 / dumi - Jun 5, 2014
|IELTS Essay - Some children take sports seriously while others not. Give opinion
3 - ... Well, it is always better to conclude your introduction with a statement that clearly expresses your opinion...
Writing Feedbackmsarkar - Jun 3, 2014 / dumi - Jun 5, 2014
|IELTS - Introductions; living in modern world/ world poverty/ traffic problem
6 - If you organize the order other way, I feel it would be more interesting; Some people find these...
Writing FeedbackPyon9x - May 27, 2014 / dumi - Jun 5, 2014
|IELTS TASK I : US Crude Oil Imports (15 countries)
6 - ...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 19, 2014 / SHanafi - Jun 4, 2014
|IELTS Letter - Write to a friend inviting him/her to watch a movie
Writing Feedbackrims - Jun 2, 2014 / Est2k - Jun 4, 2014
|IELTS: Learning a foreign language at elementary school brings lots of benefits
6 - Since you expressed your opinion supporting the statement, it is better to continue justifying your opinion rather than...
Writing Feedbackharry137181143 - Jun 1, 2014 / dumi - Jun 4, 2014
|Ielts: "International Day" - Letter to the principal
2 - I am so happy to hear the news that a great event "International Day" is going to holdbe held...
Writing Feedbackganggang - Jun 4, 2014 / dumi - Jun 4, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Visitor from and to UK
Writing Feedbackandial - May 9, 2014 / ganggang - Jun 4, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Hydro Electric process
5 - ... it is not accurate in this occasion. you may say the process begins when the sunlight hot...
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 21, 2014 / andial - Jun 3, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: Channel one news viewing figures
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 3, 2014 / andial - Jun 3, 2014
|IELTS: Pizza, fish and chips consumed by Australian Teenagers
5 - Sorry Tia, it has nothing to do with the article.:-) I mean 'first period' here is not obvious...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 1, 2014 / andial - Jun 3, 2014
|IELTS: THE ADVERSE OPINION OF SCHOOL LEAVERS
3 - Thank you pinkpoet for your correction I am using the format "Firstly, ... Secondly,..." so I think...
Writing FeedbackAnh Nguyen 265 - Jun 3, 2014 / Anh Nguyen 265 - Jun 3, 2014
|Would individuals bring about positive effects to society?
Writing FeedbackGBoyka - May 8, 2014 / GBoyka - Jun 3, 2014
|[IELTS] Prevention is better than cure. Agree or not? 'materialistic diversion'
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 2, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 3, 2014
|[IELTS] University education restriction. Just for best students? Agree or not?
2 - If you want to write a balanced answer for an "agree or disagree" question, it's important to get the...
Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 3, 2014 / fikri - Jun 3, 2014
|My pets - chicks; Yun Tai Mountain attractions
Writing Feedbacka35817126as - Jun 2, 2014 / dumi - Jun 3, 2014
|IELTS Task 1 : Injuries and Incidents
Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 21, 2014 / SHanafi - Jun 3, 2014
|IELTS Task 1: The number of visitors to three London museums.
8 - Overview should actually present the general information or the main trends of the graph which may come...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - May 27, 2014 / andial - Jun 3, 2014
|One of the interesting differences in culture between America and Vietnam
2 - great job... the only thing wrong with this comparison essay is that you did not state any similarities at...
Writing FeedbackTranAnh - Jun 2, 2014 / pinkpoet - Jun 2, 2014
|IELTS: working in team enhances the students' efficiency in the study process
Writing Feedbackstronglee - May 26, 2014 / rims - Jun 2, 2014
|TOEFL integrated task, personality called universal risk taking
3 - I think your essay is good to read. In my experience, sometimes, you can only hear the example...
Writing FeedbackAngelaB - May 31, 2014 / okdeerpass - Jun 1, 2014
|IELTS : Languages' extinction, discuss both views
3 - yeah , i like something kinda short and concise but i dont know why everytime i write essays, i...
Writing Feedbackthanhphongct1 - Jun 1, 2014 / thanhphongct1 - Jun 1, 2014
|IELTS: young school leavers have a negative attitude towards learning
Writing Feedbackthanhphongct1 - May 30, 2014 / thanhphongct1 - Jun 1, 2014
|IELTS - ACADEMIC - INTERNET vs CLASSROOM FOR LEARNING LANGUAGES
Writing Feedbackcandy07 - May 31, 2014 / harry137181143 - Jun 1, 2014
|Parents - the main factor effect personality on person; Fatherhood vs motherhood
4 - Well I understand most of your ideas. However you need to practice writing quite hard :) you need to...
Writing FeedbackVihuynh - May 27, 2014 / SalMon - Jun 1, 2014
|Combustion of Food to Find Stored Energy-Mini Evaluation
Writing Feedbackclassified9988 - May 29, 2014 / classified9988 - May 31, 2014
|pros and cons when children were learned foreign language in primary shool
4 - This sentence shows faulty reference of a pronoun. This part show a problem with a subject-verb...
Writing FeedbackVihuynh - May 29, 2014 / eddies - May 31, 2014
|[IELTS] THE MAINTENANCE OF TRADITIONAL SKILLS AND WAYS OF LIFE?
Writing FeedbackSalMon - May 30, 2014 / thanhphongct1 - May 31, 2014
|IELTS TASK 2: increased sport facilities vs other measures. Discuss both views.
3 - According to some people, increased number of sports facilities can be the best way to reduce the number of...
Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 27, 2014 / dumi - May 30, 2014
|GRE Argument: A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys..
Writing FeedbackKMeghji - May 27, 2014 / christy6789 - May 30, 2014
|A caste less society is the need of the hour-IGNOU
2 - Hey dear, On the fourth paragraph, Instead of 'this further increases caste divide" rather it is " this will...
Writing FeedbackGrasshopper - May 29, 2014 / christy6789 - May 30, 2014
|CBEST - Technology to modern life is advantageous.
2 - You put your points across and backed it up with instances which is great...But some changes should be made......
Writing Feedbackokdeerpass - May 29, 2014 / christy6789 - May 30, 2014
|TOEFL: keep your old friends or make new friends? I've ever had just few friends
3 - Well, you need to improve a lot on your approach for this introduction. I have provided an approach for...
Writing FeedbackAngelaB - May 27, 2014 / dumi - May 30, 2014
|Smoking should be made prohibited in public places : IELTS
Writing Feedbackdil77 - May 27, 2014 / dumi - May 30, 2014
|Task 1 : Line graph essay of expenditure on phone services in America
4 - .... "average yearly the consumer pending"? This phrase spoils your intro.... Also, mention the period in more details...
Writing FeedbacktiaDS - May 26, 2014 / dumi - May 30, 2014
|Park in Bangkok -Should the government build the park in the middle of the city?
3 - Instead of using same word frequently. it is highly better to use referencing such as it, they , or...
Writing Feedbackbrightxxz - May 26, 2014 / andial - May 30, 2014
|IELTS - Write a letter to a book shop manager about a book you're looking for
Writing Feedbackrims - May 29, 2014 / SalMon - May 29, 2014
|GRE: Adam's Realty firm is considerably superior to the Fitch's Realty firm
2 - The ten year period can help a company establish --> to establish its business, increase its productivity and thus,...
Writing FeedbackKMeghji - May 27, 2014 / Hung Arsenal - May 29, 2014
|ielts: different causes of car accidents and some solutions
Writing Feedbackieltswriter - May 25, 2014 / dumi - May 29, 2014
|Parent should acquisite skills of listening and taking care of their children
Writing FeedbackSalMon - May 23, 2014 / SalMon - May 29, 2014
|to acquire some certain skills, people usually need to be trained by education
Writing FeedbackHang Le - May 25, 2014 / dumi - May 29, 2014
|TOEFL: Why music is so important? It's indispensable part of people's life
Writing Feedbackluckyxuan - May 19, 2014 / Abdurasul - May 29, 2014
|Toefl: Teachers should attend courses - knowledge should be up to date
3 - You write very well - good grammar, vocabulary, ideas etc. However, I wonder whether it is wise to spend...
Writing Feedbackzhanghankun - May 25, 2014 / dumi - May 29, 2014
|IELTS task 2: video games provide harmless fun
Writing FeedbackStarSea - May 15, 2014 / StarSea - May 29, 2014
|IELTS - Rejecting job opportunities - POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE?
Writing Feedbackyirunli - May 24, 2014 / yirunli - May 29, 2014
|'experience more' - Living in a big city is better than a small city
4 - Hello, In my humble opinion, firstly, you should decide what types of essays you want to write; secondly, you...
Writing Feedbackhui4369 - Jul 27, 2012 / kristennguyen23 - May 29, 2014
|IELTS: Young people in the modern world
4 - Thank you Dumi! I really appreciate your comments ^^ I have a habit of writing too long, I trying...
Writing FeedbackSalMon - May 20, 2014 / SalMon - May 28, 2014
|IELTS: ACADEMIC- LINE GRAPH- TOURISTS IN FIVE COUNTRIES
3 - Hi tiaDS Thanks for your revert You are right . I should have compared the countries at least US...
Writing Feedbackcandy07 - May 28, 2014 / candy07 - May 28, 2014
|Story about why the dog 'Jaw' was sold by the owner
Writing Feedbackenglishlover - May 25, 2014 / dumi - May 28, 2014
|Governments should support public transport - important factor of social welfare
4 - Anyway, your essay looks pretty short :) .... Had your prompt asked whether you agree on that...
Writing Feedbackmaryailt - May 23, 2014 / dumi - May 28, 2014
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