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|Balance between both indoor and outdoor activities as they both are essential
8 - .... I agree with ArezuF ... redundancy makes your essay boring. Like every person, children too...
Writing FeedbackArezuF - Jun 5, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|IELTS- Languages die every year......... Is this a positive trend?
Writing FeedbackBaicheng - Jun 6, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|TV is dangerous for family bonds; Do you agree?
2 - TV has become a serious threat to family bonds because it affects adversely on communication between family members....
Writing Feedbacknguyenngoc - Jun 13, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|Europe, America and Asia; The holiday of a lifetime
2 - .... honeymoon is referred to a vacation spent together by a newly wedded couple... is that what you...
Writing Feedbacksmudla95 - Jun 12, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|ADVERTISING ; Useless & Useful depending on individual perceptions
Writing Feedbackrozha - Jun 12, 2013 / dumi - Jun 13, 2013
|Earning capacity of successful SPORTS professionals Vs OTHER professionals
3 - I think you definitely need to double check this for grammatical errors; there are a fair amount of blantant[i][/i]...
Writing Feedbackdragosp - Jun 12, 2013 / marecrowley - Jun 12, 2013
|How should girls and boys study? Should they attend separate schools?
2 - These lines do not have much relevance to your essay. In the introduction you are supposed to introduce...
Writing Feedbackgangadhar - Jun 12, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|IELTS task 2: Inclusion of Competitive sports in the school curriculum.
2 - I disagree with this argument and wish to discuss the advantages of inclusion of sports in the school...
Writing FeedbackShumaila86 - Jun 12, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|When I was younger, I began keeping a journal/ Attitude towards writing
3 - Thanks :)...
Writing Feedbackashleynicole - Jun 10, 2013 / ashleynicole - Jun 12, 2013
|City vs countryside (essay by 8th grader in Norway)
3 - Hi What's the purpose of this writing? Is it a term paper? Or answers to a few questions? .......
Writing FeedbackJeruTheBuilder - Jun 3, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|Parents should encourage their children learn a secondary language as soon as possible
3 - ... start sentences with capital letters even during your practice sessions. It's a healthy habit and also less...
Writing Feedbackjemmy - Jun 3, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|The excessive usage of social networkings
3 - There are many more social networks, in fact EF is also one of them. However, Facebook and Twitter...
Writing Feedbackanggittas - May 25, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|college and university should be available for all students or only to good students
4 - Nowadays, many people look forward to receiving a degree from university or college to acquire more in depth...
Writing FeedbackHabib Rastegar - May 25, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|Compare the advantages and disadvantages of establishing a new university in your own
Writing FeedbackHabib Rastegar - May 24, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents job
3 - I guess you are preparing for IELTS or TOEFL. It's better that you mention the purpose of your writing...
Writing Feedbackrobotics - Jun 11, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|Share the Dorm or Choose my own Roommate
5 - You seem to have a fair understanding about the essay structure. However, you need to include specific examples in...
Writing FeedbackHabib Rastegar - May 22, 2013 / dumi - Jun 12, 2013
|IELTS: Is it fair that sportmen earn far more money than doctors and teachers?
5 - First of all, they need to commit themselves and make many sacrifices, both physically and emotionally, in order...
Writing Feedbackkayo1996 - Jun 10, 2013 / dumi - Jun 11, 2013
|IELTS ; Is travelling around the world a good thing?
3 - Some people think it is a good way of spending time because it helps people explore new things....
Writing FeedbackAslanbek - Jun 11, 2013 / dumi - Jun 11, 2013
|IELTS: Arranged Marriage vs Love Marraige / Discuss both systems
2 - Hi Lady Elle, I think the below essay need minor correction which I have highlighted below. In my...
Writing FeedbackLady Elle - Jun 10, 2013 / davesh82 - Jun 10, 2013
|IELTS TASK 1: Heart Attacks by Age & Gender ; Chart information
2 - A glance at the bar graph provided reveals the information about frequency of heart attacks of US. male and...
Writing FeedbackLeeHyoRi89 - Jun 5, 2013 / jole - Jun 10, 2013
|"No way out?"; Explain what this quote means
2 - Has there ever been a time in your life when you have feltfeel hopeless and vulnerable, experienced the forlorn...
Writing Feedbacklindatong - Jun 7, 2013 / runkirby - Jun 10, 2013
|Event planning is a relatively new career field; Event planning as a career
Writing Feedbackeventzkaze - Jun 7, 2013 / eventzkaze - Jun 10, 2013
|The Mozart Effect - citing references
Writing Feedbackwhitknee - Jun 5, 2013 / cutierlb - Jun 9, 2013
|Now day's crime is increasing. Why is this happening? What can government do?
Writing Feedbackankush - Feb 21, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jun 9, 2013
|Need help in evaluating my Analytical Writing. GRE
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Jun 9, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jun 9, 2013
|GRE Analytical writing; Letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner
2 - This isn't a lower-half response, but I'm afraid that (as is the case with most test takers) you haven't...
Writing Feedbackshadman19922 - Jun 9, 2013 / jkjeremy - Jun 9, 2013
|GRE; Blogosphere & Social media Vs Quality of political discoure in the US
2 - You did raise some really nice points in your essay and acknowledged both sides of the the argument. However,...
Writing Feedbacktaanyakhare2312 - May 27, 2013 / shadman19922 - Jun 9, 2013
|My dog spoke to me! Essay for a writing contest
2 - that was wonderful MAN... hats off... your age and your narration. vocabulary was more than enough. how excited i...
Writing FeedbackJoanne123 - Jun 9, 2013 / temptprovidence - Jun 9, 2013
|IELTS - It's better to learn how to communicate with opposite sex before entering universities
Writing FeedbackArezuF - Jun 6, 2013 / lilythuy2289 - Jun 8, 2013
|"If at first you don't succeed, try and try again" - TOEFL essay
9 - Things you might consider to take your essay to the next level: 1.) Include personal experience relevant to...
Writing Feedbackdesertrose - May 24, 2013 / amorphous1 - Jun 8, 2013
|TOEFL: HOW TO BE A QUALIFIED CO-WORKER?
3 - Great essay! I particularly like your conclusion. Only a few nitpicks: Run-on sentences. Split into two sentences...
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Jun 4, 2013 / amorphous1 - Jun 8, 2013
|I plan to retire when I am no longer in healthy ;Retirement / Answers 4 questions
Writing Feedbackfsolano94 - May 25, 2013 / dumi - Jun 7, 2013
|"Marshrutka"; FEMALE LOGIC - funny story
Writing FeedbackVyyy96 - Jun 7, 2013 / dumi - Jun 7, 2013
|IELTS; New fashion of doing multiple careers
3 - You should work more on your grammar, like ArezuF stated above. Also, work on the structure of an Ielts...
Writing Feedbackbmtcute - Jun 6, 2013 / April April - Jun 7, 2013
|financial preparedness; wealthy nations sharing their wealth with poorer nations
Writing Feedbackbmtcute - Jun 5, 2013 / bmtcute - Jun 6, 2013
|Country has a lot of special things to offer and many of them are reflected in movies
Writing Feedbacklele1987 - Jun 2, 2013 / lele1987 - Jun 4, 2013
|TOEFL: PEOPLE WHO CANT ACCEPT CRITISISM ARE NOT GOOD TEAM PLAYERS
2 - I wish you started this essay with a more meaningful statement. Get more help from your prompt and Introduce...
Writing Feedbackj0937065063 - Jun 3, 2013 / dumi - Jun 4, 2013
|IELTS: Richer nations shoul assist poorer nation in their development efforts?
2 - Yes.... I can see you have excellent writing skills. You only need to pay attention to time management and...
Writing FeedbackNewUser - Jun 4, 2013 / dumi - Jun 4, 2013
|IELTS ....Fast Food is becoming more popular?
Writing FeedbackNewUser - May 30, 2013 / NewUser - Jun 4, 2013
|IELTS: TASK 2: Problems caused by Internet and its solutions.
2 - Some suggestions .. bigger is comparative, bigger than what ?!?! acknowledged as a key source ... ...
Writing FeedbackShumaila86 - May 31, 2013 / NewUser - Jun 3, 2013
|IELTS : Which behaviour of teachers is efficient; Strict or friendly?
Writing Feedbackshaddy - Jun 2, 2013 / JangGemini - Jun 3, 2013
|Are rich people generally more happy than poor people?
5 - Hi, im new here too. For this topic, I think most religiouses teach mankind the happiness is depend on...
Writing FeedbackPhilosophy Essa - Jun 2, 2013 / Borworn01 - Jun 3, 2013
|To what extent do you agree with going abroad for university studies?
5 - You shouldn't use abbreviation. In the essay, you merely analyze the 1st opinion and ignore the 2nd one. I...
Writing Feedbackrndxpert - Jun 1, 2013 / nellylovekelly - Jun 3, 2013
|I'm a mechanical engineer; Academic background and work experience
3 - Thank you so much Didgerigoo. Could i ask you one more question? About the sentence " I work in...
Writing Feedbacklespeed - May 31, 2013 / lespeed - Jun 2, 2013
|IELTS;It's important to support artists,but important things should get priority
Writing Feedbacknellylovekelly - Jun 2, 2013 / rememberwhen - Jun 2, 2013
|'technology and media' - CAS Essay of a non-English Speaker
Writing FeedbackLolaya - Aug 20, 2012 / Lolaya - Jun 1, 2013
|IELTS; Water Cycle/ Life cycle of butterfly/ Letter /Process fo digital photography
3 - For each idea below, continue the sentence or write a follow-on sentence using your own ideas to express Result...
Writing FeedbackShumaila86 - May 30, 2013 / Shumaila86 - May 31, 2013
|Review of the film ''Mongol'' by Sergei Bodrov.
NEW - Please check my essay. I don't know how many mistakes are there. Thank you! Not until I watched...
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|Marketing assistant position - IELTS Letter check Request
4 - I don't think you need to add the last sentence as it makes you sound desperate (anxious part), besides...
Writing Feedbacksophisticated - May 29, 2013 / dragonking88 - May 31, 2013
|IELTS: Selfsufficiency OR Import Food
3 - You need to pay attention to the essay to the essay structure for this task. I generally recommend the...
Writing Feedbackmahash - May 31, 2013 / dumi - May 31, 2013
|Governments money for artsists; 'Artists have been seen as talented people'
7 - Hi, lilythuy2289. Investing too much resources on artists will have a negative impact on the development of...
Writing Feedbacklilythuy2289 - May 28, 2013 / Xiaokai Jin - May 30, 2013
|TOEFL: (Dis/Agree) Establish a large shopping center in our community or not?
Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - May 30, 2013 / Xiaokai Jin - May 30, 2013
|IELTS: Arranged and love marriages. Discuss both views.
2 - To begin with, one of the biggest advantages of love marriage is that it freesexempt the parents from their...
Writing Feedbackshaddy - May 29, 2013 / Xiaokai Jin - May 30, 2013
|Assignment: Is it best to determine how wise people are by how happy they are?
3 - Really? That encourages me so much xD Thank you thank you!! I thought no one would fix it for...
Writing FeedbackJangGemini - May 28, 2013 / JangGemini - May 29, 2013
|Psychological Effects of War on Soldiers
4 - Didgeridoo You might not be a grad student or a professor but you pointed out the mistakes and made...
Writing Feedbackrtyler - May 28, 2013 / rtyler - May 29, 2013
|Many childhood experiences leave a lifelong impression
Writing Feedbacknorthernbell - May 22, 2013 / northernbell - May 29, 2013
|IELTS: Nature of Holidays is changing, do you agree or disagree
Writing Feedbackshaddy - May 28, 2013 / shaddy - May 29, 2013
|Factors which influence a good movie ( your opinions )
Writing Feedbacklilythuy2289 - May 27, 2013 / shaddy - May 29, 2013
|IELTS : Nowadays people are producing more and more rubbish. Reasons and actions.
Writing Feedbackshaddy - May 27, 2013 / Shumaila86 - May 29, 2013
|IELTS - Report an island before and after construction
Writing Feedbackseabird88 - May 26, 2013 / shaddy - May 28, 2013
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