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Data on Australia exports to four regions: Japan, US, China, and India, over the period of 22 years

2 - This is a confusing statement as there are no categories enumerated in the line graph. Percentage points we...

Writing Feedbackngthuylinh1011 - Nov 11, 2021 / Holt - Nov 12, 2021
Writing task 2: Students should be primarily taught academic subjects so that they can pass exams

3 - @TranThanhLuy This is a potential question for me, you missed all the conjunction words to link your idea....

Writing FeedbackTranThanhLuy - Nov 9, 2021 / beloyal - Nov 12, 2021
More people put their personal information online (address, telephone number...) for everyday (ielts

2 - Good restatement but it should have had a direct reference to the indicated channels where the use of...

Writing FeedbackPham Ngoc Anh - Nov 11, 2021 / Holt - Nov 12, 2021
Social Media on the Brain and Mind

2 - The introduction to the topic will be helped if a previous paragraph is presented showing the history of human...

Writing Feedbackhan2206320 - Nov 11, 2021 / Holt - Nov 12, 2021
"Today many people are spending less and less time at home". What are the reasons and effects?

3 - 'if worse come worst' The correct idiom should be 'if worse come TO worst', or 'if the worse...

Writing Feedbackanonyhoang - Nov 10, 2021 / Emperor Penguin - Nov 11, 2021
IELTS Writing Task 2 - Celebrities' viewpoints on a wide range of matters

4 - @Holt Dear Holt, I did read samples of Ielts regarding 'Is this a positive or negative development?' before writing...

Writing FeedbackEmperor Penguin - Nov 9, 2021 / Emperor Penguin - Nov 10, 2021
New technologies have changed the way children spend their time

2 - Refrain from changing the original topic presentation by offering a testimonial about the topic. Proving the veracity of...

Writing Feedbackasdadwds28 - Nov 9, 2021 / Holt - Nov 10, 2021
The line graph illustrates the number of tourists travelling to an Caribbean island (2010 to 2017)

2 - The essay is over-analyzed at 127 words. With a writing time allowance of 20 minutes, this should have no...

Writing FeedbackLinh Tran 119 - Nov 9, 2021 / Holt - Nov 10, 2021
WRITING TASK 2 - should phones be forbidden for youngsters during the school time?

4 - In the conclusion you made a grammatical mistake. 'It is better to limit', not 'to limits'....

Writing Feedbackxuming - Nov 5, 2021 / Emperor Penguin - Nov 9, 2021
lELTS WRITING TASK 2 - Televised trials shared in public

3 - @Holt Thank you very much for your advice!...

Writing FeedbackEmperor Penguin - Nov 4, 2021 / Emperor Penguin - Nov 9, 2021
Companies use a variety of methods to improve the sales of their products. What are those methods?

2 - The first paragraph is called the prompt restatement + opinion for a reason. It has to accomplish 2 things:...

Writing Feedbackchibi2004 - Nov 8, 2021 / Holt - Nov 9, 2021
Many people argue that rather than reducing climate change, we should find a way to adapt to it

3 - @Holt Thank you very much...

Writing Feedbackaugenstern16 - Nov 6, 2021 / augenstern16 - Nov 9, 2021
WRITING TASK 2: INTERNATIONAL SUPPORT FROM INTERNATIONAL COMMUNITY FOR LESS DEVELOPED COUNTRIES

2 - Is this your personal point of view ? If yes, then frame it as such. Respond as required...

Writing Feedbackcynthiavu1709 - Nov 7, 2021 / Holt - Nov 8, 2021
Ielts graph about gold sales in Dubai during the year of 2002

2 - The currency of sales needs to be mentioned in the summary overview. As the writer, you need to let...

Writing Feedbackkunstpm - Nov 7, 2021 / Holt - Nov 8, 2021
Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others

2 - When using the 2 paragraph format for this comparative discussion, you must provide your point of view for each...

Writing Feedbackleira1709 - Nov 7, 2021 / Holt - Nov 8, 2021
In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the govern

2 - The prompt restatement is totally inaccurate. It fails to refer to the original statement as it adds a discussion...

Writing Feedbackmea1304 - Nov 7, 2021 / Holt - Nov 8, 2021
How Covid-19 have negative impact on my 12th marks

3 - Thank you Mr. Holt, I changed it a little bit ,pl. comment There was anxiety in the environment,...

Writing Feedbackawdheshp - Oct 22, 2021 / awdheshp - Nov 8, 2021
IELTS TASK 2: Youngsters have problems but the government ignores this. Give solve problems?

4 - 'Adult in the house impose children their ...' This sentence is quite confusing, maybe due to the grammatical...

Writing FeedbackYu Yu - Nov 4, 2021 / Emperor Penguin - Nov 8, 2021
IELTS Writing Task 2 - Negative effects of fast food

3 - @Holt Thank you very much for your advice!...

Writing FeedbackEmperor Penguin - Nov 4, 2021 / Emperor Penguin - Nov 7, 2021
IELTS Task 2: Advantages and Disadvantages of consuming organic food

2 - There is a time reference confusion in the first paragraph. refers to most recent events over the...

Writing Feedbackbon12351 - Nov 6, 2021 / Holt - Nov 7, 2021
The given bar chart illustrates the number of people visiting four certain museums in London

2 - The 4 museums have reference names in the chart. For summary compliance , you have to mention the...

Writing Feedbackninhnb05 - Nov 4, 2021 / Holt - Nov 7, 2021
Vietnamese blockbusters and Hollywood blockbusters

2 - The original topic basis is not clearly interpreted in the first paragraph.The writer opens with an opinion about cinematography,...

Writing Feedbacklinh_592002 - Nov 6, 2021 / Holt - Nov 7, 2021
TRAFFIC CONGESTION IS BECOMING INCREASINGLY PROBLEMATIC IN MAJOR CITIES. WHAT ARE THE CAUSES?

2 - Avoid providing a personal opinion in the restatement paragraph. By changing the purpose of the orginal topic presentation...

Writing Feedbackhaneii10 - Nov 5, 2021 / Holt - Nov 6, 2021
Task 2 question: Some people believe it would be better to build houses in existing towns....

2 - These should be restated in the paragraph.That is why it is identified as the topic restatement paragraph. The...

Writing FeedbackNguyenfromhanoi - Nov 5, 2021 / Holt - Nov 6, 2021
ESSAY - Failure and desire. It is believed that failure is the consequence of ambitions shortage

2 - Is someone else other than you writing this essay? No? Then why are you referring to yourself in...

Writing Feedbackcallmenatie - Nov 5, 2021 / Holt - Nov 6, 2021
Writing task 1: The bar chart below shows the number of visitors to four London museums.

2 - Since you mention 2 out of 4 museums in the tending paragraph, you may as well list all...

Writing Feedbacknguyenanhthu111 - Nov 4, 2021 / Holt - Nov 6, 2021
The diagram illustrates a wind turbine specification in general and the best location to install it

2 - Incorrect reference in relation to S v. P. 2 illustrations are presented. Your reference is for one image...

Writing Feedbacksatria13e - Nov 4, 2021 / Holt - Nov 6, 2021
Ielts - The chart gives information about water use by sector in Brazil and Congo

3 - We also can see that...

Writing Feedbackphienn - Oct 29, 2021 / rosigenious - Nov 5, 2021
Ielts writing task 1- Summarize the information about the process by which bricks are manufactured.

4 - You should not use " Last but not least" as it is informal. .Your report must have an overview...

Writing Feedbackntanhlinh03 - Oct 15, 2021 / rosigenious - Nov 5, 2021
IELTS Task 1: PIE CHART - WATER USE PROPORTIONS

4 - I think you should not describe Overview too detailed....

Writing Feedbackelinita123 - Oct 29, 2021 / rosigenious - Nov 5, 2021
IELTS Task 2 - Agree or Disagree Essay - Railroad vs Roads

3 - Your essay is well put, but I think you should explain more specifically in each paragraph in order to...

Writing Feedbackelinita123 - Nov 1, 2021 / iam5102 - Nov 5, 2021
Ielts task 1: Australian use of energy and how it impact numbers of the greenhouse gas emissions

3 - @Holt Thank for your feedback so much ❤ Yay I've found my mistake 😎...

Writing FeedbackPupu - Nov 3, 2021 / Pupu - Nov 5, 2021
In some cities, the government try to reduce traffic by imposing congestion tax during rush hours

3 - Thank you for all of your comments and advice....

Writing Feedbacktrancaongocthao - Oct 29, 2021 / trancaongocthao - Nov 5, 2021
Describing a competition - women's table tennis tournament

NEW - table tennis match at Tokyo 2020 Olympic I'd like to talk about the most exciting table tennis match...

Writing Feedbackconmeokeumeomeo - Nov 4, 2021 / — -
Selecting a job to meet the living standards

2 - The reasoning discussion of the writer mistakenly uses a comparative format. The examiner does not need to know about...

Writing Feedbackthusun103 - Oct 30, 2021 / Holt - Nov 4, 2021
Some people believe that sport is an essential part of school life for children, but others disagree

3 - @Huynhgiao Body Paragraph 1: 'student's time would be more efficient' I think this is not a proper main...

Writing FeedbackHuynhgiao - Nov 2, 2021 / Emperor Penguin - Nov 4, 2021
International sport event. Discuss both views

3 - @besthope In the introduction you write 'While some agreed that... '. It is unnecessary to use Past simple here....

Writing Feedbackbesthope - Nov 2, 2021 / Emperor Penguin - Nov 4, 2021
IELTS Writing Task 2: The tendency of human beings copy another.

2 - Where did you get this idea? It is not a part of the original prompt reference. This makes...

Writing FeedbackHann - Nov 3, 2021 / Holt - Nov 4, 2021
Ielts 1: The line chart presents the figures for UK commuters who owned one or more cars (1975-2005)

2 - Seeing as how this is the summary overviews you cannot use other year measurement references yet. If you...

Writing Feedbackchristine112 - Nov 3, 2021 / Holt - Nov 4, 2021
Write about surveillance in modern life.

2 - As a tank 2 essay, this writing fails to meet 2 scoring considerations: - Failure to meet the Minimum...

Writing FeedbackTrang Doan - Nov 2, 2021 / Holt - Nov 3, 2021
Ielts Writing task 1: the number of visitors going a Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017

2 - Kindly note the indicative years in the report. It ended in 2017. We are now in the year...

Writing Feedbackmandypear - Nov 1, 2021 / Holt - Nov 2, 2021
In this regard, peers have more of an impact than teachers do. To what extent do you agree or not?

2 - The essay has just the right number of words for a very good scoring consideration. The effort to properly...

Writing FeedbackAnnie090807 - Nov 1, 2021 / Holt - Nov 2, 2021
STUDYING IN TRADITIONAL CLASSES IS LESS BENEFICIAL THAN LEARNING ONLINE AT HOME

2 - This is a personal reflection of the writer. It is not a correct nor accurate prompt topic replacement....

Writing Feedbackngotridung0110 - Oct 31, 2021 / Holt - Nov 2, 2021
Opinion essay Social networks are damaging our personal relationships.

2 - You cannot partially with an idea, then provide a definite reason with such strong support. The supporting idea...

Writing Feedbacksuada - Oct 31, 2021 / Holt - Nov 2, 2021
Write on the topic "Evaluate a public place". Ho Thi Ky night market could be more impressive, how?

NEW - Evaluate a public place. Suggest how it could be made more appealing. Ho Thi Ky night market, located...

Writing Feedbacknlth259 - Nov 1, 2021 / — -
PROBLEMS AND PRACTICABILITY OF LIVING WHERE PEOPLE SPEAK FOREIGN LANGUAGES

NEW - LANGUAGE BARRIERS ABROAD Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious...

Writing FeedbackCharlie William - Oct 31, 2021 / — -
The percentages of residents for various ways of drinking coffee and tea in five Australian cities

3 - Thank you for your help! I'm going to fix my writing now...

Writing FeedbacklaborareEstOrare - Oct 29, 2021 / laborareEstOrare - Oct 31, 2021
In the future, the main reason for going to the mall will be for entertainment, not to shop.

2 - This is an automatic task failing scoll. The discussion should focus on only one side. Either agree or...

Writing FeedbackElfleda - Oct 30, 2021 / Holt - Oct 31, 2021
The necessity of schooling children - who should be the most responsible for this task?

3 - @Holt Sorry but the question was "Discuss both views and give your own opinion". Because there is a limit...

Writing Feedbackfarmtus - Oct 30, 2021 / farmtus - Oct 31, 2021
What are the advantages and disadvantages of leading a single life rather than get married ?

2 - You have failed the essay in terms of restatement considerations at this point. The prompt, as you have...

Writing Feedbackltthien - Oct 30, 2021 / Holt - Oct 31, 2021
The time that family members spend gathering to have meals is reducing

2 - There is no need for you to affirm the statement. It is not part of the discussion instruction....

Writing Feedbackhlg24 - Oct 30, 2021 / Holt - Oct 31, 2021
The proportion of government's money used for roads and transport in Italy, Portugal, UK and USA

2 - The examiner will be looking for the specific chart name/ identifier that will differentiate it from the other...

Writing Feedbackhonghanh8724 - Oct 30, 2021 / Holt - Oct 31, 2021
Peers have more of an impact on students than teachers do?

2 - The essay is only 202 words long. This would normally be an automatic failing score but since the scoring...

Writing Feedbackhatq126 - Oct 30, 2021 / Holt - Oct 31, 2021
An alarming deficiency of basic life skills among high school students. To what extent do you agree

2 - This is not orginally stated as an assumption. This is a statement of fact. Do not alter the...

Writing Feedbackhuonggiangkl - Oct 29, 2021 / Holt - Oct 31, 2021
Petrol and Oil - Writing task 1 : Line Graph.

2 - This is not a proper English word. It does not exist in any English dictionary version. Believe me,...

Writing FeedbackCadeyhere - Oct 29, 2021 / Holt - Oct 30, 2021
The proportion of three types of businesses access to social media for commerce benefit

2 - Refer to the business types directly as a part of the short form report. You have to do...

Writing Feedbackctttismi - Oct 29, 2021 / Holt - Oct 30, 2021
The map illustrates the process of producing chocolate (there are ten steps)

2 - This is an incorrect image reference. A map is not used in this presentation. An illustrative diagram...

Writing Feedbackcrownbeea - Oct 29, 2021 / Holt - Oct 30, 2021
Essay about sharing information in my sectors

2 - This makes the original topic vague in your restatement. Such a general reference will be marked as an...

Writing FeedbackTee_ER - Oct 29, 2021 / Holt - Oct 30, 2021
[IELTS TASK 1] MAP ABOUT A UNIVERSITY'S SPORTS CENTRE

7 - It's essential for you to divide the introduction and the overall paragraph into 2 single paragraphs....

Writing Feedbackehetenandaiyo - Oct 17, 2021 / littlewriter2005 - Oct 30, 2021
Playing games teach you about life

3 - I think your ideas are quite good but they should be illustrated with more examples and evidence. For e.g.:...

Writing Feedbacklinh san - Oct 27, 2021 / elinita123 - Oct 30, 2021

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