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|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: the development of technology and its implication
2 - I feel you should have a hook that relates more with your prompt.Your prompt actually talks about technology...
Writing Feedbackbsm_25 - Sep 16, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|Do you think mathematics can predict divorces ?
2 - In the contemporary eras, predicting divorces based on Mathematics is a matter of increasing concerns . Some people...
Writing FeedbackAloha363 - Sep 16, 2013 / JDCho - Sep 17, 2013
|GRE Analyze an argument. Restoration of local news and weather forecast time
4 - The author's recommendation for anto increase in the time devoted infor the coverage of local and weather news cannot...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Aug 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|GRE: Arts does not needs to have the public eyes.
3 - ... The word "society" is getting repeated too much. Your opinion is not very clear (highlighted sentence). I...
Writing Feedbackleebongho - Aug 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|TOEFL; Children & their own money? lack of self-control and financing conception
Writing FeedbackaliceNN - Sep 12, 2013 / aliceNN - Sep 17, 2013
|Short biography for TEDX TALK and Marketing proposal
Writing Feedbackbedomohamed - Aug 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 17, 2013
|Multiculturalism ; Accepting more cultures
Writing Feedbackqasderwdw - Sep 14, 2013 / dumi - Sep 16, 2013
|[Toefl] spending equal amount of money on libraries and sports?
2 - Well.... I feel you can present this idea better, in a more logical way; The degree of interest...
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 14, 2013 / dumi - Sep 16, 2013
|A Person knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract
2 - I partially agree with the argument made here that banning from civil rights and the discredit about his own...
Writing Feedbackhemkantaregmi - Sep 16, 2013 / bui23353 - Sep 16, 2013
|GRE Sample Essay Response; Perceived Greatness of political leader
NEW - This is my response to a practice revised GRE Issue Essay response. I would love some feedback and scores...
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|IELTS - CAM 5; three different countries population compare
4 - The line graph provides information about the percentage of people with an age of 65 years or more in...
Writing FeedbackTraveler - Sep 15, 2013 / fahadbd - Sep 16, 2013
|[IELTS]- Use of mobiles have become common in many countries.
3 - Thank you guys. Thanks yosh, Very much appreciated. Thanks for correcting the essay... I didn't notice all those...
Writing Feedbackdelvydavis - Sep 11, 2013 / delvydavis - Sep 16, 2013
|Changing trends of local access to the advanced technology in the UK from 1996 to 2003.
4 - Thank you very much, Kalyn. Actually, I tried to do these tasks as regularly as possible and read relevant...
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 15, 2013 / MisterWandering - Sep 16, 2013
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: various nutrition of two different dinners
7 - Try to keep things simple, organise your task 1 in 3 or 4 paragraphs (e.i. introduction, overview and details)....
Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Sep 15, 2013 / Traveler - Sep 16, 2013
|The reasons of an increase in social problems involving teenagers
Writing Feedbackzoha - Sep 6, 2013 / zoha - Sep 15, 2013
|memo introducing myself. help: mechanicalism and grammar
4 - You probably don't have to, but it wouldn't be a bad idea to include something like "I appreciate you...
Writing Feedbackbhickey0827 - Sep 15, 2013 / Th25cc - Sep 15, 2013
|Ielts: Parents are sole responsible for their children's misbehavior. Do you agree?
2 - ....the word behavior is getting repeated. This you can present in a more simple way ; The way that...
Writing Feedbackcongchop - Sep 13, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|GRE: Colleges and universities should specify all required courses
Writing Feedbacksistan - Sep 8, 2013 / Th25cc - Sep 15, 2013
|Use ipads and mobiles in class or stay with hard copy books?
4 - There is no doubt that teaching methods and learning process have come under the heavy influence of advance...
Writing Feedbackalrashed - Aug 25, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|【IELTS2】Suggest measures that could be taken to reduce impact of ageing populations.
3 - ... what do you mean by "average of age"? this does not happen only in developing countries but...
Writing Feedbacknoro - Aug 24, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make
3 - The rapid growth of technology has brought about significant changes in human lives, especially in their relationships. ...
Writing FeedbackMinions144 - Aug 22, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|GRE Issue;Ability of human thinking may deteriorate with dependence on technology
3 - I think you need to improve the presentation of your essay. You need to have a clear Introduction, Body...
Writing Feedbackclearbinder - Aug 21, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|[IELTS] CAM9 - WRITING TASK 1 - REPORT AN ISLAND BEFORE AND AFTER CONSTRUCTION
Writing Feedbackseabird88 - Aug 27, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|It's not pointless to strive to keep traditional skills and life style alive.
4 - Hi I think you need to pay attention to the essay structure. Your essay should have an introduction, body...
Writing Feedbackalesssiiaa - Aug 26, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|[IELTS]Task 2: Generally believed that some people are born with certain talents
4 - Hi.... You need to pay attention to your essay structure - Your essay needs to contain an introduction,...
Writing Feedbacksharman - Aug 25, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|Succees because of hard work- luck has nothing to do with it; it has been proven
2 - This is not grammatically correct. Also, it does not covey your idea clearly. Better re-phrase! Only...
Writing FeedbackAli110 - Aug 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|[IELTS] Task1:Table on consumer spending information in 5 countries on different item
7 - This is the structure I suggest for this task; Introduction - Introduce the graph title (e.g. The table depicts...
Writing Feedbacksharman - Aug 24, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|During the first years after graduation students are usually full of health and energy
4 - Well.... You do write impressively and no doubts about that. However, I think you better change the structure...
Writing Feedbackcheer - Aug 22, 2013 / dumi - Sep 15, 2013
|IELTS: Exploitation of animals is bad!
6 - Well... this is the structure I generally recommend for the essay introduction for this task; Hook - Write...
Writing Feedbackmoutaz1978 - Aug 21, 2013 / dumi - Sep 14, 2013
|IS DEMOCRACY REALLY RELIABLE - PROFICIENCY ESSAY
3 - Well, there have been similar administrations taken place in India among Lichchavi rulers much earlier than Aristotle's era....
Writing Feedbackonurcanuyar - Aug 25, 2013 / dumi - Sep 14, 2013
|IELTS; WRITING TASK 1 - TELEPHONE CALLS BY CATEGORY
6 - This is report writing. So limit your introduction to introduce the graph title. In this introduction you have...
Writing Feedbacktrangkhanhle - Sep 6, 2013 / dumi - Sep 14, 2013
|IELTS writing task 2- Doing the same job for whole the life or changing it frequently
18 - Dear ah-zafary I really enjoyed your essay. I learned somany new structures from you. the only thing I saw...
Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Aug 10, 2013 / marmaria - Sep 14, 2013
|[TOEFL] For me the influence of my friends was more highlighted than impact of the school
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 8, 2013 / marmaria - Sep 14, 2013
|IELTS; Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries
4 - 1- There are several reasons of causing serious effects of obesity: Clear this, those reasons are "cause" of obesity...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Sep 11, 2013 / ARIA - Sep 13, 2013
|The usage of free time properly; Relax or Improve mind?
2 - .... good start... this is the type of hook I like :) However, your essay is poorly structured....
Writing FeedbackDr Kumar - Sep 8, 2013 / dumi - Sep 13, 2013
|IELTS: Task 2 Some people think that no one should be allowed to work after the age
6 - With the incredible economic growth, the working and living condition has been significantly improved in recent decades. This line...
Writing Feedbackpijiuwdw - Sep 8, 2013 / dumi - Sep 13, 2013
|The mystery of Angelica /descriptive piece
Writing Feedbackmahnoorhassan - Sep 7, 2013 / dumi - Sep 13, 2013
|IELTS; Should all countries have laws to prevent animals being used in circuses ?
Writing Feedbackscorpio - Sep 10, 2013 / dumi - Sep 13, 2013
|Toefl; Ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard
Writing Feedbackmarmaria - Sep 4, 2013 / MisterWandering - Sep 13, 2013
|[IELTS] Task 1 USA marriage and divorce rates
Writing Feedbackmuffle - Sep 11, 2013 / MisterWandering - Sep 13, 2013
|IELTS 2:Talents naturally inherited and talents which are taught
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Sep 5, 2013 / muffle - Sep 13, 2013
|ielts do you agreewith the private companies support science rather than government
3 - I guess you follow this format for the introduction; Hook - Begin your essay with a strong sentence...
Writing Feedbacklittlekid 986 - Sep 10, 2013 / dumi - Sep 13, 2013
|My Holiday (quick weekend) essay
Writing Feedbackjohnnynguyen - Sep 4, 2013 / dumi - Sep 13, 2013
|People are not paying attention to environmental protection
3 - For which task you wrote this essay? Is it for IELTS? or TOEFL or some class assignment. It's good...
Writing Feedbackhuyentrang - Sep 4, 2013 / dumi - Sep 13, 2013
|IELTS ;Clothes are a necessary part of people's lives
5 - ....people refers to them... For most of us, clothing provides protection from weather. ..or For most people, clothing...
Writing Feedbackkatiequintos - Sep 3, 2013 / dumi - Sep 12, 2013
|Benefits of Micro-lending. GRE Analyze an argument, Feel free to comment
4 - I am preparing for toelf and GRE simultaneously too. my gre exam is on 29th september and my GRE...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Sep 1, 2013 / marmaria - Sep 12, 2013
|Essay about the influence of Technology on human thinking - feedback
4 - Introduction:We are in the "tech era" where one is relied on techonology for a solution probably to a minuscule...
Writing Feedbacksaiwiwo - Sep 8, 2013 / septem1821 - Sep 12, 2013
|[TOEFL] Your job has more effect on your happiness than your living environment does.
11 - Thanks first! But refer to "any" I checked the dictionary and give the following example, I never...
Writing Feedbackewido - Sep 5, 2013 / ewido - Sep 12, 2013
|Ielts - The Diagram shows the process of using water to produce electricity.
4 - In this kind of task, you should write an introduction to state what the diagram illustrate. Then you should...
Writing Feedbackzarab - Aug 24, 2013 / MisterWandering - Sep 12, 2013
|Ielts-Tables : Students'results in a math test
3 - It can be clearly seen that the point level between 34 and 66 has been achieved by a majority...
Writing Feedbackyucky - Sep 4, 2013 / zoha - Sep 11, 2013
|IELTS; characteristics motivate to our goals and provoke to develop our self-identity
12 - @pijiuwdw - You are supposedcto provide meaningful comments on others threads to stay active in yhis forum. Otherwise you'll...
Writing Feedbackfahadbd - Aug 21, 2013 / dumi - Sep 11, 2013
|'Old is Gold' - keeping old friends or making new ones? -TOEFL
Writing Feedbacknlakhots - Aug 23, 2013 / dumi - Sep 11, 2013
|Use of computer; Advantages and Disadvantages
Writing Feedbackdjaffar - Aug 20, 2013 / dumi - Sep 11, 2013
|In order for any work of art-for example, a film, a novel, a poem, or a song-to have
2 - Some people might argue that a piece of art is useless unless it contains a precise message that itwhich...
Writing Feedbackwatiss - Sep 7, 2013 / fahadbd - Sep 11, 2013
|IELTS: Task 2 Carry guns or not? No for gun carrying!
Writing Feedbackpijiuwdw - Sep 11, 2013 / dumi - Sep 11, 2013
|Teachers should not talk about their personal viewpoints like the social and political ones.
5 - I suggest you to follow the following format for the introduction; Hook - write a sentence which is relevant...
Writing Feedbackramshah - Sep 9, 2013 / dumi - Sep 11, 2013
|Essay introduction about SELF CONFIDENCE
2 - WOW...are you a poet? your introduction was really beautiful. I do not know if it maches the requirements for...
Writing Feedbackderpeena - Sep 7, 2013 / marmaria - Sep 11, 2013
|[IELTS] Task 1 School Spending - Feedback
9 - @pijiuwdw: The conclusion also states the overview again. That's what I have in the paragraph 2....
Writing Feedbackmuffle - Sep 8, 2013 / muffle - Sep 11, 2013
|IELTS TASK 2:Retirement age at 60/65.What is your opinion.
Writing Feedbackgmad06 - Sep 10, 2013 / gmad06 - Sep 10, 2013
|GRE: Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern
2 - In my view there are many grammatical and spelling mistakes in this essay, for example, should be...
Writing Feedback600score - Sep 9, 2013 / xiaoheng - Sep 9, 2013
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